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标题: 虫子要拿下T——一口啃掉综合写作!!! [打印本页]

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-7-27 13:57
标题: 虫子要拿下T——一口啃掉综合写作!!!
亲们，猛拍吧~虫子又回归了。28号再战！

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-7-27 13:58
坚持写作文，虫子要回归！

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-7-27 20:56
The passage talks about the problem about the decrease of Torreya taxifoha, and gives three solutions to it. In the lecture the professor disagrees with all the methods that provides in the reading passage. Instead, she point out that the possibility of achieving the ultimate goal is faint.

To begin with, in resolving the problem, the option is to rebuild the Torreya in the location where they used to be established. However, the professor would like to claim that due to the global warming, the expected effect wouldn’t be appeared. On the contrary, the climate in the northern part of Florida, which is very not too dry or hot, is now quite drier than that before.

Secondly, the passage provides another option is that Torreya could immigrate to an entirely new habitat, which is very far from the Florida microclimate. Does it work? Definitely, no! Based on the examples that side effect of immigrating balck noka tree, if Torreya change its location to the totally different one, it would hold the potential problem whether or not this action will do harm to the environment of the new location.

Finally, it’s obvious that the passage holds a seemingly unbelievable solution that preserves the Torreya in reaserch center. The speaker gives her reasons that the situation is not suitable for plant to survive. Not only do the decrease of the capability to disease, but also the capacity of the research center is not enough to keep a large amount of Torreya. Thus, the way to protect Torreya from extinction is unconvincing.

In all, the professor disagrees with the methods provided in the reading passage.

写的不咋的，要多多练习的！求狠批啊，谢谢！

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-7-27 20:57
上一个TPO18的原文~
In the 1950s Torreya taxifoha, a type of evergreen tree once very common in the state of Florida, started to die out. No one is sure exactly what caused the decline, but chances are good that if nothing is done, Torreya will soon become extinct. Experts are considering three ways to address the decline of Torreya.

The first option is to reestablish Torreya in the same location in which it thrived for thousands of years. Torreya used to be found in abundance in the northern part of Florida, which has a specific microclimate. A microclimate exists when weather conditions inside a relatively small area differ from the region of which that area is a part. Northern Florida's microclimate is very favorable to Torreya's growth. This microclimate is wetter and cooler than the surrounding region's relatively dry, warm climate. Scientists have been working to plant Torreya seeds in the coolest, dampest areas of the microclimate.

The second option is to move Torreya to an entirely different location, far from its Florida microclimate. Torreya seeds and saplings have been successfully planted and grown in forests further north, where the temperature is significantly cooler. Some scientists believe that Torreya probably thrived in areas much further north in the distant past, so by relocating it now, in a process known as assisted migration, humans would simply be helping Torreya return to an environment that is more suited to its survival.

The third option is to preserve Torreya in research centers. Seeds and saplings can be moved from the wild and preserved in a closely monitored environment where it will be easier for scientists both to protect the species and conduct research on Torreya. This research can then be used to ensure the continued survival of the species.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-28 22:17

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The passage talks about the problem about the decrease of Torreya taxifoha, and gives three solutions to it. In the lecture the professor disagrees with all the methods that provides in the reading passage. Instead（also，连接上句，或者就把句号去掉和上句连成一句）, she point out that the possibility of achieving the ultimate goal is faint.

To begin with, in resolving the problem, the option is to rebuild the Torreya in the location where they used to be established. However, the professor would like to claim that due to the global warming, the expected effect wouldn’t be appeared. On the contrary（这里用in addition 或者moreover什么的，因为它和上句不是相反的而是和第一句相反额）, the climate in the northern part of Florida, which is very not too dry or hot （in the past）, is now quite drier than that before.

Secondly, the passage provides another option is（可以不要） that Torreya could immigrate to an entirely new habitat, which is very far from the Florida microclimate. Does it work? Definitely, no! Based on the examples that side effect of immigrating balck noka tree, if Torreya change its location to the totally different one, it would hold the potential problem whether or not this action will do harm to the environment of the new location.

Finally, it’s obvious that the passage holds a seemingly unbelievable solution that preserves the Torreya in reaserch center. The speaker gives her reasons that the situation is not suitable for plant to survive. Not only do the decrease of the capability to disease, but also the capacity of the research center is not enough to keep a large amount of Torreya. Thus, the （this）way to protect Torreya from extinction is unconvincing.

In all, the professor disagrees with the methods provided in the reading passage.

整体很好了，就是觉得用词方面提高下就好。个人意见哈，多多交流额

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-7-29 23:20
多谢kchszy061ban~我会努力的！用词这个是个长路啊，嗯嗯，谢谢指点

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-7-30 17:11
加油哇~~~

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-11 22:00

TPO9——还希望请教一下综合的写作的关键是不是就是大概在每一段，引用一句文章的关键句的改写，然后融入听力中反驳或者支持的内容就可以了...其次就是需不需要结尾段落啊？
The topic of the lecture and the reading passage is about whether the new fuel will reduce the disadvantages which the inter-combustion engine has. Though the author of the reading claims that the fuel-cell engine is so good that perhaps it will take the place of traditional one, the professor in the lecture disagrees with the ideas.

To begin with, it is more likely to get the source of fuel-cell engines than that of internal-combustion engines. Because the hydrogen, which the new engines need, is abundant, it could derive from the natural gas and even water. But the professor points out that it is unconvincing when the water at the state of the pure liquid is useful. In other words, the problem to employ the hydrogen will constrain the various sources and finally make this point meaningless.

Secondly, based on the saying that the world's pollution could be decreased, the conclusion of the effectiveness on the fuel-cell engines is that the by-products could be limited. What a pity that the author did not take the whole manufacture process into consideration. Due to the purification process, which needs to deal with the burning coal and oil, it might create much more pollution than expected the new fuel will save during the use.

Last but not least, there is no warranted for the cost efficiency. According to the professor, she asserts that the manufacturing process would need an expensive mental, which would be not in demand if made the traditional fuel. So the raw material will lead in the higher cost if the fuel-cell engine were adopted to take the place of the old one. Nevertheless, the reading passage gives the example that the fuel-cell engine will require just half fuel and could go to the identical distance. The savings will not compensate the additional cost on raw material.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-8-12 16:39
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The topic of the lecture and the reading passage is about whether the new fuel will reduce the disadvantages which the inter-combustion engine has. Though the author of the reading claims that the fuel-cell engine is so good that perhaps it will take the place of traditional one, the professor in the lecture disagrees with the ideas.

