标题: 朽木 作文贴~~ 求指导 求猛攻 已然火烧眉毛了 [打印本页] 作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-17 17:56 标题: 朽木 作文贴~~ 求指导 求猛攻 已然火烧眉毛了 9.17 Grades (marks) encourage students to learn？A\D Marks become more and more common in our daily life to measure the quality of matters. You want to know whether the movie is deserved to watch. There will be a TOP 10 list on the web site and judge the details of the movie with exactly score. In this way the company will work hard to make a better movie. Same deal, the students should learn harder just for marks. The point of view seems superficially indisputable but totally incomplete to construct the logical chain. The discrepancies would be critically considered and corrected in the following parts of the article.
First of all. The interest is the foundation of study instead of marks. Bill Gates, a world famous person, quit from university because he did not enjoy the major. Then he established a company what was called Microsoft. It is no doubt that the interest of software make his success. We can not image the world without his invention. The interest contribute to people's success in many other fields.
Moreover, marks can not encourage students to learn and give them more pressure. In my class. The mark is an ordinary and obvious way for teacher to balance the standard of students. The pressure from the mark is so great that the students can barely stand it. Many students give up the course immediately just because they think it is no use to improve their marks. We do not want to see this phenomenon. It can not be denied that the marks will take more pressure on the students what is beyond their limit.
Finally, as for many students the mark is not important for them. The ability what they get is cared. The students do not pay much attention on the marks so the hypothesis that marks encourage students to learn is incorrect. The students already become logically on the problem of marks. Getting a higher or lower marks do not present their ability, and the process of study is the truly essential matter. This case is not rare, in reality, frequently many people hold the same view at the same time.
Admittedly, The marks will stimulate the students to work hard in a certain extent. However, the interest is the mother of study. What is more, marks will add pressure on the students ,and more and more students do not care about the marks .I therefore enhance my standpoint that marks do not courage students to learn.作者: shatong424 时间: 2012-9-18 00:11
能给发word行不 用word 改习惯了作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-18 08:39
好啊 贴上附件就行，不过还要在论坛上复制回复一下，要不版主看不见作者: shatong424 时间: 2012-9-18 13:47 标题: 修改 9 17 本人用的word 帮改的 word里面有给你的意见， 语言上提升空间还很大，多练练作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-18 14:04
太感谢了··帮助非常大 错误太多了作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-18 16:25 9.18 综合写作 边写边想··根本就是手残 结尾没来的急写！ The reading passage focuses on the subject that the ethanol fuel is not good enough as a replacement of gasoline. The professor's lecture deals with the opposite issue, however,he argues that ethanol is better than gasoline in the use of energy, which challenges what the reading states, and in the lecture, he use three specific reasons to support his idea.
First of all, even though the reading passage suggests that the ethanol fuel makes no function on the environmental problems, in other words, the ethanol produce as much greenhouse gas as the gasoline do. The professor makes a point in the lecture that the corn what is the source of the ethanol will absorb much more carbon dioxide in their planting life, which means, there is no more air pollution. Apparently, the professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading. Moreover, contrary to the belief of the reading passage that the use of plant for making green fuel contribute to the decrease of the animals' use of corn. The professor contends that there is no influence on the animals' food, that is because the usage methods of the plant which are mentioned in the reading are totally different parts of the plant. Finally, another important perspective showed in the reading passage is that the price of the green fuel would decrease with more and more people star to use ethanol fuel. but the reading passage presents a conflicting view that the cost of gasoline is lower than ethanol fuel. 作者: SophieS123 时间: 2012-9-19 20:11
9月18日 综合 修改 The reading passage focuses on the subject that the ethanol fuel is not good enough as a replacement of gasoline. The professor's lecture deals with the opposite issue; however, he argues that ethanol is better than gasoline in the use of energy, which challenges what the reading states, and in the lecture, he use three specific reasons to support his idea.(这句虽然表达很清晰，但是有过长之嫌，拆成两句是不是更稳妥一点呢？) First of all, even though the reading passage suggests that the ethanol fuel makes no function on the environmental problems, in other words, the ethanol produce as much greenhouse gas as the gasoline do(does). The professor makes a point in the lecture that the corn what (which) is the source of the ethanol will absorb much more carbon dioxide in their planting life, which means, there is no more air pollution. Apparently, the professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading. Moreover, contrary to the belief of the reading passage that the use of plant for making green fuel contribute to the decrease of the animals' use of corn. The professor contends that there is no influence on the animals' food, that（改成which）is because the usage methods of the plant which are mentioned （删去which are会更简洁一些）in the reading are totally different parts of the plant.（个人感觉是不是应该说一下“动物不吃那部分”） Finally, another important perspective showed in the reading passage is that the price of the green fuel would decrease with more and more people start(starting) to use ethanol fuel. But the reading passage presents a conflicting view that the cost of gasoline is lower than ethanol fuel.(without subsidies)
总结：整体来说不错，该写的点都写到了，许多短语用的非常好，学习一下~对了结尾不写也可以 作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-19 20:35
非常感谢····我这听力和单词是硬伤啊，细节听不到··· 还有这么多语法错误作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-24 23:00
9/24 写了一个小时······· which do you choose to improve your health：kind of food you eat，amount of exercise，amount of stress
With the development of the society, a increasing number of people focus on the topic of health. Then many effective measures like dieting, doing sports, and proper stress have been taken to improve our health. As for me, proper amount of exercise contribute to our health. Several points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my hypothesis.
First of all, exercise exert positive effect on shaping our body and enhancing our breathing system. All eating no exercise makes person a fat man. A recent survey shows that more and more people die each year from diseases linked to fat. It is generally accepted the fact that exercise help us to reduce our weight and also reinforce our heart. Body in good shape avoids many chances of getting disease, and a strong heart provide us with endless energy in the daily life. Exercise keep our body in a good situation.
Moreover, doing sports can release our stress. Many experts claim that health means not only the strong of body but also a healthy mind. In the modern society, so fast the step of our world is that we cannot even breath rapidly. The stress we faced everyday have already over our limitation, what is worse, it is always no way for us to deal with the stress. To take my own experience as a case. When I bear great pressure, I will run in gym time and time again until I cannot take one more step. After that I usually feel comfortable and relax. This case is not rare, and in reality many people need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.
Finally, the proper amount of exercise is also important aspect in the improvement of our health. To much exercise do harm to our body. We feel tired after quite a heavy amount of exercise and this may last a longer time than we imaged. In addition, That feeling even influence our daily work. We may in depression for a whole week. Thus a proper and regular exercise plays a essential role in the process of building healthy body.
