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标题: 蘑菇作文贴：每周都得写点儿什么 [打印本页]

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-16 22:54
标题: 蘑菇作文贴：每周都得写点儿什么
piupiupiu~~四战加油~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-17 21:32

[0516-独立] Teaching is a harder work in the past than today

Recently, a topic about whether teaching is a harder work in the past than today has emerged among people. The debate shows that people are now paying more attention on the educational problems and the teaching qualities have become a main consideration of many parents. In terms of this problem, I would like to support that teaching is even harder today for several reasons.

In the first place, teachers should have more acknowledge than before for the reason that information era requires us updating our knowledge in a faster speed. With the development of high technology and international communication, more and more scientific researches are released in recent years. What impressed most is that when scientists declared that Pluto is no longer a member of the nine planet, my scientific teacher told us about the news at the first time. Even through the book did not changed the content, the teacher has the responsibility of keeping us in the latest knowledge. If the teacher is a person who is not willing to be exposed to more and newer knowledge in his field, he would not provide better or even just qualified teaching quality for his students. As we all know, it is a hard work for every teacher to undertake. However, each teacher should make this as a principle if they want to do better and make their students benefit more.

Secondly, with more companies requiring their employees to have novel ideas, more and more students will make having innovation as the goals for their daily study. The direct result is that students express their personal opinions in the class more and more frequently than before. This term, I have a class called Auditing. The teacher requires us to do a group work of presenting the audit scandals in the past several years. At each end of the presentations, there will be a part of question and answer. During this period, many students will express their analysis of the audit problems and have a debate with teacher. Sometimes the questions are so complex and sharp that the teacher will find difficult to answer. What I want to say is not that the purpose of question part is to embarrass the teacher, but that every teacher should have the sense and the confidence to provide a stage for students to express their own thinking. I know it requires a lot for teachers, so teachers now are facing more pressure than before.

The last point is that currently parents have more expectation on their children. The situation has changed a lot because parents do not only hope their children learn how to read and write in the school but also hope the education will provide a brighter future for their kids. As a result, teachers takes huge responsibilities to guarantee that the school education will not only provide sufficient knowledge but also help students building great study habit. The process of creating habit is complex and varies from person to person. Teaching is no longer a job of passing on knowledge as before, but a combination of role of advisors and mentors about life. In this way, teaching really becomes harder today.

To conclude, as we stress more on the education, the requirements on teachers and teaching have also become stricter. Even through teachers may face more challenges in the process of teaching such as the fast update of new knowledge and various questions from students. Teachers should always hold the principle that they are the main warranty in education, and they bear a lot to help students to build a beneficial study habit.

很久很久很久没写T作文了。。什么经验模版都没看就这么硬写，写了一个多小时。。
修改的同学你辛苦了！

作者: qdshuai130 时间: 2014-5-19 21:43
话说自己能力实在有限。不敢多改。白天去忙交流的事情耽误了上传。抱歉！

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-19 21:46

qdshuai130 发表于 2014-5-19 21:43
话说自己能力实在有限。不敢多改。白天去忙交流的事情耽误了上传。抱歉！ ...

谢谢！~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-21 21:28
[0520-综合]TPO6

In the reading material, the author introduces us the latest resources which are communal online encyclopedias. The online encyclopedias are completely different from the traditional one because any Internet users can edit the context. Even through the author of the article tries to convince us that online encyclopedias are less valuable than traditional, printed one, the professor in the listening material lists some advantages of the online one to refute the opinion of the author.

In the first place, the professor disagrees with the author because in her opinion printed encyclopedias can sometimes be more inaccurate. Because the online encyclopedias can be edited any time an error is found, then the information can update to righter version. However the mistakes in the printed one cannot be corrected at once for the reason that the printed one can be revised many years after the publication. The online one can be more valuable for users for some academic researches.

Secondly, the professor refutes to accept what author has said in the article that any Internet user can have access to delete the information in the encyclopedia. The online encyclopedias hires some special editors to ensure that the crucial content of the information is not changed as anyone want. What is more is that the format of the online encyclopedias is not changed, so the user will not be confused about the words of online encyclopedias.

The last point of the professor used to fight the stand of view of the author in the reading is that traditional encyclopedias has many limitations. The information in the traditional one cannot accurately reflect the real interest of the public. However, these disadvantages can be overcome in the online encyclopedias. The online encyclopedias has vast diversity because it represent the real interests of most people and the thing most people care about. This function is also the strongest advantage of the online encyclopedias.

又是什么模版都没看上来就写。。时间真紧张。限时写的一篇，后来贴到文本里修改了几个拼错的单词，但是内容都没有再变了。不知道听力的部分挺得是不是对的。。
修改的同学辛苦啦！

作者: Johnnyli 时间: 2014-5-23 19:26

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-5-21 21:28
[0520-综合]TPO6

In the reading material, the author introduces us the latest resources which are co ...

不好意思改完了，见谅！

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-23 20:07

Johnnyli 发表于 2014-5-23 19:26
不好意思改完了，见谅！

知道你会比较忙~~谢谢啦~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-24 20:35

[0523-独立]The best way to reduce air pollution is for the government to raise the cost of fuel(petrol).

There a public debate that the best way to reduce the air pollution is for the government to raise the cost of fuel. Some people are in support of the proposal for it can force more people drive less than before, however others are not agree. From my perspective, I agree with the view that it is practicable to increase the price of fuel.

To start with, the increased price will force more people choose other transportation such as subway or bicycles. As we all know, with more people starting to buy and drive cars, the air pollution is even worse. The government has come up with some legislations to limit the amount of car licenses but the result is not as expected. So if the government can succeed in lift the price of fuel, most of the citizens will second consider the decision of buying cars or driving cars everyday. Several years before, my father was really desire to buy a car just because the car was cheaper. However, my mother said that even through the price of car is acceptable, the cost of using car will increase then. The decline of car sales will definitely contribute to the change of air pollution problem.

On the second place, many manufactures who use fuel for their main manufacture process will find alternative resource to replace the fuel. With the development of new recycled resource, companies can use solar energy to meet their electric demand and the solar energy is more environmental friendly than fuel. A great company should have a long-term prospect on the development of its business. The increase of the cost of fuel is a no doubt result even through government do nothing to affect the price of fuel. If the company want to surpass its competitors, it need to seek for more and better alternative resource. At the same time, protecting the environment is part of the responsibility of the world-wide company. Then, the air pollution will improve if all the companies have these kinds of awareness.

However, although the action of increase the price of fuel can do a lot to the improvement of the air pollution, there are still many other factors contribute to the problem. The most obvious cause is the decrease of forest. When government pays a lot of attention on the control of the price of the fuel, it must do more to protect the green land. Trees can absorb many waste which is created by fuel and bring out fresh air. My home town is a costal city with many green plants, the air of there is much fresh than that of Beijing. Every time I come home for vacation, I just want to stay at home for a longer time because the air in Beijing is so terrible that I cannot go outside when the air pollution is bad. If the government can do the two things at the same time, the room for the improvement of the air pollution will be much bigger.

To conclude, the proposal that the government try some action to increase the cost of fuel can solve the problem of air pollution and the proposal can be most best one for the reasons I have mentioned above. The amount of cars and the amount of fuel that factories used to manufacture can have great influence on the situation of air pollution. At the same time, if the area of trees can increase, the problem can be solved even faster and better.

限时做的，时间到的时候最后一段才写了一两句，然后超时三分钟敲完了文章。
开头第一句和各段第一个短语用了所谓模版。。原谅我真的想不出什么其他高级句子来了。。说好的准备素材呢喂！
本来心里是想写反对意见，但是想了一分钟还是觉得支持好写一些吧，然后就这样了！逻辑什么的懂就好，虽然我最后一段有一点让步但是这样也应该是可以的吧。没有double check所以应该有语法错误。。修改的同学辛苦你了！~

作者: 超级无敌小鹤鹤 时间: 2014-5-27 22:10
我不是鹤鹤，我是队长企鹅哈，改好了

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-28 21:22

超级无敌小鹤鹤发表于 2014-5-27 22:10
我不是鹤鹤，我是队长企鹅哈，改好了

我现在才看见啊。。谢谢组长！！

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-28 22:11

[0527-综合]TPO13

The article introduces that recently there is a trend of commercial business of fossils. The reading material expresses a lot of concerns about the result because the business may be an unfortunate development for both scientists and general public. However, the professor says that the business’s benefits overate its disadvantages for several reasons.

First, the professor refutes the idea of the article that the public will have less access to fossils. In contrast, the public will have more exposure to the fossils for some reasons. The large amount of business trade of the fossils will make public have more chance to see the fossils. The more trade of fossils, the more purchase of them. Then some scientific constitution will have more resources to explain to the public.

On the second place, the professor does not accept the opinion that scientist are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils. The assertion is not realistic. The reality is that every fossil need to be passed from the hand of scientists. Only scientists can give the fossil detailed identity. In this circumstance, scientists will not lose any chance of researching and studying the fossils.

The last point that the professor disagrees with the reading is that the finding of private collectors cannot destroy the scientific value of the fossils. Since much of the fossils are found unintentionally, the commercial finding is just a small part of the total finding of fossils. The finding of fossils can give scientists more data about the location of fossils or there are just many uncovered fossils without research value.

