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作者: 夜落莺知。 时间: 2012-11-13 13:08
标题: argue 113 求批改

113. The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.

"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar(研究会) in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

In this recommendation, the personal director considers that to improve the productive of Acme Publishing Company, the company should ask all the employees to take part in the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. However, this method is less convincing.A number of questions related to the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course and the Acme Publishing Company are still not clear. We should make the answers of those questions clear before we make a judgment to this method.

We should question if the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course could bring everyone who takes the course a wonderful effort as the personal director claimed. Though the director gives a fantastic example about a person who takes the course could read a 500-page report in two hours, we should ask if every one, after one taken the course, could do the same thing. Perhaps the person in the example has already had a talent in reading and he or she is able to read faster than other people even without taking the course. The example about the graduate who rises from an assistant to the vice president is less persuasive, since the author never gives any direct relation between the reading ability of a person and the ability to get a higher position in the company. There could be other reasons than the course that result into the rising of position, such as success in the negotiation with several important clients. Moreover, the author still never gives any explain about whether every one take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course could get a promotion.

We are going to ask if require the employees to take part in Easy Read Speed-Reading Course is going to enhance the productive of the Acme Publishing Company.The author just thinks about the cost of the courses but never put other things that a company could lose into his or her consideration.If now it is a busy season of Acme Publishing Company, the company really needs its employee to work in the company. It is easy to imagine that the company is going to lose business if it asks all the employees to take part in the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course and has no one to work in the company. The course takes three week, which is not a short time. The company has to pay salary for the workers in this time and get no work done. If we rethink about these questions, it seems that asking employees to take part in Easy Read Speed-Reading Course may not be a smart idea.

What is more, even though the course is indeed helpful, should the company ask all the employees to take part in Easy Read Speed-Reading Course?Actually, the company has different kind of employees, and not all of them have a work related to reading ability.For example, it is no use to ask the cleaner of the company to take Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. Moreover, some manager may have to take care of the company almost everyday. These people are so busy that they have no time to take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course. And if they take the course, it is hard for the company to find a suitable person to do their work. For these reasons, asking all the employees to take part in Easy Read Speed-Reading Course seems unnecessary and sometimes impossible.

To sum up, though the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course seems to be a nice course, we should ask whether to ask all the employees to take part in it is a good idea. Special conditions about both the course and the company should be taken into our consideration.

这篇比较好写因为可攻击点多~于是字数多错误也少
的argue全篇就一个明显的点。。就不好写了

作者: 普渡哥 时间: 2012-11-14 10:46
We are going to ask if require the employees to take part in Easy Read Speed-Reading Course is going to enhance the productive of the Acme Publishing Company.

分析一下这个句子的结构。

作者: 竹林中人 时间: 2012-11-15 16:03
嗯，建议ＬＺ按一定的顺序安排下中间段落，比如先说这个ｃｏｕｒｓｅ是否必然是题目中提高阅读速度或者说是否必然职位升迁的原因，再就是这个读得快是否必然能提高ｐｒｏｄｕｃｔｉｖｉｔｙ，再就是你的第三点，甚至还可以第四点

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