All in all, proper amount of exercise contribute to our body in shape and mind in peace. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose amount of exercise as my final choice in improvement of health. 作者: angelafeng 时间: 2012-9-25 14:30 With the development of the society, a（an） increasing number of people focus on the topic of health. Then many effective measures like dieting, doing sports, and proper stress have been taken to improve our health. As for me, proper amount of exercise contribute to our health. Several points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my hypothesis.
First of all, exercise exert（用单数） positive effect on shaping our body and enhancing our breathing system. All eating no exercise makes person a fat man. A recent survey shows that more and more people die each year from diseases linked to fat. It is generally accepted the fact that exercise help us to reduce our weight and also reinforce our heart. Body in good shape avoids many chances of getting disease, and a strong heart provide（单数） us with endless energy in the daily life. Exercise keep （单数）our body in a good situation.（这句话前面加个表示总结的词像so或therefore，会比较好，要不然放在这里有点突兀。）
Moreover, doing sports can release our stress. Many experts claim that health means not only the strong of body but also a healthy mind. In the modern society, so fast the step of our world is that we cannot even breath （应该用动词形式breathe）rapidly. The stress we faced everyday have already over our limitation, what is worse, it is always no way for us to deal with the stress. To take my own experience as a case.（这个句子是个fragment，没有主语）When I bear great pressure, I will run in gym time and time again until I cannot take one more step. After that I usually feel comfortable and relax. This case is not rare, and in reality many people need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.
Finally, the proper amount of exercise is also important aspect in the improvement of our health. To （too）much exercise do harm to our body. We feel tired after quite a heavy amount of exercise and this may last a longer time than we imaged. In addition, that feeling even influence（单数） our daily work. We may in depression for a whole week. Thus a proper and regular exercise plays a（an）essential role in the process of building healthy body.
All in all, proper amount of exercise contribute to our body in shape and mind in peace. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose amount of exercise as my final choice in improvement of health.文章结构完整，论证比较有逻辑，但是第三点论证略显单薄。 注意语法错误和单复数问题哦
文章结构完整，论证比较有逻辑，但是第三点论证略显单薄。 注意语法错误和单复数问题哦作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-25 14:51
感谢~~哎··太丢人了 这种错误！！ 抽脸作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-9-26 13:50 9.25 终于突破400字了~~402个···但是时间啊·！ People who cannot accept the criticism from others will not be successful at working in a group.
In the modern life, people receive praise and abuse everyday, and there is no doubt that the criticism contribute directly to our success. Several points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my hypothesis.
First of all, From the information the experts have received over the recent years, the criticism from others always point out our weakness as well as enhance our capability. People always ignore their own mistakes when they work in a group. In view of this seriousness problem, criticism form others paly a essential role in the function of prevent the things which is cased by the mistake from getting worse. Once our weak point has been pointed out, we must spare no effort to improve the weakness so that we can strengthen our capability. In the case, I will say accepting the criticism makes perfect.
Moreover, the man who refuses others' criticism may be regard as a haughty person by his co-workers. That may do harm to their relationship. It is okay to have flaws, which makes us real. But someone always claim that if colleagues criticize them, this behavior, which may lead them feel uncomfortable, shows disrespect. And then their relationship may become nervous along with this kind of mind. To take my own experience as a case. When I worked in a computer company. One of my best friends and I dealt with a same project. I pointed out some fault in his work gently. But instead of correcting this error, he quarreled with me immediately since he though I did not respect his idea and did this on purpose. Finally, this project was died out. What is worse, other company members thought he was not a easy-going man, and no one want to work with him. This case is not rare, and in reality many person need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.
Admittedly, Some criticism from others may not reasonable and too many criticism even decrease our self-confidence. However, If no one point out our weakness, wo may never get a chance to improve the capability and hand the key to success. In addition, Refusing criticism may leave a bad impression to others, this will put us in a negative position in the future job market. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose people who cannot accept criticism will not be successful at working as my final mind.作者: 最后一次杀T 时间: 2012-9-26 15:08 高亮为表达的好的地方 In the modern life, people receive praise and abuse everyday, and there is no doubt that the criticism contribute directly to our success. Several points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my hypothesis.
First of all, from the information the experts have received over the recent years, the criticism from others always point out our weaknesses as well as enhance our capability. People always ignore their own mistakes when they work in a group. In view of this seriousness problem, 【criticism from others play an essential role in the function of preventing the things which is cased by the mistake from getting worse. 这句话的表达有点别扭。改成criticisms from others play an essential role in preventing the result caused by the mistake from getting worse.会显得简洁一些。】 Once our weakpoint【可替换为flaw，drawback】 has been pointed out, we must spare no effort to improve the weakness so that we can strengthen our capability【可以直接说strengthen ourselves】. In the case, I will say accepting the criticism makes perfect.
Moreover, the man who refuses others' criticism may be regard as a haughty person by his co-workers. That may do harm to their relationship. It is okay to have flaws, which makes us real. But someone always claim that if colleagues criticize them, this behavior, which may lead them feel uncomfortable, shows disrespect. 【And then their relationship may become nervous along with this kind of mind. nervous我觉得不能形容relationship，但是又想不到更合适的形容词，不如直接将这句改成This kind of mind may generate the difficult relationships at work. 】To take my own experience as a case. When I worked in a computer company. One of my best friends and I dealt with a same project. I pointed out some faults in his work gently. But instead of correcting this error, he quarreled with me immediately since he thought I did not respect his idea and did this on purpose【我猜你想表达‘故意这样做’，我觉得应该是and did deliberately to make him embarrassed.】. Finally, this project was died out. What is worse, other company members thought he was not a easy-going man, and no one want to work with him. This case is not rare, and in reality many person need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.
Admittedly, Some criticisms from others may not reasonable and too many criticism even decrease our self-confidence. However, if no one point out our weakness, we may never get a chance to improve the capability【个人觉得capability这个词有点chinglish的感觉，直接说improve ourselves就好了】and hand the key to success. In addition, Refusing criticism may leave a bad impression to others, this will put us in a negative position in the future job market. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose that 【这个that省了会有歧义】people who cannot accept criticism will not be successful at working as my final mind.
作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-8 12:36 10.7 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:The government and corporation should share all their scientific discoveries with other countries in the world?
