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标题: 少壮不努力，老大写作文。洛阳亲友如相问，就说我在写作文。 [打印本页]

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-2-6 23:37
标题: 少壮不努力，老大写作文。洛阳亲友如相问，就说我在写作文。

厄。。关于作文这件事真的是我最不想面对的T.T
破个题要破半小时，纠结来纠结去，总觉得三个理由哪个跑偏了，放在一起又没有整体性逻辑感。
好不容易开始写了又编不出理由，想不出表达，用不准词语，拼不出单词。

总之就是，惨！不！忍！睹！

BUT，我们的口号是rock toefl writing, 目标31+
所以哪怕开始一篇文章写了一晚也千万千万不要气馁，常积累，多练笔，相信自己在考场上可以下笔如有神的。

恩恩。

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-2-6 23:39
2.6 独立 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful at working in a group.

Nowadays, team work occupies the most important position in variety manners of working. As a result, the ability of time management, communication, self-improvement and etc. are all crucial elements determine a successful working group member. Besides, an outstanding team member is always a good listener. People need to accept their fellows' advice and even criticism when necessary. Those who turn a deaf ear to other's criticism and stick to themselves are easily fall into a wrong road, which would affect job schedule, damage relationship, and impede personal development.

First of all, refusing criticism prevents the whole team group from carrying on the work. Assuming that you got some wrong solutions about a case while discussing, one of your workmates points out and others are agree, but you insist your idea and never admit the mistake. It is conceivable that the whole job schedule will be delayed due to your stupid insistence. Consequently, to maintain an original time schedule, great importance should be attached to a wise acceptance when facing criticism for a successful team member.

Another problem we cannot ignore is that a stubborn people has a negative impact on working environment. Everyone in the group enjoys other's nodding assent, but as for criticism, the first sensation might not be pleasant. However, as a successful group member, modesty is an essential factor to handle conflicts between colleagues. Angry as you are, the reason why you are faced others' criticism is the most significant indeed. Therefore, it is necessary to calm down and communicate with your fellows patiently, and thus to create a harmony working atmosphere for a better cooperation.

What's more, self-improvement will also be affected if one never accept the criticism from workmates or leaders. A fitting example is about my friend. Lisa, one of my best friends, used to be a member in the campus broadcasting station, and was criticized by one of her team members of editing a radio program with a outdated software for convenience, just because she was good at this software. It turns out one day the software collapsed, all the hard works end up by this unstable system and Lisa couldn’t regret more. If she accept the criticism, she could practice a new skill as well as save the group work from unintended damage. Since each of us is limited in knowledge and experience, we can improve our skills and attain a comprehensive thinking by opening to the criticism.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that refusing the criticism will impede people's success in a working team. An high quality work on time, a good working atmosphere, and an ideal self-development need us to be more generous and comfortable to embrace the criticism.

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-2-6 23:43
这个写了好！长！时！间！
还参考了别人的例子一枚T.T

尽请拍砖哦各位。

P.S 那啥。这才写一篇算算时间就已经是节前最后一篇了。
明天开始回家and断网，我不知道还有没有时间帮跟我一组滴童鞋改作文。
so... 这可肿么办？

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2013-2-7 00:36
支持小花~~！

作者: teddybearj4 时间: 2013-2-7 11:02
我也来支持花儿！~~~

作者: SMS 时间: 2013-2-7 22:10

这个写了好！长！时！间！
还参考了别人的例子一枚T.T

尽请拍砖哦各位。

P.S 那啥。这才写一篇算算时间就已经是节前最后一篇了。
明天开始回家and断网，我不知道还有没有时间帮跟我一组滴童鞋改作文。
so... 这可肿么办？

-- by 会员 corneliaflower (2013/2/6 23:43:59)

没事，回来再改也行，我给你改的也回来再看。春节愉快！

作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2013-2-10 22:41
哇。。我来晚了！！顶花！
虽为水军，等年过完我们都要好好加油杀GT咯哈
我就是那啥洛阳亲友来相问了。。

