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作者: qdshuai130 时间: 2014-5-17 13:26
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When it comes to the issue about teaching is a harder in the past than today,

people's opinion differs from person to person, and culture to culture. Some hold view that teaching in the past is harder, while others may claimed that teaching now is more difficulty. On personal level, I support the prior one for reasons of teaching in the past lacking many essential teaching facilities and needing to communicate with student face to face. Meanwhile, student in the past have much pressure to take from their families .

It is true that teaching in the past has its own merits. It means that students can live in a simple life,stay away from computer games,shopping online and surf on the Internet all the time by mobile phone. At the mean time, young adults could save a lot of time for studying the professional skills and broaden our horizon from the study. What an appealing study life, isn't it? But is it a easier one? When taking more factors

into consideration, as far as I am concerned, teaching in the past have a lot of limitations.

First and foremost, teachers have a lot of barriers for teaching.Decades ago,when I was a primary student, our my math teacher have to write his explanations for some questions by chalk.It is take a lot of precious time to transfer his idea into the blackboard.And recently, my brother attend the primary school ,too.His teacher uses a projector and a software to show his lecture notes on the blackboard.Therefore we tempted to ask ourselves: Isn't it necessary for teachers to have a perfect facilities?Isn't it important for people to realize the deficiency of teaching facilities shortage? Isn't it compulsory for teachers to have an complete teaching facilities when they teaching in the past? Obviously teaching cannot effective without compulsory teaching facilities.

Moreover,with the development of Internet,we can obtain knowledge with our teacher by variety of ways such as surfing the website page,searching the theory by college database management system whereas teaching in the past have to take courses so as to improve students’s skill.For example,Yan Mo,a Chinese Nobelist,has to expand his scope of knowledge by borrowing books as much as possible when he was a high school student.Therefore, it is crystal clear that teaching in the past is harder than today.

Finally,in my country,statistic data shows that most people do not have a chance to attend the university in 1990 ,if one received a offer from a university,he or she will bearing lots of expectations from the whole family.Now,however,there is a universally acknowledged that most high students attend the university now.That means teaching in the past can bear a lot of pressure from students family’s expectation.

In short, from what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that teaching in the past is more harder than today as much as possible. Only by upgrading teaching equipments and developing educational environmental can we release the pressure of teachers.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-17 21:14
先mark上！我明天给你改！（不知道算不算违反规定。。）
我那篇十点前一定贴出来。。然后完全是裸写。。模版都没记地瞎写。。辛苦你了！

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-18 11:05
原谅我这个排版渣。。虽然很想弄高级的highlight但还是。。楼主你辛苦了将就看吧。。所有我的话都在括号里面。

[0516-独立]修改qdshuai130的文章

When it comes to the issue about teaching is a harder in the past than today（感觉语法有点儿。。about介词后面接名词或从句吧，然后加一个whether是不是就对了？G语法都快忘光了。。）,

people's opinion differs from person to person, and culture to culture. Some hold view that teaching in the past is harder, while others may claimed（这个地方用动词原形claim吧~） that teaching now is more difficulty（difficulty是名词，这里应该用difficult形容词吧~）. On personal level, I support the prior one for reasons of teaching in the past lacking many essential teaching facilities and needing to communicate with student face to face. Meanwhile, student in the past have much pressure to take from their families .

It is true that teaching in the past has its own merits. It means that students can live in a simple life,stay away from computer games,shopping online and surf on the Internet all the time by mobile phone.（看到动词并列就开始找平行。。楼主是想说stay away后面的三部分平行吧，那这样的话surf就应该用surfing了；然后我觉得在stay away前面加一个and，结构会更清楚一点） At the mean time, young adults could save a lot of time for studying the professional skills and broaden（是不是要用动名词形式？） our horizon from the study. What an appealing study life, isn't it? But is it a（用an吧~） easier one? When taking more factors

into consideration, as far as I am concerned, teaching in the past have a lot of limitations.（我觉得这里的逻辑有一点牵强，就是楼主在说以前simple life可以节约很多时间，节约的时间用来学习但是过程很痛苦，这个“但是过程很痛苦或者艰辛”的理由又不那么充分，没有什么例子支持）（然后看了下面几段觉得这一段文字的目的是。。过渡嘛。。）