In the modern world, every country owns its special technology, and all those scientific discoveries function in different ways. However, those countries totally cannot catch any information about each others' discoveries. This phenomenon not only cases the war between the countries, but also leads the poverty of people. As for me, I support to share all the scientific discoveries in the world. Two points in diverse dimensions will be explained to testify my hypothesis.
First of all. The unbalance of the technological level deeply contributes to the war in the world. If a country got a high level of scientific discoveries, it may use them to develop the military affairs. Then, firing a war with other countries for oil or other nature resources. To take my own country's history as an example. In the Qin dynasty, The Qin is the most powerful country at that time and has many advance technology. There is no doubt that it begin to conquer other country. The war lasts many years, and people painfully suffer in the disaster. So the special technology do harm to the world peace.
Moreover, the share of the discoveries will benefits people's life. As we all know, the development of the science makes our life more convenient and comfortable. We can reach the destination quickly by car and defend cold by the use of air-condition. But the new technologies have not yet been spread for some reasons. Nevertheless, an increasing number of scientists share their inventions with the world. To take Longping Yuan, who now is a successful agricultural scientist, for a example. He unselfishly shares the new rice seed which can obtain great financial profit with the world. But with this behaviour, the whole world can produce much more rice each year than before and raise a great number of people. This case is not rare, and in reality many people refer to the same issue at the same time.
Admittedly, the country which need to pay for the cost of the new technology is still a big problem, and the result of the sharing discoveries cannot be measured accurately. These cases are rare and therefore are too specific and too weak to strengthen the opposite view. In addition, those viewpoint cannot hold water because the benefits from the share of the scientific discoveries overweighs its flaws. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose sharing the scientific discoveries with other countries as my final choice.
In the modern world, every country owns its special technology, and all those scientific discoveries function in different ways. However, those countries totally cannot catch any information about each others' discoveries. This phenomenon not only cases（用法值得斟酌） the war between the countries, but also leads the poverty of people. As for me, I support to share all the scientific discoveries in the world. Two points in diverse dimensions will be explained to testify my hypothesis（这个词用得不是很恰当）.
First of all. The unbalance（建议换成imbalance） of the technological level deeply contributes to the war in the world. If a country got a high level of scientific discoveries, it may use them to develop the military affairs. Then, firing a war with other countries for oil or other nature resources. To（去掉） take my own country's history as an example. In the Qin dynasty, The Qin is the most powerful country at that time and has many advanced technology. There is no doubt that it begins to conquer other country（为了和你前面的firing a war with other countries for oil or other nature resources相对应，可以加个for land and...). The war lasts many years, and people painfully suffer in(from) the disaster. So the special technology do harm to the world peace.
Moreover, the share of the discoveries will benefits people's life. As we all know, the development of the science makes our life more convenient and comfortable.For instance, We can reach the destination quickly by car and defend cold by the use of air-condition.But the new technologies have not yet been spread for some reasons .(这句话有点多余） Nevertheless, an increasing number of scientists share their inventions with the world. To take Longping Yuan, who now is a successful agricultural scientist, for a example. He unselfishly shares the new rice seed which can obtain great financial profit with the world. But with this behaviour, the whole world can produce much more rice each year than before and raise(feed) a great number of people. This case is not rare, and in reality many people refer to the same issue at the same time.
Admittedly, the country which need to pay for the cost of the new technology is still a big problem, and the result of the sharing discoveries cannot be measured accurately. But These cases are rare and therefore are too specific and too weak to strengthen the opposite view. In addition, those viewpoint cannot hold water because the benefits from the share of the scientific discoveries overweighs its flaws. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose sharing the scientific discoveries with other countries as my final choice.
条理还算清楚，注意小问题例如单三。强烈建议多加些连词以使语句逻辑更清楚。
作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-9 19:13
谢谢修改啊~~那个case我想打cause来着···作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-12 15:32
10.11 Nowadays people spend too much money on their pets, although those can be spent on other things.
With the development of the society. Pets paly an increasing essential role in our daily life. Many families start to keep pets, not only because the animals can help us do some ordinary work, but also for an emotional partner. I think the cost on the pets is not too much money but a proper spend, although those can be spent on other things.
First of all. The pet now has been treated as a family member, and the money spending on it is deserved. Take one of my friends, who has a dog and lives far from the city, for an example. After a whole day's hard working, when he came back home, a lovely dog was just waiting for him at the front door. The pressure, however, pales in comparison to the welcome of the dog. This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.
Moreover. The pets are creatures just like humans, and the cost on it is reasonable. The pets own emotion, they can recognise their owner and even protect their owner from dangerous. Once one man kept a pet, he must be responsible to the pet. Ten years, For human, is just a period of life, but for the pets, is its whole life. What is more, the memory which they get together is the most precious thing. So people should treat the pet equally, and spending some money on the pets for a happier life is a logical measure.
Finally, with the rise in the income of the family, the money using on the pet occupy a little part in the families' daily cost. An investigation shows that a normal family spend about 15 percent of their incomes on the usual life, like the food supply, clothes, include the pets' part. In such circumstance, actually, the pets' cost is not too much for the family.
Admittedly, taking the money which is originally spent on pets on the other things may make our level of life better in some certain extent. But this viewpoint still cannot hold water because the pets are emotional partners, they are creatures just like humans, and the family can afford the cost. To more precise, the benefit brought from spending money on pets overweights its flaws. I therefore stick to my standpoint that people nowadays spend proper money on the pets, although those can be spent on other things as my final statement.
作者: kiddy72 时间: 2012-10-12 20:23
10.11 Nowadays people spend too much money on their pets, although those can be spent on other things.
With the development of the society. Pets paly an increasing essential role in our daily life. Many families start to keep pets, not only because the animals can help us do some ordinary work, but also for an emotional partner. I think the cost on the pets is not too much money but a proper spend, although those can be spent on other things.
First of all. The pet now has been treated as a family member, and the money spending on it is deserved最好用形式主语吧这句～. Take one of my friends, who has a dog and lives far from the city, for an example.这个不错～ After a whole day's hard workinghard work, when he came back home, a lovely dog was just waiting for him at the front door. The pressure, however, pales in comparison to the welcome of the dog. This kind of cases is not rare, and in reality many people generally refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.
Moreover. The pets are creatures creatures不用了吧just like humans, and the cost on it is reasonable. The pets own emotion, they can recognise their owner and even protect their owner from dangerous. Once one man kept a pet, he must be responsible to the petit. Ten years, For human, is just a period of life, but for the pets, is its whole life. What is more, the memory which theythey应该说清楚一点吧避免理解错误 get together is the most precious thing. So people should treat the pet equally, and spending some money on the pets for a happier life is a logical measure.
