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作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-11 23:09
标题: kchszy061ban的作业贴
There is never a reason to be rude (impolite) to another person

Have you ever been criticized by your teacher?Have you ever been shouted loudly by your boss？Have you ever been pushed down to the ground by someone?If your never experienced these situations,you would never understand the feeling of being treated rudely by other people.

Rude attitudes to others make them feel uncomfortable and even depressed.People always like the feeling of being confirmed by others,
such feeling makes them feel they are accepted by the society.However,rude people can not give others such feeling.Researchers had done
one experiment before.Two groups of workers were leaded by different bosses.One of them always criticized the workers in his group,while
the other boss treat his workers politely.One month later,the researchers made a survey,the results revealed that the rude boss made his workers feel stressful and depressed,the work efficiency of them were lower than the other group.

In addition,if one always have a rude character,people tend to keep a distance with that person.No one would love to live near a rude person,and enjoy the feeling of been treated impolitely.The result is that rude people have less friends,the relationships between them and their nearby people are strained.Such as when one chooses a house to buy,there are many of the houses to be selected.But people are less likely to buy a house which means they are going to live with a rude neighbour.Living with a rude neighbour means so many things people
have to consider.If you do something unintendly,but your neighbour does not think so,s/he may show her/his temper for you.

On the contrary,polite people have the effect of create a harmary and pleasant atmosphere.And other people are willing to live with people
who are not rude.

Of course,one sometimes have reasons to be impolite to other people which always have a bad temper and treat others unscrupulously.This
is understandable because one has her/his limitation of deadline.But being rude to other rude people,which have little sense of polite,may cause even worse effecnts.As a result,I definitely agree with the statement that there is no reason to be rude to another people.

综合写作 TPO19

The reading passage talks about “buzzing”,and says buzzers have bad effects on consumers and society.However,the lecture argues that the information in the reading passage is misleading,and does not reveals the truth.

First of all,the students who is a buzzer says the companies always hired people who had used their products and find the products are really
good.And buzzers are paid just like the companies paid the advertising.One different thing is that buzzers are person who really used the products and know the quality of them.While in the reading passage,it says that because buzzers are paid by the companies,their praises of the products are incrediable.

In addition,the reading passage reveals that because buzzers pretend to be private people,consumers just listen to them without any questions.
On the contrary,the students says that when he talks about a product with other people,they tend to ask so many questions,such as the price of it,the service,and how long does the student use the product.Consumers are always aware of the products they want to buy.

In the end,the students argues that it is no reason to say buzzers destory the social relationship.Because buzzers are who use the products themselves,and after consumers buy the products,they will find the products are indeed good.Then consumers began to believe buzzers and they develop a trustful relationshop with them.Futhermore,consumers are become open to people.

作者: nirvanababy 时间: 2012-6-12 17:00
红色改错，蓝色建议，高亮是写得好的

There is never a reason to be rude (impolite) to another person

Have you ever been criticized by your teacher?Have you ever been shouted loudly by your boss?Have you ever been pushed down to the ground by someone?If your never experienced these situations,you would never understand the feeling of being treated rudely by other people.

Rude attitudes to others make them feel uncomfortable and even depressed.People always like the feeling of being confirmed by others,
such feeling makes them feel they are accepted by the society.However,rude people can not give others such feeling.Researchers had done
one experiment before.Two groups of workers were leaded by different bosses.One of them always criticized the workers in his group,while
the other boss treat(treated, 最好和前面时态保持一致) his workers politely.One month later,the researchers made a survey,the results revealed that the rude boss made his workers feel stressful and depressed,the work efficiency of them were（was） lower than the other group.

In addition,if one always have a rude character,people tend to keep a distance with that person.No one would love to live near a rude person,and enjoy the feeling of been treated impolitely.The result is that rude people have less(fewer) friends,the relationships between them and their nearby people are strained.Such as when one chooses a house to buy,there are many of the houses to be selected.But people are less likely to buy a house which means they are going to live with a rude neighbour.Living with a rude neighbour means so many things people
have to consider.If you do something unintendly,but your neighbour does not think so,s/he may show her/his temper for you.

On the contrary,polite people have the effect of create a harmary(这个单词什么意思？我没查到诶) and pleasant atmosphere.And other people are willing to live with people
who are not rude.

Of course,one sometimes have（has）reasons to be impolite to other people which（who）always have a bad temper and treat others unscrupulously.This
is understandable because one has her/his limitation of deadline（期效限制？）.But being rude to other rude people,which have little sense of polite,may cause even worse effecnts（effects）.As a result,I definitely agree with the statement that there is no reason to be rude to another people.

文章第一段写得不错，整体来说逻辑清晰论述也很好，多注意语法。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-12 17:14
多谢改正，第一段是十天搞定里面照抄来的了。嘿嘿，你肯定看出来了，不过还是多谢夸奖。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-12 21:54
When come to the question of improving the quality of education,people’ opinons diverged.Some people believe that the best method is to increase teacher’s salaries,while others may think it is better to build teaching facilities.The people which support the later choice argue that if the taxpayer’s money are spend more on teacher’s salaries,then there would be not enough to be spended on teaching facilities.Also,they doubt that if teachers all have a high salaries,then they will not pay much attentions on their teaching.However,building high-level teaching facilities can benefit both teachers and students.

Taxpayers always pay attention to the use of their money that they paid as taxes,the reason is that the total amount of the money is limited,so increasing teacher’s salaries,means that less money will be spended on build teaching facilities.As we all know,taxpayer’s children are going to the school that were constructed by the government,and the money was come from the taxpayer.If the taxpayer does not satify with the quality of the teaching facilities in the school,they would think it is not a good choice the send their children to such type of school.The most important factor in kindergardens and primary schools is the safety,children there are more vulnerable than students in high schools and universities.So,if the facities in these places are not substantial and safe enough,children’ personal safety are not ensured.The result is that parents are not going to send their children to these shcools,how to talk about the quality of education.

Moreover,people worry about the situation that high salaries would cause teachers distracted.Compared to other types of career,teacher’s are already well paid.If one have so much money,the direct result is to spend it.With much money in hand,people are always willing to enjoy a better life.They may spend their time on thinking about planing a trip to several places,buy a sports car,a much bigger house.Personaly I do not think these ideas are not suitable for teachers,if they spend time on these things,the time they pay attentin to the teaching decreased.And it will cause the teaching quality of the teaher decreased intead of improved.

On the contrary,building teaching facilities can be good to students as well as to teachers.A high-level labrary gives students many equipmens to study,such as various books,computer centre,science centre,and so on.All these places can help student study better.At the same time,teachers can use these facilities too. We also can imagine a school have so many high salary teachers,they drive sports car to work,wear expensive outfits,but the labrary in this school is so small,you cannot find the book you want most of the time,no computers are provided there.Then,the quality of education can not be ensured.

Teachers are considered as master educators of human beings,their quality of life should be ensured.It is no doubt that teachers have a reasonable salary,however,the method of giving all teachers high salaries to improve the quaity of education is not suitable enough.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-12 23:10
TPO 20 综合写作

The reading passage suggest that it is necessary to reintroduce the policy of supressing the natural fire in the wild places,the main reason is that the 1988 Yellowstone big fire cause huge damages to that place.However,the professor in the lecture argues that the natural fire is creative instead catastrophic phenomenon.

First of all,the professor says that the fire creats a chance for new plants to grow.And the pants in the Yellowstone becoms more diversed after the fire.The plants which are in the shade of the big trees have the opportunity to grow,and some seeds of the plants and other vegetation need heat to germinate,and the fire provided these seeds suitable condition.This view is directly opposite to the reading passage which states that the fire made the park seems like a devastated wasteland now.

Then,the reading states that large animals have the ability to escape from the fire,while smaller animals are unable to go to the safe place.Because of the disruption of the food chains,the ecosystem will never recover.On the contrary,the professor says that,with the appearance of the plants in the burned place,small anilams like rabbits and hares will come,behind them are the predators prayed on thess small animals.The food chains can be established again.

In the end,the professor says that if the fire happens every year,it may causes negative consequences for the local economy as in the reading passage said.However,the professor explains that the 1988 fire in the Yellowstone was a combinatin of many factors,such as the wind,dry weather,less rainfall.As a result,the fire would not like to happen every year,in fact,Yellowstone has no fire since 1988.So,the tourist com

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-13 09:42
The reading passage suggests that it is necessary to reintroduce the policy 感觉应该是对let it be 的批评of supressing the natural fire in the wild places,the main reason is that the 1988 Yellowstone big fire cause huge damages to that place这句没有必要啊感觉 However,the professor in the lecture argues that the natural fire is a creative instead catastrophic phenomenon.

First of all,the professor says that the fire creats a chance for new plants to grow.And the pants in the Yellowstone becomes more diversed after the fire.The plants which areused to in the shade of the big trees have the opportunity to grow,and some seeds of the plants and other vegetation need heat to germinate,and the fire provided these seeds suitable condition.This view is directly opposite to the reading passage which states that the fire made the park seems like a devastated wasteland now.

Then,the reading states that large animals have the ability to escape from the fire,while smaller animals are unable to go to the safe place.Because of the disruption of the food chains,the ecosystem will never recover.On the contrary,the professor says that,with the appearance of the plants in the burned place不大准确啊,small anilams like rabbits and hares will come,behind them are the predators prayed时态 on thess拼写 small animals.The food chains can be established again.再准确些吧
对阅读的叙述有些多了听力可以在细致一些注意小错误哦

In the end,the professor says declares claims insists...换换词 that if the fire happens every year,it may causes negative consequences for the local economy as in the reading passage said said in the reading passage.However,the professor explains that the 1988 fire in the Yellowstone was a an unusualcombinatin of many factors,such as the wind,dry weather,less rainfall.As a result,the fire would not like to happen every year,in fact,Yellowstone has no fire since 1988.So,the tourist com ？

没有写完呀？
听力要注意细节哦侧重在听力阅读可以不叙述那么多

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-13 10:16
偶，多谢改正，下次一定注意，我也试试着看下你的文章额。我的语法错误太多了点。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-13 10:19
没有写完？你是的是要把结尾也写上么？我看有好多综合作文都是没有结尾的，只是把三个要点写完就好。我真的不是很清楚结尾是不是很重要。刚刚看到，我没有贴上去完整的写作，是我太粗心了。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-13 23:22
When it comes to the methods of teaching children,some parents agree with the point that the most important way for their children to improve abilities is to make mistakes and then learn from these mistakes by their own.While others believe that children should be told what is the right thing to do and help them when they make mistakes.As in China,most of the parents do not consider this question,the reason is that parents here think it is the done thing to help their children and tell them what is the right and proper thing to do.However,this type of teaching has its disadvantages.Indeed,children who make mistakes and then correct them on their own can learn more from these mistakes,thus they can do better in the future.

Through making and then learning from mistakes that children' made,they can cultivate indenpendence.Without help from their parents,children have to solve the problems on their own.Such as when children have some problems on doing homework,the easy way is asking their parents for help.Parents have the experiences to work out these questions.However,if sometimes parents are not available for some reasons,what can the children do?While,if children have the ability to solve them,they would finish it on their own,despite how difficulty the problem is,or even they may make some mistakes.The courage to confront with problems and confidence to get through them are important factors of indenpendence.

Furthermore,another benefits of making mistakes and learning from them is children can avoid the limatations of their parents.Differences in values and attitudes between parents and their children make parents see everything from their own point of view,and children view things based on their perspctives.One seriour problems in China is that young children are engaged in on-line game,some of them waste all their time on these games,when they spend all their money in the Internet Cafe,they began to cheat their parents for money to contiune their on-line game.The effects is that these parents consider Internet as a devil,and forbids their children use Internet.They are not willing to watch their children make mistake through using Internet,ingnoring the positive information and scitific knowledge provided on-line.
While children want to try new things,and eager to make some differences.

Nowadays,some children are afraid of making mistakes and lack the patience to deal with difficulty problems.Thus,if parents let their children make mistakes and learn from these mistake,their children would not have these problems.On the contrary,children who are always want to rely on their parents would never have the opportunity to form this ability.

Some people may not agree with the above statement,they think some mistakes are so severe that children would have life danger if they make these mistakes.Such as touch the electricity wire.And their condiderations on these issues are reasonable.However,besides these serious conditions,it is much better for children making mistakes and learing from their own mistakes.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-14 20:52
Have you ever been criticized by your teacher? Have you ever been shouted loudly by your boss? Have you ever been pushed down to the ground by someone? If your never experienced these situations,you would never understand the feeling of being treated rudely by other people.

Rude attitudes to others make them feel uncomfortable and even depressed. People always like the feeling of being confirmed by others,such feeling makes them feel they are accepted by the society. However,rude people can not give others such feeling. Researchers had done one experiment before. Two groups of workers were leaded by different bosses. One of them always criticized the workers in his group,while the other boss treated his workers politely. One month later,the researchers made a survey,the results revealed that the rude boss made his workers feel stressful and depressed,the work efficiency of them was lower than the other group.

In addition,if one always have a rude character,people tend to keep a distance with that person. No one would love to live near a rude person,and enjoy the feeling of been treated impolitely. The result is that rude people have fewer friends,the relationships between them and their nearby people are strained. Such as when one chooses a house to buy,there are many of the houses to be selected.But people are less likely to buy a house which means they are going to live with a rude neighbour. Living with a rude neighbour means so many things people have to consider. If you do something unintendly,but your neighbour does not think so,s/he may show her/his temper for you.

On the contrary,polite people have the effect of create a harmony and pleasant atmosphere. And other people are willing to live with people who are not rude. When I was in middle far away from my home,I lived in school dorm. One of my roomamtes was so rude that everyone would keep a distance from him. However,he did not realize this because that was his habit in his own home. Later,our teacher talked to him about this question and he quichly changed his rude behavors. He became polite to me and other roommates,all of us felt so comfortable to live with him after his change.

Of course,one sometimes has reasons to be impolite to other people who always have a bad temper and treat others unscrupulously.This is understandable because one has her/his limitation. But being rude to other rude people,which have little sense of polite,may cause even worse effects. As a result,I definitely agree with the statement that there is no reason to be rude to another people.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-14 20:54
When it comes to the question of how to improve the quality of shcool,some people think the key factor is famous teachers,while others believe facilities are the most improant aspect to evaluate whether a school is advanced or not.Compared with hiring famous teachers,improving facilities can benefit both students and teachers,facilities can endure a long time,and always stay in one school instead come to other place.With the help of advanced facilities,many famous teachers can be cultivated by these facilities.However,famous teachers may become unknown as the development of society and science.

Facilities can be used by students and teachers,while famous teachers are only famous for themselves.Students and teachers can use the facilities whenever they want to and need to,while teachers may not available sometimes,especially teachers which are in the front rank.They have to do more things such as giving a speech,attending meetings,interviewed by reporters and so forth,the reason is they are famous.When a high-level laboratory is built in one school,students and teachers have the chance to do experiments that they did not have such equipments before.After the appearence of advanced facilities,the quality of school can be ensured.

The life of the facilities are long enough to meet several generations' needs.The first thing to start a school is consructing classrooms,dormrooms,office buildings,and so on.The labrary in our university were built in 1958,and are still working today.And I know some buildings in Harvard university have a history as 400 years long.They become indispensible parts of the school and contribute to the fame of the campous.

It almost human nature that they do not want to stay in one place for most of their life time,human continuously want to make some changes.If one school have the ability to attract famous teachers from other schools without high-tech facilities,the shcool may give them high salaries.Therefore,if another school give these famous teachers higher salaries,they will certainly leave and start to work at that school.However,facilities lack the ability to move,and once they have been consructed,they will stay there for their lifetime.Also,facilitis build the foundation for futuer upgrade,and they can be upgraded quickly,easily and cheaply.While it is more difficult to make a famous teacher more famous.And to hire a new famous teahcer would definitely cost so much than upgrade an existed facilities.

Of course,hiring famous teacher is one choice to make a school well-known,and through this way,the school can obtain this goal more easily because these teachers are already admitted by the society.However,facilities give school the ability to arract famous teachers,the requisite to cultivate famous teachers by the school itself.Thus,compared with hiring famous teachers,the more reasonable choice would be pay more attention to improve facilities.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-14 22:11
综合 TPO21

Compare with nutural trees,the reading cites several benefits of growing genetically modified trees.However,the professor in the lecture does not think so,and she point out problems about genetically modified trees.

The professor first states that genetically modified trees are not harder than nature trees as what the reading said.Nature trees are more diversified,therefore,some species of them can survive under different climate changes and pest infections.While genetically modified trees lack the ability to resist new virus,and they are always uniform,thus can be easily wiped out if they can not withstand certain climate change,virus or pest.

Moreover,the professor argues the hiden costs of genetically modified trees are more than what the reading passage estimated.Farmers needs to pay for seeds,the price of these seeds usually more expensive than nature trees.According to the law,farmers have to pay for the company if they want to plant these trees using the seeds their trees produced.

In the end,the lecturer disagree with the point made in the reading that genetically modified trees prevent overexploitation of nature trees.Instead,these trees bring more damage to nature trees.The reason is that these trees grow more aggressively than nature trees.They compete with nature trees for nutrient elments,sunlight and water.They can easily wiped out nature trees in the region they growed.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-14 23:11
综合 TPO22

The reading passage states that ethanol fuel is not an ideal alternative to gasoline for three reasons.On the contrary,the professor in the lecture does not agree with those points from the critics of the production of ethanol fuel.

First,the professor argues that even the burning of ethanol fuel does release carbon dioxide into the atmosphere,the materials which make it such as corn need carbon dioxide as a form of nutrient.Thus,the plants which the ethanol fuel made from are absorbing carbon dioxide.So,the process of producing ethanol fuel.

Then,the professor states that the production ethanol fuel will not reduce the food supply of animals.The reason is that producers use cellucose,which is the plants' cell walls,to produce ethanol fuel.And cell walls are not eaten by animals.So,the production of ethanol fuel would not reduce the available food resource for animals.

In the end,the professor positively believe that the price of ethanol fuel would drop.He said that producers of the ethanol fuel will not need government subsides if they increase the amount of production.The price will go down by 40% if the production of ethanol fuel is three times greater than before.

In conclusion,the lecturer firmly believe that ethanol fuel would be an alternative to gasoline.

作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-15 00:27
#6.14# Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with hiring famous teachers, school should pay more attention to improve facilities.

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

When it comes to the question of how to improve the quality of ashcool(school),some people think the key factor is famous teachers,while others believe facilities are the most improant(important) aspect ~~to evaluate whether a school is advanced or not~~.(感觉这里有点重复啦)Compared with hiring famous teachers,improving facilities can benefit both students and teachers,facilities can endure a long time,and always stay in one school instead come to other place. With the help of advanced facilities,many famous teachers can be cultivated by these facilities.However,famous teachers may become unknown as the development of society and science.(这句话有点杂糅哦还有逻辑有点问题,其实我大概明白你的意思,就是"facilities"相较一定,teachers 的"famous"与否是难以衡量、容易改变,恩,但是句子看看怎么说会很有效啊)

Facilities can be used by students and teachers,while famous teachers are only famous for themselves(? 感觉这句话有点makes nonsense to me哈, 虽然facilities can be used by both students and teachers, 但是 teachers 也可以通过授课把知识教给学生，或者老师之间也是可以相互交流心得、思想的嘛？).Students and teachers can use the facilities whenever they want to and need to ( have the need 是不是会好一点?),while teachers may not be available sometimes,especially ~~teachers which are~~ (those) in the front rank(top rank 会不会好点?).They have to do more things such as giving a speech,attending meetings,interviewed by reporters(这个应该做不了名词哈, 或者"attending meetings or interviews”合在一起怎么样?) and so forth,the reason is they are famous.When a high-level laboratory is built in one school,students and teachers have the chance to do experiments that they did not have such equipments before( which they were unable to carry on before).After the appearence(读着有点怪怪的,恩,或者整句改一下?见后文蓝色部分)of advanced facilities,the quality of school can be ensured.( The set of advanced facilities help ensure the academic performance of the school)

The life of the facilities are long enough to meet several generations' needs.The first thing to start a school is consructing(constructing) classrooms,dormrooms(dorms?),office buildings,and so on.The labrary(library) in our university were built in 1958,and are still working(in operation) today.And I know some buildings in Harvard university have a history as 400 years long( or maybe it's better to say "And I know some buildings in Harvard university can be dated back to 1600s"?会不会好点).They become indispensible parts of the school and contribute to the fame of the campous(campus).

It almost human nature that they do not want to stay in one place for most of their life time,human continuously want to make some changes.( It's a human nature that we do not want to just stay in one place for so long, instead we continuously desire to make some changes) If one school have the ability to attract famous teachers from other schools without high-tech facilities,the shcool may give them high salaries.（这个point我觉得很不错啊!very good!!, if one school have the ability to attract those famous teachers, other schools offering even better salary and research environment may have better possiblity win them over)Therefore,if another school give these famous teachers higher salaries,they will certainly(有点绝对了哦) leave and start to work at that school.However,facilities lack the ability to move,and once they have been consructed,they will stay there for their lifetime.Also,facilitis build the foundation for futuer(future) upgrade,and they can be upgraded quickly,easily and cheaply.While it is more difficult to make a famous teacher more famous.And to hire a new famous teahcer would definitely cost so much than upgrade an existed facilities.(这个point感觉也不错哦!很棒)

Of course,hiring famous teacher is one choice to make a school well-known,and through this way,the school can obtain this goal more easily because these teachers are already admitted by the society( and it's a comparably easier way, for the already existed reputation of those famous teachers may bring their influence with them to the school.) However,facilities give school the ability to arract(attract) famous teachers,the requisite to cultivate famous teachers by the school itself.Thus,compared with hiring famous teachers,the more reasonable choice would be pay more attention to improve facilities.