To begin with, it is more likely to get the source of fuel-cell engines than that of internal-combustion engines（你怎么把它当独立作文写了）. Because the hydrogen, which the new engines need, is abundant, it could derive from the natural gas and even water. But the professor points out that it is unconvincing when the water at the state of the pure liquid is useful. In other words, the problem to employ the hydrogen will constrain the various sources and finally make this point meaningless.（听力的点还是有点少，这样就会是失分点额）

Secondly, based on the saying that the world's pollution could be decreased, the conclusion of the effectiveness on the fuel-cell engines is that the by-products could be limited. What a pity that the author did not take the whole manufacture process into consideration. Due to the purification process, which needs to deal with the burning coal and oil, it might create much more pollution than expected the new fuel will save during the use.（这个还是不错，不过建议写细节了）

Last but not least, there is no warranted for the cost efficiency. According to the professor, she asserts that the manufacturing process would need an expensive mental, which would be not in demand if made the traditional fuel. So the raw material will lead in the higher cost if the fuel-cell engine were adopted to take the place of the old one. Nevertheless, the reading passage gives the example that the fuel-cell engine will require just half fuel and could go to the identical distance. The savings will not compensate the additional cost on raw material.（这个只是把这种金属很expensive，然后汽车发电需要它，而便宜的替代品的发现还遥遥无期）

一点就是说的很笼统而不是具体，改下就好了。

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-12 21:45
TPO10
不知道会不会自己的东西过渡加工了一点点呀~

The main idea of the dispute is about the factor which caused the decline of the sea otter. According to the passage, the author points out that compared to the predator effect, she thinks that the environmental pollution leads to the decrease of the sea otter. However, the lecture disagrees with it. And the professor gives the following three reasons.

First of all, the professor says that the no otter on the shore is so strange. And then she provides an assumption that if the otters were not hurt by the predator, there should be a lot of otters on the shore which lives there freely. In fact, there is nothing remain they could find.

Secondly, it is the author's idea that the number of the sea mammals like seals and sea lions along the coast is plunging the same time. Thus, this phenomenon supports the main conclusion of the reading. On the contrary, the professor gives the new clue that it is the orca which could change its diet due to the limited preys that are large enough for it and become the hunter to make the mammals disappeared. In other words, the decrease of these animals could not blame on the environment, but this consequence should be attributed to the hunters.

Last but not least, based on the reason before, the lecture would be in favor of the predation factors compared to the environmental one because the uneven locations of the otters. For example, if the otters were in the unaccessible place, their number will not shrink. And the orca is so large that the entrance could be constrained. On the contrary, if they not live in the shallow, rocky place, they are more likely to contain a limited number because the hunters.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-8-13 19:24
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The main idea of the dispute is about the factor which caused the decline of the sea otter. According to the passage, the author points out that compared to the predator effect, she thinks that the environmental pollution leads to the decrease of the sea otter. However, the lecture（用lecturer） disagrees with it. And the professor gives the following three reasons.

First of all, the professor says that the no （dead ）otter on the shore is so strange. And then she provides an assumption that if the otters were not hurt by the predator, there should be a lot of otters on the shore which lives there freely. In fact, there is nothing remain they could find.（这里是污染造成的尸体会存在而被吃了就不存在了额）

Secondly, it is the author's idea that the number of the sea mammals like seals and sea lions along the coast is plunging the same time. Thus, this phenomenon supports the main conclusion of the reading. On the contrary, the professor gives the new clue that it is the orca which could change its diet due to the limited preys that are large enough for it and become the hunter to make the mammals disappeared.（这里面有一个human hunting） In other words, the decrease of these animals could not blame on the environment, but this consequence should be attributed to the hunters.

Last but not least, based on the reason before, the lecture would be in favor of the predation factors compared to the environmental one because the uneven locations of the otters. For example, if the otters were in the unaccessible place, their number will not shrink. And the orca is so large that the entrance could be constrained. On the contrary, if they not live in the shallow, rocky place, they are more likely to contain a limited number because the hunters.（这段不错，不过建议把语言再组织下，毕竟阅卷考试是不看阅读和听听力直接读你文章的额）

听力要加油额亲

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-13 21:43

自己提前修改了一点点滴~听力还是不行啊，听了两次才能写全一点点。肿么办啊肿么办

The issue is about whetherless reading on the literature than reading on the other things does less goodon the readers who should cultivate the sense of the culture. The readingpassage is in favor of the idea that literature is more important, and the lecturerdisagrees.

She casts doubt on thereading that only reading literature is critical. And then the professor givesthe explained aboutthe other books, such as creative novels, science, and the political analysiscould also provide the readers lots of intellectual stimulation. So it would betoo suspicious to say that other material is less important than theliterature.

Second, what is poorlyconcerned is that the aspects of the time which used to reading the literatureand of the version which could be written or not. Firstly, because the time islimited, if a people do not read the literature, he or she could spend the time time 而不可以使用the的这个定冠词 on doing other things that lead to the same effect ofthe reading literature. What's more, what if the potential literature readerschoose to listen to abrilliant music 直接使用music 或者a piece of music or watch a good movie? Theprofessor asserts that readers would also benefit from these things that arenot written. In fact, no one have the right to ignore the value of such things.

Last but not least, eventhough the reading claims that it is the fault of audience the audience表达一群人，要加定冠词 who hold a poor sense of book andfinally lead to less good literature being published, it is totallyunconvincing. To take the authors in to consideration, the writer might changethe idea. Based on the information in the literature that is so difficult tounderstand, the readers have no ability to read it clearly. Even the early generationwho read the conventional literature would not have a look at the literaturenewly issued. Thus, the passage has no warranted reason to 【to的用法有问题，与modifier没有连接上】 just blames on the audience instead of the author.

作者: guoyang88 时间: 2012-8-14 19:45
8.13的综合还没写么亲还说给你改呢。

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-14 20:26

8.13的综合还没写么亲还说给你改呢。

-- by 会员 guoyang88 (2012/8/14 19:45:20)

嘿嘿，是上面那一楼的，13号的作业，自己小小修改了一下的

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-14 22:16
14号的作业~
The lecturer casts doubt on the ideas that the passage indicates, and he gives the following three reasons.

First of all, when it comes to the permission to use the portrait, this was useless to justify the person who she is in it. The action of the authorization was taken place in 1882, a time after the Austen's death as long as 17 years. In other words, the Austen's family who gave the permission never had seen her yet. Thus, the words from them could not take in to consideration.

Second, though the face show some resembles in Cassandra's sketch, it is possible that there are some relatives of Austen having the same features that Austen has. Admittedly, he says that Austen has a large family which has so many people that the probability of resemblance is much more higher than others. For example, a nephew named Maria Capion looks like her very much.

Third, no signature or date could not lead to lack of evidence to show the truth. The professor points out that the stamp on the back of the portrait could provide some extra information about the time. Based on the thing sold by a person, Willian Leg, the conclusion could not be draw that Austen is the character because this man didn't sale the thing until Austen was 27 years old, when she was not a teenager who was depicted as in the portrait any more. So it is unconvincing to predicted that the style resembles to that of Ozias Humphrey, and this work belongs to him.

In sum, the lecturer disagrees with what the passage indicates and gives the warranted reasons.

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-14 22:18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place

As the matter of improvement of life by the science or the technology, I would like to say that the enduring effect would give us a lot of imagination for the future. So we could not come to the conclusion so early, we should expect the major changes would not come yet.

To support my opinion, I will give three reasons.

