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作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-4 16:00
标题: 630二战托福~~必胜~~
512一战 g+f=24
考试的时候完全就不在状态
独立给了f都嫌ets给高了~~哈哈~~ 基本全是单句啊~~
二战一定要拿下托福~~
必须100+啊~~
一个要去读博士的姐纸伤不起呢~~
一推researches要做~~
加油吧~~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-4 16:06
今儿个贴第一篇独立~~6月4日作业~~101203NA
这是512考前写过的~~改了改发了上来~~

When it comes to the issue that the role of parents during children completing their works, some people suggest that parents should let children alone when they do their assignments, while others maintain the opposite view. To agree or disagree with it is a matter of balancing between its pros and cons. In my point of view, I agree with the statement that parents should encourage their children do work alone rather than help them.

In the first place, the children may have deep impression when they do work independently. Children may face a lot of problems in school, and the best way to overcome them is to try their best to find answers. Only when children conquer these problems by themselves, can they have impression deeply and remember them for a long period of time. There is no better example than myself when I was in an elementary school. On day, our teacher taught us about the rule of multiplication table, and then she set up our some assignments about calculations. But when I met a question which is about to count 6*8, I forgot how to calculate it. However, I did not ask my parents for help. In contrast, I reviewed the whole multiplication table again and again. Finally, I figured it out. It was 48! Although I spent a whole night to remember this multiplication table, I thought it was worth because I conquer myself and it gave me a sense of achievement.

In addition, it can help us to cultivate our personalities .With the developing of global economy, we may face more competitors and more competitions. How can we deal with it? Suppose two people, both of them are graduated from the same famous university, take part in an interview. One of them is likely to make a decision directly and independently, but the other one is prefer to ask others for help. If you are a boss to pick up an employee, which one would you like to hire? It must be the first one, I think. Obviously, the personality of independent dealing with stuff has significant meaning in our life. It can not only help us to have a good job, but also help us to complete the work by ourselves better enjoy the advanced society.

Admittedly, sometimes we need our parents help, and our parents in turn should make the best of their experiences to help us. Our parents are full of experiences ranging from academic information such as history and biology to life experiences, like how to make a decision or how to keep healthy. For example, I asked my parents’ suggestions when I chosen my college major. It was an important decision to me because it determined what I would do and what I would learn for next four years. At first, my parents hoped me to pick up a major independently. But there were two majors, computer science and geosciences, which I was interested in most and I did not know which one is better. My father figured out each field which I might face to in the future. At last, I thought computer science was suitable for me because many companies were likely to hire computer programmers.

Personally speaking, considering the positive and negative effects of this issue, I think that the capability of independence has more outweigh. In different situations, though, parents should help their children to some work, the optimal approach, for parents, is to encourage their children to overcome the problems independently.

作者: Crystaljoy 时间: 2012-6-4 17:18
小a在大本营回复一下~参加今晚的对改吧~
规则都在写作小分队大本营首页~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-4 17:37

小a在大本营回复一下~参加今晚的对改吧~
规则都在写作小分队大本营首页~

-- by 会员 Crystaljoy (2012/6/4 17:18:15)

噢啦嘻嘻~~谢啦~~

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-6-4 22:33
加油加油！

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-15 20:45
0615
110514ML作文
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future.
政府有机构，给学生判断
网络的发展
但是不管怎么简单，我们还是要有自己的critical thinking

Have you ever found more and more people take part in the civil servant examination? Have you ever found an increasing number of people send their resumes through the internet? Have you ever unconsciously found that citizens tend to pick up the career which the educational institution recommends? If so, you might deeply stand on my point that, nowadays, for modern citizens, it is much easier to identify a brighter career.

To begin with, the government plays an important role in helping its citizens to choose jobs. An educational institution, obviously, has this function. It is set because more and more people want to get advices from the professional consultors（consulters顾问） about jobs, which allow them to easy find careers in order to have successful futures. So, every year, the educational institution publishes a set of statistics about the employment rate on various kinds of jobs, such as a computer program designer or a biology teacher. Thus, thanks to the government, we can gain more information about types of careers.

From the perspective of advent of internet, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize that the importance of internet in the global development. On the internet, we can find many things. For example, if I have to send my resume to the PHMG Company, a famous accounting firm on my country, what I need to do before sending this e-mail is to searching the evaluation about this company from other netizen网友 who may be an employee in this firm. Therefore, I can find everything from it, such as how the condition of this firm, may I have a single room if I can be the member of this venture and so on.

Admittedly, if critical and independent thinking are ignored deliberately and accidently, it cannot be a sound identify whether I be able to find a secure jobs. No matter which types of jobs would have a brighter future, I still think we must choose the job which is fit for us or gaining personal satisfaction from it. However, this consideration will not make be deliver the vital points of my address because it could not be verified that it is difficult for people to choose job today, although more jobs are provided nowadays.

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that past people are easier to identify the jobs, considering both past and today’s situation, I still think modern people could choose successful career better in terms of the setting of an educational institution and the advent of internet.

