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作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-18 04:40
标题: 梨花海棠君的作文帖
为配合队长和队长夫人工作，搞个小号来作文，欢迎大家口水淹死我

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作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-18 19:36
8月18独立，The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries

Educational improvement as the heatedly discussed issue has been controversial since it was raised up. Because of its crucial position in the modern social development, the public and authorities are concerned with the educational quality and system under scrutiny. Caught by such attention, some educators propose the simple and available plan that the teachers’ salary be higher to motivate the teachers, propelling the process of quality improvement. Rational seems the plan from economic perspective, but obviously better alternatives could reach the final goal. Several points in different dimensions will be demonstrated and explained to testify my hypothesis.

Generally, three elements decide the quality of the education, teacher, students and facilities. Decided by multiple factors, “best” way should exploit these factors comprehensively instead of narrowing to one. Not only the teachers’ morale but also the students’ should be motivated to avoid the negative response from students. Assuming that a group of students taught by a high salary teacher who is highly energetic and dynamic but lack of teaching experience, the students would not feel involved but feel bored to some extent. The effects would be fatal to educational process and learning attitudes of students, high salary teacher doesn’t equal to qualified teacher is the fundamental drawback of the proposal.

Learning is such an intricate “project” that utilizes both the teaching and the learning tools. Facilities such as libraries and study rooms benefit the students in another way which reinforce what they were taught during the class time and provide a place to explore the uncovered. Pitching investment in the fundamental facilities could diversify the learning pattern and enhance the quality of education after class. Indispensible are the feedback and review for students, therefore, constructing the new learning facilities stimulate the motivation and efficiency of learning, on the other hand, the need of people who are willing to study could also be satisfied.

In addition, most teachers who devote themselves to the career worship that teaching is a noble thing. Raising salary to spur them might result in the chaos of the industry, causing people to chase after money instead of job satisfaction. Demerits will overweigh the merits if the plan executed. Budget should be assigned to training fees of teachers to guarantee that they are competent and capable of their duties. Educational improvement could be realized only if the resources were allocated appropriately.

Finally, I would like to emphasize that increasing the salary is a good way to improve the quality of education but not the best way, as I mentioned, considering the whole influencing factors to come up with a well-rounded plan is the primary direction to the educators and authorities.

作者: 超级无敌小鹤鹤 时间: 2012-8-18 20:21
帮你改了统一标题哈~~~

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-8-18 22:48

为配合队长和队长夫人工作，搞个小号来作文，欢迎大家口水淹死我

-- by 会员 N只梨花压海棠 (2012/8/18 4:40:26)

水一个~ (o ! o)
我觉得签名改成做饭比较押韵

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-8-19 10:55
8月18独立，The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries

红色错误蓝色建议高亮精彩

Educational improvement as the heatedly discussed issue has been controversial since it was raised up. Because of its crucial position in the modern social development, the public and authorities are concerned with the educational quality（吹毛求疵地说：the quality of education 和educational quanlity感觉有细微的不同，前者更好） ~~and system~~under scrutiny. Caught by such attention（这个分词的逻辑主语应该是the quality of education,但是这句话的主语是educator，不符）, some educators propose the simple and available plan thatthe teachers’ salary be higher（raise 会更好，但是要改的话整句话都要变了）to motivate the teachers, propelling the process of quality improvement. （As the issue is caught by such attention, some educators propose to raise teacher's salary, a simple and direct way to propell the process of the quality improvement.粗改，供参考）Rational seems（adj.+v.???倒装么？？） the plan from economic perspective, but obviously better alternatives could reach the final goal. Several points in different dimensions will be demonstrated and explained to testify my hypothesis.

Generally, three elements decide the quality of the education, teacher, students and facilities. Decided by multiple factors,(还是逻辑主语的问题)“best” way should exploit these factors comprehensively instead of narrowing to one.（这句话好得我快热泪盈眶了） Not only the teachers’ morale but also the students’ should be motivated to avoid the negative response from students. Assuming that a group of students taught by a high salary teacher who is highly energetic and dynamic but lack of teaching experience, the students would not feel involved but feel bored to some extent. The effects would be fatal to educational process and learning attitudes of students, high salary teacher doesn’t equal to qualified teacher is the fundamental drawback of the proposal.

Learning is such an intricate “project” that utilizes both the teaching and the learning tools. Facilities such as libraries and study rooms benefit the students in another way which reinforce what they were taught during the class time and provide a place to explore the uncovered. Pitching investment in the fundamental facilities could diversify the learning pattern and enhance the quality of education after class. Indispensible are the feedback and review for students, therefore, constructing the new learning facilities stimulate the motivation and efficiency of learning, on the other hand, the need of people who are willing to study could also be satisfied.

In addition, most teachers who devote themselves to the career worship that teaching is a noble thing. Raising salary to spur them might result in the chaos of the industry, causing people to chase after money instead of job satisfaction. Demerits will overweigh the merits if the plan executed. Budget should be assigned to training fees of teachers to guarantee that they are competent and capable of their duties. Educational improvement could be realized only if the resources were allocated appropriately.

Finally, I would like to emphasize that increasing the salary is a good way to improve the quality of education but not the best way, as I mentioned, considering the whole influencing factors to come up with a well-rounded plan is the primary direction to the educators and authorities.

总评：写的太好了

很少看到逻辑这么好的文章，没有用具体白痴的例子，但是又充满了字数！！！
不是我不认真，是真心改不出错误，我摔！
总之，再接再厉！

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-20 01:33
8,19 独立---Do youagree or disagree; the way a person dressed is a good indication of his/herpersonality or character?

An oldsaying “you are what you wear” has been recognized as the undeniable truth bymost people during a long period. However, judged by the appearance andclothing in others’ eyes, people are inclined to hide themselves behind theiroutfits, confusing other people the impact especially the first impression.Therefore, the opponents firmly support the undermining effectiveness thatdress brings. The point of view seems superficially indisputable but totallyincomplete to construct the logical chain. The discrepancies would becritically considered and corrected in the following parts of the article.

Frankly,most people love themselves in the mirror than in the reality where their eyescould not contact. Self-image strongly connects the inner mind with clothes.Every time when people dressed up and staring at them in the mirror, they willappraise and score their image, whether it was outstanding or ordinary wasdecided and determined by their own minds, others have little influence on thescoring system. Various perspectives construct different dimensional worlds,correlating with the personality, education and status. A fashionable manwouldn’t wear out-dated clothes when he goes out, a leisure wouldn’t wear suitwhen he was on vacation. Time will change, but the traditional and naturalattribute belongs to the whole humane no matter in what generation.

