标题: “我把托福踩脚下的作文贴10.30开始 [打印本页] 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-10-31 00:04 标题: “我把托福踩脚下的作文贴10.30开始 先写点感受： 拜读了依晨的写作贴，她对写作认真的态度给我留下了深刻印象。 希望我自己也能认真踏实的完成每一篇作文贴，在写作上取得进步。 2012年10月30日开贴 不积跬步，无以至千里；不积小流，无以成江海 从每一天的坚持开始。作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-10-31 02:03
10.30 Contributes on an enjoyable vacation, please select one of three selection. Good food, Good location and with good friends to travel.
A well planned vacation should make you feel refreshed and inspire a positive outlook, and this is tremendously beneficial to your health. From my experience, I prefer to find a good place to stay because I believe that good location can contribute much to my agreeable vacation.
To begin with, most people tend to skimpy on their vacation accommodations for they consider that they will spend most of their time elsewhere. If you take a chance and end up someplace that's not clean, it can certainly distract from the enjoyment of your trip no matter how little time you spend there. Moreover, if you don't feel comfortable, your would have a trouble night sleeping. The most important point is that you may be tired and cannot enjoy your vacation any more. A good place to stay is clean and comfortable. It is unlikely to disturb you, at least not as a result of your boots stick with dog shit or a snake slides into your room.
Furthermore, a good resort would be a good chance to have a moment alone that is what I really need. I am facing dozens of people every day during my work so I require a spot to stay only with my own during my vacation. If I am travelling with a friend, on the contrary, garrulous partner would disturb me a lot even though I can save travelling cost by sharing the same hotel room and car. These benefits to me don’t far surpass to my freedom.
Additionally, I prefer to regard some significant landscape as my resort vacation. Beautiful and colorful scenery usually attracts me into natural masterpiece which covers with peace, pretty and tolerance that makes me forget temporarily stressful activities.
In summary, a good place as the most important factor contributes to my wonderful travelling A clean and comfortable accommodation provide me a good sleeping without distracting from my enjoyment; when I am staying at a good scenery is helpful to forget my working stress, as well as take a chance to have myself alone. Absolutely, the good location usually also provide flavorful food.作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-10-31 04:49
俺第一篇综合，看起来有点弱啊 The reading passage claim that this field of archaeology suffered a serious trouble in Britain in 20th Century, but the lecture refutes the main point by stating that a new guidance which issued in 1990s has changed this awful situation from three aspects and was really helpful to this field’s development.
First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that most of valuable artifacts destroyed due to construction projects. He argues that construction site in new rules has to be examined by archaeologists to assure out of any value or interest. Even if it is versified valuable, further preserve plan will run by local government, builders and archaeologist working together. Additionally, excavation and documents will start before construction.
Second, while the passage mentions that a lot of archaeologists faced a gradual decreased government funding, the professor raises a contradictory idea that the guidance ruled construction companies pay archaeologist all costs including planning cost, as well as initial examination. He also argues that archaeologist's could do wider research than before with companies sponsor.
Third, the passage supports that the career plight a lot of archaeologist was facing , but the lecture rebates the idea and says that new rule provided a lot of paid work for archaeologists what didn't exist before. Those works included whole stages of process, from examining to making plan, from doing research, lab work to writing a report. What's more, ascending working opportunity contribute to the total number of archaeologist in the highest than before.
In sum, the lecture is contrary to the ideas in the reading from three aspects.作者: lmylacoste 时间: 2012-10-31 16:04
·A well planned vacation should make you feel refreshed and inspire a positive outlook(是积极地观点吗？不是很明白诶，如果是想说心态，outlook好像不能够表达，求与楼主讨论！！), and this is tremendously beneficial to your health. From my experience, I prefer to find a good place to stay because I believe that good location（可以加a，或者s） can contribute much to my agreeable （令人愉快的，好词！）vacation.
To begin with, most people tend to skimpy（两点问题哦，1，skimpy不足的，吝啬的，是adj缺be动词；2，skimpy好像不太准确，难道你指的真的是钱？我不确定诶，用be indifference如何？楼主自个儿斟酌斟酌）on their vacation accommodations for（理解楼主的paraphrase，外国人好像喜欢because，在这点上，本人也被别人指出过） they consider that they will spend most of their time elsewhere（elsewhere是指在别处，但是这里应该说是不确定，或者是在外面，用outside或者between destinations/on the way 在路上）. If you take a chance（冒险，好词！） and end up（结束，死亡，好像过了点，用lodge如何，临时寄宿哦）someplace that's not clean, it can certainly distract(注意是vt哦，加宾语) from the enjoyment of your trip no matter how little time you spend there. Moreover, if you don't feel comfortable, youràyou would have a trouble night sleeping. The most important point is that you may be tired and cannot enjoy your vacation any more. A good place to stay is clean and comfortable. It is unlikely to disturb you, at least not as a result of（表原因，而这里是表结果吧，因果关系反了）your boots stick with dog shit or a snake slides into your room.
Furthermore, a good resort（paraphrase好） would be a good chance to have a moment alone that is what I really need. I am facing dozens of people every day during my work so I require a spot（paraphrase好）to stay only with my own during my vacation. If I am travelling with a friend, on the contrary, garrulous partner would disturb me a lot even though I can save travelling cost by sharing the same hotel room and car. These benefits to me don’t far surpass to（vt，不要加to的） my freedom.
Additionally, I prefer to regard some significant（下文讲的是自然美景，意义重大不合适哦，用magnificent比较好） landscape as my resort vacation. Beautiful and colorful scenery usually attracts me into natural masterpiece which covers with peace, pretty（作名词意为没人，用beauty比较好，因为prettiness是指可爱的） and tolerance that makes me forget temporarily stressful activities.
In summary, a good place as the most important factor contributes to my wonderful travelling A clean and comfortable accommodation provide（加s） me a good sleeping without distracting （也可以是being distracted）from my enjoyment; when （只有变成that这句话才可能通吧，求讨论！）I am staying at a good scenery is helpful to forget my working stress, as well as take（是和forget并列的吗？如果不是要注意相应的变化） a chance to have myself alone. Absolutely, the good location usually also provide flavorful food.（这句活略显突兀啊）
作者: lmylacoste 时间: 2012-10-31 16:21 The reading passage claim（又漏s了啊） that this（感觉the比较好，可讨论） field of archaeology suffered a serious trouble in Britain in 20th Century, but the lecture refutes the main point by stating that a new guidance which issued in 1990s has changed this awful situation from three aspects and was really helpful to this field’s development.
First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that most of valuable artifacts destroyed due to construction projects. He（没记错好像是个女的。。） argues that construction site in new rules has to be examined by archaeologists to assure（vt 加宾语）out of（好像是由于，和缺乏的意思，求讨论!） any value or interest. Even if(这个逻辑词好像不妥，if比较好) it is versified（versify是作诗的意思。。。verify）valuable, further preserve plan will run（被动） by local government, builders and archaeologist working together. Additionally, excavation and documents（document名词是没有录档的意思的哈，可用-ing） will start before construction.
Second, while the passage mentions that a lot of archaeologists faced a gradual decreased government funding, the professor raises a contradictory idea that the guidance ruled（虚拟语气，好！） construction companies pay archaeologist all costs including planning cost, as well as initial examination. He also argues that archaeologist's could do wider research than before with companies sponsor（指赞助人，sponsorship）. Third, the passage supports that the career plight（好词！） a lot of archaeologist was facing （为什么要宾语前置呢？）, but the lecture rebates（减少，有反驳或削弱的意思吗？求讨论！） the idea and says that new rule provided a lot of paid work for archaeologists what didn't exist before. Those works included whole stages of process, from examining to making plan, from doing research, lab work to writing a report（怎么会有两个from，平行会更好，也可在第二个from前加；）. What's more, ascending working opportunity contribute（加s） to the total number of archaeologist in（感觉to更好，求讨论！） the highest than before.
In sum, the lecture is contrary to the ideas in the reading from three aspects.