作者: 慕禾 时间: 2013-2-11 10:30
强烈要求握爪~记得我第一次写作文的时候硬是吭哧了一上午，第二天就硬着头皮上考场了不过出来结果还可以- -这应该也算是完美主义加拖延症的一种吧，没关系，就算考前再拖延写的再水用时再长也千万别责怪自己，只要坚持练习，考场上一定会文思泉涌的。花儿加油！

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-2-15 12:57
TO
晨依：谢谢11。等你考完G帮我指点一下作文吧~~
teddy：好久没见。teddy准备去哪了？
SMS：你的已改好。我也不着急，迟到的年快！
浅：浅浅有空帮我看作文啊！哈哈哈哈，我不客气了><
慕禾：和慕禾一起干巴爹！！

作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2013-3-15 15:03
写论文走神中过来看看花儿的帖子，想帮你改作文来着。没看到东西哈，到时候你传给我吧

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-3-15 15:18

写论文走神中过来看看花儿的帖子，想帮你改作文来着。没看到东西哈，到时候你传给我吧

-- by 会员浅吟天 (2013/3/15 15:03:14)

在一楼有一篇~~好久前写的还没人帮我改过T.T

作者: 泥巴猪 时间: 2013-3-26 01:01
鬼子的写作思路其实很简单，总-分-总，第一部分都是背景介绍，提出观点；第二部分正反方面都得说，立论-解释（论据）-论证（例子，鬼子特别看重例子，否则文章言之无味）；第三部分总结再次阐明观点，可以延伸提出新观点（建议或者别角度分析）。

作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2013-3-29 16:24

2.6独立 Do youagree or disagree with the following statement?
People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful atworking in a group.

黄好的。绿色建议。红色有问题的

Nowadays, team work occupies the most important position in variety manners ofworking. As a result, the ability of time management, communication,self-improvement and etc.(我看到etc.就觉得这句停了，不知道有没有在中间这样用的。讨论) are all crucialelements determine（两个动词了） asuccessful working group member. Besides, an outstanding team member is alwaysa good listener. People need to accept their fellows' advice and even criticismwhen necessary. Those who turna deaf ear to other's criticism and stick to themselves are easily fallinto a wrong road, which would affect job schedule, damage relationship, andimpede personal development.

First of all, refusing criticism prevents the whole team group from carrying onthe work. Assuming that you got some wrong solutions about a case whilediscussing, one of your workmates points out and others are agree, but youinsist your idea and never admit the mistake. It is conceivable that the whole job schedule willbe delayed due to your stupid（个人感觉这个词感情色彩太浓，托福中不是很好）insistence. Consequently, to maintain an original time schedule, greatimportance should be attached to a wise acceptance when facing criticism for asuccessful team member.（这句其实我没读懂。第一，consequently和前面的逻辑不很相关。第二，我觉得不用专门用很难的句式把语序写的不是很好理解。）

Another problem we cannot ignore is that a stubborn people has a negativeimpact on working environment. Everyone in the group enjoys other's noddingassent, but as for criticism, the first sensation（有这个说法吗？告之。我觉得sensation是用在很强烈的感情上的） might not be pleasant. However, as asuccessful group member, modesty is an essential factor to handle conflictsbetween colleagues. Angry as you are, the reason why you are faced others'criticism is the most significant indeed. Therefore, it is necessary to calmdown and communicate with your fellows patiently, and thus to create a harmonyworking atmosphere for a better cooperation.（建议写个啥你表叔表姐的例子更亲切具体。比如他先如此，后来改过了就。。。跟你上面的其实一样，只是加了生活中例子。PS 读了下一段你原先那样还是挺好的）

What's more, self-improvement will also be affected if one never accept thecriticism from workmates or leaders. A fitting example is about my friend. Lisa, one of my bestfriends（删掉吧，与主旨无关）, used to be a member in the campus broadcasting station, and wascriticized by one of her team members of editing a radio program with aoutdated software for convenience, just because she was good at this software. （花儿的句子都好长。。）It turns out one day the software collapsed,all the hard works end up by this unstable system and Lisa couldn’t regretmore. If she accept the criticism（前面只写了有人批评她，以及批评原因，没写她不接受criticism）, shecould practice a new skill as well as save the group work from unintendeddamage. Since each of us is limited in knowledge and experience, we can improveour skills and attain a comprehensive thinking by opening to the criticism.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion thatrefusing the criticism will impede people's success in a working team. An highquality work on time, a good working atmosphere, and an ideal self-developmentneed us to be more generous and comfortable to embrace the criticism.