小结：
ban ban 拼写以后要注意哦, 可以在po上来之前用word检查一下拼写错误啦
还有句子的grammar,有的地方有点杂糅哈
文中有几个point我觉得挺好的呢, ^^
因为我们两个写的点是反的,我支持famous teachers. 恩,我觉得你的破提点就在: 1.facilities是attract famous teachers的基础: e.g 提供 research environment,lab. 2.facilities 本来存在，ungrade成本比招一个新老师少 3.我想你可不可以再从学生角度来想呢？e.g facilities 帮助老师,同样更是帮助学生更好地学习.呵呵，好啦，我暂时就想这么多了，欢迎各种brainstorm，我们一起来讨论吧！加油加油！

作者: gre呀gre 时间: 2012-6-15 15:37
TPO22 综合

The reading passage states that ethanol fuel is not an ideal alternative to gasoline for three reasons. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture does not agree with those points from the critics of the production of ethanol~~fuel~~.（1.前面已经说过是ethanol fuel，后面再用ethanol就好，要不字数容易超，原文也是这样写的；2.后面有两个of，用法没有错，我自己觉得两个of会显得有点重复，the critics of the ethanol production 这样写会简洁一点）

First, the professor argues that even（though的意思更符合吧） the burning of ethanol ~~fuel~~ does release carbon dioxide into the atmosphere, the materials which make it such as corn need carbon dioxide as a form of nutrient.（后半句结构和意思有点乱啊，整理一下吧，我觉得你是想说the materials which are part of the nutrition of some plants such as corns. 那个carbon dioxide既然用作定语从句要指代的东西，就不需要放出来了）Thus, the plants which the ethanol ~~fuel~~ made from are absorbing carbon dioxide. So, the process of producing ethanol fuel.（最后一句So，XXXXXXXX怎么没写完？两个所以也重复了，我觉得改成Since the process of producing ethanol counteracts the carbon dioxide when burning ethanol，the growing plants, in fact, remove the carbon dioxide from the atmosphere. 这样会好一些吧）缺少的reading的要点：Ethanol和gasoline一样，燃烧的时候会释放二氧化碳，温室气体，会带来global warming.

Then, the professor states that the production ethanol ~~fuel~~ will not reduce the food supply of animals. The reason is that producers use cellucose (celluloses（单数cellulose）纤维素的意思，能听出来很棒！), which is（are） the plants' cell walls, to produce ethanol fuel. And cell walls are not eaten by animals.（我觉得这一句加到前面那句当定于从句会更好一些，因为连着两个cell walls显得有点重复了）So, the production of ethanol fuel would not reduce the available food resource for animals.缺少的reading的要点：需要用现在生产的60%的玉米才能满足10%的燃料需求，所以生产ethanol消耗的植物会使得动物消失。

In the end, the professor positivelybelieve（believes） that the price of ethanol ~~fuel~~ would drop. He said（says 时态要一致啊GN！） that producers of the ethanol fuel will not need government subsides if they increase the amount of production. The price will go down by 40% if the production of ethanol fuel is three times greater than before.（这一段意思没有听全：未来，ethanol的价钱和gasoline相比会很有竞争力，虽然现在政府的支持使得ethanol比正常情况便宜很多，但是这种政府支持不需要持续很久。因为一旦人们都开始买ethanol，ethanol的生产商会提高产量，高产量会使得它价格下跌，从而使得生产它变得更可行。研究表明，如果ethanol产量是现在的3倍，那么单位成本会下跌40%。这些是我归纳出来的意思）缺少的reading的要点：虽然对于消费者来说，gasoline和ethanol的价格一样，但是没有了政府对于ethanol的税收优惠，ethanol价格会高很多。

In conclusion, the lecturer firmly believe（believes） that ethanol fuel would be an alternative to gasoline.

有错误换成高端词小错误没错误如果改了效果更好文章缺少的点

1.总字数220，我忘了要求字数最多是200还是220了，总之，稍微再控制一下。

2.不知道是不是因为直接复制的关系，还是因为不知道有这样的要求，总之呢，标点符号后面一定要加空格再写下一个单词。大概就是这样：In the end,(空格) the professor XXXXXXXXXXXX.

3.单复数变化和时态这样的小问题一定要注意啊姑娘！老外都不喜欢这样的错误

4.高端和低端的词要岔开用，全篇都是高端的可以，但是都是低端的词就会让改作文的老师觉得你词汇量不够，建议多背模版词，让开头的单词稍微高端一点，毕竟考T的目的就是要给米国人显摆咱们的英语水平呢~

5.Reading部分的总结呢？虽然综合写作的要突出听力部分，但是Reading的部分咱也不能一点都没有不是？下次写作的时候记得一定要加上！否则就算听力听的再完整，也还是会被扣很多分的！

.S.不好意思，我也没想到我这么罗嗦- -

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-15 15:53
太感谢了，不过我是爷们不是姑娘，失望米有？嘿嘿，不过我喜欢姑娘，虽然暂时木有姑凉喜欢我。网页的排版搞的不好，下次一定注意，我太粗心，又懒不想写完检查。

作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-16 07:53
Hey, 我们又是一组哦~只是今天我爸专门过来看我，我可能就晚一点给你改啊。。话说你还木有上文呢~~呵呵，就可能稍微晚点改啦哈，先来占个座啦，抱歉~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-16 12:29
6月15日110514 ML
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future.

Obviously,a career with secure and successful future is expected by every job hunter.As the competition becomes more and more intensified,some of them wish they would live in the ancient time,becasue they think it was easier to choose a secure job in the past.Based on the simple life style,few kinds of jobs,slight competition in the past,their expectation seems sound.While,compared to ancient society,job hunters now can get more experiences from successul workers,have scientic prediction for the future of certain career,and more opportunities to taste different jobs by themselves.Therefore,to identify which type of career would have a secure future becomes easier in modern society.

One benefit of modern sociey brings to identify a secure job is the information provided by various media.Job seekers now can use Internet,TV,newspapers,magazines to search the successful experiences of excellent workers.By using these media,one of my classmates find a job he satisfied with.At the beginning of his job hunting process,he did not know how to identify a woderful job.Then he strated to use the Internet to find clues to this question.He talked to different sucessful workers on-line,interviewed many bosses to ask their attitudes of which was a secure career,and how they thought the futue of their job.Base on the information he collected and his carefull analysis,finally he found a suitable job.

Moreover,people now can use new inventions to estimate the future development of a career.With the help of computors,scientists can use mathematic models to produce a general trend of a certain career in the next few years.This trend gives job hunters a guide to judge which job will decline and which will fourish in the future.On the contrary,people in the past had no computors to make prediction.Their judgement mainly based on their successor's experiences,and many of them did the same job as their parents did.

Also,nowadays,people have more opportunities to choose different jobs,and they can change their jobs easily if they find the job is not suitable for them or it has no bright future.Air-plane gives job hunters the convenience to go distant places for seeking jobs,the distance between New York and Beijing only take them several hours.Meanwhile,they can use the Internet and cell phone to search job information,talk with employers,and they do not need to make a face to face interview with them,they just can do these things sit in the chair in their home when they have spare time.The contract between them can last for one year or more,when the contract lose its effctiveness, job hunter can start a new job or continue the same one if they think the job is really secure.

Of course,job hunters in the past had the advantage that they only needed to focus on only a few kinds of job available at that time.And most of the jobs were inherited by their offsprings or apprentices,some of the skills they used were kept secret to ensure their success.However,job hunters today have a much broader vision than their ancient counterparts,have more opportunities,less classfied society.Therefore it can be easier for people today to identify which job is more secure.

综合TPO23

The reading passage discusses three hypotheses to explain the steadily decline of the yellow cedar in northwestern North America.While the professor in the lectrue casts doubt on these hypotheses.

First,one of the hypothesis is related to insect infection,the bettle and its larvae which attack the tree.However,the professor says that the trees which are healthy have strong resistence to this insect,their bark and leaves have the ability to secrete a partern of chemical that is poisonous to the beetle.Furthermore,the professor points out that the trees which are surpposed to be caused death by the beetle are already sick before they have been attacked.So,this hypothesis cannot explain the decline of the trees.

In addition,brown bears are thought to be the cause of the decline of the trees,because they eat the bark of the trees and their aggressively eating habits.While,the professor argues that though this hypothesis can explain the decline on the land,it cannot convince readers that it is the reason on the island where is no bears.At the same time,this hypothesis can only be used to explain the regional decline,but not the decline across the North America.

Finally,the reading says that changes of climate can be one reasonable explanation.The cedar trees now begain growing in later winter instead of early spring,and the partial freezing of cold winter day may damage the trees' sensitive roots,then kills the whole tree.On the contrary,the lecturer argues that if the temparture is the reason,the trees in the high elevation would suffer more damage than those in the low evevation.In fact,the trees in the high elevation suffered less decline even the tempretuer is low there.So,the climate hypothesis is not believeable.

In conclusion,the hypotheses in the reading passage are not convinceable enough to make the professor believe them.

作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-16 12:35
好的，中午休息，我先占个座，再跟你改哈！对啦，我的其实昨天已经写啦，见 http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-727183-1-1.html 5楼~ 昨天那个论点感觉不是很好了 >< ! 欢迎指正！

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

6月15日110514 ML
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future.

Obviously,a career with secure and successful future is expected by every job hunter.As the competition becomes more and more intensified,some of them wish they would(could?) live in the ancient time,becasue they think it was easier to choose a secure job in the past.Based on the simple life style,few kinds of jobs,slight competition in the past,their expectation seems sound.While,compared to those in ancient society,job hunters now can get more experiences from successul workers,have scientic(scientific) prediction for the future of a certain career(对了career是可数名词..吧?),and more opportunities to taste different jobs by themselves.Therefore,to identify which type of career would have a secure future becomes easier in modern society.

One benefit of modern sociey brings to identify a secure job( to the identification of a secure job..换个句式?! ) is the information provided by various media.Job seekers now can use Internet,TV,newspapers,magazines to search the successful experiences of excellent workers.By using these media,one of my classmates find (found) a job he satisfied with.At the beginning of his job hunting~~process~~(是不是可以删掉?),he did not know how to identify a woderful( wonderful) job.Then he strated(started) to use the Internet to find clues to this question ( turned to the Internet for some hints) .He talked to different sucessful workers on-line,interviewed many bosses to ask their attitudes of which was a secure career,and how they thought the futue of their job (consult many bosses on the question, to ask ask their attitudes of which was a secure career,and how they thought the futue of their job 对了,their job, 这是是指bosses们的current jobs吗? jobs?) .Base on the information he collected and his carefull analysis,finally he found a suitable job. (The information he collected and his careful analysis finally helped he find a suitable job) (问题是：suitable job ≠ 未来secure/successful job 吧?)

Moreover,people now can use new inventions to estimate the future development of a career.With the help of computors(computers),scientists can use mathematic models to produce(这里的produce是指? 还是预测? estimate?) a general trend of a certain career in the next few years.This trend gives job hunters a guide to judge which job will decline and which will fourish in the future.On the contrary,people in the past had no computors(computers) to make (such kind of) prediction.Their judgement mainly based on their successor's(sucessor in English means " on the follows“ 后继者.@@.应该是predecessors吧) experiences,and many of them did the same job as their parents did.

Also,nowadays,people have more opportunities to choose different jobs,and they can change their jobs easily if they find the job is not suitable for them or it has no bright future. Air-plane(The development of ransportation) gives job hunters convenience to go to distant places for seeking jobs, and offer them a broaden stage. the(The) distance between New York and Beijing only take them several hours by flight. Meanwhile,they can use the Internet and cell phone to search(look for, search之前用过啦!) job information,talk with employers,and they do not need to travel for hours to only make a few minutes face to face interview with them, what they have to do is just staying at home for a remote interview~~they just can do these things sit in the chair in their home when they have spare time~~.The contract between them can last for one year or more,when the contract lose(loses) its effctiveness, job hunter(hunters) can start a new job or continue the same one if they think the job is really secure.

Of course,job hunters in the past had the advantage that they only needed to focus on only a few kinds of job available at that time.And most of the jobs were inherited by their offsprings or apprentices,some of the skills they used were kept secret to ensure their success（这一点主要是为了说明因为“独家技艺”所以secure嘛?!) .However,job hunters today have a much broader vision than their ancient counterparts,have more opportunities,less classfied society(啊，我觉得nowadays, society is more classified啊~~~感觉现在分工更细了，工作领域更多，有木有！）.Therefore it can be easier for people today to identify which job is more secure.

小结：
1.ban ban的结构感觉会比较紧凑, 比我的好啦, 一段、末段还有首尾呼应的, 中间段也基本都是按首段顺序来分析的！
2. 一点小话：要注意在标点符号后边留个“空格”哈~
3. 这个题目我就觉得点子不太好找呢。哈哈，突然发现，每次我们的观点貌似都是相反的~~ "media"这个点感觉挺好，还有搜集讯息的渠道更多会有利于identify the secure/successful jobs in the future. 但是 more opportunity那段感觉对identify弱了一点啊。

哎呀，真心觉得这个题目不太好说啊 ==

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-16 12:47

没有写完？你是的是要把结尾也写上么？我看有好多综合作文都是没有结尾的，只是把三个要点写完就好。我真的不是很清楚结尾是不是很重要。刚刚看到，我没有贴上去完整的写作，是我太粗心了。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/13 10:19:12)

这样啊那时我个人习惯了没有总结段总感觉作文不完整嘿
时间允许还是写下最后一段吧不允许就灵活变动～

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-16 17:09

综合TPO23

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

The reading passage discusses three ~~hypothesises~~hypothesesto explain the steadily decline of the yellow cedar in northwestern North America. While the professor in the lectruelecture casts doubt on these hypothesiseshypotheses.

First, one of the ~~hypothesis~~
hypotheses(hypothesis是单数，复数形式hypotheses) is related to insect infection, the ~~bettle~~cedar bark beetle(第一次提到应该完整描述吧，哪类beetle?) and its larvae which attack the trees. However, the professor says that the trees which are healthy have stronger~~resistence~~resistanceto this insect,andtheir bark and leaves have the ability to secrete a ~~partern~~pattern of chemical that is poisonous to the beetle. Furthermore, the professor points out that the trees which are ~~surpposed~~supposedto be caused death by the beetle are already sick before they have been attacked. So, this hypothesis cannot explain the decline of the trees.

In addition, brown bears are thought to be account for the cause(reason换词) of the ~~decline~~deterioration(前面已经用过decline啦，但是表示下降的名词太少了有木有==//) of the trees, because they eat the bark of the trees and their aggressively eating habits. While, the professor argues that though this hypothesis can explain the population decline on the land, it cannot convince readers that it is the reason on the islands where is areno bears. At the same time, this hypothesis can only be used to explain (illustrate) the regional decline, but not the decline across the North America.

Finally, the reading says that changes of climate can be one reasonable explanation. The cedar trees now ~~begain~~begingrowing in later winter instead of early spring, and the partial freezing of cold winter day may damage the trees' sensitive roots, then kills the whole trees. On the contrary, the lecturer argues that if the ~~temparture~~temperature (有点不太清楚气候变化跟温度变化是一个意思么？！)is the reason, the trees in the high elevations would suffer more damage than those in the low ~~evevation~~elevations (ones?). In fact, the trees in the high elevations suffered less decline even the ~~tempretuer~~temperature is lower there. So(As a consequence), the climate hypothesis is not ~~believeable~~believable.

In conclusion, the ~~hypothesis~~hypothesesin the reading passage are not ~~convinceable~~convincibleenough to make the professor believe them.

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-16 17:42
Conclusion：

1.banban亲文章整体把握和处理都特别的好，尤其是细节部分，这也是我急需学习的地方^.^

2.文章整体没有什么错误啦，当然最大的错误就是标点符号后要空格，还有拼写及单复数，建议banban君把每次混淆的单词和单复数问题摘抄出来，做个整理和统计，每隔一周检查与自查一下，会有很迅速的提升的。

3.最后一点就是涉及到最后一段的问题，很多人包括我上课的老师都不建议总结，因为最后评分标准都是内容和细节，不设计这点，甚至会影响速度。但是，如果觉得有个结尾才完整的话，可以自我总结出万能结尾，新颖别致。这篇的结尾就很勉强，很Chinglish表达和思维的感觉啦！

总之，这篇综合还是非常不错的，比我的不知道要好多少倍，我要好好跟你学习！

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-16 17:46
我改了不下10遍，结果还是那么错乱，难道是电脑的问题><

附件中有改好的原稿，看着比较清楚^.^非常抱歉啦

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-16 23:24
6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

When it comes to the queston of whether movies and television have more negative than positive effects,people' opinions diversified.Some believe that they are the reason of their children' bad behaviors.While others believe that these media helps their children enlarge their views,develop strong resistence to bad things,and also make them relaxed.Meanwhile,man's subjective initiative provide them the freedom to choose what they like,and movies and television are just one of so many factors which can effect one’s behavior.Therefore,the saying that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave is not so reasonable.

It is obvious that movies and televison have the benefit to broad young people' horizon.Programs provided on the television are relating to various subjects,such as economy,politic,science,technology,sport,and so forth.These programs are up-to-date,easy to access,and widely available to young people through a TV set.I am a student who study physics in university.One of my favourite program is called "nature world".It talks about events happened in the nature world,like volcanic eruption,hurricane,global warming,and analyzes the reasons which cuause them,the effects of these events to human society.By watching these programs,I learnt so many things that our professors are not mentioned in the classes.And my experiences are not rare,everyone who wants to know the mysteries of the nature can do this.

In most of the movies,the criminals are punished in the end.And this gives the young people who watch these movies a sign that if they do the same thing,they will be punished too.Thus,watching these movies helps young people distingish whihc is benefitial and which is baneful.When they face the same situations,the information they gethered from the movies give they the wisdom to choose the right side.If one gang member invited a student to take part in,then the student recalled the punishments that the gang members suffered in the jail,and their miserable destinies after they get out from there.Then,s/he decided not to involve in this activity.

Also,when young people have misbehaves,their parents and other people always want to blame the movies and television.The reason may be young people like these media,and want to imitate the actions of the leading role in the movies or in television programs.When young people do something wrong,people begain to relate their mishaves to them.They just ignore other factors which are more influencial than these media.Their parents,teachers,friends all have significant effects on their behaves.Young people are spending more time with those people than they wactch television or movies.Another point is that before the programs in the television or the movies are shown to the public,they need to be censored,the ones which are allow to be screened are considered acceptable by the experts.Thus,it is nonsense to relate young people' misbehaves to them.

It is ture that movies and television have some bad effects on young people,but the violence scenes in them are limited.Therefore,to exaggerate the nagetive effects and diminish the positive ones are not sound.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-17 16:01
TPO 24 综合

In the reading passage,the author metions a discovery that a fossil of T.rex whose inside of its leg bone contains actual animal tissues.While the professor in the lectuer says that we need to be skeptical about the identification of the actual tissues.

To begain with,the reading states that the soft materials in the channels of the leg bone may be the remains of the actual blood vessels of T.rex.However,the professor argues that the organic substance inside the channel probably to be the remains of bacterias which located in the hollows in the bones long after the animal was died.And bacterias also left organic substance after their death,so,the information in the reading can not confirm us to believe the remians is truely the remains of the T.rex.

Then,the passage provides us with the information that the spheres in the different parts of the bone could be the the residue of the blood cells.However,the professor points out that other fossils in the same places also contain these shperes,and those animals are convinced to be have no red blood cells when they were alive.So,it is unlikely that these spheres are indeed the red blood cells,they may be the residue of mineral.

In the end,the reading cites collagen,which is showed in the bone,to be associating with bone tissue.On the contrary,the professor says that collagen can only exsist for one thousand years,the fossil's lifetime is so long,it seem impossible that the collagen is the remains of the T.rex.Moreover,the professor guess that the cellagen' origin may be the researchers,because their skin also contain celagen,and they left some of them when they touch the bone.Therefore,the cellagen in the bone could not be the bone tissue.

作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-17 19:33
虽然这篇我自己还没有写的, 也滚过来帮你看看吧~~

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

When it comes to the queston of whether movies and television have more negative than positive effects,people' opinions diversified.Some believe that they are the reason of their children' bad behaviors.While others believe that these media helps(help) their children enlarge their views,develop strong resistence to bad things(哈哈，这点有意思，先m一下),and also make them relaxed.Meanwhile,man's ~~subjective~~ (initiative已经有subjective的意思啦啊)initiative provide them the freedom to choose what they like,and movies and television are just one(some) of so many factors which can effect(affect) one’s behavior.Therefore,the saying that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects(ones) on the way young people behave is not so reasonable.

It is obvious that movies and televison have the benefit to broad(broaden) young people' horizon.Programs provided on the television are relating(related) to various subjects,such as economy,politic,science,technology,sport,and so forth.These programs are up-to-date,easy to access,and widely available to young people through a TV set.I am a student who study physics in university.One of my favourite program is called "nature world".It talks about events happened in the nature world,like volcanic eruption,hurricane,global warming,and analyzes the reasons which cuause them,the effects of these events to human society. By watching these programs,I learnt so many things that our professors are not mentioned(didn't mention) in the classes.And my experiences are not rare,everyone who wants to know the mysteries of the nature can do this.

In most of the movies,the criminals are punished in the end.(这个点。。电影的模式化啊!)And this gives the young people who watch these movies a sign that if they do the same thing,they will be punished too.Thus,watching these movies helps young people distingish whihc is benefitial and which is baneful.When they face the same situations,the information they gethered from the movies give they the wisdom to choose the right side.If one gang member invited a student to take part in,then the student recalled the punishments that the gang members suffered in the jail,and their miserable destinies after they get out from there.Then,s/he decided not to involve in this activity.(有点感觉绝对了啦,现在不是很多人知道犯罪会坐牢啥的,不也去偷杀抢劫么...但是能想到这点感觉有点意思）

Also,when young people have misbehaves,their parents and other people always want to blame (有没有on的?)the movies and television.The reason may be young people like these media,and want to imitate the actions of the leading role in the movies or in television programs.When young people do something wrong,people begain to relate their mishaves to them.They just ignore other factors which are more influencial than these media.Their parents,teachers,friends all have significant effects on their behaves.Young people are spending(spend) more time with those people than that they use on wactching television or movies.Another point is that before the programs in the television or the movies are shown to the public,they need to be censored,the ones which are allow to be screened are considered acceptable by the experts.Thus,it is nonsense to relate young people' misbehaves to them.（这个点我觉得是不错的）

It is ture that movies and television have some bad effects on young people,but the violence scenes in them are limited.Therefore,to exaggerate the nagetive effects and diminish the positive ones are not sound（今天看到sound想到一个替换词: valid).

