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标题: 橙子酱的作文贴：每天都要写写写 [打印本页]

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-10 20:15
标题: 橙子酱的作文贴：每天都要写写写
N站归来25 呀么咦霍嘿气死爷了呀么咦霍嘿
再考不粗就喵有书读啊啊啊

要有个27就好了哒不贪心！

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-11 11:34
0810 独立

Although people are enjoying more comfortable life than before, life becomes more complex than before in the same time. Some people think that young people should take no action to deal with it. However, I believe that it is important for young people to be capable of planning and organizing because of severe illness, limited time, and rapid changed society.

The ability to make financial plan is important for young people, because they are facing more severe illness than before. For example, until now scientists have not found sure-fire plan to cure AIDS and cancer, and alone, these two diseases have killed a large number of people. Young people would rather work out a plan to solve this problem than be thrown into confusion when these two diseases torture their family members or even themselves. In order to be able to afford medical expenses, they should learn basic way to make financial plan, such as buying insurance, making investment, and practicing thrift. Therefore, it is essential for young people to make financial plan to against illness.

The pace of modern life makes time management is an essential skill for young people today, because not only they have more things to deal with in daily work but also their time are fractured by social website and electronic games. For instance, the invention of computer is a double-edged sword. It promotes productivity, but, in other words, young people have to do more work each day than in the past. On the other hand, the recreation function of computer may distract young people’s attention, thus decreasing their efficiency. Therefore, making plan and follow the allocated time could ensure people’s productivity.

Unprecedented rapid change of society increases the importance of scheduling, since it is a great challenge for young people to never fall behind times. Because of the popularity of Internet, the knowledge that is superior today might not be novel in tomorrow. It spreads so fast in the Internet that young people should have the ability to foresee what is advanced in the future and to make plans according to their predict. In this way, young people could keep pace with the times. Therefore, young people should never neglect the necessity for making plans and organize.

Owing to the reasons as I mentioned above, I agree with the statement that responding to complex society, the youth should have the ability to managing their time, finance, and future.
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作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-12 16:50
0811独立

Almost every people have heard this word: books are the larder of human progress. Some people, however, think that television plays a more important role in society. Other people, including me, are against this idea, and I believe that people could find nothing to replace book in society, because people have easier access to book than to television, because book companies people longer time than does television, and because what is written in books is more valuable than what is on air in television.

People have more opportunity to read book than to watch television. This is because people spend much less money on buying a book than on buying a television. In my country, even a discounted television would cost people more than thousands dollars, whereas people could use only ten dollars to buy a book with advanced knowledge. Additionally, the popularity of electronic books reduces the price of book further. In the discount season, it is impossible to make more than the wildest guess at how much an electronic book is sold. Books are priced at a few cents on the E-commerce websites, such as Amazon.com. Thus the relative low price makes book have more influence on society.

Book occupied people more time than did television. From the beginning of literacy, people invest a lot of effort in reading, while television is regarded as a way of entertainment, and people only could watch it in spare time. From primary to university, students read textbook to learn specialized knowledge. After class, they are required to read references, scientific magazines, and academic journals to complement their curricular knowledge. Even many of them are literature buff, spontaneously looking for books written by men of letters to relax. Hence, the influence of book began to be accumulated during people’s growth process, and the impact of television could never catch it up.

After novelty of the television faded, there is no comparison between book and television when people refer to value. The contents of books are carefully selected by publishing house. As is so often pointed out, books are a great genius leaves to mankind’s heritage. By reading books, for instance, people could learn shipbuilding technology in ancient Rome, be familiar with etiquette of mediaeval palace and traditional custom all around world. However, among information broadcast on television, a large amount of massages are junk massages, such as exaggerated advertisement, which would do harm to people. Therefore, the knowledge stored in book allows book to make wider impact than does television.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, book, rather than television, has greater effect on society. It boosted the development of civilization progress in the past thousands years and would continue to function in the future.

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-12 20:34
我改完了

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-12 21:32
0810 独立

Although people are enjoying more comfortable life than before, life becomes more complex than before in ("at" is better) the same time. Some people think that young people should take no action to deal with it. However, I believe that it is important for young people to be capable of planning and organizing because of severe illness, limited time, and rapid changed society.

The ability to make financial plan is important for young people, because they are facing more severe illness than before. For example, until now scientists have not found sure-fire plan to cure AIDS and cancer, and alone, these two diseases have killed a large number of people. ( sorry, I could not understand the meaning of this sentence... especially the word "alone" )Young people would rather work out a plan to solve this problem than be thrown into confusion when these two diseases torture their family members or even themselves. In order to be able to afford medical expenses, they should learn basic way to make financial plan, such as buying insurance, making investment, and practicing thrift. Therefore, it is essential for young people to make financial plan to against illness.

The pace of modern life makes time management is ("make sth. sth." right? so the "is" should be deleted) an essential skill for young people today, because not only they have more things to deal with in daily work but also their time are fractured by social website and electronic games. For instance, the invention of computer is a double-edged sword.(new word for me~) It promotes productivity, but, in other words, young people have to do more work each day than in the past. On the other hand, the recreation function of computer may distract young people’s attention, thus decreasing their efficiency. Therefore, making plan and follow the allocated time could ensure people’s productivity.

Unprecedented rapid change of society increases the importance of scheduling, since it is a great challenge for young people to never fall behind times. Because of the popularity of Internet, the knowledge that is superior today might not be novel in tomorrow. It spreads so fast in the Internet that young people should have the ability to foresee what is advanced in the future and to make plans according to their predict.("predict" is a verb, so you may use "prediction" instead) In this way, young people could keep pace with the times. Therefore, young people should never neglect the necessity for making plans and organize.

Owing to the reasons as I mentioned above, I agree with the statement that responding to complex society, the youth should have the ability to managing their time, finance, and future.

some words to say:
1, you always hand in the writing work on time, bravo!
2, each of your arguments is clear and strong, however you can use some kind of "story" to rich your essay rather than reasoning.
3, some suggestions: it is difficult to understand some of your sentence. it is not necessary to always write in long sentences. you should clarify your ideas at the first place.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-13 17:05
It’s much easier to achieve success without help from one’s family than in the past.

Modern people live in a more independent way than before: young adult people have their own houses rather live with their parents. Consequently, some people argue that not only could they live on their own, but also they could succeed without help from their families. Other people, including me, are against this idea, and I believe that it is too early to say that people could break away from support from family, because family allows people to receive education, provides people opportunities to promote themselves, and creates an atmosphere of success.

People without education are deprived of one of the greatest opportunities to succeed. To a great extent, parents, instead of people themselves, decide whether people could get great education, since it is the parent to pay tuition fees to schools. For instance, I attended one of the best primary schools in my city. Zillions of parents are eager to send their children to my school, and only few of them could obtain their heart desire. The reason why I could enroll at this school is not that I was smarter than others but that my parents could afford expensive tuition fee. Thus my experience in my childhood makes me realize that family paves the way for people to achieve success.

For students who are wet behind the ears, their parents’ connections give them more opportunities than the connections of themselves, because rarely could they make contact to importance person who could contribute to their career. Take my personal experience as an example. My parents have a good friend. He is in charge of auditing department in a famous accounting firm. When my internship application almost killed me, this uncle offered me an opportunity to assist his department’s annual review. What excited me most is that, at the end of my internship, my boss asked me to get another internship in my department next semester. Therefore, without the help from my parents, I could not be so close to success.

Family creates a successful atmosphere for general people. People born in a successful family are more likely to continue the success of their family. However, this possibility is quiet small in family that has not made something of a contribution. For example, George Walker Bush, the former president of the United States, was born in a highly respectable family-his father was also a former presidents of the United States. His success seems naturally to American people. But the election of Obama was out of people’s imagination. In such a long history, none of other people sharing the same background with him have done the same thing as he did before. Hence, the help from family plays an important role in people’s success.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, people benefit a lot from family’s help. With the help from family, they could easy obtain the resources critical to success.

作者: sigrid_shan 时间: 2014-8-13 18:47
给勤劳勇敢的小橙子，啦啦啦

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-14 16:36
0811 独立修改

Almost every people have heard these words: books are the ladder of human progress. Some people, however, think that television plays a more important role in society. Other people, including me, are against this idea, and I believe that people could find nothing to replace book in society, because people have easier access to book than to television, because book accompanies people longer time than does television, and because what is written in books is more valuable than what is on air in television.

People would have no hesitation in buying a book but might be uncertain of buying a television. This is because the price of a television is far exceeds that of a book. In my country, even a discounted television would cost people more than thousands dollars, whereas people could use only ten dollars to buy a book with advanced knowledge. Additionally, the popularity of electronic books reduces the price of book further. In the discount season, it is impossible to make more than the wildest guess at how much an electronic book is sold. Books are priced at a few cents on the E-commerce websites, such as Amazon.com. Thus the relatively low price makes book more influential on society.

Compared with time people spent on television, that of book is much longer. From the beginning of literacy, people invest a lot of effort in reading, while television is regarded as a way of entertainment, and people only could watch it in spare time. From primary to university, students read textbooks to learn specialized knowledge. After class, they are required to read references, scientific magazines, and academic journals to complement their curricular knowledge. Even many of them are literature buff, spontaneously looking for books written by men of letters to relax. Hence, the influence of book began to be accumulated during people’s growth process, and the impact of television could never catch it up.

