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作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-14 20:47
标题: shatong424的作业贴
9月14日   占座   独立 综合
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-15 18:19
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: people are now easier to become educated than in the past.

As the time passed, a huge percentage of population in the world, nowadays seem to be educated. Even if a fraction of people also remain at home at the point when they should be at the school, many people fulfill their educational acquisition; thus, it is fairly true that people, as it were, are now easier to get access to education.

The prosperous economical condition brings about whatever the huge range of people desire for their educational need. Above all, the material of people's need, specifically speaking, the up-to-date books presenting the latest knowledge, the professional and experienced teachers, the active and scientific teaching technique, has been reaching to everyone at no more than the middle-class society. The upper-class and middle-class society are predominant in the present period of the time, and as many knows. The economical resources are concentrate on these two classes, and even the low-class families, some of them suffering from the problem of the educational fee, can more or less be funded by the government, other members of the society and even, at the same time, some individuals with the high-level standard of life. In the past, however, with the high cost of the paper material, the books could only be viewed by landlords; because of the low salary, only a fraction of teachers were engaged in the teaching; owing to the economical policy of the government at that point, the teaching technique stood at the ignorance of the people's mind. The consequent effects would have been the people's lack of the education, which are completely different from the picture of education today.

The huge change involved in the attitude of the education steers the people toward the way in which people are easier to be taught. To start with, the parent's attitude shifts dramatically. The investigation on the internet shows us the sign that the people's investment is predetermined to serve for the children's future happiness, the big portion of which is the education. Let us get down to the present tendency. First, more and more customs in the bank, fill in the application form of the educational loan, because these money would lay the solid foundation for their children long-term education. Secondly, not only do parents pay more and more attention to the rank of the school, but are becoming more sensitive to every chance which can perfectly finalize their children's schooling. In contrast, dating back to the last century, just four or five decades before now, people in most part, with the traditional thought, never be aware of the importance of their children's education. In retrospect, the children were brought up via imparting the farming technique on their children, and promoted to be good farming assistance rather than an excellent intellectual. There is no doubt that their parents at that point, more or less, hindered their children development on the education. What if their parents discarded such an old viewpoint, could their children be educated easily, could not they?

The extraordinary technology innovations provide children with many methods to acquire the education. During the ninetieth century, children studied in their family, having little chance touch the paper books, and there were no library for them to search for, partly because the knowledge is kind of luxury-——only being shared in the politicians’ or in those who were regarded as the representation of elites. Hardly could normal people achieve, however desirable, what people nowadays create, mostly for the objective condition, the technology, constraint their children vision of the world, unless they could travel afar to gain the knowledge as some few people did. Unlike the lack of state-of-the-art technology in the past, the television and media have delivered the information from every corner of the world to the people sitting in front of the screen; The computer with access to the Internet--the most fashionable and common element of the technology-- are brought in families step by step; and needless to say, with the printing having been the low-level technique, the library can be seen everywhere; even, the auditoria and visual classes can be carried out on the internet, downloaded to the portable device like the Mp4 or the mobile phone, viewed everywhere--in the bus, the public shopping mall, the restaurant and etc. If only you want to learn something, everything with the respect of the every field would be available.

"It is the time of the information." people said. So, I believe that the storm of such information explosion sweep away illiterates, sending the knowledge to us. The education is something like the staple of the meal, enjoyed in everyday life.
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-16 20:18
标题: 9 15 独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Professors in the universities or colleges should focus on academic research rather than educating students. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As it is said, the professors going about the scientific research promote the statue of the university and contribute to the development of the present technological level. Even so, I could merely say that as an essential role, the professors should spend more time educating their students than focusing on the research.

Above all, the performance of students heavily hinges upon the professors’ attitude toward them. Regarding the interests of the university, the efforts devoted to the students are mostly transformed into the excellence of the students in the future. Generally, with obligation to the students, the student-centered schools like Harvard always attract and cultivate more well-rounded students than the teacher-centered schools do. Harvard's professors make an excessive effort to conduct their students on making progress in all-around aspects." It is teaching students that is the focus. ", said Drew Gilpin Faust, the last president of Harvard. Just like the saying “you reap what you sow.”, facing the peer pressure, students graduated from Harvard are becoming role models, actively exerting considerable influence on various realms.