今天突然想到，感觉T的作文就像是在辩论一样呢. 你来我挡~~最好的效果就是不断找自己论点的可能攻破点给它补上啊
每次看ban ban 作文，都能学到一些我之前都没想到的点呢..很好啊！！
有的拼写错误我就标出来，没给你改了哦，以后注意一下单词词性哈

对了,题外话，我已经决定可能以后每周只跟着作文小分队写3-4篇文章，不天天写了, 但是每个题目还是会想的, 感觉我还是需要更多时间消化啊~~

作者: DanielleZ 时间: 2012-6-17 21:10
When it comes to the question of whether movies and television have more negative than positive effects, people' opinions are diversified. Some believe that they are the reason of their children' bad behaviors. While others believe that these media helps their children enlarge their views, develop strong resistence against(我觉得against 比to更形象一些) to bad things, and also make them relaxed. Meanwhile, men's（humen’s更好一些） subjective initiative provide them the freedom to choose what they like, and movies and television are just one of so many factors which can effect one’s behaviors. Therefore, the saying that movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave is not so reasonable.

It is obvious that movies and televison have the benefit to broad young people' horizon.（主题句突出）Programs provided on the television are relating to various subjects, such as economy, politic, science, technology, sport, and so forth. These programs are up-to-date,easy to access,and widely available to young people through a TV set(我觉得写through TV就够了).I am a student who study physics in university. One of my favourite program is called "nature world". It talks about events happened in the nature world, like volcanic eruption, hurricane, global warming, and analyzes of~~the~~ reasons which cause them (涂红部分建议改成about these phenomena),the effects of these events to human society. By watching these programs, I learnt so many things that our professors are not mentioned in the classes. And my experiences are not rare, everyone who wants to know the mysteries of the nature can do this.

In most of ~~the~~ movies, the criminals are punished in the end. And this gives the young people who watch these movies a sign that if they do the same thing, they will be punished too. Thus, watching these movies helps young people distinguish ~~which is~~ benefit and ~~which is~~ bane (我认为这样改简洁一些). When they face the same situations, the information they gathered from ~~the~~ movies give they ~~the~~ wisdom to choose the right side .If one gang member invited a student to take part in, then the student recalled the punishments that the gang members suffered in the jail, and their miserable destinies after they get out from there. Then,s/he will decided not to involve in this activity.

Also, when young people have misbehaves, their parents and other people always want to blame ~~the~~ movies and television. The reason may be young people like these media, and want to imitate ~~the~~ actions of the leading role in the movies or in television programs. When young people do something wrong, people begain to relate（link感觉好一些吧？） their mishaves to them（改成movies and television或许好一些吧？）. They just ignore other factors which are more influential than these media. （斜体的这句我认为是这段的主题句，但是不够突出。我觉得在段首突出写清，会更好一些）Their(用young people’s指代清楚一些) parents,teachers,friends all have significant effects on their behaves. Young people are spending（改成spend 就可以了） more time with those people than with ~~theywatch~~television or movies. Another point is that before the programs in the television or the movies are shown to the public, they need to be censored, ~~the~~ ones which are allow to be screened are considered acceptable by the experts. Thus, it is nonsense to relate young people' misbehaves to them.

It is ture that movies and television have some bad effects on young people, but ~~the~~ violence scenes in them are limited .Therefore, to exaggerate the nagetive effects and diminish the positive ones are not sound.（最后一段可以再多说几句，总结一些第一个理由和第二个理由）

作者: DanielleZ 时间: 2012-6-17 21:17

Dear Banban，
不好意思啊，这么晚才修改完。

从你的文章我学到很多很好的内容，我觉得需要修改的内容已经用红色字体标出了。

里面如果有些什么不周全的地方，敬请谅解，欢迎讨论。

谢谢你帮我修改作文哦，我确实句式会比较单一，采纳你的意见，今后多背一些句式啊。

fighting~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-18 16:38
6月17日110115 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of a university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

Nowadays,people become more and more foclus on the education quality that the unviersity or college provided to the public. Educatin quality not noly affects university's reputation,it is also essential for students in their future work place. One of the problems directly related to this topic is that which is the main role of the university professor:to educate students or to do research? According to the above statement,professors in the university should pay more attention to teach students.However,professors need to do researches to keep pace with their peers,to have a more deep understanding of the subject which they teach.And they do not do researches alone,they may need their students' help to do those researches.In,fact,university also need their professors do researches to enhance their acdemic reputation.All of these can benefits university,the students,and the professors themselves.

Professors need to do researches to explore new things in their field,in order to compete with other professors in the same field.As we all know,the resources are always limited,professors get their funding mainly from the government,the companies,some private associations.If they do not represent the leading position in their field,no one will give them the funding they need.One important way to keep at the forefront postion is to do researches.I am a university student,my professor spend most of his spare time on his researches,which is about the LED.He got a lot of rewards from the state,and even applied two patents from the US.When we attended his class,he told us his experiences and his latest development.We learnt so much in his class.As you can see,doing researches help professors teach studetns better.

Another point is that as the students,professor need to do researches to update themselves.The rapid changes in sciences and technologies,also in the society make mordern people can be easily left behind by others if they stand still.Some courses in the university,as computer science or biology,are changing from time to time.Professors just can not talk about the technologies which are used ten years ago to their students.If they do so,their students would have problems to find a job,just because what they learned in the university are no longer used by the company any more.By doing researches,professors will keep contact with the new technologies used in the companies or the other universities.So,it is very important for professors to do researches.

Moreover,doing researches is an communal activity.Professors always need their students' help to do their researches.And students sometime play an important role in doing researches,they have so many ideas,they are eager to make some changes,and they are not confined by the norms as their professors.So,doing researches both benefits students and professors.

Of course,professors have the responsibility to teach their students well,and provide them the latest knowledge to make them really educated.Therefore,they need to do researches in order to give their students the new information.Also,they do researches in their spare time,this will not do harm to teach their students.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-18 17:30
TPO1 综合

In the reading passage,the author says that an option of a four-day workweek would benefit the company,the country,and the employee as well.While,the professor in the lecture expresses his doubt in his mind about the advandages suggested in the reading passage.

First,the reading states the company's profits can be increased by as a result of the shortened workweek.The reason is that company have the option to hiring more staff to ensure the same amount work done by workers who make less errors.However,the professor argues that,the cost may even more than hiring five-day workweek workers.He explains that the company should pay the training fee,buy new computors,new office spaces ,and medical insurance for hiring new workers,and the medical insurances are the same,despite the worker works or not.So,the cost of hiring four-day workweek workers may even more than before.

Then the reading suggests that the unemployment rates would be reduced by offering four-day workweek options.The reason is that four-day workweek worker only do 80 percent of the whole work,thus companies need extra workers to do another 20 percnet work by new workers.The professor argues that the company may expect the four-day workers to do the same amount work as they did before;even worse,they may rise the working hours in order to do so.This will cause the workers work under unpleasant condition,and it would not increases the job opportunities for others.

In end of the passage,the author states that,by choosing four-day workweek day,individual employees could afford more time to relax themselves.On the contrary,the professor warns that even this option means more free time,it may cause the workers have less time to advance their skills.Meanwhile,when the economic condition is not so good,the four-day workweek workers would be the first to loose their work.Also,when the company want to find some workers which can be the management workers in the company,the four-day workweek workers are less likely to be choosed because of their unstability in their work place,and the workers who conver the entire work day are more consistent in their work,they are more likely to make a promotion in the company.

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-18 20:32
TPO1 综合

In the reading passage,the author says that an option of a four-day workweek would benefit the company,the country,and (as well as 感觉放前边能顺畅一点) the employee as well.While,the professor in the lecture expresses his doubt in his mind about the advandages (advantages) suggestedin the reading passage.

First,the reading states the company's profits can be increased by as a result of(整个去掉，直接by+，是不是能简洁点) the shortened workweek.The reason is that company have (has) the option to hiring(hire....have option+to do吧) more staffs to ensure the same amount of work done by workers who make less errors.However,the professor argues that,the cost may even more than hiring five-day workweek workers.He explains that the company should pay the training fees,buy new computors,(increase larger) new office spaces ,and offer more medical insurance for hiring new workers,and (Moreover) the medical insurances like health benefits are the same,despite the worker works or not (four days or five....or not 跟原文意思不一样吧).So,the cost of hiring four-day workweek workers may even more than before.(感觉最后应该总结到sub point这个点上，that is, 公司的profits会cut down.)

Then the reading suggests that the unemployment rates would be reduced by offering four-day workweek options.(这个sub point有问题，应该是the country as a whole will benefits，而不是细节降低失业率)The reason is that four-day workweek workers only do 80 percent of the whole work,thus companies need extra workers to do another 20 percnet work by new workers.The professor argues that the company may expect the four-day workers to do the same amount of work as they did before (in five days...before跟five days的意思是不一样的，before可以指每天的工作量，而5天指的是总量);even worse (as a result),they may rise the working hours in order to do so.This will cause the workers work under unpleasant conditions,and it would not increases the job opportunities for others as well.

In the end of the passage,the author states that,by choosing a four-day workweek ~~day~~,individual employees could reap more benefit, like affording more time to relax themselves.On the contrary,the professor warns that even this option means more free time,it may cause the workers have less time toadvance their skills.(好像没有提到这点诶)Meanwhile,when the economic condition is not so good,the four-day workweek workers would be the first to loose their work.Also,when the company want to find some workers which can be the management workers in the company,the four-day workweek workers are less likely to be choosed because of their unstability in their work place,and the workers who conver the entire work day are more consistent in their work,they are more likely to make a promotion in the company.

Conclusion：
提几点建议吧^^
1. 感觉sub point抓的不是特别准诶，我的依据是在CD下载的TPO综合写作解析，说的挺有道理的，里边也介绍有关于观点抽出的方法，我把pdf上传到附件里了，banban可以抽空看看。
2.就是关于阅读部分的细节问题了，banban这篇写得字比较多，有350+了吧，因为阅读和听力都抓的比较细。这个pdf也提出了一些TIP：没有必要在文章中出现passage部分的support和details，或者不能出现。但是，我的理解是，如果听力实在没听到细节，字数不够的时候，还是可以拿阅读的细节部分码码字来着。
呵呵，当然，每个人对于同一事物有不同的理解，banban可以有选择性地挑选适合自己的哦~~~

作者: babaxiong 时间: 2012-6-18 20:36
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

6月17日110115 NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of a university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

Nowadays, people become more and more foclus（focus）on the education quality that the university(university) or college provided to the public. Educatin(Education) quality not noly(only) affects university's reputation, it is also essential for students in their future work place（这里为什么是工作的地方？应该是对学生未来的工作career 很重要吧）. One of the problems directly related to this topic is that which is the main role of the university professor: to educate students or to do research? According to the above statements, professors in the university (这里不应该用“the”吧，没有特指哪个学校啊)should pay more attention to teach students. However, professors need to do researches to keep pace with their peers, to have a more deep（deeper） understanding of the subject which they teach. And they do not do researches alone, they may need their students' help ~~to do those researches~~. In fact, university also need their professors do researches to enhance their acdemic(academic) reputation. All of these can benefits universities, the students, and the professors themselves.

Professors need to do researches to explore new things in their field, in order to compete with other professors in the same field. As we all know, the resources are always limited, professors get their funding mainly from the government,~~the~~companies, some private associations. If they do not represent the leading position in their field, no one will give them the funding they need. One important way to keep at the forefront postion(position) is to do researches. I am a university student, my professor spend most of his spare time on his researches, which is about the LED. He got a lot of rewards from the state, and even applied two patents from the US. When we attended his class, he told us his experiences and his latest development. We learnt so much in his class. As you can see, doing researches help professors teach studetns(students) better.

Another point is thatas~~the~~students(as students 这里是不是要了？我不是很明白), professors need to do researches to update themselves（update这里是不是不适合？promote会好一些吧）. The rapid changes in sciences and technologies, also in the society make mordern(modern) people ~~can~~ be easily left behind by others if they stand still. Some courses in the university, as computer science or biology, are changing from time to time. Professors just can not talk about the technologies which are used ten years ago to their students. If they do so, their students would have problems to find a job, just because what they learned in the university are no longer used by ~~the~~ companies any more. By doing researches, professors will keep contact with the new technologies used in the companies or ~~the~~ other universities. So, it is very important for professors to do researches.

Moreover, doing researches is an(a) communal activity. Professors always need their students' help to do their researches. And students sometimes play an important role in doing researches, they have so many ideas, they are eager to make some changes, and they are not confined by the norms as their professors are. So, doing researches both benefits students and professors.

Of course, professors have the responsibility to teach their students well, and provide them the latest knowledge to make them really educated. Therefore, they need to do researches in order to give their students the new information. Also, they do researches in their spare time, this will not do harm to teach their students.

Conclusion:

ban ban的作文真的让我受益匪浅啊，写的很好，逻辑性很强，观点也都很明确。

比我写的强太多了！

但是作文中用了好多特指，我觉得不是很必要。单词拼写也要注意一下哦~

个人水平很有限，不要介意哦~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-18 21:00
多谢luna和xiaoxiong的辛苦修改额。综合实在是有很多要学的了，不过好像综合不限制字数吧？ xiaoxiong你改的很仔细了额，你发现的拼写错误都是我检查之后仍然有的，我实在是太粗心了。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-18 23:17
6月18日101017 大陆 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.
The advances of modern society provide people the convenience to relax themselves,some would like to reading books,which either paper-based or e-book, in their comforale and quiet home,or watch a moive with their family members or friends.While others engage in doing physical exercise such as running or mountain climbing when they want to relax themsevles.Generally speaking,people can relax their stressful mind when they read one interesting novel or watch a funny film,this really help them to relax.While,when they are reading or watching,they just stand still,or in other word,they do not move so much.Then,doing exercise make people healthy,help them contact clostly with the nature, and people then can work or study better in their work or study.

By doing physical exercise,people could enjoy a good health.Physical exercise,such as joging or running,help people build up a sound body.Human need some physical to keep health,because they are animals not plants.According to the "evolution theory",if peopel do not use one organ,then the that organ would probability suffers a degeneration process. While doing physical exercise can help people regularly use every part of their body,keep the healthy condition of their organ.One example is that in china,many old people would like to do exercise to keep heathy,an recent survey shows that old people who often do physical exercise have a better health and are less likely to catch a cold or other diseases.

In addition,doing physical exercise give people the opportunity to close to nature.Most of the residents now live in the sities,which have little space for the forest,green trees,and wild animals.While some exercies like mountain climbing,long distance running,give people the chance to appreciate the beauty of the nature.One can not imagine the amazing sights of the nature if they do not go there by themselves.

Also,doing physical exercise is different from people' daily work,thus,it help people experience a new enviorment and can help people relax both their spirit and their body.One example of this is that,after one day's busy work,I alway running for thirty minutes.I enjoy the feeling of runing on the road,on both sides of which are green grasses and trees,the birds are singing amoung the leaves of the tree.I breath the fresh air,enjoy the beauty of the nuture,and really feel relaxed when I come back to my dorm.Next day,I am in good condition to continue my study.My experience is not rare,many peopel are willing to do physical exercise to release their stress.

Of course,some people love reading or wacthing a movie when they want to espcape from their busy daily work.they also feel relief when they do those things.But according to the above statements,I recommend these people do some physical exercise in order to keep health and enjoy the beauty of the nature.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-19 07:54

6月18日101017 大陆 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.
The advances of modern society provide people the convenience to relax themselves,some would like to reading books,which either paper-based or e-book, in their comforale and quiet home,or watch a moive with their family members or friends.While others engage in doing physical exercise such as running or mountain climbing when they want to relax themsevles.Generally speaking,people can relax their stressful mind when they read one interesting novel or watch a funny film,this really help them to relax.While,when they are reading or watching,they just stand still,or in other word,they do not move so much.Then,doing exercise make people healthy,help them contact clostly with the nature, and people then can work or study better in their work or study.

By doing physical exercise,people could enjoy a good health.Physical exercise,such as joging or running,help people build up a sound body.Human need some physical to keep health,because they are animals not plants.According to the "evolution theory",if peopel do not use one organ,then the that organ would probability suffers a degeneration process. While doing physical exercise can help people regularly use every part of their body,keep the healthy condition of their organ.One example is that in china,many old people would like to do exercise to keep heathy,an recent survey shows that old people who often do physical exercise have a better health and are less likely to catch a cold or other diseases.

In addition,doing physical exercise give people the opportunity to close to nature.Most of the residents now live in the sities,which have little space for the forest,green trees,and wild animals.While some exercies like mountain climbing,long distance running,give people the chance to appreciate the beauty of the nature.One can not imagine the amazing sights of the nature if they do not go there by themselves.

Also,doing physical exercise is different from people' daily work,thus,it help people experience a new enviorment and can help people relax both their spirit and their body.One example of this is that,after one day's busy work,I alway running for thirty minutes.I enjoy the feeling of runing on the road,on both sides of which are green grasses and trees,the birds are singing amoung the leaves of the tree.I breath the fresh air,enjoy the beauty of the nuture,and really feel relaxed when I come back to my dorm.Next day,I am in good condition to continue my study.My experience is not rare,many peopel are willing to do physical exercise to release their stress.

Of course,some people love reading or wacthing a movie when they want to espcape from their busy daily work.they also feel relief when they do those things.But according to the above statements,I recommend these people do some physical exercise in order to keep health and enjoy the beauty of the nature.

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/18 23:17:59)

他人作文：
The advances of modern society provides people the convenience to relax themselves, some would like to reading books, which either paper-based or e-book, in their ~~comforale~~ comfortable and quiet home, or watch a ~~moive~~ movies with their family members or friends.这块描述的很详细哦~~好好~~ While others engage in doing physical exercise such as running or mountain climbing when they want to relax themselves . Generally speaking, people can relax their stressful mind when they read one interesting novel or watch a funny film, this really help them to relax. While, when they are reading or watching, they just stand still,vor in other words, they do not move so much. ~~Then~~,这应该用个转折比较好吧~~however, doing exercise make people healthy, help them contact ~~clostly~~想说closely吧~~with the nature, and people then can work or study better in their work or study.

By doing physical exercise, people could enjoy a good health. Physical exercise,such as ~~joging~~ or running,help people build up a sound body. Human need some physical to keep healthy, because they are animals not plants. According to the "evolution theory",if ~~peopel~~ do not use one organ,then the that organ would probability suffers a degeneration process. While doing physical exercise can help people regularly use every part of their body,keep the healthy condition of their organs.One example is that in china,many old people would like to do exercise to keep heathy,an recent survey shows that old people who often do physical exercise have a better health and are less likely to catch a cold or other diseases.这个例子可以举得细一些，比如他们早晨锻炼啊，有的跟着音乐跳舞啊~~等等等的~~最后结尾再来个小总结

In addition,doing physical exercise give people the opportunity to close to nature.Most of the residents now live in the ~~sities,~~which have little space for the forests,green trees,and wild animals.While some exercies like mountain climbing,long distance running,give people the chance to appreciate the beauty of the nature.One can ~~not~~ imagine the amazing sights of the nature if they do ~~not~~ go there by themselves.这不要用双重否定，一直都肯定就好了

Also,doing physical exercise is different from people' daily work,thus,it help people experience a new enviorment and can help people relax both their spirit and their body这一个观点跟前面的1和2有重复吧.One example of this is that,after one day's busy work,I alway running for thirty minutes.I enjoy the feeling of runing on the road,on both sides of which are green grasses and trees,the birds are singing amoung the leaves of the tree.I breath the fresh air,enjoy the beauty of the nuture,and really feel relaxed when I come back to my dorm.Next day,I am in good condition to continue my study.My experience is not rare,many peopel are willing to do physical exercise to release their stress.这段的例子和题目联系的很紧密~~但是论点要好好想想，跟身体上的那个例子，也就是第一点重复了~~

Of course,some people love reading or wacthing a movie when they want to espcape from their busy daily work.they also feel relief when they do those things.But according to the above statements,I recommend these people do some physical exercise in order to keep health and enjoy the beauty of the nature.
文章的小错误很多，例如拼写，复数等
而且有个问题，你没有说清楚为什么运动是一个很好的休闲放松的方式，你一直都在说运动的好处，但是他是怎么跟放松联系到一起去的呢？这个没有直接说明~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-19 10:30
TPO 2 综合
In the reading passage,the author states the advantages of group work.However,the professor in the lectuer is skeptical about these advantages.And explain his reasons in the lecture.

First,according to the reading,a group of worker have more people to do the same projects,and they have more ways to do the project.While the professor cites an experiment has done,the result showed that the workerw were like to become free-ride when they were in a group.And then the group makes some succeses,they are asigned to the group.

Alao,when asking about the feeling of some workers who have made insightful contributions,they just says they feel opposite to what is said in the reading.Because their contribution are belong to the group,no one’s name is cited except the group.

Then,the reading says that because of more people invoved in a group project,they can finish the project quickly.While the professor argues that the fact is that it takes long time to make an agreement amoung all the members.If some of the group members are so infulcial to others,they would become dictated,most of the tiem they make a dicision without discussion,even when other members warn that the direction of that decision may be wrong.If their decision is proved to be a mistake,then the mistake would attribute to all the group members.

