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作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-12 23:21
标题: loveluyuanbai的作文帖 狠批~~
Nowadays, the qusetion are parents the best teachers has arosed much debate .Although parents have a significant impression on their children,someone still hold the point that parents simply have little academic knowledge and perhaps can not be the real teacher in the children’s lifetime.However,I do support the argument that parents are the best teachers for several reasons.

First, it is our parents who brought us to the lively world,it is our parents who teach us the first words.Actually, about approximate six years,most of parents not only need to burden the family staff,but also need to enlighten us.Without parents, we can not simply say a word.I did remember my childhood,once my parents had time,they would tell some facinated stories and lively histories to me.Even now, I like the history and would like to spend my life pursuiting it.Therefore,parents can make a enormous different on the knowledge level in the beginning of our life.

Second,parents always enlightens us in our socical life.How many times we spent a lot of time on several trival staffs but still can not figuer them out?How many times when we encounter a massive dificulty and can not handle?At the moment,who is the most expected person that we want to see?Oblivously,parents!Perhaps parents sometimes can not give us many practical suggestions and let us get out of the situation immidately.But at least,their socical skiils can give us some effective methods and give us more morale to face it.Eventully,with parents’power,we can beat it.

Though,lacking of newly information,parents may sometimes can not help us in some areas exactly,sometiomes can not be a teacher in the academic level,and parents sometimes may suffer in alcohol abuse or something that do not have postive effect on children at all .But in a large picture, parents can give us more and become best teachers forever.In conclusion,for the reasons that lists above,I think I raise the point that parents are best teachers.
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-13 09:27
没人吗？自己顶下。。。
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-13 17:37
Nowdays,with the rapid development of our economy,people especially students always have to face several dilemmas when they actually get to the society and most of them could not handle them and some of the mmay be faced with even vital consequences because no one can get them out of the situation.so in this case, I totally agree with the argument that colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.Here are the line of reasoning.
In the first place,. the courses including the academaic classes and some indication lessons to our socical skills can even make a enoemous different on our working life Obviously,we can not say firmly that we have done that.There are mmassive problems here.For one thing,most of the colleges and universities even have nothing to do with their students’future careers,they have no courses for their working skills,some of them have not teachers who analyze the socical circumstance and employment.So imagine this ,when their students finishing classes and graduting,they may be don not know what exactly  the society is ,how to live in it,what they will do,they eventually could not even get through all this staffs.To let the students live better,we need at least provide some courses about social skills and social employment with them.
Furthermore, the colleges and universities with the abidding socical courses can even make a tremendous profit.As you can see,the employment now has been  a siginificant problem over the past 30 years. Parents perhaps have already considered that.what they,what they can do is just let their children go to a univeristy that provide such courses.They regard this course as a opportunity for their chidren to grasp the essence of the social skills and perform better in the employment market.Take account of this element,the colleges and univeristies need to attain new personals and add this kind of lessons.
In conlcusion, for universities and colleges,providing courses for students’furture working is not only a chance for stdents to gain valuable experience,but only a mean to let themselve gain a profit.
913独立Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges or Universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-13 20:22
怎么没人啊？怎么互批啊？求指教。。。
作者: 婷婷connie    时间: 2012-9-14 00:05
来啦，嘿嘿
13独立
第一次批你的文哦，红色错误， 蓝色评论，高亮精彩

Nowdays（nowadays）,with the rapid development of our economy,(这句可以不要)people especially students always have to face several dilemmas when they actually get to the society and most of them could not handle them and some of themmay be faced with even vital consequences because no one can get them out of the situation.so in this case, I totally agree with the argument that colleges or universities should offer more courses to prepare students for the future before they start working.Here are the linesof reasoning.(第一段太长了)


In the first place,.the courses including the academaic（academic） classes and some indication（introduction就是介绍性的课程） lessons to our socical（social） skills can even make a enoemous（enormous）different(difference这里要用名词形式)on our working life. Obviously,we can not say firmly that we have done that.There are mmassive（massive） problems here.For one thing,most of the colleges and universities even have nothing to do with their students’future careers,they have no courses for their working skills,some of them have not teachers who analyze the socical circumstance and employment.So imagine this ,when their students finishing classes and graduting（graduating）,they may be don not know what exactly  the society is ,how to live in it,what they will do,they eventually could not even get through all this staffs.To let the students live better,we need at least provide some courses about social skills and social employment with them.


Furthermore, the colleges and universities with the abidding(abiding)socical courses can even make a tremendous profit.As you can see,the employment now has been  a siginificant（significant） problem over the past 30 years. Parents perhaps have already considered that.what they,what they can do is just let their children go to a univeristy that provides such courses.They regard this course as a opportunity for their chidren(children) to grasp the essence of the social skills and perform better in the employment market.Take account of this element,the colleges and univeristies（universities） need to attain new personals and add this kind of lessons.

这里再来一个让步段就好了~~（说说more courses带来的不好的点，比如too pressure on students, burden on school’s finance budget.. ）
In conlcusion(conclusion), for universities and colleges,providing courses for students’furture（future） working is not only a chance for stdents（students） to gain valuable experience,but only（also） a mean to let themselve（themselves） gain a profit.


Conclusion:

1.感觉这个题理解上有点错，题目给的是more courses，而不是courses for working skills，这个可以作为一个部分写

2.错拼的单词很多，这个要注意了，太多了ETS也会相应减分的，写完之后检查一下

3.语言需要精炼一点，如第一段

4.主位要一致

5.加油哦~~
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-14 09:54
呃 写完忘记看一遍了 见笑了。。。等下修改下。。。我要加油啊！
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-14 10:48
修改过后的。。。
Nowadays,there has been a pervalent discussion over the issue whether colleges and universities should provide more courses for the students in the future before they start working.Obviously,there exists a dilemma that more courses can better equipped the students but on the other hand can also attain more pressure to students.As I am concerned,I support the argument that colleges and universities should prepare more courses for several reasons.
In the first place,more courses that colleges and universities provided are able to better equipped the students with more detailed academic knowledge and pragmatic social skills.As you can see,today’s society with fiecre competition easily lead to highly unemployment especially for those students who has inadequent social skills and academic knowledge. imagine this ,when their students finishing classes and graduating,they may be do not know what exactly  the society is ,how to live in it,what they will do,they eventually could not even get through all this staffs.To let the students live better,we need at least provide some courses about social skills and social employment with them. .In this case,the provided courses may exert a enormous power that let students do better in the circumstance.
Furthermore,the abiding courses can on the other hand make a tremendous difference on the colleges and universities issues. As you can see,the employment now has been  a siginificant problem over the past 30 years. Parents perhaps have already considered that.what they can do is just let their children go to a univeristy that provide such courses.They regard this course as a opportunity for their chidren to grasp the essence of the social skills and perform better in the employment market.Take account of this element,the colleges and univeristies need to attain new personals and add this kind of lessons.The most significant achievement may lies in the daily revenue.Imagine that,the more courses that the colleges and universities provided, the more revenue the colleges and universities may attain.Consequently,the colleges and universities can make a profit over this level.Over and over again,the increasing profit can also lead better equipment and better teaching staffs here,it is really can be said that one stone kills two birds immdiately.
Admittedly,there are some negative effects of the policy here.Heavy courses and much pressure can not even bear for some students,and more courses provided here must at the first time put ahead some funds and may be on the other hand let the colleges and universities overbear.But in my opinion,these problems all can be succseefully solved due to synthetic regulation as well.
In conclusion,t totally in favor of the argument’s viem of adding more courses to the students for their future working.
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-14 18:59
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Recent years,there has been a heated debate over the discussion whether people are now easier to become educated than in the past.As you can see,with the rapid development of the social economy and the more variable education meams for people to choose,there are absolutely more opportunities to equip them with knowledge.As far as I am concerned,I totally support the argument for several reasons.
In the first place, the books and courses which provided in diverse education institutions are so variable that basically everyone can acquire a chance to learn,so easy to become educated.The diversity of books can broaden the horizon and the courses are able to taught to the people who enrolled about what we can do, who we are,whether we should to due to specific conditions.Meanwhile,in current decades,the rising economy on the one hand exert a powerful impetus to the development of the diversity of books and courses.In this way,not only students who in the colleges and universities can learn a lot,but also simple people who in the social can make a enormous differnence in their daily life.Therefore,with the adequant books and courses,people can be more educated in the society.
Furthermore,with the fully development of the internet and the sufficient usage of computers,the people nowadays can get close to the materials which are in the internet more easily.People ture on the light,power the computer,put the mouse into the explorer icon and they will get what they need.Additionally,the online matrials are so different form the solid staffs that can be took to anywhere,by this kind of way people can be more convenient to learn such massive knowledge and let themselves more easier to become educated.In this way,people find it undemanding to be educated in the internet.
Admittedly,sometimes the knowledge that provided recnet years may not be competitive to these which was in the past,sometimes the diversity of the knowledge can distract the attention which people can be more focused in the past,inevitably,a part of people may be lost in the society due to that much staffs.While in my opinion,statistics which conducted recent years still found that people have been more educated in contenmporary era.Still,these data can buttress the argument which I support above totally.
In conclusion, the people today can be more educated and more sophisticated than people in the past .
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-15 20:29
9月15日
Some people think university professors should spend more time doing research while others
think they should spend more time educating students. What is your view?

Nowadays,there has been a heated debate over the issue whether university professors should spend more time doing research while others think they should spend more time educating students.As far as I am concerned,I definitely in favor the argument that university professors should more time on the education of the students for several reasons below.
In the first place,we all can not deny the fact that students in universities are the main component.So obviously,in students level,professors in universities should do more education stuffs in order to edify the core of universities rather than just spend hundreds and thousands of days and nights playing their own stuffs in  experiments.
While,some professors would justify their statement by leaving the explanation that the more experiments are turned into work,the more students are taught successfully.But,here is the dilemma,if professors spend that much time on the research ,they can not portion out a considerate share for their for students. Over and over again,students who are not adequately put focus on,may heavily suffer bad grades in their academic study.A experiment conducted by the government give some statistics showing that with a overlook at the students,and a overdo focus on the research issues,the universities can suffer a bad consequence.
Furthermore,universitise or colleges are not some sort of research instutions,which  always need sufficient time to do variable experiments.On the other  hand, universities and colleges are the education institutions which should totally put their responsibility on the students level,and spend more time on the students themselves.So,if the professor in the university,the only compatible method for the professor Is always lies on the students.How to let the students know which lessons are their total interest and which lessons are some sort of lessons they should not spend that much energy on?That question can be always in peofessors mind ,not some researches.
Admittedly ,a considerate protion of  researches are regraded as a kind of necessarity to not only professors but also universities.Imagine that,when the researches that professors conducted here are triumphant,meanwhile,the professors and universities also make a profit,which can be a sufficient fund for the university budget and the university equipments’development.But,the advantage of the research which conducted successfully can not outweight the negative influence of the overlook of the students issues.
In conclusion,the more attention of the professors should always be paid on the students ,not the researches the professors conducted.
作者: fuzhengrui    时间: 2012-9-16 11:36
标题: 9.15独立改正
我最近比较忙，只把问题指出来了没有重新给出正确的例子。。而且只写了问题。。
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作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-16 11:53
改的真好 改出不少错误 看来我得好好看单词 看满分作文了。。。谢谢图图！
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-17 00:42
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should choose the same career as their parents. Use specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays,there has been a heated debate over the issue whether children should choose the same career as their parents.It is widely accepted that children who was born and raised in a well family should always consider following his parents’careers.While,from my perspective,I do not really in favor of the argument for following reasons.
In the first place,if someone wants to chase for his or her career,the most crucial point he or she has to figured out is where his or her interest lies.That is to say,some vioces such as whether children should choose the same career as their parents are secondary.If children who always need to tolerate something that do not favorable for them at all,they will not really release themselves and attain the real power to let out the potential that hide that deep and push themselves forward.Since the situation that they are kind of facing with the obstacle get into the way,they cannot fix it well while they possibly will turn to their parents looking for help which is always favored for parents.Over and over again,the phenomenon will absolutely turn out to be a circulation,doing harm to the ability of children’s future career and happiness.
Furthermore,taking account of the interest issue,children still need not to choose the same craeer as their parents.Since parents have already done the career successfully, children in this way would like to follow the same method their parents have already made,think the same way as their parents,and most significant,children cannot deal with the stuffs alone,in other words,the thinking pattern of their parents hinder them heavily.Another vital problem is that by doing the same career as their parents ,children have to bear much more pressure which is always need to get to the parents’anticipation.A mother will always warn her son to do the same way as she think,to comfirm the ambition as she has made.I this way,children cannot really fell in love with the career .
Admittedly,the same career with parents will exert a enormous power which can help children get the right way of the career,and there will never be  experienced persons like your parents aiming to give advice to you from nowhere.Given the premise that you are in favor of what your parents do,that you are not distracted by the pressure that your parents put,you are totally can put yourself in the career.But as I said above,in most of cases,children shoud always follow their heart and their own inner voice instead of letting others ‘opinions impede you own choice.
In conclusion,by ruling out the differernt interests exist and the much pressure that parents put in front of children,the argument can be  quite considerare.But from the whole picture,I hardly agree with the argument that children should always choose the same career as their parents.
作者: SophieS123    时间: 2012-9-17 14:06
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should choose the same career as their parents. Use specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, there has been a heated debate over the issue whether children should choose the same career as their parents. It is widely accepted that children who was born and raised in a well family should always consider following his parents’ careers. While, from my perspective, I do （am）not really in favor of the argument for following reasons.
In the first place, if someone wants to chase for his or her career, the most crucial point he or she has to figured (figure) out is where his or her interest lies. That is to say, some voices such as whether children should choose the same career as their parents are secondary. If children who (删去who) always need to tolerate something that do(is) not favorable for them at all, they will not really release themselves and attain the real power to let out the potential that hide (hides) that (删去that) deep and push themselves forward. Since the situation that they are kind of facing with the obstacle get (gets) into the way, they cannot fix it well while they possibly will turn to their parents looking for help which is always favored for parents.(这句话的连接词似乎用的有问题，而且孩子遇到困难向父母求助真的是“always favored for parents”吗？) Over and over again, the phenomenon will absolutely turn out to be a circulation, doing harm to the ability of children’s future career and happiness.(应该是获得事业成功和快乐的能力)
Furthermore, taking account of the interest issue, children still need not to choose the same career as their parents. Since parents have already done the career successfully, children in this way would like to follow the same method their parents have already made, think the same way as their parents, and most significant(ly), children cannot deal with the stuffs alone, in other words, the thinking pattern of their parents hinder them heavily. Another vital problem is that by doing the same career as their parents , children have to bear much more pressure which is always need（needed） to get to the parents’ anticipation. A mother will always warn her son to do the same way as she think, to confirm（confirm是证实的意思吧） the ambition as she has made. In this way, children cannot really fell（fall）in love with the career .
Admittedly, the same career with parents will exert an enormous power which can help children get the right way of the career, and there will never be experienced persons like your parents aiming to give advice to you from nowhere.(from nowhere可以删去) Given the premise that you are in favor of what your parents do, that you are not distracted by the pressure that your parents put（upon you）, you are (are删去)totally can put yourself in the career. But as I said above, in most of cases, children should always follow their heart and their own inner voice instead of letting others ‘opinions impede you own choice.
In conclusion, by ruling out the different interests exist and the much pressure that parents put in front of children, the argument can be quite considerate. But from the whole picture, I hardly agree with the argument that children should always choose the same career as their parents.