After novelty of the television faded, there is no comparison between book and television when people refer to value. The contents of books are carefully selected by publishing houses. As is so often pointed out, books are a great genius leaves to mankind’s heritage. By reading books, for instance, people could learn shipbuilding technology in ancient Rome, be familiar with etiquette of mediaeval palace and traditional customs all around world. However, among information broadcast on television, a large amount of massages are junk massages, such as exaggerated advertisements, which would do harm to people. Therefore, the knowledge stored in book allows book to make wider impact than that made by television.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, book, rather than television, has greater effect on society. It boosted the development of civilization progress in the past thousands years and would continue to function in the future.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-14 17:43
0812 独立修改

Modern people live in a more independent way than before: young adults have their own houses rather than live with their parents. Consequently, some people argue that not only could they live on their own, but also they could succeed without help from their families. Other people, including me, are against this idea, and I believe that it is too early to say that people could break away from support from family, because family allows people to receive education and provides people opportunities to improve themselves and because social class still exists.

People without education are deprived of one of the greatest opportunities to succeed. To a great extent, parents, instead of people themselves, decide whether people could get great education, since it is the parent to pay tuition fees to schools. For instance, I attended one of the best primary schools in my city. Zillions of parents are eager to send their children to my school, and only few of them could obtain their heart desire. The reason why I could enroll at this school is not that I was smarter than others but that my parents could afford expensive tuition fee. Thus my experience in my childhood makes me realize that it is still hard to success without help from the family.

For students who are wet behind the ears, an important way to improve themselves might depend on their families’ social network, because rarely could they make contact to important person who could contribute to their career. Take my personal experience as an example. My parents have a good friend. He is in charge of auditing department in a famous accounting firm. While my classmates were still looking for internship jobs, this uncle offered me an opportunity to assist his department’s annual review. What excited me most is that, at the end of my internship, my boss asked me to get another internship in my department next semester. Therefore, people who do not ask for help from their families have to try as hard as they did in the past.

The words “ family holding high office for generation” could still precisely describe many successful families. As is so often pointed out, people born in a successful family are more likely to continue the success of their families. However, this possibility is quiet small in family that has not made something of a contribution. For example, George Walker Bush, the former president of the United States, was born in a highly respectable family - his father was also a former president of the United States. His success seems natural to American people. But the election of Obama was out of people’s imagination. In recent years, none of other people sharing the same background with him had done the same thing as he did. Hence, to success on one’s own could never be an easy thing.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, people benefit a lot from family’s help. With the help from their families, they could easy obtain the resources critical to success.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-15 19:46
0814 TPO2 综合

从来没有写过这么非主流的综合写作阅读写得没逻辑听力更不知道在bb啥就这么将就吧我也不知道我在写啥

In the listening, the profess thinks that having a team of people worked on a project actually leads to result opposite to what mentioned in reading passage. He uses a company’s experience to explain the reasons.

First, contrary to what is said in reading passage, the real contributors would not feel better about the group project. This is because some members got almost a “free ride”-they did not make contribution to group at all but benefited from the group. However the names of members who worked well were not named, because the success of group was considered as a whole. Hence, these contributors’ attitudes are different from what the reading predicts.

Second, conflicting with what mentioned in reading passage, the group worked less efficiently and even towards the wrong direction. On the one hand, it took so long to reach consensus, because the group held many meetings to discuss the project. On the other hand, some influential people made arbitrary decisions without further consideration.

Third, the professor raised another negative consequence resulting from members who have voice in making a decision. Once members were convinced of “a highly creative plan” from influencers, even though some members tried to warn other members that the project was moving towards the wrong way, their voice would be ignored. Therefore, the blame was posed on all group members when the project failed.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-16 21:07
0815独立

Modern agriculture method damage theenvironment, but providing food for the growing population around the world ismore important than protecting the environment.

What characterizes modern agriculture mostis its controversial method to increase production. Some people argue that theharm resulting from, such as, pesticide and fertilizer, could be acceptable dueto high yield. However, other people, including me, are against this idea, and Ibelieve that protecting the environment is more important because some agriculturelead to irreversible problem.

A tiny damage to environment could causechain reaction to environment, because our environment, as an organic whole, issusceptible to modern agriculture. Farmers, for instance, reclaim new areasfrom the jungle, thus cutting down the natural growing trees. But these treesplay an important role in preventing soils from washing away by rains. Needlessto say, animals feeding on jungle trees also are influenced. They would losenot only suitable place to build nests but also reliable sources to find food. Onthe other hand, the decline of population of these animals might result infurther decease in biological diversity. Because of their irregular death,their predator might lack sufficient food supply. Thus if people insist ongreedily depriving environment of food, the crop will yields at the price of environmentalcollapse.

Environment would take long time to recoveronce polluted, since it is really hard for environment to decompose manyartificial chemicals naturally. There once was a river near my home. It was soclear that I could easily see the bottom in my childhood. However, people dumpedfertilizer into it in order to breed fish fry. Within a short period, thesmelly, green water have replaced the clear water; plankton has packed into theriver surface, leaving no fresh air for fish to breathe. Although it’s been somany years, none dares to use the river water for daily life. Foreseeably, in subsequentyears, the governor of our city still has to spare nothing to harness this river.Therefore, today’s blindly high production costs people their future.

Even though I admit that providing morefood today is essential to growing population, protecting environment does notconflict with higher production. A damaged environment means that, quiet sometime, rarely could food be grown in this land. Therefore, many people wouldface starvation as soon as environment was populated. In consequently, whatpeople need to do is not to grow crops without restriction but to find ascientific way to boost output. Luckily, astronomic science has thrown newlight to this area-genetically modified could be a possible way. Hence,providing food for growing might be not of paramount importance.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, Ithink that protecting environment is priority over providing food forincreasing population around world. Additionally, improving agriculture methodcould solve this conflict.

今天破事儿一堆刚回家慌慌张张把作文写完也没时间看目测应该错误不少

啊啊啊啊啊想到口语还没撸完我就心塞

尿了

作者: daisy333 时间: 2014-8-17 00:55
改完啦~受益匪浅

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-17 15:19
815综合改完了

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-17 16:05
0814 综合修改

In the listening, the professor thinks that the approach to assemble a team to attack a project actually leads to a result opposite to what is mentioned in reading passage. He uses a company’s experience to explain the reasons.

First, contrary to what is said in reading passage, the real contributors would not feel better about the group project because some members got almost a “free ride”. They did not make contributions to the group at all but benefited from the group. However the names of members who worked well were not named, because the achievement of the group was considered as a whole. Hence, these contributors’ attitudes are different from what the reading predicts.

Second, conflicting with what is mentioned in reading passage, the group worked less efficiently. It took so long to reach consensus, because the group held many meetings to discuss the project. Thus team work actually went against original purpose.

Third, the professor raised two negative consequences resulting from members who have voice in making a decision. On one hand, some influential people made arbitrary decision without further consideration. Once members were convinced of “a highly creative plan” from influencers, even though some members tried to warn other members that the project was moving towards the wrong way, their voice would be ignored. Therefore, the blame was posed on all group members when the project failed.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-17 17:08
0815 独立修改

Modern agriculture method damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.

What characterizes modern agriculture most is its controversial method to increase production. Some people argue that the harm resulted from, such as, pesticide and fertilizer, could be acceptable due to high yield. However, other people, including me, are against this idea, and I believe that protecting the environment is more important because some agriculture method leads to irreversible problem.

A tiny damage to environment could cause chain reaction to environment. Our environment, as an organic whole, is susceptible to modern agriculture. Farmers, for instance, reclaim new areas from the jungle, thus cutting down the natural growing trees. But these trees play an important role in preventing soils from washing away by rains. Needless to say, animals feeding on jungle trees also are influenced. They would lose not only suitable place to build nests but also reliable sources to find food. On the other hand, the decline of population of these animals might result in further decease in biological diversity. Because of their irregular death, their predator might lack sufficient food supply. Thus if people insist on greedily depriving environment of food, the crop will yields at the price of environmental collapse.

Environment would take long time to recover once polluted, since it is really hard for environment to decompose many artificial chemicals naturally. There once was a river near my home. It was so clear that I could easily see the bottom in my childhood. However, people dumped fertilizer into it in order to breed fish fry.Within a short period, the smelly, green water have replaced the clear water; plankton has packed into the river surface, leaving no fresh air for fish to breathe. Although it’s been so many years, none dares to use the river water for daily life. Foreseeably, in subsequent years, the governor of our city still has to spare nothing to harness this river. Therefore, today’s blindly high production costs people their future.

Even though I admit that providing more food today is essential to growing population, protecting environment does not conflict with higher production. A damaged environment means that, quiet some time, rarely could food be grown in this land. Therefore, many people would face starvation as soon as environment was polluted. In consequently, what people need to do is not to grow crops without restriction but to find a scientific way to boost output. Luckily, astronomic science has thrown new light on this area-genetically modified food could be a possible way. Hence, providing food for growing might be not of paramount importance.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I think that protecting environment is priority over providing food for increasing population around world. Additionally, improving agriculture method could solve this conflict.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-17 23:11
0816 独立

折腾了一晚上信用卡今天 Sorry交晚了本来说要再改改也没时间了那那那那就这样吧

Government budget is always desperately hard up, when confronting two kinds of investment- medical treatment and environmental protection. Some people think that environmental protection takes prior to medical treatment. Other people, including me, are against this idea. I believe that medical security is of paramount importance, especially in my country.

Medical security could mean difference between life and death. Many people lost optimal opportunities to get treatment because of lacking money. In my country, for instance, the poor have no money to cure their disease. They would rather take some pills from drugstore or even give free region to their illness than go to the hospital. However, even minor illness could worsen and thus take people’s life. Therefore, if government provides free medical treatment for these poor people, they would be more willing to receive correct treatment in hospital. In contrast, environment population yet has not directly endangered people’s life. Hence, government should devote more energy to medical security.