Firstly, it is unlikely to predict the future things because we are not the god. The world is changing rapidly. Without enough imagination, we have no ability to predict what it would be tomorrow. For example, many years ago, people wanted to be like the birds flying in the blue sky freely. They just dreamed again and again that they had the wings on their bodies and that help them to enjoy the happiness of flying. They thought the magic must be needed, and then the dream would come true. Actually, the new technology of airplane gave an opportunity for people who would like to be like the birds. This invention truly changes the people's life. What a significance improvement you never thought would accomplished by the advanced science. If you lack the imagination, you will not know what significant change will happen in the future. So how can you speak that the most one has been there?

Secondly, the unconvincing saying that the most important improvement has already taken place is weaken by the wrong comparison. Because there is no standard for this comparison, how can you get the conclusion randomly that this technology is more critical than the other one? Lacking of the line to judge the importance of the creation, we could not point out that the idea of light bulb would be less useful than the thought of computer. In fact, light bulb change the living habits of the people, we could work and study at night without sun light. Speak of the computer, it is a fantastic improvement which contributes to our life a lot. Nowadays, nearly any individuals could not work without a computer, the elementary tool for a work.

Last but not least, if the idea that the most improvement is accepted by the majority of people, then the side-effect would appear. Why does this effect show up? Since the people might find there is no motivation to come up with the awesome ideas that bring to the big changes of the technology or science, they would like to try other things more challenge than this. I remember a traditional old saying just show the meaning that only the dissatisfaction leads to the change. What if all the public are satisfied with the science, they would do no effort to make our life better. That will be hurt the development of the science.

Thus, I really believed that not only a most significant improvement has not taken place, but also there will be no best one in our world.

作者: 235852140 时间: 2012-8-14 23:56
粉色是错误蓝色是个人建议
The lecturer casts doubt on the ideas that the passage indicates, and he（这个he没有指代对象，改成the professor）gives the following three reasons. （我认为这段至少应该说一下争论的问题是什么，光说听力反驳阅读应该不够）

First of all, when itcomes to the permission to use the portrait, this（改it） was useless to justify the person who she is in it. （句意不太通，“当什么什么时候，它useless to 判断...”改为The lecture claims that although an edition of A's letters got the permission to use ..., it could not conclude that the person in the painting is A. ）The action of the authorization was taken place in 1882, a time after the Austen's death as long as 17 years.（是70年）In other words, the Austen's family who gave the permission never had(反了， had never ) seen her yet. Thus, the words from them could not take in to consideration. （the words做主语，应用被动，could not be taken into consideration）

Second, though the face show（shows） some resembles in Cassandra's sketch, it is possible that there are some relatives of Austen having the same features that Austen has.(说一下是听力中的内容更好)Admittedly, he says that Austen has a large family which has so many people that the probability of resemblance is much more higher than others.（这里把可能性和others做比较，比较对象不平行，可把others改为 that of others，或者用 the general case更好） For example, a nephew named Maria Capion looks like her very much.（厉害，名字都听出来了，不过我在一个TPO综合写作解析的文档里看到名字的拼写是 Marianne Kempian，外国人的名字不太容易写对，建议不写名字的好）

Third, no signature or date could not lead to lack of evidence to show the truth. （没有签名不会导致证据缺乏，听力中应该是有证据的）The professor points out that the stamp on the back of the portrait could provide some extra information about the time. （the time it created）Based on the thing（thing是画布，改the blank canvas）sold by a person, Willian Leg, the conclusion could not be draw that Austen is the character（画线部分应该紧跟在conclusion后面） because this man didn't sale the thing until Austen was 27 years old, when she was not a teenager who was depicted as in the portrait any more.So it is unconvincing to predicted that the style resembles to that of Ozias Humphrey, and this work belongs to him.
（去掉and前的逗号，因为并列的内容都是predict的内容）
In sum, the lecturer disagrees with what the passage indicates and gives the warranted reasons（加个above）

昨天有个判错了，今天更正来，when it comes to 是固定搭配我搞错了嘿嘿 .

作者: winnie98 时间: 2012-8-15 03:23
我第二回给改写作，先帮你大体改改，等晚上有时间再帮你仔细看看O(∩_∩)O

批改：用红色标注错误,蓝色标注没错但改了更好，绿色为批注

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people's lives have already taken place

As the matter of improvement of life by the science or the technology, I would like to say that the enduring effect would give us a lot of imagination for the future. So we could not come to the conclusion so early, we should expect the major changes would not come yet.

To support my opinion, I will give three reasons.

Firstly, it is unlikely to predict the future things because we are not the god. The world is changing rapidly. Without enough imagination, we have no ability to predict what it would be tomorrow. For example, many years ago, people wanted to be like the birds flying in the blue sky freely. They just dreamed again and again that they had the wings on their bodies and the wings helped them to enjoy the happiness of flying. They thought the magic must be needed, and then the dream would come true. Actually, the new technology of airplane gave an opportunity for people who would like to be like the birds. This invention truly changed the people's life. What a significant improvement you never thought would be accomplished by the advanced science. If you lack the imagination, you will not know what significant changes will happen in the future. Thus, how can you speak that the most one has been there?

Secondly, the unconvincing saying that the most important improvement has already taken place is weakened by the wrong comparison. Because there is no standard for this comparison, how can you get the conclusion randomly that this technology is more critical than the other one? Lacking of the line to judge the importance of the creation, we could not point out that the idea of a light bulb would be less useful than the thought of a computer. In fact, on grounds that (因果关系,加个transition更好) light bulbs have changed the living habits of the people, we could work and study at night without sun light. Speaking of the computer, it is a fantastic improvement which contributes to our life a lot. Nowadays, nearly any individuals could not work without a computer, the elementary tool for a work (work不可数,a去掉).

Last but not least, if the idea that the most improvement is accepted by the majority of people, then the side-effect would appear. Why does this effect show up? Since the people might find there is no motivation to come up with the awesome ideas that bring to the big changes of the technology or science, they would like to try more challenges of other things than those of technology and science(比较级前后要互相平衡,且challenge无adj.词性). I remember a traditional old saying just show the meaning that only the dissatisfaction leads to the change. What if all the public are satisfied with the science, they would do no effort to make our life better. That will harm(hurt一般不能用于指抽象事物) the development of the science.

From what have been discussed above, I really believe (不需用过去时) that not only the most significant improvement has not taken place, but also there will be no best one in our world.

1.整体思路清晰，如果在结尾段能稍微再总结一下前面阐述的理由，然后升华结论会更好。
2.有个别语法错误，注意时态和单复数形式。

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-15 20:04
好的好的，谢谢winnie啦~

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-15 21:42
TPO 13 8月15日作业

The lecturer points out that the consequence of selling and buying fossils is truly exaggerated. And she gives the three following reasons.

First of all, contrary to the argument in the reading text that there will be less access for the public to view the collections, the professor asserts that actually commercial fossils will lead to more exporture to the audience. Since they could use more place to display the fossil like public school, which have no access to show the fossil before.

Secondly, the lecturer contends that the experts will not miss out on any potentially critical discoveries because when the private buyers get their collection, they would like to ask someone who knows how to identify the fossil scientifically for help. Thus, it is unconvincing to say that the crucial information about the fossils would be missed out.