Finally, with the rise in the income of the family, the money using on the pet occupy a little part in the families' daily cost. An investigation shows that a normal family spend about 15 percent of their incomes on the usual life, like the food supply, clothes, include the pets' part. In such circumstance, actually, the pets' cost is not too much for the family.
Admittedly, taking the money which is originally spent on pets on the other things may make our level of life better in some certain extent. But this viewpoint still cannot hold waterbecause the pets are emotional partners, they are creatures just like humans, and the family can afford the cost. To more precise, the benefit brought from spending money on pets overweights its flaws.赞一个～ I therefore stick to my standpoint that people nowadays spend proper money on the pets, although those can be spent on other things as my final statement.
我觉得写的很好啊～呵呵 不过有个小问题可以探讨一下 之前貌似听说老外不太喜欢用长主语 最好换成形式主语比较习惯～可以参考哈 加油！作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-12 20:58
嗯 有这说法， 我老师也说过， 主要是指句子平衡··· 就不显得头重脚轻了作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2012-10-20 10:54
嘿嘿 我来等你的10.19独立哈~~作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-20 14:20
10.19Do you agree or disagree? It is better to work with your own computer and telephone at yourhome than work in your company's office. Relax, efficial. Do better Freedom. Control the time more convenience Save cost of the company
With the booming of the technology. Computer and telephone play an increasing essential role in our daily life. We now can work at home with the new technology efficiently instead of working in the boring office. As for me, I entirely support the statement that working with computer and telephone at home is better than working in the office. Three points in different dimensions will be demonstrated to testify my point. First of all.Contrary to work in company's office, it is more efficient to work at home with the help of computer. The home often the symbol of relax and warm, and working in this kind of atmosphere, people definitely focus on his work and perform perfectly. As for most people, when they step into a strange environment where may makes them feel uncomfortable at first time, they cannot put into a high standard of work situation immediately. They need to face a process of adapting to this environment. In the opposite, however, working at home also can save the process. So working at home will be more efficient and time saver. Moreover, working at home contributes to a flexible schedule. As we all known, when work in company's office we must obey a serious schedule, like reach the office at 8 am and go home until 16 pm. That is not a hommization system for most people. There is no need to worried about the problem which has been mentioned above when we work at home. We can get up whenever we want without delaying the company's work. We can witness the children's any big moment with the flexible schedule. This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time. Finally. Working at home also can save the cost of the company, and then add the profit of the company in some way. If all the workers work at home, the company would save a big number of money which must be used for the facilities and the department in the past. Under the present crisis of the economy, many company now experiencing a really hard time. There is no doubt that this method can release the pressure of the company. Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient, however, pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose working at home is better than working in the office as my final choice.作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-20 14:20
刚写完···越来越懒了·~~作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2012-10-20 18:50
谢谢你给我改的~~wil的问题以前没注意到 还是句式太单一的缘故把 黄色 好的 红色 我觉得有问题的 绿色 建议 With the booming of the technology.(逗号哈) Computer and telephone play an increasing essential role in our daily life. We now can work at home with the new technology efficiently instead of working in the boring office. As for me, I entirely support the statement that working with computer and telephone at home is better than working in the office. Three points in different dimensions will be demonstrated to testify my point. First of all. Contrary to work in company's office, it is more efficient to work at home with the help of computer. The home （谓语呢~~）often the symbol of relax and warm, and working in this kind of atmosphere, people definitely focus on his work and perform perfectly.（再具体一点就更好了，有点突兀哈） As for most people, when they step into a strange environment where may makes them feel uncomfortable at first time, they cannot put into a high standard of work situation immediately. They need to face a process of adapting to this environment. In the opposite, however, （我觉得这两个词有点重）working at home also can save the process. So working at home will be more efficient and time saver（额，我觉得一个adj和一个n.并列有点奇怪）. Moreover, working at home contributes to a flexible schedule. As we all known, when work in company's office we must obey a serious(我觉得换成rigid好些) schedule, like reach（reaching） the office at 8 am and go(going) home until 16 pm. That is not a hommization(没看懂呢) system for most people. There is no need to worried （worry）about the problem which has been mentioned above when we work at home. （来个连词吧，个人觉得这前后是你表达的两个观点）We can get up whenever we want without delaying the company's work. We can witness the children's any big moment with the flexible schedule. This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time. (没读懂呢，最后一句。。) Finally. Working at home also can save the cost of the company, and then add the profit of the company in some way. If all the workers work at home, the company would save a big number（amount好点把） of money which must be used for the facilities and the department in the past. Under the present crisis of the economy, many company(companies) 谓语呢 now experiencing a really hard time. There is no doubt that this method（写出来好点，不然this的指代真不好找） can release the pressure of the company. Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient, however（这两个动词中间少了连词，however它不是连词啊。。）, pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. I therefore stick to my standpoint to choose working at home is better than working in the office as my final choice.