Furthermore,in modern society, individualism has been raised to a incomparable positionthat even could represent a culture’s value. Generally, clothes people chooseto wear could offset the imperfections of people to draw other’s attention ontheir merits. Individualized patterns depict the different lives of differenthuman being, To distinguish themselves from other, modern people are in fond ofthe peculiar accessories and outfits to be labeled as their own “brand”.Honorable and favorable in contempory development, outfit selection already hasbeen a valuable art and booming industry.

On theother hand, indication of one’s personality could be exposed to multiplefactors besides the way the people dressed, but the statement doesn’t revealthat the way people dressed is not associated with one’s character at all.There is a deficient loop to be convincing. In addition, the style ofconversation and action dominates first impression in a unacquited relationship.People are less likely to hide their character behind their clothes because ofthis reason.

Atlast, sounds overstated as it is, I am definitely proponent of the previousevidences, and the outfit people choose could be crucial and determining tosome extent. Given the description of one’s dressing style, People could tellthe internal value and attitudes towards life. But in order to be objective, otherindicators should also be thought over to be unbiased.

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-8-20 11:35
19改文
8,19 独立---Do youagree or disagree; the way a person dressed is a good indication of his/herpersonality or character?

An oldsaying“you are what you wear”has been recognized as the undeniable truth bymost people during a long period. However, judged by the appearance andclothing in others’ eyes, people are inclined to hide themselves behind theiroutfits(这个词也可以表示衣服，婷婷木有想到诶), confusing other people the impact especially the firstimpression.Therefore, the opponents firmly support the undermining effectiveness（直接用effect行吗?） thatdress brings. The point of view seems superficially indisputable but totallyincomplete to construct the logical chain. The discrepancies would becritically considered and corrected in the following parts of the article.这句话太强了，是模板吗？

Frankly,most people love themselves（better跟后面的than对应） in the mirror than in the reality where their eyescould not contact. Self-image strongly connects the inner mind with clothes.Every time when peopledressed up and staring at them in the mirror, they willappraise and score their image, whether it was outstanding or ordinary wasdecided and determined（这两个是不是重复了？） by their own minds, others have little influence on thescoring system. Various perspectives construct different dimensional worlds,correlating with the personality, education and status. A fashionable manwouldn’t（would not） wear out-dated clothes when he goes out, a leisure wouldn’t wear suit when he was on vacation. Time will change, but the traditional and naturalattribute belongs to the whole humane no matter in what generation.

Furthermore,in modern society, individualism has been raised to a incomparable positionthat even could represent a culture’s value. Generally, clothes people chooseto wear could offset the imperfections of people to draw other’s attention ontheir merits. Individualized patterns depict the different lives of differenthuman being, To distinguish themselves from other(用others比较好), modern people are in fond ofthe peculiar accessories and outfits to be labeled as their own “brand”.Honorable and favorable in contempory（contemporary） development, outfit selection already hasbeen a valuable art and booming industry.

On theother hand, indication of one’s personality could be exposed to multiplefactors besides the way the people dressed, but the statement doesn’t revealthat the way people dressed is not associated with one’s character at all.（这句话好绕口啊，不过总算读明白了，双重否定）There is a deficient loop to be convincing. In addition, the style ofconversation and action dominates first impression in a unacquited（unacquainted） relationship.People are less likely to hide their charactersbehind their clothes because ofthis reason.

Atlast, sounds overstated as it is, I am definitely proponent of the previous evidences, and the outfit people choose could be crucial and determining(one's characters感觉少了个谓语) tosome extent. Given the description of one’s dressing style, People could tell the internal value and attitudes towards life. But in order to be objective, otherindicators should also be thought over to be unbiased.

Conclusion：

果真奇作，膜拜一下~~

1.处处彰显逻辑的光彩，三个sub-point结合在一起了

2.only一些拼写错误了

3.真的很好~~

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-20 19:31
8,20 独立 --- your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does

Happiness index as an eye-catching measurement has ranked all the nations to score the countries' happiness factors. Judging from the cultural value and traits, we can obtain the coincidence that what we consider the country where civilians have more pressure from their jobs has lower happiness index in the investigating from statistics. Biased and Superficial seems the judgment made, but the trend could still be speculated through the numbers. I, as a social person, comprehensively combine different "rational" factors with "irrational" own feelings, concluding that job apparently has more effect on happiness than social life, reasons and examinations will be explored to break down the controversial issue.

The first question hanging over my brain is that what takes you more? The job, or your social life? Most people would offer the undeniable answer: yes. Of course, the job has occupied more than half of our day time, roughly what we experienced during the working time has twice effects than the rest of our time, not even the social life time. When on duty, people easily are in touch with the satisfaction and responsibilities, the two basic needs leading us to be enjoyable. On the other hand, social life in the modern society has crucial position and incomparable effects on leisure time, it still couldn't decide our related feelings that brought by job.

Networking as a heatedly discussed issue in the career area is a important social pattern in during the working time. From the ever-increasing stock price of Linkedin, we can reach the previous point of view."We love networking" , this will definitely gain various agreements in all industries,. Providing new opportunities and visions in their careers, networking has been one of the new social lives based on the jobs. In addition, the increasing rate of employment, such as in the Europe, would distract the unemployed from their normal social life to the job related social activities.

Assuming such a situation, you prefer to enjoy social life rather your job, what will the your life be? Desperate in your professional area, you are easily indulged in the social "intimacy" , luring around and feeling worthless except on the party and on date. What a miserable it will be. Social life to some extent release people from the pressured work but value nothing to make people choke. The main value of a human exists in the achievements especially the working achievements, giving up the main value, people will be hysterical and lost.

Finally, basing on the evidences supporting the arguments I make, we could inspect that job is more essential in satisfying your own life and creating the successful personal values. The effects it causes are lasting and extremely ditrimental to one's fulfillment.

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-8-21 19:27
刚刚看多啦a梦，正在改文，别着急哈~

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-8-21 20:06
8,20 独立 --- your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does

Happiness index（幸福指数^o^）as an eye-catching measurement has ranked all the nations to score the countries' happiness factors. Judging from the cultural value and traits, we can obtain the coincidence that what we consider the country where civilians have more pressure from their jobs has lower happiness index in the investigating from（这个地方不明白，是调查数据吗，among statistics of the investigation） statistics. Biased and Superficial seems（倒装不错，不过前面是两个词，seem不用加s了吧） the judgment made, but the trend could still be speculated through the numbers. I, as a social person, comprehensively combine different "rational" factors with "irrational"ownfeelings, concluding that job apparently has more effect（effects） on happiness than social life, reasons and examinations will be explored to break down the controversial issue.