总的来说：
开头可以再直接入题一点。结尾很好！点还是挺好的。就是有的语句可以再流利一点。
（新版用不惯，我word上改好了，粘过来都没了。。）

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-4-2 00:53
哦发一篇作文 4月预测JJ里的必须是超时产物写到刚才实在困了写不下去草草结尾求狠批！！！

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For successful development of a country, should government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities?

Education is always represented the power of a country, and government, as the primary investor, plays an extremely role in education. Thousands of years ago, the emperor built Shangshufang for prince and princess to study. Nowadays schools, museums and libraries are all offered by government to propel the process of education. Then one problem emerges when we try to improve our education: which one deserves more to get the budget, very young children education or undergraduates education? From my perspective, the latter may fit better to this dilemma.

It is undeniable that college students are now in their best ages to have the ability to learn. The budget, which put in the university, can make the most use of it. We can easily foresee that economic and technology will be promote by our students through their efforts, however, some limitations still exist between the eager students and the progressed country. For instance, some of the universities, especially in northwest of China, are lack of the resources of facilities and teachers. Students here cannot receive a matching education, since they have classes in a small classroom, which is full of people, and cannot hear what the professor says clearly. If more budget can use in these schools, bigger classroom could be built, advanced microphone could be used, and maybe prominent teachers could be attracted. Consequently, budgets on universities enable students get better educated and the promote the whole society steps on a developed stage.

What’s more, we cannot ignore the hidden trouble if we focus the budget on young children education. Children are too young to have self-discipline, as their emotional intelligence, self-awareness and self-guidance is still not mature, thus much money invested only can we get half the result. A fitting example is that once my little sister was in her 5 years old, her kindergarten received a fund from the government of my hometown to buy a series of calculating tools to learn more difficult mathematics. Unfortunately, my sister and her classmates were all attracted by the appealing packing, no one liked to listen to what the teacher taught. They also regarded these tools just as playing dolls. No more than 3 days, the abacus is destroyed and the calculator is discharged. It is apparent that pitching budget on young children education may put our best wishes in vain.

We have to admit that primary education is necessary, however, children spent most of their time with parents, there is no reason for us to entrusted with great expectations on government. Parents, who affected children with their ideas, have duties to create a better education environment to pave the basis for a brighter future of both children and our country.

Finally, basing on the evidences supporting the arguments I make, we could safely draw a conclusion that it is better for government to pitch the budget on universities.

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-4-7 23:16
寂静一篇求批哇~~
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past young people depended on their parents for making decisions. Today, young people are better able to make decisions on their own．

Decisions making is always an important issue in one’s whole life. When we were young, we have to choose which one we could get from numbers of toys that we wanted. Then we need to choose which major is the most suited for us to get a better job. Then one problem emerges when we compare the different situation between the past and nowadays that young people depend on their parents or themselves to make a decision. My opinion will be well discussed in the following paragraphs.

In the feudal society, especially in China, parents play the most essential role in a family. And the whole society put the filial duty in the first place when children and parents hold some discussions. So it is common for parents to make almost every decision for their children. A fitting example is that the marriages in ancient times are all decided by parents. Young people cannot marry who they true love if the two family have much differences in property or those two people are in different class. Just because of the traditional manner, young people always depend on their parents for making decisions.
However, young people today are more open-minded as the development of social society. They want to show their own personalities and don’t like to follow the old fashion. What’s more, the gap between parents and children is more or less become an barrier from their communication. Thus it is obviously to see that young people today are more independent to make their own choice, they choose what they like to wear, to eat and to read. It is hard force them to obey what their parents said because they could get more information about one thing to judge whether it is suitable for themselves.

Admittedly, the suggestion of parents is always valuable for young people when they faced with a big choice. It is necessary to take parent’s advices into account. However, we have to listen to our own voice and follow our own path to make a decision. And being independent to deal with this paradox is a memorable class in our life.