听力渣爆了。。没有限时。。

作者: sweetyecho 时间: 2014-5-29 21:38
综合修改～～～～～～～～～

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-5-29 23:26

sweetyecho 发表于 2014-5-29 21:38
综合修改～～～～～～～～～

谢谢谢谢！~~~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-1 16:03

[0530-独立]The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone

When it comes to the discussion of how to relax and reduce stress, some people would like to spend time with their friends while others prefer to spending time alone. As for me, I would choose the way of spending time alone to truly relax myself for following reasons.

To start with, spending time alone means I can choose the thing I really want to do. When many people group together to talk about what we will do to have fun, it is also a terrible experience for me because everyone has his own preference. It always takes a long time to make the final decision and there are always some disappointments. This circumstance oppositely adds the stress. However if there is only one person, I can choose whatever I want without considering others' opinions. For example, I prefer watch romantic movies for my spare time but some of my friends prefer science fictions. It will take us a long time to decide which film to watch every time we group together and the process is filled of compromise. If I can spend time alone, there will be no this kind of problem.

Secondly, having time alone can ensure I have a quiet place to have rest. During my daily life, I often feel tired and just want to have a sleep. However, it is sometimes noisy if I am with other people. I really hope to have some private space to sleep or just do nothing. At the same time, I need to keep away from the Internet. With the development of high technology, we can communicate easily without stepping out our living room. However, the information on the Internet sometimes just bothers us. What impressed most is the terrorism affairs. I am not saying that I have no concerns about the world but I really want to be alone without any disturbance from the outside.

In the last place, as far as I am concerned, thinking is the most important thing we need to know and do in our whole life. It is true that we can have deep thinking even through the surrounding atmosphere is chaotic, however it is better if we can have some silent time to recollect what we have done in the past. The thinking process is the best way of relax.One of my favorite books is an autobiography written by Haruki. The name of the book is what I am thinking when I am running. After reading the book, I acquired that the best way of relaxing and making progress is spending some time alone and doing something that you are really into. So I just follow the way of the writer---- running everyday. During the running time, I think about what I have done in that day and what I will do in the next day or weeks. Even through running is kind of tiring, but the thinking process can truly reduce my stress about my problems. I cannot say that you cannot have good thinking experience in a noisy situation, but I am sure a silent period is better.

In summary, spending time alone can be the first choice for me to have a rest and reduce my stress. For during the private time, I can choose thing I really want to do such as running or just watch a romantic movie. The time alone can also provides me a chance to have great sleep for I really need a quiet space. The last but not least part of the reasons is that thinking when you are alone is beneficial not only to your body but also to your mental health.

对不起晚了一天才交作业，效率太渣了。。
限时30分钟的话还是写不完。。

作者: 超级无敌小鹤鹤 时间: 2014-6-2 22:14
改好啦，i'm 企鹅 again

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-2 22:27

超级无敌小鹤鹤发表于 2014-6-2 22:14
改好啦，i'm 企鹅 again

谢谢组长~~辛苦辛苦~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-4 20:10

[0603-综合]TPO20 333 words

In the United States, it is common to use the "let it burn" policy to deal with the fire of natural forest fires. However, in the summer of 1988, forest fires in Yellowstone caused a great damage. Then people started to argue that the "let it burn" policy has many disadvantages. However, the professor in the listening material says that even through the fire can cause damage, but sometimes it can be a good one for it can be creative.

In the first place, professor disagrees with the article because fire can develop the diversity of the forest but not decrease the amount of the vegetation. After the fire of Yellowstone, the number of plants increased because the fire created more place for plants which cannot live in the forest before. For instance, some small plants need open space with less shade. The other example is that some seed of plants can only grow after the stimulation of high temperation.

Secondly, as professor has mentioned before, she does not accept the second opinion of the reading because it is the same for animals---the type of animals grows as well. There are more space and more kinds of plants for the live of new animals, such as rabbits. Then the predators of the new coming animals will follow. As time goes by, the food chain will strengthen. The relationship between different animals will be even stronger than before.

The last point that the professor says to refute the assertion of the article is that it is not the fire that affected the tourism of Yellowstone. There are massive factors contributed to the fall-down of the tourism such as rainfall and traffic. The reality is that in the next year of fire, the tourism of Yellowstone recovered to its normal level. Several years later, the value of the Yellowstone as a tourist attraction is not affected by the fire in 1988. So it is not convincing that the fire compromised the economic value of Yellowstone.

今天是限时完成的，主要是因为文章和听力都比较简单，修改了几个拼写错误，开始的时候一定要好好检查，因为没有自动纠错啊。。

作者: xhbhxhbh 时间: 2014-6-4 21:20
我去哪里找你需要改的文章啊

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-4 21:26

xhbhxhbh 发表于 2014-6-4 21:20
我去哪里找你需要改的文章啊

就是上面那篇啊。。我写的也是TPO20的综合写作。。

作者: xhbhxhbh 时间: 2014-6-5 11:36
sorry 啊昨天没找到你的作文今天才改的。。。

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-5 16:45

xhbhxhbh 发表于 2014-6-5 11:36
sorry 啊昨天没找到你的作文今天才改的。。。

谢谢！~~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-8 16:04

[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

Recently, a heated topic has arose among the public. Even through modern agriculture methods damage the environment, the new methods make it possible providing food for the growing population around the world. This advantage outweighs the importance of protecting the environment in some ways. However, from my perspective, I refute to accept the assertion for some reasons.

In the first place, good and sustainable environment is the fundamental basis for human beings. Although more people can have access to enough food, if the environment gets worse, it means nothing for the development of agriculture. In the past, farmers use traditional method to grow crops. With the introduction of fertilizer, farmers have more harvest than before but the rivers got polluted because of the overuse of the fertilizer. The damage of the environment is more difficult for the government to solve compared with the change of the agriculture methods. As time goes by, these rivers will finally become the places where no fish can live and the water in there will not suitable for the growth of crops. Modern agriculture methods can lift the harvest. However, if it has bad influence on the environment, it will do harm to human beings in long-term.

Second, we only have one Earth, but we have many ways to deal with the population increase and food shortage. As the assertion has mentioned, the main advantage of the modern agriculture method is that they can relief the pressure of food shortage. However, if we must sacrifice the environment to get the advanced agriculture methods, I prefer to say no to the development of the methods. We have many other ways to help people laking enough food. Educating the public and having them have the awareness of not wasting food is the example of the solution. We can see many college students waste a lot of food in their daily lives. If the school or some media take the responsibilities to propagate the importance of food, the situation of food shortage will be much better.

The last point is that the so-called modern agriculture methods are not the best methods for human beings in long-term. If the future method can provide enough food for the increase population and have no harm to the environment, this method is the best method. Since I have mentioned before, what we need to live a better live is a sustainable environment. So we must try our best to keep the smooth going of the environment. Scientists should put more efforts to the study of more environmentally friendly method of crop growing.

In summary, solving the food shortage problem is not the final goal of our human beings. Even through modern agriculture methods can relief the pressure right now, it can do harm to the environment as well. This is not what we want. In order to have a better and lighter future live, more efforts should be made to the research of advanced agriculture methods.

这篇文章真是各种没思路。。要是考场遇上感觉就要跪了。。

作者: sweetyecho 时间: 2014-6-8 22:14
[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

Recently, a heated topic has arose among the public. Even through modern agriculture methods damage the environment, the new methods make it possible providing food for the growing population around the world. This advantage outweighs the importance of protecting the environment in some ways. However, from my perspective, I refute to accept the assertion for some reasons.

In the first place, good and sustainable environment is the fundamental basis for human beings. Although more people can have access to enough food, if the environment gets worse, it means nothing for the development of agriculture. In the past, farmers use traditional method to grow crops. With the introduction of fertilizer, farmers have more harvest than before but the rivers got polluted because of the overuse of the fertilizer. The damage of the environment is more difficult for the government to solve compared with the change of the agriculture methods. As time goes by, these rivers will finally become the places where no fish can live and the water in there will not suitable for the growth of crops. Modern agriculture methods can lift the harvest. However, if it has bad influence on the environment, it will do harm to human beings in long-term.

Second, we only have one Earth, but we have many ways to deal with the population increase and food shortage. As the assertion has mentioned, the main advantage of the modern agriculture method is that they can relief the pressure of food shortage. However, if we must sacrifice the environment to get the advanced agriculture methods, I prefer to say no to the development of the methods. We have many other ways to help people laking enough food. Educating the public and having them have the awareness of not wasting food is the example of the solution. We can see many college students waste a lot of food in their daily lives. If the school or some media take the responsibilities to propagate the importance of food, the situation of food shortage will be much better.

The last point is that the so-called modern agriculture methods are not the best methods for human beings in long-term. If the future method can provide enough food for the increase population and have no harm to the environment, this method is the best method. Since I have mentioned before, what we need to live a better live is a sustainable environment. So we must try our best to keep the smooth going of the environment. Scientists should put more efforts to the study of more environmentally friendly method of crop growing.

In summary, solving the food shortage problem is not the final goal of our human beings. Even through modern agriculture methods can relief the pressure right now, it can do harm to the environment as well. This is not what we want. In order to have a better and lighter future live, more efforts should be made to the research of advanced agriculture methods.