The first question hanging over my brain is that what takes you more? （第一句通常是TS，建议不要用问句，e-rater可能识别不出来）The job, or your social life? Most people would offer the undeniable answer: yes(这个是选择题，不是是非题啊，答案应该是job~). Of course, the job has occupied more than half of our day time, roughly what we experienced during the working time has twice(加个extent没有直接用twice修饰effect的)effects than the rest of our time, not even the social life time. When on duty, people easily are(换成get，比较动态) in touch with the satisfaction and responsibilities, the two basic needs leading us to be enjoyable. On the other hand, （even if加一个更好）social life in the modern society has crucial position and incomparable effects on leisure time, it still couldn't（could not）decide our related feelings that brought（不形象，用render）by job.

Networking as a heatedly discussed issue in the career area is a important social pattern in during（留一个） the working time. From the ever-increasing stock price of Linkedin, we can reach the previous point of view."We love networking" , this will definitely gain various（这个地方逻辑有问题，后面是agree就是一致的，而various是强调不同，建议去掉，意思已经用后面的in all industries表达出来了） agreements in all industries,. Providing new opportunities and visions in their careers, networking has been one of the new social lives based on the jobs. In addition, the increasing（前面用过了，这里可以换成roaring/skyrocketing）rate of employment, such as in the Europe, would distract the unemployed from their normal（这里normal: according with, constituting, or not deviating from a norm, rule, or principle,用ordinary较好） social life to the job related social activities.

Assuming such a situation, you prefer to enjoy social life rather your job, what will the your life be? Desperate in your professional area, you are easily indulged in the social "intimacy" , luring around and feeling worthless except on the party and on date(直接合并就行，party可能也是和你妹子去的嘛~). What a miserable （少了个名词：life）it will be. Social life to some extent release(releases) people from the pressured(pressured是形容人的主观感受，换成onerous) work but value nothing to make people choke(婷婷不明白这里的用法). The main value of a（不用强调是一只人） human exists in the achievements especially the working achievements, giving up the main value, people will be hysterical（生动！）and lost.

Finally, basing on the evidences supporting the arguments I make, we could inspect that job is more essential in satisfying your own life and creating the successful（感觉这里用successful修饰value不太对，用profound？） personal values. The effects it causes are lasting and extremely ditrimental（这个词貌似用错了？） to one's fulfillment.

Conclusion：抓狂，每次都写这么好！这词汇，嘿嘿，婷婷也小摸的查了好几次字典的说~

1.写的比较有深度，把job中的social life都拿出来了，不错

2.有少量用词不准和逻辑错误

3.继续努力吧~

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-22 04:54
8 21独立，早晨梦游起来写的，睡眼惺忪, 发完继续睡去了~瓜瓜同学来狠P！
Distance is aabstract definition on my mind until I left my hometown for university. Livingin my hometown, a small town where people are closely connected with eachother, I made intimate and life-long friends there. When told to say goodbye tomy pals, I was deeply frustrated and desperate to accept such a cruel fact, butwhat makes me relieve is the desire for knowledge and passion for venture in myfuture. Commonly, distance blocks the certain relationships between friends,but from my perspective, not moving to a new city or new country for fearingfor losing friends is a clumsy excuse and coward-style action, render the badeffects. Truth and the evidences proving it would be exposed in the following paragraphsto oppose the issue.

Usually, moving toa new country or city means breaking in a strange environment, which is more orless different from your familiar life style in your previous place. Sufferingthe adapting problem and messy settlement at first, people generally couldadjust themselves to the new pattern after a few weeks, In contact with the “new”people around, the new settler could socialize with the new friends in the newplace, new relationships would not influence the existing ones but provide youwith a new chance to share your stories to your new friends. The oldfriendships could be treasured through the new acquaintance because you willmemorize certain old friends when referring to a topic.

The remote electronicaldevices, such as the mobile phone and internet-connected computer, could linkyou with your old friends. Booming as the internet application is , Skype andCamfrog, could realize the face to face online chatting. The old friendshipswouldn’t be undermined via such technology. On the other hand, keeping distinctto some extent could reinforce the friendship in a long-term view to avoid aover frequent communication which could be annoying to both.

In addition, whensteeping into a world, people will experience and explore the things, whichwill be worth being away from friends. Rare are the opportunities for people tofulfill their dreams, missing these chances could cause them to not forgivethemselves especially when they are old. Furthermore, “comfort zone” restrictspeople into an “incarceration” where their visions are limited to the surroundings,sunrise and sunset could be appreciated exotically and spectacularly outsidethe familiar places to avoid pathetic regrets for fear of losing oldfriends.

Finally, bearingthe cliché of the losing friend’s statement, I engage myself into the beliefthat moving to a new place benefit you in different angles, at the same time,the chance that old friendships become apathetic is gratuitously assumed basedon the evidences and arguments.

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-8-22 13:07
It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the loss of old friends.D/A

Distance is a abstract definition on my mind until I left my hometown for university. Livingin my hometown, a small town where people are closely connected with each other, I made intimate and life-long friends there. When told to say goodbye to my pals（感觉told这个被动用在这里意义不大，pal较为口语化，不推荐）, I was deeply frustrated and desperate to accept such a cruel fact, but what makes（made） me relieve is（was） the desire for knowledge and passion for venture in my future. Commonly, distance blocks the certain relationships between friends,but from my perspective, not moving to a new city or new country for fearing for（of） losing friends is a clumsy excuse and coward-style action, render the badeffects（这个的主语也是not moveing 那一段？感觉离的有点远，而且应该加个and来连接）. Truth and the evidences proving it would be exposed in the following paragraphs~~to oppose the~~ ~~issue~~.(it之上一句的but后面的内容，那issue呢？指代不清，建议直接去掉)

Usually, moving to a new country or city meansbreaking in a strange environment, which is more or less different from your familiar life style in your previous place. Suffering the adapting problem and messy settlement at first, people generally could （not）adjust themselves to the new pattern after （utill）a few weeks(+later,感觉改成not...utill...更好一点), In contact with the “new”people around, the new settler could socialize with the new friends in the newplace,（缺少连词） new relationships would not influence the existing ones but（应该要加上also，单单but的话句子的意思不太对劲） provide you with a new chance to share your stories to your new friends. The old friendships could be treasured through the new acquaintance because you will memorize certain old friends when referring to a topic.（建议还是在第一、二句就扔出你的观点，这一段引入有点长了）

（缺衔接）The remote electronical devices, such as the mobile phone and internet-connected computer, could link you with your old friends. Booming as the internet application is , Skype and Camfrog, could realize the face to face online chatting（额= =！adj.+as+subject1+is, subject2+verb 这个句式我也有用，但是根据35好句的意思是：虽然，我把例句附在文章最后）. The old friendships wouldn’t be undermined via such technology（这个木有表达好，建议改成：thank to such technology, the old friendship would not be undermined 。另：IBT writing里尽量不要出现would'nt 这类的缩写）. On the other hand, keeping distinct to some extent could reinforce the friendship in a long-term view to（改成 as it aviods） avoid aover frequent communication which could be annoying to both.

