求拍（自虐倾向？！）—— TWE17

DarkRusher · 发表于 2009-11-27 09:39:35

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Topic 17 Some people thinkthat they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think thatit is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specificreasons to develop your essay.

My Essay：

One of the key words of 21 century is education, a process in which both professors and students take an active part. While it is true that an experienced teacher equips his student with numerous pragmatic skills and indispensable knowledge, I believe, however, that a student learns even more by studying purely by himself.

First of all, a class usually consists of a multitude of students so that the time a teacher is able to spare on each student is fairly limited. As a teacher is supposed to be impartial to anyone of the class while all the time he could afford isonly the finite hours on his course combined with a couple of minutes afterclass, the divided efforts to every one of his students are quite minute.

Learning by oneself, on the other hand, promises a student’s making specific plans of study that fit his own characters, plans that his teacher are not capable of offering. The profundity of a teacher’s explanation is quite too often based on the level of the majority of the class, rendering such explanation too general to be efficacious to respective individual. Nevertheless, a student tends to be acquainted with his own merits and defects and is consequently more likely to develop a learning method that works best on himself.

In addition, by studying by himself, a student learns how to arrange his schedule.Taking into account both the timetable of the courses and the free time, a student has to contemplate what to do in order to be efficient, in which process he will slowly discover the ideal way to make use of his time. For example, as a freshman in university, I choose only the courses in the morning, when I am efficient in study after a night’s sound sleep, and spend all the afternoon doing physical exercise or participating academic activities when I am more energetic than other time of the day.

In conclusion, studying by oneself allows a student to focus on his own features and simultaneously teaches him to organize his personal affairs, which in turn enables him to obtain a vast amount of information. Therefore I have a propensity for studying alone.
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求拍（自虐倾向？！）—— TWE17

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