Establishing medical security system is an essential way to preserve social order. High profits of selling drugs have lured liars into deceiving patient. Old people and uneducated people are taken in easily. My grandfather, for example, was an old patient, having chronic arthritis more than 20 years. When it was raining, he could only lie on the bed. A seller said that there was an “ effective cure”, which could cure his disease within one month. He spent more than thousands dollars on it without hesitation. A month later, it turns out that he got nothing but blisters on his legs. This tragedy could be avoided if people only could buy drugs from official channel. Thus an effective medical security helps to social stability.

As is so often pointed out, environment governance has a long way to go. Thus it is very difficult to gain effect in a short space of time. Under this circumstance, insisting on habit that protects environment has more profound significance than putting more energy into this issue by government. However, people themselves could not replace the function of government. They could not provide enough money to help poor people and, needless to say, to establish a medical security system. Therefore, compare with environmental protection, government should be more involved in medical treatment.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I think that government has important and irreplaceable responsibility to spend significant energy to medical security.

作者: sigrid_shan 时间: 2014-8-18 17:43

作者: 小火山 时间: 2014-8-18 20:03
我觉得楼主写的好好啊

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-19 21:21

小火山发表于 2014-8-18 20:03
我觉得楼主写的好好啊

严重超时哈哈哈哈哈哈哈

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-19 21:26
0817 独立

Although a lot of people know the environment situation, the present situation is unlikely to change in the future.

Environment seems to be ruined by modern industry. The blue sky, fresh air, and clear river have gone forever in the city and been replaced by acid rain, vehicle exhausts, and stagnant water. Some people hold the negative view that no method could control the pollution that city has suffered. Other people, including me, are against this idea, and I believe that present situation is not unchangeable.

Environment has its ability to recover from damage, because the movement of air and water and the decomposition of microorganisms could eliminate harmful substances naturally. This phenomenon could easily be observed in our daily life. For instance, after a heavy rain, city looks brand new. A scatter of birds fly in the cloudless blue sky; the air is so clean that people could smell the scent of flowers; insects come out for food, crawling along in the damp road. On the other hand, the modern part of the city also shows its new look-the walls of buildings could reflect the sunlight, looking like mirrors. As we all know, nature forces play more important role in uninhabited areas. Therefore, as long as we do not aggravate our environment intentionally, our environment would save itself.

More and more advanced technology further deceases our threats to environment since many artificial chemical substances are not used anymore when scientists find their side effect. Take Freon as an example. Freon, known as a refrigerant, was wildly used in refrigerator because of its cheap price. However, scientists found that Freon could damage ozone layer, which serves as protective cover to prevent ultraviolet ray and other harmful light. By applying other technology to replace Freon, modern technology provides a way to solve this problem entirely. Similarly, many other things we used in the past have been abandoned gradually, such as plastic bag and mercury. Hence today’s technology has changed environment in a good way.

Social attitudes towards environment totally changed. Our generation, the pillar of society, grows up with the story of environmental protection, thus knowing more about environmental protection than the old does. When my parents knew little about what is the function of frogs, I refused to eat any beneficial insects because of their contributions to the environment. Therefore, an important reason why environment went so bad is that people in the past were not aware of what were the consequences of their behaviors. However, people today would never be stupid and ignorant. We not only know how to protect the environment but also take actions to protect it right now. Thus, anything could not be more effective than an active action to improve our environment.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I think that, finally, the future would not disappoint us if we try as hard as possible to save our mother earth.

啊啊啊啊啊啊啊原谅我！！!早上起晚了！急着粗门现在才回！

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-20 15:45
0819 独立

If I happen to be good at my friend’s weaksubject, should I lend a hand to him or her? Some people might say “yes”, sinceas is so often pointed out, the rose is in her hand, the flavor in mind.However, other people are against this idea, and I would like to recommend myfriend to ask help from tutors.

The tutors could provide my friend more specialexplanation than mine, because schools hire them only if they are qualified fortheir jobs. For instance, a tutor for universities often acquires doctordegree. He or she has ready learned the knowledge my friend and I now arestudying for many years. Therefore, there is no reason that I could be more familiarwith this knowledge than he or she is. More importantly, doctors should havedone further research in this area. Thus when my friend asks them a question,they could offer my friend many extra-specialized information, which mightthrow new light on my friend’s study. In contrast, my perspective is limited onwhat our professor mentioned in the classes. The only thing I could do is justto repeat professors’ explanations from classes, which my friend has alreadyconsidered thousands times. Hence, I think my friend should ask help fromtutors rather than me.

Answering my friend question would put morepressure on my intense time schedule. What I suppose to do every day is wellarranged due to my high volume homework. But I could not accurately measure thetime spent on tutoring my friend. Therefore, I may not have enough time to makemy friend clear about his or her questions. However, the one of the most importantresponsibilities for tutors is to assist students in studying. Thus, tutorswould reserve a large amount of time for answering questions. In this way, myfriend not only could get the additional help almost in any time he or she wantsbut also could go deep into the knowledge they do not fully understand.Therefore, I would be really relieved if tutors fulfill their responsibility.

Considering our friendship, I think that teachingmy friend is not a good idea. I would be confused about how to deal with ourrelationship. For instance, when my friend distract from my tutoring, should Ibehave like a real teacher to warn him or her? As a friend, I should not be extremelystrict with them, since they have their own independent judgments. But if Ileave them distracted, what is the meaning of my tutoring? They would not learnanything from it. Hence, to avoid being caught on the horns of a dilemma, I thinkmy friend should turn tutors for help.

Owing to reasons I mentioned above, I thinkthis situation is not the thing that I should help because I have the abilitybut a more complex one. Therefore, I suggest that my friend should go to thetutor centers.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-21 15:31
0820 独立（已经改过啦最近好混乱内啥被抢了工作的同学不要难过）

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

These days nobody could have failed to notice the fact that some students are required to attend classes for 11 months of a year, hoping to receive a better education. Some people, including me, are against this idea and I believe that the key factor to better education are not time for attending class but good teachers and extracurricular activities.

Good teachers could improve the productivity of the classes, because they have great experience of teaching, thus knowing a lot about their students and the knowledge of their areas. Hence they can design a special plan for their student to study. The contents of this plan not only totally accord with the weak points of students but also include the appropriate time when students need to review their homework. By following this specific schedule, students always could make up their deficiency and acquire knowledge more quickly. Therefore, with good teachers, students could learn a lot of knowledge even though they only attend school 8 months of a year; in contrast, they will acquire limited knowledge if teachers are not extremely scholarly.

Better education also contains extracurricular activities. Students should learn many things from their daily life. For instance, students learned many characteristics of animals at natural science class. They may know what a duck looks like and how a duck passes winter. Yet only by observing ducks in the farm can students really be familiar with this creature. Attending classes cannot gain the precious experience similar to observing animals, which mainly comes from extracurricular activities. Thus studying 11 month of a year absolutely will decrease the time for extracurricular activities.

Even though I admit that students should spend enough time on their classes, 11 month of a year is so long that students might be tired of attending classes. Especial for primary children, their nature is to play. It is really difficult for them to focus on study in a long time. What is worse, forcing them to attend classes such a long time may result their resistance to studying and thus decrease their productivity. The same is true of high school students. Hence students should not be required to attend classes 11 month of a year.

Owing to the reasons as I mentioned above, I think that good teachers and varied and colorful extracurricular activities play vital roles in receiving better education.

今早起来一看发现这篇我写过懒得重新写了整整改改就贴啦（让你懒 pia飞~）
所以语言肯定很一般（你想说你逻辑不错么 pia飞~）唔中途发现哪里逻辑链断了也有可能毕竟这是23分的橙子酱
Anyway 将就将就啊哈哈哈哈

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-22 17:33
0821 独立

As a result of pollution in cities, increasing amount of urban dwellers leave from cities to villages to pursuit more suitable residences. In fact, villages have a lot of merits: they usually are peaceful, close to nature, and, more importantly, spacious. Although there are many shortcomings for living in the cities, my family still has a lot of reason to do so.

All my family members will save time, if we live in the city. An important reason is that our daily activities happen around the city. My parents, for instance, are the common white collars. On weekdays, they drive to the downtown of our city at which their office buildings are located. Therefore, if our family live in village far away from their office, my parents have to get up extremely early in the morning, especially thinking of traffic congestion nowadays. As for me, living near the downtown area is also good news. I could go to the school just by bike and save a great amount of time to do my homework. Hence, to save the time consumed in traffic, city is a better place to take care of family.

Medical condition could be another important reason to prevent my family from living in the countryside. There is no doubt that hospitals equipped with good doctors and devices are all located at city. Because of distance between city and countryside, patients may miss the optimal opportunity for treatment. Take one of my uncles for example. After retired, he moved to countryside to live out his final years in peace. In a late evening, he suddenly felt headache and was sent to the nearest hospital in the countryside immediately. Unfortunately, even though the doctors of this hospital could not find any problems with him, he passed away only on the second day in the hospital. As far as I am concerned, inferior medical condition in rural hospital should be responsible for his death. Therefore, since my parents are at an advanced age, good medical condition is essential for my family.

Education adds more importance on living in the city. Unquestionably, city possesses superior education recourses. With the development of urbanization, good fundamental education firstly thrives on cities. Then, because these schools could afford high salaries, they attract many good teachers to leave their hometown and to look for jobs in the cities. The good teachers in turns have improved teaching quality further. Thus a beneficial cycle formed. Apart from classroom education, extracurricular activities are more various in cities due to advanced facilities, such as gyms, computer centers with high network speed and libraries. Therefore, my family inclines to live in the city in order to receive better education.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I find it hard to part with my house in the city. Therefore, I believe that city is more suitable for taking care of family.

这作文写得越来不走心了（叹气~）

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-23 00:00
0820 独立 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-23 00:20
8.21独立城市还是乡村更容易照顾家庭

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-23 12:31
0820 独立修改

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

These days nobody could have failed to notice a wide discussion about whether some students should be required to attend classes for 11 months a year, hoping to receive a better education. Some people, including me, are against this idea and I believe that the key factor to better education is not the amount of time for class but good teachers and extracurricular activities.