作者: sweetyecho 时间: 2014-6-8 22:16
错误修改好

[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

Recently, a heated topic has arose among the public. Even through（even though） modern agriculture methods damage the environment, the new methods make it possible providing （to provide）food for the growing population around the world. This advantage outweighs the importance of protecting the environment in some ways. However, from my perspective, I refute to accept the assertion for some reasons.

In the first place, good and sustainable environment is the fundamental basis for human beings. （这个主旨句不能很好概括这一段的意思）Although more people can have access to enough food, if the environment gets worse, it means nothing for the development of agriculture. In the past, farmers use traditional method to grow crops. With the introduction of fertilizer, farmers have more harvest than before but the rivers got polluted because of the overuse of the fertilizer. The damage of the environment is more difficult for the government to solve compared with the change of the agriculture methods. As time goes by, these rivers will finally become the places where no fish can live and the water in there （语法错误：删去in 直接the water there）will not suitable（语法错误：suit或者be suitable） for the growth of crops. Modern agriculture methods can lift the harvest. However, if it has bad influence on the environment, it will do harm to human beings in long-term.

Second, we only have one Earth, but we have many ways to deal with the population increase and food shortage. As the assertion has mentioned, the main advantage of the modern agriculture method is that they can relief the pressure of food shortage. However, if we must sacrifice the environment to get the advanced agriculture methods, I prefer to say no to the development of the methods. We have many other ways to help people laking （这个单词不认识也没查到，是不是打错了？）enough food. Educating the public and having them have the awareness of not wasting food is the example of the solution.（此句话，直接接在上一句后边，用for example：blablabla 是不是更好？因为你现在这句话感觉头重脚轻了） We can see many college students waste a lot of food in their daily lives. If the school or some media take the responsibilities to propagate the importance of food, the situation of food shortage will be much better.

The last point is that the so-called modern agriculture methods are not the best methods for human beings in long-term. If the future method can provide enough food for the increase population and have no harm to the environment, this method is the best method. Since I have mentioned before, what we need to live a better live is a sustainable environment. So we must try our best to keep the smooth going of the environment. Scientists should put more efforts to the study of more environmentally friendly method of crop growing.

In summary, solving the food shortage problem is not the final goal of our human beings. Even through modern agriculture methods can relief the pressure right now, it can do harm to the environment as well. This is not what we want. In order to have a better and lighter future live, more efforts should be made to the research of advanced agriculture methods.

总结一下哈，文章语句思路清晰顺畅。分论点找的很赞，如果鸡蛋里挑骨头，那就是第三段论点的选取。因为从我的理解，你是想写一边倒的态度。但是，你的第三段表达的意思是个折中：就是要找到best solution既要保护环境，也要养活人们。我不知道这样的叙述好不好或者说切不切题？

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-8 22:49

sweetyecho 发表于 2014-6-8 22:16
错误修改好

[0606-独立]Modern agriculture methods damage the environment, but providing ...

谢谢echo！我会好好看修改的！~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-12 19:40

[0610-综合]TPO27

In the reading material, it discussed some causes may contribute to the Little Ice Age. It sounds convincing. However, the professor says according to the recent study, all the evidences and reasons the article mentioned are out of date. The professor argues this from three aspects.

In the first place, the professor refutes that the disruption of current cannot lead to the lower temperature. For the reason that the current change can only have influence on the Europe and America, it cannot affect New Zealand and South Africa as the data said. There is no explanation about the impact of current disruption on the climate.

Secondly, the professor disagrees with the assertion that the volcanic eruption block the sunlight which resulted in the start of Little Ice Age. It is true that enough dust released by volcano can low the temperature, but it will also cause some visual effects on human, for example color sunset. However there is no report of this kind of thing. Thus it is obvious that the volcanic eruption is not strong enough to cause the Little Ice Age.

The last point that the professor refuses to accept is that it is the decrease of population leaded to the cooler atmosphere. From the current research and record, there is no enough time for the change of population to show its influence on the climate. The population grows back quickly and of course the forest are cut to make more land for corps. With more carbon dioxide in the atmosphere, the increase of forest is no longer help the creation of Little Ice Age.

又晚交作业了。。以后TPO26以后的文章都不占了。。

作者: qq2228757 时间: 2014-6-13 09:31
楼主，改好了~加油~~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-13 20:41

qq2228757 发表于 2014-6-13 09:31
楼主，改好了~加油~~~

谢谢！~~我会好好看的，辛苦~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-14 21:08

[0613-独立]There is no reason to be impolite to other people

Currently, more social problems among different groups of people come to the public eye. It seems that people become more impolite to others. However, from my perspective, we still have no reason to show our ignorance or to be impolite to other people no matter how angry we are in that situation.

In the first place, as the word goes, everyone borns equal. It is true that there are rich people and poor people in the same world and society. However the money and fortune are only some additional things attached to your life. There is no link between the money and superior status. Since everyone shares the equal rights, there is no reason to see others are lower than you or just be impolite to others just because he is poor. In fact, a rich man is the person who has love and desire to help others rather than the person whose mind is filled of money.

Second, since we have had so many pressure in the modern life, why don’t show our kindness to others even though you do not know the guy? Recently, I listened to a TED speech on how people feel vulnerable in their relationship with their friends. Sometimes they just want to seek some courages or advice from their friends whom they trust a lot. It is sad that they will feel heartbroken if their friends show their impatience and ignorance to them. Then I started to remember my own experience about how I was discourage by my closest friends. I know that they do not mean to hurt me but it really let me down at that time, so if they show their care to me, the situation will be completely different. With the support and love from others, we will be brave to chase the thing we want. Even the positive words from strangers can give me power as well.

The last point is that sometimes you will never know whether the kind behavior will bring you. We have heard a lot of stories about how people give help to strangers, then the stranger turn out to be a great man. I do not believe in it at first, after I heard about the true story of my sister, I start to have faith in that every kind behavior can lead to some happy thing. Last year, my sister was trying to find a job related to her major. Someday, a man drove a car stopped to ask her how to get to the building. My sister just told him how to get there. In the info session of a local accounting firm, my sister found that the partner of the accounting firm is the man who asked her the route. After the session, my sister had some talk with the partner and the partner showed his appreciation on my sister. You guess what, my sister finally got the job from that accounting firm. What I want to say is that everyone should be polite to others and you may get surprise.

To sum up, we have no right to show our ignorance to others. You will never know how your words can hurt others on matter it is your best friends or just a stranger. The polite behavior may bring you a gift for your kindness to others. There is no reason to be impolite to other people.

这篇文章写得太难受了。。想不出点，感觉最近两三篇独立都是这个毛病，最后总结得也是渣啊。。没有限时，如果限时一定跪。。
怎么办啊！

作者: 超级无敌小鹤鹤 时间: 2014-6-16 21:41
我是企鹅，改好啦，我看到题目也是感觉不知道从哪儿下笔写，所以看到你的文章真的是有点“想不出点”然后在硬扯的感觉。。。。。。。。请容许我那么残忍啊，不过全文都没有啥语法问题，很流畅这点值得赞啊

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-29 21:18

[0628-独立]Parents should give school-age children money as reward for getting a high mark in school

Nowadays, many parents choose to give them children money as rewards when their children get a high mark in the exams. Even though giving children money can help them build the habit of money management, it is not a good way to encourage children to study hard in long-term. From my perspective, it is not appropriate for parents to give school-age children money as reward of good scores.

First, getting high scores in exams is the duty of students. Even though the high score is not the final goal of study, but the great scores is some way that shows the students have greatly gain the knowledge. If parents give money to children every time children perform well in exam or use money as incentives to encourage their children work hard, the children may consider money as the final goal of study. It is obviously opposite to the idea of parents.

In the second place, children in school-age may not have a good sense of money and they may misuse the money. In the modern society, because of the one-child policy, all the families choose to devote all the effort and love to the child. No matter what he want and how much the staff cost, parents just try their best to meet the needs of the children. We can always see the news about how parents are spoiling their children and the children just do some bad things because they have money given by their parents. In the TV show, we can see that most children in school-age do not have the ability to clarify expensive thing from cheap one and the ability to decide which one to buy. If they have more money than they actually need, they must waste them and buy something they do not need.

The last but not the least point is that there are more better ways for parents to choose to reward their children. For example, the parents can promise their children that if he get what score, the parents will take him a travel. Even though the travel is also something like money to encourage children study hard, children can benefit more from travel. Spending time with their parents to see how wonderful our country and world are is a fantastic experience for children in school-age and the money spent in this tour is more worthwhile.

To conclude, parents should not choose the money as the reward when their children get high scores in school. The money is not the best way to encourage their children to work hard in long-term. The children should understand their final goal of study and the parents should help their children have the ability of money management before the children have more money they need. Parents can also choose some other ways to give incentives to their children such as travel and buy the children a pet.

作者: elleven806 时间: 2014-6-29 23:21

Nowadays, many parents choose to give them(their) children money as rewards when their children get a high mark in the exams. Even though giving children money can help them build the habit of money management, it is not a good way to encourage children to study hard in long-term. From my perspective, it is not appropriate for parents to give school-age children money as reward of good scores.

First, getting high scores in exams is the duty of students. Even though the high score is not the final goal of study, but the great scores is some way that shows the students have greatly gain the knowledge.(感觉这句话逻辑让步上表达的有些别扭总赶脚不是削弱而是加强给钱刺激的好处呀~~ in some way 可以改成 in some extent，even though 用了就不用but 不然木有主句) If parents give money to children every time children perform well in exam or use money as incentives to encourage their children work hard, the children may consider money as the final goal of study. It is obviously opposite to the idea of parents.