In addition, when steeping into a world, people will experience and explore the things, which will be worth being away from friends. Rare are the opportunities for people to fulfill their dreams, (缺少连词链接两个句子，最简单地加个and)missing these chances could cause them to not forgive themselves especially when they are old. Furthermore, “comfort zone” restricts people into an “incarceration” where their visions are limited to the surroundings,（again！连词！）sunrise and sunset could be appreciated exotically（神马词？金山词霸查不到-。-） and spectacularly outsidethe familiar places to avoid pathetic regrets for fear of losing oldfriends.

Finally, bearing the cliché （神马情况！法语也来啦？！跪。）of the losing friend’s statement, I engage myself into the belief that moving to a new place benefit you in different angles, at the same time,the chance that old friendships become a pathetic is gratuitously assumed based on the evidences and arguments.

梦游时写的确实没有清醒的时候写的好啊。
1.注意句子+，+（and/ but/ 等conj.）+句子这个错误有点低级了，重复出现好多次。
2.十、Adj + as + Subject（主词）+ be, S + V~ （虽然...）
例句：Rich as our country is, the qualities of our living are by no means satisfactory. {by no means = in no way = on no account 一点也不}
虽然我们的国家富有，我们的生活品质绝对令人不满意。（摘自35好句）
此用法已经鹤鹤牛津词典认证，放心使用啊哈哈哈

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-22 13:59
四篇了，把自己的错误总结一下经常地逻辑主语搞错，魂淡啊~
（As the issue is caught by such attention, some educators propose to raise teacher's salary, a simple and direct way to propell the process of the quality improvement.粗改，供参考 --- 避免啰嗦的表达方式
经常性忘记加连词或者把标点改成分号--- 不可饶恕啊
缩写啊缩写--- 太随便了
in the investigating from statistics ---- 自己写的，现在想想，这还是人话么== among the statistics from investigations
increasing--- roaring/skyrocking/climbing/rising
detrimental--- 傻逼呵呵地记成了重要的
successful personal value---- 应该是 sucess-orientated personal value- 这样就好了

自我批判：1，态度要认真，最后一篇写得太快了，根本没多想，pal都出来了~
2，速度要加快，但是错误，尤其是句式错误不能有，下篇严格下时间
3，词汇上面要更丰满一些，在某些小话题上还需要积累，
4，最后一个星期搞个自己的模版
5，走了~blessing myself---- something we obtain too cheaply we esteem to lightly

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-22 20:01
8 22独立parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently
Educationalmethods, the ever-lasting heatedly discussed issue, has expanded to all the environedareas in our lives. Concerning the future of the next generation, the parentsand public exert great effort to chase the beacon in the mist. During theperiod, the road they embark on is blocked by the topic; children should finishtheir tasks by themselves or via parents’ help. The paradox triggered the stormof arguing and discussing, people falling into it with confusions. Generalarguments and specific examples will be demonstrated in the article to displaythe pros and cons of each way, providing a straightforward process to decidethe better one.

Independent and criticalthinking is always the favorable and essential quality children, for it couldreinforce the process of self-improving that is crucial in the children’sfuture careers. Encouraging children to resolve the assignments independentlycould absolutely train such quality, and what the parents offer is not set mealbut a a la carte. Children could choose their own proble-settled methods whichwill not be limited by the stereotypes. Creative and optimistic will be thechildren to face the challenges when treated in this way. But struck in aproblem in a long time, children could be unconfident and clumsy because notevery one is Einstein, even the genius need the guide from experienced adults. Furthermore,it is not possible to “abandon” their children except worthless words for theparents.

Another considering way,giving the suggestions and directions for the children’s problems, could beless time-consuming and energy-consuming. Children could benefit from such educationalway to explore the uncovered and cultivate their habits and hobbies. Inaddition, children would not be distracted by their own absent-minded moments but be concentratingon the tasks under the parents’ supervision. Rational seems it is, this methodhas obvious fallacy that could overweigh the advantages rendered by it. “Toteach a man to fish is better than to give him fish.” Children could rely on itever since, they might be dependent in the pattern without their own thoughts.Restricted in their parent’s minds, children could hardly experience the newworld; they will be helpless and desperate when facing the world alone.

Finally, I try to convincemyself to support one way, but I failed. Complex and intricate the issue is.What we have covered and explored is insufficient to conclude, but no mattereach way is necessary to be adjusted by the children’s characters and interests.On the other hand, for different subjects, the educational ways could bemultiple. Touring into the forest with parents’ assistance is a good way to studybiology. Explaining the mathematic formulas independently could be effiencentand unforgettable.

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-8-23 18:03
8.22改文
8 22独立parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work independently

Educationalmethods, the ever-lasting heatedly discussed issue, has expanded to all the environedareas in our lives. Concerning the future of the next generation, the parentsand public exert(最近发现cast这个词也挺好~)great effort to chase the beacon in the mist（形象的比喻）. During theperiod, the road they embark on is blocked by the topic（这句话不是很明白，求解释）; children should finishtheir tasks by themselves or via parents’ help. The paradox triggered the stormof arguing and discussing, people falling into it with confusions. Generalarguments and specific examples will be demonstrated in the article to displaythe pros and cons of each way, providing a straightforward process to decidethe better one显得好有逻辑的说~）.

Independent and criticalthinking is always the favorable and essential quality (of) children, for it couldreinforce the process of self-improving that is crucial in the children’sfuture careers. Encouraging children to resolve the(可以去掉) assignments independentlycould absolutely train such quality, and what the parents offer is not set mealbut a carte. Children could choose their own proble-settled（problem-settled）methods whichwill not be limited by the stereotypes. Creative and optimistic will be thechildren to face the challenges when treated in this way. But struck（stranded） in aproblem in a long time, children could be unconfident and clumsy because notevery one is Einstein(这句是做什么成分？), even the genius need the guide from experienced adults. Furthermore,it is not possible to “abandon” their children except worthless words for theparents.

Another considering way,giving the suggestions and directions for the children’s problems, could beless time-consuming and energy-consuming.（这个地方要强调一下小孩省时省力了？） Children could benefit from such educationalway to explore the uncovered （这里少了一个名词）and cultivate their habits and hobbies. Inaddition, children would not be distracted by their own absent-minded moments but be concentratingon the tasks under the parents’ supervision. Rational seems it is, this methodhas obvious fallacy that could overweigh the advantages rendered by it. “Toteach a man to fish is better than to give him fish.” Children could rely on it ever since（用could怪怪的，改成if children rely on it ever since）, they might be dependent in the pattern without their own thoughts.Restricted in their parent’s minds, children could hardly experience the newworld; they will be helpless and desperate when facing the world alone.