421
40min

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-16 09:36
Have you ever found more and more people take part in the civil servant examination? Have you ever found an increasing number of people send their resumes through the internet? Have you ever unconsciously found that citizens tend to pick up the career which the educational institution recommends? If so, you might deeply stand on my point that, nowadays, for modern citizens, it is much easier to identify a brighter career.
排比很好啊found出现三次可以换一下 notice discovery pay attention
To begin with, the government plays an important role in helping its citizens to choose jobs. An educational institution, obviously, has this function. It is set because more and more people want to get advices from the professional consultors（consulters顾问） about jobs, which allow them to ~~easy~~ find careers easily in order to have successful futures. So, every year, the educational institution publishes a set of statistics about the employment rate on various kinds of jobs, such as a computer program designer or a biology teacher. Thus, thanks to the government, we can gain more information about types of careers.
段末加上一句话总结吧点题
From the perspective of adventing of internet, an increasing number of people are beginning to realize ~~that~~ the importance of internet in the global development. On the internet, we can find many things具体些吧建议改成information and convenience. For example, if I have to send my resume to the PHMG Company, a famous accounting firm on my country, what I need to do before sending this e-mail is itto searching the evaluation about this company from other netizen网友 who may be an employee in this firm. Therefore, I can find almost 不能太绝对everything from it, such as how the condition of this firm, may I have a single room if I can be the member of this venture and so on.

Admittedly, if critical and independent thinking are ignored deliberately and accidently, it cannot be a sound identify whether I be am able to find a secure jobs. No matter which types of jobs would have a brighter future没看懂啊, I still think we must choose the job which is fit for us or gaining personal satisfaction from it. However, this consideration will not make be deliver the vital points of my address because it could not be verified that it is difficult for people to choose job today, although more jobs are provided nowadays.

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that past people are easier to identify the jobs, considering both past and today’s situation, I still think modern people could choose successful career better in terms of the setting of an educational institution and the advent of internet.

让步很恰当
思路逻辑非常好的学习学习~
句型可以多样些

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-16 11:31
小a亲，刚膜拜完你的6.15独立

立意很新颖，论据充分，尤其是最后一段Conclusion，相当perfect！

但是跟其他文章比较起来，可能就觉得站的角度不够高，不够多。

之前上过培训班，老师建议，写作文，可以从人类文明、社会政府、再到家庭个人这个思维来拓展。虽然我也没有深得真传，但是我在努力训练培养自己的思维，将狭隘自我的思维开拓舒展(我经常习惯在文中用We think/must....I think)。

我也有出国读博的打算，咱们可以一起研讨、奋进呐

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-17 21:30

小a亲，刚膜拜完你的6.15独立

立意很新颖，论据充分，尤其是最后一段Conclusion，相当perfect！

-- by 会员 lunating (2012/6/16 11:31:57)

呵呵一起努力哈~~
我没上过辅导班但是看过老外的185
我看他们没说什么特别深奥的东西
虽然考过g 不过都忘光了哈哈
很多经验贴都说要从身边的小事说就可以了哈哈~~
以后经常来我这看看哈~~
我也去看你的~~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-18 19:33
0618
大陆20101017 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise。
看书好
看电影好
运动不好
ps：写的很差劲，没有观点，想不出来啊~~
Have you found we could get asleep quickly if we read our favorite books? Have you ever discovery watching a comedy movie can help us get rid of bad moods? Have you even feel exhausted and exciting after doing some fierce games, such as a soccer game? If so, you might stand on my point that the better way to relax is watching a movie or reading a book full of imagination rather than doing physical exercise.

From the perspective of my own experience, I tend to reading Harry Potter, an English version book, before I go to bed because I am a sort ofintroverted girl. On one hand, reading books are my habit, on the other hand, it is fit for my personality- quiet, hating competition and also disliking the smell of sweat. In the book, there are full of sophisticated plots and full of imagination. Also, I can experience the actor-little harry potter- life, which I have not suffer this forever and ever, such as attacking the evil by magic. All of these give me a sense of relaxation. Thus, reading book is one way to relax myself.

Watching movies also give us another way to relax ourselves. I am always overwhelmed by my study stuff, like preparing the presentation every Monday or biology homework every day. Thus, I like to find a way which can not only let me feel relaxed, but also allow me to attain some information and knowledge. Obviously, watching movie is this kind of thing. During the movie, I can see the beautiful scenery, know a romantic love story or even could imitate the way they speak properly. So I can kill the bird with one stone and take advantage of my time.

Even though doing some exercise, like jogging or walking, can improve my speed, strength and flexibility, the feeling of exhausted and the smell of swear always make me frustrated. I would spend more time on recovering my energy and emotion. This is needless to say it could relax myself.

Personally speaking, even though maybe everyone has its own dictionaries of relaxing ways, I, considering both the positive and negative about movies, books and physical exercise, still think reading books and watching movies are fittest way for me about relaxation in terms of personal experience and personalities.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-19 10:34
多谢xiaoA 姐的指点额，这个题目木有好好想。
xiaoA姐你改的好快哈，一战就24分了，那你二战岂不是要向满分靠齐了么。
以后你的每篇作文我都要拜读下额。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-19 11:48

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Have you found we could get asleep quickly if we read our favorite books? Have you ever discovery watching a comedy movie can help us get rid of bad moods? Have you even feel exhausted and exciting after doing some fierce games, such as a soccer game? If so, you might stand on my point that the better way to relax is watching a movie or reading a book full of imagination rather than doing physical exercise.