Furthermore, teaching students is virtually a main driving force behind the technology innovation. Indisputably, the professors play a pivotal role in the science and technology improvement, and at the same time, the professors who can turn out a flash of an innovative idea are often assisted by the student. For instance, the professor of Harvard called Robert P. Kirshner, who is doing research about the astrophysics, was invited to make speech or to give a lecture in many famous universities like MIT and Yale. After integrating the teaching methodology and the academic research many years, his spending on teaching prompts him to rebuild and revise his own ideas so that he has been excellent in the astrophysics field. By the same token, it's little wonder that a professor reaching such a high level can't be free from the student's assistance.

Granted, professors’ doing research is part and parcel of the technology innovation. The automated machines are operated based on the scientific fundamentals which professors have defined; the breakthrough on the program of space probe are pushed forward by the professors’ astonishing discoveries; the progress of the DNA program have been accelerated after their a large number of the experiments. No matter how essential the doing research is, however, professors have to make a huge effort to promote the development of students. Note that everything revolving around the technology innovation is actually a branch of knowledge, and knowledge, as many think, must be carried from one generation to the next. The stream of the technology would be drained away, if the emphasis were not placed on the students.

To sum up, it is educating students that can provide the impetus behind the revolutionized technology and the advancement of students, and that have to be concentrated as well.
作者: 超级无敌小鹤鹤    时间: 2012-9-16 23:25
欢迎加入小分队~~~ 加油~
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-17 00:12
嗯、我是新来的，还不熟悉大家，以后多多关照啊， 一起杀T
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-17 20:36
标题: 9 17 独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: the grades can encourage the students to study


Indeed, students love the childhood so far with their buddies as company; thus, the orgies of hatred towards the schooling are capable of directing them go astray. Fortunately, the grades like kind of rule can constraint students’ fury of learning, and maybe turn these students into the enthusiasts in study.

The pupils in the primary schools are awarded to perform well by acquiring good marks in their ordinary test. The butterfly effect of the grades has been shown obviously. In particular, students notice the subtle depression on their parents’ faces while their peers are praised, and then back to the house, they are impressively aware of the role models established by parents and asked to imitate these peers’ behavior. In fact, not only for their parents request, but also for their own psychological nature, they appear to be jealous of others’ glory and are injected with the violent ambition; thus, they hardly give up the chance to seek for the relatively better score—the indication of their good performance and the sign of their medal. Without any doubt, the high score is the fruit of the studious people and only can be created via continuous study.

More importantly, as for the middle school students, the high score is the gateway to the ideal education. In view of this point, it is better to discuss about the students in China. With the fierce competition, whether they can continue their education in the relatively ideal schools is the main factor of their seeking the high scores, and high score, as many people learn, can knock down the gate of the advanced school. The final test in the last year of students, for example, is significant for their higher education, and they do their utmost to gain the perfect score regardless of staying up late every midnight, harming their own vision and bearing the loneliness for preparing tests. It is worthy of noting that all of these astonishing efforts to study are the students’ initiatives but the imposition on them. Therefore, it is proved that the grades are truly an impetus behind students’ learning.

Last but not least, the scores weigh heavily against the future profession or job of students. In terms of the graduates’ interview, the company recruitment firstly concentrates on the educational experience, frankly speaking, the degrees acquired in one’s university or in a particular field. The GPA of a student, the official criterion of one’s ability, belongs to the one of the above points, and at the meanwhile, mostly hinges on the course attendance, the average grades of every test, the achievement of their academic research and so forth. All of these items are turned out through the hard work. Only if students get down to study hard enough would they be picked up among their peers; hence it is fair to say that scores can stimulate their learning enthusiasm.

The elites are always molded by the grades, which I take leave to recognize as driving force behind their learning.
作者: xiumu2280    时间: 2012-9-18 12:46
9.17独立
Indeed, students love the childhood so far with their buddies as company/in good company(兴趣相投）; thus, the orgies of hatred towards the schooling are capable of directing them go astray. Fortunately, the grades like kind/kinds of rule can constraint(名词）/restrict students’ fury of learning, and maybe turn these students into the（删掉） enthusiasts in study.

