狠批至上！

sherlock1992 · 发表于 2013-8-27 23:21:49

applesoforever 发表于 2013-8-27 22:52
写好了~~~狠批啊亲！！！

tpo 19 综合

The buzzers should be banned in the reading passage（这句是不是有些太突兀了，如果改成the reading passage suggests that the buzzers should be banned会不会好些）, but the speaker in the listening part disagrees with the reading from three different perspectives.
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Frist, the man points out that the buzzers are tell（tell) the truth when facing with（去掉） consumers. In other words, uzzers（buzzers) will not lie to consumers even if they take the money from the company. Also, the company are only hiring(only hires) the ones who indeed have used their product and thought their product is acutually good wholeheartly. This is constracted(contradicts) with the reading passage that buzzers will mislead clients with incorrect information about the product only because they took(take) money from the company.

Second, the student(不是student而是buzzer) in the listening part states that the fact that clients will not trust buzzers instead of trusting buzzers which refered in the reading part. The clients will ask the buzzers many questions such as the price of the commodity and the service about it, also they ask how long they are able to use the goods. If the buzzers cannot answer one of questions, the customers will not buy the product.

Third, as the reading part points out the buzzers will make people mistrust with each other. The student in the listening passage points out that if the commodity does not bear a good quality, then the company can not hire a buzzer to announce it. In other words, the quality of the products that buzzers annouced are good, so if the clients purchase the products, they will have a great experience, making them develop more trust with buzzers. Thus, they will open heart to people.

In conclusion, the man in the listening part states his opinion which is opposed to the reading part.

小结：赶脚lapple的语法和时态有些不稳，需要加把劲，另外某些points某有听出来，建议apple听完之后对下listening的原文，并搞清楚哪部分是关键点。

applesoforever · 发表于 2013-8-27 23:33:21

sherlock1992 发表于 2013-8-27 23:21
tpo 19 综合

The buzzers should be banned in the reading passage（这句是不是有些太突兀了，如果改成 ...

谢谢~~~

哪点木有听出来？？？望点明哈~~~

applesoforever · 发表于 2013-8-28 11:43:52

applesoforever 发表于 2013-8-27 22:51
tpo 19 综合

The buzzers should be banned in the reading passage, but the speaker in the listening p ...

第二点中消费者在面对buzzers时clear和怀疑的态度没写出来。。。只是用了一个词“不信任”带过恩注意其余的思考了下应该没啥问题 #自评#

applesoforever · 发表于 2013-9-5 16:45:04

tpo7 综合晚上写

狠批至上！

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