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标题: 暴风雨小圆的写作贴，请多关照：） [打印本页]

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-10 21:08
标题: 暴风雨小圆的写作贴，请多关照：）
从今天开始~

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-10 21:10
好像把规则弄错了，嘛~先放这里吧：）
综合+独立（TPO24）
综合写作：In the lecture, the professor talks about dinosaur fossils found recently can't be provided to learn actual a nimal tissues and he states three ideas speculating what's said in the reading section in three ways:blood vessels, red blood cells, and collagen matrix.
Firstly, the professor states that the little branching channels inside are actually not that necessary, and he says there still exist hollows even through there are not real blood vessels of tissue things.This is just opposite against the reading material which shows that the remains of the actual blood vessels of tissue can be represented by this soft substance.
Then, the professor disagrees with the idea that substances containing red blood cells or iron, which is essential to the function and the size of red blood cells and is helpful to change oxygen to tissues.He then says that these spheres found inside the bone are likely to be some red minerals.
Last bu not the least, the speaker claims that collagen, the major factor of living bone tissues, can't last longer than 100 years, and this is a strong evidence to deny, in reading part, that the collagen matrix in the leg bone is related to bone tissue.

独立写作：I don't think it's the best way for parents to encourage their kids to take a part-time job because they waht their children to be more mature.Why?We must need to know work is not all that life means.
Being adualt means independence, both finantially and mentally, both of which can't be provided completely by part-time job.As we all know, this kind of job usually doesn't offer enough income for us to make a living, and what we get from it is maybe just a small part of our pocket money.In China, especially, students do part-time job most likely can get only one to two dollars per hour.After a day of hard work, we might buy a humberg and cocacola and surprisingly find that nothing can be left in our pocket and we are even not able to buy our parents a gift.Futhermore, most part-time job is very elementory and we can only do basic work for lack of experience and expertise.Doing this sort of job, well, porbably intresting and fresh in the beginning, but it can't obviously give us a sense of santisfaction.We can do it just for fun, but trust me, it do have little relation to independence, the adult life.
On the other hand, to become an eligible adult, we ought to know how to socialize efficiently, which means making new freinds and keep good relationship with old ones.In part-time job, we waste our time repeating the same thing, just the labor one.I remember when I have part-time job in Macdonal, I spend my entire day helping my clients odering Mexico chicken roll and chocolate ice-cream, after a seven-hour work, I return home and just want to sleep, thinking of nothing but rest.Nether do I spend time making freinds who I can contact for long time, but I don't watch movies with my boyfreind.It's so terrible.
Admittedly, taking part-time job give me an access to know how the quick food bands work their company, which may be helpful for my economic learning.But it's absolutely not that important for parents to ask their children to take part-time job!

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-10 21:59
座位已占期待明天的写作~ 另外谢谢官群里928 。同学的耐心解答~

作者: wanggang0411 时间: 2013-9-12 17:20

暴风雨小圆发表于 2013-9-10 21:10
好像把规则弄错了，嘛~先放这里吧：）
综合+独立（TPO24）
综合写作：In the lecture, the professor talks ...

同学9月10号的独立作文题目是
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-12 18:47

wanggang0411 发表于 2013-9-12 17:20
同学9月10号的独立作文题目是
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement
It is better t ...

今天的呢？我昨天占了位置但现在都还没有回复的说是落选了吗><

作者: 追梦CY 时间: 2013-9-12 20:20

暴风雨小圆发表于 2013-9-10 21:59
座位已占期待明天的写作~ 另外谢谢官群里928 。同学的耐心解答~

哈才看到小句号就是我呀

加油小圆童鞋~

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-12 22:59

追梦CY 发表于 2013-9-12 20:20
哈才看到小句号就是我呀
加油小圆童鞋~

谢谢小···小句号童鞋

一起进步^_^

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-12 23:01
今天还是占座失败了ORZ 哎我是有多笨
晚上在图书馆写了一篇独立作文，30分钟刚好用完，395字，来不及修改····放到word里很多拼写错误，嘛~发现错误也是一种进步嘛

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-12 23:06
回想起来，想观点和例子花了很多时间，不过比前天的10分钟要快一点，practice makes perfect！！
今天举的是老俞的例子，不知道作为ETS的前死对头，这样的例子会不会扣印象分哈哈
自己修改的局限性果然还是很大，只能改点单词什么的，再看看别人写的好文章，就是发掘不出重要的coherence上有什么弱点
祈祷明天占位成功：3

作者: pengxudong 时间: 2013-9-12 23:28
同学你9月11日的综合呢？TPO6

作者: yzwdan818 时间: 2013-9-13 09:14
同学，你能抽时间改一下我9月11号的独立作文吗？分组里你是给我改，你每次占了座之后当晚11点后或者第二天早上再去帖子第一页再看一下分组

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-13 18:57

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-9-13 09:14
同学，你能抽时间改一下我9月11号的独立作文吗？分组里你是给我改，你每次占了座之后当晚11点后或者第二天 ...

原来如此谢谢！
迟一点时间我把修改的你的作文，和我的作文一起给你哦

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-13 19:18

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-9-13 09:14
同学，你能抽时间改一下我9月11号的独立作文吗？分组里你是给我改，你每次占了座之后当晚11点后或者第二天 ...

你好刚刚看分组信息我修改的是你12号的综合写作哦 911的独立写作我是和lexi互改的

作者: yzwdan818 时间: 2013-9-13 19:54

暴风雨小圆发表于 2013-9-13 19:18
你好刚刚看分组信息我修改的是你12号的综合写作哦 911的独立写作我是和lexi互改的 ...

我没有占12号的座，11号我占的是综合的座，我开始说错了，你应该给我改11号的综合作文，你到帖子里找我的作文链接就行，谢谢！

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-13 20:15

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-9-13 19:54
我没有占12号的座，11号我占的是综合的座，我开始说错了，你应该给我改11号的综合作文，你到帖子里找我的 ...

no problem><

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-13 20:17

yzwdan818 发表于 2013-9-13 19:54
我没有占12号的座，11号我占的是综合的座，我开始说错了，你应该给我改11号的综合作文，你到帖子里找我的 ...

你能开一个作文贴吗？我改完了直接放到你的帖子里哦

作者: 暴风雨小圆 时间: 2013-9-13 20:31

pengxudong 发表于 2013-9-12 23:28
同学你9月11日的综合呢？TPO6

不好意思今天才搞懂这个分组规则
作文已经发到主贴上了，在34页
作文的听力好像和listening不太一样，感觉没抓住重点····
不好意思今天才交作业，麻烦了！><

作者: gre呀gre 时间: 2013-9-13 23:10
童鞋麻烦你看一下规则好吗，你写好的作文直接贴到你自己的帖子下面就好，不要再开新帖，不要再发到占座贴上，只需要把你作文链接放到你占座那一楼就行，麻烦你看下规则，这样互改的童鞋能方便找到你作文，我和另一个队长也方便查作业

作者: 苦大仇深的Lexi 时间: 2013-9-14 12:12
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