First and foremost, teachers have a lot of barriers for teaching.Decades ago,when I was a primary student, our my（笔误吧） math teacher have to write his explanations for some questions by chalk.It is take （去掉is，然后变成takes）a lot of precious time to transfer his idea into the blackboard.And recently, my brother attend the primary school ,too.His teacher uses a projector and a software to show his lecture notes on the blackboard.Therefore we tempted to ask ourselves: Isn't it necessary for teachers to have a perfect facilities?Isn't it important for people to realize the deficiency of teaching facilities shortage? Isn't it compulsory for teachers to have an （用a）complete teaching facilities when they teaching in the past? Obviously teaching cannot effective（effective是形容词，前面加个be 就好啦~） without compulsory teaching facilities.

Moreover,with the development of Internet,we can obtain knowledge with our teacher by variety of ways such as surfing the website page,（这里加一个and会好一些）searching the theory by college database management system whereas teaching in the past have to take courses so as to improve students’s skill.For example,Yan Mo,a Chinese Nobelist,has（过去时态好一些） to expand his scope of knowledge by borrowing books as much as possible when he was a high school student.（我觉得例子可以再扩充一些，就只说以前只能通过借书来补充知识没有对比，然后自己借书来看和teaching的逻辑关系也可再挖掘一下）Therefore, it is crystal clear that teaching in the past is harder than today.

Finally,in my country,statistic data shows that most people do not have a chance to attend the university in 1990 ,if one received a （用an？）offer from a university,he or she will bearing lots of expectations from the whole family.Now,however,there is a universally acknowledged that most high students attend the university now.（没太看懂这句话。。是说现在大部分高中生都可以上大学是嘛，用it is不用there is是不是更好？然后两个now重复啦）That means teaching in the past can bear a lot of pressure from students family’s expectation.

In short, from what has been discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that teaching in the past is more harder （不需要再加more啦）than today as much as possible（这个as much as possible是不是可以去掉，简洁一些，或者用in many aspects不，不知道是不是楼主想说的意思。。）’ Only by upgrading teaching equipments and developing educational environmental can we release the pressure of teachers.

总结：感觉楼主论证的时候都很有力，但是例子说的部分有些少，除了第一个说弟弟现在上学设备高级很多，然后莫言那个就应该可以再补充一些的。语法什么的，虽然我也很喜欢写长句，但是还是要在结构正确的基础上吧。然后有一些笔误什么的注意一下就好~~

作者: qdshuai130 时间: 2014-5-18 11:47
题目：People should state their honest opinions even though they know otherts will disagree with their views.
It is universally acknowledged that state our honest opinions have a significant function to team discussion though others will disagree with our views. One the one hand, state our honest opinions can improve team work’s efficiency. One the other hand, stating our honest opinions can help us to make some intimate friends. My reasons and examples are given below.

First of all,expressing our honest opinions on can assist our team members to be familiar with our partner’s characteristics, like the way of thinking, education background, distinctive ideas, etc, which contributes to the efficiency of the team discussion.Nowadays,with the development of the Internet,all the people can get the effective information by variety of ways such as iPad,mobile phone and computers.Consequently,people get used to the high pace of life,if some team members do not show their honest opinions on account of they know others will disagree with their views,the team discussion will have no actually function.For example,as a film major student,I was aked to submit a short film every semester with my team members .There is no better way to state our honest opinions even though they know others will disagree with their views than to stay silent.Stating our honest opinion is a good vehicle for us to swap our ideas with each other so as to boost our productivity. Hence,I strongly support that People should state their honest opinions even though they know others will disagree with their views.