Third, it is very important that the total number of the fossils could be studied. According to the passage, it suggested that the destruction of the fossils might take place. However, if there is no enough sample of fossils, then what the people could study is very limited. In other words, the professor says that the scientists need more fossils be found, and compared to the fossils completely undiscovered, they could expect the fossils go discover. Plus, the commercial fossil collectors always come from the scientific organization or universities, how could them be not professional?

Thus, the outcome of commercial fossils is certainly exaggerated by the passage.

作者: winnie98 时间: 2012-8-15 22:05
kllun 我独立搞定嘞~不好意思有点晚了。。。

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-16 00:16
非常感谢噶，虫子的语法确实很不咋滴啊，要注意了。嗯嗯，意见老好了！下次一定注意！

粉色是错误蓝色是个人建议
The lecturer casts doubt on the ideas that the passage indicates, and he（这个he没有指代对象，改成the professor）gives the following three reasons. （我认为这段至少应该说一下争论的问题是什么，光说听力反驳阅读应该不够）

First of all, when it（it指代什么）comes to the permission to use the portrait, this（改it） was useless to justify the person who she is in it. （句意不太通，“当什么什么时候，它useless to 判断...”改为The lecture claims that although an edition of A's letters got the permission to use ..., it could not conclude that the person in the painting is A. ）The action of the authorization was taken place in 1882, a time after the Austen's death as long as 17 years.（是70年）In other words, the Austen's family who gave the permission never had(反了， had never ) seen her yet. Thus, the words from them could not take in to consideration. （the words做主语，应用被动，could not be taken into consideration）

Second, though the face show（shows） some resembles in Cassandra's sketch, it is possible that there are some relatives of Austen having the same features that Austen has.(说一下是听力中的内容更好)Admittedly, he says that Austen has a large family which has so many people that the probability of resemblance is much more higher than others.（这里把可能性和others做比较，比较对象不平行，可把others改为 that of others，或者用 the general case更好） For example, a nephew named Maria Capion looks like her very much.（厉害，名字都听出来了，不过我在一个TPO综合写作解析的文档里看到名字的拼写是 Marianne Kempian，外国人的名字不太容易写对，建议不写名字的好）

Third, no signature or date could not lead to lack of evidence to show the truth. （没有签名不会导致证据缺乏，听力中应该是有证据的）The professor points out that the stamp on the back of the portrait could provide some extra information about the time. （the time it created）Based on the thing（thing是画布，改the blank canvas）sold by a person, Willian Leg, the conclusion could not be draw that Austen is the character（画线部分应该紧跟在conclusion后面） because this man didn't sale the thing until Austen was 27 years old, when she was not a teenager who was depicted as in the portrait any more.So it is unconvincing to predicted that the style resembles to that of Ozias Humphrey, and this work belongs to him.
（去掉and前的逗号，因为并列的内容都是predict的内容）
In sum, the lecturer disagrees with what the passage indicates and gives the warranted reasons（加个above）
.

-- by 会员 235852140 (2012/8/14 23:56:09)

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-16 00:17

kllun 我独立搞定嘞~不好意思有点晚了。。。

-- by 会员 winnie98 (2012/8/15 22:05:22)

明天去改哦，碎觉觉啦

作者: winnie98 时间: 2012-8-16 19:03
批改：
TPO 13 8月15日作业

The lecturer points out that the consequence of selling and buying fossils is truly exaggerated. And she gives the three following reasons.建议楼主在首段简单概括一下lecture的观点，然后表达lecture与passage观点不同。

First of all, contrary to the argument in the reading text that there will be less access for the public to view the collections, the professor asserts that actually commercial fossils will lead to more exporture to the audience. Since they could use more place to display the fossil like public schools, which have no access to show the fossil before.

Secondly, the lecturer contends that the experts will not miss out on any potentially critical discoveries because when the private buyers get their collection, they would like to ask someone who knows how to identify the fossil scientifically for help. Thus, it is unconvincing to say that the crucial information about the fossils would be missed out.

Third, it is very important that the total number of the fossils could be studied. According to the passage, it suggested that the destruction of the fossils might take place. However, if there is no enough sample of fossils, then what the people could study is very limited. In other words, the professor says that the scientists need more fossils be found, and compared to the fossils completely undiscovered, they could expect the fossils go discover. Plus, the commercial fossil collectors always come from the scientific organization or universities, how could them be not professional?
此段与lecture有点小差异"whatever damage commercial fossil collectors sometimesdo, if it weren't for them, many fossils would simply go undiscovered becausethere aren't that many fossil collecting operations that are run byuniversities and other scientific institutions."

Thus, the outcome of commercial fossils is certainly exaggerated by the passage.

总体结构清晰明了O(∩_∩)O

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-16 22:10
TPO14
The lecturer points out that the salvage logging leads to more harm than benefits to the long-run environment. However, the reading passage provides three advantages, the professor gives her contradiction.

First of all, the professor asserts that rapid cleaning up do harm to the new generation. Because the place which suffers from a big fire or storm is fairly good to the growth of next generation who needs the particles exerting during the decompose process, so the idea in the reading that more room would help the recovery is totally wrong.

Secondly, according to the lecturer, she says that the decaying wood is actually most used by the insects that do good to the environment. Thus, to remove them is not necessary. Moreover, compared to salvage logging, people would rather to choose to keep them, which just kills the harmful insects and many insects do no harm to the environment need them. Plus, the spruce bark beetle has been there for hundred years, and it did not destroy the forest environment.

Third, contrary to the income from the reuse of the wood, it will cost more to get the wood by helicopter, which is extremely expensive. Admittedly, the reading contends that there will be more occupations. To refute, the lecturer suggests that the job is just temporary and it need the workers who have a lot of experience and need some training instead of the local workers without much skills.

作者: winnie98 时间: 2012-8-16 22:52
kllun，今天又是我帮你改。
综合我还没写，明天我看完题目帮你改哈~

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-17 20:50

kllun，今天又是我帮你改。
综合我还没写，明天我看完题目帮你改哈~

-- by 会员 winnie98 (2012/8/16 22:52:39)

好嘞，你的我已经搞定啦~

作者: winnie98 时间: 2012-8-17 21:52
TPO14
The lecturer points out that the salvage logging leads to more harm than benefits to the long-run environment. However, the reading passage provides three advantages, (逗号不能连接2个完整的句子,要加conj.)the professor gives her contradiction.

First of all, the professor asserts that rapidly cleaning up do harm to the new generation. Because the place which suffers from a big fire or storm is fairly good to the growth of next generation who needs the particles exerting during the decompose process, so the idea in the reading that more room would help the recovery is totally wrong.

Secondly, according to the lecturer, she says that the decaying wood is actually most used by the insects that do good to the environment. Thus, to remove(→removing) them is not necessary. Moreover, compared to salvage logging, people would rather to choose to keep them, which just kills(→kill) the harmful insects and many insects do no harm to the environment need them. Plus, the spruce bark beetle has been there for hundred years, and it did not destroy the forest environment.