Finally, I try to convincemyself to support one way, but I failed.Complex and intricate the issue is.What we have covered and explored is insufficient to conclude, but no mattereach way is necessary to be adjusted by the children’s characters and interests.On the other hand, for different subjects, the educational ways could bemultiple. Touring into the forest with parents’ assistance is a good way to studybiology.Explaining the mathematic formulas independently could be effiencent(efficient) and unforgettable.

Conclusion：同样抱着欣赏的态度啊~此乃美文也

1.海棠的比喻用的超级好！

2.冠词问题，之前上课听老师说过，the表特指，a表泛指，后面接单数；如果是复数的话，通常什么都不加。

It's a ladder used to ascend a tree, it's a kind of tool of ascent that's a kind of a tool for getting fruit.这是用来爬上树的梯子，是一种上升的工具,也是用来摘果子的。

The radius of the orbit, the energy of the system and the velocity of the electron, I am just going to present you the solutions.是轨道的半径，系统的能量,以及电子的速度，我接下来会给你们讲解其方程的解法。

3.很喜欢那个time-consuming and energy-consuming的观点

4.fighting

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-8-31 00:48
8月30独立，好久没写了，手生，边扯淡边写的，写了一个多小时，愁!

When the main westernauthorities emphasized on the ideology of democracy, the public was called upon to contribute themselves to vote for the relatively “fair” tax policy.Burdened by the bright future has been promised to the dwellers previously andthe “golden rule” admitted by the multilateral politic powers, government hasattempted to exploit effective proposals to benefit the civilians. Generalarguments and specific examples would supposedly be displayed to demonstratethe direction of the judgment which is relevant to the construction of art museumsand music performance center or of recreational facilities.

Standing on differentdimensional mountains, you could view various scenes. From the normal civilianperspectives, art museums and music performance provide them with the chancesto be drowning in the cultural pool to experience the depictions of the creaturesand characters from the great painters in the world or to enjoy the serendipitiesgifted by God which are created by amazing musicians. Furthermore, the artmuseums and music performance centers could cultivate the civilian’s intereststo arts through touring to such places. Adopted by the novels and stories from the ancestors, music and arts inanother way spur people to learn literature from native writers. What a amazingthing it is that people on the street chat with others with the topic of Shakespeareor Henry Thoreau and their articles. Hence, the national values and beliefscould be heritaged by the next generations.

Chasing the beacon in themist, the opponents criticize the arguments above that overstate the value ofthe art and music. Gratuitous assumptions made by the proponents mislead themto embark on the wrong crossroad. Great expenditures and time cost by buildingthe impractical arts, the “realists” prefer to urge the government to spend thetaxers’ money on the facilities that are closely associated with their lives.Building the recreational facilities supposedly fulfill the demand of mostpeople especially the avid people who regularly exercise outdoor. It is nodenying that people would be inclined to exercise via the superior facilitiescompared to the previous ones. Rational is the logical chain that health andstatus of the dwellers would be better. Especially, the ever-increasingcontemporary diseases and obsesity disturb modern people’s livies. Encouragingthem to go out and breathe the fresh air could be a fundamental problem that isindispensible to be settled by the government/

What the issue provides isnot a set meal but a a lar carte, policy maker should be clam to ignore themania of the discussion. No matter the artistic buildings or the recreationalfacilities could rendor the impacts based on the decisions. The governmentshould cope with the controversial problem through analyzing the currentsituation and future development of the cities. Take an imaging example. If,the image of the city is the historic city, advocating the local arts and musicis the buckle to the belt, and vice versa.

作者: steigen 时间: 2012-8-31 18:40
When the main western authorities emphasized on the ideology of democracy, the public was called upon to contribute themselves to vote for the relatively “fair” tax policy.（背景引入很深入啊，值得学习）Burdened by the bright future has been promised to the dwellers previously and the “golden rule” admitted by the multilateral politic powers, government has attempted to exploit effective proposals to benefit the civilians. General arguments and specific examples would supposedly be displayed to demonstrate the direction of the judgment which is relevant to the construction of art museum sand music performance center or of recreational facilities.（开头好有感觉啊，紧密和社会联系在一起）

Standing on different dimensional mountains, you could view various scenes.（好比喻）From the normal civilian perspectives, art museums and music performance provide them with the chances to be drowning in the cultural pool to experience the depictions of the creature sand characters from the great painters in the world or to enjoy the serendipities gifted by God which are created by amazing musicians. Furthermore, the art museums and music performance centers could cultivate the civilian’s interests to arts through touring to such places. Adopted by the novels and stories from the ancestors, music and arts in another way spur people to learn literature from native writers. What an amazing thing it is that people on the street chat with others with the topic of Shakespeare or Henry Thoreau and their articles. Hence, the national values and beliefs could be heritaged by the next generations.

Chasing the beacon in the mist, the opponents criticize the arguments above that overstate the value of the art and music. Gratuitous assumptions made by the proponents mislead them to embark on the wrong crossroad. Great expenditures and time cost by building the impractical arts, the “realists” prefer to urge the government to spend the taxers’ money on the facilities that are closely associated with their lives. Building the recreational facilities supposedly fulfill the demand of most people especially the avid people who regularly exercise outdoor. It is no denying that people would be inclined to exercise via the superior facilities compared to the previous ones. Rational(缺少名词) is the logical chain that health and status of the dwellers would be better. Especially, the ever-increasing contemporary diseases and obsesity(???) disturb modern people’s livies(lives). Encouraging them to go out and breathe the fresh air could be a fundamental problem that is indispensible(indispensable) to be settled by the government/

What the issue provides is not a set meal but a a lar(???) carte, policy maker should be clam to ignore the mania of the discussion. No matter the artistic buildings or the recreational facilities could rendor(render) the impacts based on the decisions. The government should cope with the controversial problem through analyzing the current situation and future development of the cities. Take an imaging example. If, the image of the city is the historic city, advocating the local arts and musicis the buckle to the belt, and vice versa.(后两个句子可以整合在一起吧，总结做的很精彩)

批改过程中让我学到了很多，思路也很开拓，比喻还有最后总结升华也都很有特点。
不足的地方就是，有些拼写错误啊，多注意就好了，还有看了一下字数上快要500多字了
其实作文在350-450之间是最好的了。但是还是蛮佩服的，能有这么多可写~

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-9-1 12:51
8月31日独立，打字速度严重下降，半个小时才写了不到450字，郁闷
What we have observed inthe reality and from the success-orientated books occasionally introduce thesuccessful story of a small villager, attracted by this achievement, we admire himand constitute such a biased ideology. People who go out from the born villagewould gain greater achievements and happiness. There is an deficiency to connectthe logical loop. Superficial and insufficient evidences will be disputed inthe following parts of the articles to argue the right direction of the issue.