From the perspective of my own experience, I tend to reading Harry Potter, an English version book, before I go to bed because I am a sort of introverted girl. On one hand, reading books are my habit, on the other hand, it is fit for my personality- quiet, hating competition and also disliking the smell of sweat.In the book, there are full of sophisticated plots and full of imagination. Also, I can experience the actor-little harry potter- life, which I have(would?) not suffer this forever and ever, such as attacking the evil by magic. All of these give me a sense of relaxation. Thus, reading book is one way to relax myself.

Watching movies also give us another way to relax ourselves. I am always overwhelmed by my study stuff, like preparing the presentation every Monday or biology homework every day. Thus, I like to find a way which can not only let me feel relaxed, but also allow me to attain some information and knowledge. Obviously, watching movie is this kind of thing. During the movie, I can see the beautiful scenery, know a romantic love story or even could imitate the way they speak properly. So I can kill the bird(kill two birds?) with one stone and take advantage of my time.

Even though doing some exercise, like jogging or walking, can improve my speed, strength and flexibility, the feeling of exhausted and the smell of swear always make me frustrated. I would spend more time on recovering my energy and emotion. This is needless to say it could relax myself.

Personally speaking, even though maybe everyone has its own dictionaries of relaxing ways, I,(after carefully) considering both the positive and negative about movies, books and physical exercise, still think reading books and watching movies are the fittest way for me about(这个可以用to么？) relaxation in terms of personal experiences and personalities.

1 xiaoA 姐的逻辑很清晰，通篇读很完美的说；

2 xiaoA 姐你应该也写一篇不带模板的综合来让我们看下额

3 就是里面的一小部分不是很清楚了。

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-19 18:02
110820NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.

其他东西更值得投资；
投资大学生也挺好；
人力也很重要

Have you ever noticed that more and more companies tend to invest money to joint ventures? Have you ever found the relationship between the universities and companies are getting together closely? Have you ever heart an increasing number of employees are beginning to consider jump-hop to other companies which might have higher salaries or have more chances to promote? If so, you might deeply stand on my side that it is not a wise investment for a company to devote money on training their employees.

Training workers are not a wise investment for a company. Nowadays, it is well acknowledged that when companies could not give their workers what they want or meet their satisfactions, like promotion, they will leave the companies as quickly as possible without hesitating. A complete company consists of capital, labor force and the modern facilities such as fax machines, printing presses and computers. Obviously, improving the other aspects, for instance, the manger could choose a nicer working condition for their employees or contribute money on promoting the companies’ stocks, is totally wise decision. Thus, training their employees will make companies loss more money if their workers choose other companies rather the original companies.

Aside from the forgoing proviso, devoting money to undergraduate students seems a popular investment in the modern society. For students, it is essentially to have some working and training experiences during their campus lives. On one hand, the companies can store more labor forces for the future development. On the other hand, students might have more chance to practice themselves which can put them in the favorable position in the upcoming competitions. Killing two birds with one stone! This investment strategy also meets the ideals of most companies: less investments, more profits. Therefore, both companies and students will get benefits from this policy.

Admittedly, if other factor, like labor force, are ignored accidently and deliberately, it could not a sound analysis that can stand up to a close scrutiny. Apparently, manpower is one of the important section in one company. Without employees, how the works or the projects could go well? How the new and modern electric products come out into the beginning in a short time? However, this consideration would not make me deliver the vital point of my address without sufficient punch.

Personally speaking, even though different people have different dictionaries of their own, I, considering the positive and negative of this issue, I still think labor force is not an important investment for a company in terms of benefits the companies receive and advantages all the whole society enjoy.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-19 18:04
其实我考试的时候写的真的很糟糕的
不骗你因为口语没答好
写作文的时候都没什么力气了
加油其实我觉得不难的
你要是有时间就看看老美185
那里面的观点没有很深奥都是身边的小例子却能得到满分
呵呵咱们一起加油哈~~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-20 20:42
0620 独立~~
110827 NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.

我们也要明白，忍着有的时候是为了更好的了解情况，得到更好的结果；

1对于个人：参加危险活动，我们要想清楚，例如有题我不会做，我想去问别人，但是忍住了，自己解决更好；

2对社会：有的决定对于社会有很大的影响，例如科研，不应该只看到核能有利用价值，就投入生产，最后往往导致全球安全性降低的可能

3但是，有的事情要立即行动，机会往往飞逝，并且有的事情不用考虑

It is a common fact and an indisputable phenomenon that people should take everything into consideration before taking actions. There are some reasons of this phenomenon. It is due to better clear mind people adopt, worse results people avoid, and safer outcome people receive. In my point of view, I definitely agree that it is essential to represent more patience when we take actions.

To begin with, one of advantages of enduring is beneficial to individuals. It is well acknowledged we should keep clear minds, especially facing some emergences or troubles, when we do something else. Take me for example, when I was an elementary school’s student, once our teacher taught us how to use multiplication table to calculate numbers and gave us some assignments related with this knowledge point. However, when I did this homework at home, I found I nearly forget how to calculate number of 5 multiply 6. At the beginning, I wanted to ask my mom to help me figure out this math problem. But I put up with that. Instead, I recited this table again and again, even notice a little knack how to recite it as quickly as possible, although it costs me five hours. Finally, I got an A in this assignment. Thus, patience is more helpful when we do actions.