Therefore, it is true that young people depend on their parents more than teenagers today when making a decision due to the social system and culture.
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作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-4-10 23:45

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Your job has greater happiness than your social life does.

Happiness has pervaded every aspect of our life. However, there may be thousands of definitions of happiness according to different opinion of different people. Both of job and social life can bring us the feeling of happiness: job gives us an opportunity to show our talents and make some contributions, social life offers a way to relaxing ourselves both in physical and in mental. When compared which one has greater happiness, after seconds of thoughts, I probably go for the social life.

There is no denying that people can find true happiness when they do what they really want to. Your social life just offers you such spare times to enjoy yourselves. Just imagine how wonderful it could be when you come back home after a whole day’s work, sit down in front of your computer with a box of popcorn in hands. While you are laughing loudly at the funny performance and words, and chatting with your friends about the plots in the movies, all your pressure and anxieties from work or study have all gone. Therefore, in this case, social life do help people feel happiness.

What’s more, there is another kind of happiness along with our whole life – family. It is an enjoyable time when stay with our parents, sisters or brothers, and children. Almost everyone is bathed in the sea of love from our families. Taking myself as an example. When I was walking along the road of city before sunset with family members, I just feel peaceful and don’t afraid of anything. Every words from my parents gives me a courage to deal with problems that I don’t want to face in my study and life. And I can totally confirm that this is a kind of happiness I will never forget as time goes by.

Admittedly, it is a great honor to do some achievements after several days of hard working. And the money and praises in your job create an environment of happiness. However, we should keep in mind that this kind of feeling is just temporary. No one will gain these things forever, the true happiness only exist in the process you have experienced.

Therefore, it is somewhat biased to claim that your job has greater happiness than your social life does. We can easily find happiness through the time in our social life do what we truly loved or stayed with our families. But if you can understand what will really bring you happiness, it is absolutely to say that happiness is everywhere in your colorful life.

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-4-11 23:43
厄。。真的很不好意思，我这篇没按照小分队今天的题目来写，因为今天出门了忘记作文题目，就自己找了一篇JJ写，下周就要考了，麻烦改作文的同学了！

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for schools to fund their students' social activities than to improve students' meals.

School funds is an indispensable part to improve the quality of education. Advanced teaching method, glamorous environment and plentiful student's activities are all needed the help with this budget. Then one problem emerges as we try to find the other useful ways of school funds: which is more important for school to focus its budgets on, students' social activities or meals? From my perspective, the former has more significant meaning.

First and foremost, social activities can offer students opportunities to build up a wilder relationship, which is absolutely useful in their future career. A good job is an appealing stage that attracts every students to show their talents utilizing what they have learned from school. The improving of social activities just lend an impetus to this process. An experience from myself is a telling example to illustrate this point. When I was a freshman in university, I participated in many kings of social activities, one is called "San Xiaxiang" Summer Investigation. In this activity, I met a patient teacher who gave me many inspiring guidance and helped me to won the second prize. She also sent me some tips about my study and life and recommended me to a local company to do some internships even after this activity. Thanks to this social activity, I have more valuable experiences in my resume and an unforgettable memory during my college life.

What's more, social activities enrich students' vision and create a colorful environment. It is obvious that plentiful activities benefit students' development both in physics and mental. A singing club can help students to release their pressure, an art exhibition can stimulate the whole passion of painting, and a speech competition can improve the skills and confidence when facing with a lot of people. Just imagine how boring it could be when you walk out from classroom after a full day of classes, has nothing to do but go back to dormitory quickly. However, while you walking through the schoolyard and find there is just a concert ongoing, your tiredness and pressure may all gone.

Admittedly, it is undeniable that improving student's meals guarantee a good body health. But we can provide some gym clubs for students to exercise. In this kind of activity, you can not only stronger your body but also make new friends, which offer you a memorable life and broad chances to get a better job.

Therefore, from what we have discussed above, it is highly recommended school to fund their student's social activities than to improve student's meals. Just because what the benefits that increasing meals could bring, the social activities could also give to you.