First of all, a questionhanging over my head, what is success and happiness. Finding a torch in thedark, socialists have explored various situations and scenarios to figure outthe answers. Unfortunately, unknown the certain answer, no one could define thesuccess and happiness, but from the experience and demonstrations given by the investigations,success and happiness have a fundamental issues, that is do what you want.Imagine you are born as a empire with silver spoon, you could enjoy all the “wonderful” amusement all over the world but you couldn’t do your favorite things, it ispathetic and miserable. In the same pattern, devoting one’s willingness toachieve success would not result in the happier life but cause a hysterical anddesperate life. Therefore, irresponsible it is to assert that village peoplecould not achieve the same success and happiness as people who go out.

Generally, when speaking ofthe achievements that one gains, people are usually “blind” to see his hardworkingand ethical dilemmas. Behind the fame and fortune, the man who is successful islagged by such “heavy things” to conduct his duties, he would get happinessuntil he esteem the “heavy things” as his own destiny. Obviously, this is gratuitouslyassumed.

Finally, People who go outof the villiage to experience the outdoor world might be influenced by the distractionsand temptations outside. Even though they have more opportunities in themotroplicians, they will be easier to lose themselves to the unexpectedsituation without any trusted teamworkers. On the other hand, people who stayin the village could concentrate on what they do, if they seize one chancegifted by god, they could be successful too with the help of their families andfriends.

Even the whole society hasemphasized on the value of the vision which could only be gained through goingoutdoor, I hold the point of view that staying in own place could also renderthe successful life. But one’s destiny is decided by multiple factors, youcouldn’t rely on one, choosing your own comfort zone and enjoy your life couldbe the ideal and rational choice.

作者: pedrohuo 时间: 2012-9-1 14:17
What we have observed in the reality and from the success-orientated books occasionally introduce the successful story of a small villager, attracted by this achievement, we admire him and constitute such a biased ideology. People who go out from the born village would gain greater achievements and happiness. There is an(a) deficiency to connect the logical loop.Superficial and insufficient evidences will be disputed in the following parts of the articles to argue the right direction of the issue.（请教海棠兄。这个是模版么？感觉这句很好）

First of all, a question hanging over my head, what is success and happiness. Finding a torch in the dark, socialists have explored various situations and scenarios to figure out the answers. Unfortunately, unknown the certain answer, no one could define the success and happiness, but from the experience and demonstrations given by the investigations, success and happiness have a fundamental issues, that is do what you want. Imagine you are born as a empire with silver spoon, you could enjoy all the “wonderful” amusement all over the world but you couldn’t do your favorite things, it is pathetic and miserable. In the same pattern, devoting one’s willingness to achieve success would not result in the happier life but cause a hysterical and desperate life. Therefore, irresponsible it is to assert that village people could not achieve the same success and happiness as people who go out.

Generally, when speaking of the achievements that one gains, people are usually “blind” to see his hard working and ethical dilemmas. Behind the fame and fortune, the man who is successful is lagged by such “heavy things” to conduct his duties, he would get happiness until he esteem the “heavy things” as his own destiny. Obviously, this is gratuitously assumed.

Finally, People who go out of the villiage(village) to experience the outdoor world might be influenced by the distractions and temptations outside. Even though they have more opportunities in the motroplicians(metropolitans), they will be easier to lose themselves to the unexpected situation without any trusted team workers. On the other hand, people who stay in the village could concentrate on what they do, if they seize one chance gifted by god, they could be successful too with the help of their families and friends.(这段例子对我启发很大啊。太好了。我写的时候实在想不到例子了。所以最后观点段写的特差)

Even the whole society has emphasized on the value of the vision which could only be gained through going outdoor, I hold the point of view that staying in own place could also render the successful life. But one’s destiny is decided by multiple factors, you couldn’t rely on one, choosing your own comfort zone and enjoy your life could be the ideal and rational choice.

海棠的作文功底比我高很多。用词丰富。独立主格句式信手拈来。都是我需要学习的。除了几个拼写错误。真没发现什么问题。

作者: N只梨花压海棠 时间: 2012-9-1 18:56
把自己第一篇背得演讲词发上来为明天考试攒人品~ 林肯老大求给力Gettysburg Address Delivered on the 19th Day of November, 1863 Cemetery Hill, Gettysburg, Pennsylvania Fourscore and seven years ago, our fathers brought forth upon this continent a new Nation, conceived in Liberty, and dedicated to the proposition that all men are created equal. Now, we are engaged in a great Civil War, testing whether that Nation, or any nation so conceived and so dedicated, can long endure. We are met on a great battlefield of that war. We have come to dedicate a portion of that field as a final resting-place for those who gave their lives that Nation might live. It is altogether fitting and proper that we should do this. But, in a larger sense, we cannot dedicate, we cannot consecrate, we cannot hallow this ground. The brave men, living and dead, who struggled here, have consecrated it far above our power to add or detract. The world will little note nor long remember what we say here, but it can never forget what they did here. It is for us, the living, rather to be dedicated to the great task remaining before us; that from these honored dead, we take increased devotion to that cause for which they gave the last full measure of devotion; that this Nation, under GOD, shall have a new birth of freedom; and that government of the People by the People and for the People shall not perish from the earth."

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-9-16 22:26
我是楼主的NC粉！！！！

考试前特地前来一拜！！！！！

保佑我作文上27吧！！！！！！！

我会回来还愿的！！！！！！！！！！！

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-9-28 17:11

我是楼主的NC粉！！！！

考试前特地前来一拜！！！！！

保佑我作文上27吧！！！！！！！

我会回来还愿的！！！！！！！！！！！

-- by 会员瓜瓜不瓜 (2012/9/16 22:26:06)

还愿帖！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！

真的上了27！！！！！最后28！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！超灵的啊！！！！！！！！！！！！！

求OFFER！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-9-28 17:16

我是楼主的NC粉！！！！

考试前特地前来一拜！！！！！

保佑我作文上27吧！！！！！！！

我会回来还愿的！！！！！！！！！！！

-- by 会员瓜瓜不瓜 (2012/9/16 22:26:06)

-- by 会员瓜瓜不瓜 (2012/9/28 17:11:06)

果然虔诚啊！！
偶也来一发
求27+，要灵的话一定回来还愿~~

作者: liulu007 时间: 2012-9-28 17:30
小璐。。。。来学习啦。。。。句式。。。。用词。。。。果断抛弃老美185篇。。。。这些估计就够我琢磨的了。。。。。