In the second place, children in school-age may not have a good sense of money and they may misuse the money. In the modern society, because of the one-child policy, all the families choose to（tend to) devote all the effort and love to the child. No matter what he want(s) and how much the staff costs, parents just try their best to meet the needs of the children(meet their needs). We can always see the news about how parents are spoiling their children and the children just do some bad things(什么bad things？这可以举例讲讲） because they have money given by their parents. In the TV show, we can see that most children in school-age do not have the ability to clarify expensive thing from cheap one and the ability to decide which one to buy. If they have more money than they actually need,（这个是个好论点，如果下次有机会可以试着深入讲讲） they must waste them and buy something they do not need.

The last but not the least point is that there are more better ways for parents to choose to reward their children. For example, the parents can promise their children that if he get what score（这个太表达有点chinglish。 high scores就可以表达了 ), the parents will take him a travel.( Even though the travel is also something like money to encourage children study hard, 这个让步不太好,换成Compared with money rewards, children can benefit more from travel. Spending time with their parents to see how wonderful our country and world are is a fantastic experience for children in school-age and the money spent in this tour is more worthwhile.）

1.主谓一致打快了还是不能注意到，小错误细节多注意~
2.亲的中式表达有点多，就会出现一些不必要的从句。托福作文中一个词能表述的最好不要用两个字，字数很重要，但是准确简介表达也是门技术活，上盘蜀黍帮我改作文，给的建议就是多背点优美地道句子。
3.感觉亲的有的论点提的很好，但是都只是泛泛一谈，木有深入。论点提出后，论证要一点一点要说清楚哒~~
4.另外感觉亲的词汇可以再积累点，有点匮乏~~even though好像就出现了3次~~
亲的问题都是我的问题呀~~~一起共勉！

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-6-30 09:25

elleven806 发表于 2014-6-29 23:21
Nowadays, many parents choose to give them(their) children money as rewards when their children get ...

谢谢~~我会好好看的~
你的文章我今晚改行嘛

作者: elleven806 时间: 2014-6-30 11:07

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-6-30 09:25
谢谢~~我会好好看的~
你的文章我今晚改行嘛

好麻烦了我这周考~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-7-4 21:59

[0703-独立]Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished

Nowadays, it is common to see that many movies or television programs involve some plots that bad people won at the end. The ending is not only shocking but also has some bad influence on the new generation and the whole society. From my stand of view, the movies and television programs should present some stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people get what they deserve.

First of all, many children and young people are influenced by the movies and the TV programs. Recently there are many news showing that some young people mimic the roles in movie doing the robbing. When asking them why they did this, they just said it is cool and the people in movie is released without any punishment. It is obviously that the movies and TV programs have made some bad influences on the judgement of the new generation. It is the top duty of the government to direct the right values and propagandize the great merits of good people.

Secondly, it is the common sense that if people did bad things such as lie or thief, they must be punished. What we have been educated is that everyone get what he deserves, but if the bad people do not get the punishment they should have? We may wonder whether we are right or wrong in the judge of the affair or the people. The principle and the values we have always stink to may have changed to some way we cannot understand anymore. It is horrific to the society. A sustainable and steady society need the great notion and judgement of what is right and what is wrong for its fundamental basis. Movies and TV programs should bear great responsibilities in doing this kind of thing.

The last but not the least part of my argument is that movies and TV programs is not just a way for the writers to express their own opinions. It is true that some writers want to write or create something that impress every audience, but when the material is published, the writers should pay some attention to what they have created. As I have mentioned before, movies and TV programs as the most common media bear a lot in the spread the culture and values. That is why we need some policy to limit the contents of programs. The plots in which bad guy smiled to the end is definitely not the good and right thing we want to see in the cinemas or TVs, so it is understandable why the government banning some TV serious even though the serious is really popular among the public.

To sum up, movies and TV programs really need to pay more attention on what are showed in them. We all know that good people should be rewarded and bad people must be punished since they have done something harmful. Not only the writers but also the government take role in making our society a better one and provide the new generation right values.

作者: elleven806 时间: 2014-7-5 09:54

[0703-独立]Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded and bad people are punished

蘑菇蘑菇不好意思哈我就晃眼看了哈，明天要切考试哒，这哈还有些事没弄完。等我考完了回来再细看哒~~
赶脚和上次相比，蘑菇的语法和句型已经进步很大呀~~
唯一美中不足的是有些论点的提出上还不够有说服力，特别是中心句，每段开始最好先提出TOPIC SENTENCE，这样比较一目了然哒~~
说的不对的要告诉我哟，加油加油！！

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-7-5 23:36

elleven806 发表于 2014-7-5 09:54
[0703-独立]Movies and television programs should present stories in which good people are rewarded a ...

谢谢elleven~~明天考试加油~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-7-6 14:23

[0704-独立]Parents should allow children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes

Nowadays, parents pay more attention on the education of their children and want their children have a successful future. Parents choose to direct everything their children do and do not let their children have any mistakes. However, from my perspective, I believe that parents should let children have the experience of failure from which they can learn and benefit a lot.

To begin with, as the old saying goes, failure is the mother of success. No one can succeed at one time without any mistakes. Let’s take Edison’s story as an example. We are all familiar with the story how he invented the light after over 1000 times failure. Every time he failed, he did not give up but knew that he reached the success even closer. If parents do not allow their children to make mistakes, the children will not know how hard it is to get to the final win and they could have no idea of the value of success.

Second, making no mistakes is a thing that seldom happens during one’s lifetime. We all have some period when we cannot concentrate on the thing we are dealing with. It is easy to make mistakes in that circumstance and we should admit that these situation happens all the time. Even with the advice or tutor from experienced people, we cannot avoid the mistakes as well. Do not allow children to make mistakes means putting a lot of pressure on children. I still have the memory when I was in primary school, my parents told me that I should get a high score in the math test. It was really a huge pressure for me as a little child. Thus you can imagine the result, which I failed the exam beyond my parents’ expectation.

The last but not the least part of my assertion is that learning from the mistakes is a process that will benefit the children the whole life. When it comes to talk about the learning ability from failure, we need to emphasize the power of thinking. Learning from the mistakes is actually a thinking process in which you recollect what you have done and find out what you can do better. Thinking is essential to our life and is the key point to get success. My favorite writer has a book called what I am thinking when I am running. In this book, he describes how he spends most of his time thinking and the process gives him a lot of clue of novel. In this way, children can learning from their mistakes and do it better next time. What parents can do is to direct children to have a positive view on his failure and never give up.

To sum up, mistakes is not a bad thing for most of us. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes since it is the essential part on the way to success. Children can also benefit from their experience of failure and as long as they never abandon themselves, they can reach the goal one day.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-7-6 18:55

[TPO21-综合]

The article discusses the advantages of genetically modified trees from three aspects. Genetic modification is a new tech that used widely to improve the performance of plants. However, the professor states a conflicting assertion to the reading material by beating the arguments one by one.

To start with, the article makes the point that genetically modified trees are designed so that they can survive better than other kinds of trees. The professor refuses to accept the idea for even though genetically modified trees can resist to some certain climate, they cannot live when the climate change. Since the genetically modified trees are uniformed, when a new pest is introduced into the environment or some of the element of the climate changed, the genetically modified trees may all die and just wipe out.

Second, on the contrary to the reading that genetically modified trees can bring economic benefit to the local area, the professor points out that it may not be convincing because actually the genetically modified seeds charge more than normal seeds for the farmer. On the other hand,every year, farmers want to use the seeds, they need to pay the company again in stead of using the seeds for free. Taking the high cost into consideration, the profit brought by the genetically modified trees is limited.

The last point that the professor disagrees is that the wide spread of genetically modified trees can prevent over cut of wild trees. The actual reason and circumstance is that genetically modified trees can oppositely do harm to wild trees. Because the genetically modified trees have some advantages in survival, they are aggressive when they compete with wild trees. With the limited amount of source, wild trees can be out of compete and finally be crowding out of the space.

作者: elleven806 时间: 2014-7-10 14:21

Parents should allow children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes

Nowadays, parents pay more attention on (to 只有pay attention to这种用法哟) the education of their children and want their children have a successful future. Parents choose to direct everything their children do（这句话是想表达神马呀没读懂父母指导孩子么用guide会比direct更准确哒） and do not let their children have any mistakes. However, from my perspective, I believe that parents should let children have the experience of failure from which they can learn and benefit a lot.（GOOD！)

To begin with, as the old saying goes, failure is the mother of success. No one can succeed at one time without any mistakes. Let’s take Edison’s story as an example. We are all familiar with the story how he invented the light after over 1000 times failure. Every time he failed, he did not give up but knew that he reached the success even closer(RUN-ON，两个完整句子组成一句话？缺连词，可以把第一句做成从句，every time when he failed,.....）. If parents do not allow their children to make mistakes, the children will not know how hard it is to get to the final win and they could have no idea of the value of success.