作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-19 14:49

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/18 23:17:59)

banban, 小A姐已经改得比较详细咯，我就大概说一下自己的想法吧,这次我想的也是支持physical exercises这边~
总体感觉banban在具体细节的细化方面做得一直是挺好的~撒花~ 要学习啊~
1.恩恩，就像小A姐说的, By doing physical exercise, people could enjoy a good health 但是跟relax的关系? 最后是不是再点题一下会比较好?
2. close to nature 这点还是不错的呢，反正之前我是没想到的

我对这个命题自己大概想了三点:
I think doing sports works better to relax, 1.by clearing our head away from the daily work or study, 2.by providing us a outlet to let go of our pressure and anxiety in a healthy way,3. and also doing exercise is not merely a way of relaxation, more importantly it is a positive and lively attitude towards life.
就是想说,1.可以换个环境,体育锻炼能让我们focus on our own thoughts,不受外界物质生活干扰,放空心灵 2.平常office work还有study用眼用脑多,看书看电影也是需要用眼用脑的,体育锻炼可以让我们用一种更healthy的方式放松 3.体育锻炼不仅休息身心,其实更是一种向上的，生命在于运动的生活态度.而有了这种态度,其实生活中很多pressure,tension问题也可以游刃而解了.

呵呵，我们来brainstom一下吧, ban ban 加油啊！！！

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-19 22:41
6月19日110820NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.

Nowadays,more and more companies becomes to focus on finding the best methods to improve their profits as well as cut costs.Gernerally speaking,so many ways can be used to obtain this goal.It may be benefitial for a company to spend money to update their equipments,to cultivitate its future labor forces in a university,or to improve the work skills of its employees.Everyone knows that a factory can not work without workers,even the advanced technologies today help some companies finish part of their work by robots.So,spending money to improve the work skills of its employees is the basic option for a company.

The main reason to improve the worker's skills is that it can improve the work efficiendy of the workers.Workers becomes familiar with the processes of their work,the way about how to do better and to save time after they are trained.Thus they shortcut the time they spend on their work.In the same amount time compared to the day before,they can produce more products.Meanwhile,when they become familiar with the processes,they will make fewer mistakes than before.This also contributes to improve the work efficiency.Therefore,by improving worker's skills,the company can produce more products with high quality.

Then,the company can make more profits by improving their worker's skills.As what states in the first paragraph,more products means more money for the comopany.At the same time,if the workers in the sale department are well enough to persuade their consumers to buy their products,these products will bring real money to the company.One improtant way to help the sale workers is to improve their work skills.Thus it is very important for a company to invest money on this.

After the work efficiency and profits are all improved,the company will develop more quickly.The company will have more money to invest on other things that can help it to develop faster and bigger.Such as the company will have the ability to purchase more sophisticated machines to produce more precise products.And at the same time they may afford new technologies to produce new products which can make more profits for the company,and to compete with other companies in the same field.

Of course,one risk of improving the worker's skills is that they may jump the manager after they learn the skills and the company can not provide them with the salaries they need,or the promotion they demand.However,this risk can be avoid by a lot of solusions,such as a contract between the workers and the company can be made to ensure the worker work in the company for certain year if they want to be trained by the company.So,improving the work skills of the worker is the important and essential step for a company.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-19 23:05
TPO 3 综合

The reading passage offers three evidences that one painting thought to be Rembrandt's is not painted by him.However,the professor in the lecture convinces that the picture is indeed Rembrandit's.

First,the author in the reading says that the inconsistency of the clothes in the painting is one evidence that the paniting is not painted by Rembrandt.While,the professor explains that the dark fur collar is not original,it was added to the painting to improve its value one hundred years after the picture was painted.The original painting was consistent as Rembrandt's other paintings.

The second reason the reading provided is the light on the women's face.Then,the professor states that,the dark fur collar is not original on the painting,after the fur collar is removed,it can be seen that the women was wearing a bright clothes which can illuminated the face of the women by reflecting the sunlight.Thus,the light and shdow in this painting fit together.

In the end,the reading points out that the painting was glued together.On the contrary,the professor argues that,the part which were added to the painting was not the original wood that Rembrandt used to make the painting.After other parts was removed,people could find the painting was painted on only one wood.Furthermore,the professor says that another self-portrait of Rembrandt with a hat was made of wood from the same tree as the women's painting.Therefore,the painting was indeed painted by Rembrandt.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-20 07:01
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.

Nowadays,more and more companies becomes to focus on finding the best methods to improve their profits as well as cut costs.Gernerally speaking,so many ways can be used to obtain this goal.It may be benefitial for a company to spend money to update their equipments,to cultivitate its future labor forces in a university,or to improve the work skills of its employees.Everyone knows that a factory can not work without workers,even the advanced technologies today help some companies finish part of their work by robots.So,spending money to improve the work skills of its employees is the basic option for a company.

The main reason to improve the worker's skills is that it can improve the work efficiendy of the workers.Workers becomes familiar with the processes of their work,the way about how to do better and to save time after they are trained.Thus they shortcut the time they spend on their work.In the same amount of time compared to ~~the day~~ before,they can produce more products.Meanwhile,when they become familiar with the processes,they will make fewer mistakes than before.This also contributes to improve the work efficiency.Therefore,by improving worker's skills,the company can produce more products with high quality. 感觉这顿的句子有些琐碎导致出现了好多they

Then,the company can make more profits by improving their worker's skills.As what states in the first paragraph,more products means more money for the comopany.At the same time,if the workers in the sale department are well enough to persuade their consumers to buy their products,these products will bring real money to the company.One improtant way to help the sale workers is to improve their work ing skills.Thus it is very important for a company to invest money on this.

After both the work efficiency and profits用improve不大恰当啊 are ~~all~~ improved,the company will develop more quickly.The company will have more money to invest on other things that can help it to develop faster and bigger和成一句话吧或者用不同的句式.Such as the company will have the ability to purchase more sophisticated machines to produce more precise products.And at the same time they may afford new technologies to produce new products which can make more profits for the company,and to compete with other companies in the same field.

Of course,one risk of improving the worker's skills is that they may jump the manager什么意思啊?跳槽? after they learn the skills and the company can not provide them with the salaries they need,or the promotion they demand.However,this risk can be avoid by a lot of solusions,such as a contract between the workers and the company can be made to ensure the worker work in the company for certain year if they want to be trained by the company.So,improving the work skills of the worker is the important and essential step for a company.

论点结构什么好的包子就不说了说说缺点
句子有些简单了变化不够多啊
倒数第二段是说提高员工及术后公司得到的好处吧这段应该和前面两段恰当融合才好单独成段感觉有些重复的

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-20 21:51
6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.

When it comes to the question of doing things,people' opinions differ.Some prefer to take action immediately as soon as they face the challenge.While others like to consider carefully and thoroughly before they take any actions.Gernerally speaking,if people can think about every aspect of the challenge and make a plan about how to deal with it,it would be better.

Let us talk about the first benefit of being patient with one's work.If one use patience as a good strategy to deal with the problem s/he faces,it can shortcut the time s/he needs to solve it.When people suddenly confront with a new problem which is very diffifult to solve,they need time and energy to analyze it,to gather information about it,and sometimes they need to learn from other people' advices or experiences as well.After all of these preparation works have been done,they will have a clear plan about every step on how to solve the problem.Also,with enough time of consideration,they definitely have time to think about the difficulies they may face in their work,and draw up a plan on how to set them at rest.Therefore,people will solve the problem eaily and quickly.

Then,people really need patience to do some specific works.Patience means that one need to spend suffient time on the work they do,have the confidence to solve it,and to continue on whenever they confront with setbacks or they may feel depressed when they fail sometime.As we all know,studying is really a boring process,and it lasts so long,from primary school,middle school,then fianlly into university,if one has no patience,s/he can hardly finish the learning process.

In addition,patience is a factor to become grow-up.Adults are more tactful than young people,they are usually more patient before they do something than young people do.Years of experiences give them the wisdom to consider thoroughly before they make any decisions.The one who always takes action is thought to be not wisdom engough.If one start to do something s/he know little about it,most of the time s/he will fail.Not only s/he lacks the knowledge of it,but also s/he need to learn that s/he need patience to spend enough time to understand the priciples in the field s/he meets with.

Of course,the opportunity will escape if you do not seize it.However,one thing that everyone need to pay attention to is that,before you grasp it,you need to ensure you can succeed.Otherwise,the damage it brings to you would far outweith the advantage you get.Thus,people need patience as a kind of good strategy.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-20 23:18
TPO 4 综合

The reading talks about some evidence which supports dinosaurs are endotherms.While in the listening,the professor explains that scientists have problems about the argument in the reading passage,and the materials are not valid enough to prove dinosaurs are in fact endotherms.

Fisrtly,the polar region explaination that if dinosaurs were not maintain their body temperature constant and above the surrounding,they would not likely to survive in the polar region.While the professor says that the climate at that time when dinosaurs lived were warm enough to maintian their life,and when the climate were indeed too cold,dinosaurs could migrate to warm places or hibernate.Thus,this explaination are not convinceable enough.

Then,the author of the passage states that the place of the leg may indicate dinosaurs are warm-blooded animals.However,the professor argues that there may other benefits for the leg position of dinosaurs,such as it could support more weight,and then dinosaurs could grow into large size which had many advantages at that time.

In the end,bone structure is cited by the reading as an evidence to support its conclusion.On the contrary,the professor points out there also growth rings on the bone of the dinsaurs.The growth rings means that dinosaurs used to grow rapidly and then slowdown or stop to growth if the temperature was cool.And then they began to grow again when the weather was warm.That was the reason why the growth rings formed.If dinosaurs are warm-blooded animal,they would grow constantly despite the weather was warm or cool.So,this evidence proves to be invalid.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 07:46
稍晚些时候回来该文章哈~~表着急~~

作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-21 16:06
恩，我也只有先来占个座儿，晚上晚点回来给你改了~今天晚上得出去啊~~刚才大概扫了一眼，昨天作文没看，今天感觉banban 写作好像有进步了耶~读着挺顺~ 加油哇！

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-21 19:24
TPO 2 综合
In the reading passage,the author states the advantages of group work.However,the professor in the lectuer is skeptical about these advantages.And explains his reasons in the lecture.
First,according to the reading,a group of worker haves more people to do the same projects,and they also have more (lots of) ways to do (fulfill) the project.While the professor cites that an experiment has been done,the result showeds that the (some) workerws were likely to become free-riders when they were in a group.And then (when) the group ~~makes~~ made some succeses,they ~~are~~ were assigned to the group.
Alao,when asking about the feelings of some workers who have made insightful contributions,they just saysthat they feel opposite to what is said in the reading.Because their contributions are belong to the group,no one’s name is cited except the group.
Then,the reading says that because of more people invoved in a group project,they can finish the project quickly.While the professor argues that the fact is that it takes long time to make an agreement amoung all the members.If some of the group members are so infulcial to others,they would become dictated,most of the tiem they make a dicision without discussion,even when other members warn that the direction of that decision may be wrong.If their decision is proved to be a mistake,then the mistake would attribute to all the group members.

抱歉banban这篇改的比较晚，这几天期末导师找着各种帮忙，终于碰到过节了，先预祝banban端午节快乐哇\(^o^)/~
banban写这篇文时，是不是时间特别赶呀，感觉一点都不像你写得诶，很多拼写和时态的错误，后边我就直接标红了，其他都还好了，该把握的点也都在。
继续加油哦

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-21 19:31
这个综合，阅读分的不清楚，写起来就很费劲，多谢改正。没事的，导师的事情先应该做

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 19:47

TPO 4 综合
The reading talks about some evidences which suppots dinosaurs were 这块我觉得就直接写现在时吧·~你觉得呢~~因为全篇都是现在时~~虽然R部分都是过去的时态endotherms.While，这的while是副词啦~~要加，
号 in the listening,the professor explains that scients 拼写拼写！！！have problems in the arguments in the reading passage不要这么多in~~把in the argument去掉~~,and the ？？？是阅读还是lecture~~说明确materials are not valid enough to prove dinosaurs are endotherms.
Fisrtly,the polar region 这个地方怎么能解释呢？加个theory~~ explaination that if dinosaurs were 现在时not maintain their body temperature constant and above the surrounding,they would not likely to survive in the polar region.While， the professor says that the climate at that time when dinosaurs lived were warm enough to maintian their life,and when the climate were indeed too cold,dinosaurs could migrate to warm places or hibernate.Thus,this explaination are not convinceable enough.
Then,换一个词，表示所以的此很多，so therefore 等等哦~~ the author of the passage states that the place of the leg may indicate dinosaurs are warm-blooded animals.However,the professor argues that there may other benefits for the leg position of dinosaurs,such as it could support more weight,and then dinosaurs could grow into large size which had many advantages at that time.最后的逻辑关系不对哦，听力说的是腿长底下除了能跑以外还有个好处，是支撑体重！~~
In the end,bone structure is cited by the reading as an evidence to support its conclusion.On the contrary,the professor points out there also 缺个动词啊~~has啊 is啊~~growth rings on the bone of the dinsaurs.The growth rings means that dinosaurs used to grow rapidly and then slowdown or stop to growth if the temperature was cool.And then they began to grow again when the weather was warm.That was the reason why the growth rings formed.If dinosaurs are warm-blooded animal,they would grow constantly despite the weather was warm or cool.So,this evidence proves to be invalid.这是不是没听懂呢？说的是恒温动物一般的生长规律是快-慢或不长-快，而恐龙不是这样，所以他不是恒温动物~~这个是个很重要的细节啊~~
-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/20 23:18:13)

我挑了很多毛病特别是时态单三最重要的就是听力内容的细节及和文章的关系要弄明白
总的来说全文很流畅这个还是挺好的~~一定要保持住~~
听力还是要加强~~
我听这部分的听力的时候也是总丢点~~
一起努力吧~~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 20:37

6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.

When it comes to the question of doing things,people' opinions differ.Some prefer to take action immediately as soon as they face the challenge.While others like to consider carefully and thoroughly before they take any actions.Gernerally speaking,if people can think about every aspect of the challenge and make a plan about how to deal with it,it would be better.

Let us talk about the first benefit of being patient with one's work.If one use patience as a good strategy to deal with the problem s/he faces,it can shortcut the time s/he needs to solve it.When people suddenly confront with a new problem which is very diffifult to solve,they need time and energy to analyze it,to gather information about it,and sometimes they need to learn from other people' advices or experiences as well.After all of these preparation works have been done,they will have a clear plan about every step on how to solve the problem.Also,with enough time of consideration,they definitely have time to think about the difficulies they may face in their work,and draw up a plan on how to set them at rest.Therefore,people will solve the problem eaily and quickly.

Then,people really need patience to do some specific works.Patience means that one need to spend suffient time on the work they do,have the confidence to solve it,and to continue on whenever they confront with setbacks or they may feel depressed when they fail sometime.As we all know,studying is really a boring process,and it lasts so long,from primary school,middle school,then fianlly into university,if one has no patience,s/he can hardly finish the learning process.

In addition,patience is a factor to become grow-up.Adults are more tactful than young people,they are usually more patient before they do something than young people do.Years of experiences give them the wisdom to consider thoroughly before they make any decisions.The one who always takes action is thought to be not wisdom engough.If one start to do something s/he know little about it,most of the time s/he will fail.Not only s/he lacks the knowledge of it,but also s/he need to learn that s/he need patience to spend enough time to understand the priciples in the field s/he meets with.

Of course,the opportunity will escape if you do not seize it.However,one thing that everyone need to pay attention to is that,before you grasp it,you need to ensure you can succeed.Otherwise,the damage it brings to you would far outweith the advantage you get.Thus,people need patience as a kind of good strategy.

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/20 21:51:39)

标红为单词拼写错误

When it comes to the question of doing things,people' opinions ~~differ.~~这个词是动词啊~~不对啊~~Some prefer to take action immediately as soon as they face the challenge要复数哦~~不能所有人面对的都是一个问题啊~~.While others like to consider carefully and thoroughly before they take any actions. Gernerally speaking,if people can think about every aspect of the challenge and make a plan about how to deal with it,it不要把两个it放在一起，给人的感觉太不明确了啊~~ would be better.

Let us talk about the first benefit of being patient with one's work.If one use patience as a good strategy to deal with the problem s/he faces,it can shortcut the time s/he needs to solve it.When people suddenly confront with a new problem which is very diffifult to solve,they need time前面家a或者复数 and energy to analyze it,to gather information about it,and sometimes they need to learn from other people' advices or experiences as well.After all of these preparation works have been done,they will have a clear plan 还是那个问题~~那么多人就一个plan？about every step on how to solve the problem.Also,with enough time of consideration,they definitely have time to think about the difficulies they may face in their work,and draw up a plan on how to set them at rest.Therefore,people will solve the problem eaily and quickly.注意：标点符号后面打空格，然后再写下一个单词~~

例子举得很好，但是呢~~你可以说，我遇到了这么一个问题，然后我是怎么解决的，把例子套在自己身上，具体化~~这样我觉得更好啊~~对不~~

Then,people really need patience to do some specific works.Patience means that one need to spend suffient time on the work they do,have the confidence to solve it,and to continue on whenever they confront with setbacks or they may feel depressed when they fail sometime.As we all know,studying is really a boring process,and it lasts so long,from primary school,middle school,then fianlly into university, if one has no patience,s/he can hardly finish the learning process.

这个观点感觉不是很好啊~~有点跟第一点重复了~~我一时间也想不到什么好的idea~~

In addition,patience is a factor to become grow-up要说帮助青少年长大，而不是有了p就能长大，要注意说的动词啊~~.Adults are more tactful than young ~~people有点中式英语，~~可以说说youngster,they are usually more patient before they do something than young people do.Years of experiences give them the wisdom to consider thoroughly before they make any decisions.The one who always takes action is thought to be not wisdom engough.If one start单三形式 to do something s/he know little about it,most of the time s/he will fail.Not only s/he lacks the knowledge of it这个只代不明确,but also s/he need to learn that s/he need patience to spend enough time to understand the priciples in the field s/he meets with.

Of course,the opportunity will escape if you do not seize it.However,one thing that everyone need单三形式 to pay attention to is that,before you grasp it,you need to ensure you can succeed.Otherwise,the damage it brings to you would far outweith the advantage you get.Thus,people need patience as a kind of good strategy.
一定要注意拼写啊~~这个很扣分的呀~~
总的来说文章不错~~但是要注意句子之间要空格哦~~用word查一下就明白了~~如果不空格是错误的哦~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-21 22:54
6月21日110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help?

When I was in middle shcool a couple years ago,my classmates often called me "bookworm".In fact,books are the most interesting things I have ever seen,I love reading books,love soving problems in the practices.Also,when I had some schoolwork which I could not deal with it by myself,I usually choosed to ask my teachers for help.At first,my classmates were willing to talk the questions we confronted with,but the result was not so satisfying.When we got together,most of the time we could not concentrate on the quesions,and our knowledge was not sufficient enough to work out all the problems,things gone even worse if my classmates did not know the answer,but they just gave me a wrong solution.Thus,I would recommend my classmates find a professional tutor when they need help for their schoolwork.

Let us talk about one of the disadvantages if we ask our classmates for help.What will you most likely do when you have time with your classmates?Doing schoolwork? It is so boring!And we have enough time to cope with it tomorrow,now let us play football with the school team,they are training only at this time of the week.Or they would say,"I have learn a new skill about street dance,let me show you,it is really cool".Then most of the time,you just focus on unralated things,instead of paying your attention to solve the problems.While,if you ask a professional tutor,s/he would not give you the chance to talk about other things.You can solve your problem very quickly without disturbance.

Then,another weakpoint to ask your classmates is that you can not solve some really difficult schoolwork.Whether they are primary students,middle school students,or studying in university,their knowledge is limited.Thus,when some quesions in the schoolwork require related knowledge beyond their level,the answer cannot be gained without the help of a professional tutor.As you can see,a professional tutor's help is necessary and at the same time can save your time if you directly ask s/he instead of your classmates who cannot give you all the answers you need.

Things would make you furstrate if your classmates give you the wrong answer.I still rember one solution which my classmate gave when I asked him about a very difficult mathematical question.According to his solution,I could work out it and got the right answer,so,I just did the same process as he told me when we took a test.But,the process of his solution was indeed incorrect and completely based on inverse method.Therefore,my score was very low in that test.If I had the opportunity to opt again,I would definetely choose to ask the professional tutors.Their experiences give them the wisdom to solve the quesion properly.

Of course,some students feel strained when they ask a professinal tutor because of the age difference.Meanwhile,some specific professional tutors will charge you for their service.However,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the disadvantages of asking classmates ar so many and unacceptable,to ask for help from professional tutor is a better choice.

作者: yangyangyu 时间: 2012-6-22 09:30
6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.

When it comes to the question of doing things,people' opinions differ.Some prefer to take action immediately as soon as they face the challenge.While others like to consider carefully and thoroughly before they take any actions.Gernerally speaking,if people can think about every aspect of the challenge and make a plan about how to deal with it,it would be better.

Let us talk about the first benefit of being patient with one's work.If one use patience as a good strategy to deal with the problem s/he faces,it can shortcut the time s/he needs to solve it.When people suddenly confront with a new problem which is very diffifult to solve,they need time and energy to analyze it,to gather information about it,and sometimes they need to learn from other people' advices or experiences as well.After all of these preparation works have been done,they will have a clear plan about every step on how to solve the problem.Also,with enough time of consideration,they definitely have time to think about the difficulies they may face in their work,and draw up a plan on how to set them at rest.Therefore,people will solve the problem eaily and quickly.

Then,people really need patience to do some specific works.Patience means that one need to spend suffient time on the work they do,have the confidence to solve it,and to continue on whenever they confront with setbacks or they may feel depressed when they fail sometime.As we all know,studying is really a boring process,and it lasts so long,from primary school,middle school,then fianlly into university,if one has no patience,s/he can hardly finish the learning process. 这一点差不多算是第一点的具体化吧~（second benefit?!)