Good teachers could improve the productivity of the classes, because they have much experience in teaching and thus know a lot about their students and the knowledge of their areas. Hence they can design a special plan for their students to study. The contents of this plan not only totally accord with the weak points of students but also include the appropriate time when students need to review their homework. By following this specific schedule step by step, students could always make up their deficiency and acquire knowledge more quickly. Therefore, with good teachers, students could learn a lot of knowledge even though they only attend school 8 months a year; in contrast, they will acquire limited knowledge if teachers are not extremely scholarly.

Better education also contains extracurricular activities. Students should learn many things from their daily life. For instance, students learned many characteristics of animals in natural science class. They may know what a duck looks like and how a duck passes the winter. Yet only by observing ducks in the farm can students really get familiar with this creature. Attending classes cannot gain the precious experience similar to observation, which mainly comes from extracurricular activities. Thus studying 11 month of a year will absolutely decrease the time for extracurricular activities.

Even though I admit that students should spend enough time on their classes, 11 month is so long that students might be tired of attending classes, especially for primary children, whose nature is to play. It is really difficult for them to focus on study for a long time. What is worse, forcing them to attend classes such a long time may result in their resistance to studying, thus decreasing their productivity. The same is true of high school students. Hence students should not be required to attend classes 11 month a year.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I think that good teachers and varied and colorful extracurricular activities play vital roles in receiving better education.

深深觉得这篇没救了

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-23 12:37
写个总结贴~么么哒~

最近有几点问题：
1. 介词搭配 in on at of 好好想想
2. 副词位置牢记修饰助动词滴副词放助动词后面呀~
3. 结果状语修饰前面整句
4. 逻辑主语要注意
5. 名词单复数问题可数名词一定不能裸奔
6. 定冠词放在可数名词前面的一把好手~~~
7. 句型多样化要注意~

我们的目标是~消灭语法错误~~~

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-23 12:45

橙圆发表于 2014-8-23 12:37
写个总结贴~么么哒~

最近有几点问题：

加油吧

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-24 18:45
0819 revised by mushroom

If I happen to be good at my friend’s weaksubject, should I lend a hand to him or her? Some people might say “yes”, sinceas is so often pointed out, the rose is in her hand, the flavor in mind(送人玫瑰手有余香咩~好厉害）.However, other people are against this idea, and I would like to recommend myfriend to ask help from tutors.

The tutors could provide my friend more specialexplanation than mine, because schools hire them only if(感觉这个连接词有点怪。。） they are qualified fortheir jobs. For instance, a tutor for universities often acquires doctordegree. He or she has ready learned the knowledge my friend and I now arestudying for many years. Therefore, there is no reason that I could be more familiarwith this knowledge than he or she is. More importantly, doctors should havedone further research in this area. Thus when my friend asks them a question,they could offer my friend many extra-specialized information, which mightthrow new light on my friend’s study. In contrast, my perspective is limited onwhat our professor mentioned in the classes. The only thing I could do is justto repeat professors’ explanations from classes, which my friend has alreadyconsidered thousands times. Hence, I think my friend should ask help fromtutors rather than me.

总结：
每段的论点的都很清晰~写得蛮好的啦

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-26 11:09
0824 独立

Parents should let children make and learn from their own mistakes.

As is so often pointed out, he who makes no mistakes makes nothing. Mistake, on one hand, costs children confidence; on the other hand, it perfects children in a variety of ways. As far as I am concerned, what parents should do is to familiarize their children with mistakes and guide their children to learn from their own mistakes.

Mistakes made by children weigh in favor of the process that parents get to know their children. Children, especially those who are under age six, could not precisely talk to their parents about what they have learned, but their behavior could tell parents the truth. Take myself as an example. When I was in childhood, my parents always encouraged me to repeat what I learned in the kindergarten. Actually, it was a hard task for a four-year-old child, and unavoidably my words were topsy-turvy. However, my parents could interpret a lot of information from my wrong answers. For instance, that I said one plus two equals four means that I had difficulty in subtraction. In this way, my parents could easily know my weakness.

The one of best ways to correct children’s behavior is let them learn from their own mistakes. For my perspective, nothing could impress a child greater than a mistake. For instance, the sentence “never forget your key” sounds familiar to almost all people. I was once one of the guys who never kept that sentence in mind and always lost keys at home. Unlike other parents who put the key into their children’s bags, my parents took a laissez-faire policy. But it worked. I stopped forgetting my key after I locked myself out five hours. Since then, the heave price I paid has reminded me to check my key every time before I go out. Therefore, parents should allow their children learn from mistakes.

Apart from real behaviors, mistakes help children to form a positive attitude towards failure. Only by knowing failure is commonplace could children overcome difficulties in the rest of their life. I often read the story that a successful businessman suddenly killed himself when facing a not serious financial problem. People did not understand the reason why he did so until found that this businessman went through his life too easy to rebound from a setback. Hence to prevent similar things from happening, parents should let children make mistakes and learn from their own mistakes at young age so that they could face failure with normal heart at older age.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-26 14:50
0820独立修改

As a result of pollution in cities, an increasing amount of urban dwellers leave from cities to villages to pursuit more suitable residences. In fact, villages have a lot of advantages: they are usually peaceful, close to nature, and, more importantly, spacious. Although there are many shortcomings for living in the cities, my family still has a lot of reasons to do so.

All of my family members will save time, if we live in the city. An important reason is that our daily activities happen around the city. My parents, for instance, are the common white collars. On weekdays, they drive to the downtown in our city at which their office buildings are located. Therefore, if our family live in village far away from their office, my parents have to get up extremely early in the morning, especially thinking of traffic congestion nowadays. As for me, living near the downtown area is also good news. I could go to the school just by bike and save a great amount of time to do my homework. Hence, to save the time consumed in traffic, city is a better place to take care of a family.

Medical condition could be another important reason to prevent my family from living in the countryside. There is no doubt that hospitals equipped with good doctors and devices are all located at city. Because of distance between city and countryside, patients may miss the optimal opportunity for treatment. Take one of my uncles for example. After retiring, he moved to countryside to live out his final years in peace. In a late evening, he suddenly felt headache and was sent to the nearest hospital in the countryside immediately. Unfortunately, even though the doctors of this hospital did not find any problems with him, he still passed away only on the second day in the hospital. As far as I am concerned, inferior medical condition in rural hospital should take responsible for his death. Therefore, since my parents are at an advanced age, good medical condition is essential for my family.

Education adds more importance to living in the city. Unquestionably, city possesses superior education recourses. With the development of urbanization, good fundamental education firstly thrives in cities. Then, because these schools could afford high salaries, they attract many good teachers to leave their hometown and to look for jobs in the cities. The good teachers in turns improve teaching quality further. Thus a beneficial cycle formed. Apart from classroom education, extracurricular activities are more various in cities due to advanced facilities, such as gyms, computer centers with high network speed and libraries. Therefore, my family inclines to live in the city in order to receive better education.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I find it hard to part with my house in the city. Therefore, I believe that city is more suitable for taking care of a family.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-26 18:04
0825 独立

Should we always state our honest opinions (statement) even though most people don’t agree with you?

Some people are oppressed by the fear of being “unique”. They talk in the same way as others do, behave like all of the other gentlemen or ladies and even see things from the same perspective as that of others; but they are empty of creativity and imagination. Another group of people talk their views loudly, even among which are different from others’. I find the latter group of people more interesting.

As is often pointed out, truth often lies in the hand of a few. People should be no shame of talking about a truth, even though other people are against them. Take Apple as an example. After it just launched a new product, its research team was always inundated with the complaints from customers about the appearance of the new product. However, its selling data strongly refuted those criticisms: millions of people will not spend several thousands dollars on an ugly product unless they come to realize the beauty of it. Therefore, the key question is not whether most people agree with a certain point but whether you speak it out.

Even though my answer is wrong and others’ are right, it is not a big deal to state my honest opinions, because I could learn from the process that I discuss with other people and figure out why we are different. For example, my mathematic dragged my feet when I was in high school. But unlike my classmates who shared the weak point with me, I was never afraid of speaking my wrong answers in the math class. By analyzing my wrong answers, my math teacher got to know the reason why I got the wrong answers and explained it to me. Gradually, mathematic could not bother me anymore. Hence, no matter what other people think, people should straightly state their own thoughts.

The difference views actually are the source of innovation. Almost every splendid historical era could prove that the world needs different views regardless of right or wrong. For instance, dating back to Renaissance period, many different thoughts flourished at that time. Some of them are regarded as heresy from a religious perspective, which occupies a mainstream position in the medieval Europe. However, it was these controversial opinions that open the minds of early European and give impetus to the first industry revolution. It is worth mentioning that although some views in the early stage are not perfect, they helped to improve the subsequent viewpoints. Thus people should be encouraged to state their unique opinions.

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-26 21:19
8.24修改，我觉得你比我写的好

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-26 23:47

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-8-24 18:45
0819 revised by mushroom

If I happen to be good at my friend’s weaksubject, should I lend a hand t ...

Thanks~
过了好几天才发现蘑菇默默改了~

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-27 19:11
0826 独立

Have you ever been confused about what kind of dream you should have? An achievable dream is better or a challenging but harder to fulfill one attracts you more. However, dream, in other words, is people’s expectation of their future, but if not coming true, it means nothing. Therefore, if I were you, I would prefer an achievable dream.