作者: llssyy93 时间: 2012-10-6 10:23
考前特来许愿！！
求LZ保佑小女子作文27+！！！

从LZ的作文中获益颇多！！

希望成功后可以来还愿！！

膜拜LZ！！

我一定会虔诚的！！

作者: 戴娥缇玛 时间: 2012-10-6 10:32
虔诚的祈祷~~上次25了，这次一定要28+啊~~
海棠君，我一定会好好学习的~~
保佑~~
还有7天了，祈祷中~~~
我一定会来还愿的~~

作者: Cathyhe1990 时间: 2012-10-8 11:40
我也来取个经沾个喜气~
多向大牛学习！！上次27，这次希望29+！！！

作者: jennywang911 时间: 2012-10-16 23:00
楼主写的超级好！秒杀众多托福作文！
我要想要27 ！求楼主保佑啊！我也要来还愿！求27++++++！

作者: dorisxyy 时间: 2012-10-20 02:27
谢谢大牛分享！

作者: 口u2口 时间: 2012-10-21 10:56
感谢大牛分享，求沾仙气~

作者: NmgMadman 时间: 2012-10-22 10:36
写的真好啊。。。大牛，愁人啊 11月三号第五次考托福了。。。找不到可以找人指点的地方

作者: 北极的企鹅123 时间: 2012-10-22 20:13
话说大牛是个好人，乐于助人，我现在准备最后一战，但是考的有点迷茫了，知道自己有问题却麻木了，找不出在哪儿，话说能否将最苦恼的写作和口语发给大牛帮忙分析一下。。。。感谢啊。。。。

作者: 爱力宏的小搓板 时间: 2012-10-29 14:27

回去好好研究，希望我也可以~~~25真心就好呀

作者: llssyy93 时间: 2012-11-7 12:06
我来还愿了···果真27···跪拜楼主！

作者: 苗苗心圃G 时间: 2012-11-13 13:47
膜拜一下大牛！俺滴要求不高，这次写作上25就行啦

作者: corona321 时间: 2012-11-14 19:47
果然神作……
膜拜大牛……

保佑我比上回分数高就好啦……

会回来还愿的！！！

求大神庇佑～

作者: echine 时间: 2012-11-24 23:21
写的也忒好了！膜拜中。。。

作者: shisuwang 时间: 2012-11-27 21:36
也来取经~

愿这次比9.8每项都多2+！

加油加油！

希望可以成功回来还愿阿~~~

作者: 悬崖草 时间: 2012-12-5 08:14
问下楼主啊
跑个题
综合写作用一些参考资料模板有危险么，毕竟就算是自己改完之后的， ets还是能多多少少看出来你使用模板的啊

作者: 兜兜vicky 时间: 2013-1-12 09:29
明天考，拜一拜，求27加！绝对来还愿TAT

作者: perfectends 时间: 2013-1-23 10:33
楼主这文笔，还需要神马模板啊。。。俨然已经是高分范文了。。。无限崇拜并鄙视自己一个。。。退而结网去。。。这是怎么练就的啊，楼主，求勾搭。。。能加你好友么？我发站内消息了。。。

作者: 唯爱无缺 时间: 2013-3-2 11:02
赏心悦目！

作者: gengyi 时间: 2013-3-22 15:30
那我也来拜一下

作者: darisguo 时间: 2013-3-27 14:13
拜一下大牛，求29+！

作者: huangtan 时间: 2013-4-4 21:52

steigen 发表于 2012-8-31 18:40
When the main western authorities emphasized on the ideology of democracy, the public was called upo ...

rational is the chain .....只是楼主太喜欢这样的倒装了

作者: 时光机和咸鱼 时间: 2013-4-5 18:01
一战101，写作和阅读拖了分数，这次拜托一定读写上27啊，要求不高啊有没有。。。应了一定来还愿啊~！

作者: darisguo 时间: 2013-4-14 15:39
来还愿了真乃神帖！！

作者: lihaolan 时间: 2013-4-19 12:59
考试前来拜拜！！！考试顺利！作文顺利！

作者: lihaolan 时间: 2013-5-1 09:27
不错考试挺顺利，作文28

作者: applesoforever 时间: 2013-5-2 16:41
牛逼。学习了。

作者: wangmenghan123 时间: 2013-5-7 21:36
楼主真是大牛啊。像是考过GRE后写的这些，逻辑和词汇明显水平颇高，同求保佑28+，定来还愿~

作者: seci 时间: 2013-5-20 15:46
真大神，我第一次见到中国人写这么好的，拜读一下，求人品

作者: perfectends 时间: 2013-5-24 13:07

seci 发表于 2013-5-20 15:46
真大神，我第一次见到中国人写这么好的，拜读一下，求人品

作者: perfectends 时间: 2013-5-24 16:25

lihaolan 发表于 2013-5-1 09:27
不错考试挺顺利，作文28

哎呀，队友，不要一个个的都这么猛撒。。。

作者: 小镜儿爱木子 时间: 2013-7-18 00:34
周末考试，我也来膜拜下帖子求仙气，这几天把这几篇文章好好学习下，求保佑27+，定来还愿~

作者: Kate1992 时间: 2013-8-11 09:22
拜拜的话真的有用吗？？我也来膜拜一下~~~求上27！！！

作者: 铁板吗啡 时间: 2013-8-13 04:13
这是哪牛人小号啊，拜拜。

作者: thinking99 时间: 2013-8-17 15:53
求修改，作文实在太烂不知道怎么写，1号就考试了，裸考啊亲们，帮帮忙吧，只求不要死的太难看
tpo17 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertising is one of the most useful ways to make the customers believe in the products they are faced.
In my opinion, it’s true that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
First, the ultimate goal of the producers is to make maximum money and get profits. As there are so many similar products and the competition is much more dramatic, producers must use advertisements that can attract the customers to gain consumers and to do so, they may use exaggerate ways and definition to make their products attractive, and it can be even untrue.
What’s more, it is easy to cheat the consumers and mislead them to buy something useless by the advertisements make products seem much better than they really are. For example, some advertisements for ladies to lose weight may exaggerate the utility of the products and make women crazy about the products.
And last, producers may hire stars to advertise their products and these stars have the ability to make people believe in what they say. Like some snacks producers may employ hot stars to represent their products, they use some technology to make their products seem much more delicious and tasty, and people who like the star may buy a lot of this product without rational thinking, and when they get the food, they may be disappointed because of the low quality and terrible taste of the food.
In conclusion, it’s true that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.

作者: thinking99 时间: 2013-8-17 15:56
tpo16Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The new guidelines in the 19th century have improved the three problems.
First, before construction plan starts, it needs an examination of the value of artifacts, the government will preserve the valuable artifacts and avoid their destroyed.
Second, it’ll be the construction company that responsible for the financial support for archaeological research instead of the government, it’s a total new type of financial support and will guarantee the investigation of the sites for archaeologists.
And third, it’ll provide a lot of paid work during the process, experts of archaeology will be in every stage of the process, from helping draw the plan to process data, and write reports of archaeology.

