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作者: lvfengoo    时间: 2012-7-26 10:59
标题: 【写作小分队】lvfengoo暑假要发奋搞定T
头一次加入这样的作文群，衷心希望大家互助共同提高~~~要虐请深虐~~~不求轻拍7.26开始我的写作小分队贴子~~~
会陆续补充前面缺的作文的~~~
FIGHTING~~~ROCKING MY TOEFL WRITING~~~
作者: lvfengoo    时间: 2012-7-26 17:21
标题: 7月26日独立作文 【求深虐】
7月26日101030NA Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier tobecome educated than in the past.



I agree with the ideathat people are now easier to become educated than in the past. Because withtechnology of rapidly-developing and society of incessant promotion, everyonehas more opportunities to fast and effectively access to plenty of educationresources. Following is three obvious yet significant reasons that supportingmy above opinion.

Firstly,there are virtually much more amount of resources today than decades ago. Moreand more education teaching materials are published recently. For example,TOEFL examination textbooks downpour the general bookstore field, which books arefrequently used by a lot of TOEFL testers as essential reviewing methods. In thepreviously times, you couldn’t imagine there were so many books about TOEFLthat you can get for examination preparation.

Furthermore,the resources at present are rather open and free by the promotion of webdevelopment than in the old and close days. These years, you can search forwhatever materials you need for education on the Internet, and it isunimaginable ten years before that on by a single yet magical cable, educationmaterials are free to anyone around the world. Moreover, you can just take varietiesof open classes from global famous universities in the relative officialwebsite without going out your dormitory, these classes are untouchable to nonlocalstudents ,letting along oversea people, years before.

Inaddition, the devices for education are much more beneficial for anyone toreceive education. At school, teachers prefer to using PPT rather than onlywriting on the limited size outdated blackboard to lecture. Since lecturers cansmoothly and rapidly display more relative information b by using PPT, at thesame time, before or after classes, students can conveniently obtain PPTs justthrough copying by a portable devices or downloading on line. Besides iPad orlaptop makes course’s noting faster and shareable on line.



【吭哧了半天弄到了303字...⊙﹏⊙b汗...顺便求问大家是怎么写到350字的...】
作者: kchszy061ban    时间: 2012-7-27 17:31
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误



I agree with the idea that people are now easier to become educated than in the past. Because with technology of rapidly-developing and society of incessant promotion, everyone has more opportunities to fast and effectively access to plenty of education（这个用adj好点额）resources. Following is three obvious yet significant reasons that supporting my above opinion.

Firstly, there are virtually much more amount of resources today than decades ago. More and more education teaching materials are published recently. For example,TOEFL examination textbooks downpour the general bookstore field, which books are frequently used by a lot of TOEFL testers as essential reviewing methods. In the previously times, you couldn’t imagine there were so many books about TOEFL that you can get for examination preparation.

Furthermore, the resources at present are rather open and free by the promotion of web development than in the old and close days. These years, you can search for whatever materials you need for education on the Internet, and it is unimaginable ten years before that on by a single yet magical cable, education materials are free to anyone around the world. Moreover, you can just take varieties of open classes from global famous universities in the relative official website without going out your dormitory,（这里要段下句或者加个链接词）these classes are untouchable to nonlocal students ,letting along oversea people, years before.

In addition, the devices for education are much more beneficial for anyone to receive education. At school, teachers prefer to using PPT rather than only writing on the limited size outdated blackboard to lecture. Since lecturers can smoothly and rapidly display more relative information b by using PPT, at the same time, before or after classes（这个把at the same time去掉，然后把时间状语写到stu句后，因为感觉since被at the same time 一分，就是个破碎句额）, students can conveniently obtain PPTs just through copying by a portable devices or downloading on line. Besides iPad or laptop makes course’s noting faster and shareable on line.

词和句子处理的都很好，整体结构上注意下就行了。另外就是还要写个结尾段的额
作者: lvfengoo    时间: 2012-7-29 22:06
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误





I agree with the idea that people are now easier to become educated than in the past. Because with technology of rapidly-developing and society of incessant promotion, everyone has more opportunities to fast and effectively access to plenty of education（这个用adj好点额）resources. Following is three obvious yet significant reasons that supporting my above opinion.

Firstly, there are virtually much more amount of resources today than decades ago. More and more education teaching materials are published recently. For example,TOEFL examination textbooks downpour the general bookstore field, which books are frequently used by a lot of TOEFL testers as essential reviewing methods. In the previously times, you couldn’t imagine there were so many books about TOEFL that you can get for examination preparation.

Furthermore, the resources at present are rather open and free by the promotion of web development than in the old and close days. These years, you can search for whatever materials you need for education on the Internet, and it is unimaginable ten years before that on by a single yet magical cable, education materials are free to anyone around the world. Moreover, you can just take varieties of open classes from global famous universities in the relative official website without going out your dormitory,（这里要段下句或者加个链接词）these classes are untouchable to nonlocal students ,letting along oversea people, years before.

In addition, the devices for education are much more beneficial for anyone to receive education. At school, teachers prefer to using PPT rather than only writing on the limited size outdated blackboard to lecture. Since lecturers can smoothly and rapidly display more relative information b by using PPT, at the same time, before or after classes（这个把at the same time去掉，然后把时间状语写到stu句后，因为感觉since被at the same time 一分，就是个破碎句额）, students can conveniently obtain PPTs just through copying by a portable devices or downloading on line. Besides iPad or laptop makes course’s noting faster and shareable on line.

词和句子处理的都很好，整体结构上注意下就行了。另外就是还要写个结尾段的额
-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/7/27 17:31:23)

首先真心谢谢昂。
plenty of education（这个用adj好点额）resources 这个意思用词要精简嚒？我怎么觉得T作文是要凑字呢。
看来要努力的还有很多啊。木有高亮句呢。。。
我刚开始写的作文都不知道要用五段结构。所有也就木有写SUMMARY



作者: lvfengoo    时间: 2012-7-29 22:07
标题: 7月28日 独立
题目：Do you agree or disagree, the way a persondressed is a good indication of his/her personality or charactor.


Obvious, we always judge surrounding people’sindividuality only through their temporal dress style at our first sight ofthem, for example suit standing for seriousness but T-shirt delivering thesense of casualness. However, personally, I claim that people’s wearing styledepends on their current mood or situation, but it is a little indication of theirbasic personality. The reasons are as follow.


Firstly, we almost change our clothes allthe time according to which occasion we are being about to present at. For example,when you are going to a significant interview, you will choose a formaldressing, such as a black suits and black leather shoes, in order to impress arigid feeling on your interviewer. On the other hand, you will put on yourcasual sport wear to exercise in the public gym. However, the solemn suit or informalsport wear does not mean you keep virtually serious or casual all day long. Moreover,as a public security, he must remain having such an uniform on work that youcan not detect his kindness under that uniform.

In addition, people’s dress does not nearly convey a correct expression of their character. As everyone knows, Steven Jobs’s daily dressing is informal T-shirt, even when he is at an official occasion like iPad conference, whichmakes him seems to be superficially unreliable. However, everyone have an ideaof his zealot pursuit of perfection and his seriousness both in his career and company,which push his company to the summit in the world. Thus, his T-shirt can’tconvey his seriousness in work.


However, I must admit that dressing partially display one’s character.As we can conclude, respectable people frequently dress formal clothes,objecting to the irresponsible one’s casual shirts. We can say that someone’sregular cloth mood almost express his basic character all the time. If you area simple girl, you would never dress gorges skirt.


In summary, People’s current mood or situation directly decides their dailydressing. While, their personality is a little reason for the clothes pattern.



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