总结：强烈建议您在写完作文后自己先改一遍，整个文章的拼写错误和单复数、包括标点符号错误略微有点多，拼写错误我顺手就改了，并没标出。

从整体架构上看，主体似乎是前两段说choose the same career的坏处，后一段让步一下，感觉第二段写得最好，第一段蓝色高亮的句子改一下连接词应该就比较和谐了……

从语言上看，感觉个别地方稍微有点Chinglish的痕迹，虽然能读懂但看着有些许别扭……

总之文章的思路还是很清晰的。以上纯属个人意见，水平有限，如果言重了还望包涵，意见不一致的地方欢迎赐教。
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-17 22:24
DO you agree the following statement:Grades (marks) encourage students to learn


Nowadays ,there has been a heated deabate whether gardes encourage students to learn.It is widely accepted that students as well as parents should not pay much attention on the grades but the effort of students.While,from my perspective,I am not in favor of the argument for the following reasons.
In the first place, better grades can totally help students attain much confidence,which will exert a powerful comfort to them.A student with better grades is always likely to show positive actions in term of social behavoir and will always follow their own steps no matter what difficitity they have to encounter.Over and over,students with better grades will always figure out some massy stuffs and can deal with some dilemmas,in no circumstance could they be trapped and discouraged.Rencent studies of the students have shown that the mount of students with high grades will express a more entensive study urge compared with the students with a low gardes, also they have more stability towards hard problems such as academic quedtions and science experiments,which will be much more difficult for some students with low grades,for they do not show confidence.In this way, grades really can encourage students to fix difficultities and move on.
Furthermore,better grades not only can get back the confidence of students themselves,but also can rellieve the pressure of parents and teachers towards students at the same time,which will also attain the attention of the parents and teachers and obtain the support of them as well.It is not a trival thing to say,as you can see,the support of teaches and parents is obviously vital to students,only with the sustention students can put theis whole mind on the study materials and get back to learn as soon as possible.And the support of teachers and parents will emerge only if students can give them better grades.All in all,better grades can assist students eventually.
Admittedly,as I say better grades can encourage students to learns,I do not mean students have to put their whole focus on the grade issue,other things are not important at all.there is no deny that there are other elements such as the patience of the studying,the interest to the learning materials,etc.But what I am essentially want you to know is the grades can really valuable to the learning ability of students.In this case ,I think enlighten my opinion as well.
In conclusion,as an old saying goes_confidence and support can play a vital role In everyone ‘s life,also there is no exception in this case,in the same way as the grades thing works,we must come up with the argument that grades really can encourage students to learn.
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-17 22:25
谢谢S123的修改！
作者: d0gzi    时间: 2012-9-18 19:54
Nowadays ,there has been a heated deabate whether gardes encourage students to learn.It is widely accepted that students as well as parents should not pay much attention on( TO) the grades but the effort of students.While,(你是想说HOWEVER, 还是Well? 感觉WHILE 是副词，不能放在句首然后打个逗号那样用）from my perspective,I am not in favor of the argument for the following reasons.
In the first place, better grades can totally help students attain much confidence,which will exert a powerful comfort to them.A student with better grades is always likely to show positive actions in term of social behavoir and will always follow their own steps no matter what difficitity （拼写错误） they have to encounter.Over and over,students with better grades will always figure out some massy stuffs and can deal with some dilemmas,（要么用连词要么这里另起一句）in no circumstance could they be trapped and discouraged.Rencent studies of the（无特指， 去掉THE） students have shown that the mount *amount？of students with high grades will express a more entensive study urge compared with the students with a low gardes, also they have more stability towards hard problems such as academic quedtions (spelling mistake)and science experiments,which will be much more difficult for some students with low grades,for they do not show confidence (太绝对，建议使用AS ..AS 句型。。。SHOW AS MUCH CONFIDENCE）.In this way, grades really can encourage students to fix difficultities and move on.
Furthermore,better grades not only can get back the confidence of students themselves,but also can rellieve（SPELLING) the pressure of parents and teachers towards students at the same time,which will also attain the attention of the parents and teachers and obtain the support of them as well.It is not a trival thing to say,as you can see,the support of teaches and parents is obviously vital to students,（变为句号。分句）only withthe sustention students can put theis whole mind on the study materials and get back to learn as soon as possible.And the support of teachers and parents will emerge only if students can give them better grades.All in all,better grades can assist students eventually.
Admittedly,as I say better grades can encourage students to learns,I do not mean students have to put their whole focus on the grade issue,other things are not important at all.there is no deny（ing） that there are other elements such as the patience of （TO？） the studying,the interest to the learning materials,etc.But what I am essentially want you to know is the grades can really （无动词）valuable to the learning ability of students.In this case ,I think enlighten （。。。ENLIGHTEN的主语呢？）my opinion as well.
In conclusion,as an old saying goes_confidence and support can play a vital role In everyone ‘s life,also there is no exception in this case,in the same way as the grades thing works,we must come up with the argument that grades really can encourage students to learn.