The more I get when dream comes true, the more I lose when it fails. Although the challenging dream tempts me with a lot of benefits, I am still oppressed by the fear of wasting all efforts. For instance, my brother was dreaming of becoming a professional football player in his childhood. This dream really challenged him because only people who not only have talented for football but also work really hard could qualify for this occupation. Thus he trained as hard as possible, but the results still fell short of his expectation. An accidental injury deprived him of his professional life, and he never recovered from it. Therefore, sometimes a dream that is too hard to attain may result in an unpredictable bad effect.

In contrast, a practical dream is relatively easy to achieve, thus providing people confidence and gradually leading people to succeed. Take myself as an example. Mathematic once was my nightmare. Unlike my aggressive classmates who were very anxious to get a perfect score in the next math exam, I made a simple goal for myself, specifically a requirement that I should only make a progress of five points in every subsequent exam. I got my first five points easily and then obtained one five points after another during my senior year. At last, I have never failed to come top in math examination. Hence, a practical dream encourages people to achieve their final goal step by step.

Another important function of real dreams is to foster an essential ability to recognize people themselves. To tell whether a dream is challenging or not actually requires people to know themselves very well. A person says he could lift a car that weighs in several tons might because he thinks himself man of unusually strength. Similarly, some people who insist on a challenging dream might not realize that it is tough for him to do so but regard it as an easy task. Thus choosing every attainable dream is one of the most important ways to learn how to evaluate people themselves.

Owing to the reasons as I mentioned above, I would rather make a workable dream first than have an impractical one.

作者: sigrid_shan 时间: 2014-8-28 12:18
橙子棒棒哒

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-28 14:21
#没事儿闲着一总结#

话说我觉得没事儿干总结总结还是有用的哈~没看我最近语法错误直线下降么么哒~

1. 固定搭配还是要注意阿 regardless of 后面+n. 没事儿多想想内后面是个介词还是啥词， have和be的搭配也要注意么么哒
2. eventhough 和 even if 区别：尽管/即使 eventhough+现实， even if+假设
3. 时态神马的还需要再注意注意~

Again!
我们的目标是~消灭语法错误~

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-28 16:20
0827 综合
In the listening, the professor thinks that the measures mentioned in the passages are unlikely to succeed and may cause unwanted damages.

First, contrary to what is mentioned in reading passage, erecting a fence could not prevent the spread of cane toads, because the young cane toads and their eggs are found in revers and streams. Through the waterways, they could flow from one side to another. Therefore, since a few young cane toads and eggs could establish a population on the other side, the fence will not be effective.

Second, conflicting with what is said in reading passage, the volunteers will result in a decline in a certain frog. These untrained volunteers have difficulty in telling the cane toads from a native frog especially when they are young. Hence, even though volunteers could trap and destroy the cane toad population, the native frogs are in danger.

Third, opposite to what is said in reading passage, a disease-causing virus will lead to terrible consequences. This virus will kill the American native cane toads since cane toads infected with this virus are possible to be transported to American for researches. Therefore, once the virus attacks and devastates the population of American native cane toad, it will be a disaster to ecosystem because American toad is an essential part of the ecosystem.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-28 16:26
0825 独立修改
Should we always state our honest opinions (statement) even though most people don’t agree with you?

Some people are oppressed by the fear of being “unique”. They talk in the same way as others do, behave like all of the other gentlemen or ladies and even see things from the same perspective as that of others; but they are empty of creativity and imagination. Another group of people talk their views loudly, some of which are different from others’. I find the latter group of people more interesting.

As is often pointed out, truth often lies in the hand of a few. People should feel no shame of talking about a truth, even though other people are against them. Take Apple as an example. After it just launched a new product, its research team was always inundated with the complaints from customers about the appearance of the new product. However, its selling data strongly refuted those criticisms: millions of people will not spend several thousands dollars on an ugly product unless they come to realize the beauty of it. Therefore, the key question is not whether most people agree with a certain point but whether you speak it out.

Even if my answer is wrong and others’ are right, it is not a big deal to state my honest opinions, because I could learn from the process that I discuss with other people and figure out why we are different. For example, my mathematic dragged my feet when I was in high school. But unlike my classmates who shared the weak point with me, I was never afraid of speaking my wrong answers in the math class. By analyzing my wrong answers, my math teacher got to know the reason why I got the wrong answers and explained it to me. Gradually, mathematic could not bother me anymore. Hence, no matter what other people think, people should straightly state their own thoughts.

The different views actually are the source of innovation. Almost every splendid historical era could prove that the world needs different views regardless of the correctness. For instance, dating back to Renaissance period, many different thoughts flourished at that time. Some of them were regarded as heresy from a religious perspective, which occupied a mainstream position in the medieval Europe. However, it was these controversial opinions that open the minds of early European and give impetus to the first industry revolution. It is worth mentioning that although some views in the early stage are not perfect, they helped to improve the subsequent viewpoints. Thus people should be encouraged to state their unique opinions.

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-28 17:18
8.26 已改

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-29 22:16
[size=13.63636302948px]0827 综合 revised by mushroom

[size=13.63636302948px]In the listening, the professor thinks that the measures mentioned in the passages are unlikely to succeed and may cause unwanted damages.

[size=13.63636302948px]First, contrary to what is mentioned in reading passage, erecting a fence could not prevent the spread of cane toads, because the young cane toads and their eggs are found in revers and streams. Through the waterways, they could flow from one side to another. Therefore, since a few young cane toads and eggs could establish a population on the other side, the fence will not be effective.

[size=13.63636302948px]Second, conflicting with what is said in reading passage, the volunteers will result in a decline in a certain frog. These untrained volunteers have difficulty in telling the cane toads from a native frog especially when they are young. Hence, even though volunteers could trap and destroy the cane toad population, the native frogs are in danger.

[size=13.63636302948px]Third, opposite to what is said in reading passage, a disease-causing virus will lead to terrible consequences. This virus will kill the American native cane toads since cane toads infected with this virus are possible to be transported to American for researches. Therefore, once the virus attacks and devastates the population of American native cane toad, it will be a disaster to ecosystem because American toad is an essential part of the ecosystem.

总结：
听力没问题
语法我扫了一遍没见着~
一个建议，第一段可以简单一两句介绍一下背景，讨论的是啥个事儿，突然这么一句反对有点儿惊。

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-29 22:20
0828 独立

Pets nowadays enter more and more families. Some people treat their pets as one of their family members and spend a large part of their salaries on their pets. Other people are against this behavior, holding the opinion that money should be put into good use for many other things, such as education, medical treatment, and financial investment. In my opinion, I stand for the former use of money.

There is only one criterion to judge significance that people should spend money on a certain thing: whether this certain thing is important? As for many people, pets to them are what children to parents. My parents, for instance, has lived on their own because I left home to my university. Our cat, Tom, to some extent, substitutes for me to accompany them. We always have a sweet moment when talking about Tom’s recent funny stories on the telephone. As Tom becomes an increasingly important bridge between my parents and me, my parents are more and more willing to spend money on Tom. Therefore, the important meaning of pets makes it unsurprising that people spend so much money on their pets.

Pets could bring the same function as with many other investments I mentioned at the beginning, because raising a pet benefits people in many good ways. For example, a family with dog has to do many works to breed it. The owners should take their dogs for a walk at least twice a day. In this way, it is a simple way for owners to keep practice everyday. Apart from adults, playing with dogs is good for their children. I read an article saying that keeping a dog could improve children’s memory. Hence, the advantages of keeping pets could compensate for the money we spent on them.

The money spent on pets is very small compared to the money earn by people today, because salaries is significantly increased. In the past, the large apart of money could only meet people’s basic demands, such as eating and living. Even if there were surplus, most people would try every means to make the use of this money to earn more money. In contrast, today keeping pets is not a luxury thing. The majority people will regard the money for keeping pets as a drop in ocean. Thus people could justifiable pay as much as money they want for pets.

Owing to the reason I mentioned above, modern people should not be confined to how many money they spent on their pets. The only thing they should care about is whether they are happy about spending that amount of money.

掐了下时间略略有些超时写成这样我满足了

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-1 20:39
0901 独立

You can know a lot about a person through the types of friends this person has.

In the most cases, when people are referring to the relationship between two people, they are most likely to use the word “friend” to describe their relationship. Some people argue that friendship is only a small part of people ‘s life and thus could not use as a way to know a certain person. However, other people are against this idea and believe that they could judge a person by taking a glance at his or her friends. I stand for the latter opinion.

First of all, friends could show us people’s interests. As is so often pointed out, birds of a feather flock together. People who share the common interests have high possibility in becoming friends. Take my own experience as an example. At the first time when I acquainted with my best friend, our conversation started from a famous Japanese cartoon we both liked. With this as a turning point, we gradually became familiar with each other and found that we have a lot in common other than cartoon. After so many years, I still hold the point that what bonds us most is our common interests. Therefore, we could safely say that at least there is one common point we could find between friends.

Second, we could make a simple hypothesis about the personality of people through that of their friends. As for normal people, they are more willing to spend their time with people who make them relax rather than put them in a nervous state. For instance, introverted people are less likely to have a group of friends who are outgoing due to their different lifestyles. Social contact plays a vital role in outgoing people’s life. However, the social relationship may be too complicated to deal with for introverted people. As a result, it is hard for them to maintain their relationship with outgoing people and vice versa. Hence, people tend to have friends who are similar in personality.

Finally, seldom could we see a person who has a noble character make friend with a notorious guy. Sometimes, a disappointment towards people’s character is strong enough to break a couple of friends apart. For example, the famous composer, Beethoven, and the great monarch, Napoleon, were friends and he even composed Symphony No.3 to dedicate to Napoleon. However, he tore the music score into pieces after hearing the news that Napoleon became the emperor of France. Thus, we could know people’s character from their friends because there is always a principle on which they constantly insist.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at the conclusion that we could learn a lot from people’s friends.

0901 综合

The reading passage describes a trend that people nowadays tend to read less literature and is concerned about this phenomenon. However, in the listening, the professor thinks that this worry is unnecessary.