In addition,patience is a factor to become grow-up.（这里读着感觉有点奇怪呢, patience 是being mature的一个反映?!) Adults are more tactful than young people,they are usually more patient before they do something than young people do.Years of experiences give them the wisdom to consider thoroughly before they make any decisions.The one who always takes action is thought to be not wisdom(wise) engough.If one start to do something s/he know little about it,most of the time s/he will fail.Not only s/he lacks the knowledge of it,but also s/he need to learn that s/he need patience to spend enough time to understand the priciples in the field s/he meets with. (这点举个例子会不会好一点）

Of course,the opportunity will escape if you do not seize it.However,one thing that everyone need to pay attention to is that,before you grasp it,you need to ensure you can succeed.Otherwise,the damage it brings to you would far outweith the advantage you get.Thus,people need patience as a kind of good strategy.

小结:
就像之前说的哦，感觉ban ban 句子顺了很多~不错哇~撒花~
问题: 还是拼写~一定要小心小心啊~ 写完了要记得检查啊~
有关这个话题:
the first benefit之后,你后边文章没有其他的 second, third benefit了哇? 第二段有点第一段的延续，第三段就说的是patience 是 grown-ups 一个象征,最好可以多拿出点观点证明是benefits 而不是 benefit啦. (adults那段还可以细化一点,说patience到底是怎样让adults成功,而impatient如何不成熟了)..

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-22 17:10
TPO 5 综合

The reading talks about the use of the Chaco structures,and gives reader three possible theories about it.While,the professor says that none of the arguments in the passage are convinceable.

First,the reading says that the Chaco structures could be used for residential purpose.However,the professor states that,their outside indeed look like some later buildings for residential,but their inside cast serious doubt on this theory.If the Chaco structures are purely residential,there must be enough fire places for residents' daily cooking.But the fact is that even the largest building of this type has only a few fire places,which could only support around ten families.While the building's rooms are large and so many that they can support hundurd of families.So,the Chaco strtuctures cannot be used for residential.

Then, the second theory in the reading is that the Chaco structures were used to store grains maize.On the contrary,the professor argures that,the size of these buildings are plausible for storing food.But the excavation has found not spoiled grain maize or large containers,if the buildings are truely used for storing,why there no these things which are essential indacators for food supply?

In the end,it proposes that these houses were used for ceremony.While,the professor explains that,although the excavations found a huge number of broken pots,they also found other materials-sand,stones,contruction materials,even tools.It seems as trash piles rather than ceremonial center.Furthermore,the pots are more likely to be thrown by the contruction workers after they ate their meals.Thus,the third theory is not sound enough.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-22 22:13
TPO 5 综合

The reading talks about the use of the Chaco structures,and gives reader three possible theories about it.While,the professor says that none of the arguments in the passage are convinceable.

First,the reading says that the Chaco structures could be used for residential purpose.However,the professor states that,their outside indeed looks like some later buildings for residential,but their inside casts serious doubt on this theory.If the Chaco structures are purely residential,there must be enough fire places for residents' daily cooking.But the fact is that even the largest building of this type has only a few fire places,which could only support around ten families.While the building's rooms are large and so many that they can support hundurd of families.So,the Chaco strtuctures cannot be used for residential.

Then, the second theory in the reading is that the Chaco structures were used to store grains,such as maize.On the contrary,the professor argures that,the size of these buildings are plausible for storing food.But the excavation has not found ~~not~~ spoiled grain maize or large containers,if the buildings are truely used for storing,why there are no these things which are essential indacators for food supply?

In the end,it proposes that these houses were used for ceremony.While,the professor explains that,although the excavations found a huge number of broken pots,they also found other materials-sand,stones,contruction materials,and even tools.It seems as trash piles rather than ceremonial center.Furthermore,the pots are more likely to be thrown by the contruction workers after they ate their meals.Thus,the third theory is not sound enough.

注意小错误其他都很好啦

作者: zombiee 时间: 2012-6-22 22:27

6月21日110815NA One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help?

When I was in middle shcool a couple years ago,my classmates often called me "bookworm".In fact,books are the most interesting things I have ever seen,+and I love reading books,~~love~~ soving problems in the practices ect.Also,when I had some schoolwork which I could not deal with it by myself,I usually choosed to ask my teachers for help.At first,my classmates were willing to talk+about the questions we confronted ~~with~~,but the result was not so satisfying.+Because When we got together,most of the time we could not concentrate on the quesions,and our knowledge was not sufficient enough to work out all the problems,这句太长了没有用连词，连着用逗号，后面也有同样的问题things gone even worse if my classmates did not know the answer,but意思没有转折 they just gave me a wrong solution.Thus,I would recommend my classmates find a professional tutor when they need help for their schoolwork.

Let us talk about one of the disadvantages if we ask our classmates for help.What will you most likely do when you have time with your classmates?这个说法不地道Do~~ing~~ schoolwork? It is so boring!And we have enough time to cope with it tomorrow,now let us play football with the school team,they are training only at this time of the week.Or they would say,"I have learn a new skill about street dance,let me show you,it is really cool".Then most of the time,you just focus on unralated things,instead of paying your attention to solve the problems.While,if you ask a professional tutor,s/he would not give you the chance to talk about other things.You can solve your problem very quickly without disturbance.

Then,another weakpoint to ask your classmates is that you can not solve some really difficult schoolwork.Whether they are primary students,middle school students,or studying in university,their knowledge is limited.Thus,when some quesions in the schoolwork require related knowledge beyond their level,the answer cannot be gained without the help of a professional tutor.As you can see,a professional tutor's help is necessary and at the same time can save your time if you directly ask s/he instead of your classmates who cannot give you all the answers you need.

Things would make you furstrate if your classmates give you the wrong answer.I still rember one solution which my classmate gave when I asked him about a very difficult mathematical question.According to his solution,I could work out it and got the right answer,so,I just did the same process as he told me when we took a test.But,the process of his solution was indeed incorrect and completely based on inverse method.Therefore,my score was very low in that test.If I had the opportunity to opt again,I would definetely choose to ask the professional tutors.Their experiences give them the wisdom to solve the quesion properly.

Of course,some students feel strained when they ask a professinal tutor because of the age difference.Meanwhile,some specific professional tutors will charge you for their service.However,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the disadvantages of asking classmates ar so many and unacceptable,to ask for help from professional tutor is a better choice.

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/21 22:54:47)

总体不错，表述清楚，细节需细化深入，用词更上一个level比较好
如果是限时写出来的，可以自己先修改一下看起来应该更好。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-22 23:00
6月22日100619 NA If you need to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others, you will use e-mail or text messaging, OR use the telephone or voice-messaging.

When it comes to the question of how to discuss upsetting or controversial problems with others,people' choices diversified. Some people prefer to use telephone of voice-messaging method because of their convenience and instant,while others would like to use e-mail or text messaging to reveal their congitation and preciseness. Generally speaking,upsetting or controversial problems often relate to serious topics,therefore,using e-mail or text messaging is a better choice to deal with this type of problems.

Comapred to speaking,writing gives people more time to do researches,to think deeply and thus can better explain their ideas. When confronting with upsetting or controversial problems,people need more time to cope with it,Writing e-mail or text massaging thus are the proper to solve this type of problems.On the contrary,using telephone or voice-messaging would cause more questions because of misunderstandings. Once our teachers gave us an assignments for us to talk after class,the topic was whether money and power are the symbol of success.And we began immediately when the class was over.However,none of us could make others to admit that they were wirte becasue the topic was so controversial.And we did not have enough time to think about it. Then,our teacher told us to write about the same topic,and arrange the articles next week.Things became so much better next week when we brought our writtings to the classroom and read them.Thus,when confronting with some problematic questions,it would be better to use writting such as e-mail or text messaging to express you ideas.

Then,e-mail or text messaging can avoid some disadvantages that rised from telephone or voice messaging.People tend to behave more emotional when they use telephone or voice messaging than writting. Their daily communicatin with others is speaking,so they adapted to this type of way to express their thinking and emotions.When using audio methods to express themselves,they will inevitablely band their emotions in their expression. When peope write something,they are more fair and cool-headed. So,when discussing upsetting or controversial problems,writting is a way to avoid personal prejudice in some degree.

Writting is also easy to arrange after the discussion end. The process of discussion is important,as well as the conlusion of it. Ever from the character has been created,huamn began to use them to rember things,to show their thought,and to communicate wiht others.Most of the materials used in modern classes ralate to writting,so,people are familiar paper based materials and have many ways to process the information of them.Furthermore,writting is explicit and abstract,therefore,it is easy to organize.

Of course,speaking is simultaneous and people can use them whenever they have some good ideas about the problems.However,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the benefits of e-mail or text messaging are so many,so,using writting is a thoughtful choice.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-23 11:17
TPO6 综合
The lecturer talks about the incorrect theories of on-line encyclopedias made in the reading.She says that on-line encyclopedias does have many advantages and methods to treat the problems it confront.

First,the professor points out that errors exsist both in on-line and traditional encyclopedias,none of them could be perfect.While the advantage of on-line encycolpedias is that it can be corrected more easily compared to traditonal one.The mistakes in traditional encyclopedias may last for hundreds of years without change.This is the first advantage of on-line encyclopedias.

Second,many methods can be used to protect the information in on-line encyclopedias.The crucial parts of it can only be read,then,the hackers or vandals can not change it.Moreover,there are special editors who monitor any changes of it,so,some unnecessary changes can be avoid,then,the information of it can be protected.This directly contradicts what the passage states.

Third,the space of on-line encyclopedias is unlimited,thus it can include verious sources from a great range of subjects.While the space of the traditional encyclopedias is not enough to contain every aspects they need to make the information accurate and complete.However,the on-line encyclopedias have the benefits to have adequate space to include audio,visional,and other types of information.As you can see,the advantage of on-line encyclopedias is so obvious.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-23 11:53
TPO7 综合
In the reading,the author says that the companies in the United States would not pay much attention to wood certifications. While,the professor in the lectue points out several reasons that they are most likely to adopt this practices in the end.

First,the professor talks about the consumers in the United States do pay attention to the advertisments,and they usually distingish the companies and the indenpended agency when they wacch TV. And,they are willing to trust the indepedended agency with international reputation.This is directly contradicts what is said in the reading.

Second,the price difference between these two products is less than 5%. Consumers in the states will consider the prices only when the difference is so big,in this situation,they would more like to choose the ecocertfied ones in order to protect the enviorment and to enjoy a high quality. So,the price is not a problem relates to the companies to earn ecocertification.

Third,the companies would complete interest in this practise not because of the comsumers in the states,but arise from the competeness of the foreign companies. If the companies in the states do not have this ecocertification as foreign companies,they certainly will loose advantage in the home market. Then,foreign companies will corowd into the states.So,even the products are not used to sale abroad,the companies in the states still forced to get the ecocertification in order to compete with foreign counterparts.

作者: DanielleZ 时间: 2012-6-23 16:04
6.22 修改完了，这篇里面拼写的小错误很多，可能是因为限制时间的原因吧。
也学了不少有用的句子和词，嘿嘿~加油哦~
When it comes to the question of how to discussupsetting or controversial problems with others, people' choices diversified.(我记得之前修改过的一篇banban也是用这句话开头的，很好用的一句话哦~)Some people prefer to use telephone of voice-messagingmethod because of their convenience and instant, while others would like to usee-mail or text messaging to reveal their cogitation and preciseness. Generallyspeaking, upsetting or controversial problems often relate to serious topics, therefore,using e-mail or text messaging is a better choice to deal with this type ofproblems.

Comapred to（with） speaking, writing gives people more time to doresearches, to think deeply and thus can better explain their ideas. Whenconfronting with upsetting or controversial problems, people need more time to cope with it, writinge-mail or text massaging thus are the proper to solve this type of problems. Onthe contrary, using telephone or voice-messaging would cause more questionsbecause of misunderstandings(用的很好，因为我写的时候完全不记得这个词了). Once our teachers gave us an assignments ~~for us~~ (重复)to talk about(talk后面要加介词) after class, the topic was whether money andpower are the symbol of success. And we began immediately when the class wasover. However, none of us could make (persuade可以替换) others to admit that they werewirte(the standpoints that they held by just talking with them，感觉想表达的是这个意思，但是banban写的时候不是很清楚，我尝试提供了一个另外的写法)becasue the topic was so controversial. And we did not have enough time tothink about it. Then, our teacher told us to write about the same topic, andarrange the articles next week. Things became so much better nextweek when we brought our writings to the classroom and read them. Thus, whenconfronting with some problematic questions, it would be better to use writingsuch as e-mail or text messaging to express you ideas.

Then, e-mail or text messaging can avoid somedisadvantages that raised from telephone or voice messaging. People tend to behavemore emotional when they use telephone or voice messaging than writing. Theirdaily communication with others is speaking, so they adapted(adapt) to this type of way to express their thinking andemotions. When using audio methods to express themselves, they will inevitablyband their emotions in their expression. When people write something, they aremore fair and cool-headed. So, when discussing upsetting or controversialproblems, writing is a way to avoid personal prejudice in some degree.

Writing is also easy to arrange after thediscussion ending. The process of discussion is important, aswell as the conclusion of it. Ever from the character has been created, humanbegan to use them to remember things, to show their thought, and to communicatewith others. Most of the materials used in modern classes ralate towritting, so people are familiar with paperbased materials and have many ways to process the information of them. Furthermore,writtingis explicit and abstract(抽象的？banban是想说简洁的意思么？concise可以), therefore, it is easy to organize.

Of course, speaking is simultaneous and people can use themwhenever they have some good ideas about the problems. However, from what hasbeen discussed above, we may safely draw the conclusion that the benefits ofe-mail or text messaging are so many, so, using writting is a thoughtful choice.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-23 22:42
TPO6 综合
The lecturer talks about the incorrect theories of on-line encyclopedias made in the reading.She says that on-line encyclopedias does have many advantages and methods to treat the problems it confronts.

First,the professor points out that errors exsist both in on-line and traditional encyclopedias,none of them could be perfect.While the advantage of on-line encycolpedias is that it can be corrected more easily compared to traditonal one.The mistakes in traditional encyclopedias may last for hundreds of years without change.This is the first advantage of on-line encyclopedias.

Second,many methods can be used to protect the information in on-line encyclopedias.The crucial parts of it can only be read,read only format 用一下出现在听力里的词组吧then,the hackers or vandals can not change it.Moreover,there are special editors who monitor any changes of it,so,some unnecessary changes can be avoid to eliminate unbelievable changes没有听到啊,then,the information of it can be protected.This directly contradicts what the passage states.

Third,the space of on-line encyclopedias is unlimited,thus it can include verious sources from a great range of subjects.While the space of the traditional encyclopedias is not enough to contain every aspects they指代的是谁啊need to make the information accurate and complete.对space的讨论可以吧online traditional 合到一起表述简洁一些However,the on-line encyclopedias have the benefits to have adequate space to include audio,visional,and other types of information.As you can see,the advantage of on-line encyclopedias is so obvious. 有些信息没听到 reflect the interests of users

逻辑是很清楚的个别句子可以简练些但是听力有些没有听到啊加强练习哦

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-23 23:29
6月23日101030NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.

Society keeps changing and so are the capacities requierd to achieve education.The development of human being and technology give modern people so many advantages to get educated than in the past. Computors and Internet make the communication around the world easier and more rapid. With the help of them,people have the ability to know what happened in the world immediately,at the same time they can exchange their ideas about these events to improve knowledge even can correct their wrong opinions on some events.Therefore,it is no doubt that people are now easier to become educated than in the past.

Considering the advent of communication technology,people nowadays are easier to get information from various ways to become educated.You only need to click on one button of your computors or cell phones when you have some problems or want to know about some specific knowledge.The information on-line provided is up-to-date,easy to access,and widely available to the public. While,hundreds of years ago,these technologies were quite unimaginable. Thus,the technologies give modern people the advantage to achieve information more convenient and complete.

Educatin nowadays becomes more focus on international exchange and informatin sharing,this give modern people the opportunity to choose the subject what they interest in and love to continue on throughout their life. The present day transportation system is fast and safe,people only need to spend several hours on traveling to every part of the world to acheve education. Furthermore,modern education becomes equally focus on demestic and global events,so the citzens now have a much broader vision on the issues beyond the national boundaries than ancient people did.Therefore,modern people have so many ways to get educated,at the same time they have the opportunity to go to the place they can be educated.

The development of human being give all the members of modern society the freedom to achieve equal rights to become educated. Everyone in modern society have the right to get educated,and the goverment is reqired to protect this right,to ensure children can accept the education. While in the past,so many people could not go to school simplely because of their social status or economic condition. Meanwhile,the schools in the past were not so many and formal. Their teaching condition,
education status and effcts were behind modern counterparts. As you can see,all social class nowadays can receive an high quality education. While in the past,it was difficult for many people to become educated.

Of course,ancient people indeed had less knowledge to learn,so that they could be more focus on their subject. However,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that modren people become educated earier than ancient people.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-24 08:04
TPO7 综合
In the reading,the author says that the companies in the United States would not pay much attention to wood certifications. While,the professor in the lectue points out several reasons that they are most likely to adopt this practices 一定要注意这个单复数问题啊·~in the end.

First,the professor talks about the consumers in the United States do pay attention to the advertisments,and they usually distingish单词拼写！ the companies and the indenpended agency when they wacch拼写 TV（后半句我觉得应该加强，这点是听力反驳的重要内容，用个however也行~~）. And,they are willing to trust the indepedended agency with international reputation.Thisisdirectly contradicts what is said in the reading.

Second,the price difference between these two products is less than 5%. Consumers in the states will consider the prices only when the difference is so big,in this situation,they would more like to choose the ecocertfied ones in order to protect the enviorment and to enjoy a high quality环境和质量是除了价格以外看中的地方，写成关心其他，例如保护环境和高质量，这样更加全面，是不~~. So,the price is not a problem relates to the companies to earn ecocertification.
这个顺序说的不对，听力说人们确实在乎价格，但是如果两个价差在5%以内，那他们就看中别的方面而不是价格了·~你的第一句话不应该以5%作为观点，建议把首句的观点句改一下
Third,the companies would complete interest in 应该是be interented in this practise拼写 not because of the comsumers in the states,but arise from the competeness拼写 of the foreign companies（not only，butalso这个短语后面接的应该是平衡成分，你接的不是哦~~(*^__^*) 嘻嘻……）. If the companies in the states do not have this ecocertification as foreign companies,they certainly will loose拼写啦··loose是松了~~要lose哈哈~~ advantages 要复数~~in the home market. Then,foreign companies will corowd into 啥意思？没看懂哦~~是说他们就涌进了市场么？the states.So,even the products are not used to sale abroad,the companies in the states still forced to get the ecocertification in order to compete with foreign counterparts.
写的不错，还是要多注意拼写啦单复数啦等等
还有就是一定要听到点子上例如第二点 5%是个小细节，他主要说的是人们不仅关心价钱还关心别的~而5%是他们的一个类似“心理价”的东东，这个不能作为一个反驳的观点，只是一个小细节~~
加油~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-24 12:35
xiaoA姐你改的好仔细，多谢了！

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-24 14:02
TPO 8 综合

The reading talks about the critics who cast doubt on the accuracy of the memoir wrote by Chevalier.While the professor in the lecture explains that none of their opinions are correct,the memoir is indeed a realiable historical material.

First,the professor claims that the loan did not mean that Chevalier were poor,because he needed cash when he spent money on parties and gambling in Switzerland.So,he had to convert his property in to cash before he could use them.This process would cost him several days,during which he would borrow some money for using. Thus,the assumption in the reading is unfounded.

Second,the professor points out that Chevalier wrote down everything he could remember immediately after he talked with Voltaire. And his neighbors said that he often consulted notes and journals when he wrote his memoir. So this is a good answer to explain the doubt cast in the reading passage.

Third,the government record revealed that after Chevalier's escape,the room once he stayed were repaired. This could be an evidence that Chevalier really escaped through a hole in the jail.Furthermore,the professor argues that there were other criminals who were more powerful than Chevalier,but they had no opportunities to brible the jailers.Thus,the last doubt is toppled over.

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-24 19:34
TPO 3 综合

The reading passage offers three evidences that one painting thought to be Rembrandt's is not painted by him.( suggessing that one painting was thought not be painted by Rembrandt)However,the professor in the lecture convinces that the picture(portrait) is indeed Rembrandit's.

First,the author in the reading says that the inconsistency of the clothes in the painting is one evidence that the paniting is not painted by Rembrandt.While,the professor explains that the ~~dark~~(没有提到collar的颜色吧) fur collar is not original,it was added to the painting to improve its value one hundred years after the picture was painted.The original painting was consistent as Rembrandt's other paintings.

The second reason the reading provided is the light on the women's face.Then,the professor states that,the dark fur collar is not original on the painting,after the fur collar is removed,it can be seen that the women was wearing a bright (light-colored浅色的) clothes which can illuminated the face of the women by reflecting the sunlight.Thus,the light and shdow in this painting fit together.

In the end,the reading points out that the wood planet ~~painting~~was glued together with several pieces of wood.On the contrary,the professor argues that,the part which were added to the painting was not the original wood that Rembrandt used to make the painting.After other parts was removed,people could find the painting was painted on only one wood.Furthermore,the professor says that another self-portrait of Rembrandt with a hat was made of wood from the very same tree as the women's painting.Therefore,the painting was indeed painted by Rembrandt.

写得很不错，有些不太确定的地方建议模糊带过，但是很确定的地方，像阅读部分，一定要describe清楚。

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-25 06:29
TPO 8 综合

The reading talks about the critics ~~who~~ which iscast doubt on the accuracy of the memoir wrote by Chevalier.While the professor in the lecture explains that none of their opinions are correct,the memoir is indeed a realiable historical material.