1.文章写得挺中规中矩的。是比较不错的应试作文。有观点，有例子，有模板，有句型。黄色是我觉得比较好的地方
2.个人意见啊……我觉得你好像不是很会断句。该断的地方句子要断。。。实在不想断，也不要光用逗号连接，要用连词。
3.拼写啊拼写。。。我自己也常常拼写出问题……本来以为老师会看不出来，。。。改完你的之后才知道。。老师能看出来=。=……

4.同学你为什么没有在主贴上更新你的地址啊……= = 害我刷了五六遍主贴都没有找到你这帖子……
最后~不管你之后是在国内读研还是出国，希望这段为了英语要死要活的经历之后回忆起来都会让你为自己感动~ 加油 ^ ^
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-18 22:46
Nowadays ,there has been a heated deabate whether gardes encourage students to learn.It is widely accepted that students as well as parents should not pay much attention on( TO) the grades but the effort of students.While,(你是想说HOWEVER, 还是Well? 感觉WHILE 是副词，不能放在句首然后打个逗号那样用）from my perspective,I am not in favor of the argument for the following reasons.
In the first place, better grades can totally help students attain much confidence,which will exert a powerful comfort to them.A student with better grades is always likely to show positive actions in term of social behavoir and will always follow their own steps no matter what difficitity （拼写错误） they have to encounter.Over and over,students with better grades will always figure out some massy stuffs and can deal with some dilemmas,（要么用连词要么这里另起一句）in no circumstance could they be trapped and discouraged.Rencent studies of the（无特指， 去掉THE） students have shown that the mount *amount？of students with high grades will express a more entensive study urge compared with the students with a low gardes, also they have more stability towards hard problems such as academic quedtions (spelling mistake)and science experiments,which will be much more difficult for some students with low grades,for they do not show confidence (太绝对，建议使用AS ..AS 句型。。。SHOW AS MUCH CONFIDENCE）.In this way, grades really can encourage students to fix difficultities and move on.
Furthermore,better grades not only can get back the confidence of students themselves,but also can rellieve（SPELLING) the pressure of parents and teachers towards students at the same time,which will also attain the attention of the parents and teachers and obtain the support of them as well.It is not a trival thing to say,as you can see,the support of teaches and parents is obviously vital to students,（变为句号。分句）only withthe sustention students can put theis whole mind on the study materials and get back to learn as soon as possible.And the support of teachers and parents will emerge only if students can give them better grades.All in all,better grades can assist students eventually.
Admittedly,as I say better grades can encourage students to learns,I do not mean students have to put their whole focus on the grade issue,other things are not important at all.there is no deny（ing） that there are other elements such as the patience of （TO？） the studying,the interest to the learning materials,etc.But what I am essentially want you to know is the grades can really （无动词）valuable to the learning ability of students.In this case ,I think enlighten （。。。ENLIGHTEN的主语呢？）my opinion as well.
In conclusion,as an old saying goes_confidence and support can play a vital role In everyone ‘s life,also there is no exception in this case,in the same way as the grades thing works,we must come up with the argument that grades really can encourage students to learn.

1.文章写得挺中规中矩的。是比较不错的应试作文。有观点，有例子，有模板，有句型。黄色是我觉得比较好的地方
2.个人意见啊……我觉得你好像不是很会断句。该断的地方句子要断。。。实在不想断，也不要光用逗号连接，要用连词。
3.拼写啊拼写。。。我自己也常常拼写出问题……本来以为老师会看不出来，。。。改完你的之后才知道。。老师能看出来=。=……

4.同学你为什么没有在主贴上更新你的地址啊……= = 害我刷了五六遍主贴都没有找到你这帖子……
最后~不管你之后是在国内读研还是出国，希望这段为了英语要死要活的经历之后回忆起来都会让你为自己感动~ 加油 ^ ^
-- by 会员 d0gzi (2012/9/18 19:54:53)

恩 谢谢修改啊 今天一直在忙申请书的事 刚过来 差点忘记修改了 我现在去修改你的啊！还有 保研也是为了更好地出国 我的观念不会动摇 欢迎监督啊！
作者: d0gzi    时间: 2012-9-19 01:49
你好像是应该改HULU的……而不是我的……= =
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-21 22:49
9月20日
The most important investment of a company is to improve the skills of its employees

