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第二篇作文,请大家帮忙给点意见!

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楼主
发表于 2003-12-28 09:29:00 | 只看该作者

第二篇作文,请大家帮忙给点意见!

我觉得这个题目很难,所以写得很烂……特别是结尾,没有时间。:(

I always hear people discuss about different restaurants and food stands on campus and I realized that different people have different choices among restaurants and food stands. While some people like to eat at food stands or restaurants, I prefer eating at home.

First of all, I think that eating at home is cleaner.  I always make sure that I have cleaned the dishes well, washed the vegetable thoroughly, and cooked the food deeply.  Eating clean food is very important.  As I learned in my food science class, eating pork that is not well done can cause serious problem.

Secondary, eating at home has more flexibility compared to eating in a restaurant or a food stand.  Since different people have different favor in tastes, it is easier adjust when a person eats at home.  For example, I always find foods in restaurant are too salty, therefore, eating at home can provide me more satisfactory.  Moreover, eating at home provides a more relaxed environment.  A person does not need to dress up if he/she eats at home; he/she can lays on the couch and watch TV while enjoying his/her delicious meal.

Even though eating at home has the advantages I have discussed above comparing to eating outside, eating at a restaurant or food stand also has its own advantages.  Food stands and restaurants make people’s lives easier by eliminating the long process of cooking.  However, I think that as long as I have time, I prefer cook by myself and eat at home.

While eating at home is clean and flexible, it may cause some inconveniences.  Therefore, I made a commitment to myself: eat outside during test weeks, eat at home during relax days.
沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2003-12-28 09:29:00 | 只看该作者

忘记了题目

13) Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
板凳
发表于 2003-12-29 10:49:00 | 只看该作者
第二段太短了,所有的发挥都应该在第二段突出的,应该6-7行,第三段5-6就可以了,结尾和开头有矛盾。修改一下
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