The last but not the least part of my assertion is that learning from the mistakes is a process that will benefit the children the whole life. When it comes to talk about the learning ability from failure, we need to emphasize the power of thinking. Learning from the mistakes is actually a thinking process in which you recollect what you have done and find out what you can do better. Thinking is essential to our life and is the key point to get success. My favorite writer has a book called what I am thinking when I am running. In this book, he describes how he spends most of his time thinking and （that ）the process gives him a lot of clue of novel(and后面最好加个that，两个宾语从句并列哒）. In this way, children can learning from their mistakes and do it better next time. What parents can do is to direct children to have a positive view on his（their指代要一直，children复数哒) failure and never give up.

哇塞，蘑菇的进步真是刚刚的。
特别是论证的部分，越来越好啦！
拼写神马的我自己都很粗心，所以也没发现蘑菇的错误。
能改的已经只剩少数语法错误啦~
建议可以最后几天再背背句式，文章头的句型还是有那么一点点单一~不过已经进步很大啦~
摸摸头，这周考试加油哟！

作者: elleven806 时间: 2014-7-10 14:32

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-7-6 18:55
[TPO21-综合]The article discusses the advantages of genetically modified trees from three aspects. G ...

综合很好~考试的时候认真听，不要漏听就好~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-7-10 14:51

elleven806 发表于 2014-7-10 14:21
Parents should allow children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes
Nowadays, ...

谢谢elleven~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-7-10 18:04

[0710-独立] Patience is usually not a good thing. We should take action at once.

In this modern society, due to the high tech and the wide spread information, things can change fast. Even though we have always been told that we must think twice before the action, sometimes it is not a bad thing to take action at once. Thus I believe that patience is not a good thing at any situation.

Second, being patient requires a lot of your spirits and passion. During the long and seemingly no-end waiting period, it is normal that we may wonder whether we have chosen the right way. It is so common that no one can deny that they have never thought about these. The story of my uncle may be the best negative example. My uncle plans to start his own business for many years. During this time period, he has done a lot of preparation and wait for the best chance but never takes action. After several years struggle, he lost his confidence and passion to do the business and gives up at the end. If my uncle can make his mind taking action at the first time, he may achieve his dream long before.

The last but not least point of my argument is that practice is something different from imagination. You can never know exactly the circumstance until you try it. Many people prefer to making many plans and preparation before the action. It sounds convincing but what is the perfect time for you to end the waiting? That is why our teachers strongly recommend us to take jobs after graduation rather than continue the undergraduate education. You can learn more through the practical experience of work. Several days before, I had a talk with my boss who has worked for more than ten years. On the other hand, he also has a master degree after he went to work for three years. His career is the best example of how take action and go to practice is the best way to learn.

To sum up, waiting patiently sometimes may cost you much more beyond the expectation. The situation changes all the time. What we could do better is to catch every change that may lead to success and take action without hesitation. I believe you can learn even more through the experience of practice.

作者: xiaofan0205 时间: 2014-7-11 00:34
我先通篇看了一下，觉得总的来说已经写的很好了，我就鸡蛋里挑点骨头吧，希望大家共同进步！

In this modern society, due to the high tech and the wide spread information, things can change fast. Even though we have always been told that we must think twice before the（这里的the可以去掉） action, sometimes it is not a bad thing to take action at once. Thus I believe that patience is not a good thing at any situation.

To begin with, if we do not act right now, we may let the chance flee away. Just recollect how many times you miss a good investment chance and how many good internships have passed away. Until now, I still feel regretful that I did not catch the fantastic intern in a famous company. When my senior asked me whether I want to take over her job, I hesitated. At that time, what I was thinking is all about just（all about 和just表达的意思重复） waiting for a better one. After waiting, I found that the first internship is the best and the most suitable position for me. However, everything is too late. （这里用了三个词和短语表达了三个状态，感觉不够连贯，用从句应该会更简洁，比如However, everything is too late until I found that the first internship is the best and the most suitable position for me )

Second, being patient requires a lot of your（这里可以省略）spirits and passion. During the long and seemingly no-end waiting period, it is normal that we may wonder whether we have chosen the right way. It is so common that no one can deny that（这里用了两个从句的句式，略显复杂） they have never thought about these. The story of my uncle may be the best negative example. My uncle plans to start his own business for many years. During this time period, he has done a lot of preparation and wait for the best chance but never takes action. After several years struggle, he lost his confidence and passion to do the business and gives up at the end. If my uncle can make his mind taking action at the first time, he may achieve his dream long before.

The last but not least point of my argument is that practice is something different from imagination. You can never know exactly the circumstance until you try it. Many people prefer to making （prefer to do？）many plans and preparation before the action. It sounds convincing but what is the perfect time for you to end the waiting? That is why our teachers strongly recommend us to take jobs after graduation rather than continue the undergraduate education. You can learn more through the practical experience of work. Several days before, I had a talk with my boss who has worked for more than ten years. On the other hand,（这里的转折我没看明白，不知道是不是我没理解对，你再看看？） he also has a master degree after he went to work for three years. His career is the best example of how take action and go to practice is the best way to learn.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-7-11 15:53

xiaofan0205 发表于 2014-7-11 00:34
我先通篇看了一下，觉得总的来说已经写的很好了，我就鸡蛋里挑点骨头吧，希望大家共同进步！

In this mode ...

谢谢xiaofan！~~之前在阅读小分队也看到你啦~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-10 14:11
独立写作题库
口语的Task1 Task2也可以练习这些
根据之前考试的情况来看，胡平蛮准的~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-10 22:27
【20140810】
独立：Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
综合：TPO1

分组：
综合：Daisy一人占座，蘑菇改
独立：等叔<---->Sigrid
      Daisy --->蘑菇
      蘑菇 --->橙子
      橙子 --->Daisy

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-11 22:29
【20140811】
独立：书籍比电视对社会有更大影响？
综合：TPO2

占座分组：
独立：等叔<--->橙子

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-12 21:13
【20140812】
独立： It is much easier to achieve success without help from one's family than in the past.
综合： TPO3

独立：橙子<--->sigrid
综合：蘑菇

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-12 22:34

[0810-独立] Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

When it comes to the good merit you should have if you want to be a leader, the ability to plan and organize is no doubt one of the characters. With the development of modern society, as we young generation face with more challenges and sometimes we must handle several tasks at the same time. In this way, it is necessary for us to develop the habit of planning and organizing and we could truly benefit from this behavior.

To begin with, if we are more ordered and have more plans in advanced, we are more competitive among peers. It is commonly known that the population is growing and the rate of employee is becoming lower than before. In order to confront the tough situation, some students choose to plan advanced and equip themselves with more skills. Just imagine when two students with same grades but one of them has more internship experience to compete for the same position. Who is more likely to be selected? I bet everyone will pick the students with richer experience. Why this student has such advantage is all thanks to his ability to plan.

Second, how to use the limited time and expense to do more work, the most fundamental key point we need to know is to have good plans before your action. I still remember when I had the management class, the teacher told us that success is all about effectivity and efficiency. These words impressed me a lot and I bear them in mind for quite a long time. The knowledge I learned from the management class really pushes me a lot every time I just want to delay something that I should finish on time. That is to say, if you do not want to waste your energy, time and money, you should plan everything and finish your to-do-list as organized.

The last but not least part of my arguments is that a good plan will offer you even more time to do thing you like or just relax and enjoy your life. As I have mentioned before that we can finish all of our work within a limited time only if we have good plans and take actions accordingly. God is fair to everyone since each of us have 24 hours a day no matter which race we are and whether we are rich or poor. Even though we are fair that we all have the same time, it is amazing that some of my classmates seem like to have 48 hours a day. They can join parties and maintain a good score. They can always finish tasks earlier than me. The secret of their magic is that they have habit of planning everything.

To sum up, the ability to plan and organize is not only a key element of success but also a habit we could benefit for the whole life. Everyone, especially our generation who face with even more pressure than before, should bear in mind that a good plan is just a start point of success. It is always up to you to finish and follow your plans. Let plans lead your life.

上一次写作文是0710，整整一个月了。。

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-13 13:41
嘿咻嘿咻~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-13 22:08
【20140813】
独立： Teachers are appreciated and valued nowadays not as much as they were before.
综合： TPO4

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-15 21:50
【20140815】
独立 Modern agriculture method damange the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment.
综合 TPO 6

【20140814】
独立等叔 <---> 蘑菇
综合橙子一人占，等叔代改

【20140815】
独立 Daisy <---> 橙子

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-16 22:21
【20140816】
独立：政府应该在医疗保障还是环境治理上花费更多精力
综合： TPO7

占座
独立：
橙子---》Daisy
Daisy---》Sigrid
Sigrid---》橙子

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-17 15:39

[0814-独立]过去的老师比现在的老师对年轻人的影响力更大

Nowadays, people pay more attention on the education. Teachers, as the main power of spreading knowledge, bear a huge responsibility of educating students not only about new knowledge but also about their life and value.

To begin with, education means a lot in modern society. In order to become competitive when finding a job, many people choose to have their further education. In this way, teachers play an important role to help their students realize and achieve goals. Speaking of this, I am so honored that my teachers teach me a lot of practical accounting knowledge. During my internship in the finance department of a company, all the knowledge I learned from the class do me a lot of favor to solve the problems.

Second, sometimes students have to choose among choices, then teachers can use their knowledge and experience to help their students find the best way. Compared with the old days, we truly have a more complex world. There are many sources of information that confuse us. I often have the feeling like I am standing in the center of a crossing road. Many people walk pass by me and I just do not know where to go. At this time, teachers can give suggestions to their students and perform like a light to lead them towards a bright way.