总结
内容完整，用了许多不常见的词
个别词可讨论，本人也拿捏不准
可适当增加字数 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-10-31 21:04
自己小结一下：A well planned vacation should make you feel refreshed and inspire a positive outlook and this is tremendously beneficial to your health. From my experience, I prefer to find a good place to stay because I believe that a good location can contribute much to my agreeable vacation. To begin with, most people tend to skimpy on their vacation accommodations for they consider that they will spend most of their time elsewhere. If you take a chance and end up someplace that's not clean, it can certainly distract you from the enjoyment of your trip no matter how little time you spend there. Moreover, if you don't feel comfortable, youràyou would have a trouble night sleeping. The most important point is that you may be tired and cannot enjoy your vacation any more. A good place to stay is clean and comfortable. It is unlikely to disturb you, at least not as a result of lodging, your boots stick with dog shit or a snake slides into your room. Furthermore, a good resort would be a good chance to have a moment alone that is what I really need. I am facing dozens of people every day during my work so I require a spot to stay only with my own during my vacation. If I am travelling with a friend, on the contrary, garrulous partner would disturb me a lot even though I can save travelling cost by sharing the same hotel room and car. These benefits to me don’t far surpass my freedom. Additionally, I prefer to regard some magnificent landscape as my resort vacation. Beautiful and colorful scenery usually attracts me into natural masterpiece which covers with peace, beacuty and tolerance that makes me forget temporarily stressful activities. In summary, a good place as the most important factor contributes to my wonderful travelling. A clean and comfortable accommodation provides me a good sleeping without being distracted from my enjoyment; I am staying at a good scenery that is helpful to forget my working stress, as well as taking a chance to have myself alone.最后一句的确突兀删掉
谢谢lmylacoste帮我指出问题 求讨论： a positive outlook ： 积极乐观的态度或者人生观 skimpy on：吝啬于，不愿意花钱在 end up:不表示死亡， finally be or do something;
The reading passage claimsthat the (用the 因为指代的是大家都知道的)field of archaeology suffered a serious trouble in Britain in 20th Century, but the lecture refutes the main point by stating that a new guidance which issued in 1990s has changed this awful situation from three aspects and was really helpful to this field’s development.
First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that most of valuable artifacts destroyed due to construction projects. She argues that construction site in new rules has to be examined by archaeologists to ensure the sites against any ignoring .If it is (versify是作诗的意思)verifyvaluable, further preserve plan will run by local government, builders and archaeologist working together. Additionally, excavation and documenting will start before construction.
Second, while the passage mentions that a lot of archaeologists faced a gradual decreased government funding, the professor raises a contradictory idea that the guidanceruled construction companies pay archaeologist all costs including planning cost, as well as initial examination. He also argues that archaeologist's could do wider research than before with companies sponsor（指赞助人，sponsorship）.
Third, the passage supports that the a lot of archaeologist was facing career plight , but the lecture（ rebates 减少）rebuts the idea and says that new rule provided a lot of paid work for archaeologists what didn't exist before. Those works included whole stages of process, from examining to making plan, from doing research, lab work to writing a report（怎么会有两个from，平行会更好，也可在第二个from前加；）. What's more, ascending working opportunity contributes to the total number of archaeologist in（感觉to更好，求讨论！） the highest than before. In sum, the lecture is contrary to the ideas in the reading from three aspects. 小结 第三人称单数谓语动词。 最后用 in 还是to ，我也不确定 sponsor 也有动词赞助的意思， 这里你指出的sponsorship更适用 作者: lmylacoste 时间: 2012-10-31 21:46 谢谢lmylacoste帮我指出问题 求讨论： a positive outlook ： 积极乐观的态度或者人生观 skimpy on：吝啬于，不愿意花钱在 end up:不表示死亡， finally be or do something;
1a: a place offering a view b: a view from a particular place
b: a view from a particular place 2:point of view<a positive outlook on life>
3: the act of looking out
4: the prospect for the future <the outlook for steel demand in the United States — Wall Street Journal>
1.我不知道outlook有心态的意思，可以给一下出处吗，如果有，就是好词了 2.skimpy on是花钱的意思，我明白了，我以为是不关心呢 3.end up 有这层意思，好词！
附，我也有点问题，一起讨论下哈 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-1 01:38 10.31 Young people nowadays have no influence on decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole Modern society focuses on youth education, growth and mental health because the public has belief on that the destiny of society will be determined more by the youth of today. The ideas and behaviors based on young generation obviously affect present society a lot regardless of on decision or making regulations that has longer and more permanent impact to future.
To start with, It is a notable phenomenon that the impact of young to society has an upward rapidly tendency today. As a result of effect, many social critical events have shifted concerning about young's overwhelming opinions. For instance, considerable new ideas and opinions that young often discuss on the platform of Internet communication become the predominant power and streamline ideas. As we know, the president of USA, Obama was not content to stay out of young electors, instead of; he did some pop rally to win supporting from young voters.
Furthermore, considering the strong power of youngsters’ ideas, prudent decision-makers usually tend to listen from youngsters and pay their more attention to younger before important decisions they generate. They who have played important roles in building future society but are the offspring in families. Decision-makers are the responsibilities and stress to consider how advantage will bring to their next generation. For example, Chinese government updated their enrolling system of universities for considering about many youngsters were out of registration list. Universities in China has extended their enroll figure from 1.8 million people in 2000 to 6.5million people today. Thus, youngster ideas have well contributed to wise decision made by government.
Besides, it is certified by a lot of evidence that young generation are competent to impact and change society because they hold creative ideas, open minds and energy bodies which of those are helpful to their success. One example is that Mark Zuckerburg as the chairman and chief executive of Facebook company was nominated number one on 2010 list of top 100 most influential people of the information Age on Vanity Fair magazine. What you can image that the Facebook as one new popular communication platform has roughly 800 million active users in worldwide. When decision-makers enjoy their chatting on Facebook, isn’t it necessary that they give more consideration to young impact to society.
In sum, modern youth has significant influential to modern society, also the impact will continue in the future. Decision-makers absolutely make their wise decisions by around youth group beacuse they realize that youth as a newborn strong power enable to dominant social development. 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-1 08:46 http://ezinearticles.com/?What-It-Means-To-Have-A-Positive-Outlook-On-Life&id=744338 有一篇关于positive outlook的文章。作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-1 12:03
10.31写得有点匆忙，第2点的理由我听得不是很清楚
The reading passage claims that the total of birds will certainly decrease in the furture in America due to human population, agriculture extending and pesticide use, but the lecture believes that lecture is unconventional ideas by stating that the whole number of birds will not change a lot.
First, the professor doubts the point in the passage that birds' habitats would be limited in smaller and smaller size as a result of swell of human population.She argues that even though some type of birds were limited but other kinds of bird will adapt to living with human. For instance, more and more pegon will on the streets. Thus, the birds wil not decreased in total quantities. The points is contrary to reading materials.
Second, while the passage mentions that expanded agriculture will result in destruction of birds, the professor raises a contradictory idea that future agriculture will not need to hurt or destroy wild area because the fact is less and less land are being used agriculture every year in USA. He also argues that in the future, new crops for foods can support human demanding, it is not nessary to use more land. So, the opinion the professor contradicts the idea in reading
Third, the passage says that chemical pesticides is an important reason to contribute to birds' decline, but the lecture rebuts the idea from two aspects. First of all, traditional pesticide will be replaced and new pesticide will provide less toxicity. What's more, crops can be designed to resist-pest. Therefore, chemical insectcide will not hurt birds at all in future. The lecture is oppsite of the idea in the reading.
作者: AnthonySummer 时间: 2012-11-1 22:02 10.31 Young people nowadays have no influence on decisions that determine the future of the society as a wholeModern society focuses on youth education, growth and mental health because the public hasbelief on that the destiny of society will be determined more by the youth of today. The ideas and behaviors based on young generation obviously affect present society a lot （语病，一句长句，但是我没看懂表达的对象是谁） regardless of on decision or making regulations that haslonger and more permanent impact to future. （还是感觉摸不着头脑）
To start with, It is a notable phenomenon that the impact of young to （宾语是谁？没看懂）society has an upward rapidly tendency today. As a result of effect, many social critical events have shifted concerning about young's overwhelming opinions. For instance, considerable new ideas and opinions that young often discuss the platform of Internet communication become the predominant power and streamline ideas. As we know, the president of USA, Obama was not content to stay out of young electors, instead of; he did some pop rally to win supporting from young voters. （感觉写的比较晦涩）
Furthermore, considering the strong power of youngsters' ideas, prudent decision-makers usually tend to listen from youngsters and pay their more attention to younger before important decisions they generate. They who have played important roles in building future society but are the offspring in families. Decision-makers are the responsibilities and stress to consider how advantage will bring to their next generation. For example, Chinese government updated their enrolling system of universities for considering about many youngsters were out of registration list. Universities in China has extended their enroll figure from 1.8 million people in 2000 to 6.5million people today. Thus, youngster ideas have well contributed to wise decision made by government.