有些小的语法错误可以注意一下~~~
点都挺好的，有的问题我用绿色的已经在文中标出了
我们有个共同的问题，没用很specific的具体例子！！这个要注意一下~~ 作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-20 19:08
谢谢修改~~看的很仔细啊·！This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.这句是我摘抄的一个大神的，用来凑字数的···意思说 这种情况并不少见，在现实中 人们需要面对类似的事情在相似的时间。 hommization system 人性化的制度，我想表达这个意思 第三段你说少连词的地方，我写的时候也感觉到了···不过不知道补什么···作者: dreamcece 时间: 2012-10-21 06:01
等你的10.20的综合。作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2012-10-21 09:06
哈哈 因为我真的改了很久啊~~ 讨论一下： 1， many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon 这里refer to是提及的意思把，有面对的意思吗，回复我个~ 2，人性化的制度 humanized system, "hommization"我在word里改时底下画了跟红线。。 3，连词的问题我不确定，等我在想想再跟你说把~~
谢谢修改~~看的很仔细啊·！This case is not rare, and in reality many people generally need to refer to the same phenomenon at the same time.这句是我摘抄的一个大神的，用来凑字数的···意思说 这种情况并不少见，在现实中 人们需要面对类似的事情在相似的时间。 hommization system 人性化的制度，我想表达这个意思 第三段你说少连词的地方，我写的时候也感觉到了···不过不知道补什么···
-- by 会员 xiumu2280 (2012/10/20 19:08:59)
作者: 浅吟天 时间: 2012-10-21 09:10
哦 这样把 Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient。however，it pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. 因为你又有admittedly又有 however，明显就是两句话，很难不补出主语，就写成一个句子，我是这么理解的。。作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-21 11:16
to mention or speak about someone or something We agreed never to refer to the matter again.Although she didn't mention any names, everyone knew who she was referring to. 我查的灵格斯词典，上面一行是解释，这应该是这个短语最接近的一种解释了
哦 这样把 Admittedly, working in the office makes the coordination of the company's different department more convenient。however，it pales in comparison to the advantage of working at home. 因为你又有admittedly又有 however，明显就是两句话，很难不补出主语，就写成一个句子，我是这么理解的。。
-- by 会员 浅吟天 (2012/10/21 9:10:22)
作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-21 11:17
我尽快写···· 不好意思，又慢了作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-21 14:26
TPO6 听力有点差 ， 有的地方很模糊 The reading passage focuses on the subject that the communal online encyclopedia has several disadvantages compared with the traditional encyclopedias. The professor's lecture deals with the opposite issue, which challenges what the reading states. And in the listening material, she use three specific points to support her view. First of all, even though the reading passage suggests that the communal online encyclopedia usually lack academic credentials which make the material fault in some way. The professor makes the point that the normal encyclopedias also have mistakes, and the online one can fix the fault more efficient than the traditional one, which means the online encyclopedia performs better than the printed encyclopedias in the update area. The professor's statement disproves its counterpart in the reading. Moreover, contrary to the statement shown in the reading that the data of the online encyclopedias can be changed by everyone who own the correct original entry. The professor contends that experts put two methods into protecting the online data from dangerous. One is the original data is safety enough and not everyone can change the basic format. The other is they has special staff to secure the safety of the data. Finally, another important perspective mentioned in the listening material is that the online encyclopedias offer more divers and interesting contents. But the reading hold a entirely conflicting idea that the new one creates a false priority impression of the topics.The professor proves that the claim is specious by pointing out that the online one provides various and funny topics to people and no need to worry about the space which the problem old one must to face. 作者: dreamcece 时间: 2012-10-22 03:43 标题: 10.20 综合改 蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误
The reading passage focuses on the subject that the communal online encyclopedia has several disadvantages compared with the traditional encyclopedias. The professor's lecture deals with 感觉用holds opposite opinion 比较好 the opposite issue, which challenges what the reading states. And in the listening material, she use three specific points to support her view. First of all, even though the reading passage suggests that the communal online encyclopedia usually lacks academic credentials which make the material fault in some way. The professor makes the point that the normal encyclopedias also have mistakes, and the online one can fix the fault more efficient than the traditional one, which means the online encyclopedia performs better than the printed encyclopedias in the update area. 这句话太长了，建议分开；而且在听力原文中，这是两个点，（complete correct cannot be found either on/off line; the important point for online encyclopedia is that they can be corrected any time.）所以最好分成两句话写The professor's statement disproves its counterpart in the reading. Moreover, contrary to the statement shown in the reading that the data of the online encyclopedias can be changed by everyone who own the correct original entry. The professor contends that experts put two methods into protecting the online data from dangerous. 这句话逻辑不是特别清晰，Lecturer并没有contratry to the point,而是说这个顾虑不应该是问题，因为blabla；其次，如果照楼主的表达，这两句应该和在一起，因为前一句结构不完整（contratry to...），仅能作为一个分句。 One is the original data is safety enough and not everyone can change the basic format. The other is they has special staff to secure the safety of the data. Finally, another important perspective mentioned in the listening material is that the online encyclopedias offer more divers and interesting contents. But the reading hold a entirely conflicting idea that the new one creates a false priority impression of the topics.The professor proves that the claim is specious by pointing out that the online one provides various and funny topics to people and no need to worry about the space which the problem old one must to face. 这一个点感觉楼主是听明白了，但是没有把听到的细节摆出来，或者说是表达得不清晰，反而花了很多句式在模板上，有效信息不多。其次，这一个点有两个分论点，第一论点被第一句话一代而过，有点欠缺（because of the print encyclopedia has limited space, so they have to decide which is important or not; however, the judgement to one topic from the academic group members may be biased/ not reflect the great interest of people. ）;第二个论点是online encyclopedia没有limited space这个困扰，而且它的variety正是它的优势。楼主把主要区别：Limited space这个点听到了，但是细节论证差异上面做的不够。 总结：感觉上来说，楼主的语法大问题没有。 这一次主要纠内容上面的问题：1、 细节不全，或者表达有误。2、套用模板导致有效信息太少。3、 每个点的论证上面细节链不充分，而且没有把原文中每个小点间论证的关键找到，所以可能在内容的全面性上和正确性上会被扣分。 well, open to discuss.作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-22 11:44
十分感谢，我的确是用的模板。差的太多了·· 看来以前是走近误区了作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-11-29 22:51 11月29日 独立：Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
With the booming of the society, job gradually affects our individual emotion in an increasing number of various measures. The job occupies more and more time in the present life. So, it cannot be denied the fact that job has more effect on the happiness than the social life does. Three points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my view. First of all, Job costs much more percentage of our energy, like time and emotion. We have barely time to deal with other issue with full vigour. To take myself for example. I normally need to stay in the office about ten hours one day and must spare no effort on everything. In the purpose of achieving high performance, I usually work for additional five hours one week. After the entire day, all I want is sleeping on the bed and saying nothing. This case is not rare, and in reality many of my friends need to refer to the same matter at the same time. In that situation, we hardly own the so-called social life and the social life cannot affect our happiness. Moreover, the level of our life mostly depends on the salary of the job, in other words, without the job we cannot live in the comfortable department or buy the delicious food. No one can perfectly adapt to the life without money. According to a recent psychological research showed that only when we solve the problem of food and habitat we can deal with the emotional enjoyment, in brief, a hungry man does not own happiness in mind. In general, the money offered by the job is the basement of the happiness. Finally, The brilliant achievement made in the job is also the source of happiness. A man needs some proofs in his career to proves his ability. That absolutely brings happiness to individuals. The achievement is the milestone in the life. It also represents the hard-work and effort we have ever did. No one wants to work without payment. In this way the job obviously contributes to the happiness. Admittedly, the social life can influence our happiness in some certain extent. Actually, the advantages of social life pale in comparison to the benefits of the job. In addition, I therefore stick to my viewpoint that job greatly affects the happiness.作者: 正儿八经潜水 时间: 2012-11-30 16:09 11月29日 独立修改 Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.