The last but not least part of my assertions is that teacher is a noble position since teachers also bear huge responsibility to educate students about the right values. Let’s take Einstein' story as an example. When Einstein was awarded the Nobel Prize, the first person he wanted to thank is his kindergarten teacher. His teacher found his potential and told him he is different and unique from other children. He just kept these words in mind and it turns out that these words do have great influence on Einstein’s life. With the development of information era, we can access to more information and ideas than before, so we need to have a more critical eyes on this world and hold a right value. Teachers are not the only but one of the groups of persons to help the new generation.

To sum up, since we live in a more complex society than before, teachers today have more influence and valued more as well. Teachers are not only the envoy of spreading knowledge but also the lights leading students road of life.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-17 17:19
[0817-综合] TPO3
As we all know that Rembrandt is the most famous painters in history. Recently, researchers found a new painting of Rembrandt but there are some doubt about it. The article shows three points of speculating the painting is not worked by Rembrandt, however the lecture hold the opinion differing from the main ideas in the reading and refutes them one by one.

Contrary to the belief in the passage that the fur collar is inconsistent with the woman in the portrait, the professor says that actually the fur collar is added by other people about 100 years after Rembrandt created the painting. In the original version of the painting, there is no fur collar. The person who added this thing may want to make the painting looks more expensive.

The professor refutes the viewpoint shown in the passage that the light and shadow in this painting is not appropriate since Rembrandt is known as the master of painting light and shadow, the professor notes that after removing the top of the painting, researchers can see the original work. In the original version, the woman was wearing a light color cloth. In this way the light and shadow in this painting is consistent with the surrounding.

Another important point shown in the reading material is that the panel is made of several pieces of wood glued together and this method is not the common way Rembrandt used. However the listening presents a conflicting idea that the extra wood is glued by other people with the intention of making the painting looks wider. Rembrandt has nothing to do with the change. On the other hand, the original wood is the same tree which Rembrandt used for his another painting.

作者: MrWaiting 时间: 2014-8-18 15:42
8.15改好了

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-18 17:23
【20140817】
独立：Although a lot of people know the environmental situation( global warming etc) the present situation is unlikely to change in the future
综合： TPO8

占座：
独立：
等叔---》橙子
橙子---》Daisy
Daisy---》等叔

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-19 22:43
【20140819】
独立：如果你的朋友在某门课需要帮忙，而你是这门课的牛人。问你认为你朋友找你帮忙好还是找专门的tutor帮忙比较好？
综合：TPO9

占座：
独立：
橙子---》Daisy
Daisy---》蘑菇
蘑菇---》橙子

综合：
Sigrid一人占，蘑菇代改

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-20 22:07
【20140820】
独立：如果每年上课11个月以上，学生会得到更有效的教育
综合：TPO10

占座：
独立：
Daisy---》等叔
等叔---》橙子
橙子---》Daisy

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-23 22:37
【20140823】
独立：城市里还是农村更适合take care of family?
综合：TPO11

占座：
独立：
橙子《---》Sigrid
综合
蘑菇

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-24 20:17

[0819-综合]如果你的朋友在某门课需要帮助，而你是这门课的牛人。问你认为你朋友找你帮忙好还是找专门的tutor帮忙好

We all have the experience of facing with complex problems that we cannot handle by ourselves. At that time, I would like to turn to my friend who is good at the subject to seek for some help. If I were the friend who is good at this, I would be glad if my friend ask me for help since it represents that he trusts me.

The first thing comes to my mind is that turning to friend to seek help on lessons will strengthen our friendship. As we spend more time discuss about the questions, we could better know and help each other even though I am little better than him on this subject. Sometimes, it is inevitable that we may argue about the exercise because we hold different opinions. However from my perspective, friendship does not mean we must be consistent all the time. Friendship is something guaranteeing we can still be friends even after we express completely different ideas and argue on them.

Additional, through the process of talking, my friend and I can come up with some new ideas which were not mentioned by the teacher. I still remember when I was in high school, I preferred to turn to the student who is really good at maths every time I had problems. The boy unlike other students who just told you how teacher solved the question, he would like to tell you his own method. This really inspired me a lot because he just directed me to view the problem from another angle. After the discussion, we can tell our new method to the teacher. In this way, all the classmates can learn a new method other than the one teacher told us.

Third, even though I am good at this subject, I cannot be sure I have no miss point on this course. When my friend turns to me to seek help, it is also a good chance for me to examine how I understand the knowledge. As the teacher often said, reviewing is the best way of learning. If I can deal with all the problems my friend has, the possibility of my fault will consequently declines. This can be the best way of self examination and it can save me a lot of time to prepare for the courses that I am not so good at.

In summary, turning to friends to seek for help in homework is not a shame behaviour. Actually it is a good way to strengthen the friendship between friends. During the discussion, new ideas will spark and we can have deeper understanding about the problems. Not only the person who seek help but also the person who offer help can benefit from this process. In this way, I sincerely thank for all the people who help me in my lessons and feel glade to help my friends if I can.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-24 22:59
【20140824】
独立：Parents should let children make and learn from their own mistakes
综合：TPO12

占座：
独立：
等叔《---》橙子

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-24 23:19

[0823-integrated] TPO11

The reading discusses that people nowadays spend less time reading literature than they used to, then it does harm to the culture, which differs from the main idea in the lecture that even though less time spent in reading books, the culture still goes well as expected.

The professor refutes the viewpoint shown in the passage that nothing other than literature can provide the intellectual stimulation by saying that in today’s culture, people can get stimulated by films and other form of art. In recent years, the films are of good quality and they can always let people think about something.

Contrary to the belief in the passage that diverting time previously spent in reading literature to other format of entertainment lowered the level of culture in some ways, the professors notes that actually music and movies are some other good format of art that people are willing to spend time on. The culture has changed a lot as time goes by and the literature is no longer limited in novel and poem.

Another important point stated in the reading material is that the writers get less support from the public since less people choose to read, but the listening presents a conflicting idea that even though writers are less favoured than before, it has nothing to do with the readers. Some writers today sometimes just come up with something complex and difficult to understand. You cannot blame the public for their no support since the books are suck…

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-26 15:52
【20140825】
独立：Should we always state our honest opinions, even though most people don't agree with you?
综合：TPO 13

占座：
独立
Sigrid---》橙子
橙子---》等叔
等叔---》Sigrid

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-27 11:09
【20140826】
独立：人们应该坚持自己有挑战性的梦想还是注重实现现实的梦想
综合：TPO14

占座：
独立：
等叔《---》橙子

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-27 23:32
【20140827】
综合：TPO15

占座：
橙子《---》蘑菇

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-28 21:13

[0827-integrated]TPO15

In the old days, in order to protect the Australian farmer's crops from the harmful insects, the government decided to introduce cane toad which is native to America. However, as the time goes by, it turns out the large number of cane toad has threatened Australian native species. The article provides some proposals to stop the spread of the cane toad in Australia. The lecture just expresses the opposite opinions on these methods since all these ways will be unsuccessful and can result in unwanted disasters.

To begin with, contrary to the belief in the passage that building fence will block the cane toad spreading towards larger area, the professor says that it cannot work at all. Since young cane toads are eggs floating in rivers and strains. Only if there is water, the water can carry eggs to another place no matter how many fences the government builds.

Additionally, the professor refutes the second action introduced in the passage that the government can call on a group of volunteers to capture the young toads. It seems work in some ways. However, these volunteers are a group of people without training, it can be difficult for them to distinguish the harm species from the native one since they are really similar to each other in young stage. The result of this method is unpredictable.

Another important point shown in the reading material is that researchers can develop a disease-causing virus to control the cane toad population, but the listening presents a conflicting idea that this method will have opposite result. The virus may do harm and lead to other consequence. For example, a kind of specie that was native to Australia, after it spreading to other continent like America, its population started to grow. The worse result was that it destroyed a native specie that is vital to the ecosystem. It was a disaster for the whole ecosystem suffered.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-8-29 13:27
改好了主要问题是听力

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-29 14:18

橙圆发表于 2014-8-29 13:27
改好了主要问题是听力

谢谢橙子~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-8-30 14:43

[0830-integrated]TPO2

A company came up with an idea of getting people work into teams to finish projects since the company believed this method will result in good performance. After six months try, there is just the opposite result. The lecture discusses the reasons why the team plan fails, which differs from the main idea in the reading that working as a team has a lot of advantages.

Contrary to the belief in the passage that a group can work more quickly because members have more resource compared with individual work, the professor says that actually in the group, there are some people are not involved in the project. When it comes to the recognition, the boss only conceive the group as a whole other than members individually. The really contributors in the team have the opposite attitude as the article describes.

The professor refutes the idea shown in the passage that the team can react more quickly to make the decision. In fact, in order to achieve a final decision, the team needs spend even more time that before. It needs to meet and research. Another point the team may hinder the process of the project is that in the team there must be some person is influential. When the leader says the proposal cannot work then the team just drop it without any correction. At the same time, if the leader convinces the whole team the plan will be good, the team will move on to it without consideration of whether it works or not.

Another important point shown in the reading material is that taking part i a group process can be rewarding for members of the team, but the listening presents a conflicting viewpoint that it does not work like this. The work of the team is assessed as a whole. If the project is failed, all members are to blame. This is the result that no one wants to see especially the members truly make a lot of effort.