The pupils in the primary schools are awarded to（to后面接获得奖励的人也就是pupils,短语意思是XX被给予什么，是想说好成绩给了那些表现好的孩子？) perform well by acquiring good marks in their ordinary test. The butterfly effect of the grades has been shown obviously. In particular, students notice the subtle depression on their parents’ faces while their/other peers are praised, and then back to the house, they are impressively aware of the role models established by parents and asked to imitate these peers’ behavior. In fact, not only for their parents/parents' request, but also for their own psychological nature, they appear to be jealous of others’ glory and are injected with the violent/intense一般不这么搭配 ambition; thus, they hardly give up the chance to seek for the relatively better score—the indication of their good performance and the sign of their medal. Without any doubt, the high score is the fruit of the studious people and only can be created via continuous study.

More importantly, as for the middle school students, the high score is the gateway to the ideal education. In view of this point, it is better to discuss about the students in China. With the fierce competition, whether they can continue their education in the relatively ideal schools is the main factor of their seeking （for)the high scores, and high score, as many people learn/learned, can knock down/ON the gate of the advanced school. The final test in the last year of students/middle school, for example, is significant for their higher education, and they do their utmost to gain the perfect score regardless of staying up late every midnight, harming their own vision and bearing the loneliness for preparing tests. It is worthy of noting that all of these astonishing efforts to study are the students’ initiatives but/instead of the imposition on them. Therefore, it is proved that the grades are truly an impetus behind students’ learning.

Last but not least, the scores weigh heavily against the future profession or job of students. In terms of the graduates’ interview, the company/company's recruitment firstly concentrates on the educational experience, frankly speaking一般用在发表观点前面/in other words, the degrees acquired in one’s university or in a particular field. The GPA of a student, the official criterion of one’s ability, belongs to the one of the above points（这句没有理解啊```!), and at the meanwhile, mostly hinges on the course attendance, the average grades of every test, the achievement of their academic research and so forth. All of these items are turned out through the hard work. Only if students get down to study hard enough would they be picked up among their peers; hence it is fair to say that scores can stimulate their learning enthusiasm.

The elites are always molded by the grades, which I take leave to recognize as driving force behind their learning.

单词，短语什么真的很丰富···好多我都不认识
字数好多，打字速度要求高
中间论述段的首句最好是主题句
结尾太短，应该对上面有个概括总结，更有逻辑
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-22 03:12
标题: 9 21 独立
Some people prefer to spend their money on travelling or vacation, while others prefer to spend their money for the future. Which one do you prefer and why?


The arrangement of spending money weighs heavily against our life standard. In light of life standard, I tend to profess that transforming my cash into my account in bank and saving it for future are more rational at my disposal.


Above all, so much uncertainty of my future financial capacity restricts my thought to saving my money. In this case, it is necessary to conceive what I would spend in the future. Materially speaking, housing and food are two important items in my daily life. Considering that the house price has been soaring day by day and the food price has been inflated, which is a severe issue haunting citizens, many people sacrifice their whole life to earn a house. Even so, more horribly, many of them also hold nothing in their hand up to the end of their life. As many people have been suffering from such a circumstance, can I ensure that I will be content with my basic demand in my future? When the question of where I will live and what I will eat in the future arises, the good strategy would be to save my money prior to the time when your income is no more than your expenditure.


With another aspect important to my life, the financial budget on the educational investment hinges on the decision of saving money. In other words, the consumption of the offspring’s education is deeply dependent upon the amount I have saved before. In China, where I live, for instance, as long as you intend to raise a child, the educational investment inevitably occupy a great amount of your income. In fact, in accordance with the lowest standard of education investment, a couple needs nearly more than one hundred thousand RMB to respond to a child’s request for education; however, the annual average per capita income statistically show that 80 percent of population have not been equipped with such a corresponding financial capacity yet. Only if I stock the cash previously would I take advantage of these amounts to fulfill my child’s need. Therefore, the realization of such reality steer me towards the way of saving money.


Admittedly, spending money in travelling, in a sense, is also a reason proposal. With respect of the heavy loads on work and the trivialities of daily life, what people can do to relieve such outward pressure is to seek for the temporary relaxation, as those who has despised city life travel far away to the wild forest but back to their homes soon, just for noticing the lack of food and of suitable room to live in. As if sleeping pills can pacify your mind but cannot truly help you sleep in regular time, travelling is merely able to seemingly obscure the facts that your tough life always follows you. Once the ideal world disappears and you have to face your real life again, the benefits of travelling would be undermined.