With the booming of the society, job gradually affects our individual emotion in an increasing number of various measures(感觉有些啰嗦，简洁点更好). The job occupies more and more time in the present life. So, it cannot be denied the fact that（好句型，学习了）job has more effect on the happiness than the social life does. Three points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my view.
First of all, Job costs much more percentage of our energy, like time and emotion. We have barely notime to deal with other issues with full vigour. To take myself for example, I normally need to stay in the office about ten hours one day and must spare no effort on everythingin the work. In For the purpose of achieving higher performance, I usually work for additional five hours one every week. After the entire day(表达有问题感觉，直接用After work), all I want is sleeping on the a bed and saying doingnothing. This case is not rare, and in reality many of my friends need to refer to the same matter at the same time(同时处理同样的事？有点过分地用短语的意思，直接说朋友们也处于这样的状况). In that situation, we hardly own the so-called social life and the social life cannot affect our happiness.
Moreover, the level of our life mostly depends on the salary of the job, in other words, without the job we cannot live in the comfortable department or buy the delicious food. No one can perfectly adapt to the life without money. According to a recent psychological research, itshows that only when we solve the problem of food and habitatwe can wedeal with the emotional enjoyment. In brief, a hungry man does not own happiness in mind. In general, the money offered by the job is the basement of the happiness.(最好说一下social life不能带来money，对幸福影响不大)
Finally, The brilliant achievement made in the job is also the source of happiness. A man needs some proofs in his career to proves his ability. That absolutely brings happiness to individuals.（这句应该放到接下来两句后面，不然显得后面的都跑题了）The achievement is the milestone in the life. It also represents the hard-work and effort we have ever did. No one wants to work without payment.（这里简单说一下social life不能带来这样的幸福感，题目中是比较的，千万要切题） In this way the job obviously contributes moreto the happiness.
Admittedly（不要说公认地，这只是你个人的看法）, the social life can influence our happiness in some certain extent. Actually, the advantages of social life pale in comparison to the benefits of the job. （这句换一下，不要说优势，工作对幸福感影响更大，但不一定是好的影响，比如你第一个论点）In addition, I therefore stick to my viewpoint that job greatly affects the happiness.
你喜欢用新颖的词和短语，但一定不要偏离原来的意思，反而出现中式英文的现象。
加油！ 作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-11-30 16:45
哥们 ~错了 ··你不是改我的····谢谢了···作者: 正儿八经潜水 时间: 2012-11-30 18:37
纳尼。。。我怎么老干这种事。。。我是女的我看了下，过六点了，我的修改对象还未上传，无压力作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-11-30 19:00
e ~不好意思啊··这么称呼别人习惯了··作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-12-1 11:54 11月30 独立：Disagree or agree: It is impossible to be completely honest with your friend.
Agree Honest may hurt the friendship Disagree Honest in the essential quality Honest is good for our friendship When i was i child, i was taught to be honest to others 10:46 With the booming of the society, the competition among individuals become more and more sharp. Therefore, being absolutely honest with friends seems an impossible quality. However, I would say the exact opposite that it is still possible to be completely honest with friend. Three points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my view.
First of all, honesty is the precious and necessary quality in the present or past, and we should spare no effort to achieve it. We cannot emphasize to much the important of honesty in the modern communication. A company which always lie to consumers does not just lose its profit but the reputation. As a result of lie, this company will drowns in the sea of business. The same phenomenon happened in our friendship. One without honesty can even survive in the modern society, let along make friends. In the present, People admire the quality of honesty. This case is not rare, and in reality many countries hold the same point. Hence, it is possible to be completely honest not only with friends but others. Moreover, Honesty plays an essential role in the built process of friendship. Cheating may pose a significant barrier to the people who want to be friends. For the purpose of trust what is the fundament of the friends, No one wants to make friends with dishonest individuals. To take my own experience as a example, as soon as one of my friends cheats on me, that behaviour will conveys a negative impression to me, and the lag effect may more serious. I cannot image to trust a person who had ever lied to me, then the lie enables our friendship run to the bottom of the road. This scene is the worst consequence what no one excepts to see. In general, honesty not only possible but also necessary to our friendship. Finally, I have been taught to be honest to people since I was a little kid. As for me, To honest with friends is as nature as breathing. It is may hard for people who not familiar with honest to be completely honest with friends immediately. But by practicing to be honest with friends frequently, everyone could get the goal. In a nutshell, to be completely honest to friends may lead to some troubles and sometimes the white lie also contributes to a better relationship. But those viewpoints still cannot hold water because those situations seldom appear and cannot represent the majority. To be more precise, the benefits brought from to honest with friends cover its flaws. In addition, I therefore stick to my choice that it is possible to be completely honest to friends.作者: 正儿八经潜水 时间: 2012-12-1 14:33 11月30 修改 独立：Disagree or agree: It is impossible to be completely honest with your friend.
Agree
Honest may hurt the friendship
Disagree
Honest in the essential quality
Honest is good for our friendship
When i was i child, i was taught to be honest to others
10:46
With the booming of the society, the competition among individuals becomes more and more sharp. Therefore, being absolutely honest with friends seems an impossible quality. However, I would say the exact opposite that it is still possible to be completely honest with friends. Three points in different dimensions will be explained to testify my view.
First of all, honesty is the precious and necessary quality in the present or past, and we should spare no effort to achieve it. Wecannot do not have to emphasize too much on the important importance of honesty in the modern communication. A company which always lie to consumers does not just only lose its profit but the reputation. As a result of lie, this company will drowns in the sea of business. The same phenomenon happens in our friendship. One without honestycan even cannot survive in the modern society, let along alone make friends. In the present, People admire the quality of honesty. This case is not rare, and in reality many countries hold the same point. Hence, it is possible to be completely honest not only with friends but others.(最后一句一加反而看出你有些跑偏题了，去掉)
Moreover, Honesty plays an essential role in the built building of friendship. Cheating may pose a significant barrier to the people who want to be friends with us. For the purpose of trust, what which is the fundament of the friends friendship, no one want to make friends with dishonest individuals. To take my own experience as a example, as soon as one of my friends cheat on me, that behaviour will conveys leave a negative impression to on me, and the lag effect may be more serious. I cannot image to trust a person who had ever lied to me, then the lie enable our friendship to run to the bottom of the road. This scene is the worst consequencewhat that(查一下that用法) no one except to see. In general, honesty is not only possible but also necessary to our friendship.(去掉，理由同上，还有这个论点好像包含在第一个论点中。。。)
Finally, I have been taught to be honest to people since I was a little kid. As for me, To being honest with friends is as nature as breathing. It is may hard for people whonot familiar with honest are not used to being completely honest with friends immediately. But by practicing being honest with friends frequently, everyone could get the goal.(这段叫我怎么说好呢，翻译成中文的说法都是很幼稚的话)
In a nutshell, to be completely honest to with friends may lead to some troubles and sometimes the white lie also contribute to a better relationship. But those viewpoints still cannot hold water because those situations seldom appear and cannot represent the majority.(这句就是反驳自己啊。。。) To be more precise, the benefits brought from to being honest with friends cover its flaws. In addition, I therefore stick to my choice that it is possible to be completely honest to with friends.