Furthermore,stating honest opinions enable us to make more friends.As the transportation development,we are faced with many classmates all over the country,they may have completely different educational background and growth phrase.For example,one of my team companions comes from Shanghai,he is interested and has many unique views in the film industrial economic issues.Stating honest opinions in the team discussion can be conducive to a extremely intense debate between us .However,based on the debate,not only can we exchange our economic views but also it can deepen our mutual understanding.Therefore,the discussion with honest statement makes our friendship more endurable.

Granted, people do not express their honest opinions can avoid some intense debate . Also, we can get rid of our team discussion as soon as possible. However, communication without honest statement just like a form do not have any specific meaning.

From the analysis above, I do support that People should state their honest opinions even though they know others will disagree with their views.

作者: Johnnyli 时间: 2014-5-18 18:29

qdshuai130 发表于 2014-5-18 11:47
题目：People should state their honest opinions even though they know otherts will disagree with the ...

同学，今天稍晚一点改给你，争取10点半之前，不好意思了。

作者: qdshuai130 时间: 2014-5-18 19:05

Johnnyli 发表于 2014-5-18 18:29
同学，今天稍晚一点改给你，争取10点半之前，不好意思了。

收到！！！！！！！！

作者: Johnnyli 时间: 2014-5-18 21:48

qdshuai130 发表于 2014-5-18 19:05
收到！！！！！！！！

改完了，请参考。

作者: qdshuai130 时间: 2014-5-21 11:04
In order to attract good students，a university should spend a lot of money funding social activities.

In order to attract more good students from high school,more and more universities  are devoting lots of money on the social activities.It is clearly that spending money funding social activities can improve universities’s social reputation.In my view,however,a good student will choose a university with excellent teachers and professional equipments.Therefore,I support that a university should not spend a lot of money funding social activities.
First of all,a university should focus on how to get teaching  conditions improved rather than fund social activities.Because social activities cannot offer any essential help for attract mote good students.Fox example,when I graduate from high school,I was faced with two universities to choose,one university have a good social reputation and devote a lot of money to the social welfare,another one is a 985 program university with so many good teachers and advanced equipments.It is crystal clear that I will choose a 985 program university.Although the prior option has a good social reputation,what is more important for me is the the level of teaching.A university with a high educational level can provide me with more opportunities to job options and to be promoted in the future process of employment.
Moreover, a  university with good teaching conditions can attract more good teachers,which is the most attractive issue for a good  high school graduate..I read a news story the other day, saying that a university’s educational level is closely connected with the teacher’s instruction ability.As a Chinese old proverb says that teachers is the fundamental of the education.Not only teachers can broaden students’s horizon,but also teachers can help students learn the way of thinking and how to express their ideas,etc..So compared with a university contributed to the social activities,a university with good teachers is a huge temptation for students .
Admittedly, spending money on the social issues can be conducived  to the universities’ reputation.However,a student will choose a university more depends on the teaching conditions and the teachers’  educational level.
To sum up, with all the aspects taken into account, it is safe to conclude that a universities should not spend a lot of money funding social activities so as to attract more good students.

作者: Johnnyli 时间: 2014-5-21 16:33

qdshuai130 发表于 2014-5-21 11:04
In order to attract good students，a university should spend a lot of money funding social activitie ...

同学，修改完了，请查收

作者: qdshuai130 时间: 2014-5-22 13:43

Johnnyli 发表于 2014-5-21 16:33
同学，修改完了，请查收

谢谢！！！！！！

作者: 北极的企鹅123 时间: 2014-5-24 11:39
qdshuai130 小盆友，找了你的两个写作帖都没有看到你22号的独立作业哈，是不是因为这周末考试忙不过来没写呀

作者: qdshuai130 时间: 2014-5-26 17:05

北极的企鹅123 发表于 2014-5-24 11:39
qdshuai130 小盆友，找了你的两个写作帖都没有看到你22号的独立作业哈，是不是因为这周末考试忙不过来没写 ...

是的。。sorry.考前这两天在各种复习机经看加试题。。。。

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