听力应该就没听对吧。。

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-1 15:17
[0901]you can know a lot about a person through the types of friends this person has
As the old saying goes, people are divided by types. It is easy to understand that friends are people who share some similar characters with you. We often make friends with people who have the same hobbies, similar education background and even a close social network.

To begin with, friendship is based on the same interest. If you want to better know a person, the first question you may ask must be what are his hobbies. We can know the answer through his friends since we often make friends with person like the same thing. I am a fan of a famous rock band. In the fans club, I met with one of my best friend Erica. Besides the music we are all crazy about, we still have other common interests such as Japanese literature and old movies. During the weekends, we often gather together to join the old movie salon or share comments about the book we read recently.

Additionally, most of our friends are our classmates so we have similar education background. Have you ever had the experience of eating with students who majored in Biology? If you say no, I only want to say how lucky you are. However the sad thing is that I had such kind of experience and I do not want to have it any more. During the lunchtime, the biology student kept describing the process of operating on frogs. It is so disgusting! However other persons who are also majored in Biology ate as normal. Then I suddenly realise why I could never make friends with the person major in Biology or Medical Science.

The last point you can know about a person through his friend is the social circle. We must admit that social circle is a complex thing but it can reflect what kind of person he is in some ways. If the person often communicates with teachers, he is more likely to be exposed to new knowledge and scientific researches. At the same time, if the friends of a person are mainly business man, which may not confirm he is a rich man, but we can articulate that he might have a job related to business.

To sum up, the kind of person we are decides the type of friends we have and vice versa. It can be a good way to know a person through the friends he has and acknowledge his interests, education background or even social circle.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-2 18:28
改好么么哒~

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-2 18:32
改好么么哒~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-3 22:31
[0902]being creative, rather than carefully planning, is more often results in better solution
Nowadays, the society stresses more on the ability of creation, however, in my mind, a practical plan can handle more situations when facing problems. Thus, being carefully planning results more often in better solutions.

For one thing, life is not always full of novel things. The problems we often meet are mostly ordinary ones. Take the life of a housewife as an example, the daily works of hers are all about cooking, laundering and shopping. She does not need something creative to tutor her solving the problems which happen everyday. Only the practical plan and the common senses could help her get out of puzzles. In this way, during our daily lives, the creative ideas seem not work as expected.

Additionally, having a careful plan means we can handle most situations within our participants. We all have plans about the time when we need to get up to catch the bus. Meanwhile, we all have the experience of watch the bus you were planning to take just passing by only if you get up just several minutes earlier. At this time, even the most creative ideas cannot make up for the losing minutes. We must admit that only the careful plan is far from enough. The final goal of setting a plan is to give your a direction when facing difficulties. Only in this way, the careful plans can do us a favor.

The last point is that even the most ordinary plans still need a creative mind. An ordinary plan does not mean a plan without logic. If the plan is useless by just taking a glance at, how it can direct us? When I decided to recite words to improve my English, I made a plan of remembered 700 words a day. It was really painstaking! It was easy to keep the plan for only one or two days, but it really required a lot of time and patience to keep it more than one week. Finally I failed. After getting the experience of how to make plan, I changed it to recite only 50 words a day. And you know what, I have kept doing this more than 400 days. It is so true that a logical plan is half of success.

To sum up, creative mind can make people say “wow” in some circumstance, but it cannot work all the time since we do not have that much of complex challenge to deal with. A careful plan is the really helper when we face with difficulties. Every time we turn to it, we can know it will bring us a good news.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-4 11:40
[0903-integrated]TPO13
The article introduces that recently there is a trend of commercial business of fossils. The reading material expresses a lot of concerns about the result because the business may be an unfortunate development for both scientists and general public. However, the professor says that the business’s benefits overate its disadvantages for several reasons.

First, the professor refutes the idea of the article that the public will have less access to fossils. In contrast, the public will have more exposure to the fossils for some reasons. The large amount of business trade of the fossils will make public have more chance to see the fossils. The more trade of fossils, the more purchase of them. Then some scientific constitution will have more resources to explain to the public.

On the second place, the professor does not accept the opinion that scientist are likely to lose access to some of the most important fossils. The assertion is not realistic. The reality is that every fossil need to be passed from the hand of scientists. Then the fossils can get into the market or some other places. Only scientists can give the fossil detailed identity. In this circumstance, scientists will not lose any chance of researching and studying the fossils.

The last point that the professor disagrees with the reading is that the finding of fossils will in turn bring more fossils for the research of scientists. Nowadays, thanks to the discovery, scientists can have access to more fossils to collect more data information. It is truly one of the advantages of letting fossils going into the commercial business.

作者: 橙圆 时间: 2014-9-4 14:08
改好棒棒哒

作者: mygirlzini 时间: 2014-9-4 21:37

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-3 22:31
[0902]being creative, rather than carefully planning, is more often results in better solution
Nowad ...

[0902]being creative, rather than carefully planning, is more often results in better solution

Nowadays, the society stresses more我明白楼主的意思是想说更重视,但是读起来感觉有些奇怪,楼主确定可以这样说地道吗? on the ability of creation, however, in my mind, a practical plan can properly handle more situations when facing problems. Thus, being carefully planning would results more often in better solutions.

For one thing, life is not always full of novel things(这是正确的表达方式吗?感觉有点奇怪,楼主自己确定就好). The problems we often meet are mostly ordinary ones. Take the life of a housewife as an example, the daily works of hers are all about cooking, laundering and shopping. She does not need something creative to tutor her solving (solve)the problems which happen everyday. Only the practical plan and the common senses could help her get out of puzzles. In this way, during our daily lives, the creative ideas seem not work as expected.

Additionally, having a careful plan means we can handle most situations within our participants. We all have(had) plans about the time when we need to get up to catch the bus. Meanwhile, we all have the experience of watch the bus you were planning to take just passing by only if you get up just several minutes earlier. At this time, even the most creative ideas cannot make up for the losing minutes. (However,这里缺少连词)We must admit that only the careful plan is far from enough.The plan should be able to give (directions)your a direction when facing difficulties. Only in this way, the careful plans can (help us stay in the right way when distraction start popping up.)do us a favor.(感觉这里要使用比do us a favor 更加具体和详细的语句会更符合英语的思维方式)

The last point is that(At the same time) even the most ordinary plans still need a creative mind. An ordinary plan does not mean a plan without logic. If the plan is useless by just taking a glance at这句话不太明白, how it can direct us? (缺少连词)When I decided to recite words to improve my English, I made a plan of remembered 700 words a day. It was really painstaking!(感叹句和painstaking过于口语化,不太符合academic 的风格) It was easy to keep the plan for only one or two days, but it really required a lot of time and patience to keep it more than one week. Finally I failed. After getting the experience of how to make plan, I changed it to recite only 50 words a day. And you know what, I have kept doing this more than 400 days. It is so true that a logical plan is half of success.

To sum up, creative mind can make people say “wow” in some circumstance, but it cannot work all the time since we do not have that much of complex challenge to deal with. A careful plan is the really helper when we face with difficulties. Every time we turn to it, we can know it will bring us a good news.

1最后一段感觉有点OFF跑题,题目是creative 和carefully planning,最后一段论证的是logical plan的重要性

2整体感觉中文的影响还是比较大

3 有许多句子语气非常肯定,比如Every time we turn to it, we can know it will bring us a good news.学术作文的风格一般都会更客观一些,比如这个句子:Compared with many un-experienced young people,most experienced elders can work more efficiently.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-4 23:04

mygirlzini 发表于 2014-9-4 21:37
[0902]being creative, rather than carefully planning, is more often results in better solution
Nowad ...

THX a lot ~~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-5 11:45
[0904]should all teachers be required to take courses every five years to update their knowledge?
People nowadays always feel awesome about how frequently the knowledge changes. Due to the development of the Internet and easy access to more sources, not only we as students but also teachers who deliver knowledge should keep up with the new ideas. However, is it necessary for all teachers to update their knowledge every five years? I bet my answer is no.

For one thing, not all teachers have the money and time to get the new training courses. Some teachers, especially in some poor areas, even face difficulties getting their wages on time. If they are required to take courses, it will no doubt bring much pressure on their financial situation. Besides the cost, the time is also a key factor that need to be taken into consideration. During my high school, all our teachers were so busy that they even work late to correct our papers or prepare for the classes, let alone spend extra time to take courses.

Additionally, taking courses may not be the most suitable way since we have many other more convenient methods. With the advanced Internet, we can do almost everything online. Recently many people try to take online courses through MOOC, which is an online platform provides some opening courses videotaped by teachers from famous schools. You can have a flexible time to watch the video and arrange your own study plan. As for me, I prefer to watch the video when I eat breakfast or when I wait for the bus. It will cost me only half an hour a day to finish my plan and have no effect on my normal work and study. Teachers can choose this method rather than taking courses in class to renew their knowledge.

At the same time, if there is the specific time period—which I take leave to doubt—for all teachers no matter what subjects they teach to update the knowledge? I have no idea how the five-year requirement is articulated, but I do know it is not appropriate. For some courses such as literature and history, there is little change to the content. It is common for the history books kept what it was for at least 10 years. However, there are truly some subjects need updated in a shorter period, but five years are apparently too long. In the field of technology and design, the improvements and trade just like rabbits and you won’t wish to catch them. Any changes in technology and design will influence the research and should be reflected in classes. Teachers of these subjects should always open their mind to new things.

