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Do you agree or disagree teacher's ability to relate well with the students is more important than knowing the subject well

The issue of whether teacher’s ability to relate well with the students is more important than knowing the subject well is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different views due to their respective angles. On the one hand, as is well-know and has been often advocated knowing the subject well is much more important. On the hand, others probably insist that teacher’s ability is related getting long well with students. We do not need stand very far to see the valid standpoint of this issue. In the following analysis, I would like to reason and provide evidence favoring the former one, and refuting the latter one.

In the first place, the most important reason can be presented to develop my point is that being a good teacher is required the high education and the teaching ability, in order to that student can follow the teacher to find the effective way to enrich their acknowdge. A good example may be found in the case that when I was in high school, my math teacher was being a teacher for 20 years and he knew that how to teach student learning math very well, at that time I realized that math is not as hard as I thought before, and I found a good way to improve myself. Under this therefore, it is obvious that knowing the subject well is the most important elements for a good teacher.

In addition, there is anther reason for me to choose the former consider. The reason is not far to seek the high education can help teacher knowing the subject well, thus they can benefit more students in their teaching life. To illustrate, a case in this respective, my aunt is art teacher, and she has been studying abroad in several years,  with the high education helping her to find a successful method teaching students and she believes that in the future she could educate more students  and help them understanding more acknowage. This is no doubt that being a good teacher should have a high education and knowing the subject very well.

Consequently, I advocated that knowing the subject well is more important for teacher. I do hope that every teacher can have a good education to help students to learn effencnce, also get long well with students.