标题: Please rate my essay, 1st time doing this. [打印本页] 作者: levilee 时间: 2014-5-9 16:19 标题: Please rate my essay, 1st time doing this. 开头...
firstly, though the comparison of the House of Beef with the Good Earth Cafe and of the product selling nowadays with the main products selling in the past may say something, the particular data may not be representative as a whole. For instance, it's possible that the Heart's Delight is the only store selling high-butterfat cheeses in that area while numbers of stores are selling food with low intake of red meat and fatty cheeses, since people living in that area have been aware of the importance of regulating their intake of such things.
Secondly, the argument depends on an unproven cause-and-effect relationship between the living stardard of the owner of the shop and the economic condition of that shop. The basis for the profits that the shop gains might have nothing to do with the living stardard of the owner. To be more specific, the owner of the new House of Beef might be a son of a successful bussiness man, which means that the money he got is not from the profits of that shop but from his father, furthermore, the condition of that shop has nothing to do with whether the owners are millionaires or not. It works for the example of the Good Earth Cafe too.
Thirdly, the author cited the wide section of cheeses made with high butterfat content sold in the Heart's Delight to back the position but he failed to consider both the demand of the customer and the selling condition, thus, the example cannot support the position that the author agrees effectively.
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