作者: kao154 时间: 2013-4-12 15:37
批改见附件。。。千万注意别跑题

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-4-12 20:49

kao154 发表于 2013-4-12 15:37
批改见附件。。。千万注意别跑题

谢谢你的批改哦，我不知道托福作文有这么分的。不过我觉得这道题它说你是不是同意SA比M更值得学校投资，你如果认同的话肯定要说明SA哪里比M重要吧，我是按照这个思路来写的。不知道算不算跑题呢~~
这道题我还问了两个CDer 他们给我的思路也是这样子的>< 我觉得可能也没有分得那么精准吧。

然后就是a telling example就是一个生动的例子的意思，嘻嘻。
最后一句我确实写的比较乱了，因为没时间了，以后要避免这样的长句子，自己都被自己绕晕了。

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-4-12 21:05
我！！！真的对不起改作文的童鞋。我看错题了。。扫了一眼因为看过机经有印象，结果题目写错了T.T
麻烦批改我作文的亲了。

Contributes on an enjoyable vacation, please select one of three selection. Good food, Good location and with good friends to travel.

An enjoyable vacation is an unforgettable memory in our life, and several factors decide the vacation jointly. An amazing location will provide us some beautiful views and delicious food can bring us good moods. When asked about which one impress me most, however, I would like to choose traveling with my good friends. The reasons why I hold this opinion are listed below.

To start with, friends always share the same interests. It is conceivable that we can find a place we both enjoy easily. And even our destination is inconvenient, we will still have fun just because traveling with friends. Just imagine how wonderful it could be when you are climbing a mountain which has nearly a right angle, afraid to walk any more, but your friends lend you a hand and encourage you to climb on the top. The cooperation between your trip and the excitement of success will enhance the friendship, forget the nervous and dangerous, as well as enjoy the scenery that is hardly seen in the city life.

In addition, friends enable the trip much safer if you are faced with some problems occasionally. They will give you a helping hand in the first time when some trouble happens to you, and that is what other elements cannot give. Take my personal experience as an example. When I headed to Xi an with my best friend, I got a badly cold during the trip in the midnight. My friend bought some medicine for me at once and stayed with me the whole night. I can hardly imagine how difficult it would be to find an open drug store in the night. Thanks to her patient care, I recovered so quickly that I could enjoy the delicious food in Xi an.

There is no denying that a good location and food will also bring us some happiness during vacation, however, good friends could regard as the basic of the other two factors to some extent. Therefore, sharing the fascinating scenery and delicious food with friends could be a better way for us to remember an unforgettable vacation.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that traveling with good friends contributes on an enjoyable vacation most. Not only because it will improve the friendships after the experience working out a difficult situation together, but also because it will be very helpful when faced with difficulties that could not fixed alone.

作者: viviyl 时间: 2013-4-13 20:10

改晚了= =sorry~
An enjoyable vacation is anunforgettable memory in our life, and several factors decide the vacationjointly. An amazing location will provide us some beautiful views and deliciousfood can bring us good moods. When asked about which one impress me most,however, I would like to choose traveling with my good friends. The reasons whyI hold this opinion are listed below.

To start with, friends always share the same interests. It is conceivable thatwe can find a place we both enjoy easily. And even our destination is inconvenient(even the journey is long andboring, inconvenient 在这不大合适), we will still have fun just becausetraveling with friends. Just imagine how wonderful it could be when you areclimbing a mountain which has nearly a right angle, (and)afraidto walk any more, but your friends lend you a hand and encourage you to climbon the top. The cooperation between your trip and the excitement of successwill enhance the friendship, (make you,是人forget不是cooperation forget)forget the nervous and dangerous,as well as (let you 同上)enjoythe scenery that is hardly seen in the city life.

In addition, friends enable the trip much safer if you are faced with someproblems occasionally. They will give you a helping hand in the first time whensome trouble happens to you, and that is what other elements cannot give. Takemy personal experience as an example. When I headed to Xi an with my bestfriend, I got a badly cold during the trip in the midnight. My friend boughtsome medicine for me at once and stayed with me the whole night. I can hardlyimagine how difficult it would be to find an open drug store in the night.Thanks to her patient care, I recovered so quickly that I could enjoy thedelicious food in Xi an.