总结：
就这篇文章而言，
我觉得写同意更好些，反对的论点总是很相似，没有层次。
就扬兄而言，
三个论点一定要写得差不多长，否则容易被认为论据不足，胡乱堆砌；
不能乱用短语，反而显得不伦不类。
加油！！ 作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-12-1 15:18
这些层出不穷的小错误看的我自己都要吐血了····谢谢修改作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-12-25 22:32 Should company use public recognition to rewardhard working, not to use money 21:17 Should company use public recognition ormoney to reward hard working? It is easy to image people with different backgroundsand perspectives will judge it with their own angles. As for me, both of themethod is useful to reward hard working. But only when they tied with eachother can they achieve the highest efficiency. Several points will testify myview. First of all, it cannot be denied the factthat individuals need money, thus money can motivate us to work hard. Under thesituation of economic crisis, an increasing number of people lose their jobs. Inorder to satisfy the demand of family, employees work hard and want to gain higherpay.They do not know when and where the disaster will occur to themselves. Onthe other hand, Money can motivate people to work hard. Owing to gaining thescholarship, I study really hard. For the reason that the scholarship can releasethe economic pressure of my parents. And I can use the money to buy somethinguseful. This case is not rare, in reality the employees generally will face thesame phenomenon. But the money cannot effect at a long time, and when we wipeit out there is nothing can be left. Moreover, it cannot emphasize theimportance of public recognition too much. Everyone wants to gain reputationfrom others, and public recognition is an essential way to do that among all ofthe means. Praise can give person a sense of satisfaction. And this feeling canmotivate people to work hard too. But this feeling functionedlonger than that money did. To take one of my friends, who was an excellent teamleader of Microsoft, for an example. He always told me that gold pales in comparisonto the significant of reputation. His success all comes from the support ofco-workers, and the reputation is source of support. So, public recognition actuallyis a key factor in our career. But the public recognition cannot feed the basicneed of human. Peopleneed money and achievement need public recognition. They can cover theirshortage when they are used together to reward hard working. Therefore, I stickto my point that company should use both money and public recognition to rewardhard working. 作者: 45573asdasd 时间: 2012-12-25 23:17
Should company use public recognition ormoney to reward hard working? It is easy to imagine people with different backgroundsand perspectives will judge it with their own angles. As for me, both of themethod is useful to reward hard working. But only when they tied with eachother can they achieve the highest efficiency. Several points will testify myview. First of all, it cannot be denied the factthat individuals need money, thus money can motivate us to work hard. Under thesituation of economic crisis, an increasing number of people lose their jobs. Inorder to satisfy the demand of family, employees work hard and want to gain higherpay.They do not know when and where the disaster will occur to themselves. Onthe other hand, Money can motivate people to work hard.（连续出现两个一模一样观点？） Owing to gaining thescholarship, I study really hard. For the reason that the scholarship can releasethe economic pressure of my parents. And I can use the money to buy somethinguseful. This case is not rare, in reality the employees generally will face thesame phenomenon. But the money cannot effect at a long time, and when we wipeit out there is nothing can be left. Moreover, it cannot emphasize theimportance of public recognition too much. Everyone wants to gain reputationfrom others, and public recognition is an essential way to do that among all ofthe means. Praise can give person a sense of satisfaction. And this feeling canmotivate people to work hard too. But this feeling functionedlonger than that money did. To take one of my friends, who was an excellent teamleader of Microsoft, for （as）an example. He always told me that gold pales in comparisonto the significant of reputation. His success all comes from the support ofco-workers, and the reputation is source of support. （你这个朋友只是说说就成功了/不信服）So, public recognition actuallyis a key factor in our career. But the public recognition cannot feed the basicneed of human. Peopleneed money and achievement need public recognition. They can cover theirshortage when they are used together to reward hard working. Therefore, I stickto my point that company should use both money and public recognition to rewardhard working. 问题还是客观存在的。连着打字是按错字来的，你上下错了差不多20个。字数稍微嫌少。影响分数。逻辑的连贯性还是不错的。看看素材。贝贝句子作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-12-26 13:01
谢谢修改~那个单词连着的问题··我也不知道怎么回事。从WORD2010上复制过来 个别单词就成那样了···作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-12-31 15:37 Independent Writing: Some people think that auniversity professor should focus time on doing research; while others thinkthat the main role of a professor is to educate students in university. 14:30 有好多 被连接起来的两个单词··· 我这WORD不知道怎么回事，一复制上来就这个样子··无视好了 Should university professor focus time ondoing research or educating students? It is easy to imagine people withdifferent backgrounds and perspectives will judge it with different angles. Asfor me, the university professor should mainly educate students in university.Several examples will be explained to testify my vision. First of all, it cannot emphasize theimportance of educational role played by university too much. As we all known, Universityis born to spread knowledge and science to people. If the university professorspay too much attention on research, the university would lose its original faithand even cannot be called a university. Public reputation paly an increasing essentialrole in the development of university. The universities gain their reputation mostlyby high-quality educational level and outstanding alumni. Thus, universityshould spare no effort on educating students. The students can feel satisfiedwith the knowledge they got and their enhanced ability in various areas. Theeducational part is a key link in the functional chain of university. Moreover, the universities should use mostof money to update the facilities of university and improve the user-feeling insteadof pay money on research. Every academic research is a money-cost project. Ifuniversities use that money to rebuild the campus, it will not only convey agood impression to visitors but also offer a comfortable study environment tostudents. This case is not rare, and in reality many university cannot balancetheir cost between research and education. In this way, the problem can besolved easily. To take one of my friends, who now study in a university, as an example.The students in his university always complained about the poor facilities andcould not find proper and enough place to do practice. On the contrary, the labin his university is the most fantastic place that I had ever seen. Thehigh-technological equipment can be used conveniently. However, this university’sreputation among student is bad; they all say the university looks like anacademic lab rather than a university where a good place for students to study. Admittedly, we cannot ignore the fact thatsome university professors enjoy the experiences of research, and they chasetheir dreams by doing research. At this situation, we should not force them tofocus on education for the reason that they have their right to do research. Theprofessor also can find some professional institutions to do their research. Allin all, the nature duty of university is education, and the university shouldpay more attention on education. Given all these detailed analysis, I firmlybelieve that professors should focus on education. Even though research canhelp them achieve their academic goal, it is an unrealistic situation for theprofessors to spend all time on research. The professor should help university gainpublic reputation and improve the level of facilities by focusing on education.作者: conanwang 时间: 2013-1-1 18:16
Should university professor focus time on doing research or educating students?