First, contrary to what is said in reading passage, public will not miss out on the important benefits, such as expansion of understanding of the language, exercise of imagination, and sympathy for others. Actually, other books, other than literature book, could provide people intellectual stimulation. Therefore, even though the decline is sharp for literature books, there are still other good books for people to read.

Second, the reading passage displays a bias to the forms of entertainment today. In fact, people spend less time not only on literature books but also on all kinds of books. The culture has changed. Listening to a brilliant song and watching a good movie do not waste people’s time. Instead, these creative entertainments speak more directly to contemporary concerns more directly than literature does.

Third, opposite to what is said in reading passage, we should not blame people for not reading literature books. Conversely, it is the authors who should take responsibility for the decline of literature. They write the books in a way that people hardly understand. Hence, there is not much reason to support that earlier generation would read today’s literature.

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-1 22:38

橙圆发表于 2014-9-1 20:39
0901 独立

You can know a lot about a person through the types of friends this person has.

已下载明天改

作者: angla 时间: 2014-9-1 23:22
The reading passage describes a trend that people nowadays tend to read less literature and is （复数）concerned about this phenomenon. However, in the listening, the professor thinks that this worry is unnecessary.

First, contrary to what is said in reading passage, （典型的结构不平行错误。Contrary to 的对象不平行如果要contrary to what is said in reading应该是what is said in listening）public will not miss out on the important benefits, such as expansion of understanding of the language, exercise of imagination, and sympathy for others. Actually, other books, other than（语意重复） literature book, could provide people intellectual stimulation. Therefore, even though the decline is sharp for literature books, there are still other good books for people to read.

Second, the reading passage displays a bias to the forms of entertainment today. In fact, people spend less time not only on literature books but also on all kinds of books. The culture has changed. Listening to a brilliant song and （用or 更好，两者并不是同时发生）watching a good movie do not （相应用单数）waste people’s time. Instead, these creative entertainments speak more directly to contemporary concerns more directly than literature does.

Third, opposite to what is said in reading passage,（与第二段同） we should not blame people for not reading literature books. Conversely, it is the authors who should take responsibility for the decline of literature.（强调句加高级短语，赞） They write the books in a way that people hardly understand. Hence, there is not much reason to support that earlier generation would read today’s literature.

虽然总体字数达到了官方要求，但对于高分作文字数偏少

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-2 09:00

angla 发表于 2014-9-1 23:22
The reading passage describes a trend that people nowadays tend to read less literature and is （复 ...

那请问高分作文是多少字呢？？

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-2 14:12

angla 发表于 2014-9-1 23:22
The reading passage describes a trend that people nowadays tend to read less literature and is （复 ...

我也想问这个因为之前看到要求都说不用写太多了

作者: angla 时间: 2014-9-2 15:51

橙圆发表于 2014-9-2 14:12
我也想问这个因为之前看到要求都说不用写太多了

我也是个人意见啊。
刚刚满200感觉略微少，250-300之间感觉会好一些。只是个人意见

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-2 16:22

橙圆发表于 2014-9-2 14:12
我也想问这个因为之前看到要求都说不用写太多了

我上次综合写了330左右，独立写了600多一点嗯。。

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-2 17:07
revised by mushroom

0901 独立

You can know a lot about a person through the types of friends this person has.

In the most cases, when people are referring to the relationship between two people(two persons), they are most likely to use the word “friend” to describe their relationship. Some people argue that friendship is only a small part of people ‘s life and thus could not use as a way to know a certain person. However, other people are against this idea and believe that they could judge a person by taking a glance at his or her friends. I stand for the latter opinion.

First of all, friends could show us people’s interests. As is so often pointed out, birds of a feather flock together. People who share the common interests have high possibility in becoming friends. Take my own experience as an example. At the first time when I acquainted with my best friend, our conversation started from a famous Japanese cartoon we both liked. With this as a (as a 可以去掉？) turning point, we gradually became familiar with each other and found that we have a lot in common other than cartoon. After so many years, I still hold the point that what bonds us most is our common interests. Therefore, we could safely say that at least there is one common point we could find between friends.

Second, we could make a simple hypothesis about the personality of people through that of their friends. As for normal people, they are more willing to spend their time with people who make them relax rather than put them in a nervous state. For instance, introverted people are less likely to have a group of friends who are outgoing due to their different lifestyles. Social contact plays a vital role in outgoing people’s life. However, the social relationship may be too complicated to deal with for introverted people. As a result, it is hard for them to maintain their relationship with outgoing people and vice versa. Hence, people tend to have friends who are similar in personality.

Finally, seldom could we see a person who has a noble character make friend with a notorious guy. Sometimes, a disappointment towards people’s character is strong enough to break a couple of friends apart. For example, the famous composer, Beethoven, and the great monarch, Napoleon, were friends and he even composed Symphony No.3 to dedicate to Napoleon. However, he tore the music score into pieces after hearing the news that Napoleon became the emperor of France. Thus, we could know people’s character from their friends because there is always a principle on which they constantly insist.(例子实在是太高大上了...）

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at the conclusion that we could learn a lot from people’s friends.

例子实在太高大上了。。成语和习语也是各种狂拽酷炫。。
可以改进的是，开头的句式可以多点变换~（滚开，你自己不还是万年就那两句话！。。。）
然后背一些地道的英语用法，比如，a small part of 就可以用a fraction of... 刚开始“背”新四，让我显摆一下。。【捂脸跑】
一起加油~~

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-2 17:45

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-2 17:07
revised by mushroom

0901 独立

谢谢蘑菇~
PS：with this as a turning point 以此作为契机呃固定搭配

PPS：卧槽！你是怎么做到写600多个字的我赶脚我完全写不完阿

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-2 20:29
0902 独立

Being creative, rather than carefully planning, is more often results in better solution.

What characterizes modern society most is its open thinking. People’s minds are not confined to what they have already known but broadened by Internet and other technologies. As for me, these creative minds provide us better ways to solve problems than do carefully plans.

To some extent, carefully planning gives us a possible solution rather than a feasible one. No matter how carefully it is, it is unlikely to deal with all sudden changes. Take my own experience as an example. In my senior year, I went to the Europe for tourism. Before departing from my country, I almost did all plans as carefully as possible, even thinking about what if I got a terrible disease during the trip. However, all my previous efforts wasted. My luggage was lost at the airport in my country because of airport staff’s fault. Under this circumstance, the only thing I could do is to forget all my plans and try to find a creative solution to solve this problem. Therefore, thoughtfully planning not always results in better solution.

Additionally, creative minds allow us to think things in a smarter way. Let us assume a situation that a man has to attend a meeting on a couple of days. However, the weather forecast says that there is probably raining outside during these days. What this man should do? Should he plan the time he go out precisely? I think the answer might be “no”. Today we all know that he should take an umbrella or use other tools, but in ancient china most people’s life depend on prediction about weather greatly. Hence, the creative minds enable people to abandon their awkward planning.

Another important advantage of creativity is that it concerns more about people’s emotion and thus makes people feel better about a certain solution because of the power of surprise. For example, when people try to chase a girl, it is the boy who has bad taste will do the things like carefully planning. In the most cases, only unpredictable things could touch the heartstrings of the girl. In contrast, the reason why many boys failed to win their girls is that they treat people as machines, which are in the need of accurately planning. Thus when it comes to human, I prefer a creative solution.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, better solutions often result from creative minds rather than carefully planning.

作者: GJason 时间: 2014-9-3 20:38
模版痕迹很淡，说明功力已经过了初级阶段；其他细节见文内

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-3 22:34

GJason 发表于 2014-9-3 20:38
模版痕迹很淡，说明功力已经过了初级阶段；其他细节见文内

谢谢啦有一个点~ than do careful plans 是因为标准写法 do 需要倒装哒~

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-3 23:30
0903 独立
Do you agree or disagree? The best way for a teacher to let students become interested in a subject is to help them know how to use it in lives outside schools.

What characterizes the best part of subjects in school most is their profound knowledge, which preventing students from being interested in them. However, by telling the application of those subjects to students, teachers could attract their students to show more interest in studying those sciences.

As for most people, life draws them more than an abstract knowledge does because life experience provides people a directly way to understand a subject. Take my own experience as an example. Physics was my setback for a long period. One of my most important problems is that I cannot relate what I learn in class to the phenomenon in real life. For instance, a theory says that light could reflect towards different directions, but light is invisible and intangible. I did not fully acquire this knowledge until my teacher told me that the street lamp in the evening could describe this phenomenon precisely. In this way, how light reflects vividly appeared on my mind, and I found that physics is really interesting. Therefore, the application of a subject interests us in the subject itself.

People tend to have interest in what is useful rather than what is only important in exams. Once they realize that they are in desperate need of a subject, nothing could pour cold water on their enthusiasm. Another example from my own experience is how I feel interest in English. Like almost all students, I was afraid of learning a totally different language. However, a tour to Europe completely changed my mind. The English I learned in class plays a vital role in my whole trip, even when I ask the place of the toilet. Since then, I have devoted myself to English study and gradually fell in love with it. Hence, real interest sometimes comes from an urgent need.

The unknown things outside the school stimulate people to study a certain subject with a surprising passion. As is so often pointed out, curiosity is the nature of human beings. People incline to try every means to finger out anything unknown to them. For example, when my ten years old sister sees something strange to her, the first thing she do is to try to explain it with the knowledge she learned in class. If she feels that she could not solve this puzzle, the next thing for her is to search the reference or consult with her teachers. This puzzle-solving process helps a lot to keep her interest in her study. In contrast, if she were confined to the academic books, this enthusiasm would easily fade away. Thus the outside world could arouse students’ interest in subjects.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at the conclusion that learning how to use a subject in real world weighs in favor of the process that students become interest in this subject.