Third, contrary to the income from the reuse of the wood, it will cost more to get the wood by helicopters, which is(→are) extremely expensive. Admittedly, the reading contends that there will be more occupations. To refute, the lecturer suggests that the job is just temporary and it need the workers who have a lot of experience and need some training instead of the local workers without much skills.

整体思路清晰明了，个别有语言错误。
挺好，继续加油。

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-17 21:53

8月17日

The lecturer points out thatgetting rid of the cane toad will neither be successful nor do good to the wholeenvironment. However, the reading passage gives some advantages that stop thespread of the cane toad in Australia.

Firstly, what the readingasserts is that the fence would prevent the spread of the toad. Unfortunately,the professor in the lecture says that because the young toad and toad eggs areusually in the river or the stream, it is unlikely to stop the spreading by thefence. Moreover, since the flowing river, it is quite easy to bring the toad toanother side. Thus, the toad would survive even the fence built.

Secondly, according to the lecture,the professor says even though the volunteers would like to pick up the youngtoad and the toad eggs, they could not tell the difference between the eggs offrogs and that of toads. Plus, the distinguish job will be much more difficultwhen the both of them are so young. In fact, the collective effort suggested inthe reading will not contribute to the expect consequence.

Thirdly, contrary to theidea in the reading that new virus developed by the researchers will help solvethe problem, the lecturer refutes that in the south America, where is the regionalplace of toads, virus will lead to a limited number of toads, which do harm tothe whole environment. Plus, on the grounds that the reptile and amphibianusually bring to other places by the researchers, they could be brought to thesouth America. As a result, the regional place of toads will face abig problem.

作者: winnie98 时间: 2012-8-18 22:06
嘿我会速速写完的

不好意思。。。。

作者: winnie98 时间: 2012-8-18 22:45

批改8月17日

The lecturer points out that getting rid of the cane toad will neither be successful nor do good to the whole environment. However, the reading passage gives some advantages that stop thespread of the cane toad in Australia.

Secondly, according to the lecture,the professor says even though the volunteers would like to pick up the youngtoad and the toad eggs, they could not tell the difference between the eggs offrogs and that of toads. Plus, the distinguish(只有v.用法) job will be much more difficultwhen the both of them are so young. In fact, the collective effort suggested inthe reading will not contribute to the expect consequence.

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-19 21:24

8.19 TPO17

The lecturer points out that the idea that there will be fewer and fewerbirds is unconvincing. However, the reading gives some reasons that thepopulation of bird is going to decline. The professor totally disagrees.

Secondly, what the lecturer asserts is that the agricultural activitieswill lead to more variety crops instead of limited crops which were grown onthe land before. More crops do good to birds rather than do harm to them. Incontrast, the reading contends that those activities would cause furtherdestruction of bird habitats. Virtually, based on the reason professor givesabove, this idea is false.

Third, contrary to the reading passage that the pesticides result in thedecrease of the bird population, the lecturer refutes by two reasons. To beginwith, she claims that the pesticides are newly developed. Secondly, there are cropswhich are genetically combined so they have less chemical particles in them.Finally, they don't hurt birds. Consequently, the last reason suggested in thepassage is unwarranted.

作者: 陈喵喵holdon 时间: 2012-8-19 23:09

8.19 TPO17

First of all, in the urban areas, the professors says, they will providebetter environment for some birds, such as sea eagles, pigeons, and hawks whichare seldom seen in cities. In other words, there are some species might shrink,but other animals will be benefit from the new habitats, prompting the increaseof their population(由于这一部分我有些鸟类的名字没听懂,而且你写的跟我写的也有出入特地去看了下原文,好像是说居民抱怨城市里海鸥和鸽子太多,而一些不太出没的鸟类例如老鹰什么的却出现捕食鸽子什么的,所以一些鸟类减少,而另一些鸟类实际增加了.好像跟原文有出入). Plus(Plus可以这么用吗??), this is not a universally decline. Thus, the idea inthe reading is not true at all(感觉这里也跟听力有出入,lecturer是承认reading里面有一部分是true的).

Third, contrary to the reading passage that the pesticides result in thedecrease of the bird population, the lecturer refutes by two reasons. To beginwith, she claims that the pesticides are newly developed. Secondly, there are cropswhich are genetically combined so they have less chemical particles in them.Finally, they don't hurt birds(前面写了2reasons,这里列了begin with, secondly, finally三点?). Consequently, the last reason suggested in thepassage is unwarranted.

-- by 会员 klllun (2012/8/19 21:24:56)

Hiiiiiii虫子,除了内容上有些出入以外，感觉你语言很简洁表意很明确啊值得学习！
不过感觉单句短句有点多适当连接一下,多用点复合句哈~

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-21 18:50
The professor in the lecture totallydisagrees with the solutions of saving Torreya in the passage. She says thethree options provided in the reading passage will not lead to the satisfactoryoutcome.

To begin with, the lecturer points out thatthe same location of the Torreya would be different, which is not suitable forthe growth of Torreya. Since the global warming is spread out the world, thenorthern part of Florida is influenced by the effect. Thus, the drier place isnot ideal for the tree any more. In other words, the solution of reestablishingTorreya on the same place is not believable.

Secondly, contrary to the argument in thereading passage that move Torreya to a new place, where the environment is moresuited to its survival, the professor asserts that the potential problem.Because Black Noka trees once were moved to a new environment, they hurt thespecies of plants which are native to the new location. Plus, some speciesthreaten by the transplanted trees will soon become extinct. Thus, this optioncould not be favorable.

Third, the author of the reading passagessays that preserving Torreya in the monitored environment contributes to thesurvival. In contrast, the professor contends, according the lecture, that thetrees will not survive in the monitored environment, on the grounds that theywould not have the capacity of defending the disease.

作者: sherryzhangh 时间: 2012-8-21 21:35

In the lecture, the professor totally disagrees with the solutions ofsaving Torreya that brought out in the reading passage. She ~~says~~ claims that the three options provided in thereading passage will not lead to the satisfactory outcomes.

To begin with, the lecturerpoints out that the same location of the Torreya would be different (difficult), because it ~~which~~(这是谁的从句？) is not suitablefor the growth of Torreya. Since the global warming is spread out the world,the northern part of Florida is influenced by the effect. Thus, the drier placeis not ideal for the tree any more. In other words, the solution of reestablishingTorreya on the same place is not believable.

Secondly, contrary to theargument in the reading passage that move Torreya to a new place, where theenvironment is more suited to its survival, the professor asserts that (that 后面要跟从句呀，主谓宾都要齐全呀)may brings ~~the~~ potentialproblem. Because Black Noka trees once were moved to a new environment, theyhurt ~~the other~~ species of plants, whichare native to the new location. Plus, some species threaten by the transplantedtrees will soon become extinct. Thus, this option could not be favorable.

Third, the author of the reading passages saysthat preserving Torreya in the monitored environment contributes to the survival.In contrast, the professor contends, according the lecture, (逗号去掉，逗号后面的从句一般用which,但是这个不适合。)that the trees will not survive in the monitoredenvironment, on the grounds that they would not have the capacity of defendingthe disease.

