标题: argument 8宿舍问题 狠拍之 [打印本页] 作者: byhdhr123 时间: 2012-11-4 22:14 标题: argument 8宿舍问题 狠拍之 In the argument,the arguer recommends that Buckinghan College should bulid more new dormitories to serve the housing need of the students.The argument is based on a increasing enrollment,the rising rent price of an apartment in the town and the goal to attract more brilliant students.The argument may seens persuative at first glance,however,because it lacks a lot of specific evidence,the solidity of the argument is weakened.Unless the author can provide more information about the details,the contenion is poorly supported. First, the author metioned a growing enrollment trends and it will double over the next 50 years,thus,the trends will making existing dormitories inadequate.However,it may be not the case for some specific details is omitted.For example,from the argument,we don't know the number of enrollment before it starts to grow quickly.If the entrollment at that time is very low,it can not inferred form the argument that today's growing and the trends can affect the situation severely.Moreover,the author does not provides the number of the extant dormitories as well.if the dormitories which now exist are not heavily ocuppied,even if the enrollment grows rapidly,then the extant houses can be adequate for the unocuppied houses can be used to mitigate the pressure of the increasing trends of enrollment. Then,the arguer metioned that the rising rent price of an apartment in the town and it will make stdents dfficult to rent a apartment.Still,it is not well supported for lack of details as well.Truly,the price of renting an apartment is rising,but it does not means that the price is high and the students can afford it.May be the average price of renting in that town is much lower than the average nationwide.Though it is rising,it may still be lower when compared with other areas,then,The student won't be hard to rent a house and will be glad that the rent price is low.So,if the author wants to strengthen his contention,He must provide more about the rent price and had better show a comparison with other area to convince that there's truly a difficulty in renting an apartment. In additon,the author also says that buliding more dormitories will attract more brilliant student to entroll at Buckinghan.Still,specific evidence is needed to evaluate its solidity.For it is known to all that to attract more smart students,there are many factors other than dormitories that may have more effect on the enrollment.A smart student may not likely to choose a college only because of the dormitory.Mostly,He may be more focused on the college's reputation,its location and its academic performance.Only by buliding more dormitories may have some effect,but it is not a fatal one.So,even though the new dormitories is great or even splendid,it will not attract inteligent stendent if the college has disadvantages in other facets.So more imformation about the relationship between entrollment of smart student and the dormitory must be added to support the contention. To sum up,The seemingly logical argument is not as solid as it stands. several specific evidences is omitted or ignored by the anthor.So to strengthen the argument and achieve the goal of the argument,the arguer must rely on more information to make the argument convincing.作者: byhdhr123 时间: 2012-11-4 22:15
一天写三篇，累死了作者: 竹林中人 时间: 2012-11-9 09:33 In the argument, the arguerrecommends that Buckinghan College should build more new dormitories to serve the housing need of thestudents. The argument is based on a increasing enrollment, the rising rentprice of an apartment in the town and the goal to attract more brilliant students. Theargument may seempersuasive at first glance; however, because it lacks a lot of specific evidence, thesolidity of the argument is weakened. Unless the author can provide more information about thedetails, the contention is poorly supported. First, the author mentioned a growing enrollmenttrends and it will double over the next 50 years,thus, the trends will making existing dormitories inadequate. However, it maybe not the case for somespecific details is omitted. For example, from the argument, we don't know the number of enrollment before itstarts to grow quickly. If the enrollment at that time is very low,it can not be inferred form the argument that today's growing and the trends canaffect the situationseverely. Moreover, the author does not provide the number of the extantdormitories as well. ifthe dormitories which now exist are not heavily occupied, even if the enrollment growsrapidly, then the extant houses can be adequate for the unoccupied houses can be usedto mitigate the pressureof the increasing trends of enrollment. Then, the arguer mentioned that the rising rentprice of an apartment in the town and it will makestudentsdifficult to rent a apartment.Still, it is not well supported for lack of details as well. Truly, the price ofrenting an apartment is rising, but it does not means that the price is high and the students canafford it. May be the average price of renting in that town is much lower than the averagenationwide. Though it is rising, it may still be lower when compared with other areas, then; the studentwon't be hard to rent a house and will be glad that the rent price is low. So, if the author wantsto strengthen his contention, He must provide more about the rent price and had better show acomparison with other area to convince that there's truly a difficulty in renting anapartment.
In addition, the author also says that building more dormitories will attract more brilliant student to enroll at Buckinghan. Still, specific evidence is needed toevaluate its solidity. For itis known to all that to attract more smart students, there are many factorsother than dormitoriesthat may have more effect on the enrollment. A smart student may not likely to choose a college only becauseof the dormitory. Mostly, He may be more focused on the college's reputation, its location andits academic performance. Only by building more dormitories may have someeffect, but it is not a fatal one. So, even though the new dormitories are great or even splendid, it will not attract intelligentstudent if the college hasdisadvantages in other facets.So more information about the relationship between enrollment of smart students and the dormitory must be added tosupport the contention.
To sum up, the seeminglylogical argument is not as solid as it stands. Several specific evidences is omitted or ignored by the author. So to strengthenthe argument and achieve the goalof the argument, the arguer must rely on more information to make the argumentconvincing.作者: 竹林中人 时间: 2012-11-9 09:34
1.主要的单词和语法错误已经标出 2.这篇argu写的比较具体。继续加油