0903 综合

The reading passage puts up some negative effects of commercial fossil trade. However, in the listening, the professor thinks that even though these negative effects exist, they have been greatly exaggerated. In fact, the benefits of this trade outweigh its disadvantages.

First, the professor refute the point in reading passage that commercial fossil trade decrease the exposure to the public. As a matter of fact, the public tends to have a greater exposure to fossils. The fossil hunting makes more fossils available for purchase, so even low level of institution, such as public school and libraries could buy the fossils.

Second, contrary to what is mentioned in reading passage, the point made by professor shows that scientists are unlikely to lose access to some of important fossils. In contrast, any fossils, before entering the market, have to be identified by scientists. The Scientists are the only people who could put the value on fossils. Therefore, the important information will not be missed.

Third, another important reason stated in reading passage is that commercial fossil collectors will destroy valuable scientific evidence, however, the professor in the listening believes that those collectors help to discover many fossils. In reality, universities or scientific institutions discover not that much fossils. If there were not those collectors, we might even not know the locations and surroundings of fossils.

快考试了压力大改作文的见谅见谅可能错误会比较多一点

作者: GJason 时间: 2014-9-4 10:13

橙圆发表于 2014-9-3 22:34
谢谢啦有一个点~ than do careful plans 是因为标准写法 do 需要倒装哒~

倒装是可以的，没问题。正装也行吧

作者: GJason 时间: 2014-9-4 12:38
9.3综合修改
橙子的综合写作非常可以了，good。出了两个主谓一致的错误，其他都OK

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-4 14:10

GJason 发表于 2014-9-4 12:38
9.3综合修改
橙子的综合写作非常可以了，good。出了两个主谓一致的错误，其他都OK ...

谢谢G童鞋！主谓一致居然还表扬我满地打滚

作者: GJason 时间: 2014-9-4 16:34

橙圆发表于 2014-9-4 14:10
谢谢G童鞋！主谓一致居然还表扬我满地打滚

瑕不掩瑜

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-4 21:22
0904 独立

Should all teachers be required to take courses every five years to update their knowledge?

What characterizes modern society is its rapidly changes. It is not totally exaggerated that the knowledge advanced yesterday might fall behind times tomorrow. As a result of the significance of teachers, I stand for the point that they should attend courses after a certain period, such as five years, to refresh their knowledge.

To judge a course, one of the most important criteria is practicality. Teachers should teach a course that could apply to real life rather than a backward one. Take smart phone as an example. Five years ago, it is impossible to make more than the wildest guess at how clear and big the screen of mobile phone could be. In the classes, teachers was talking about superior capacities brought by Iphone 3GS. However, these capacities could not amaze people anymore. Teaching these knowledge in class bring nothing valuable to students. Therefore, teachers should focus on catching up with times.

Some people are wondering whether all teachers should take courses. I insist that this requirement is an absolute necessity, because world changes not in some certain perspectives but in every corner. People’s outlooks on the world, life, and values have totally changed, thus converting the things in the world to completely different features. For instance, people in my country now regard thin face as the symbol of beauty. Responding to market demands, scientists have developed countless technology to help people to change their face shape. The method they used even not appeared on the world in the past. Hence, new things has sprung up in large members, thus making it is necessary for all teachers to update their knowledge.

How often should teachers renew their knowledge? I think every five-year is appropriate. If they attend courses more often, these courses may distract them too much from their jobs, resulting in a decline in the time they spent on their student. But if the time is longer, their knowledge might too out-of-date to teach their students. For example, in my childhood, Pluto was one of plants surrounding the sun. But when I attended high school, scientists announced that it is not qualified for being a “plant” and actually Pluto is a dwarf start. Thus five year is suitable.

Owing to reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at the conclusion that all teachers should be required to attend courses every five years to update their knowledge.

我不是故意把个作文写得这么非主流我实在憋不粗理由！

作者: daisy333 时间: 2014-9-4 21:52
么么哒~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-5 11:07

橙圆发表于 2014-9-4 21:22
0904 独立

扫了一眼发现真的蛮非主流的~~

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-5 16:58

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-5 11:07
扫了一眼发现真的蛮非主流的~~

这种一眼看上去废话的句子实在很难憋理由TAT

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-5 16:59
0904 综合

The reading passage describes the situation that forest fires and severe storms cause disaster to forest and provides a solution to solve this problem, which is called salvage logging. However, in the listening, the professor believes that even though this method helps to the recover the forest, it would result in long-term damage and its benefits are questionable.

First, the professor refutes the point in reading passage that dead trees weighs against the forest. In fact, removing the dead trees will not create the good condition for the growth of plants. The decomposition provides the nutrient for further generation in forest. Therefore, the salvage logging might lead to a lack of nutrient in forest.

Second, contrary to what is mentioned in reading passage, the point made by professor says that salvage logging does more harm than insects do. The dead trees provide the habitat not only for some harmful insects but also for many birds and other insects. Thus, these dead trees play a vital role in the long-term health of the forest.

Third, another important reason stated in reading passage is that salvage logging could bring economic benefits to society, however, the professor in the listening believes that these benefits would not last every long. To recover some severely damaged forest, some vehicle that is expensive to use and maintain has to be used, such as helicopters. Furthermore, jobs created by salvage logging are usually temporary and prefer to hire outsiders with more experience and training rather than locals.

作者: chasedreamabc 时间: 2014-9-7 14:43
9.4 独立
What characterizesmodern society is its rapidly changes（1.觉得语法不是很通，有类似的例句吗。 2. Changes作名词，副词rapidly不能修饰名词；作动词，看不懂）. It is nottotally exaggerated that the knowledge advanced yesterday might fall behindtimes tomorrow. As a result of the significance of teachers, I stand for thepoint that they should attend courses after a certain period, such as fiveyears, to refresh their knowledge.

To judge a course, one of the most important criteria is practicality. Teachers should teach acourse that could apply to real life rather than a backward one. Take smart phone（+s） as an example. Five years ago, it is impossible to make more thanthe wildest guess at how clear and big the screen of （a+）mobile phone could be. In the classes,teachers was talking about superior capacities(手机内存是memory，我的手机一直提示我no memory card) brought by Iphone（iPhone）3GS. However, these capacities（ditto） could not amaze people anymore. Teachingthese knowledge in class bring（应该是brings吧，teaching引导句子做主语，说的是这种行为） nothing valuable to students. Therefore, teachers should focus oncatching up with times.

Some people are wondering whether all teachers should take courses. I insistthat this requirement is an absolute necessity, because （the+）world changes not in some certainperspectives but in every corner. People’s outlooks on the world, life, andvalues have totally changed（建议用现在完成进行时，此时此刻这些outlooks仍然在变化，have been totallychanging, PS:现在完成进行时via XDF）, thus converting the things in the world to completely differentfeatures. For instance, people in my country now regard thin face as the（a）symbol of beauty. Responding to market demands, scientists have developedcountless technology（词会否有些大，skills，而且应该用+s，这里意思不用总称） tohelp people to change their face shape. The methodthey used even not appeared on the world in the past.（之前1句说现在流行小脸，所以发明了很多削脸的，这句说这方式以前没有，用2个单句显得有点逻辑重叠了，改成一个定从，have developed countlessskills that have not appeared in the past，或者 in the last 5 years，最好说是5 years 要是只是past，5年美容术没进步老师就可以不进修了， on the world 没必要） Hence, new things has sprung up in large members, thus making it isnecessary for all teachers to update their knowledge.

How often should teachers renew their knowledge? I think every five-year isappropriate. If they attend courses more often, these courses may distract themtoo much from their jobs,（频繁更新会影响上课，但是不频繁更新会一直给学生讲过时的东西，前半句是本段的意思，后半句是第一点的意思，有点自相矛盾。可以说一个理论或者knowledge从提出到被证实需要5年的时间，it needs 5 years to determine that a theory is practicable from hypothesis to theorem） resulting in a decline in the time they spent ontheir student（+s）.But if the time is longer, their knowledge might too out-of-date to teach theirstudents. For example, in my childhood, Pluto was one of plants surrounding the sun（Sun，专名大写）.But when I attended high school, scientists announced that it is not qualifiedfor being a “plant” and actually Pluto is a dwarf start. Thus five year issuitable.

Owing to reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at the conclusion that allteachers should be required to attend courses every five years to update theirknowledge.

反过来看题目要求，to update，to do表目的，破题点落在更新，就是更新有什么好处，不更新有什么好处。第一段是说out of date；第二段还是说了out of date，没有表现出跟本段TS句子的对应，all teachers should be，算是内部偏题吧。最后段也有些绕进去了。
如果米有自虐倾向话呢，就找些容易的points 知识更新，教学设备的更新，教学方式的更新，学生心理的变化。。。。

作者: chasedreamabc 时间: 2014-9-7 15:23
0904 综合

The reading passage describes the situation that forest fires and severe storms cause disaster to forest and provides a solution to solve this problem, which is called salvage logging. However, in the listening, the professor believes that even though this method helps to the recover the forest, it would result in long-term damage and its benefits are questionable.

First, the professor refutes the point in reading passage that dead trees weighs（是想写won't？） against the forest. In fact, removing the dead trees will not create the good condition for the growth of plants. The decomposition provides the nutrient for further generation in forest. Therefore, the salvage logging might lead to a lack of nutrient in forest.

Second, contrary to what is mentioned in reading passage, the point made by professor says that salvage logging does more harm than insects do. The dead trees provide the habitat not only for some harmful insects but also for many birds and other insects. Thus, these dead trees play a vital role in the long-term health of the forest.