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-22 13:26
TPO 19In the lecture, the person claims that theargument in the reading passage, which suggests that the buzzed advertisementis problematic, is totally misleading. And he gives the responses below.

First of all, the reading passage makeswrong assumption that buzzers who promote the products would tell lies due tothe payment. However, the lecturer asserts that as a buzzer of a phone servicecompany, he would value the service first, then he could be the buzzer who willbe paid to tell the truth. Thus, the employees of the companies are the peoplewho really think highly of the products they used.

Secondly, according to the reading passage,it contends that the consumers would be less critical than they should whenthey face other advertisements. In contrast, the lecturer points out that theconsumers would be more careful about the products. For example, they will askhim specific questions, such as how much is the price and how long has beenused for the service.

Third, contrary to the reading passage thatbuzzed advertisement would do harm to the social relationships, causing themistrust and the expectation of dishonesty, the buzzed advertisement wouldpromote the relationship, on the grounds that the buzzer help the individualfind a good service like phone service. As a result, they will end up moretrustful and more open to people. In other words, if the consumers feel badabout the buzzers, the company will not employ the individuals to do that.Whereas there are lots of employees, they could do this job well.

作者: sherryzhangh 时间: 2012-8-22 17:43

TPO 19

In the lecture, the person claims that the argument in the reading passage, which suggests that the buzzed advertisement is problematic, is totally misleading. And he gives the responses below to defend with argument.

First of all, the reading passage makes ~~wrong~~ assumption （这个感觉是在表达自己的意见，综合要做的就是阐述归纳所看到的听到的。）that buzzers who promote the products would tell lies due to the payment. However, the lecturer asserts that is not the case. By telling story of himself as a buzzer of a phone service company, he would value the service first, and then he could be the buzzer who will be paid to tell the truth. Thus, the employees of the companies are the people who really think highly of the products they used.

Secondly, according to the reading passage, it contends that the consumers would be less critical than they should when they face ~~other~~friend buzz advertisements. In contrast, the lecturer points out that the consumers would be more careful about the products. For example, they will ask him specific questions, such as how much is the price and how long has been used for the service.

Third, contrary to the reading passage that buzzed advertisement would do harm to the social relationships, causing ~~the~~ mistrust and ~~the~~ expectation of dishonesty, the person claims that the buzzed advertisement would promote the relationship, on the grounds that the buzzer help the individual find a good service like phone service. As a result, they will end up more trustful and more open to people. In other words, if the consumers feel bad about the buzzers, the company will not employ the individuals to do that. Whereas there are lots of employees, they could do this job well.

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-8-22 21:01
独立 8.22
parents should help children to do theirwork or encourage children to do their work independently

When it comes to the issue that the role ofparents in children's work, I am in favor that as parents, they should takeencourage children to do their work by themselves rather than help the kids.Weighting the pros and cons, I think kids would benefit more fromencouragement. Here, I will give my reasons below.

First of all, children need to beindependent. In other words, if parents always try to help the kids toaccomplish the work, then the kids would get used to relaying on others. Whenthey face the problem, no matter it is big or small, they would like to ask forhelp. For example, in china, the parents usually value their kids as importantas the treasures. As a result, they involve themselves in the work of children,helping them do the dishes, washing the clothes, and even arranging the path offuture. Then, the babies are so immature that they could not make the decisionor live on their own.

Secondly, it is more likely that the moreparents helping children with their work, the more obstacles of developingtheir imagination. Because we all know that there are plenty of fantastic ideasin the head of youngsters, they would like to apply them when they do theirjobs. Imagine, what will happen if a fabulous idea was regarded as the strangething from the point of view of parents? Children will get upset about it.Consequently, they will be afraid of to brainstorm the good ideas instead offinishing the job by traditional method that their parents think highly of.This will be a totally nightmare. Thus, getting parents out of the process ofchildren's work will be better.

Last but not least, the proponents ofhelping kids with their work would like to say that children might face theproblem that is too serious to solve it by themselves. At this point, I wouldlike to response that though this situation probably happens, they would struggleand try their best to tackle the problem. Since you could not imagine how faryou will arrive, if you never push yourself. Take my teacher for example. Onceshe gave us a task that asks the students to group together and to play out afairy tale which produce by ourselves. At the beginning, we were astonished!Because we knew nothing about how to play it before, we wanted to get the helpfrom her. However, she refused. So we have to finish it by our own. Finally, itturns out we have the potential to accomplish well by watching a lot of playsand looking the information on the internet. We did what we think as impossiblebefore.

In short, I would support that parents stayaway from the children when they are work. Or the good intention might lead unexpectedoutcome, such as dependence, lack of imagination, and obstacle of showingpotential.

作者: 332211abc 时间: 2012-8-23 09:58
When it comes to the issue that the role of parents in children's work(能看懂意思，但我觉得表答很不好。), I am in favor that as parents, they should take encourage children to do their work by themselves rather than help the kids. Weighting the pros and cons（这句不太常见，目测好像没什么问题。。。可以问一问别的高手）, I think kids would benefit more from （parents’）encouragement. Here, I will give my reasons below.

First of all, children need to be independent. In other words, if parents always try(ing) to help the kids to accomplish the work, (then)似乎可以省 the kids would （get used to）（有些口语化，和what’s up之类的相似） relaying on others. When they face（d） the problem, no matter it is (big or small)这两个词形容WORK有些怪。。, they would like to ask for help. For example, in china, the parents usually value their kids as （importantas）拼错（the treasures）不地道，感觉太中式英语了。. As a result, they involve（这里用被动句比较好，they 和themselves略显累赘） themselves in the work of children, helping them do the dishes, washing the clothes, and even arranging thepath of future（这个没必要加path,中意太明显了，老外估计很难理解）. Then, the babies（baby,kids,children这3个词的年龄是有变化的，不能互等） are so immature that they could not make the decisionor（拼错）（live on）直接用BY比较好 their own.

Secondly, it is more likely that the more parents helping children with their work, the more obstacles of developing their imagination（第一个MORE可以换别的）. Because we all know（有些不客观。。。） that there are plenty of(我不知道这个短语能不能修饰抽象名词，没听说过plenty of ideas这句。。暂时放着，我也不太清楚。) fantastic ideas in the head of youngsters, they would like to apply them when they do their jobs（WORKS）. Imagine, what will happen(后面用WAS，这里好像要变一下吧，虚拟语气后变前不变吗？) if a fabulous idea was regarded as the strange thing from the point of view（直接point of parents可以表达）of parents? Children will get upset口语化 about it. Consequently, they will be afraid of to（被动句比较好） brainstorm the good ideas instead of finishing the job（work） by traditional method that their parents think highly of.（这句错了，你的意思是：孩子会拒绝想新方法，取而代之的是遵循父母鼓励的传统方法解决问题。中间instead of 意思衔接有问题，有歧义）This will be a totally nightmare. Thus, getting parents out口语化 of the process of children's work will be better.

