TIM的写作。写的第一篇作文，求狂批。。

timding93

11月要在上海中学考托福，一战。
这是刚写的第一篇托福作文，没有训练过托福的写作模式，就知道外国人喜欢 总-分-总 的形式。
请大家评一下我写作水平，我能给自己一个定位
感激不尽了~~


题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If a person wants to be successful in life, knowledge gained through study is more important than the ability to be creative.

 Everybody wants to be successful, so nowadays people are living and working under increasing pressure,.Enriching knowledge through study and developing the ability to be creative seems to be the right way out, but to tell which one is more important? I am on the side of the ability to be creative,reasons are followed.

Comparing to gaining knowledge through study,i think the ability to be creative is essential and it is not so easy to be developed or learned,it's something about talent,it takes time to cultivate that kind of ability. People may study and learn from text books all year long but never find that the real power is from themselves! what we do is maximize our own unique creativity,then it will means a lot to our future life.

Knowledge through study sure is very important,but without our own thoughts,own creativity,own imagination it is nothing.I also suggest the parents,the education authorities should focus on cultivating children's ability to be creative,instead of reviewing,reading text books all day long,that would lead you and your children on a right way to be successful.