It is easy to imagine people with different backgrounds and perspectives will judge it with different angles. As for me, the university professor should mainly educate students in university. Several examples will be explained to testify my vision.（直截了当进入主题，很好！）
First of all, it cannot emphasize the importance of educational role played by university too much. As we all known, University is born to spread knowledge and science to people. If the university professors pay too much attention on research, the university would lose its original faith and even cannot be called a university.（此句可可省去） Public reputation plays an increasing essential role in the development of university. The universities gain their reputation mostly by high-quality educational level and outstanding alumni. Thus, university should spare no effort on educating students. The students can feel satisfied with the knowledge they got and their enhanced ability in various areas. The educational part is a key link in the functional chain of university.
Moreover, the universities should use most of money to update the facilities of university and improve the user-feeling instead of pay money on research.（主题句似乎偏题，题目问的是whether professors should spend time，而不是whether university spend money） Every academic research is a money-cost project. If universities use that money to rebuild the campus, it will not only convey good impression to visitors but also offer a comfortable study environment to students. This case is not rare, and in reality many university cannot balance their cost between research and education. In this way, the problem can be solved easily. To take one of my friends, who now study in a university, as an example? The students in his university always complained about the poor facilities and could not find proper and enough place to do practice. On the contrary, the lain his university is the most fantastic place that I had ever seen. The high-technological equipment can be used conveniently. However, this university’s reputation among student is bad; they all say the university looks like an academic lab rather than a university where a good place for students to study.
Admittedly, we cannot ignore the fact that some university professors enjoy the experiences of research, and they chase their dreams by doing research. At this situation, we should not force them to focus on education for the reason that they have their right to do research. The professor also can find some professional institutions to do their research. Allin all(这个词组是什么意思), the nature duty of university is education and the university should pay more attention on education.（这段不错。）
Given all these detailed analysis, I firmly believe that professors should focus on education. Even though research can help them achieve their academic goal, it is an unrealistic situation for the professors to spend all time on research. The professor should help university gain public reputation and improve the level of facilities by focusing on education.（结尾不错。）
______________________________________________________________________________________________ I make a little amendment to your sentences to improve your essay’s overall flow. I hope this will be helpful.
Several examples will be explained to testify my vision. ==>> I will use some examples to illustrate my views.
As we all known, University is born to spread knowledge and science to people. ==>> As we all know, University was designed to spread knowledge and promote science.
If the university professors pay too much attention on research, the university would lose its original faith and even cannot be called a university. ==>> If the university professors pay too much attention on research, the university would lose its original faith.
Public reputation plays an increasing essential role in the development of university. ==>> The development of university relies on the Public reputation.
Thus, university should spare no effort on educating students. ==>> Thus, scholars should spend less time in teaching students.
Every academic research is a money-cost project. ==>> Most of academic researches are expensive project.
At this situation, we should not force them to focus on education for the reason that they have their right to do research. ==>>At this situation, we should not force them to focus on education because they have right to conduct research.
The professor also can find some professional institutions to do their research. ==>> The professors can also find other research institutions to do their research. .
Allan all, the nature duty of university is education and the university should pay more attention on education. ==>>The primary task of universities is cultivating the talented. Thereby, universities should pay more attention on education.
The professor should help university gain public reputation and improve the level of facilities by focusing on education. ==>> The professors should pay more efforts on winning public reputation for the university and focus more time on education in order to improve the university facilities.作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2013-1-1 19:46
谢谢修改~~ 那个词是all in all 总而言之的意思作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2013-1-1 21:50 有好多 被连接起来的两个单词··· 我这WORD不知道怎么回事，一复制上来就这个样子··无视好了 TPO2 The reading and the listening upload anopposite viewpoint toward whether it is better to work in a team. The professorillustrates that several reasons mentioned in the article are questionable. Heuse a specific research conducted by a company to support his point. First of all, the lecture contradicts thestatement in the article, which indicates that the team is work as whole, andit is unfair for the people who most contribute to the project. In other words,the accomplishment made by the team member is not equal. And those who did abetter job cannot be treated equally; they deserved richer rewarding. Theprofessor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading. Moreover, regarding the decision-makingadvantage, the professor argues that some good idea may be ignored by the teamleaders instead of being fully discussed and it takes longer time for a team toget an agreement. The team leader may also influence other co-workers' standpoint.They do not want to contend their opinion because the responsibility is sharedby the team. This do harm to the process of project. That directly contradictswhat the reading indicates.作者: cooperdw 时间: 2013-1-2 13:15 The reading and the listening upload an opposite viewpoint toward whether it is better to work in a team. The professor illustrates that several reasons mentioned in the article are questionable. He uses a specific research conducted by a company to support his point. First of all, the lecture contradicts the statement in the article, which indicates that the team is work as whole, and it is unfair for the people who most contribute to the project. In other words, the accomplishment made by the team member is not equal. And those who did a better job cannot be treated equally; they deserved richer rewarding. The professor's argument disproves its counterpart in the reading. Moreover, regarding the decision-making advantage, the professor argues that some good idea may be ignored by the team leaders(文中没说道leader) instead of being fully discussed and it takes longer time for a team to get an agreement. The team leader may also influence other co-workers' standpoint. They do not want to contend their opinion because the responsibility is shared by the team.(文中没提到这个意思吧，或者你曲解了) This do harm to the process of project. That directly contradicts what the reading indicates.
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We agreed never to refer to the matter again.Although she didn't mention any names, everyone knew who she was referring to.
我看了下，过六点了，我的修改对象还未上传，无压力