The argument states that the foreign company copied the motocycle X and the sales is not good as Motocycle X, becasue it lacks the loud noise, which is made by motocycle X, and besides that, there must be some other explanation. The author cites the sample of car selling to do comparison, and makes the advertisements as evidence to support his view. But the author fails to convince me, because he has makes several assumptions.
To begin with, the author put the foreign made products at the same platform to do comparison with US-made products. To a consumer, perhaps, it is not very obvious, but it's no doubt that more or less a consumer has emotional factor to impact his decision. Normally, if the product made by foreign nation has good quality as same as the one made by US, and meanwhile, the price is not very competitive, most likely, the consumer would buy the one made by US. For example, US is the pioneer of IT industry, if a US citizen wants to purchase a computer between US brand, Dell and Chinese brand, Lenovo, the choice will go to Dell, becasue of the preferrence to support own country.
Secondly, if the author put the country preferrence away, he still assumes that car selling could be compared with motocycle selling. Frankly, it is true that foreign cars have certain marketing share in the whole industry, but car and motorcyle are two different products, though they are all engine-driven. It is very possible that when people choose car, people would consider price, safty, maintance frequency, but for motocycle, it's not as popular as car, when people buy motorcycle, fashion, noise, speed may become the main points to consider. Therefore, it is not reasonable expect motorcycle sales good only due to car selling was good before.
Finally, even if the car selling is suitable to fit the car selling, the advertisment envidence still works under an assumption. The author assumes that the coustomers who buy the motorcycle X are driven by TV advertisment to make the choice. To be honest, the TV ads typically doesn't show the loud noise to audience, but it doesn't proved that the customers buy the motorcyle by the motivation of TV watch. Actually, the majority of the motor riders are young people, who now like the internet surfing, internet marketing and internet purchasing. For example, 80% of the friends around me are buying products from internet now, and they don't even watch TV now. The young people adore the internet ads more than the TV ads. Thus, the TV ads couldn't support the author's view completely.
To sum up, the argument makes three assumptions when expressing his view, and if the author wants to convince more people to trust this argument, he has to release more analysis and proof to show that people treat foreign products as same as own-country-made products, car selling is comparable with motorcycle selling and the TV ads is the main channel to promote the motorcycle. 作者: 飞翔的荷兰号 时间: 2013-10-2 16:56
我觉得LZ的总体结构都没有问题。可以提高的地方我觉得有如下几点：
1.关联词，可以替换使用一些CD里面的template的。仅仅使用To begin with，secondly, finally 太简单了。而且单词数也少了，比如Secondly可以换成 Another problem with the argument is that ^^^.
2.LZ的每段话的论点后面可以增加一个总结句。比如Without ruiling out the possibilities that ~, the argument is not worthy of consideration.