There is no denying that a good location and food will also bring us somehappiness during vacation, however, good friends could (be) regard(ed) as the basic of theother two factors to some extent(friends是location和food的基础好像有点奇怪= =，说它是happiness的基础应该好一点~). Therefore, sharing thefascinating scenery and delicious food with friends could be a better way forus to remember an unforgettable vacation.

From what has beendiscussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that traveling with goodfriends contributes on(to) an enjoyable vacationmost. Not only because it will improve(strengthen) the friendships after the experience (of) working out a difficult situation together, butalso because it will be very helpful when faced with(we encounter,补上主语比较好) difficulties that could not (be) fixed alone.(最后一句话好像不是一个完整的句子，not only because…, but also because….而且还木有倒装。建议改成：This is because traveling with friends will not only…but also…)

观点和举例都很好~注意一些小的语法问题更好了~

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-4-13 22:55
4.13 综合 TPO25

The lecture claims that the clay jars that had been excavated indeed proposed that vessel were ancient electric batteries. This directly contradicts what the passage indicates such point is not true.

First, the reading passage believes the absence of some electricity conductors means the vessels were not ancient batteries. However, as the speaker says, no evidence to show that the conductors are existed will prove nothing. Since the ancient people are not specialists, they may found metal wires or other conductive materials but threw them away after use just because lacking of knowledge about the function of these materials.

The second point of difference between the lecture and the reading passage concerns that the purpose of copper cylinders. The lecture cast doubt on the statement that copper cylinder was used for holding scrolls. Just as one thing created for one purpose, whereas used for another. It is of highly possibility that the copper cylinder was designed to hold scrolls at first but used to generate electricity later.

Finally, according to the reading passage, there is no use for ancient people to have electricity. The listening material, in contrast, thought there are at least two functions electricity can provide. First, you could show your magic power by touching the batteries, which would shocking in miles. And second, it could be used for healing, such as reducing the pain, in medical area just as the doctors do nowadays.

Consequently, the contents displayed in the reading passage are entirely rejected by the lecture.

作者: sherlock1992 时间: 2013-4-14 18:32

corneliaflower 发表于 2013-4-13 22:55
4.13 综合 TPO25

The lecture claims that the clay jars that had been excavated indeed proposed tha ...

The lecture claims that the clay jars that had been excavated （这一部分我更偏向于用一般过去时）indeed proposed (这里的主语是jars吗？感觉proposed在这里用的不是太舒服）that vessel (the vessels)were ancient electric batteries. This directly contradicts what the passage indicates such point is not true.(直接contradict points of reading passage就行了，感觉not ture有些重复）

First, the reading passage believes the absence of some electricity conductors means the vessels were not ancient batteries. However, as the speaker says, no evidence to show that the conductors are (去掉are,另外感觉这还像是read passage的观点）existed will prove nothing. Since the ancient people are not specialists, they may found metal wires or other conductive materials but threw them away after use just because lacking of knowledge about the function of these materials.

The second point of difference between the lecture and the reading passage concerns that (去掉that)the purpose of copper cylinders. The lecture casts doubt on the statement that copper cylinder was used for holding scrolls. Just as one thing created for one purpose, whereas used for another. It is of highly possibility that the copper cylinder was designed to hold scrolls at first but used to generate electricity later.

Finally, according to the reading passage, there is no use for ancient people to have electricity. The listening material, in contrast, thought there are at least two functions electricity can provide. First, you could(这里为什么要用could？还想没有语气婉转或虚拟吧？） show your magic power by touching the batteries, which would shocking in miles.(这是什么意思？） And second, it could be used for healing, such as reducing the pain, in medical area just as the doctors do nowadays.

Consequently, the contents displayed in the reading passage are entirely rejected by the lecture.

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-8-27 19:08
8/27 第一个理由段之前有看过老师推荐的一个理由和例子，就直接拿过来用啦。然后我想知道二次世界大战那个2在作文里要怎么打啊？

Agree or disagree: to solve the problem of present and future, it is necessary to understand the past.