To sum up, regarding the above points, I prefer saving money for future than spending it in travelling or vacation.
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-22 12:52
标题: 有那个好心人给帮忙看看吧 谢谢 虽然没占座
9 20 综合

Recently, the fossils found by the scientists, as the reading claims, cooperate some materials which could be testified as the remains of the T. rex’s living tissues—blood vessels, red blood cells and collagen matrix. However, the professor profess that the evidence provided by the reading cannot supports this idea.; therefore, he extract his viewpoints from some evidences to oppose what the reading suggests.



First, regarding the soft and flexible substances found the channels, the empty area in the T rex’s bone, professor thinks that these soft materials might originate from other sources, for the bacteria existing in the hollows in the bone secreted a trace of organic materials after they left the bone,. Thereby, the soft materials found in the fossils cannot be justified as the remains of the blood vessels.



Moreover, considering the point that spheres presenting inside the bone could be the remains of the red blood cells, the professors believe that these spheres containing the iron could merely be some reddish mineral instead of the remains of the red blood cells, because these fossils can also be found in the same place amoung other animals. For example, many primitive animals also have these spheres, but they have not the red blood cells, which illustrates that the spheres’ origin were not the red blood cells.



In the end, professor casts doubt to the third point posed by the reading that collagen detected in the bone’s fossils would be the remains of the living bone tissue. In fact, in accordance with the professor's  confirmation, the collagen which are regarded as a part of the T rex living in the 70 million years ago can never be preserved more than 100 thousand years or so, which strongly contradicts what the reading suggests. On the other hand, the collagen can be produced by the human’s skin, which may provides the clue that the collagen inside the fossils could come from the researcher’s skin when they handle the fossil samples
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-9-26 04:05
which do you choose to improve your health：kind of food you eat，amount of exercise，amount of stress



After the long-term research, the healthy body proved to be the result of a variety of food; thus, the kind of the food must be considered when I face the issue of my health.



The variety of the food in the diet can lead to the good health. People can learn of this viewpoint from the concrete example. People living in China averagely have a relatively long lifespan. In contrast, the people inhabiting America keep a relatively shorter one. In substance, the only difference of these two groups of people is related to the composition of their daily diet. In accordance with the research, with excessive deep-fried food, people feeding on the fried food like the fried chicken and French fries are subject possibly to the obesity and the coronary heart disease. What assists people in leading a healthy life is the sensible diet consisting of vegetable and some grains with a limited amount of oil, which is the source of Chinese food. We can sense that people coming to Chinese are desperate for the utter changes in their diet for the sake of their health. As people in authority claim, seeking for our health virtually need combine our force to improve our diet











The food can supply us some essential elements building our body. Technically speaking, the chemical compounds within our cells need proteins, vitamins and minerals extracted from the daily food supply. First, the proteins, which are regarded as the builder of the humans, are abundant in eggs, meats and all of the diary products. On the other hand, the proteins from the food play the pivotal part in the immune reaction to the deadly diseases, the flu and some common virus. Not only for the body’s immune system, but also for the body’s normal operation, the food should be greatly improve. The metabolic system control the normal body’s activity, and as scientists study, the vegetable and fruits supplement the basic chemical elements with a large amount of vitamins and minerals, the necessities for building a healthy body. Apart from the above points, the carbohydrate absorbed from the rice, maize and wheat can also provide the energy for the body’s activity and chemical reaction inside the cells. Based on these points, there is no doubt that the improvement of food is the wise strategy of obtaining a good health.







Admittedly, exercise is also important for people’s health. The exercise—the source of heath—can speed up our metabolic rate, sculpt the shape of our body, and lengthen our lifespan, but at the meanwhile, we should be aware of the significance of the food. The exercise cannot substitute for the food. Merely can food offer you some energy when you feel exhausted, and otherwise you will end up with losing your strength to do anything as much as possible.







Lastly, no matter how important the exercise and the amour of the stress are, never is the food arrangement supposed to be ignored. In light of the several fundamental matters obtained from food, I am engaged in keeping health by virtue of the food improvement.