Besides, it is certified by a lot of evidence that the young generation is competent to impact and change society because they hold creative ideas, open minds and （谓语是什么？）energy bodies which (指代不清，没看懂） of those are helpful to their success. One example is that Mark Zuckerburg as the chairman and chief executive of Facebook company was nominated number one on 2010 list of top 100 most influential people of the information Age on Vanity Fair magazine. What you can image that the Facebook as one new popular communication platform has roughly 800 million active users in worldwide. When decision-makers enjoy their chatting on Facebook, isn't it necessary that they give more consideration to young impact to society. （这段也是比较晦涩，感觉和主题不是很突出）
In sum, modern youth has significantly influential （adj错了，改用noun to modern society, also the impact will continue in the future. Decision-makers absolutely make their wise decisions by around youth group because they realize that youth as a newborn strong power enable to dominant social development. 作者: lmylacoste 时间: 2012-11-2 15:30 Young people nowadays have no influence on decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole
Modern society focuses on youth(paraphrase好!) education, growth and mental health because the public has belief on that the destiny of society will be determined more by the youth of today. The ideas and behaviors based on young generation(paraphrase好!) obviously affect present society a lot regardless of（何意啊，没有看懂诶） on decision or making regulations that has longer and more permanent impact to future.
To start with, It is a notable phenomenon that the impact of young to society has an upward rapidly tendency today. As a result of effect, many social critical events have shifted（好词！） concerning about （好词！）young's overwhelming opinions. For instance, considerable new ideas and opinions that young often discuss on the platform of Internet communication become the predominant power and（我感觉是of，因为不是并列关系，是原因结果）streamline ideas. As we know, the president of USA, Obama was not content（为什么是不满意啊？）to stay out of young electors, instead of; he did some pop rally to win supporting from young voters. (有个句型O did not settle for the present(这里可以再改改的), when he can win supporting from young voters by some pop rally）
Furthermore, considering the strong power of youngsters’ ideas, prudent（小心，谨慎的）decision-makers usually tend to listen from youngsters and pay their more attention to （their 好像多余了，有点别扭）younger（paraphrase，好！） before important decisions they generate（明白意思，有点别扭，用propose，make比较好）. They who have played important roles in building future society but are the offspring in families. Decision-makers are （漏了under）the responsibilities and stress to consider how（可以，主要看表达什么意思，你想表达的是优势如何被带来吗？） advantage will (被动)bring to their next generation. For example, Chinese government updated their enrolling system of universities for considering about many youngsters （漏了who ）were out of registration list. Universities in China has extended their enroll(是动词额，有专有名词planned enrollment figure) figure from 1.8 million people in 2000 to 6.5million people today. Thus, youngster ideas have well contributed to wise decision made by government.
这段写的很不错，但是因为结论是youngster ideas have well contributed to wise decision.所以不妨加一句youngster ideasàplanned enrollment figure上升
Besides, it is certified by a lot of evidence that young generation are competent to impact and change society because they hold creative ideas, open minds and energyàenergetic bodies which of those(有点突兀，删去如何？) are helpful to their success. One example is that Mark Zuckerburg as the chairman and chief executive of Facebook company was nominated number one（就写NO.1吧，我看了愣了一下。。）on 2010 list of top 100 most influential people of the information Age on Vanity Fair magazine. What you can image that the Facebook as one new popular communication platform has roughly 800 million active users in worldwide.（原句有两个连词啊，用疑问句好了，Can you。。？）/When decision-makers enjoy their chatting on Facebook, isn’t it necessary that they （这里我认为加一个should比较好，我之前觉得这里有意思断层，但是看了几遍觉得最后一句是联系文章的句子，写的很好！但是加一个should表意见，能是这句句子的目的性更明确—表建议）give more consideration to young（不能表示年轻人的，用youth吧） impact to society.
In sum, modern youth has significant influential（应该是名词） to modern society, also（用句老练） the impact will continue in the future. Decision-makers absolutely make their wise decisions by around（我觉得副词至后比较好youth group around）youth group because（拼错啦）they realize that youth as a newborn strong（查了字典，没搞清楚哪个在前，可以用and） power enable to dominant（用v吧）social development.
总结
1.写的很好，关键是例子详细！
lthe impact of young to society has an upward rapidly tendency
lyoung generation are competent to impact and change
lprudent decision-makers usually tend to listen from youngsters
2.用词多样 young generation youth young people younger youngster
3.疑问，请问 on the platform of 能够准确表达在。。平台之上吗？
望回 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-3 09:21
11.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should buy things made in their own country; even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else.
People tend to purchase foreign products because they believe that this behavior is virtually significant, which shows their patriotic obsession. However, as far as I am considering, boycott is not the best way to promote local economy or halt other regions’ economical development. People should have their freedom to choose whatever they like.
To start with, this primary reason people usually don't purchase importation because they treat these products with strong emotion involved hostility, enmity or angry. For instance, people in South Korea have refused to shop any Japanese goods because they have embraced strong indignation with Japan's invasion 30 years ago. However, many people who don't have good incomes need less expensive good to feed their diary lives. These people usually live as grass roots of society and earn unstable salary, also live with their big and poor family. To them, buying foreign items means that they have to spend certainly more money by paying additional custom duties and transportation conveying than local alternatives. Thus, the price will be their most important consider when people do shopping.
Furthermore, high quality of products should be an important factor contribute to people's consumption custom. Nobody wants buy a poor item which probably break out within one month. If the item doesn’t work, people will spend much more time and cost on maintaining and replace it with some parts. For example, there are one 20 -buck earphone with high quality and a low quality one with the same price at front of you. Absolutely your decision must be the good quality. At least, a product with high quality can make your life easier.
Additionally, nowadays more and more people aware of globe economy instead of putting them only in their own feet. Some local companies will monopolize local market without any competition when all people in local region resist foreign goods, also local companies will increase goods’ price a lot at the end. On the other hand, when good qualified importation come out local market from other countries, people's enthusiasm on purchasing will encourage the development of local companies. That would be the mutual benefits between customer and local economy.
All in all, it is ridiculous that people who tend to shop local low- quality products with much expensive price. People buy anything mainly depended on how much bucks in their wallet. They obviously prefer to buy produces with good price and quality.作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-3 10:47
11.2综合
The reading passage claims three ways to protest Torreya against decrease, but the lecture refutes the idea by stating that all those methods don’t work for this kind of tree's survive.
First, the professor doubts that the idea in the passage that to reestablish Torreya's habitats with a specific microclimate is helpful to their quantities. He points that this way is unlike to success because present global warming contributes to temperature increase and less humidity in Florida where do not really benefit to Torrey's growth.
Second, while the passage agrees that to relocate Torreya with totally different places to help them adapt to new environment well, the professor raises a contradictory idea that relocation unfortunately is an unsuccessful idea. He takes an example that other species of plants and trees closely died out, even some of trees endangered when human moved black locust tree to north to help it growth. Thus, the viewpoint of professor is contrary with the passage.
Third, the passage argues that monitor Torreya in research center can ensure their number . But the lecture rebuts the point and claims that in order to avoid Torreya successfully resists disease in research area, a large number and general diverse are being required in center, but it is hardly to keep a large number of trees in center. So, research center don't have enough capacity to protect Torreya against disease.
In general, the professor presents his conflicting idea to the reading.作者: AnthonySummer 时间: 2012-11-3 21:56 11.2 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should buy things made in their own country; even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else.
People tend to purchase foreign products because they believe that this behavior is virtually significant, which shows their patriotic obsession. However, as far as I am considering, boycott is not the best way to promote local economy or halt other regions' economical economic development. People should have their freedom to choose whatever they like.
To start with, this primary reason people usually don't purchase importation because they treat these products with strong emotion involved hostility, enmity or angry. For instance, people in South Korea have refused to shop any Japanese goods because they have embraced strong indignation with Japan's invasion 30 years ago. However, many people who don't have good incomes need less expensive good to feed their diary lives. These people usually live as grass roots of society and earn unstable salary, also live with their big and poor family. To them, buying foreign items means that they have to spend certainly more money by paying additional custom duties and transportation conveying than local alternatives. Thus, the price will be their most important consider when people do shopping. (列子舉得不錯！）
Furthermore, high quality of products should be an important factor contributes to people's consumption custom (沒看懂）. Nobody wants buy a poor item which probably breaks out within one month. If the item doesn't work, people will spend much more time and cost on maintaining and replace it with some parts. For example, there are one 20 -buck earphone with high quality and a low quality one with the same price at the front of you. Absolutely your decision must be the good quality. At least, a product with high quality can make your life easier.