From the perspective of the whole society, patience is also needed. Patience could not only beneficial to each person, but also do well to nearly all the countries in the world. The invention of nuclear weapon, a causing bad outcome scientific research, is a good example to demonstrate this point. Even though the nuclear weapon could greatly improve the efficient of electronic power, without thinking about the bad aspect of nuclear weapon, people put this power out into the society and military area which may pollute air condition or threaten human’s lives. If the scientists show more patient when they research this power, maybe some bad influences will be avoid. Thus, patience also takes effect on the whole society.

Admittedly, sometimes, on no account can we realize taking action without thinking is also necessary because the opportunities are flying away as quickly as possible. If we could not grasp this chance, maybe we would spend more time on solving this problem. For instance, when I did my homework about multiplication table after I totally understood this process, the time of finishing homework would greatly shorten. Thus, taking action right now probably is good for us.

Personally speaking, even though maybe it is true people have different dictionaries of their own, I still think, under the most circumstance, taking action later is a wise choice in terms of different individuals and the whole world.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-20 21:25
0620 综合写作
tpo4
Both the reading passage and lecture talk about the character of dinosaurs. The professor, in the listening passage, says the dinosaurs are not endotherms. It apparently revises the point illustrated in the reading material. Here are three reasons.

In the first place, the writer discusses the fossils of dinosaurs are found in Polar Regions which show the evidence to verify dinosaurs are endotherms. However, the lecture defies, in the old days, the climate in polar regions were not as cold as nowadays, which means the temperature was much warms than now. But with the temperature coming down, polar dinosaurs could live in these areas and then migrate to some warm regions or hibernation like other reptiles. So, the lecture totally disagrees with the view stand demonstrated by the writer.

In addition, the reading passage describes that the leg position and movement determine dinosaurs are endotherms. Conversely, the professor argues there has other evidence to explain the position of these legs. Obviously, besides the explanation of running, the usage of legs underneath the body is to support its weight because its huge size, which is another part rejects the reading passage.

Furthermore, the reading material claims Haversian canals allow dinosaurs to grow quickly. The professor contends dinosaurs really have Haverisan canals, special bone structure. However, the dinosaurs have growth rings. They can prove the dinosaurs growth slowly or even stop growth at that time. What's more important, the process of quickly growth, slowly or no growth, and quickly growth again is a character of non-endotherms.

In conclusion, all the information about dinosaurs are endotherms in the reading passage objects to the points stand in the lecture.

作者: zombiee 时间: 2012-6-20 23:04

110820NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.

其他东西更值得投资；
投资大学生也挺好；
人力也很重要

Have you ever noticed that more and more companies tend to invest money to joint ventures? Have you ever found the relationship between the universities and companies are getting ~~together~~ closely? Have you ever heart an increasing number of employees are beginning to consider jump-hop to other companies which might have higher salaries or have more chances to promote? If so, you might deeply stand on my side that it is not a wise investment for a company to devote money on to training their employees.
首段排比用的很好
Training workers are not a wise investment for a company. Nowadays, it is well acknowledged that when companies could not give their workers what they want or meet their satisfactions, like promotion, they will leave the companies as quickly as possible without hesitating. A complete company consists of capital, labor force and the modern facilities such as fax machines, printing presses and computers. Obviously, improving the other aspects, for instance, the manger could choose a nicer working condition for their employees or contribute money on promoting the companies’ stocks, is totally +a wise decision. Thus, training their employees will make companies loss more money if their workers choose other companies rather the original companies.

Aside from the forgoing proviso, devoting money to undergraduate students seems a popular investment in the modern society. For students, it is essentially to have some working and training experiences during their campus lives. On one hand, the companies can store more labor forces for the future development. On the other hand, students might have more chance to practice themselves which can put them in the favorable position in the upcoming competitions. Killing two birds with one stone! This investment strategy also meets the ideals of most companies: less investments, more profits. Therefore, both companies and students will get benefits from this policy.

Admittedly, if other factors, like labor force, are ignored accidently and(是不是应该用or) deliberately, it could not +be a sound analysis that can stand up to a close scrutiny. Apparently, manpower is one of the important section in one company. Without employees, how the works or the projects could go well? How the new and modern electric products come out into the beginning in a short time? However, this consideration would not make me deliver the vital point of my address without sufficient punch.个人问一下这句是引用的吗

Personally speaking, even though different people have different dictionaries不解 of their own, I, considering the positive and negative of this issue, I still think labor force is not an important investment for a company in terms of benefits +of the companies ~~receive~~ and ~~advantages~~ welfares of all the whole society enjoy.

-- by 会员 a273007862 (2012/6/19 18:02:46)

总体说从反面写有难度，攻击点只有提升个人技能后回引起跳槽，说投资其他方面也很好反驳略显单薄，说其他方面例如办公条件、市场份额、售前售后更需要提高感觉更有说服力。
另外就是例子较少。
错误较少，句式有变换，用词准确。不错，加油~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-21 06:48
tpo4
Both the reading passage and lecture talk about the character of dinosaurs. The professor, in the listening passage, says the dinosaurs are not endotherms. It apparently revises the point illustrated in the reading material. Here are three reasons.