Last but not least, the proponents （of ），WHO ARE HOLD THE IDEA THAT helping kids with their work，would like to say that children might face the problem（trouble比较好） that is too serious to solve it（that 已经指代前面的问题了，后面这个IT好像多余了） by themselves. At（IN） this point, I would like to response that though this situation probably（will） happens(应该没有S吧), they would struggle and try their best to tackle the problem. Since you could not imagine how far you will arrive, if you never push yourself.（1，逗号用的不好，断错句子了，歧义。2，could 和will在一个句子里，且中间没有转折连接词。3，Since 和if 两个都是引导词，重复了。4，arrive 和解决问题之间没太大联系，如果是比喻修辞，psuh解释不通。） Take my teache（托福作文里最好不要用关于自己例子，万不得已编造一个）r for example. Once she gave us a task that asks the students（和前面的US重复，用代词。） to group together（两次重复） and to play out a fairy tale which produce by ourselves. At the beginning, we were astonished! Because we knew nothing about how to play it before, we wanted to get the help from her. However, she refused. So we have to finish it by our own. Finally, it turns out we have the potential to accomplish well by watching a lot of plays and looking the information on（还是太口语化）the internet. We did what we这里直接用简单句就行了，没必要用复合句。think as impossible before.

In short, I would support （statement）that parents stay away(题目中说是courage没说stay away，略有问题) from the children when they are work. Or the good intention might lead unexpected dout come, such as dependence, lack of imagination, and obstacle of showing potential.

Would like 用的是在有些略多，可以换换其他句式。

中文翻译有些略多，显重复。

其余有些小细节，以后多注意。

另外一些水平有限，不会改。。。

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-10-18 19:24

交的晚不好意思呀。

The issue is about solving thesignificant problem in people's life on their own. On the contrary, the statement contends that there is nothingto do with the government. In other words, individualscould only get the help from their families orby themselves. As my point of view, I totallydisagree with the contention as the following reasons.

First of all, when it comes topromote one's level of living, we usually consider the well-being of the wholecountry. Thus, if a person meet some problems that could not solve by theirown, the government is responsible for tacking them. It is the fundamentalduties for the government to deal with problems the citizens meet. Take thesteady economic circumstance for example.Merchants or businessmen could only get lots of profit under the appropriate regulation. If there were no rules among the barter, it will be a totally mess. Theprofit will decrease. Finally, the government should be blamed because it didnot take the responsibility. Thus, knowing the duty of government and applyingthe power of government will help individuals deal with their problems.

Secondly, in recommending thegovernment would be in a better place to deal with the problem, I am in favorof that government hold the effective capability to tackle the predicament.Specifically, there is some difficulties, which individuals seldom solve bythemselves. For example, in China people are worrying about the retirement accounts.Only relying on the efforts of individuals could not solve the problem. Webarely have the ability to get enough account, which will conquer the expected inflationin the future years. Though a small number of people hold the financing knowledge who could deal with the account,plenty of individuals rely on our government will take the responsibility andtake some measures to solve the problem. Therefore, government should dosomething to improve the situation and help its citizens.

Last but not least, governmentis not the only factor in solving the problem. However, it should take apositive attitude toward helping citizens. As citizens, we should try to assistourselves. First, be optimistic about looking for problems, which could beimprove. Then, do some effort to get to change the situation. If you find outthat lacking the ability to solve the problem by the limited number of people,your families, turn for help to the government, which could provide you withbetter source and in a suitable place to deal with some difficulties.

In sum, not only should peopletake a positive attitude to discern the potential problem, which is important,but also the government should recognize its responsibility and apply its powerto contribute solving predicament. Finally, thesociety will be much better than ever before.

作者: AnthonySummer 时间: 2012-10-18 21:11
The issue is about solving the significant problem in people's life on their own. On the contrary, the statement contends that there is nothing to do with the government. In other words, individuals could only get the help from their families or by themselves. At my point of view, I totally disagree with the contention as the following reasons.

First of all, when it comes to promote one's level of living, we usually consider the well-being of the whole country. Thus, if a person meets some problems that could not (be solven 被解决）solve by their own, the government is responsible for taking them. It is the fundamental duties for the government to deal with problems the citizens meet. Take the steady economic circumstance for example.Merchants or businessmen could only get lots of profit under the appropriate regulation. If there were no rules among the barter, it will be a totally mess. The profit will decrease. Finally, the government should be blamed because it did not take the responsibility. Thus, knowing the duty of government and applying the power of government will help individuals deal with their problems.

Secondly, in recommending the government would be in a better place to deal with the problem, I am in favor of that government holds the effective capability to tackle the predicament.Specifically, there are some difficulties, which(which 指什么) individuals seldom solve by themselves.(这句话结构不清楚) For example, in China people are worrying about the retirement accounts.Only relying on the efforts of individuals could not solve the problem. We barely have the ability to get enough account, which will conquer the expected inflation in the future years. Though a small number of people hold the financing knowledge who could deal with the account,plenty of individuals rely on our government will take the responsibility and take some measures to solve the problem. Therefore, government should do something to improve the situation and help its citizens. (貌似有些啰嗦这段，讲的有些重复)

Last but not least, government is not the only factor in solving the problem. However, it should take a positive attitude toward helping citizens. As citizens, we should try to assiduousness. First, be optimistic about looking for problems, which could be improve （improved 被动）. Then, do some effort to get to change the situation. If you find out that lacking the ability to solve the problem by the limited number of people,your (符号)families, （逻辑有些混乱~）turn for help to the government, which could provide you with a better source and a suitable place to deal with some difficulties.

In sum, not only should people take a positive attitude to discern the potential problem, which is important,but also the government should recognize its responsibility and apply its power to contribute solving the predicament. Finally, the society will be much better than ever before.

整体不错，可圈可点，论证的挺好的，加油！

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-10-19 18:33
AnthonySummer亲，请问一下修改中的各种颜色是什么意思呀。麻烦备注一下呗~确实有点迷茫。虫子作文功底有限的，有些不明白呀。谢谢了的

The professor in the lecture is talking that some scientists are totally disagree with statement in the reading passage, which contends that the dinosaurs were endotherms. And she gives the following reasons.

First, though in the reading passage the author asserts that dinosaur fossils could be found in polar regions, it do not contribute to sustain the claim because there are other possibilities, such as migration or hibernation. Thus, this location proof has nothing to do with the conclusion.

Secondly, by indicating that dinosaurs are different from crocodiles and many lizards based on the position of the leg, the author thinks that could lead to the desired conclusion. In contrast, the lecturer shows another explanation, which is the use of supporting weight. Specifically, it is obvious that large animals will be benefit from the leg underneath the body.

Last but not least, Haversian canals are the evidence of the reading passage to get the conclusion. In fact, it does no good to connection between endothermy and bone structure. On the contrary, rapid body growth indicates nothing but shows that dinosaurs grow slowly in cold period, resulting in another conclusion that dinosaur is not endothermy since this characteristic manifests. In other words, if the animals grow up in the cold climates, they should be endothermy. Unfortunately, dinosaur do not show that feature at all by using the proof of Haversian canals.

In sum, some scientist are not in favor of the contention in the reading passage and show strong response above that is very convincing.