What is the most vital investment of a company?What is the most profitable way to deal with the investment?Every manager in companies perhaps would take the entire career to think about how to tackle these tough questiones.While from my perspective,the most important investment of a company is always lies in the improvement of the skills of employees.
In the first place,improving the skills of its employss may be not considered the most effective method to gain funds and some other tangible assets,but regarded as the most important mean to attain intangible assets.Taking into account of the soild foundation,which can be built by some prominent staffs in companys who are well trained,have some fascinate skills that really available to companies .In this case ,the improvement of the skills of the employees can be the key to open the door to future market ,the company with come skillful staffs can figure out some certain ways to fix up the situation that the company may face up no matter how complex it is.Some surveys and statistics in the HBS give us some apparent evidence show that a company with a team of more adept staffs would suffer from fewer dilemma compared with the company which have not.Obviously,the investment of payment on skills can be reasonable.
Furthermore, the investment on the skill level on the other hand may attibute several unique traits to staffs themselves.The developed skills or some exploited intelligence can even trigger the hidden area of the brain,which may be stay untapped for a long time,can cause a enormous difference of the thinking pattern,in which the staffs can aquire some creativity to think differerntly,to try some fresh things,to make innovations for the company.If the company do not pay that much to the skills training, by no means will the company know creative thinking of their staffs,the change that the skillful staffs can bring to them.Generally speaking,the investment of the skills training can bring much to companies,far more than it takes away from .
Admittedly,the more payment the company costs on the skills training of employees,the less money the company can takes into the development of the facility,over and over,the company which spend most of the funds to the skill training, would suffer from the obsolete machines,worst circumstance may lies in the unchanged of the tangible environment of the company,which will also exert a negative influence of the company backwards.However,only if we already dispose the relationship of the two parts,can the company really get robust.
In conclusion,as I state above,the most important investment always lies in the development of the skills training of employees,but only if you can handle the two things well.
作者: fuzhengrui    时间: 2012-9-22 13:17
标题: 9.20独立改正 见附件
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作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-22 16:26
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-- by 会员 fuzhengrui (2012/9/22 13:17:02)

有些地方改得很好 我一定努力改正！
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-23 00:06
9月22日
it is more enjoyable to have a job, and you work only 3 days a week with long hours rather rhan work for 5 days with short hours a day

Nowadays,with the rapid development of the economy and varied working patterns of people,it is really hard to pick out the most enjoyable working pattern which is favorable to all staffs from really diverse operations.But,if I must choose one working pattern from the two options,perhaps the more intensive way of working is more favor to me .
There is no denying that the more intensive way working compared with the incompact way of working can really help people get focus on the certain things.The volume of the task is fixed,all that we have to do is to trigger all the cells of bodys to face with it,not some ways of relaxed breaks or inattentive working.Someone would state that intensive working seems inhumane,But if you refer to the fact that some famous persons such as Madame Curie,she almost devoted all her life to the working of physics,will you say she was not enjoyable about what she had done.Absolute not.Someone who want to work that intensive to certain field must have the total ture love of what he or she is working,no matter how intensive working pattern it is .
Furthermore,the more intensive working pattern will induce the more efficient working during manufacting,which on the other hand will exert more time for doing other things.In recent era ,the statistics show that there are more and more employees have developed diverse interests of doing other stuffs which are not in relationship with what they are doing in their careers.The employee with intensive working pattern will easily handle the schedule of their daily life.They will have more time for their families,their friends,they will get into the area which their interest really lies in.During this period,most of the employees with the intensive working patterns will enjoy their lifes.
Admittedly,may be the more incompact way of working will diminish the current pressure at the first time.And they will have more time daily to get close to their lifes,but they will never relieve their working stuffs when they having fun with their kids,they will never really turn to what they like when they have to figure out some tough questions that working put to them.
In conclusion,it is more enjoyable to set our working patterns intensively,only in this way can we focus on what we are doing at certain time and have time to do some interesting things.
作者: xeyyxzty    时间: 2012-9-23 21:23
Nowadays,withthe rapid development of the economy and varied working patterns of people,itis really hard to pick out the most enjoyable working pattern which isfavorable to all staffs from really diverse operations(请问哈，这个在这里是什么意思).But,if I must choose one working pattern from the twooptions,perhaps the more intensive way of working is more favor to me (favorable to me怎么样，或者is my favor).
There is no denying that the more intensive wayworking compared with the incompact way of working can really help people getfocus on the certain things.Thevolume of the task is fixed,all that we have to do is to trigger all the cellsof bodys to face with it（两个动词咯~应该句号，或者加一个连词，例如and~同时可能我真的很水哈，没有看懂第二句话~捂脸） ,not some ways of relaxedbreaks or inattentive working.Someone would state that intensive working seemsinhumane,But if you refer to the fact that some famous persons(people) suchas Madame Curie,she almost devoted all her life to the working of physics,willyou say she was not enjoyable about(我不是很确定是不是用这个词哈~) what she had done.Absolute not（是不是有点过于口语化呢~个人感觉哈~仅供参考）.Someone whowants to work thatintensive to certain field must have the total ture(true) love of what he or she isworking,no matter how intensive working pattern it is(个人喜欢这个形式哈：how intensive the working pattern is) .
Furthermore,the more intensive working pattern will inducethe more efficient working efficiency during manufacturing,which on the other hand will exert more time for doingother things.In recent era(不确定能不能这么用哈~) ,thestatistics show that there are more and more employees have developed diverse interests of (in) doing otherstuffs which are not in relationship(relative) with what they are doing in their careers.The employee withintensive working pattern will easily handle the schedule of their dailylife.They will have more time for their families,their friends,they will getinto the area which their interest really lies in.During this period,(亲~不是很清楚这个的指代哈)most of the employeeswith the intensive working patterns will enjoy their lifes.
Admittedly,may be the more incompact way ofworking will diminish the current pressure at the first time.And they（没有指代呀~） will have more time daily to get close totheir lifes,but they will never relieve their working stuffs when they havingfun with their kids,they will never really turn to what they like when theyhave to figure out some tough questions that working put to them.
In conclusion,it is more enjoyable to set ourworking patterns intensively,only in this way can we focus on what we are doingat certain time and have time to do some interesting things.


有一个小问题哈~既然两种工作方式已经用不同的词汇表达了~为什么前面都加上了比较级呢？个人感觉没有必要哈
还有就是代词的问题，they什么的不明确具体内容~
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-9-24 01:07
9.23
The competition between friends always has negative effect