In the first place, the writer discusses the fossils of dinosaurs that are found in Polar Regions which shows the evidence to verify dinosaurs are endotherms. However, the lecture defies, in the old days, the climate in polar regions were not as cold as nowadays, which means the temperature was much warmser than now. But with the temperature coming down, polar dinosaurs could live in these areas and then migrate to some warm regions or hibernation like other reptiles. 这句好像没有表达清楚啊So, the lecture totally disagrees with the view stand demonstrated by the writer.

In addition, the reading passage describes that the leg position and movement determine dinosaurs are endotherms. Conversely, the professor argues there ~~has other~~ is another evidence explanation to explain the position of these legs. Obviously, besides the explanation of running, the usage of legs underneath the body is to support its weight because its huge size has advantages, which is another part rejects the reading passage.

Furthermore, the reading material claims Haversian canals allow dinosaurs to grow quickly. The professor contends dinosaurs really have Haverisan canals, special bone structure. However, the dinosaurs have growth rings. They can prove the dinosaurs growth slowly or even stop growth at that time. What's more important, the process of quickly growth, slowly or no growth, and quickly growth again is a character of non-endotherms.

In conclusion, all the information about dinosaurs are endotherms in the reading passage objects to the points stand in the lecture.

没什么问题可挑啦
就是听力个别地方没听到~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-21 08:16

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

It is a common fact and an indisputable phenomenon that people should take everything into consideration before taking actions. There are some reasons of this phenomenon. It is due to better clear mind people adopt, worse results people avoid, and safer outcome people receive. In my point of view, I definitely agree that it is essential to represent more patience when we take actions.

To begin with, one of advantages of enduring is beneficial to individuals. It is well acknowledged we should keep clear minds, especially facing some emergences or troubles, （or）when we do something else. Take me for example, when I was an elementary school’s student, once our teacher taught us how to use multiplication table to calculate numbers and gave us some assignments related with this knowledge point. However, when I did this homework at home, I found I nearly forget how to calculate number of 5 multiply 6. At the beginning, I wanted to ask my mom to help me figure out this math problem. But I put up with that. Instead, I recited this table again and again, even notice a little knack how to recite it as quickly as possible, although it costs me five hours. Finally, I got an A in this assignment. Thus, patience is more helpful when we do actions.

From the perspective of the whole society, patience is also needed. Patience could not only beneficial to each person, but also do well to nearly all the countries in（around） the world. The invention of nuclear weapon, a causing bad outcome scientific research, is a good example to demonstrate this point. Even though the nuclear weapon could greatly improve the efficient of electronic power, without thinking about the bad aspect of nuclear weapon, people put this power out into the society and military area which may pollute air condition or threaten human’s lives. If the scientists show more patient when they research this power, maybe some bad influences will be avoid（这句用过去式比较好吧）. Thus, patience also takes effect on the whole society.

Admittedly, sometimes, on no account can we realize taking action without thinking is also necessary because the opportunities are flying away as quickly as possible. If we could not grasp this chance, maybe we would spend more time on solving this problem. For instance, when I did my homework about multiplication table after I totally understood this process, the time of finishing homework would greatly shorten. Thus, taking action right now probably is good for us (me in this particular situation这样是不是可以更突出主题，然后再加上在某些特殊情况下对人们也是适用的。).

Personally speaking, even though maybe it is true people have different dictionaries of their own, I still think, under the most circumstances, taking action later is a wise choice in terms of different individuals and the whole world.

XiaoA姐的作文可以改的很少了，呵呵，不过看后很受启发的说。

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 17:56
0621 独立
110815NA
One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help?

我帮他：
我每天课不多,有时间；
我比t懂他；
T花钱

It is a common fact and an indisputable phenomenon that an increasing number of students would like to hire a professional tutor to help them. It is due to difficulty courses students receive, many assignments students should finish, and the resourceful tutors have. However, in my point of view, I still I could help my classmate better than a tutor.

To begin with, sometimes, asking a tutor for help is not convenient. As we all know, the responsibilities of tutors could not only help students figure out academic problems they meet off class, but also prepare the other knowledge or information which will explain and interpret in class. So, maybe they have less time to induct us as the mentors. Conversely, I have an abundant of free time. My classmate could ask me at any time because I do not have so- called “office hour”. For example, if my roommate has a question about the periodical table in chemistry, she could ask me when she gets up early at morning in weekend. Thus, no one could deny how convenient it is!

In addition, I know my friend better, comparing with the tutors. Suppose, in a large- scale lecture hall, there are nearly one hundred students in the classroom. Could the tutors call out the name of each student? Obviously, it is impossible. On no account can they really know the character or the personality of a student. If they could not know much about a student, tutors could not help students in a proper way. However, it will be different when I face this problem. Every day, I spend much time on communicating with my classmates. I could know most of them about their study habits. Thus, when my classmate faces some problems in doing their assignments, I could interpret these academic questions on depending their different ways of learning. In this way, they could better understanding the answers.