Additionally, nowadays more and more people aware of the globe economy instead of putting them only in their own feet. Some local companies will monopolize local market without any competition when all people in the local region resist foreign goods, also local companies will increase the goods' price a lot at the end. On the other hand, when good qualified importation comes out local market from other countries, people's enthusiasm for purchasing will encourage the development of local companies. That would be the mutual benefits between customers and the local economy.
All in all, it is ridiculous that people who tend to shop local low- quality products with much expensive price. People buy anything mainly depended on how much bucks in their wallet. They obviously prefer to buy produces with good price and quality.
The reading passage claims three ways to protest Torreya against decrease, but the lecture refutes the idea by stating that all those methods don't work for this kind of tree's survive.
First, the professor doubts that the idea in the passage that to reestablish Torreya's habitats with a specific microclimate is helpful to their quantities. He points that this way is unlike to success because present global warming contributes to temperature increase and less humidity in Florida where do not really benefit to Torrey's growth.
Second, while the passage agrees that to relocate Torreya with totally different places to help them adapt to a new environment well, the professor raises a contradictory idea that relocation unfortunately is an unsuccessful idea. He takes an example that other species of plants and trees closely died out, even some of trees endangered when human moved black locust tree to north to help it growth. Thus, the viewpoint of professor is contrary with the passage.（最後一句話感覺用在這不好)
Third, the passage argues that monitor Torreya in the research center can ensure their number . But the lecture rebuts the point and claims that (that +in order to的主語是什麽？that是賓語從句啊） in order to avoid Torreya successfully resists disease in research area, a large number and general diversity are being（一般式就可以了，去掉being） required in the center, but it is hardly to keep a large number of trees in the center. So, research center don't have enough capacity to protect Torreya against disease.
In general, the professor presents his conflicting idea to the reading. 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-5 06:54
11.4 Young people should try several different jobs before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term.
Nowadays, people regard work as an important part in their lives. There is a controversial issue whether or not people should go to different jobs to help them decide their final work. Many youth oppose the viewpoint by saying that trying various jobs contributes negative personal images to boss that is hardly to distribute you any work chance with more challenge. From my perspective, however, you will learn more about work and communication skill, and you can broaden your horizon as well, that can really helpful to your final decision to your best work. Just give a shot to different jobs.
To individual, attempting to work in different fields and locations enables people to position themselves better. As we know, most students tend to seek what are their interests by applying part-time jobs during their summer and winter break. Almost all colleges allow students do internship in their fourth-year to help them decide their orientation. Obvisouly, students usually successfully find their most interested jobs through their own experience. Take me as an example; children special education actually intrigued all of my potential enthusiamenthusiasm when I did an intern in children center, then I changed my major to Children education from higher education. I still enjoy this passion what my job brings out until today.
Furthermore, working experience with different background is beneficial to your growth, which is useful to you correct decision. For instance, when you never taste a green apple, how can you learn the green apple sweeter than the red one you have held for long time? To noviciate,various work experience opens a door to broaden your horizon and to learn new skills, such as some interdisciplinary skills which can contribute to you being an elite in your future work. Look around today’s society, more and more companies and corporation have faced to a shortfall of integrated talent.
Additionally, the benefit to company is that you can dedicate yourself entirely to your work once you are satisfy to your work. you can enjoy the passion, the challenge , the material rewards and the sense of belonging from work. As a result of it, you produce miracle to your company.
In conclusion, an ideal work is so important in people's lifespan because it can bring you around well-being and happiness. Rich work experience not only locates yourself better and help you do accurate decision for your future life, but also results in a mutual benefit to both of company and individual.作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-5 08:27
11.4integrated
The lecture discusses that "Let it burn" policy from its positive angle which refutes the main idea in the reading that three kinds of damage contribute to this policy’s opponent voice.
First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that trees and vegetation suffer totally destruction. He argues that this scorched land provides plants a chance to become more diversity. Moreover, some seeds of plant can germinate through exposure in a high level heat.
Furthermore, while the passage pronounces that both of animals population and habitats are suffering, the professor contradicts this by saying that the newborn plants and vegetation create a good habitat for small animals such as rabbits and hairs which attract some predator to reestablish new food chain. The food chain will become stronger after fire as before.
Finally, the passage asserts that fire results in less tourist population and less local economy, but the lecture rebuts the idea by analyzing the occasional combination factors to serious yellowtone fires in 1988.He claims that similar serious fire dont occur every year yet. He also argues that tourist still come back next year and every year. The fire dont really affect the local tourism.
In total, the professor discussesd the issue of "Let it burn"policy that the reading views in a contrary angle.作者: xeyyxzty 时间: 2012-11-5 13:03 Nowadays,people regard work as an important part in their lives. There is acontroversial issue whether or not people should go to (do) different jobs to helpthem decide their final work. Many youth oppose the viewpoint by saying thattrying various jobs contributes negative personal images to boss that is hardlyto distribute you any work chance with more challenge. From my perspective, however,you will learn more about work and communication skill, and you can broadenyour horizon as well, that can (are)really helpful toyour final decision to your best work（感觉发for you to make the final decision about work that suitsyou most能好一点哈，不过还是好奇怪的感觉~果然能力有限）. Just give a shot to different jobs.
To individual, attempting to work indifferent fields and locations enables people to position themselves (貌似与individual不是很符合) better. As we know, moststudents tend to seek what are their interests by applying part-time jobs during theirsummer and winter break. Almost all colleges allow students to do internshipin their fourth-year to help them decide their orientation. Obvisouly, studentsusually successfully find their most interested jobs through their ownexperience. Take me as an example; children special education actuallyintrigued all of my potential enthusiamenthusiasm when I did an intern inchildren center, then I changed my major to Children education from highereducation. I still enjoy this passion what my job brings out until today.
Furthermore, working experience with differentbackground is beneficial to your growth, which (这个指什么？没有看懂哈,是experience吧~那么就because it’s useful…应该更好吧，怎么感觉这个Which这么奇怪呢~如果说得不恰当就忽略我吧~~~能力有限) is useful to you (for you to ) correct decision. For instance, when you never taste agreen apple, how can you learn the green apple sweeter than the red one youhave held for long time? To noviciate,various work experience opens a door to broadenyour horizon and to learn new skills, such as some interdisciplinary skillswhich can contribute to you being an elite in your future work. Look aroundtoday’s society, more and more companies and corporation have faced（感觉一般现在时或进行时会更好一些~） to ashortfall of integrated talent.
Additionally, the benefit to company is thatyou can dedicate yourself entirely to your work once you are satisfy to(satisfied with) yourwork. you can enjoy the passion, the challenge , the material rewards and thesense of belonging from work. As a result of it, you produce miracle to yourcompany.
In conclusion, an ideal work is so importantin people's lifespan because it can bring you around well-being and happiness.Rich work experience not only locates yourself better and help you do accuratedecision for your future life, but also results in a mutual benefit to both ofcompany and individual.
思路很清晰哈~就是不清楚最后一个论点从公司的角度说可不可行~ 感觉应该可以~很新颖 主要是你的句子给我很奇怪的感觉(为什么总是感觉...我也不知道...原谅我吧) 都说长短句结合什么的,你多看看范文吧,换一下句式什么的应该能让作文看起来更棒~ 加油作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-8 02:55 11.7 College or university should offer students a better job preparation before they start working
In the current global financial crisis, the college graduates “employment difficult” issue has become a common focus of attention. Many universities are passionate about prepare various occupation preparation to students. However, it is still a lot of complaint from some students due to an unattended attitude of college. From my perspective, colleges should concern about helping graduates for their careers. As a result of that, students can find a better job through resources from colleges; also colleges can benefit a lot when they provide this service to students.
To begin with, college as a whole can gain information resources easier than students themselves. Usually, some offices or organizations on campus such as human resource program and career office are working for professional career information. Colleges also have ample connection resources among every corner of society . These two ways contribute to employing information more accessible to college from its alumini and peers. For instance, Harvard encourages students to attend positively various internships and assorted conferences. Harvard students can also learn a lot when many famous and celebrities do some speeches and interact with students on campus. In contrast, individual’s capacity to look for career information is limited.