There has been a heated discussion as to whether it is necessary for people to review the past when faced with problems at present and in the future. Some supporters suggest that the past could equip us with easy access to solutions. However, others remain unconvinced of its merits, retorting that some unintended backlash might occur as the experience from history could not work any more nowadays. When I take a moment to reflect this issue, I am still a big voter for the opinion that we have every reason to understand the past in order to solve the puzzles of present and future.

To begin with, reviewing the past can let us evade some stupid mistakes. Since people have paid tremendous price for mistakes in the past, looking back at the history is bound to avoid the same tragedy repeating in the future. An illustrating example is the World War 2. Thousands of millions people suffered the unprecedented human catastrophe, which thoroughly changed the face of the world. For instance,the radiation of the atomic bombs thrown on the Japanese land even brings hazard to people's health right now. Therefore, through this painful lesson, people place a high value on the importance of peace and cherish the cooperation among countries now. As a result reviewing the past can prevent the mistakes from repeating in the future.

What is more, understanding the past is beneficial for us to reach the bank of new findings. There is no denying that all the wisdom and experiences are concealed in the flow of the history, those knowledges could indeed give people some insights to solve problems. Let me raise a tangible example to break down this abstract statement. Albert Einstein proposed the theory of relativity on the foundation of Mathematics and Maxwell's equation. Because of those elite's theories in the past, Einstein could make the great contribution nowadays. And the field of science is progressed accordingly. Thus understanding the past can trigger the emergence new discoveries.

Admittedly, we could easily become disoriented in the huge sea of information when we look back at the history. In addition, some useful experiences at that time may not functional at present and in the future. Reviewing the past, however, is just a process that discarding the old-fashioned things and preserving the rests. If we split carefully, the advantages will far more outweigh the disadvantages.

To sum up, based on what have already been mentioned above, I am quite favorable in terms of understanding the past. Although some shortcomings might be taken into consideration, we should not ignore the colossal fruits that reviewing the past offers.

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-8-27 21:33
TPO21

The reading passage takes issue with the professor on whether genetic modified trees are beneficial or not. The article states that since the genes have been changed, the modified trees will bring significant advantages. However, the professor remains unconvinced of its merits, retorting that there are still some serious problems concealed.

First of all, the essay reckons that genetic modified trees are more likely to survive. A counter-argument is soon being raised by the lecturer. Since the genes of genetic modified trees are less diverse, if one tree expose to threatens, like climate changes or pests, all of them will die out. Therefore, it is quite compelling to say the resistance to one virus do not constitute a valid argument.

Moreover, genetic modified trees will promote the economic growth, as argued by the reading passage. On the contrary, the lecturer suspects this statement. Retorting by saying that although genetic modified trees yield greater, their costs increase accordingly. You have not only spend more money on the seeds but also pay to the company every time you plant.

Last but not least, the article suggests that genetic modified trees can prevent overexploitation of wild trees. Another evidence is raised by the professor to oppose this point. Because genetic modified trees also need sunshine, water and nutrients, planting them actually raises a fierce competition and threatens the native trees. Such influence clearly contradicts what is enjoyed by genetic modified trees.

To sum up, based on what has been described above, the professor precisely identifies the weakness for the opinion that genetic modified trees have more advantages than natural trees on the basis of the counter points mentioned before.

作者: 倾海比目鱼 时间: 2013-8-28 19:22
作文不敢谈修改，因为比我写得好很多。只能学习

作者: corneliaflower 时间: 2013-8-28 21:35

倾海比目鱼发表于 2013-8-28 19:22
作文不敢谈修改，因为比我写得好很多。只能学习

那个是要加of哦~~ 我漏了。
我一般是第一段和最后一段会背一些比较好的模板，中间就不会啦。不过好句子背多了真的就可以信手拈来了呢，我其实一战作文也不是很好的，在努力提高中！

作者: laneesherry 时间: 2013-8-29 02:27
TPO21

实在是不知道该怎么改了。。。

本文应该有的点已经全部写出来，语言表述也富于多样，已经是一篇非常好的作文了，请继续加油~

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