作者: chunte20    时间: 2012-9-26 20:31
The variety of the food in the diet can lead to the good health. Peoplecan learn of this viewpoint from the concrete example. People living in Chinaaveragely have a relatively long lifespan. In contrast, the people inhabitingAmerica keep a relatively shorter one. In substance, the only difference ofthese two groups of people is related to the composition of their daily diet.In accordance with the research, with excessive deep-fried food, people feeding on the fried food(我想或許這裡可以合併成一句) like the fried chickenand French fries are subject possibly to the obesity and the coronary heartdisease. What assists people in leading a healthy life is the sensible dietconsisting of vegetable and some grains with a limited amount of oil, which isthe source of Chinese food. We can sense that people coming to Chinese aredesperate for the utter changes in their diet for the sake of their health. Aspeople in authority claim, seeking for our health virtually need combine ourforce to improve our diet



The food can supplyus some essential elements building our body. Technically speaking, thechemical compounds within our cells need proteins, vitamins and mineralsextracted from the daily food supply. First, the proteins, which are regardedas the builder of the humans, are abundant in eggs, meats(我查到是不可數?) and all of the diary products. On the other hand, the proteins from the food play(foods play or food plays?) the pivotal part in the immune reaction to the deadlydiseases, the flu and some common virus. Not only for the body’s immune system,but also for the body’s normaloperation, the food should be greatly improve. The metabolic system controls thenormal body’s activity, and as scientists study, the vegetables andfruits supplement the basic chemical elements with a large amount of vitaminsand minerals, the necessities for building a healthy body. (這句子讀起來挺累的，總覺得三個逗號間的內容連接不起來，先說了metabolic system後面接著說蔬菜水果好但這跟前面沒連接起來)Apart from theabove points, the carbohydrate absorbed from the rice, maize and wheat can alsoprovide the energy for the body’s activity andchemical reaction inside the cells. Based on these points, there is no doubtthat the improvement of food is the wise strategy of obtaining a good health.


Admittedly,exercise is also important for people’s health. Theexercise—the source of heath—can speed up our metabolic rate, sculpt the shapeof our body, and lengthen our lifespan, but at the meanwhile, we should beaware of the significance of the food. The exercise cannot substitute for thefood. Merely can food offer you some energy when you feel exhausted(這句型我沒學過，但也查不到，才疏學淺，請問是倒裝嗎?), and otherwiseyou will end up with losing your strength to do anything as much as possible.



Lastly, no matter how important the exercise and the amour(n. 名詞
  1. (男女間的)私通, 偷情
  2. 戀人(尤指情婦)
  3. 性愛
哪個意思?還是特別的用法?) of the stressare, never is the food arrangement supposed to be ignored. In light of theseveral fundamental matters obtained from food, I am engaged in keeping healthby virtue of the food improvement.


詞彙相當多，佩服佩服!
有段時間沒接觸英文

若有錯改的地方，請指教，好讓我也進步
學習了!
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-10-1 12:41
标题: 9 30 综合
In the reading, the environmental theory doing with the cause of the sea otters' declinaiont is suggested. However, this theory contradicts the professor's argument supporting the predation hypothesis and arouses the professors' doubt. There are several reasons and facts for holding professor's opinion.







First, the chemical pollution which affect the otters' resistance to life-threatening infection cannot be adopted to testify the declination of the sea otters' population. otherwise, the same effect would appear among other species living there. In fact, based on the professor's perspective, seldom do the sea otters conduct their daily activities off shore, which strongly disapprove the point in the reading by demonstrating that the harmful sources of chemical pollution cannot get access to the sea otters. Beside, this fact also authenticate that humans' hunting activities there prevent those sea otters from appearing off shore.







Second, the declination of some sea animals like the seals and sea lions cannot be the testimony of the pollution theory supported in the reading. On the contrary, what causes the declination of those sea animals, as professor claims, should be ascribed to the orca’s hunting. In fact, what happen to orcas—which are not supposed to be the predators of those small creatures –is that humans’ hunting whales gives rise to the necessary change in their diet, which ends up with big shift from its hunting whales to its hunting those small sea animals also including those sea otters.