First,the professor claims that the loan did not mean that Chevalier were was poor,because he needed cash when he spent money on parties and gambling in Switzerland.So,he had to convert his property in to cash before he could use them.This process would cost him several days,during which he would borrow 应该再加一句对这种borrow的解释说明他不穷some money for using. Thus,the assumption in the reading is unfounded.

Second,the professor points out that Chevalier wrote down everything he could remember immediately after he talked with Voltaire. And his neighbors said that he often consulted notes and journals when he wrote his memoir. So this is a good answer to explain the doubt cast in the reading passage.witenss who lives with Chevalier comfirmed...细节没听到

Third,the government prison? record revealed that after Chevalier's escape,the room once he stayed were repaired.the celling was repaired This could be an evidence that Chevalier really escaped through a hole in the jail.Furthermore,the professor argues that there were other criminals who who have more powerful friends were more powerful than Chevalier,but they had no opportunities to brible bribe the jailers.Thus,the last doubt is toppled over.

总体没有问题啦就是听力的细节还是不够足啊

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-25 08:53

6月23日101030NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.

Society keeps changing and so are the capacities requierd to achieve education.The development of human being and technology give modern people so many advantages to get educated than in the past. Computors and Internet make the communication around the world easier and more rapid. With the help of them,people have the ability to know what happened in the world immediately,at the same time they can exchange their ideas about these events to improve knowledge even can correct their wrong opinions on some events.Therefore,it is no doubt that people are now easier to become educated than in the past.

Considering the advent of communication technology,people nowadays are easier to get information from various ways to become educated.You only need to click on one button of your computors or cell phones when you have some problems or want to know about some specific knowledge.The information on-line provided is up-to-date,easy to access,and widely available to the public. While,hundreds of years ago,these technologies were quite unimaginable. Thus,the technologies give modern people the advantage to achieve information more convenient and complete.

Educatin nowadays becomes more focus on international exchange and informatin sharing,this give modern people the opportunity to choose the subject what they interest in and love to continue on throughout their life. The present day transportation system is fast and safe,people only need to spend several hours on traveling to every part of the world to acheve education. Furthermore,modern education becomes equally focus on demestic and global events,so the citzens now have a much broader vision on the issues beyond the national boundaries than ancient people did.Therefore,modern people have so many ways to get educated,at the same time they have the opportunity to go to the place they can be educated.

The development of human being give all the members of modern society the freedom to achieve equal rights to become educated. Everyone in modern society have the right to get educated,and the goverment is reqired to protect this right,to ensure children can accept the education. While in the past,so many people could not go to school simplely because of their social status or economic condition. Meanwhile,the schools in the past were not so many and formal. Their teaching condition,
education status and effcts were behind modern counterparts. As you can see,all social class nowadays can receive an high quality education. While in the past,it was difficult for many people to become educated.

Of course,ancient people indeed had less knowledge to learn,so that they could be more focus on their subject. However,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that modren people become educated earier than ancient people.

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/23 23:29:25)

Society keeps changing and so are the capacities requierd拼写to achieve education.The development of human being and technology加定冠词或复数give modern people so many advantages to get educated than in the past. Computors 拼写and Internet make the communication around the world easier and more rapidly用副词. With the help of them,people have the ability to know what happened用现在进行时比较好哦~~what is happening in the world immediately,at the same time they can exchange their ideas about these 这个指代不明确啊~~具体说说，如human life， global warming等等events to improve knowledge没有连词，但是有连个动词，此处加and even can correct their wrong opinions on some events.Therefore,it is no doubt that people are now easier to become educated than in the past.还是没有注意一点，英文的格式问题：句子之间，空格，再接下句~~

Considering the advent of communication technology,people nowadays are easier to get information from various ways to become educated，这个用个非定型定从比较好哦，which could allow them to accept more education .You only need to click on one button of your computors拼写 or cell phones when you have some problems or want to know about some specific knowledge.The information on-line provided is up-to-date 这也加个副词吧~~例如frequently，跟后面正好对应·嘻嘻,easy to access,and widely available to the public. While,hundreds of years ~~ago~~ before,these technologies were quite unimaginable. Thus,the technologies give modern people the advantage to achieve information more convenient and complete.

Educatin拼写 nowadays becomes more focus on international exchange and informatin拼写 sharing,this give modern people the opportunity to choose the subject what they are interested in and love to continue 这个词有及物动词，不加后面的东东就好了on throughout their life. The present day transportation system is fast and safe,people only need to spend several hours on traveling to every part of the world to acheve education. Furthermore,modern education becomes equally focus on demestic拼写 and global events,so the citzens拼写 now have a much broader vision on the issues beyond the national boundaries than ancient people did.Therefore,modern people have so many ways to get educated,at the same time they have the opportunity to go to the place they can be educated.感觉第一句和第二句不连贯，中间应该说哎呀这个教育很方便啦，例如国外有很多famous学校啦，交通方便了，我可以灰过去啦~~中间有个过渡，不然第二句的交通工具有点突然。

The development of human being give all the members of modern society the freedom to achieve equal rights to become educated. Everyone in modern society have the right to get educated,and the goverment is reqired拼写 to protect this right,to ensure children can accept the education. While in the past,so many people could not go to school simplely 拼写because of their social status or economic condition. Meanwhile,the schools in the past were not so many and formal这句太中式啦~~例如the numbers of school are increasing greatly and more and more schools are formally than before. Their teaching condition,
education status and effcts拼写 were behind modern counterparts. As you can see,all social class nowadays can receive an high quality education. While in the past,it was difficult for many people to become educated.一直都用前后对比，很不错哦~~

Of course,ancient people古代人？？？这个太古老啦~~不好啦~~直接就到元谋人了呢~~ indeed had less knowledge to learn,so that they could be more focus on their subject. However,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that modren拼写 people become educated earier 拼写than ancient people.
写的不错啦~~加油~~继续努力哈~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-25 11:15
6月24日110108 ML Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food in the past was much healthier than today.

When it comes to the question of whether food in the past was much healthier than today,different people do not hold the same opinion.Some of them believe that food in the past was much healthier,based on the enviorment had less polution than today.While others think that due to the development of technologies,human nowadays have a broader range of selection for food,the ways that people treat food are also changing,so,present food is healthier.Generally speaking,the health condition today is better than in the past,it is another indication that food today is healthier.

First,the selectin of food is various in modern society. When people go to supermarket,they can find almost every food resources avialable in the world. Today's transportation system and the air-conditation technologies make it possible to convey food for long distance and at the same time ensure its quality. While in the past,the fresh fruit could only be stored for several days before it became putrid. Also,some food were not suitable for long distance transportation in the past.Thus,ancient people relyed on limit kinds of food,the nurtient these food provided could not compared to today's high quality food.

Then,people nowadys have many ways to cook food,to ensure the food is healthy to eat. New technologies lead to the inventions of oven,pressure cooker,induction cooker,etc;all these facilities can be used to sterilization. New instruments which detect the content of the food can help people find hazardous substances in the food,thus people will not feed on it to avoid possible diseases. However,people in the past did not have these technologies or instrucments,so that they might catch some diseases simplely becasue lack of knowledge about some food resources.

Finally,compared to the production process,such as how to choose the seeds,where to plant these cprops,to the past,modern agriculture have many advantages. When choosing the seeds with high quality,medern technoligies give the experts the convenience to ensure this purpose. Also,the irragition system contributes to the healthy growth of the crops. Meanwhile,new methods for cultivating crops like hydroponics are used in large commercial greenhouses,to produce food at any seasons of the year. New breeding technique,such as Space-breeding and hybridization,help technicists create new crops which can produce foodstuffs rich in certain particular nurtient or vitamin. While,people in the past did not have such advantages.

Of course,some people could argue that food in the past was more natural and contained less heavy metal element than today's. Almost everyone knows the polution in current situation is very severe. While,the exiting thing is that we realize this point,and are making effort to changing the situation with the lhelp of our science and technology. This is unlike people in the past,who might eat unhealthy food without notice because of their limited knowledge on this subject. Therefore,based on the discussion listed above,it is safe to say that food today is much healthier than in the past.

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-6-25 20:00
红色为错误高亮为精彩蓝色为句子建议绿色为段落逻辑建议

When it comes to the question of（of去掉，whether直接引同位语从句） whether food in the past was much healthier than today,different people do not hold the same opinion.（K是想出新么？意思是没有错，但是不地道，直接different people hold different opinion）Some of them believe that food in the past was much healthier,based on（句子结构错误，base on sth，后面要接句子的话要有引导词，+the fact） the enviorment (environment拼写错瓦)had less polution than today.While others think that due to the development of technologies,human nowadays have a broader range of selection for food,（两个句子之间缺少连词）the ways that people treat food are also changing,(想表达什么意思？感觉和后面的SO没有因果关系)so,present food is healthier.Generally speaking,the health condition today is better than in the past,it is another indication that food today is healthier.(这句表达的有点奇怪，已经是generally speaking,直接说出你自己的观点food today is healthier就可以了，another indication 感觉很奇怪。因为你之前讲的原因是站在其他人的观点上讲的，不是你自己的理由，不知道我这么说你有没有明白）

First,the selectin of food is various in modern society. When people go to supermarket,they can find almost every food resources avialable in the world. Today's transportation system and the air-conditation technologies （冷藏技术？查过么？air-condition是空调的意思），make it possible to convey food for long distance and at the same time ensure its quality. While in the past,the fresh fruit could only be stored for several days before it became putrid. Also,some food were not suitable for long distance transportation in the past.Thus,ancient people relyed on limit kinds of food,the nurtient these food provided could not compared to today's high quality food. （建议再第一句里就点出不同种类的食品为人们提供更全面的营养，不然整一段都是再讲食品的种类多了，但是与health无关，只在最后才点出有点晚了。）

Then,people nowadys have many ways to cook food,to ensure the food is healthy to eat. New technologies lead to the inventions of oven,pressure cooker,induction cooker,（+and）etc;all these facilities can be used to sterilization. New instruments which detect the content of the food can help people find hazardous substances in the food,thuspeople will not feed on it to avoid possible diseases（句子表达有点问题，瓜瓜说不上哪里有严格的错误，但是小K你自己念念试试，是不是有点奇怪？还有feed 一般是指动物吧。。好吧，人也算动物，但是一般都不用在人身上，用在家畜身上比较多，feed on是指以XXX为食，有点赖以生存的意思，但是这里你只是想表达不吃有毒食品，这个词真心不合适） .However,people in the past did not have these technologies or instrucments,so that they might catch some diseases simplely becasue lack of knowledge about some food resources.

Finally,compared to the production process,such as how to choose the seeds,where to plant these cprops,to the past,modern agriculture have many advantages. When choosing the seeds with high quality,medern technoligies give the experts the convenience to ensure this purpose. Also,the irragition system contributes to the healthy growth of the crops. Meanwhile,new methods for cultivating crops like hydroponics are used in large commercial greenhouses,to produce food at any seasons of the year. New breeding technique,such as Space-breeding and hybridization,help technicists create new crops which can produce foodstuffs rich in certain particular nurtient or vitamin. While,people in the past did not have such advantages.（里面讲到的hydroponics，好像只是讲到了提高了产量，和健康没有关系吧？）

Of course,some people could argue that food in the past was more natural and contained less heavy metal element than today's. （这个让步很漂亮）Almost everyone knows the polution in current situation is very severe. While,the exiting thing is that we realize this point,and are making effort to changing（change) the situation with the help of our science and technology. This is unlike (固定搭配it is unlikely that)people in the past,who might eat unhealthy food without notice because of their limited knowledge on this subject. Therefore,based on the discussion listed above,it is safe to say that food today is much healthier than in the past.

O(∩_∩)O~ 小K 初次见面多多指教了瓜瓜拖延症晚期，刚刚才写完昨天的，现在才来批不好意思╮(╯﹏╰）╭
瓜瓜批得有点严格，小K不要介意哦！

总评：语法错误有点多，一定要改，不要想着小的错误犯几个还能拿满分。
文章大体上的结构出来，总分总也对。但是逻辑上需要改进。适当的地方有例子要加进去，不然显得空洞。
一起加油！

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-26 11:42
6月25日101022NADo you agree or disagree with the following statement? The advice from grandparents has no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 5o years.

No one can deny the fact that society had changed a lot during the past fifty years. New technoligies such as the Interent,cell phone,robots and so many biological inventions,all of these have brought great changes to modern people. Also,evevyone would agree that both old people and young people can enjoy the benefits and convenice of these technologies. While,some aspects which youngsters do not have is that old people like our grandparents have years of experiences,and the wisdom to deal with difficulties in life,to face the misfortunes of evevy kind,most importantly,they know the methods to solve these problems. Thus,the above statament is not correct in some degree.

In the first place,some life experiences do not change even the society may alter dramaticly. Some social norms and custom keep unchange for several hundreds of years,not to mention only fifty years. All of the members of the society should conform to these social regulations to ensure the stablity of the society,despite the age difference of them. So,grandparents' advice on these things is indeed helpful for their grandchildren. Such as in my country,when people visit a Muslim's house,there are so many things that they should pay attention to,like not eat pork. If they do so,it will make the host unhappy,and the host would think you smirch their religion. So,old people' advice has its use on these things,and their grandchildren should listen to them to avoid making mistakes.

Then,children can learn lessons from the mistakes made by their grandparents,and hopefully can aviod making the same mistakes again. Old people had made so many mistake in their life,and some of the quesions might be encountered by their garandchildren. Thus,by realizing and learning from the mistakes of their grandparents,young children can develop quichly with less setback than all depend on their own efforts. Most of the children nowadays are required to go to schools to study,and they will meet some problems in their learning process. Then,their grandparents might confront the same problems fifty year ago. Becasue some of the basic knowledge are remian the same even the courses in the university may changed a lot because of the progresses of science and technology. Thus,grandparents advice on these problems is really useful for their grandchildren to make progresses quickly.

Finally,young children can have a different perspective of view on the difficulties they face,even their grandparents' advice may not seem useful for them to sovle the question. The develoopment of the society is a contiuneous process,so children need to learn how their grandparents' opinion on the same question in order to broaden their horizon. At the same time they can have a better understanding of their grandparents.

Of course,some advice may seem useless,such as grandparents' advice on the use of Inernet or on the knowledge on some specific areas which are developing so quickly. But,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the advice from our grandparents is useful even the society had changed a lot in the past fifty years.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-26 13:53
TPO 10

The reading text holds the point that the decline of sea otter is caused by chemical pollution. However, the professor in the lecture totally disagrees. In her opinion,the reason of the declining is the predator.

First,if the death of the sea otters is because of chemical pollution,then people could some dead sea otters. While,in fact,there are not dead sea otters can be seen. So,the professor points out that the predator explaination seems to be true in this situation,as the predators eat the sea otters so people can not find dead sea otters.

Second,the orca indeed more interest in large prey such as whales. But,the whales have been largely hunted by human. Thus,orca has to turn their attention to some small sea animals such as seals,sea lions,and sea otters,the ensure its survival.

Third,the professor says that the uneven distribution of the otter decline can be better explained by the predators. The pattern of otter decline is determined by whether the places are accessable to the orca or not. In the place where the orca can easily go,the number of the sea otters is greatly decreased. While in other places like the shallow or rocky location where the orca can not go because of its body,the sea otter has not declined. Therefore,the orca can better explain the uneven pattern of the otter decline.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-26 17:12
ban ban 没有写tpo9麽?
写好了告诉包子哈

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-26 17:13
TPO 9

The professor totally questioned the assertion made in the reading text. Actually,the professor believes that the author in the reading is too optimistic about the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine,and contends that hydrogen is not a solution to this problem.

First,hydrogen,as claimed by the professor,is not easy to access as the author says in the reading text. The fact is that even hydrogen is present in water,first it should be isolated before it can be used as fuel. The professor also emphasizes that hydrogen is difficult to store and should be keep in liquid state in order to use. Therefore,hydrogen is not easy to produce and store. Thus the assessment in the passage is no more than just imagination.

Second,the lecturer also points out that burning of hydrogen indeed bring no pollution to the environment,but the process to produce hydrogen need energy which comes from burning of coal or oil. Then,the process of producing hydrogen would pollute the atmosphere. The opinion in the reading text is weak and not practical at all.

Third,evidence shows that the material which used to produce the hydrogen engine is too expensive,the cheap material is so far to be accessable. The professor claims that using hydrogen engine is not cheap at all.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-26 22:09
6月26日100206 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.

Nowadays,many countries across the world undergo a great economic depression,such as the E.U area. lots of people are talking about the future trend of the world economy. One of the question retates to this discussion is whether high school students should be required to take a basic econimic course. Some people believe that high school students do not need such a course,they already have to many courses to study,and basic economics is uesless for them if they do not major in ecomics after they enter university. While ohters think that basci economics has a close link to everyday life,and when their children studying in college or after they get married,they need to have some knowledge about economics. Personally speaking,I agree with the statement that high school students should take this course.

Let us talk about the first benefit of taking a course on basic economics. By taking basic economics course,high school students could obtain the basic knowledge of the commercial aspect of life. As economics is about analyzing the production,distribution,and consumption of goods and services,which connect tightly to students' daily life. Then students could understand the role of some economic phenomena,such as the fluctuation of the price and deposit rate. Students will use these knowlege when they grow up. Thus,taking general economics course is good for students.

Another benefit is that students would interest in how to earn their own money and then learn how to budget their money properly if they take a course on economics. When students are at primary school and middle school,they are not old enough to do part-time jobs. While when they go to high school,they are old enough to take some work experiences in order to cultivate their indenpendence and also make them try to relieve the economic bardens on their parents partly.

Also,a general economic course could benefit high students on their study on other subjects. Economics is a complementation to natural science like math,chemistry,physics,etc. The methods used in economics are different with which used in natural,because the solution to a scientific problem may be only one,while the solutions to econimic question are various,according to the concrete situation. It is useful for high school students to know how to solve some problems about their daily supply and demand.

Of course,add new course to high school students will increase their load. Also,to carry it out means that the school need to hire new teachers and the increase of credit hours to students. However,from the benefits I listed above,it is safe to draw the conclutsion that it is necessary for high school students to take a basic economics course.

作者: zombiee 时间: 2012-6-26 22:15

6月25日101022NADo you agree or disagree with the following statement? The advice from grandparents has no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 5o years.

No one can deny the fact that society had changed a lot during the past fifty years. New technoligies such as the Interent,cell phone,robots and so many biological inventions,all of these have brought great changes to modern people. Also,evevyone would agree that both old people and young people can enjoy the benefits and convenice of these technologies. While,some aspects which youngsters do not have is that old people like our grandparents have years of experiences,and the wisdom to deal with difficulties in life,to face the misfortunes of evevy kind,most importantly,they know the methods to solve these problems. Thus,the above statament is not correct in some degree.

In the first place,some life experiences do not change even the society may alter dramaticly. Some social norms and custom keep unchange for several hundreds of years,not to mention only fifty years. All of the members of the society should conform to these social regulations to ensure the stablity of the society,despite the age difference of them. So,grandparents' advice on these things is indeed helpful for their grandchildren. Such as in my country,when people visit a Muslim's house,there are so many things that they should pay attention to,like not eat pork. If they do so,it will make the host unhappy,and the host would think you smirch their religion. So,old people' advice has its use on these things,and their grandchildren should listen to them to avoid making mistakes.

Then,children can learn lessons from the mistakes made by their grandparents,and hopefully can aviod making the same mistakes again. Old people had made so many mistake in their life,and some of the quesions might be encountered by their garandchildren. Thus,by realizing and learning from the mistakes of their grandparents,young children can develop quichly with less setback than all depend on their own efforts. Most of the children nowadays are required to go to schools to study,and they will meet some problems in their learning process. Then,their grandparents might confront the same problems fifty year ago. Becasue some of the basic knowledge are remian the same even the courses in the university may changed a lot because of the progresses of science and technology. Thus,grandparents advice on these problems is really useful for their grandchildren to make progresses quickly.

Finally,young children can have a different perspective of view on the difficulties they face,even their grandparents' advice may not seem useful for them to sovle the question. The develoopment of the society is a contiuneous process,so children need to learn how their grandparents' opinion on the same question in order to broaden their horizon. At the same time they can have a better understanding of their grandparents.

Of course,some advice may seem useless,such as grandparents' advice on the use of Inernet or on the knowledge on some specific areas which are developing so quickly. But,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the advice from our grandparents is useful even the society had changed a lot in the past fifty years.

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/26 11:42:28)

No one can deny the fact that society had changed a lot during the past fifty years. New technoligies such as ~~the~~ Interent,cell phone,robots and so many biological inventions不知道可以不可以这样用，只知道so on,so forth如果可以请告知谢谢,不清楚为什么老用逗号all of these have brought great changes to modern people. Also,evevyone would agree that both old people and young people can enjoy the benefits and convenice of these technologies. While,some aspects换个词 which youngsters do not have is that old people like our grandparents have years of experiences,and the wisdom to deal with difficulties in life,to face the misfortunes of evevy kind,most importantly,they know the methods to solve these problems. 和前面不平行Thus,the above statament is not correct in some degree.

In the first place,some life experiences do not change even the society may alter dramaticly. Some social norms and custom keep unchange for several hundreds of years,not to mention only fifty years. All of the members of the society should conform to these social regulations to ensure the stablity of the society,despite the age difference of them. So,grandparents' advice on these things is indeed helpful for their grandchildren. Such as in my country,when people visit a Muslim's house,there are so many things that they should pay attention to,like not eat pork.举例到底用like还是such as?If they do so,it will make the host unhappy,and the host would think you smirch their religion. So,old people' advice has its use on these things,and their grandchildren should listen to them to avoid making mistakes.
这个例子可以举但是没有针对性，因为任何人都可以提出这种advice不是非得grandparents
Then,children can learn lessons from the mistakes made by their grandparents是他们当时犯的错还是现在犯的错这个应该交代否则很难理解,and hopefully can aviod making the same mistakes again. Old people had made so many mistake in their life无厘头语言,and some of the quesions might be encountered by their garandchildren. Thus,by realizing and learning from the mistakes of their grandparents,young children can develop quichly with less setback than all depend on their own efforts. Most of the children nowadays are required to go to schools to study,and they will meet some problems in their learning process. Then,their grandparents might confront the same problems fifty year ago. Becasue some of the basic knowledge are remian the same even the courses in the university may changed a lot because of the progresses of science and technology. Thus,grandparents advice on these problems is really useful for their grandchildren to make progresses quickly.