Furthermore, students usually are busying during their final year on campus, especially nearby the deadline of graduates. Many students are hardy to extract extra time and energy on job hunting while they have to finish their final essays and work for the results of labs. If they make time to seek jobs, the amount of time they spend on their experiments and essays enforces to shrink. My friend, Amy, he really appreciated his alma mater, UIC ,to provide graudates career fairs, so he had a chance to meet professor Dolglas in one national lab and recommend himself. It is nothing than less resources student gain only even if some of they spend up to 5 hours every day hunting a job from newspaper and by Internet.
From a point view of long term, the more benefit students earn, the more rewards belonged college obtains. First, College tends to invest more human resource and money to help students a lot through organizing career fair, inviting famous presentation and so on, so college wins more respect among students. Second, alumni work done in their different career positions, the aurele of college becomes more brilliant.
In conclusion, once many colleges realize mutual advantages between studentsand colleges themselves, they will cast their more attention to feed career requirement of graduates. In that way, colleges win more respect and better reputation, and students are lso happy when they successfully applied favorable jobs by a favor of college
作者: 陈喵喵holdon 时间: 2012-11-8 11:14 In the current global financial crisis, the college graduates “employment difficult” issue has become a common focus of attention有点重复,直接common focus就可以了. Many universities are passionate about preparepreparing various occupation preparation to students词组为prepare sb. for sth. However, it is still a lot of complaint from some students due to an unattended attitude of college. From my perspective, colleges should concern about helping graduates for their careers. As a result of that有点多余,直接as a result就可以了, students can find a better job through resources from colleges; also colleges can benefit a lot when they provide this service to students.(A benefit B B受益于A)
To begin with, college as a whole can gain information resources easier than students themselves. Usually, some offices or organizations on campus such as human resource program and career office are working for professional career information. Colleges also have ample connection resources among every corner of society . These two ways contribute to employing information more accessible to college from its alumini and peers. For instance, Harvard encourages students to attend positively various internships and assorted conferences. Harvard students can also learn a lot when many famous and celebrities do some speeches and interact with students on campus. In contrast, individual’s capacity to look for career information is limited. 这个理由很好！
Furthermore, students usually are busying(busy) during their final year on campus, especially nearby(near) the deadline of graduates(deadline of graduates?这个表达很奇怪). Many students are hardy(hard) to extract extra time and energy on job hunting while they have to finish their final essays and work for the results of labs. If they make time to seek jobs, the amount of time they spend on their experiments and essays enforces to shrink直接will shrink就可以了. My friend, Amy, he(Amy是女子名吧?) really appreciated his alma mater, UIC ,to provide graudates career fairs, so he had a chance to meet professor Dolglas in one national lab and recommend himself. It is nothing than less resources(不好意思,这是个固定搭配吗?不太明白,感觉很奇怪) student gain only even if some of they spend up to 5 hours every day hunting a job from newspaper and by Internet.
From a point view of long term(from the long term point of view), the more benefit(benefits) students earn, the more rewards belonged college obtains. First, College tends to invest more human resource and money to help students a lot through organizing career fair, inviting famous presentation and so on, so college wins more respect among students. Second, alumni work done in their different career positions, the aurele of college becomes more brilliant.有点例子就更好了
In conclusion, once many colleges realize mutual advantages between studentsand colleges themselves, they will cast their more attention to feed career requirement of graduates. In that way, colleges win more respect and better reputation, and students are lso happy when they successfully applied favorable jobs by a favor of college.
理由很充分,一开始看了你的第一个point还觉得我自己写偏了.. 有些语句有点赘述,表达有点奇怪,可以用比较平实的语言清楚的表达意思,然后适当丰富句式和词汇. Good Luck!作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-8 12:56
谢谢喵喵指出我的问题。also colleges can benefit a lot when they provide this service to students.(A benefit B B受益于A) 是不是要改成college can be benefited a lot表示A也受益了。 deadline of graduation. 是我打错了
作者: 陈喵喵holdon 时间: 2012-11-8 13:37
谢谢喵喵指出我的问题。also colleges can benefit a lot when they provide this service to students.(A benefit B B受益于A) 是不是要改成college can be benefited a lot表示A也受益了。 deadline of graduation. 是我打错了
-- by 会员 我把托福踩脚下 (2012/11/8 12:56:37)
可用college can benefit from ... 主要是觉得gradution就是毕业 deadline of graduation有点奇怪也有点赘述..作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-9 01:55
11.8 综合
The lecture discusses the professor‘s skeptical about the main idea in reading passage that three different materials can be revealed by a fossil of T.rex leg bone .
First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that a flexible and soft substance represents actual T.rex's blood vessels. He argues that the soft material probably is residues of organic material after bacterial gathering, because long after animal died, bacterial usually colonized in the hollow where empty area of vessels.
Furthermore, while the passage declares that iron-spheres regards as red blood cells, the professor contradicts this by saying that the material is unlikely to blood cells, because other animal fossils also were founded in the same place, but some of they appeared that these primitive animals without red blood cells when they were alive. Thus, the spheres shouldn't pertain to T.rex.
Final, the passage asserts that a fibrous protein ---collagen was found in the fossils, but the lecture rebuts the idea and says that collagen cannot last over one thousand year. The material probably comes from human skin; maybe the one who was handing with the bone left the collagen verification.
我问一下综合作文需要写结尾的总结段吗？作者: 小滋滋 时间: 2012-11-9 14:59 11.8 The lecture discusses the professor‘s skeptical('s+n.doubt吧)about the main idea in reading passage that three different materials can be revealed by a fossil of T.rex leg bone .
First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that a flexible and soft substance represents actual T.rex's blood vessels. He argues that the soft materials probably is(are) residues of organic material after(due to吧，下面有个after了，感觉一句话用两个相同连词不太好) bacterial gathering, because long after animal died, bacterial usually colonized in the hollow where empty area of vessels.
Furthermore, while the passage declares that iron-spheres are regards as (这我觉着说得不太准确，应该是证明而不是当作吧？楼住再合计合计哈)red blood cells, the professor contradicts this by saying that the material is unlikely to blood cells, because other animal fossils also were founded in the same place, but some of they appeared that these primitive animals without had no red blood cells when they were alive. Thus, the spheres shouldn't pertain to T.rex.
Final, the passage asserts that a fibrous protein ---collagen was found in the fossils, but the lecture rebuts the idea and says that collagen cannot last over one thousand year. The material probably comes from human skin; maybe the one who was handing with the bone left the collagen verification.
最好还是加上结尾，简单点即可作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-14 01:15 Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view?
A controversial issue debates among people whether professors in colleges should focus more on educating students. Many people believe that professors of universities should cast all of their energy and time on education because students virtually rely on them more. Other people oppose the viewpoint by saying that professors shouldn't give up purchasing their professional recognition in their own scientific fields. From my perspective, what professors should pay more attention on that depends on different occasion.
In some occasion, it is not conflicted, even shows us mutual benefits when professors work in labs, as well as in classrooms. The advantages involved with three main aspects. One is that experience professors possess from labs will further promote education well because students can gain knowledge more impressively from the vivid elaboration of professor personal experience, other than from original notebook; the exact databases from labs can also be regarded as more convinced materials to student's discussion.Moreover, professors carry out their updated research results to class and discuss around them with students, which open a window to people and contribute more chances to people verify the accuracy and precision of new research result. For example, the idea that people usually believe about surfing Internet don't take any advantage to elder health has been broken up by recent lab result. The new report from Harford university lab claimed that surfing Internet promote elder's brain activities and effectively protect elder against Parkinson disease. Many professionals are skeptical about this report and want to give a shot to prove its reliability. In this way, it also propels entire science development. Additionally, some new and good ideas which come from some collaboration such as group discussion in classroom will spark creativities for research. Based on these three reasons, professor can work well done in both of classroom and lab.
However, it isn’t always compatible to professors working for separately aims. Some professors probably don’t have enough time and energy to cope teaching with researching well when other professors realized being incapable to afford such huge research projects. Some changes need to occur, not every professor enable to balance the relationship between educating and researching after all. At that situation, those professors who are excel at teaching and dealing with students better to serve students so universities can ensure education quality for students; while those professors who are competent to lab works and anticipated to achieve success too can be arranged to do lab researches.
In general, doing researches is not fairly contradicted to educate students for professors. On contrary, it brings mutual affects for educating and researching. Once professors feel arduous to cope with them, universities can adjust professors to do different job according to professors’ preference and specialty . 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-14 02:52
The lecture discusses about the reasons contribute to yellow cedar’s decrease have still unclear which refutes the main idea in reading passage that three hypotheses lead to declined population of yellow cedar.