Again, predation theory related with orcas’ hunting also be the opposition to the last argument in the reading which points out the various pattern of otter decline with the distinct degree of pollution in the different location. Virtually, in accordance with evidence given by professor, the locations inaccessible to the orca, specifically speaking, the rocky and shallow places, best correspond to the area with the stability of otters’ population, while those in which the orca can exist prove to have the dramatic declination of sea otters’ population. As a result, the predation theory is more likely to be the reason of otters’ decline compared with the environmental population theory.




作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-10-1 12:45
标题: 9 30 独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statements: colleges or universities should offer students a better job preparation before they start working.

The competition of any fields in the present society has being fierce, introducing the huge amount of unemployment. Universities, the significant turning point in people’s life, weigh heavily against people’s position in the job market. There is no doubt that universities are supposed to provide students a better job preparation before they step into that job market.

The student of a good job preparation takes the priority in applying for jobs. There are two groups of people. The one has kept a mass of professional skills with working experience, while the other has not. If you are the executive in a particular company, which one would you prefer to recruit? In reality, the preference of executive in today’s company proves that the former one achieves more success in job interview than the latter one does; thus, the previous job preparation is essential ingredient of students’ future development.

The job preparation is not only the method for students’ improvement but the strategy for universities’ interest. In other words, the revenue of the university almost leans on the indication of how many students graduating from this university are capable of getting the ideal job, and of what this university can offer to assist in students’ future development. In accordance with the record of the Tsinghua University, the investment in the students’ job preparation has brought substantial profits in return. In particular, the close cooperation with local business company in the job training program of students attracts the extra investment from other companies far and wide. In the meanwhile, the university earns a huge amount of profits from students who are engaged in this program. The Besides, with the influence expended to the wider range in the society, this program has been the major stimulation for students to attend this university, which, believe or not, has made the largest profits among the universities’ gross revenue; Thus, it is no exaggeration to say that how fully the university is devoted to the students’ job preparation determines how far the university develop.

In light of the companies’ development, the students with job preparation can be the potential elites in the particular companies. The lack of the elites is a common issue when attempting to development companies themselves. Nevertheless, in dell, it is from the workers with previous job preparation that the technological support produces the advanced innovations among their production. The well-trained workers raise the productive efficiency via applying their mental skills to the manufacture procedure, saving the unnecessary expenses and perfecting the quality of the products. The corresponding effects have proven to be the great source of the regular customers, the stability of its stocks, and the huge sum of income. All contribute to the comprehensive improvement.

Preparing job for students, as I state above, prompts students to make progress in the job market as well as paves the way for the universities’ development. More importantly, companies are able to benefit from this thing. Why do we oppose the students’ job preparation provided by universities?
作者: tracyn    时间: 2012-10-1 22:13
9 30 独立



Do you agree or disagree with the following statements: colleges or universities should offer students a better job preparation before they start working.



The competition of any fields in the present society has being fierce, introducing the huge amount of unemployment. Universities, the significant turning point in people’s life, weigh heavily against people’s position in the job market. (这句和后面的一句中间缺一点点过渡呢，后面一句接下来有点突兀) There is no doubt that universities are supposed to provide students a better job preparation before they step into that job market.



The student ofwith a good job preparation takes the priority in applying for jobs. There are two groups of people. The one has kept a mass of professional skills with working experience, while the other has not. If you are the executive in a particular company, which one would you prefer to recruit? In reality, the preference of executive in today’s company proves that the former one achieves more success in job interview than the latter one does; thus, the previous job preparation is essential ingredient of students’ future development.(这段内容论述不是很充分)



The job preparation is not only the method(这个词有点奇怪，用way好点) for students’ improvement but the strategy for the sake of universities’ interest. In other words, the revenue of the university almost leans on the indication of how many students graduating from this university are capable of getting the ideal job, and of what this university can offer to assist in students’ future development. In accordance with the record of the Tsinghua University, the investment in the students’ job preparation has brought substantial profits in return. In particular, the close cooperation with local business company in the job training program of students attracts the extra investment from other companies far and wide(这个后置定语用的很妙). In the meanwhile(貌似木有这样用的呢，或者meanwhile或者in the meantime), the university earns a huge amount of profits from students who are engaged in this program. The Besides, with the influence expended to the wider range in the society, this program has been the major stimulation for students to attend this university, which, believe or not, has made the largest profits among the universities’ gross revenue; Thus, it is no exaggeration to say that how fully the university is devoted to the students’ job preparation determines how far the university develop(how应该是不可以引导主语从句的，可以改成强调句).