作者: AnthonySummer 时间: 2012-10-19 21:34
AnthonySummer亲,请问一下修改中的各种颜色是什么意思呀.麻烦备注一下呗~确实有点迷茫.虫子作文功底有限的,有些不明白呀 .谢谢了的

(橘黄色是语法问题, 红色就是一般性错误）

The professor in the lecture is talking that some scientists are totally disagree with the statement in the reading passage, which contends that the dinosaurs were endotherms. And she gives the following reasons.

First, though in the reading passage the author asserts that dinosaur fossils could be found in the polar regions, it does not contribute to sustain the claim because there are other possibilities, such as migration or hibernation.（有关温度的细节没讲到） Thus, this location proof has nothing to do with the conclusion.

Secondly, by indicating that dinosaurs are different from crocodiles and many lizards based on the position of the leg, the author thinks that could lead to the desired conclusion. In contrast, the lecturer shows another explanation, which is the use of supporting weight. Specifically, it is obvious that large animals will be benefiting from the leg underneath the body. （还是落了细节啊，感觉概括的太简单了）

Last but not least, Haversian canals are the evidence of the reading passage to get the conclusion. In fact, it does no good to the connection between endothermy and bone structure. On the contrary, rapid body growth indicates nothing but shows that dinosaurs grow slowly in cold period, resulting in another conclusion that dinosaur is not endothermy since this characteristic manifests. In other words, if the animals grow up in the cold climates, they should be endothermy. Unfortunately, dinosaur does not show that feature at all by using the proof of Haversian canals. （这段说的不错）

In sum, some scientist are（is） not in favor of the contention in the reading passage and show（shows） strong response above that is very convincing.

需要多练几遍听力，一开始落了很多细节。加油吧！

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-10-20 19:58
In the lecture, the professor totallydisagrees with the explanation provided in the reading passage, which appliesthree theories to indicate the possible use of Chaco Canyon. And he givesfollowing reasons.

Firstly, the reading passage contends thatChaco structures were used as apartment. Though the lecturer does acknowledgethat they were residential form the outside, from the inside they were notapartment based on the lacking of fire places. If people live in the ChacoCanyon, they would need to daily cook. Plus, there are only a few fire placesfounded, which might just provide daily use of 10 families.

Secondly, the evidence that grain maize inthe reading passage seems plausible. However, the professor gives morecompelling reasons to rule out the possibility. Since there is no proof ofmaize on the floor and remained containers of maize, the storage of it is notwarranted in the Chaco Canyon.

Last but not least, it contends thesehouses were used as ceremonial centers because the deposits are founded at thisplace, which are discard things of people who lived there before. In fact,there is another explanation that, the professor contends, the remains could beleft by the construction workers. When the houses were being building, theworkers left ate meals and pots there. Plus, it is universally acknowledge thatbuilding composes of sand, stone, and construction materials. That is to say,excavation of mound that formed by a pile of old material could prove nothing.

In sum, the suggestions in the readingpassage are full of flaws, leading to a unstable conclusion.

作者: kiddy72 时间: 2012-10-20 21:30
In the lecture, the professor totallydisagrees with the explanation provided in the reading passage, which appliesthree theories to indicate the possible use of Chaco Canyon. And he givesfollowing reasons.

Firstly, the reading passage contends thatChaco structures were used as apartment. Though the lecturer does acknowledgethat they wereare just like residential formfrom the outside, from the inside they wereare notapartment based on the lacking of fire places. If people live in the ChacoCanyon, they would need to daily cook. Plus, there are only a few fire placesfounded, which might just provide daily use of 10 families.感觉这句没说完应该说下证明了不适合很多人住吧

Secondly, the evidence that grain maize inthe reading passage seems plausible. However, the professor gives morecompelling reasons to rule out the possibility. Since there is no proof ofmaize on the floor and remained containers of maize, the storage of it is notwarranted in the Chaco Canyon.

Last but not least, it contends thesehouses were used as ceremonial centers because the deposits are founded at thisplace, which are discard things of people who lived there before. 原文说是住在里面的人的？In fact,there is another explanation that, the professor contends, the remains could beleft by the construction workers. When the houses were being building, theworkers left ate meals and pots there. Plus, it is universally acknowledge thatbuilding composes of sand, stone, and construction materials. That is to say,excavation of mound that formed by a pile of old material could prove nothing.

In sum, the suggestions in the readingpassage are full of flaws, leading to a unstable conclusion.

挺好的，句式很多遍～向你学习哈～

作者: klllun 时间: 2012-10-21 20:33
The professor in the lecture totallydisagrees with the disadvantages of communal online encyclopedias that indicatein the reading passage. And she gives her response as follows.
Firstly, though the author in the readingpassage contends that the lacking of academic credentials of communal onlineencyclopedia, the lecturer refutes that there would be no book in the worldwhich is solid enough that has no error. On the contrary, compared totraditional one, online encyclopedia is much easier to be correct if there isany fault.
Secondly, according to the text, hackersmight threaten of the credibility of encyclopedias. However, some steps arebeing taken to avoid this possibility, the professor claims. One strategy isthat using the special format, which cannot be edited but be read. This methodpromotes the reliability. Another way to keep the information is that someonewill take charge of the position that needs to supervise the editing processand emits the unqualified change.
Last but not least, the lecturer points outthat the more information included in the online encyclopedia because there isso much space could be used on the Internet. In contrast, the traditional onejust has limited information, which reflects the preference of the editor,trapping the diversities of information. Thus, the online one provides a largeamount of information without the discrimination contributes to readers whohold the different inclinations. This is really a huge advantage, the professorclarifies.
In sum, even though communal onlineencyclopedias are not the perfect one, their merits outrun the disadvantages.

作者: xiumu2280 时间: 2012-10-21 21:37
The professor in the lecture totally disagrees with the disadvantages of communal online encyclopedias that indicate in/indicated in the reading passage. And she gives her response as follows.
Firstly, though the author in the reading passage contends that the lacking of academic credentials of communal online encyclopedia, the lecturer refutes that there would be no book in the world which is solid enough that has no error. On the contrary, compared to traditional one, online encyclopedia is much easier to be correct/corrected if there is any fault.
Secondly, according to the text, hackers might threaten of the credibility of encyclopedias.(这句应该有逻辑错误， threaten of hackers骇客的威胁，或者直接去掉of) However, some steps are being taken to avoid this possibility, the professor claims. One strategy is that using the special format, which cannot be edited but be read. This method promotes the reliability. Another way to keep the information is that someone will take charge of the position that needs to supervise the editing process and emits/omit? the unqualified change.
Last but not least, the lecturer points out that the more information included in the online encyclopedia because there is so much space could be used on the Internet. In contrast, the traditional one just has limited information, which reflects the preference of the editor,trapping the diversities of information. Thus, the online one provides a large amount of information without the discrimination contributes to readers who hold the different inclinations. This is really a huge advantage, the professor clarifies.
In sum, even though communal online encyclopedias are not the perfect one, their merits outrun the disadvantages.

写的很不错，词汇丰富，句型也不错。
点都挺到位的。

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