First, the professor doubts the claiming in reading that cedar bark beetle leads to cedar’s decline by eating and attacking its woods. He argues that yellow cedar holds more resistance to insects than other species of trees. To be specific, the chemical materials cedars generated bring Bark beetle serious hurt, even dead. Therefore, the beetle cannot be regarded as a fundamental key to declined cedar.
Second, when the reading passage declares that brown bear is a murder to destroy cedar tree's habitat, the professor raises against this by saying that bear virtually do not effect the cedar. He cites one evidence that the populations of cedar still have reduced in island where don’t have any bears.
Additionally, the reading passage asserts that climate change as a resultof making cedar's roots freezing , but the professor rebuts this by saying that cedar locates in lower elevator where offers a relative warm temperature still has suffered dead or damage. The professor believes that if the hypotheses are convinced, this kind of trees in high elevator will suffer more hurt than in the lower elevator due to the higher elevator holding the lower temperture .Unfortunately, Neither the cedar located at low nor high elevator is suffering a lot.
In general, the professor pronounces the reasons of Cedar's shrink in a contrary angle with the reading passage.作者: bonnenuit 时间: 2012-11-14 12:25 Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view?
A controversial issue debates among people whether professors in colleges should focus more on educating students. Many people believe that professors of universities should cast all of their energy and time on education because students virtually rely on them more. Other people oppose the viewpoint by saying that professors shouldn't give up purchasing their professional recognition in their own scientific fields. From my perspective, what professors should pay more attention on that (多余）depends on different occasion.
In some occasion, it is not conflicted, even shows us mutual benefits（show mtual benefit这样搭配不太合理，就写benefit each other) when professors work in labs, as well as in classrooms. The advantages involved with three main aspects. One is that experience professors possess from labs will further promote education well(前面已经有further，这个well可以省略） because students can gain（个人觉得 获得用gain很少，换obtain） knowledge more impressively from the vivid elaboration of professor personal experience, other than from original notebook; the exact databases from labs can also be regarded as more convinced materials to（for） student's discussion.Moreover, professors carry out their updated research results to class and discuss around them （指代迷糊）with students, which（which不能指代前面一整句话） open a window to people and contribute more chances to （for)people to verify the accuracy and precision(重复） of new research result. For example, the idea that people usually believe about（换that） surfing Internet don't take any advantage to elder health has been broken up by recent lab result. The new report from Harford university lab claimed that surfing Internet promote elder's brain activities and effectively protect elder against Parkinson disease. Many professionals are skeptical about this report and want to give a shot to prove its（指代模糊） reliability. In this way, it also propels entire science development. Additionally, some new and good ideas which come from some collaboration such as group discussion in classroom will spark creativities for research. Based on these three reasons, professor can work well done in both of classroom and lab.
However, it isn’t always compatible to（for) professors to work working for separately aims. Some professors probably don’t have enough time and energy to cope teaching with researching well when other professors realized（时态不一致了） being incapable to afford such huge research projects. Some changes need to occur, not every professor enable to balance the relationship between educating and researching after all.（我觉得这样改更简洁明了some change is necessary as not every......) At that situation, those professors who are excel at teaching and dealing with students can better to（去掉，否者前面缺谓语） serve students so that universities can ensure(用guarantee好) educational quality for students; while those professors who are competent to lab works and anticipated to achieve success too(去掉） can be arranged to do lab researches.
In general, doing researches is not fairly contradicted to educate students for professors. On the contrary, it brings mutual affects for educating and researching. Once professors feel arduous to cope with them(指代不明）, universities can adjust professors to do different job according to professors’ preference and specialty . 作者: AnthonySummer 时间: 2012-11-14 21:55 The lecture discusses about the reasons contribute to yellow cedar's decrease have still unclear which refutes the main idea in reading passage that three hypotheses lead to declined population of yellow cedar.
First, the professor doubts the claiming in （感覺這裡啰嗦，讀了不通暢，讓人感覺是模板）reading that cedar bark beetle leads to cedar's decline by eating and attacking its woods. He argues that yellow cedar （你聽錯了：, the professor points out that the health cedar trees produce powerful chemistry on its surface that will kill insects。）holds more resistance to insects than other species of trees. To be specific, the chemical materials cedars generated bring Bark beetle serious hurt, even dead. Therefore, the beetle cannot be regarded as a fundamental key to decline cedar.
Second, when the reading passage declares that brown bear is a murder（不是殺人~~~） to destroy Cedar tree's habitat （不能說是摧毀habitat，又不是自然災害~~~~~~~）, the professor raises against this by saying that bear virtually do not effect the cedar. He cites one evidence that the populations of cedar still have reduced in an island where don't have any bears. （細節沒把握到~在多聽一遍吧！）
Additionally, the reading passage asserts that climate change as a result of making cedar's roots freezing,（沒那麼嚴重吧：that frost will damage the root system of trees）but the professor rebuts this by saying that Cedar locates in lower elevator where offers a relatively warm temperature still has suffered dead or damage. The professor believes that if the hypotheses are convinced. This kind of tree in high elevator will suffer more hurt than in the lower elevator due to the higher elevator holding the lower temperature.Unfortunately, neither the Cedar located at low nor high elevator is suffering a lot.
In general, the professor pronounces the reasons of Cedar's shrink in a contrary angle with the reading passage.作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-19 12:02 11.18 Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past?
With the rapid development of civilization, People have more chance to receive education nowadays by different ways, such as online classes or campus education. Compare with people in past decades, it is inconvenient that people learn primarily through traditional ways such as church classes or serving as an apprentice with silversmith or shoe-maker. From my perspective, today's people feel freer to learn than them in the past because present society enable to assist them with various teaching ways and a lot of social media platforms; the increased people’s educational consciousness also gives rise to this result.
First of all, traditional campus education as an important role in people's lifespan today become more diverse of its teaching methods, that contributes to culture people well. Digit techniques truly help campus education a lot by providing a large amount of accessories methods. For instance, college students use telescopes at astronomy class to observe and orient star, or students in high school utilize microscopes to detach biofilm between cells at biology class, even more vivid geographic models, such as rack fault models, serve to our geology class. Absolutely, those teaching equipments and methods which seem are commonplace today but rare in past like computers, projectors, and microphones and audio booth extend their function to impress students both from visual and audio views. Therefore, students tend to understand all related knowledge easier.
Furthermore, because an increasing concept involved that being educated leads to a prospective future, people tend to plan their children to learn different skills and wide knowledge, even they are not contented to send children to some college which are as far as flying over several hours. By contrast, people in the past concerned more how their kids can feed their basic live; so, parents send their children to learn with silver smiths or from sailors. They cast the hope to their children being future silversmith or tailor. However, today’s people are willing to learn knowledge involved with wider and deeper to satisfy their stomach, other than halting by one or two skills only to feed their basic life. Moreover, the awakening of consciousness to education also causes a diversity of educational research. For instance, a field of traditional special education today is being specifically divided into two branches, talent education and disabled individual education. Apparently, the refinement of research catalog is helpful to educate different group of people.
Besides, education hasn’t been more accessible to people without media platforms. The tool of media which assumes propagate information educates people a lot by broadcasting on television and radio. In general, depending on broad modern teaching equipments and people’s strong concept of educational importance, people feel obviously that they are freer and easier to derive professional and common knowledge from today’s society than people did in the past. 作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2012-11-19 21:19
黄色 好的， 绿色 建议，红色 有问题的 11.18 Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past?
With the rapid development of civilization, People have more chance to receive education nowadays by different ways, such as online classes or campus education. Compare（compared） with people in past decades, it（做compared的主语，那后面就应该写现在的情况。所以整句话有点拧巴。直接写把，比如: while it is inconvenient for people in the past to learn ….） is inconvenient that people learn primarily through traditional ways such as church classes or serving as an apprentice with (可数单数前加一个the把)silversmith or shoe-maker. From my perspective, today's people feel freer to learn than them(嗯我不知道主语people和them可不可以并列，我语法学的不好，望告之。当然更好的就是people in contemporary world feel freer to learn than (people可加可不加)in the past) in the past because present society enable（单数） to assist them with various teaching ways and a lot of social media platforms; the increased people’s educational consciousness also gives rise to this result.