Furthermore, we would pay some money to tutors because of the instruction. Especially, when we need a professional tutor, the price of tutoring will even higher. All of these could make students cause budget tensions. However, if I could give my classmates a hand, they could save a lot of money. Also, there is an old saying: a friend in need is a friend indeed. Thus, I could do my utmost to help others about their schoolwork.

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that students have different dictionaries of their own on finding proper guides which may tutor them, I still think I am a perfect candidate who could help my friends better in terms of convenience, all-round knowing and free-fee.

442
40min

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 18:53
0621
tpo5：
Both the reading passage and lecture are talking about how the buildings are used before. However, the professor, in the lecture, defies these buildings are not used just like illustrated in the reading passage. It totally revises the points stand in the reading material. Here are three reasons.

In the first place, the reading passage describes this Chaco structures are used for residents. In other words, hundreds of people could live there. However, the lecture says, from the outside of these building, it really looks like apartments. But, from the inside of this building, it is not used for living. If hundreds of people live in these places, there must have many fire places, which are very important for citizens, because people use them for cooking. Obviously, there are few fire places in these building. On the other hand, there are not enough rooms to hold so many people living. Thus, the professor apparently disagrees with the view demonstrated in the reading passage.

In addition, the reading material says these Chaco structures could be used to store food supplies because the grain maize could be stored for long periods of time without spoiling. Nevertheless, the professor argues there is no evidence to verify this point. In these buildings, there are no maize on the floor or maize containers. So, it is unnecessary the usages of buildings are storing food. Therefore, this is another part which rejects the reading passage.

Furthermore, the reading passage states these houses are used for ceremonies. Nearby these buildings, archaeologists could find lots of mound formed by a pile of old materials- broken pots and etc. Conversely, the professor thinks the pots and other old material could only be found in certain areas. What's more, around these findings, there also have many trashes. Even though archaeologist found some pots which may be used for meals, there has another explanation about this phenomenon besides ceremony. It would be some containers for food used by construction workers instead of used for festivals. Consequently, the third reason is butted.

In conclusion, all the information illustrated in the reading passage objects to the points stand in the lecture.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 19:03

110820NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important investment for a company is to spend money to improve the work skills of its employees.

其他东西更值得投资；
投资大学生也挺好；
人力也很重要

Have you ever noticed that more and more companies tend to invest money to joint ventures? Have you ever found the relationship between the universities and companies are getting ~~together~~ closely? Have you ever heart an increasing number of employees are beginning to consider jump-hop to other companies which might have higher salaries or have more chances to promote? If so, you might deeply stand on my side that it is not a wise investment for a company to devote money on to training their employees.
首段排比用的很好
Training workers are not a wise investment for a company. Nowadays, it is well acknowledged that when companies could not give their workers what they want or meet their satisfactions, like promotion, they will leave the companies as quickly as possible without hesitating. A complete company consists of capital, labor force and the modern facilities such as fax machines, printing presses and computers. Obviously, improving the other aspects, for instance, the manger could choose a nicer working condition for their employees or contribute money on promoting the companies’ stocks, is totally +a wise decision. Thus, training their employees will make companies loss more money if their workers choose other companies rather the original companies.

Aside from the forgoing proviso, devoting money to undergraduate students seems a popular investment in the modern society. For students, it is essentially to have some working and training experiences during their campus lives. On one hand, the companies can store more labor forces for the future development. On the other hand, students might have more chance to practice themselves which can put them in the favorable position in the upcoming competitions. Killing two birds with one stone! This investment strategy also meets the ideals of most companies: less investments, more profits. Therefore, both companies and students will get benefits from this policy.

Admittedly, if other factors, like labor force, are ignored accidently and(是不是应该用or) deliberately, it could not +be a sound analysis that can stand up to a close scrutiny. Apparently, manpower is one of the important section in one company. Without employees, how the works or the projects could go well? How the new and modern electric products come out into the beginning in a short time? However, this consideration would not make me deliver the vital point of my address without sufficient punch.个人问一下这句是引用的吗

Personally speaking, even though different people have different dictionaries不解 of their own, I, considering the positive and negative of this issue, Istill think labor force is not an important investment for a company in terms of benefits +of the companies ~~receive~~ and ~~advantages~~ welfares of all the whole society enjoy.

-- by 会员 a273007862 (2012/6/19 18:02:46)

-- by 会员 zombiee (2012/6/20 23:04:03)

亲~能说的详细点吗？
这个文章真的很难写~~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 19:05

tpo4
Both the reading passage and lecture talk about the character of dinosaurs. The professor, in the listening passage, says the dinosaurs are not endotherms. It apparently revises the point illustrated in the reading material. Here are three reasons.

In the first place, the writer discusses the fossils of dinosaurs that are found in Polar Regions which shows the evidence to verify dinosaurs are endotherms. However, the lecture defies, in the old days, the climate in polar regions were not as cold as nowadays, which means the temperature was much warmser than now. But with the temperature coming down, polar dinosaurs could live in these areas and then migrate to some warm regions or hibernation like other reptiles. 这句好像没有表达清楚啊So, the lecture totally disagrees with the view stand demonstrated by the writer.