Finally,young children can have a different perspective of view on the difficulties they face,even their grandparents' advice may not seem useful for them to sovle the question. The develoopment of the society is a contiuneous process,so children need to learn how their grandparents' opinion on the same question in order to broaden their horizon. At the same time they can have a better understanding of their grandparents.

Of course,some advice may seem useless,such as grandparents' advice on the use of Inernet or on the knowledge on some specific areas which are developing so quickly科技发展快的结果必定是老人知识落伍吗，这句话逻辑有问题. But,from what has been discussed above,we may safely draw the conclusion that the advice from our grandparents is useful even the society had changed a lot in the past fifty years.

1.拼写先用word查一便，这种错误就不用说了
2.表达有问题，不太明确
3.举例无针对性，不深入

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-26 22:34
1 : constituting an unspecified number <can only read so many chapters each night>
2 : constituting a group or pack <behaved like so many animals>

多谢改正额，改的太好了，都是我最弱的地方，嘿嘿。确实是，因为是限时写，是在txt格式写的，辛苦你了！

作者: DanielleZ 时间: 2012-6-27 19:09
Nowadays, many countries across the worldundergo a great economic depression, such as the E.U area.(这个时事例子用的非常好) lots ofpeople are talking about the future trend of the world economy. One of thequestion retates to this discussion is whether high schoolstudents should be required to take a basic econimic course. Some people believe that high schoolstudents do not need such a course, they already have to many courses to study, and basic economics（economical knowledge） is uesless for them if they do not major in ecomics after they enter university. While ohtersthink that basci economics has a close link to everyday life, andwhen their children studying(arestudying) in college orafter they get married, they need to have some knowledge about economics.Personally speaking, I agree with the statement that high school studentsshould take this course.

Let us talk about the first benefit of taking acourse on basic economics. By taking basic economics course, high schoolstudents could obtain the basic knowledge of the commercial aspects oflife. As economics is about analyzing(analysisof) theproduction, distribution, and consumption of goods and services, which connecttightly to students' daily life. Then students could understand the role ofsome economic phenomenas, such as the fluctuation of the price anddeposit rate. Students will use these knowlege when they grow up. Thus, taking generaleconomics course is good for students.

Another benefit is that students would become (我觉得加个become会好一些)interest in how to earn their own money（个人建议哈~我觉得也可以写成earn moneyby themselves） and then learn how to budget their moneyproperly if they take a course on economics. Whenstudents are at primary school and middle school, they are not old enough to dopart-time jobs. While when they go to high school, they are old enough to takesome work(这两句话的句式完全一样，所以显得比较直白，banban可以尝试用另一句话试试的~) experiences in order to cultivate their indenpendence and also make them try to relieve the economic bardens（burden） on theirparents partly.

Also, a general economic course could benefit highstudents on their study on other subjects.(我觉得这段的主题句没有说明白，benefit应该说的更清楚一些。) Economics is a complementation to naturalscience like math, chemistry, physics, etc(最好不要用这种缩写，用and so the forth，或者and soon都可以的).The methods used in economics are different with (the method) which used in natural subjects, because the solution to a scientific problemmay be only one, while the solutions to (an) econimic question are various, according to theconcrete situation. It is useful for high school students to know how to solvesome problems about their daily supply and demand.

Of course, add new course to high school studentswill increase their (working)load. Also, to carry it out means that theschool need to hire new teachers and the increase ofcredit hours to students. However,from the benefits I listed above, it is safe to draw the conclutsion that it is necessary for high school studentsto take a basic economics course.(总结段落感觉写learning economic 的坏处太多了，之前的论点没有提到)
这篇文章的三个论点讨论的都有点空洞。banban可以尝试着写的更具体一些呢。
还有啊，我6.26的作文还没有po上来，我这几天停一下写作文，把200句背完再写呢。
到时候我写好了，通知你，再麻烦你帮我改哦~

作者: 超级无敌小鹤鹤 时间: 2012-6-27 20:00
TPO 9
The professor totally questioned the assertion made in the reading text. Actually,the professor believes that the author in the reading is too optimistic about the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine,and contends that hydrogen is not a solution to this problem(这儿后半句还不如去掉好~~ 因为这儿this problem 到底是什么problem你并没说~~~).(你的这种开头的写法给我感觉有一点点太突然。我觉得你开头可以来一句类似于 The reading and the lecture both discuss the energy for cars 这之后在讲professor怎么怎么样会比较好~~~)

First,hydrogen,as claimed by the professor,is not easy to access as the author says in the reading text. The fact is that，(加入一个逗号，把后面的even什么的最为插入语) even hydrogen is present in water,~~first~~ it should be isolated before it can be used as fuel. The professor also emphasizes that hydrogen is difficult to store and should be keep in liquid state in order to use. Therefore,hydrogen is not easy to produce and store. Thus the assessment in the passage is no more than just imagination.

Second,the lecturer also points out that burning of hydrogen indeed bring no pollution to the environment,but the process to produce hydrogen need energy which comes from burning of coal or oil. Then,the process of producing hydrogen would pollute the atmosphere. and The opinion in the reading text is thus weak and not practical at all.

Third,evidence shows that the material which used to produce the hydrogen engine is too expensive, and the cheap material is so far to be accessable. so The professor claims that using hydrogen engine is not cheap at all.

基本上没什么问题，唯一就是注意一下多用一些连接词是的文章结构更加紧密一些~~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-27 21:55

TPO 9
The professor totally questioned the assertion made in the reading text. Actually,the professor believes that the author in the reading is too optimistic about the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine,and contends that hydrogen is not a solution to this problem(这儿后半句还不如去掉好~~ 因为这儿this problem 到底是什么problem你并没说~~~).(你的这种开头的写法给我感觉有一点点太突然。我觉得你开头可以来一句类似于 The reading and the lecture both discuss the energy for cars 这之后在讲professor怎么怎么样会比较好~~~)

First,hydrogen,as claimed by the professor,is not easy to access as the author says in the reading text. The fact is that，(加入一个逗号，把后面的even什么的最为插入语) even hydrogen is present in water,~~first~~ it should be isolated before it can be used as fuel. The professor also emphasizes that hydrogen is difficult to store and should be keep in liquid state in order to use. Therefore,hydrogen is not easy to produce and store. Thus the assessment in the passage is no more than just imagination.

Second,the lecturer also points out that burning of hydrogen indeed bring no pollution to the environment,but the process to produce hydrogen need energy which comes from burning of coal or oil. Then,the process of producing hydrogen would pollute the atmosphere. and The opinion in the reading text is thus weak and not practical at all.

Third,evidence shows that the material which used to produce the hydrogen engine is too expensive, and the cheap material is so far to be accessable. so The professor claims that using hydrogen engine is not cheap at all.

基本上没什么问题，唯一就是注意一下多用一些连接词是的文章结构更加紧密一些~~~

-- by 会员超级无敌小鹤鹤 (2012/6/27 20:00:38)

多谢鹤鹤大神修改。我多背些连接词去

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-27 23:18
6月27日101009NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

People are always wondering whether the countryside or the city is the ideal place to take better care of their families. If there is on preference-which I take leave to make a conclusion-then it is the countryside rather than the city that provides people with optimal conditions to look after their family members. There widespread teatimonies for it and the primary ones are listed as follows.

The foremost reason for choosing the rural areas is the soothing and comfortable life provided by the pastoral view. Hardly anyone could deny the fact that the fresh atmoshpere-which is rich in negative oxygen ion,less carbon dioxide and even no sulfur dioxide,is good for people health. Also,people can be more close to the nature in the countryside. They can enjoy listening to birds' warble from the branch,the breathtaking sight of the sunrise in the east and sunset in the west,the brightness of the stars in the Milky Way. All of this could offer countless pleasure to family members. Under these conditions,young family members can grow healthily,old members can enjoy the beauty of the nature.

Another advantage to better take care people' family is less social life compared to the forever-lasting parties,feasts and so many meetings which reduce people' time with their family. How satisfactory and refreshing it could be to have dinner together with you family members after a busy day. Our family members who need to be taken care of are children or old parents and grandparents,they demand less material conditions than us. Thus the tranquil and relaxing atmosphere in the rural areas is suitable for their needs.

Moreover,people in the rural areas live abdantly with heathy and natural food. Food provided in the city comes from the rural areas by transporting for a long distance,the quality can not compared with those in the rural areas. Furthermore,the safety can not be completely endured because the use of fertilizer and pesticides in modern mass productin agriculture. Therefore,with plenty of fresh fruits,vegetables,milk and meat in the rural areas,people could definetely better take car of there family with healthy food.

Of course,the fact that the opportunities in studies and the accesses to various people involved in different culture are all advantages for living in the cities. However,these does not prevent us from concluding that rural areas is a better place to look after our family members. Moreover,the rapid growing of modern transportation system such as the freeway and high quality country road makes it possible to drive to the nearby city in only a few hours. Meanwhile,the new communication technologies like cell phone and Internet connect the countryside tightly to other parts of the world. Thus transportation and communication are not problems for current people who lived in the countryside. Thus,if one want to choose a place to better take care of their families,I would recommend the rural areas.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-28 17:22
TPO 11 综合

The author of the reading text believes that it is troubling that youngsters are less interesting in reading literature,novels,plays and poems nowadays. However,the professor in the lecture thinks that the judegment is just too pessimistic.

First,the professor disagree with the assertion that only literature offers intellectual stimulation to young people. Other forms of reading books like science,history and politics are of high quality as literature. At the same time,they can stimulate youngsters' imagination. Thus,the explaination made in the reading text is unfounded.

Second,the professor points out that literature is not the only high quality form in modern culture. Others like music and movies are brilliant and valuable too. And according to the professor, the society is changing,as well as the stardands to judge a high quality of general culture. Moreover,music and movies are more directly to the audience that paper-based reading books. This directly casts doubt in the reading text.

Third,the professor believes that the decline of modern literature is not because of the reader,but the reason is that modern writters of literature make their works difficult to understand. Furthermore,earlier generations of readers may not have read a lot of today's literature either. So,the reading text's opinion is weakened by the professor's fresh opinion.

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-6-28 17:25
6月27日
红色为错误蓝色为建议紫色为总评
101009NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.

People are always wondering whether the countryside or the city is the ideal place to take better care of their families.（whether的用法错了额，怎么可以跟两个选择呢。。直接就说 With more and more people move to cities, some stare to wonder whether the city is the ideal place to take better care of their families） If there is on preference-which I take leave to (没见过这个表达，小K确定么？）make a conclusion-then it is the countryside rather than the city that provides people with optimal conditions to look after their family members. There widespread teatimonies （这个词神马意思？我的金山词霸木有查到o(╯□╰)o）for it and the primary ones are listed as follows.

The foremost reason for choosing the rural areas is the soothing and comfortable life provided by the pastoral view. Hardly anyone could deny the fact that the fresh atmoshpere-which is rich in negative oxygen ion,less carbon dioxide and even no sulfur dioxide,is good for people health. Also,people can be more close to the nature in the countryside. They can enjoy listening to birds' warble from the branch,the breathtaking sight of the sunrise in the east and sunset in the west,the brightness of the stars in the Milky Way.（enjoy后面的成分木有平行，最好改成平行结构，把listening去掉就可以了） All of this could offer countless pleasure to family members. Under these conditions,young family members can grow healthily,old members can enjoy the beauty of the nature.

Another advantage to better take care people' family （直接family就好了）is less social life compared to the forever-lasting parties,feasts and so many meetings which reduce people'（+s） time with their family. How satisfactory and refreshing it could be to have dinner together with you family members after a busy day. Our family members who need to be taken care of are children or old parents and grandparents,（两个完整句之间缺少连词）they demand less material conditions than us. Thus the tranquil and relaxing atmosphere in the rural areas is suitable for their needs.

Moreover,people in the rural areas live abdantly with heathy and natural food. Food provided in the city comes from the rural areas by transporting for a long distance,the quality can not compared with those in the rural areas. Furthermore,the safety can not be completely endured because the use of fertilizer and pesticides in modern mass productin agriculture. Therefore,with plenty of fresh fruits,vegetables,milk and meat in the rural areas,people could definetely better take car of there family with healthy food.

Of course,the fact that the opportunities in studies and the accesses to various people involved in different culture are all advantages for living in the cities. However,these does not prevent us from concluding that rural areas is a better place to look after our family members. Moreover,the rapid growing of modern transportation system such as the freeway and high quality country road makes it possible to drive to the nearby city in only a few hours. Meanwhile,the new communication technologies like cell phone and Internet connect the countryside tightly to other parts of the world. Thus transportation and communication are not problems for current people who lived in the countryside. Thus,if one want to choose a place to better take care of their families,I would recommend the rural areas. （这一段的让步挺好的，但是建议将conclusion从里面分开来单独成段）

总评：瓜瓜最近老是迟到T.T 不好意思
小错误有点多，要尽量改正。
观点逻辑挺好的，但是最后一段最好将让步和conclusion分成两段。
一起加油

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-28 20:01
TPO 11 综合

The author of the reading text believes that it is troubling troublethat youngsters are less interesting interested in reading literature,novels,plays and poems nowadays. However,the professor in the lecture thinks that the judegment is just too pessimistic.

First,the professor disagrees with the assertion that only literature offers intellectual stimulation to young people. Other forms of reading of books like science,history and politics are of high quality as literature. At the same time,they can stimulate youngsters' imagination. Thus,the explaination made in the reading text is unfounded.

Second,the professor points out that literature is not the only high quality form in modern culture. Others like music and movies are brilliant and valuable too. And according to the professor, the society is changing,as well as the stardands to judge a high quality of general culture the form of culture has changed Moreover,music and movies are more directlymore direct topublic concern to the audience that paper-based reading books. This directly casts doubt in the reading text.

Third,the professor believes that the decline of modern literature is not because of the reader,but the reason is that modern writters of literature make their works difficult to understand. Furthermore,earlier generations of readers may not may nor understand today's literaturehave read a lot of today's literature either. So,the reading text's opinion is weakened by the professor's fresh opinion.

还是听力细节啊其他都是小错误了

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-28 23:00
Tpo 13 综合 6 28

The author in the reading text worries about the fact that rare and important fossils are now being sold to privete ownship for millions of dollars,which is an unfortunate development for both scientists and public. However,the professor totally disagrees with the author by saying that s/he exaggerates the negative aspects and has three points to prove the judgment.

First,according to the professor's opinion,the general public have more exposure to the fossils because of the commercial exchange of the fossils. She says that even public school and labrary which have not enough founding now can afford some fossils,then display them to the public. Thus,private sale and buying activity helps public gain more chances to see the fossils. This directly contradicts the statement in the reading text.

Second,the reading text says scientists would lose the chance to text the fossils because of the private collectors. While the professor points out that,it is the scientists who identify the fossils first before them go to private collector's hand. Thus,scientists would not miss any important discoveries when they examine and text the fossils. So,the assumption in the reading text is totally unsound.

Third,the professor provides the facts that there are not enough universities and government institutions to unearth all of the fossils around the world. Therefore,she believes that it is better for private collectors to locate the fossils rather then let them completely undiscovered. So,the opinion in the reading text has been weakened.

作者: DanielleZ 时间: 2012-6-29 21:46

亲耐的~我欠的26号的作文写完啦哈~http://forum.chasedream.com/TOEFL_Writing/thread-727156-3-1.html#last

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-6-29 22:20
K，27的独立我已经写完啦，等待批改

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-29 22:43
100306 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past.

What would you do when you face a problem in your life? Just sit down and trying to create the answer from nothing? Or you can review the past to find some similar questions,then see how these questions were solved. By doing this,one can not only save time,but also can have a better understanding of the present situation and prepare for the future. Therefore,I agree with the above statement,and list my reasons as follow.

To begain with,learning from the fail failures of the past can help us avoid making the same mistake again,while the sucessful experiences can help us solve the similar problems. As an old saying goes:What has been will be again;there is nothing new under the sun. So,by realizing and learning from the past,both individuals and countries could develop quickly with less setbacks. I would like to cite my own experience in studying as an example. When I was in high school,I began to realize that the mistakes I made in the test will reappear in the next one if I did not remember them and review them regularly. I clearly remembered one mathematical equation that was very diffcult to understand competely and I always had the same problem to solve it in the test. However,after I reviewed it for several time,it became a littly easy. Then,I synthesized all the problems related to this equation and analyized it carefully,the solutions to the similar questions linked to this knowledge all filled in my mind. Next time I took a text,I could get a high score easily.

Moreover,learning from the past can help us move on in the present and in the future as well. In my opinion,review the past is not about remembering everything and knowing everying on a time line,but about analylizing people and societies,and interpreting the decisions that were made in the past in order to help us understand the events of our own time. By doing this,we can live in the world properly in the current world as well as in the future. People record the history in order to review the past,and learn from the history in order to solve the problems of the present and the future.

Finally,the growth of individual and nation is consistent,there is a connection between the past,the present and the future. It is easy to understand that the past is once the present,and the future will becoming the present,so,if we do not think about the past,how do we fix the problems of the present and the future.

Of course,some problems indeed have no counterparts in the past,that why innovation comes,at the same time the development of human beings. However,even innovatin is based the knowledge from the past,so,it is safe to draw the conclusion that review the past in important for people to solve the problems of the present and the future.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-30 06:43
100306 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past.

What would you do when you face a problem in your life? Just sit down and trying to create the answer from nothing? Or you can review the past to find some similar questions,then see how these questions were solved. By doing this,one can not only save time,but also can have a better understanding of the present situation and prepare for the future. Therefore,I agree with the above statement,and list my reasons as follow.

To begain with,learning from the ~~fail~~ failures of the past can help us avoid making the same mistake again,while the sucessful experiences can help us solve the similar problems. As an old saying goes:What has been will be again;there is nothing new under the sun. So,by realizing and learning from the past,both individuals and countries could develop quickly with less setbacks. I would like to cite my own experience in studying as an example. When I was in high school,I began to realize that the mistakes I made in the test will reappear in the next one if I did not remember them and review them regularly. I clearly remembered one mathematical equation that was very diffcult to understand competely and I always had the same problem to solve it in the test. However,after I reviewed it for several time,it became a littly easy. Then,I synthesized all the problems related to this equation and analyized it carefully,the solutions to the similar questions linked to this knowledge all filled in my mind. Next time I took a text,I could get a high score easily.remember equation review the past 感觉还是有些区别的啊

Moreover,learning from the past can help us move on in the present and in the future as well. In my opinion,review the past is not about remembering everything and knowing everying on a time line,but about analylizing people and societies,and interpreting the decisions that were made in the past in order to help us understand the events of our own time. By doing this,we can live in the world properly in the current world as well as in the future. People record the history in order to review the past,and learn from the history in order to solve the problems of the present and the future.这段例证move on 没有体现出来啊

Finally,the growth of individual and nation is consistent,there is a connection between the past,the present and the future. It is easy to understand that the past is once the present,and the future will becoming the present,so,if we do not think about the past,how do we fix the problems of the present and the future.为什么要说到nationa啊包子么看懂唉

Of course,some problems indeed have no counterparts in the past,that why innovation comes,at the same time the development of human beings. However,even innovatin is based the knowledge from the past,so,it is safe to draw the conclusion that review the past in important for people to solve the problems of the present and the future.

找不到小错啊厉害厉害
联系了development of nation humanbing 角度蛮高的但是联系不够强有些逻辑性欠佳
加油哈~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-30 06:49
Tpo 13 综合 6 28

The author in the reading text worries about the fact that rare and important fossils are now being sold to privete ownship for millions of dollars,which is an unfortunate development for both scientists and public. However,the professor totally disagrees with the author by saying that s/he exaggerates the negative aspects and has three points to prove the judgment.

First,according to the professor's opinion,the general public have more exposure to the fossils because of the commercial exchange of the fossils. She says that even public school and labrary which have not enough found~~ing~~ now can afford some fossils,then display them to the public. Thus,private sale and buying activity helps public gain more chances to see the fossils. This directly contradicts the statement in the reading text.

Second,the reading text says scientists would lose the chance to text test the fossils because of the private collectors. While the professor points out that,it is the scientists who identify the fossils first before them go to private collector's hand. Thus,scientists would not miss any important discoveries when they examine and text the fossils. So,the assumption in the reading text is totally unsound.

Third,the professor provides the facts that there are not enough universities and government institutions to unearth all of the fossils around the world. Therefore,she believes that it is better for private collectors to locate the fossils rather then let them completely undiscovered. So,the opinion in the reading text has been weakened.

这篇听力很好啊也没有小错误逻辑清楚吧错吧错~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-30 11:06
6月29日
110916 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should choose the same career as their parents.

When it comes to the question of career planing,each of us place different weight on various factors and may consider certaion phase of career planning at different time. Some people would like to choose the same job as their parents did,while others prefer to experience new things and have a different work as their parents. Considering my own experience and what I learnt from my friends,I would like to choose a career that is not the same as my parents. I will list my reasons as follow.

To begain with,choosing a job different means a new adventure of ourselves. Would you like to do the same thing that you watched everyday since your childhood? Are't you like to make some difference to make your life colorful and fullfilled? If you want this,then why not choose a different job as your parents. Then,when you come back home,you can talk something different with you father or mother. It would be boring if all of the family member discuss the same thing day in and day out. No one can deny the fact that human need something new to make their life fullfilled and satisfying.