First of all, traditional campus education as an important role in people's lifespan today become（单数） more diverse of its teaching methods, that（跟在哪儿后，修饰什么？只有which可跟在逗号后） contributes to culture people well. Digit techniques truly help campus education a lot by providing a large amount of accessories methods. For instance, college students use telescopes at astronomy class to observe and orient star, or students in high school utilize microscopes to detach biofilm between cells at biology class, (木有连词。。run-on了，前面改成句号把)even more vivid geographic models, such as rack fault models, serve to our geology class. Absolutely, those teaching equipments and methods which seem are commonplace today but（无谓语，去掉But加一个are）rare in (the)past like computers, projectors, and microphones and audio booth extend their function to impress students both from visual and audio views. Therefore, students tend to understand all related knowledge easier.
Furthermore, because an increasing concept involved that being educated leads to a prospective future, people tend to plan their children to learn different skills and wide knowledge, even they are not contented to send children to some college which are as far as flying over several hours. By contrast, people in the past concerned more how their kids can feed their basic live(短语？我觉得是make a living); so, parents send(sent) their children to learn with silver smiths or from（这个from是干嘛的？） sailors. They cast the hope to their children being future silversmith or tailor. However, today’s people are willing to learn knowledge involved with wider and deeper(wider and deeper啥？少个名词) to satisfy their stomach, other than(是“除了，绝不是”的意思，应该用rather than) halting by one or two skills only to feed their basic life. Moreover, the awakening of consciousness(弱弱的觉得这两个词的效果一样，重复了。等你跟我讨论) to education also causes a diversity of educational research. For instance（换个词把，前面用过了）, a field of traditional special education today is being specifically divided into two branches, talent education and disabled individual education. Apparently, the refinement of research catalog is helpful to educate different group of people.（再加一句，什么这样就方便以前残疾人不上学的来上学了这类的，点题，强调比以前easier）
Besides, education hasn’t been more accessible to people without media platforms. The tool of media which assumes propagate(assume sth，要个名词把这里。或你把assume去掉。还有，propagate有一种鼓动宣传的意思，不是很中性，这个词。建议慎用) information educates people a lot by broadcasting on television and radio(个人觉得by这句和前面which有点重，或放在一起写成一个句子。读的时候挺不通的). In general, （为啥不另起一段呢）depending on broad modern teaching equipments and people’s strong concept of educational importance, people feel obviously that they are freer and easier to derive professional and common knowledge from today’s society than people did in the past.
LZ要加强语法哈！单复数，过去式注意一下 还有，不是长难句就好，我觉得有些句子读起来不是很通的。有的意思表达的不简洁。 一起加油！作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-26 12:02
11.26 Friends usually play rather important roles in people’s lifespan. What is more important characteristic of a friend to consider about when you choose friends? Some people make friends that depends on what they can obtain when they in needs because they believe that friends should help each other. However, from my perspective, I am inclined to have friends who can share my feeing and fun with rather than who is able to help me.
To start with, if you choose friends with a strong intention, like in order to gain their helping one day, your friendship wouldn't last forever. For instance, homeless people want to have wealthy friends to favor free shelters; students who are awkward to math desire to make friends with others who are good at math. What will happen if their friends cannot offer a free shelter or a math studying with them, they would be annoyed and upset. A Strong intention lets people do not feel free to make friends. It is not mentioned how they can maintain good friendship through this way, because people pick up friends don’t depends on true interest in each other, but with a deliberate intention. As a result of it, you probably break up your friendship; what your friends will bring you neither fun nor any helping.
Moreover, considering the fact that we always need assistant in our daily life, to choose friends who always share fun and feeling with you can further strength your friendship. You can deeply understand each other through some activities like go shopping, have dinners and playing baseball together. Your friends could know what your eating habit is, what your clothes style is, and how cooperate with you to win the baseball game. Further, your friend can do a favor without your asking when you in needs because they really know you a lot.
In general, it is wise that make friends who can share your happiness and feeling with. Do not choose friends with a deliberate intention of helping because your friend would be tired of your incessant demands for helping. To maintain a long-last and strong friendship, just treat your friend with honesty and frankness and make them feel free and have a good time to hang out you. 作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-11-26 23:30
11-26修改建议 红色为错误，蓝色为建议，绿色为精彩（不知道为啥高亮都不显示了呜）！
Friends usually play rather important roles in people’s lifespan. What is more important characteristicof a friendto(you) consider about when you choose friends?(问句很出彩~)Some people make friends that depends on what they can obtain when they (+are)in needs because they believe that friends should(个人感觉should的语气不够，用must或者are responsible to更好) help each other. However, from my perspective,(这个和后面incline意思重复，可以删一个) I am inclined to have friends who can share my feeing and fun with rather than whois(are)able to help me.
To start with, if you choose friends with a strong intention, like in order to gain their helping one day, your friendship wouldn't last forever. For instance, homeless people want to have wealthy friends to favor free shelters; students who are awkward to math desire to make friends with others who are good at math.What will happen if their friends cannot offer a free shelter or a math studying(guidance更好)with(to) them, they would be annoyed and upset. A Strong intention lets people do not(won't let people) feel free to make friends. It is not mentioned how they can maintain good friendship through this way, because people (don't前移了)pick up friends don’t depends on true interest in each other, but with a deliberate intention.As a result of it, you probably break up your friendship; what your friends will bring you (+is)neither fun nor any helping(helpful).
Moreover, considering the fact that we always need assistant in our daily life, to choose friends who always share fun and feeling with you can further strength your friendship. You can deeply understand each other through some activities like go shopping, have(having) dinners and playing baseball together.(动词要平行！)Your friends could know what your eating habit is, what your clothes style is, and how cooperate with you to win the baseball game. Further, your friend can do a favor without your asking when you in needs because they really know you a lot.
In general, it is wisethat(to) make friends who can share your happiness and feeling with. Do not choose friends with a deliberate intention of helping because your friend would be tired of your incessant demands for helping. To maintain a long-last and strong friendship, just treat your friend with honesty and frankness and make them feel free and have a good time to hang out you.
作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-11-26 23:37
啊 在首页看到我的名字粗线，回忆一下今天自己写的烂文，觉得好对不起你。。。 加油练习，我就是太久没有练了，现在写得越来越差劲了作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-11-27 13:05
谢谢依晨 eating habit --diet perference 2段的首句前半句 误导本段内容--。应该改为Having a friend with fun is not exclusive to have a friend who is helpful.作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-12-13 12:42
12.13综合tpo 8 The lecture argues the accuracy of Chevalier's memoir which refutes the main idea in the reading passage that Chevalier made up many events in his memoir to make his life seem glamorous.
First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that Chevalier is actually poor because the evidence showed that he borrowed a large amount of money from a Swiss merchant. She argues that Chevalier's loan doesn't enough mean that he is poor；It is more possible that he used this loan to cope with his cash emergency and buffered the waiting of his cash arrive from selling something.
Second, while the passage describes that some critics are skeptical about the detailed conversation between him and Votaire, the professor contradicts this by saying that Chevalier noted down everything included conversation’s contents at each night, then tapped his notes when he finally proposed to write his memoir.
Finally, the passage questions Chevalier's story about escaping from Italy's prison with making a hole in the ceiling, and speculates that Chevalier jailers were bribes to free him. The professor in lecture rebuts this by saying that none of powerful friends refers to this prison case. Additionally, the old policemen documents pointed out that ceiling of prison room had been repaired that convinces people to trust chevalier’s escape as he said in his memoir . 作者: 阿伦艾弗森 时间: 2012-12-14 02:19
The lecture argues the accuracy of Chevalier's memoir which refutes the main idea in the reading passage that Chevalier made up many events in his memoir to make his life seem glamorous.
First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that Chevalier is actually poor because the evidence showed that he borrowed a large amount of money from a Swiss merchant. She（最好用pro，会认为是chevalier） argues that Chevalier's loan doesn't enough mean that he is poor；It is more possible that he used this loan to cope with his cash emergency and buffered the waiting of his cash arrive from selling something.（covert access to cash）
Second, while the passage describes that some critics are skeptical about the detailed conversation between him and Votaire, the professor contradicts this by saying that Chevalier noted down everything included conversation’s contents at each night, then tapped his notes when he finally proposed to write his memoir.
