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AI021 Job security and salary should be based on employee performance, not on years of service. Rewarding employees primarily for years of service discourages people from maintaining consistently high levels of productivity.

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The issue of whether job security and salary should be based on employee performance but not on years of service is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different views due to their disctinct background. On the one hand, some people advocate that rewarding employees primarily for years of service discourages people from maintaining consistently high levels of productivity; on the other hand, others probably insist that this reward system actually encourages employees to work more loyal for the corporation and therefore helps to maintaining consistency. Therefore, there is not a universal answer to this question, and whether one choice takes precedence over the other may quite depend on the specific situation. The final judgment should rely on a case-by-case analysis.

In the first place, rewarding toward junior staffs based on years of service is not likely to encourage them to maintain consistently high levels of productivity. Junior staffs are most in the beginning of their career path. They need to out perform what managers expect them to do in order to climb up in the hirarchy structure of an organisation and thus achieve their career goals. For this consideration, incentives based on performance rather than years of service tends to secure jobs as well as a sound renumeration which will lead the junior staffs to their career expectations.

However, this kind of rewarding system does help for senior staffs to devote themselves into the job. They are already middle way of their career path and near their life goals. Their contributions and experiences during years of service to the corporation should see a sound return to secure their jobs so as to encourage them to keep high levels of productivity and move further on their career path.

To sum up, I advocate that while reward based on performance works best for junior staffs, that based on years of service provides a sound reason to see encouragement in senior staffs, because they are in different stages of their career as life periods. Due to the above-mentioned reasons, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persusive, we may safely arrive at the conclusion I support.

以上停笔时未做任何修改,我希望能得到思路上的指点,还有就是没啥好写怎么办?