Moreover,choosing a different job can help children cultivate indenpence,which is very important for their further development. In fact,it indeed much easy if one follow the way their parents did. Their parents could teach them the knowledge relates to the career,and provide them help when they have some problems or difficuties about their job. While,some advice from our parents is useful and improtant for our growth,but too much of them will do harm to our independence. If one always learn to his/her parents,how can he/she deal with problems when their parents are not available? On the contrary,if children choose different job as their parents,their have the chances to behave independently and can live happily on themselves when they grow-up.

Finally,the development of human society need our children to choose a different job. It is obvious that if all of the children simply do what their parents did years ago,human society could stay the same as it is many years ago even the time passes. The human being need new career in order to stimualte its mind,and make progresses to make the sociery more advanced. I just could not imagine that if Bill Gate followed the ways his parents did,how the world would be without the micorsoft. At the same time,the rapid development of our sicence and technology creates so many works that never exsist in the past,such as astronauts and the scientists who design a spacecrafts. So,it is very important to take a different job for the development of our society.

Of course,taking the same jobs as their parents could help children quickly adapt to the working environment and develop fast with the help of their parents and their parents' friends. However,based on what had been discussed above,we can safely draw the conclution that choose a different job as parents did is much more better not only for ourselves but also can meet the needs of the society.

作者: srafcatt 时间: 2012-6-30 16:12
标题: 6.29作业修改帖
非常好

修改和意见

6月29日
110916 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should choose the same career as their parents.

When it comes to the question of career planning,each of us place different weight on various factors and may consider certain phase of career planning at different time. Some people would like to choose the same job as their parents did,while others prefer to experience new things and have a ~~different~~ work as different from their parents. Considering my own experience and what I learned from my friends,I would like to choose a career that is not the same as my parents. I will list my reasons as follows.

To begin with,choosing a different job ~~different~~ means a new adventure for us. Would you like to do the same thing that you watched everyday ~~since~~during your childhood? Don't you like to make some difference to make your life colorful and fulfilled? If you want this,then why not choose a different job as your parents. Then,when you come back home,you can talk something different with you father or mother. It would be boring if all of the family member discuss the same thing day in and day out. No one can deny the fact that human need something new to make their life ~~fullfilled~~fulfilled and satisfying.

Moreover,choosing a different job can ~~help~~cultivate children's~~cultivate~~independence,which is very important ~~for~~ to their further development. In fact,it indeed much easier if one follows the way ~~their~~ parents did. ~~Their~~ parents could teach them the knowledge related to the career,and provide them with help when they have some problems or difficulties about their job. While,some advice from our parents is useful and important for our growth,but too much of them will do harm to our independence. If one always learn to his/her parents,how can he/she deal with problems when their parents are not available? On the contrary,if children choose different job as their parents,~~their~~ they have ~~the~~ chances to behave independently and can live happily on themselves when they grow up.

Finally,the development of human society needs our children to choose a different job. It is obvious that if all of the children simply do what their parents did years ago,human society could stay the same as it is many years ago ~~even the~~over time ~~passes~~. The human being needs(不可数名词动词用单数)new career in order to stimulate its mind,and make progress（progress是不可数名词） to make the society more advanced. I just could not imagine that if Bill Gates followed the ways his parents did,how the world would be without the Microsoft. At the same time,the rapid development of our science and technology creates so many works that never exist in the past,such as astronauts and the scientists who design a spacecrafts. So,it is very important to take a different job for the development of our society.

Of course,taking the same jobs as their parents could help children quickly adapt to the working environment and develop fast with the help of their parents and their parents' friends. However,based on what had been discussed above,we can safely draw the conclusion that choose a different job as parents did is much more better。By doing this we will not only benefit ourselves but also meet the needs of the society.

544个字。非常值得表扬的长度~托福作文的结构也熟悉了。知道在段落在第一句话表明论点，并且在阐述的过程中较少出现歧义。值得注意的是作者有意识的在练习使用复杂的句子和词组，这是十分必要的。值得鼓励。但是，仍有些问题需要改正。

1.单词的拼写问题。

2.词组中介词使用问题，建议在使用前查字典弄清使用的方法。

3.问句使用频繁。我在上新东方的时候，老师说，频繁的问句会让阅卷者不知所措。因此尽量少用问句。（经验谈，宁信其有啊。）

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-30 17:13
TPO 14 6 29

The reading test talks about the benefits of salvage logging to the forest. While the professor in the lecture states that this is indeed an effective way to clear the forest,but its long-term impact may do harm to the forest,and the benefits are questionable. Then,she explains her reason according to the reading text.

First,the professor points out that the remove of dead trees would disrupt the decompose process,which could enrich the soil in the forest. By removing the dead trees,new trees will lack enough nutrient for their growth. This is directly contradicting to the counterpart in the reading text.

Second,the professor provides an important information that insects population does no only do harm to the forest. They are food to some benefitial birds in the forest. Instead,salvage logging could do more harm to the forest than harmful insects do. Because they disrupt the blance in the forest. Thus,the assertion made by the author is weakened.

Third,the professor argues that the economic benefits of salvage logging are very small and can not last long. According to the professor,large mount of woods can only be removed by helicopters and other machines which are very expensive to use and maintain. Furthermore,the workers are temperary and come from outside the area,because they have the experiences and do not need so much trainning as the local people. So,the assertion in the reading text is totally questioned.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-30 17:44
TPO 15 6 30

In the reading text,the author offers three ways to stop the spread of the cane toad in Australia. While,the professor in the lecture believe that those methods could not help to get rid of the cane toad,even worse,they may cause unwanted damages.

First,the professor points out that national fence is not an effective ways to prevent to stop the spread. The reason is that there always rivers and streams flow through on side of the fence to the other side of it. Thus,the water can carry young toad and toad eggs,thus they can get through the fence and continue their spreading. Therefore,the assertion in the reading text is weakened.

Second,the professor states that a massive of volunteers indeed can trap and capture cane toad,but the disadvantage is that the untrained volunteers would also kill other frogs and other species,because it is very difficulty to distingish cane toad from others especially when they are young. And some of the native frogs and similar species are in-danger. So,the measure in the reading text may not work at all.

Third,the professor argues that using virus is a bad idea because they could cause damages to the cane toad in their native region. Because the reptile and amphibian species could easily transport to other places. Thus,when they arrive at cane toad's origional places,the cane toad there would be killed in large amount,this would cause damage to the whole ecosystem because cane toad is a native specie there. Thus,this method is totally disputed.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-30 22:38
6月30日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the loss of old friends.

When it comes to the question of whether it is a good thing to move a new city or a new country,each of us place different weight on various factors and may consider certaion phase of career planning at different time. Some people would like to choose live in the same place throughout their life bbecause of their concern of the loss of old firends,while others prefer to experience new things and always want to enjoy a new environment. Considering my own experience and what I learnt from my friends,I believe that it is indeed a good thing to move to a new city or a new country. And I will list my reasons as follows.

To begain with,moving to new places does not means the loss of old firends,even better,it can help us to make new friends. With the rapid develop of communication technology,people nowadays can connect with their friend with cell phones,Internet,and various transportations also can help people move from one place to anther within only a few hours. So,moving to a new place does not means the loss of old friends. Meanwhile,the new environment can give people the opportunities to make new friends,as time passes,these new friends will become old friends for people too.

Moreover,moving to a different place far from people' hometown can give them a broad understanding of the society and different perspective about their own life. They can enjoy a different culture and lifestyle which is may strange to them at the begainning,but as time moves on,they will become familiar with the new environment. Then people know something new to them,this obviously can help them to expand their horizon. Take my experience as an example,when I left my hometown and went to university,I felt all the things around me were so different,and missed my home and my old friends there. While,just one year later,I began to adapt to the school campous and felt confortable to live there. I shared my experiences with my old friends,they all said it was interesting,and they wanted to move to a new places just as me.

Finally,if people stay in one place,they will lose the chances to improve themselves,which are very important for their further development. Nowadays,the society is changing quilkly beyond people' imagination. In order to adapt to the always changing society,it is necessary for people to have the experience of living in a entirely new place. One of my friend once had an opportunity to study abroad,but his parents did not want him to be so far away from them,and they worried about the safe siturtion there,also,there were no friends there could help him. My friend,who also did not want to lose his old friend in my hometown,decided to stay at my hometown. However,years later,when he had an opportunity to promotion,he found that he did not meet the requrement,which stated that one need to have the experience of studying abroad in order to fit the position. As you can see,what a pity that he did not grasp the oppotunity years before.

Of course,live in the place where we were born means that we know all of the other people deeply,this makes us feel harmony and give us a great sense of belonging. However,based on what I have been discussed above,it is safe to say that moving on to a new city or country is better for ourselves and does not mean the loss of old friends.
超时四分钟，罪过罪过。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-1 17:37
7月1日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Rather than help their children do schoolwork, parents should encourage their children do work independently. Do you agree or disagree?

When it comes to the question of whether parents should help their children with their schoolwork,each of us place different weight on various factors and may consider certaion phase of educate children at different time. Some people would like to help their children for the reason that they can finish their schoolwork quickly and then have spare time to do other important things. While others,on the contrary,hold different opinion,they believe it is good for their children to work out their homework all on their own,and learn how to solve the difficulties by themselves. According to my own experience and what I had learnt from people whihc I familar with,I agree with the later choice,and will list my explainations as follow.

To begain with,some can help child cultivate independence at early time in their life,wich may benefit them when they grow up. When children doing schoolwork on their own,their need to finish what they can do,and then search for information to solve some difficult which they could not deal with them all on their own. By doing this,children' independence could be cultivated. One of my friends always chooses to let his son finish all the schoolwork by himself,whehter it is about mathemtics or physics,and evne some more hard courses. His son is really independent by his farther's trainning,most of the assignments become easy for him,he indeed need extra help with some question,but he know how to search relate information through Inernet or other experts. Thus,he becomes interest in solve problems,and enjoy the process of doing them. Later his son get a reward of national maths contest,which his father never had done before. As you can see,it really help for children to finish schoolwork on their own efforts.

Moreover,solving problems on their own help children foster their creative thinking abilty. If parents tell their children what to do step by step to work out schoolwork,it would establish a formlua for children when they confront with other questions. They will use what they learnt from their parents to solve questins they face,this will do harm to their creative thinking ability. While,by solving problems on their own,they need to create some solutions to the problems without help from their parents. When I was little,I ofthen asked my father to help me when I have some hard questions. Later,when I went to high school which was far away from my home,I could not ask my farther any more. Then it took me a long time to deal with schoolwork all on my own,but later,I began to create new methods to deal with them,even better,I tried to understand the knowledge in a different ways from what my teachers said,and pointed out some mistake they made in classes. This experience really help me to form my creative thinking ability.

Finally,parents' experience are correct sometime and they have the time and patience to help their children,but it not to say that they will never make any mistakes. So in order to make less mistakes by themselves,it is better for children solve problem on their own,thus when they make some mistakes ,they will know how to deal with them. Parents' knowledge are limited,they lack some current information to solve some special questions in their children' schoolwork,sometimes they may give to wrong answer. A primary student I know once ask her parents a question about English,but her parents never learn English before,thus they can not help.

Of course,with the help of parents,children could solve problems quickly and crrectly most of the time,and some parents are willing to help their children train creative thinking ability too. However,under these conditions,children can easily develop dependence on their parents,this is harmful for their future life and study. Thus,based on what had been discussed above,I firmly believe that it is better for children sovle their own problems.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-1 21:33
TPO 16 综合

The reading text talks about the tough situation of the archaeology in the U.K during most of the twentieth century. While the professor states in the lecture that in 1990 the United Kingdom establish a new guildeline,which would change and improve the situation in all the three areas mentioned in the reading text.

First,as the professor says in the lecture,the new guildeline states that before any contruction sites begain,they must be examined by archaeologists first. If something valueable can be found,then the archaeologists,the local government and the construction company get together to make a plan to preserve the valuable sites. They may construct around the sites or excavate them. So,the valuable sites could be preserved,this is the change relates to the first area in the reading text.

Second,provision in the new guildeline says that any work done for sites will be paid by the contruction company. Thus,this new financial support from the company would allow archaeologists do more researches than in the past. This is the second change relates to the reading text,which states that many archaeologists lack fianncial support.

Third,government now create many paid jobs for archaeologists in all stages of the process. They can work to draw plans,collect datas and write articles about archaeology. This helps increase position for many professional archaeologists,and the number of them is the highest than any other time. This is the third change.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-7-2 06:31
TPO 16 综合

The reading text talks about the tough situation of ~~the~~ archaeology in the U.K during most of the twentieth century. While the professor states in the lecture that in 1990 the United Kingdom establish a new guildeline,which would change and improve the situation in all the three areas mentioned in the reading text.

First,as the professor says in the lecture,the new guildeline states that before any contruction sites begain,they must be examined by archaeologists first. If something valueable can be found,then the archaeologists,the local government and the construction company will get together to make a plan to preserve the valuable sites. They may construct around the sites or excavate them. So,the valuable sites could be preserved,this is the change relates to the first area in the reading text.

Second,provision in the new guildeline says that any work done for sites will be paid by the contruction company. Thus,this new financial support from the company would allow archaeologists do more researches than in the past. This is the second change relates to the reading text,which states that many archaeologists lack fianncial support.

Third,government now create many paid jobs for archaeologists inat all stages of the process. They can work to draw plans,collect datas and write articles about archaeology. This helps increase position for many professional archaeologists,and the number of them is the highest than any other time. This is the third change.

已经很好了但是感觉在段尾的总结this is the third change this is the change relates to... 有些单薄改改就好
不错的文章了~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-7-2 06:46
7月1日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Rather than help their children do schoolwork, parents should encourage their children do work independently. Do you agree or disagree?

When it comes to the question of whether parents should help their children with their schoolwork,each of us place different weight on various factors and may consider certaion phase of educate children at different time. Some people would like to help their children for the reason that they can finish their schoolwork quickly and then have spare time to do other important things. While others,on the contrary,hold different opinion,they believe it is good for their children to work out their homework all on their own,and learn how to solve the difficulties by themselves. According to my own experience and what I had learnt from people whihc which I familar with,I agree with the later choice,and will list my explainations as follow.

To begain with,some can help child cultivate independence at early time in their life,wich may benefit them when they grow up. When children doing schoolwork on their own,their they need to finish what they can do,and then search for information to solve some difficult which they could not deal with them all on their own. By doing this,children' independence could be cultivated. One of my friends always chooses to let his son finish all the schoolwork by himself,whehter it is about mathemtics or physics,and evne some more hard courses. His son is really independent by his farther's trainning,most of the assignments become easy for him,he indeed need extra help with some question,but he knows how to search relate information through the Inernet or other experts. Thus,he becomes interest in solve problems,and enjoy the process of doing them. Later his son get a reward of national maths contest,which his father never had done before. As you can see,it really help ~~for~~ children to finish schoolwork on their own efforts.

Moreover,solving problems on their own help children foster their creative thinking abilty. If parents tell their children what to do step by step to work out schoolwork,it would establish a formlua for children when they confront with other questions. They will use what they learnt from their parents to solve questins they face,this will do harm to their creative thinking ability. While,by solving problems on their own,they need to create some solutions to the problems without help from their parents. When I was little,I ofthen asked my father to help me when I ~~have~~had some hard questions. Later,when I went to high school which was far away from my home,I could not ask my farther any more. Then it took me a long time to deal with schoolwork all on my own,but later,I began to create new methods to deal with them,even better,I tried to understand the knowledge in a different ways from what my teachers said,and pointed out some mistakes they made in classes. This experience really help me to form my creative thinking ability.

Finally,parents' experience are correct sometime and they have the time and patience to help their children,but it does not to say that they will never make any mistakes. So in order to make less mistakes by themselves,it is better for children solve problem on their own,thus when they make some mistakes ,they will know how to deal with them. Parents' knowledge are limited,they lack some current information to solve some special questions in their children' schoolwork,sometimes they may give to wrong answer. A primary student I know once ask her parents a question about English,but her parents never learn English before,thus they can not help. 时态

Of course,with the help of parents,children could solve problems quickly and crrectly most of the time,and some parents are willing to help their children train creative thinking ability too. However,under these conditions,children can easily develop dependence on their parents,this is harmful for their future life and study. Thus,based on what had been discussed above,I firmly believe that it is better for children sovle their own problems.

就是细节问题了
句型有些单一了所以感觉例子叙述有些长可以适当换些词

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-2 16:38
TPO 17 综合

In the reading text,the author writes about several reasons that birds will contiune to decline in the Uniterd States. However, this is being argued in the lecture. The professor in the lecture says that the claims in the reading text are unconvincing,and she gives her reasons in the lecture.

First,the professor admits that human development indeed cause the decline of some types of birds,but it also increases certain types of birds like doves,sea dogs and so forth,even hawks are flying around the cities to pray on these birds. The residents even complains that there so many birds in the street. So,this is directly contrary to what had been worte in the reading text.

Second,the professor points out that argiculture is increasing,but it needs less and less extra land every year. The reason is that new crops which can produce more products every unit land are created. They could produce more food in the land which already exsist,thus,it is no need to convert the wild land. The second explaination in the reading passage is disputed.

Third,people nowadays begain to aware of the influence of traditional pesticides on birds. Therefore,two methods are used to decrease this bad effect. The first one is to use pesticides which are less toxic,in order to not hurt the birds. Second,new crops which have resistance to pests are invented. All these will help to reduce harm to birds. Thus,the decline predicted in the reading text would not happen according to the professor.

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-7-2 22:27
TPO 15 6 30 红色为错误蓝色为建议紫色总评

In the reading text,the author offers three ways to stop the spread of the cane toad in Australia. While,the professor in the lecture believe that those methods could not help to get rid of the cane toad,even worse,they may cause unwanted damages.

First,the professor points out that national fence is not an effective ways to prevent to stop the spread. The reason is that there always rivers and streams flow through on side of the fence to the other side of it. Thus,the water can carry young toad and toad eggs,thus they can get through the fence and continue their spreading. Therefore,the assertion in the reading text is weakened.

Second,the professor states that a massive of volunteers indeed can trap and capture cane toad,but the disadvantage is that the untrained volunteers would also kill other frogs and other species,because it is very difficulty to distingish cane toad from others especially when they are young. And some of the native frogs and similar species are in-danger. So,the measure in the reading text may not work at all.

Third,the professor argues that using virus is a bad idea because they could cause damages to the cane toad in their native region. Because the reptile and amphibian species could （+be）easily transport (+ed)to other places. Thus,when they arrive at cane toad's origional places,the cane toad there would be killed in large amount,this would cause damage to the whole ecosystem because cane toad is a native specie there. Thus,this method is totally disputed.(native place 是South America,要是能写出来更好了)

K同学写的很好，段落上是ETS喜欢的表述方式，要点听得也很全。要是能加一个结尾就更好了！

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-2 22:33
7月2日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage children to do their work indecently.

When it comes to the question of whether parents should help their children with their work,each of us place different weight on various factors and may consider certaion phase of educating children at different time. Some people would like to help their children for the reason that they can finish their work quickly and then have spare time to do other important things. While others,on the contrary,hold different opinion,they believe it is good for their children to work out their homework all on their own,and learn how to solve the difficulties by themselves. According to my own experience and what I had learnt from people which I familar with,I am against the above statement,and will list my explainations as follow.

To begain with,children may dependend on their parents to find all solutions of their problems if parents always help them. This would cause their children can not solve problems when they deal with them all on their own. From the time when I was a child growing up in my hometown,I loved working out problems on my own. On the contrary,my friend Mike always asked his farther when he confronted with some difficulties. Every tiem our teacher gave us some homework,he was usually the first one to finish them and the answers were all correct. All of us was surprised about his talent. But,when at the end of the term,we needed to take a text,his score was very low compared to me. Then I knew that the his father told him the answers of our homework,but he could not predict the question in our text,so,Mike failed in the text. As you can see,parents' help is not always benefitial.

Moreover,if parents often make their children rely on them,their children' chances to contact with other people such as their teachers,classmates and friends will reduce. It is natural for children to choose the easy ways when they want to solve a problem. So,if their parents always want to help them,this would give children a signal that when they want to solve some question,asking their parents is the quick solution. Therefore,their time and opportunity to contact with other people would be reduced.

Finally,if parents encourage their children to do their work indecently,then,the consequence may be very severe. The purpose of give work to children is to help them improve their ability. The equal important object is that they also need to finish their work in proper way. If they just copy their classmates or do this when they take a test,teachers will punish them. If children did not know this point when they were young,they would continue their improper way when they grow up. While the law is strict,they will be put into prison if they do some work indecently.

Of course,with the help of parents,children could solve problems quickly and crrectly most of the time,and some parents are willing to help their children train creative thinking ability too. However,under these conditions,children can easily develop dependence on their parents,this is harmful for their future study and work. Also,things become even worse if children do their work indcently. Thus,based on what had been discussed above,I firmly believe that it is better for children to problems independently.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-7-3 10:30
TPO 18 综合

In the reading text,the author offers threes ways to address the decline of Torreya. While,the professor in the lecture states that these methods unfortunitely could not provide satisfactory solutions to the situation. She lists her explainations one by one according to the reading text.

First,the professor argues that the micorclimate in the northern part of Florida had already changed becaues of the larger climate changes such as global warming. Also,most of the wetland in Florida had been drained out. Thus,the climate there has becomes drier. So,this is directly contradict to its counterpart in the reading passage.

Second,the professor points out that another tree called black oak-which had been moved to a different place before. The result was that this tree wiped out other trees which were native to that region and were already in-danger or becaming extinct. Therefore,the effect of moving Torreya to other place is unpredictable. It may cause bad effect to local ecosystem.

Third,the solution to preserve Torreya in research centers also has its disadvantage,according to the professor. One chanllenge is diseases. Wild trees are geneticaly various because they are in large amount,thus they have resistance to different diseases. While,it is obvious that research centers do not have enough space to keep large amount of Torreya. They can easily be damaged by certain diseases. So,the last method in the reading text is disputed.

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