The relationship in the friend level is always considered the most important asset to everyone,especially for someone who is gregarious and always hang out with friends.But if these persons get involved in competitions with their congenial friends,what would they like to do?Do they really have to get messed up and entangled in order to handle this situation?From my perspective,I hardly think that way for the following reasons.
If the friends who you have to face with are some best friends of you,you really need not to worry about the competition.The real friends can always stand by you at any time.what you should do is never sacrifice or suffer some inevitable trouble,instead,the competition can always set as a bridge for you and your best friends.The involved competition such as the academic contests in high school or physical matches in the gym classes,can be a push in your relationship.During these compretitions,there is no doubt that you will figure out who are the real friends of you.So,in this case, never ignore these competitions,they are always indispensable opptunities.
Furthermore,the competition on the other hand can stand as a monitor to you,which can feed you some drawbacks,you will eventually be aware of some weakness or some defects as well.During the contest,though your friends are the competitors who you need to beat,the relationship will always let you and your friends know that be a good advicer may be helpful otherwise.In this case, be a good advicer not a competitor may be a double win for both you and your friends,which can exert a huge motivation for you.Statistics show evidence that a great motivation can push people forward and give them a positive influence on both social communication and daily life.Therefore,the competition between you and your friends will provide nothing bad but a power impulse for you.
Admittedly, some fierce competitions may  hinder your relationship with you friends,for some unsettled problems,some terminated communications.If these problems are not well handled,they will magnified and jeopardize all the effort that we have to put in to fix the relationship.Only if the relationship is solid and firm,can you get a well consequence.Obviously,the positive effects of the competition outweigh the negative ones.
In conclusion,from what I state above, competitions between friends are not always have negative effects.If we carefully deal with the communications and some trivial problems with our friends and treat our friendship prudentially,even competitions can not really impair everyone,instead,they will give you extra energy to overcome some more intricate stuffs.
作者: fuzhengrui    时间: 2012-9-24 13:19
标题: 9.23独立修改 见附件
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如果有说错的地方欢迎指出来
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-5 22:25
10.5
Do you agree or disagree: It is much easier for people to achieve success without families’ help than in the past.

Nowadays,there is a heated debate over the issue whether people achieve success easier without families’s help in the recent years compared to in the past.Generally speaking,this is a kind of tough question for us to judge.But, from my perspective, I hardly think so for the following reasons.

In the first place, today,we are all in this kind of complex society,which are full of urges and benefits.Then look back to us,you and me,just kinds of solo people without our families.When we really want to get close to success,we always find us too young to distinguish what are the true facts and what are the fake things.In this case, how can we  survive in this unpredictable world.Also,the world are filled with enormous competitions,how can we handle these fierce competitions by ourselves.There is no denying that some people have ambitions and want to make it by their own efforts,and may be during tremendous efforts, they will success all by their own.However for most of regular people with limited patience and inexperienced life,it is hard to achieve success without families’help in recent era.
Furthermore,today children are getting a kind of close relationship with their parents.On the other hand,look adversely,children are more dependent on their parents today.In this case,it will exert a negative influence on children in the path of success.Some children may suffer crises when they are facing with the social problems,and the first thing they want to do is tell something to their parents.Some children may be willing to go home and live with their parents because they do not get along with their colleagues.All these problems will emerge when chilren really get into society in recent years.
Admittedly,in past years children will also experience some types of problems in the path of success lacking families’help.However,in the past,because of the limited academic study of parents,similar inexperienced lives and the confined districts,parents can have a more diminutive effect on their children,especially for issues about doing some innovative stuffs or moving to some places where they have never been before.So, In the past, most of children would like to move to a new city and struggle to live by their own.
In the final , my point in this issue is given above,nowadays children who want to suceed will be more depentent on their parents,and it is important for children to get help from their parents.
作者: bonnenuit    时间: 2012-10-6 11:42
Nowadays,there is a heated debate over the issue whether people achieve success easier without families’s help in the(这个冠词可不要） recent years compared to in the past.Generally speaking,this is a kind of tough question for us to judge.But, from my perspective, I hardly think so for the following reasons.

In the first place, today,we are all in this kind of complex society,which are(is) full of urges and benefits.Then look back to us,you and me,just kinds of solo people without our families(这句话表达的太口语了，不适合在写作上运用）.When we really want to get close to success,we always find us too young to distinguish what are the（这个冠词和后面这个也可省略） true facts and what are the fake things.In this case, how can we  survive in this unpredictable world.Also,the world are（is） filled with enormous competitions,how can we handle these fierce competitions by ourselves.There is no denying that some people have ambitions and want to make it by their own efforts,and may be（改成maybe，当你把句子语序重新组一下你就会发现may be分开有问题） during tremendous efforts, they will success all by their own.However for most of regular people with limited patience and inexperienced life,it is hard to achieve success without families’help in recent era.
Furthermore,today children are getting（get感觉不是很恰当，可以换一下hold啊神马的） a kind of close relationship with their parents.On the other hand,look adversely,children are more dependent on their parents today.In this case,it will exert a negative influence on children in the path of success（这句表达有点奇怪）.Some children may suffer crises when they are facing with the（去掉这个冠词，没有特指） social problems,and the first thing they want to do is tell（telling） something to their parents.Some children may be willing to go home and live with their parents because they do not get along with their colleagues.All these problems will emerge when chilren really get into society in recent years.
Admittedly,in past years children will（用过去式，前面以前提到in the past) also experience some types of problems in the path of success lacking families’help.However,in the past,because of the limited academic study of parents,similar inexperienced lives(不可数） and the（去掉） confined districts,parents can have a more diminutive effect on their children,especially for issues about doing some innovative stuffs or moving to some places where they have never been before.So, In the past, most of children would like to move to a new city and struggle to live by their own.
In the final , my point in this issue is given above,nowadays children who want to suceed will be more depentent on their parents,and it is important for children to get help from their parents.

文章结构不错，使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词
但要注意语法，比如时态问题，冠词
切记在写作文的时候 不要写的太口语话 有时句法口语上行的通 但在写作上还是被判为病句的
还有格式也要注意 标点符号后面也好空一格
还有很大的上升空间 多练练吧
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-7 21:49
10.7
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:The government and corporation should share all their scientific discoveries with other countries in the world?