In addition, the reading passage describes that the leg position and movement determine dinosaurs are endotherms. Conversely, the professor argues there ~~has other~~ is another evidence explanation to explain the position of these legs. Obviously, besides the explanation of running, the usage of legs underneath the body is to support its weight because its huge size has advantages, which is another part rejects the reading passage.

Furthermore, the reading material claims Haversian canals allow dinosaurs to grow quickly. The professor contends dinosaurs really have Haverisan canals, special bone structure. However, the dinosaurs have growth rings. They can prove the dinosaurs growth slowly or even stop growth at that time. What's more important, the process of quickly growth, slowly or no growth, and quickly growth again is a character of non-endotherms.

In conclusion, all the information about dinosaurs are endotherms in the reading passage objects to the points stand in the lecture.

没什么问题可挑啦
就是听力个别地方没听到~

-- by 会员包子不包子 (2012/6/21 6:48:18)

包子你又这种情况吗：就是每次听的时候手跟不上脑袋听到了但是记不下来，而且有的时候记下来了过了一会又忘了这快是怎么跟前面联系起来的~~你是怎么办的呢~求解啊~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-21 22:35
多谢xiaoA姐的辛苦修改额。要好好改正并多看多修改了

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-21 22:39

多谢xiaoA姐的辛苦修改额。要好好改正并多看多修改了

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/21 22:35:04)

你的文章架构是很好的~~但是一定要注意拼写啊~~
这个会扣分的啊~~呵呵
写完了用word检查一下然后自己总结总结~~下次的时候多注意就好了~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-22 10:00
今天我也改改xiaoA姐的了，就是发现不了多少错误。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-22 12:02

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

It is a common fact and an indisputable phenomenon that an increasing number of students would like to hire a professional tutor to help them. It is due to difficulty courses students receive, many assignments students should finish, and the resourceful tutors have. However, in my point of view, I still （believe） I could help my classmate better than a tutor.

To begin with, sometimes, asking a tutor for help is not convenient. As we all know, the responsibilities of tutors could（are） not only help students figure out academic problems they meet off class, but also prepare the other knowledge or information which will explain and interpret in class. So, maybe they have less time to induct us as the mentors. Conversely, I have an abundant of free time. My classmate could ask me at any time because I do not have so- called “office hour”. For example, if my roommate has a question about the periodical table in chemistry, she could ask me when she gets up early at morning in weekend. Thus, no one could deny how convenient it is!

In addition, I know my friend better, comparing with the tutors. Suppose, in a large- scale lecture hall, there are nearly one hundred students in the classroom. Could the tutors call out the name of each student? Obviously, it is impossible. On no account can they really know the character or the personality of a student. If they could not know much about a student, tutors could not help students in a proper way. However, it will be different when I face this problem. Every day, I spend much time on communicating with my classmates. I could know most of them about their study habits. Thus, when my classmate faces some problems in doing their assignments, I could interpret these academic questions on depending on their different ways of learning. In this way, they could have a better understanding about the answers.

Furthermore, we would pay some money to tutors because of the instruction. Especially, when we need a professional tutor, the price of tutoring will even higher. All of these could make students cause budget tensions. However, if I could give my classmates a hand, they could save a lot of money（the helps which I provided are obviously free,so my classmates could save some money）. Also, there is an old saying: a friend in need is a friend indeed.(这里，friend和classmate还是有区别的额) Thus, I could（always） do my utmost to help others about their schoolwork. （这段的连贯性不是很好的说）

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that students have different dictionaries of their own on finding proper guides which may tutor them, I still think I am a perfect candidate who could help my friends better in terms of convenience, all-round knowing and free-fee.

整体不错，能在40分钟内写出，很具有挑战性了。

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-22 12:03
另外，xiaoA姐背些万能例子吧，写作的时候就把这些例子写为自己的经历，查重也查不到的。

作者: 瓜瓜不瓜 时间: 2012-6-23 13:26
蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误
0621 独立
110815NA
One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help?
我帮他：
我每天课不多,有时间；
我比t懂他；
T花钱
It is a common fact and an indisputable phenomenon that an increasing number of students would like to hire a professional tutor to help them. It is due to difficulty courses students receive, many assignments students should finish, and the resourceful tutors have. However, in my point of view, I still I could help my classmate better than a tutor.（感觉表达有点生硬，改成 my classmate can receive better help from me than from a professional tutor ）