I totally disagree with the idea that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. And here are some reasons to support my opinion.
First of all, if you travel in a group led by a tour guide, you will waste a lot of time in waiting for others. It’s a true experience that I took, once I traveled in a group led by a tour guide, in such a group there were so many old people, when we arrived at a destination, the tour guide told us to be back at an exact point of time, but when I came back after visiting, I just found that there were few people, other tourists were not temperature, and we waited for them for about an hour, and because of the limitation of time, we changed our visit schedule and didn’t visit a fantastic scenery, I was annoyed to have such an awful trip.
And second, if you travel by yourself without a tour guide, you may enjoy more in the trip. As we all known, when we travel with a tour guide, we can only appreciate the exact scenery and there are so many tourists in such popular sites, we can’t enjoy ourselves with so many tourists around us, it may be noisy, crowded, and disappointed. But if we travel by ourselves, we can find some sites with less people and better scenery, even if we couldn’t get better scenery, we will enjoy the process of seeking such scenes.
And what’s more, traveling in a group led by a tour guide may waste a lot more money than traveling by yourself. Nowadays, merchant all aim at how to take benefits from the customers, so when you travel in a group led by a tour guide, he or she will obviously arrange a lot of shopping plans during the trip, and make you spend money on some low quality and useless things, and it’s a waste of money, and you will just beyond your trip budget in no sense.
In conclusion, I totally argue against the view that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide, and I suggest people who want to have a fantastic and enjoyable trip to travel on themselves.

作者: thinking99 时间: 2013-8-17 16:14
tpo20. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree that successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
let’s take Edison as an example, he is one of the most famous inventors in the world. He invented a lot of new things during his life, if he just followed the forerunners and didn’t try new things, there will be much fewer useful inventions today.
When he thought about inventing something that can light the room, he tried thousands of times with different materials, he found some materials could light the room, but he didn’t stop and do what he know how to do well, instead, he tried more new materials, and at last found the most suitable one. If he just didn’t take the risk of failing, I think bulbs today can’t produce such bright light in our daily life.
And another example to illustrate my opinion is George Jobs, he took the risk of being fired and losing all his money to specify his Apple products, if he just followed Microsoft, and did some adaptions to the products like Microsoft company, it will be a huge loss of today’ high-tech industry, and with the fact that Apple products like Iphone, Ipod and other products are popular all over the world, George did his best to be a successful person and got a lot profits.
In conclusion, successful people are dare to try new things and take risks, they may face great challenges during the process of the experience, but if all people follow the old things and just make adaptions, there will be no creation and our world will not develop as today.

作者: sallygreen 时间: 2013-8-20 23:15
周末考试哟哟~
此必须是神贴，请愿周末作文27+，求保佑，定来还愿！！！

作者: Mint静默 时间: 2013-8-23 13:14
马上要考了，拜大神
下星期天求作文27+，要求真的不高，上了我一定会来还愿的。

作者: 晓野的野 时间: 2013-9-8 14:13

谢谢梨花海棠君

作者: Mint静默 时间: 2013-9-11 12:10

Mint静默发表于 2013-8-23 13:14
马上要考了，拜大神
下星期天求作文27+，要求真的不高，上了我一定会来还愿的。
...

来还愿了。
虽然没有27，但是当时独立确实写得不好，fair也是意料之中~
anyway，分数够申请了，撒花

作者: 小镜儿爱木子 时间: 2013-9-24 15:04

小镜儿爱木子发表于 2013-7-18 00:34
周末考试，我也来膜拜下帖子求仙气，这几天把这几篇文章好好学习下，求保佑27+，定来还愿~ ...

9.8的考试28了，虽然不是那次也来还个愿吧，后天又考G，加油！

作者: oceanflying2013 时间: 2013-12-6 17:59
请问大牛可以介绍一下学习英语的经验吗？真的是太牛了。。。

作者: roxlv 时间: 2013-12-9 23:47
只能说，在不用幼稚的例子还能写出这么高质量的文章，楼主一定下了苦功夫``~
并且逻辑思路超级缜密~
学习！
希望大神能继续发美文供我们学习呀~~！

作者: fleur0323 时间: 2014-3-20 08:40
首先必须膜拜！！！！！
其次有些问题恳请大神解答：
1、我是考雅思看了看和托福题目差不多但要求是40min250+words 字数比托福少 ~ 能加入写作小分队吗？如若批改会耽误其他同学吗？
2、我的雅思作文分数是5或5.5 好低啊~ 各种错误逻辑语法用词造句怎样提高我的作文需6.5 下月24号就考了。。。
跪求大神点拨啊 ~~ 感谢感谢！

作者: risedream 时间: 2014-3-22 07:16
今天考，请CD大神保佑！！

作者: risedream 时间: 2014-3-22 07:19
感谢CD！感谢这里的神猴、鸟儿姐姐、无敌小鹤鹤姐姐诚挚的支持和细心的帮助教导！此时此刻，想念你们，保佑我能给你们一个欣慰的结果。

作者: santakoala 时间: 2014-5-7 23:42
神贴膜拜，顺便求一个好结果，N战了作文从来都是22，这次一定要改过自新啊！！

作者: 陈大仪 时间: 2014-5-10 09:45
mark~ 非常赞！

作者: ctq2013 时间: 2014-5-10 20:27
明天考试，来大神面前许愿，求作文27. 定来还愿! Good luck!!!!

作者: txo0825 时间: 2014-5-20 01:25
大神美文保佑俺作文27+~~27也心满意足了！恩！好好练习，反复琢磨！争取能来还愿！！！！

作者: maggiezhi 时间: 2014-10-23 23:44

婷婷connie 发表于 2012-8-20 11:35
19改文8,19 独立---Do youagree or disagree; the way a person dressed is a good indication of his/herp ...

这文章的逻辑蛮奇怪的

作者: guanjan2004 时间: 2014-11-7 21:55
明显是考完G的大神啊~~~~~~~~

作者: gwqmmwendy 时间: 2015-3-31 01:09
感谢分享！

作者: twilighter123 时间: 2015-7-11 14:45
希望明天顺顺利利！！相信自己！！谢谢楼主的佳作~

作者: Wangdiya15 时间: 2015-7-26 13:31
8.1 首战拜大神~~~第一次只求作文25+ ~~~求保佑

作者: 温存。 时间: 2015-8-31 22:21
两个星期后又要踏上征服托福的战场，愿这次作文能如愿27+

作者: wxeshirley 时间: 2015-10-15 19:07
楼主的贴变成了许愿+还愿贴

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