Nowadays,there is a heated debate over the issue whether the government and corporation should share all their scientific discoveries with other countries in the world.Obiviouly,all is a kind of absolute word and can not serve the purposes of all countries in the world.Here, some of the scientific discoveries may be shared with other countries in case of other important discoveries are protected.In this case,I am not in favor of the opinion for the following reasons.
In the first place,some of the scientific discoveries may contain some crucial information,which will do a lot harm to the country unless it is  safely protected.There are enormaous scientific discoveries always have vital relationship with citizens of the country.Such discoveries as military weapons are also kind of scientific technology that should be highly confined and restricted.Not only can not share with other countries,but also have to conduct and experiment secretly.So, in this way, the scientific discoveries especially something that matters the citizens of the country can not beshared with other countries.
Furthermore,if the scientific discoveries which have a vital influence of the country are protected.Another reason should also be considered first.That is the so-called entitled right of the discovery.That may get in the way when the country share the scentific discovery with other countries freely ,eventually the cost of the invention can not be covered and the motivation of the country may heavily jeopardized.Here,like the new biological research which will have a tremendous influence of people.If it is shared with other countries without carefully entitled protections,the kind of inovative research will not have such a creative effect.In this case, the countriy which invent the inovation would not be that willing to give another shot to other inventions.In other words,some of the scientific discoveries should be protected and entitled legally.
Admittedly,we do not totally deny the share with scientific discoveries can on the other hand contribute to some fields,especially some discoveries contain the human rights of all races or the environment of the world.These kinds of subjects matters the whole humans and the whole world,and we should spare no effort to collect the datas,conduct the surveys,make kinds of charts,ect.Eventually we should share the effort of all countries to make our life more harmonious.However,nowadays the scientific discoveries which raised from the specific country or for the aimed subject that matters the citizen of sole country weighs more,though some subjects aim at all human rights.
In conclusion,as I have raised above,in recent years, the scientific discoveries should not share with other countries,especially something that matters the citizen of the country.Apart from the former reason,only if the entitled rights of the discovery are given and protected carefully,scientific discoveries can be shared with other countries unrestricted.
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-8 20:29
10.8
People who move out of their native village or town are more successful and happier than who stay in their native village or town for their whole life. A\D

Today,people especially someone in modern cities are getting a intimate relationship with their native viliages or towns.Probably due to the significant scenery of the environment in the native villages.But it does not mean that stationarily stay in the native villages can make a huge difference.While on the other hand,people who move out of their native villages might be more successful and happier for the following reasons.

In the first place,stay in their native villages and do not even move out can always be considerd somewhat conservative,which will do a lot harm to the future of people.Taking it into account we will find out some successful people always urge to make inovation and do a enormous creative stuffs in their lives.While someone who always want to stay in their hometowns and do not make a move may always suffer from high degrees of unemployment.Moreover,someone who always want to stay in their villages can put a lot of dependent on their parents,which will in the other way jeopardize the way of self-surviving.Obviously,people in recent years should always get out of their native villages and take a whole picture of the society.

Furthermore,it is important for people especially for the adults to well equipped themselves and prepare the material basis for the next generantion.Consider the native hometown,which may in the case stand for the interior education,bad living standard,somewhat confined transportation,ect.The next genernation someday come into life may face with the same crisis as we do.As to us,grown to be parents,it is hard for us to endure the moment when our children have a difficult time.So in this way, it is a better choice for people to move out of their native villages and start a bright future.

Admittedly,moving out of the native villages and start a life in other cities do not mean that we are having a terribe lives in our villages.Adversely,our native villages are abound in natural materials and they are special sights for us to enjoy enen in our workdays.I really recommend that we can fortify our homes in someplaces which nearby our hometowns,which will give our extra convinence to sightseeing and another opportunity to get close to the environment.Moreover,when the traditonal festivals coming,we do not spend that much time to travel,all we have to do is embrace our native villages.However,the place where we can build our relationships and create our craeers do not exist in our hometowns and we should keep looking until we find the place we can put all the attention on and start our familes happily.

In conclusion,It seems inevitable to move out of our native villages.Only if we find another place can we really live our lives happiy and sucessfully.
作者: kiddy72    时间: 2012-10-8 23:15
不好意思才看到你的帖子 10月7号的哦～ 改的不好 多多指教
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-9 00:38
In the reading passage,the auther concludes that there are three ways to address to the extinction of Torreya.While the lecturer do not in favor of the opinion,he states that none of the three ways can make a difference of Torreya from dying out,which on the other hand contradict what the auther in the reading passage concludes.The lecturer unfolds her disagreeement for the following reasons.
In the first place,the reading passage gives a opinion that reestablish Torreya in the same location in which it thrived for thousands of years can bring this kind of species back to life.Whereas the lecturer hardly agree to that,the reason is that Torreya in recent years does not influenced by the single element,which is given above in the reading passage.Torreya is now affected by the whole climates of Florida,which nowadays has a extremely high temperature due to the global warming.Moreover,many places are getting drier and do not suit for the living of Torreya,so in other words there are nowhere for Torreya survive against the extinction.
Furthermore,another really inevitable problem the lecturer give to us is the plant migration，which will deny the suggestion in the reading passage that move Torreya to an different location.The lecturer implys that the migration of other plants will adversely do a lot of harm to the surviving of Torreya,including the other species will spread that much quickly,take much places of Torreya,eventually will kill off new trees or plants.So in this case, this solution of the reading passage can be meaningless and should be ruled out due to the unexpectable causes of other species.
Finally,perserving Torreya in research centers and let scientists do some useful experiments to keep them prosperous are considerd the third way to handle the extinction of Torreya.However,the lecturer takes into account of miniscule population of Torreya,which in this way the scientists can not even make a sound experiment due to such limited account of specimens.In this case,the third method can also be another invalid solution.
作者: chengzaaaa    时间: 2012-10-9 15:37
橙子改的10.8的独立！
若有改的不对的地方再交流哦！多多指教！
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-9 20:18
10.9
It's more important for the government to build art museums and music performance center than to build recreational devices (such as swimming pool, playgrounds)

Nowadays, with the rapid development of economy and fierce competitive situation,it is obvious that people are more likely to pay their whole focus on the career level and neglect the issue about some mental activities,in this case art and music are the essential methods for them to enhance their mental health.From my perspective, I consider art museums and music performance centers some vital elments for body health,which will absolutely more important than build some recreational devices for the following reasons.

In the first place, as I just said in the first paragraph,the subjects which include art education and music learning are necessary parts in all human daily life.Imagine your life without art or music,you will never get close to your soul and lose the way to experience colorful stuffs.Moreover,art museums and music perfromance centers are kinds of residences which we can get that intensively close to soul,I can hardly wonder what will happen without these things in our life.While the recreational devices are kinds of unnecessaries that we can not really live with.The residents in cities will never get that close to these things,which in other ways will be built without governments’funds,in other words the market will see the needs to that stuffs and eventually meets their needs.So the government does not bother buliding that stuffs.
Fruthermore,the building like the public art museums and music preformance centers can aid in govenments and help to make a profits in return.Someone will argue that the recreational devices can also do a lot of good to the governments in turn.These people make a hugh loophole here due to the neglection of market needs.Like I just told you above,the recreational devices are abundant in almost all of cities,the phenomenon provides fact that the market meets the need in recreational devices and the government do not get involved there.So why not the government let recreational devices alone and be focus on the single issue of building mental health devices instead.If the government can cover this area and spare no effort to make it,we can not deny the development of mental health here.
Admittedly, in some cities especially some rural areas, the market there does not afford such enormous needs for the building of recreational devices,that is to say in these areas the governments should also aid in building recreational devices,because sometimes people also have rights to relax in such places.In these areas,the building of mental health devices and recreational devices should synchronized ,which means that the government should be more cautious to distribute the whole funds to each area.However,in recent years,people are getting along with an excess of recreational devices due to such a prosperous society.And the more important misson for the government is to build the devices of mental health firstly.
In conclusion, as I just unfold my opinion above,I just in favor of the argument that the government should pay more attention on the building of art museums and music performance centers in most cases.But if there are places really lack of recreational devices,the govenrment also have the responsibility to satisfy them.
作者: Yeeisstrong    时间: 2012-10-10 13:37
TPO 18