Third, another important reason stated in reading passage is that salvage logging could bring economic benefits to society, however, the professor in the listening believes that these benefits would not last every long. To recover some severely damaged forest, some vehicle that is expensive to use and maintain has to be used, such as helicopters. Furthermore, jobs created by salvage logging are usually temporary and prefer to hire outsiders with more experience and training rather than locals.

阅读部分只写半句话真的可以吗，别的都很棒

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-8 10:59

chasedreamabc 发表于 2014-9-7 14:43
9.4 独立
What characterizesmodern society is its rapidly changes（1.觉得语法不是很通，有类似的例句吗 ...

谢谢Alex 改好细我还是重写吧

第一句提供一个新概念4的例句给你 What characterizes almost all Hollywood pictures is their inner emptiness. 简单翻译一下就是好莱坞电影的特征是空洞

内capacity 我是想说性能至于到底能不能这样用有待考证

另 weigh against 应该是我手抽写错了应该是 be weighed against 不利于的意思

skill的话我不大赞成应该感觉这个词的意思是 the ability to do something well 如果technology词太大的话我比较偏向于 technique 再另外我查了下technology+s的话意思是工艺像是捏紫砂壶那个感觉了

最后求讨论个 a the s的问题我是各种蛋疼。。。。。

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-26 17:58
妹子你的作文咋还没有呢我明天就考试了你要是交晚了我可能会明天给你改么么哒我继续看基金了。。。。

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-26 22:34
原谅我实在实在是不想贴了

作者: angla 时间: 2014-9-27 12:41
thanks very much！！

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-27 19:16
9-25 我稍后把我的作文贴出来么么大

作者: sclovexj 时间: 2014-9-27 19:49
独立925修改by re
Most people do not count on government for help because they think that it is always better to either do things on their own or to ask for help form。 their family（either 和or后面需要一致 either do ....or ask....)

As for most people, turning to government for help is always not their first choice. The time for officers to produce their requests prevents them from counting on government. From their perspectives, doing things on their own or asking help from their family is more reliable. In this way, they could solve their problems more efficiently, objectively and better control the pace.(两个副词后用and，后面也应该用副词才能通顺，乃better control the pace是和谁对应或是平行呢）

The experience of waiting for helps from government tortures many people, （不是所有国家噢，某些个哈）because hardly could they figure out complex procedures required by government. In my country, people are in fear of getting involved in things related to government, such as applying for a business license. The materials that a businessman has to provide may cost him a whole month to prepare. What is worse, this process might be extended, if more than one government office are responsible for dealing with a certain issue. （感觉没说完就突然停了）Under this circumstance, a large number of businessmen in my country choose to ask a favor from their friends or family to simplify this process.

Government tends to offer help suitable for people as more as possible. Compared to government, friends and family are more likely to help people according to their specific needs. For instance, I have a relative who live in misery and want. To raise his child, he applied for unemployment relief from government in my city. However, the government refused his request because his house is slightly bigger than house for qualification（这里表达感觉有出入，他家的房子比？大）But in fact, life had forced him into a corner. At last, his friends helped him by providing him a minimum salary job. Thus all his problems were easily solved.

Doing things by themselves rather than counting on government enables them to precisely control the important things. They could arrange the things based on their own schedule and revise their plan（s） at any time. （加个to是不是好点）Take my own experience as an example. When I applied my business license last year and had to contact an officer in another department, the officer who was in charge of my application said that he could contact this officer for me. However, his help does not make me relaxed. Instead, I was really anxious about whether he could contact another officer in time. Therefore, I refused his kindness and did it by myself. The things went smoothly, and I quickly got my permission.

Owing to the reasons I mentioned above, I would arrive at （draw替换arrive at是不是好点）the conclusion that when confronting things is urgent or important, people should better do these things on their own or ask help from their family or friends.
1句式变化不多，喜欢用动名词结构从句及其并列句，尝试多变换句式
2句意表达不是特别精确
3基本做到了组织架构合理，有详细例句来支持观点，但不是足够有力度
4第三个例子阐述不是很清晰，段落主题句有些含混

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-27 21:24

loverony713 发表于 2014-9-27 19:16
9-25 我稍后把我的作文贴出来么么大

有几个点不太同意
live in misery and want 固定搭配
minimum salary 最低工资阿最朴素的写法呃我找不到其它好说法了可以给个参考一下么

另用词不太好的问题如果可以能给个替换词咩？

谢谢Emily

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-27 21:30

橙圆发表于 2014-9-27 21:24
有几个点不太同意
live in misery and want 固定搭配
minimum salary 最低工资阿最朴素的写法呃我找 ...

就是你想表达的意思不能通过动词说不出来......~ 你先试着用中文说出来~~ 然后看看有没有合适的英文~
还是多看看范文吧~ 这样自然就知道怎么用了

你的一些词组我确实不知道~ 我用的一些别人也会不知道也会各种迷惑互相补充吧

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-27 21:58

写得我蛋疼

作者: angla 时间: 2014-9-27 23:28
我改得也挺疼的

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-28 11:10

angla 发表于 2014-9-27 23:28
我改得也挺疼的

因为family 前面有every 阿所以后面谓语动词要用单数
prevent后面介词只能用from 姐姐应该是记错了
然后 deem...as 这个确实是我用错了不是缺谓语是介词应该用 to
Thx~

作者: angla 时间: 2014-9-28 11:25

橙圆发表于 2014-9-28 11:10
因为family 前面有every 阿所以后面谓语动词要用单数
prevent后面介词只能用from 姐姐应该是记错了
然后 ...

冏。。。。。。。。
我前天写的prevent from being
echo跟我说只能prevent sb to do

我去。。。。。。。。。这互改

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-28 22:15
哞吼吼我实在不擅长写这种生活的类型

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-29 17:35
啦啦啦啦啦

作者: JOCELYN1641 时间: 2014-9-29 21:01

橙圆发表于 2014-9-28 22:15
哞吼吼我实在不擅长写这种生活的类型

字数好多啊，注意一下单复数就好了，其他都挺好的

作者: sclovexj 时间: 2014-9-29 22:10
9.28 修改完毕，里面一个问题请教，[attach]149929[/attach]

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-29 23:25

sclovexj 发表于 2014-9-29 22:10
9.28 修改完毕，里面一个问题请教，

criteria 是 criterion 的复数形式呃所以不需要加s
Take sth as an example 是祈使句不能在前面加 to
observe的意思是观察你不能说观察一个电视节目吧
satisfied 和 satisfying 的区别在于主语 I am satisfied 和 this toy is satisfying
spent 是后置定语补全是 money that is spent by people 所以这句话的谓语是relate
关于不定式和动名词作主语的问题在于你可以尝试在你想用不定式作主语的时候在动词前面加为了两个字看句子通不通顺
至于动名词作主语的问题呃我好想只有一个句子是用的动名词作的主语。。。。。。所以为啥是我喜欢用。。。有点迷茫。。。

另外亲写的这个句子
some ppl relate that to spending more money in advertising is the way to success the business
1. to 如果是不定式后面应该用动词原形
2. 此处用不定式明显不合适可以使用我刚才说的方法翻译
3. spend 后面介词应该用on
4. success 是名词所以后面不能用business

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-29 23:26

JOCELYN1641 发表于 2014-9-29 21:01
字数好多啊，注意一下单复数就好了，其他都挺好的

谢谢看到通篇的语法错误还被缩其它都很好 TAT

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-30 19:47
一写这种就词穷请告诉我不是一个人

作者: ForTheAC 时间: 2014-9-30 20:41

橙圆发表于 2014-9-30 19:47
一写这种就词穷请告诉我不是一个人

不是人是啥啊。。给你改好啦= =

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-30 21:00

ForTheAC 发表于 2014-9-30 20:41
不是人是啥啊。。给你改好啦= =

Thx a lot 改的意见我一万个赞同栗子是写得太挫 PS：咱俩头像真和谐

作者: ForTheAC 时间: 2014-9-30 21:25

橙圆发表于 2014-9-30 21:00
Thx a lot 改的意见我一万个赞同栗子是写得太挫 PS：咱俩头像真和谐

我被TPO听力虐怕了= =

作者: sclovexj 时间: 2014-10-2 10:15

橙圆发表于 2014-9-29 23:25
criteria 是 criterion 的复数形式呃所以不需要加s
Take sth as an example 是祈使句不能在前面加 to
o ...

1. criteria，对的
2.observe 我后面没有看到tv，所以还是你说的用watch合适
3.Some people relate the amount of money spent on advertising to the success of business(仍然觉得这个句子表达有问题，你要表达的中文意思是？）
relate 在韦氏里面解释：describe，narrate，recite...你这里主要表达的意思是？
some ppl relate that to spend more money in advertising is the way to succeed the business
4.动名词和不定式做主语的区别：但也有个例，所以核对一下
动名词做主语通常表示经常的反复的具有普遍性的动作。比如：Getting up early is a good habit.
动词不定式做主语通常表示某一次具体的动作。例如：To apology to you friend is the most important thing.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-10-7 12:37

sclovexj 发表于 2014-10-2 10:15
1. criteria，对的
2.observe 我后面没有看到tv，所以还是你说的用watch合适
3.Some people relate the ...

1.relate something to something 将两件事联系起来我就是想说一些人认为商业成功与在广告上投资额度有关
2.我确实很少很少看到托福里面使用不定式做主语的情况所以我一般不用

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-10-8 15:46
又是一周没写作文= =

作者: echosun2002 时间: 2014-10-8 18:07
改好了亲，有嘛问题联系我哈

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-10-8 19:48

echosun2002 发表于 2014-10-8 18:07
改好了亲，有嘛问题联系我哈

Thx~ 没问题唯一的问题是始终在句式变化上摸不着头脑

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-10-15 18:12
又特么是一万年不写作文
一写就写成坨屎

作者: echosun2002 时间: 2014-10-15 20:38
改好啦亲

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