In light of the companies’ development, the students with job preparation can be the potential elites in the particular companies. The lack of the elites is a common issue when companies are attempting to development companies themselves(这里从句主语不能省略). Nevertheless, in dell(这是神马意思呀？木有见过), it is from the workers with previous job preparation that the technological support produces the advanced innovations among their production. The well-trained workers raise the productive efficiency via applying their mental skills to the manufacture procedure, saving the unnecessary expenses and perfecting the quality of the products. The corresponding effects have proven to be the great source of the regular customers, the stability of its stocks, and the huge sum of income. All contribute to the comprehensive improvement.



Preparing job for students, as I state above, prompts students to make progress in the job market as well as paves the way for the universities’ development. More importantly(改成what is more之类的吧，木有这么表达的), companies are able to benefit from this thing. Why do we oppose the students’ job preparation provided by universities?



整体语言很棒，词语句型变化很多。不过注意有些句子前后不是很连贯。论述比较充分。
作者: shatong424    时间: 2012-10-25 14:07
标题: 10 24 独立。 考完一次托福后第一次作业贴、、写作还得提升啊、嘿嘿
Do you agree or disagree with this idea: The government and the countries should share their scientific discoveries with other countries in the world?



Science is one of all kind subjects that are to specify the natural surroundings. Still, science can also bring us into the unknown but truly existing things. It appears ubiquitous and somewhat obvious. This special character of it leads us to the sense that we really have no point to hiding our scientific findings and regarding them as ‘personal assets’.



The Officials in a country may be concerned about the prized power of the scientific discoveries they possess.If only because they intend to take the priority over other countries by utilizing these astonishing finding, they likely step into the misleading situation and are somehow dazzled by the ideals. We can see today many people in this world communicate with others about their own fields. The communication like this beyond any boundaries is heritage passed from the eighteenth century—when British were proud of their industrial revolution. They had started with the steam engine to the internal combustion engine which the discovery related with energy transformation and fuel tapping technique prompt forward. Nonetheless, they could not keep their outstanding finding in the technology in secret. The widespread of knowledge broke their dream to seize the largest territory in the science and technology. One can learn that Germans invented the dynamo after ascertaining the theory about energy. Belgians replaced the steam engine with the motors based the new use of fuel. The knowledge was even more extensive from Europe to America that Edison, the American, created the filament lamp just by using the electronic technique which originated from European. What can take up all the scientific discovery is nothing. Who can constrain other members in this world to explore the scientific findings might only be God. Therefore, why do we do such a stupid thing to conceal the science in our home just for curbing others’ scientific development?



“We have the duty to protect our intellectual property of our scientific findings” said some researchers. Even so, we cannot turn for protection to dread clichés about respect for abandoning the share of scientific discovery, in that we can do the same thing to protect our right in sharing our science with others. ‘Science journal Nature’ regularly publishes what is entitled as the striking scientific discoveries. You can see that many people read these published books and retrieve the academic dissertation from the internet. Can we say those authors’ intellectual property be assailed by our view of these documents? On the other hand, the scientific discoveries that scientists explored and published call for the identification of people all over the world. For fear that the religious tension and people’s suspicion, the heliocentric theory was been published by Kopernik just before his death. If he buried his worry and upset into the tomb, maybe it was hardly for us to notice what religion suggested was totally absurd and which way the solar system should run onto. Never can science survive the lack of other people’s acknowledgement.



Again, it is in the share of the scientific discoveries that the progress of science can go forward. In terms of variability and sophistication in the scientific world, individual or even a group of people are not capable of making a conclusion with full consideration and keeping a perfect perspective. ‘We can be endlessly near to the true world of science’, said Einstein, ‘But we need join our forces to do that.’ Einstein, he made the speech far and wide to demonstrate his theory. It appeared to be necessary that what he discovered should be recognized as the right thing by others or even those of other countries. In his eyes, science is well cultivated only in the garden in which each element of science can provoke the responses so as to well development in the future.



To conclude, people should realize the significance of sharing the scientific fruits results in the prosperity of science. None of any damage considered can happen to people and any countries. On account of above points, never can others be a better idea than to share our scientific findings.




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