In the reading passage, the auther concludes that there are three ways to address to the extinction of Torreya. While the lecturer do not in favor of the opinion, he(it) states that none of the three ways can make a difference of Torreya from dying out, which on the other hand contradict what the auther in the reading passage concludes. The lecturer unfolds her disagreeement for the following reasons.
In the first place, the reading passage gives a opinion that reestablish Torreya in the same location in which it thrived for thousands of years can bring this kind of species back to life. Whereas thelecturer hardly agree to that, the reason is that Torreya in recent years does not influenced by the single element, which is given above in the reading passage. Torreya is now affected by the whole climates of Florida, which nowadays has a extremely high temperature due to the global warming. Moreover, many places are getting drier and do not suit for the living of Torreya, so in other words there are nowhere for Torreya survive against the extinction.
Furthermore, another really inevitable problem the lecturer give to us is the plant migration，which will deny the suggestion in the reading passage that move Torreya to an different location. The lecturerimplys that the migration of other plants will adversely do a lot of harm to the surviving of Torreya, including the other species will spread that much quickly(quick), take much places of Torreya, eventually will kill off new trees or plants. So in this case, this solution of the reading passage can be meaningless and should be ruled out due to theunexpectable causes of other species.
Finally, perserving Torreya in research centers and let scientists do some useful experiments to keep them prosperous are considerd the third way to handle the extinction of Torreya. However, the lecturer takes into account of miniscule population of Torreya, which in this way the scientists can not even make a sound experiment due to such limited account of specimens. In this case, the third method can also be another invalid solution.



注意小的词性和拼写问题啊，我总是打错哎，，，加油！
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-10 21:51
10.10
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Movies are worth watching only when they teach us something about the real life.

Nowadays,various communication medias are spreading over the socitey,in other words, people in recent years are paying more attention on these kinds of medias,especially in this case movies stand out against other medias.However,another question just drops out.Are movies worth watching only when they are something about the real life?You know,these years due to the rapid development of technology,there are a boom in science fictions,which are striking sbujects of movies.Are these kinds of movies really do not worth watching?While from my perspective,I totally disgree with this kind of opinion for the following reasons.
In the first place,these years a lot of diverse subjects of movies have been put into the market,and these kind of different movies just meet the need of different tastes of people.Some people just get over with their boring life,and they want to experience the life that they have never thought of before.In this way,the subject about science fiction which give us a totally different vision of life just meets their needs.And to be honest,these kinds of movie just worth watching because the creativity,the inovation,the reamarkable thinking pattern,ect.These things are really needed in some parts of departments.And it just can make a enormous difference on the obsolete working stuffs.Moreover,these things are incrediable precious in the 21st century,and the people well eqiupped these thinking will really make a profit in career.
Furthermore, the movies are not only worth watching if they do actually contain something about real life.Apart from the science fiction above,the cartoon for children or the anime for adults can in other way do a lot of good to people.The cartoon for children first,this subject indeed aid in beautifying children’s life and really do a hugh relieve for their parents in return.We can hardly take a thought of someday the cartoon get extinct,what our life will be ?Especially for someone who has a happy family,what will they do when their children just in mood and there are never some imaginable cartoon figures coming to life.The same to adults who just get used to enjoy anime when they just back to home and want to relax,they can never get back to the innocent childhood with full of imagination.What these terribe results if we just give up watching these lovely movies.
Admittedly,we can never deny that some movies about real life can better equipped us with a lot of useful tools,different thinking patterns,considerable amout of experiences which we can try to put in our daily life.Moveover,we just can not give up these movies too is we want to take a more close glance of our life and learn something about ourselves.However,if anyone want me to take a pick of these different subjects of movies,I will never respond because I totally can not make a easy choice.I sincerely want all these kinds of movies in my life,don’t you?
In conclusion, like I just told you above,none of the single subjects of movies can satify me,because what I want in my life is always full of something real,something creative,something just innocent.All these things will make up my whole life.
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-10 23:38
In the reading passage, the arguer concludes that “let it burn”policy has a lot of negative effects on some issues for a couple of reasons,while in this case the lecturer in the listening material refute that kind of opinion by giving the facts against these opinions.
In the first place,the arguer in the reading passage states that the policy attributes some tree damages and tree vegetation,which in the same way get some scorched areas eventually.While in the listening material the lecturer gives full disagreement about this opinion,she gives specific facts that the forest fire can give other opportunites for the new trees and plants and let them be prosperous and diverse again,especially for some species which can endure the more heated temperature.So in other words,that is really a new chance for these species to give birth in such circumstance.
Furthermore,the reading passage gives us another information which imfers that the number of wildlife may get much more declined due to the forest fire.O the contrary, the lecturer do not in favor of this argument by leaving that this seemly severe phenomenon may work adversely.Which means that it also give other species new chance to grow due to the decline of the wildlife.Moreover,it indeed gives these new species some brand habitats to let them give birth.Eventually these species’perdators can get more stronger in return,and it also can build some more solid chains in the animal world.
The last, the arguer also contends that the forest can cause some negative consequence for the local economy due to the unstable weather changing after the forest fire such as little rain and strong wind.However,the lecturer oppose that by expound the unusual weather is not exist forever,which means that is will never happen again and maybe will dismissed in a couple of mouths.Eventually,the toutists will get back and the economy will warm up.
作者: margrate    时间: 2012-10-11 15:33
标题: 1010 综合
1010综合  FROM MARGRATE
作者: himiko0607    时间: 2012-10-12 13:16
10.10独立作文修改
作者: loveluyuanbai    时间: 2012-10-12 14:00
恩 说的很对 我的确喜欢用这些词啊。。。感觉像是在对话一样 不正规也。。。慢慢改正



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