To sum up, even though updating knowledge is great for most of us, the time and money it requires should also be taken into account. We could seek for a new way to learn or just forget it based on the subjects the teachers are teaching.

作者: mygirlzini 时间: 2014-9-5 17:39
1 受母语影响的现象比较明显
2 语句之间的逻辑链不够严谨
3 句子和词语的多样性需要加强
改得有点多,仅仅是个人观点,欢迎QQ交流

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-5 17:54

mygirlzini 发表于 2014-9-5 17:39
1 受母语影响的现象比较明显
2 语句之间的逻辑链不够严谨
3 句子和词语的多样性需要加强

many THX！
改得真的超级认真啊！

作者: mygirlzini 时间: 2014-9-5 23:59

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-5 17:54
many THX！
改得真的超级认真啊！

嘿嘿改的过程对我也是很好的学习过程要感谢我们在写作路上能结伴共行一段

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-7 11:05
[0906]It is much easier to achieve success without help from one’s family than in the past
People are always talking about the problem of success. Older generation often says that we, as young man, has a more glorious atmosphere to achieve success even without the help from family. I am totally agree with it for several reasons.

For one thing, we could have access to more information on the Internet to achieve success. In the old age, people can only get informed by others. There was a limitation for them to update to the latest information. However, thanks to the development of Internet, it seems not to be a problem for us to catch with the information we want. For instance, if you want to find an internship on finance, you could browse the BBS or other social network websites. The Internet provides us with a great platform to spread messages and get valuable resources we want.

Additionally, the companies stress more on the capabilities of the applicants rather than who are their parents. We all hear about the story about if the man has a rich parent, then he will have a promising future no matter how well he can overtake the work. The magic of so-called background thing has faded away these years. More and more people who is work hard and have great capabilities come to power even though they are poor before and have no support from their parents. Success depends more on how well you can handle the tasks than who are your parents.

The last but not least part of my reasons is that the help from friends seems more important and weight a large part of success. As the old saying goes, a friend in need is a friend indeed. It is the friend who gives us unfailing support even though we face a dark future. Take my own experience as an example, when I was suffering from preparing for my English test, my friend Gary really helped me a lot. I could not count on my parents to tutor my test since they know little English. Gary was so nice that he accompany with me to study and told me how to practice listening and speaking skills. Finally I got a satisfying scores much beyond my expectation.

To sum up, we have an air of freedom to achieve success without the help from parents today. Utilizing the Internet, building up own skills and seeking help from friends can lead us to finally realize our dream.

越写越渣。。

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-7 21:52

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-7 11:05
[0906]It is much easier to achieve success without help from one’s family than in the past
People a ...

[0906]It is much easier to achieve success without help from one’s family than in the past
People are always talking about the problem of success. Older generation often says that we, as young man, has a more glorious atmosphere(个人感觉修饰不得当) to achieve success even without the help from family. I am totally agree with it(it不能指代一句话) for several reasons. 【开头过于简单要是考场实在写不出来就套用一个高级模板吧...】

For one thing, we could have access to more information on the Internet to achieve success. In the old age, people can only get informed by others(加一个orally?). There was a limitation for them to update to the latest information. However, thanks to the development of Internet, it seems not to be a problem for us to catch UP with the information we want. For instance, if you want to find an internship on finance, you could browse the BBS or other social network websites. The Internet provides us with a great platform to spread messages(感觉有点冗余 provide有这个固定搭配么?) and get(动作发出者和动词不匹配) valuable resources we want.
[这一段古今对比写出来了但是语言过于简单...内容也不是很生动... 可以把找到intership这个过程细化一下~比如你想找哪个工作在什么网站上看到什么样的信息所以就有了什么样的机会和经验....等等... 具体一些字数不就多了嘛！！]

Additionally, the companies stress more on the capabilities of the applicants rather than who are their parents (rather than前后对比的词形式和内容要相同). We all hear about the story about if the man has a rich parent, then he will have a promising future no matter how well he can overtake(vt. 赶上；压倒)? the work. The magic of so-called background thing has faded away these years. More and more people who is work hard and have great capabilities come to power even though they are poor before and have no support from their parents. Success depends more on how well you can handle the tasks than who are your parents.
[这几句话我感觉就是重复论点啊你得说出来用什么样的能力 handle了什么样的工作最后如何成功了...加一个具体的小栗子便于理解.....]

The last but not least part of my reasons is that the help from friends seems more important and weight(这是高级表达么?) a large part of success. As the old saying goes, a friend in need is a friend indeed. It is the friend who gives us unfailing support even though we face a dark future(让步有点诡异). Take my own experience as an example, when I was suffering from preparing for my English test, my friend Gary really helped me a lot. I could not count on my parents to tutor my test since they know little English. Gary was so nice that he accompany with me to study and told me how to practice listening and speaking skills. Finally I got a satisfying scores much beyond my expectation.
这一部分朋友的细节太少

To sum up, we have an air of freedom(高级词汇?表达什么意思?) to achieve success without the help from parents today. Utilizing the Internet, building up own skills and seeking help from friends can lead us to finally realize our dream.

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-7 23:56

loverony713 发表于 2014-9-7 21:52
[0906]It is much easier to achieve success without help from one’s family than in the past
People ...

超级谢谢！！你的文章我明天改！月饼节快乐么么~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-9 21:02

[0907-integrated]TPO17-342 words

Due to the fast growth of human population and the increase demand in agriculture and use of pesticide, the number of birds shrinks accordingly. The passage claims three factors and reasons that result in the decline of birds population. However, the professor just states a conflicting idea and beats the arguments one by one.

For one thing, the lecture discusses that because of the constant expansion of human settlements, the birds' natural habitats will continue to disappear. It may be true but it is not convincing with more consideration. Actually, thanks to the development of modern urban, the government can provide better and larger habitats for birds. The number of some kinds of birds is shrink but some others grow.

Additionally, contrary to the belief in the passage that the agriculture activities hinder the growth of birds and destroy their homes, the professor says that the prediction and reasoning in the passage is too fast. The circumstance will not take place in recent years. And the reality is that the speed of expansion is lower and lower. On the other side, the farms have been aware of the problem so they transfer to plant some productive crops. In this way, the farmers can yield more from with limited acres of land. There is no need to expand the farm land.

The last point shown in the reading material is that with the increase use of pesticide, birds will eat more insects polluted by pesticide. However the listening presents a completely different main idea that the article cannot use the history to make a misleading forecast since the situation has changed a lot. Both scientists and farmers get aware of the pollution so they come up with two solutions. First, farmers are using a new type of pesticide which does less harm to the plants. Second, thanks to the development of new technology, farmers can choose to plant pest resistant crops. What is more surprising is that the crops do not hurt birds so the birds population will not decline as described in the article.

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-9 22:37

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-9 21:02
[0907-integrated]TPO17-342 words
Due to the fast growth of human population and the increase demand ...

Additionally, contrary to the belief in the passage that the agriculture activities hinder the growth of birds and destroy their homes, the professor says that the prediction and reasoning in the passage is (are)too fast(想表达什么意思?). The circumstance will not take place(感觉主谓搭配不是很一致..) in recent years. And the reality is that the speed of expansion is lower and lower. On the other side, the farms have been aware of the problem so they transfer to plant some productive crops. In this way, the farmers can yield more from with limited acres of land. There is no need to expand the farm land.

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-9 22:39

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-9 21:02
[0907-integrated]TPO17-342 words
Due to the fast growth of human population and the increase demand ...

其实我的作文都是自己默默修改过的如果不重听根本写不了这么好

真是头疼。。。

ps我看到你有整理数学基金简直太伟大了。。。总是因为数学杀鸡失败。。。哎。。。望指点。。。。

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-9 23:51

loverony713 发表于 2014-9-9 22:39
其实我的作文都是自己默默修改过的如果不重听根本写不了这么好真是头疼。。。

ps我看到你有 ...

我数学。。大概因为是理科森吧。。两次考试都是只看机经，然后二战的时候做题认真仔细放慢了pace什么的。。始终认为数学只要认真仔细加上机经50绝对没问题~

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-9 23:54

loverony713 发表于 2014-9-9 22:37
Due to the fast growth of human population and the increase demand in agriculture and use of pesti ...

THX revise~
the "a conflicting idea" means" the professor disagrees with the article"
falon那些记下来真是无力。。不过我会努力~
一起加油~~

作者: loverony713 时间: 2014-9-10 08:39

小蘑菇开始打怪发表于 2014-9-9 23:54
THX revise~
the "a conflicting idea" means" the professor disagrees with the article"
falon那些记 ...

杀t的路上总是很艰辛。。。

作者: cherry6891 时间: 2014-9-13 18:45
蘑菇，又见面啦，看到你的作文贴很受启发，我也想加入，就是一周一篇作文传上来吗？怎么加入这个作文分队啊？

作者: 小蘑菇开始打怪 时间: 2014-9-13 20:12

cherry6891 发表于 2014-9-13 18:45
蘑菇，又见面啦，看到你的作文贴很受启发，我也想加入，就是一周一篇作文传上来吗？怎么加入这个作文分队啊 ...

你看CD 的托福写作板块，有个写作小分队~具体怎么跟都有写~

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