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This statement suggests that people canwork for public recognition even without payment. Although praise and attentionof others sometimes mean a lot to individuals, they can never take place of therole money plays in our life. It is impossibe that people will strive to achievewithout the promise of money.

Nowadays, many people’s budgets are stillvery tight, bearing heavy financial burden. They have to make money to pay fordaily supplies like food and clothes. After people can make ends meet, normallythey will desire a more comfortable life. People tend to own huge houses,expensive cars and parents usually hope their children can go to a famousprivate university to get excellent education. None of these can be realizedwithout money. Public recognition, on the other hand, is fickle and many are ’rememberedtoday and forgotten tomorrow. It is hard for me to imagine people care moreabout flattering public recognition rather than money they need to have abetter life.

Besides, we have to admit that materialpossession has been traditionally accepted as the measurement of one’s successor social status. Owning a lot of money is typically related to one’s workability. Each year, Fortune magazine publish a special issue to rank the top100most successful people throughout the world according to their yearly income.Money, as a measurement to comparing people’s values is objective. People whoobtain money through hardworking surely deserves appreciation and respect,which undoubtedly contribute to a meaningful life.

Last but not least, Money will not onlybring people various delicious food, fashionable clothes, magnificent houses,it can also be used to do a lot of rewarding things to others, such asdonations to poor people. All these things, helping to satisfy one’s need forpersonal fulfillment, will definitely entitle people to recognition and respectof others. While public recognition, inevitably, may attract the press to digout your privacy and cause a lot of trouble to your life. It’s the negativeeffects that those who eager for public attention usually ignore.

Inconclusion, I think people should not care public recognition more than money. But is essential for us to keep in mind that we have to own money through our diligenceand try to do something not only valuable to ourselves but also beneficial toothers. (389 words)

This statement（完整的题目是Agree or disagree, 没有这个statement） suggests that people canwork for public recognition even without payment. Although praise and attentionof others sometimes mean a lot to individuals, they can never take place of therole money plays（playing) in our life. It is impossibe that people will strive to achieve（这句话有点奇怪，看不太懂） without the promise of money.

Nowadays, many people’s budgets are stillvery tight, bearing heavy financial burden. They have to make money to pay fordaily supplies like food and clothes. After people can make ends meet, normallythey will desire a more comfortable life. People tend to own huge houses,expensive cars and parents usually hope their children can go to a famousprivate university to get excellent education. None of these can be realizedwithout money. Public recognition, on the other hand, is fickle and many are ’rememberedtoday and forgotten tomorrow（觉得很中式英语的调调）. It is hard for me to imagine people care moreabout flattering（我不确定可不可以这样用，但是只有在你百分百确定时，再用哦） public recognition rather than money they need to have abetter life.

Besides, we have to admit that materialpossession has been traditionally accepted as the measurement of one’s successor social status. Owning a lot of money is typically related to one’s workability. Each year, Fortune magazine publish（杂志应该被出版吧） a special issue to rank the top100most successful people throughout the world according to their yearly income.Money, as a measurement to comparing people’s values is objective. People whoobtain money through hardworking surely deserves appreciation and respect,which undoubtedly contribute to a meaningful life.

Inconclusion, I think people should not care public recognition more than money. But is(主语？） essential for us to keep in mind that we have to own money through our diligenceand try to do something not only valuable to ourselves but also beneficial toothers.

总结下下，楼主需要去看看别人的范文哦。
语法错误挺多的，这是首要解决的问题。
题目有点没扣好，不能只谈Money如何好，还需要谈public recognition不能带来这个好处。
加油哦