Finally, the passage questions Chevalier's story about escaping from Italy's prison with making a hole in the ceiling, and speculates that Chevalier jailers were bribes to free him. The professor in lecture rebuts this by saying that none of powerful friends refers to this prison case. （有一个和其他狱友的小比较可以加上）Additionally, the old policemen documents pointed out that ceiling of prison room had been repaired that convinces people to trust chevalier’s escape as he said in his memoir . 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-12-21 13:52
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21 December Independent Writing: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To increase economic growth, government can neglect environmental concerns. Integrated Writing: TPO 16
There is a hot topic people discuss whether government should neglect environmental concerns for achieving the ultimate goal to increase economic growth. Different people hold different perspectives. Some people believe that nothing is more important than economic growth so people should take economy as the foremost concern while others hold the positive attitude of environmental friendship. From my perspective, government who neglects environmental protest would be a featherbrain.
To begin with, a swift economic growth must be based on a good environment around. Nobody dislikes a gorgeous landscape, a comfortable house garden, or a tidy street, doesn’t it?! A good surrounding which could be quiet and clean, maybe with flower favor or singing from birds absolutely would attract more people than a smelly and poor place would do. For example, my hometown where locates close to a crystal river intrigues thousands travelers and hikers to come here. I am proud of my town because we have green hills and mountains covered with lush vegetation, and big green canopy with many sorts of birds. In this case, local governor determined to develop tourism there in order to increase the overall GDP of my town. Based on the effective environmental protests and renewable natural resource concerning, tourism has become a major financial resource in my town until today. At least of me, wouldn’t imagine what will change without good local environment.
Moreover, it is unwise decision that government does nothing to awful circumstance. The most direct hurt would be an overwhelmed environmental contamination. Take some examples, an awful air pollution for an unlimited private cars, or messy water or lake pollution for uncontrolled chemistry industry, or a nuclear leakage accident for hasty construction of power plant. For instance, in order to raise income, some local travelling agencies extend animal- hunting times and uncontrolled quantities of hiker or traveler rather than thinking of the landscape's ability of adaptation. At end, the animals have gone away, and splendid landscape and attraction places have become barren while they trampled upon natural green vegetative thousands times more than before. On the other hand, one indirect result will come out if nobody pays attention to condition changing, travelers would not come back any more because there is nothing can attract travelers; local residents also will move to new place as a result of heavy smoking and big noise from around industries. Thus, It is nonsense to develop economy.
Besides, it is reported by American Scientific Magazines that people ability of hearing has impaired by 20 percent than in the past among recent 30 years due to a seemingly uncritical noise pollution which possibly comes from living nearby train station, industry or shopping mall and so on. Thus, to individual, lives in a quiet and comfort neighborhood would be helpful to do his/ her social work better. Both of social development and economy growth must depend on its local residence and constructors, I believe that government see this point clearly.
In general, economy and environment coordinate as a whole. A poor environment causes a barren economy. From history, People are good at tapping surroundings to develop economy, but they are lack of idea and experience to recover environment as it in the past. Government who relies on sacrificing environment only to save economy is really fatuous. Anyway, government should take a long-term look to develop economy and protest local environment. 作者: 我把托福踩脚下 时间: 2012-12-22 12:20 Integrated Writing: TPO 16 The lecture discusses that new rules which published in 1990 changed whole archaeological field in Britain that refutes the main idea in the reading passage that the science of archaeology and old cultural artifacts faced with serious problems there. The new guidance improved situation in all three areas discussed in reading passage.
First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that many valuable artifacts cannot be protested well. She argues that new guidance stated that before construction projects started, it had to been examined by archaeologists to see if this site is interesting or valuable. If it is, the next step was that builder, archaeologists and local government have to work together and do plans to preserve artifacts and important site.
Furthermore, while the passage declares that archeologists suffered a bad financial supports and could not be paid by government any more, the professor contradicts this by saying that any worker in this field could be paid by Construction Company but not by government. Additionally, the company also could pay everything included examining and other works under this constructions project. Besides, she mentions that company provided funding to allow archaeologist to work far-growing what they could not do in the past.
Finally, the passage asserts that the career fell in trouble in Britain due to unpaid work and less positions, but the lecture rebuts the idea and saying that the new statement ruled that company paid all for archaeological works, such as evaluating preserved area, doing plans, professor manner(?这个我也没听好), processing date and writing report or article. A lot of unpaid works didn't process before but can be done now. What’s more, increasing work opportunity absolutely increased the number of worker in archaeology.
作者: txwilliam 时间: 2012-12-22 16:50 There is a hot topic people discuss whether governmentshould neglect environmental concerns for achieving the ultimate goal toincrease economic growth. Different people hold different perspectives. Somepeople believe that nothing is more important than economic growth so peopleshould take economy as the foremost concern while others hold the positiveattitude of environmental friendship. From my perspective, government whoneglects environmental protest would be a featherbrain.
To begin with, a swift economic growth must be based on agood environment around. Nobodydislikes a gorgeous landscape, a comfortable house garden, or a tidy street,doesn’t it?!A goodsurrounding which could be quiet and clean, maybe with flower favor or singingfrom birds absolutely would attract more people than a smelly and poor placewould do. For example, my hometown where locates close to a crystalriver intrigues thousands travelers and hikers to come here. I am proud of mytown because we have green hills and mountains covered with lush vegetation,and big green canopy with many sorts of birds. In this case, local governordetermined to develop tourism there in order to increase the overall GDP of mytown. Based on the effective environmental protests and renewable naturalresource concerning, tourism has become a major financial resource in my townuntil today. At least of me, wouldn’t imagine what will change without goodlocal environment.
Moreover, it is unwise decision that government doesnothing to awful circumstance. The most direct hurt would be an overwhelmedenvironmental contamination. Take some examples, an awful air pollution for anunlimited private cars, or messy water or lake pollution for uncontrolledchemistry industry, or a nuclear leakage accident for hasty construction ofpower plant. For instance, in order to raise income, some local travellingagencies extend animal- hunting times and uncontrolled quantities of hiker ortraveler rather than thinking of the landscape's ability of adaptation. At end,the animals have gone away, and splendid landscape and attraction places have become barrenwhile they trampled upon natural green vegetative thousands times more thanbefore. On the other hand, one indirect result will come out if nobody paysattention to condition changing, travelers would not come back any more becausethere is nothing can attract travelers; local residents also will move to newplace as a result of heavy smoking and big noise from around industries. Thus,It is nonsense to develop economy.
Besides, it is reported by American Scientific Magazinesthat people ability of hearing has impaired by 20 percent than in the pastamong recent 30 years due to a seemingly uncritical noise pollution whichpossibly comes from living nearby train station, industry or shopping mall andso on. Thus, to individual, lives in a quiet and comfort neighborhood would behelpful to do his/ her social work better. Both of social development andeconomy growth must depend on its local residence and constructors, I believethat government see this point clearly.
In general, economy and environment coordinate as a whole.A poor environment causes a barren economy. From history, People are good attapping surroundings to develop economy, but they are lack of idea andexperience to recover environment as it in the past. Government who relies onsacrificing environment only to save economy is really fatuous. Anyway, government should take along-term look to develop economy and protest local environment. 好词，好句，好文章，我感觉在加强一下逻辑，就更好了，没什么大问题，看看老美的分文吧，加油，我的也发过去了，哈作者: txwilliam 时间: 2012-12-22 16:58 The lecture discusses that new rules which published in 1990 changed whole archaeological field in Britain that refutes the main idea in the reading passage that the science of archaeology and old cultural artifacts faced with serious problems there. The new guidance improved situation in all three areas discussed in reading passage.
First, the professor opposes the idea in the passage that many valuable artifacts cannot be protested （拼写小失误）well. She argues that new guidance stated that before construction projects started, it had to been examined by archaeologists to see if this site is interesting or valuable. If it is, the next step was that builder, archaeologists and local government have to work together and do plans to preserve artifacts and important site.还有细节吧
Furthermore, while the passage declares that archeologists suffered a bad financial supports and could not be paid by government any more, the professor contradicts this by saying that any worker in this field could be paid by Construction Company but not by government. Additionally, the company also could pay everything included examining and other works under this constructions project. Besides, she mentions that company provided funding to allow archaeologist to work far-growing what they could not do in the past.
Finally, the passage asserts that the career fell in trouble in Britain due to unpaid work and less positions, but the lecture rebuts the idea and saying that the new statement ruled that company paid all for archaeological works, such as evaluating preserved area, doing plans, professor manner(?这个我也没听好), processing date and writing report or article. A lot of unpaid works didn't process before but can be done now. What’s more, increasing work opportunity absolutely increased the number of worker in archaeology.