To begin with, sometimes, asking a tutor for help is not convenient. As we all know, the responsibilities of tutors could not only help students figure out academic problems they meet off class, but also prepare the other knowledge or information which will explain and interpret in class.（有问题的表达，主语是responsibilities, 但是谓语却用了help和prepare,这两个verb搭配的主语应该是sb，直接用be动词做谓语即可）So, maybe they have less time to induct（induct的意思是正式任职，用在这里语义不对） us as the mentors. Conversely, I havean abundant of （abundant是adj. 应该是abundance吧？但是没见过这个词组，最好自己查一下字典哦）free time. My classmate could ask me at any time because I do not have so- called “office hour”. For example, if my roommate has a question about the periodical table in chemistry, she could ask me when she gets up early at morning in weekend. Thus, no one could deny how convenient it is!
In addition, I know my friend better, comparing with the tutors（移到前面更好）. Suppose, in a large- scale lecture hall, there are nearly one hundred students in the classroom. Could the tutors call out the name of each student? Obviously, it is impossible. On no account can they really know the character or the personality of a student. If they could not know much about a student, tutors could not help students in a proper way. However, it will be different when I face this problem. Every day, I spend much time on communicating with my classmates. I could know most of them about their study habits. Thus, when my classmate faces some problems in doing their assignments, I could interpret these academic questions on depending their different ways of learning. In this way, they could better understanding the answers.
Furthermore, we would pay some money to tutors because of the instruction. Especially, when we need a professional tutor, the price of tutoring will even higher. All of these could make students cause budget tensions. However, if I could give my classmates a hand, they could save a lot of money. Also, there is an old saying: a friend in need is a friend indeed. Thus, I could do my utmost to help others about their schoolwork. (上下逻辑不通，后面一句写成帮助坚固我们之间的友情更好)

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that students have different dictionaries of their own on finding proper guides which may tutor them, I still think I am a perfect candidate who could help my friends better in terms of convenience, all-round knowing and free-fee.

第一次见面，多多指教，瓜瓜改的有点严厉了，A同学多多见谅。

总评：文章结构完整，思路也很完整，但是有表达不是很合适。上下文的逻辑也需要稍微注意一下。拼写基本没有错误，赞一个

本来应该A同学给我批22号的独立哒，但是小分队有人说已经写过了，so瓜瓜偷懒木有写，so，A同学就不用帮我改了哈。

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-23 20:44
0623
101030NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.
高等的教育；系统的学习；竞争
It is a common and an indisputable fact that people are much easier to become education than in the past. There are many reasons to cause this situation. Generally speaking, it is due to high level of education, system learning or even more competition. In my point of view, a growing number of people receive more education easily, and they can gain knowledge more convenient than the past.

In the first place, the reason is an increasing level of education and development of living condition. Suppose, fifty years ago, the condition of education. Our grandparents may had no chance to get education. On one hand, they are so poverty that their home hardly could support them to get further study. On the other hand, what's more important, nearly no teachers had educated well, not to mention my grandma can received a better instruction. However, due to the high level of education, we could not only have knowledgeable and resourceful of teachers, but also could easily access to a huge number of information and knowledge by ourselves, because nowadays more and more media come into our life, such as Internet or television programs. .thanks to the invention of the computer and the internet, we can search all kinds of information through the internet. Also, the television shows, like CNN and discovery, help us broaden our horizon and better understand the whole world. So we can sink in an atmosphere full of education.

In addition, compare to the past, nowadays we accept more scientific learning system gradually. For example, in an elementary school, kids need to study multiplication table so that they can calculate numbers by themselves, and lay the foundation for the further study. When they are in high school, they need take advantage of the knowledge of multiplication table to understand the meaning of algebra. Then, going to the university, they should learn the calculus by understanding the multiplication table and algebra. Hence, learning system is more scientific than past, and the students can better understand the meaning of the academic information.

Furthermore, the third reason is more competitions. People pursue further educational degree, especially master degree and doctorate degree, because they realize that applying jobs are not easy tasks to them anymore. In old days, a person who has a bachelor degree can work in one of the TOP 500 companies. However, now, it is impossible. So they need to study harder and learn more knowledge to put them in favorable positions in the upcoming competitions.

To sum up, the reasons why people are much easier become education than in the past is the easier access of acquiring knowledge, the more understandable way of learning information and the stronger desire of gain knowledge, people in modern society can learn much faster than they used to do in the past.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-23 20:48

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误
0621 独立
110815NA
One of your classmates needs help with some schoolwork. Which solution would you recommend your classmate should do: to ask you for help or to find a professional tutor for help?
我帮他：
我每天课不多,有时间；
我比t懂他；
T花钱
It is a common fact and an indisputable phenomenon that an increasing number of students would like to hire a professional tutor to help them. It is due to difficulty courses students receive, many assignments students should finish, and the resourceful tutors have. However, in my point of view, I still I could help my classmate better than a tutor.（感觉表达有点生硬，改成 my classmate can receive better help from me than from a professional tutor ）

To begin with, sometimes, asking a tutor for help is not convenient. As we all know, the responsibilities of tutors could not only help students figure out academic problems they meet off class, but also prepare the other knowledge or information which will explain and interpret in class.（有问题的表达，主语是responsibilities, 但是谓语却用了help和prepare,这两个verb搭配的主语应该是sb，直接用be动词做谓语即可）So, maybe they have less time to induct（induct的意思是正式任职，用在这里语义不对） us as the mentors. Conversely, I havean abundant of （abundant是adj. 应该是abundance吧？但是没见过这个词组，最好自己查一下字典哦）free time. My classmate could ask me at any time because I do not have so- called “office hour”. For example, if my roommate has a question about the periodical table in chemistry, she could ask me when she gets up early at morning in weekend. Thus, no one could deny how convenient it is!
In addition, I know my friend better, comparing with the tutors（移到前面更好）. Suppose, in a large- scale lecture hall, there are nearly one hundred students in the classroom. Could the tutors call out the name of each student? Obviously, it is impossible. On no account can they really know the character or the personality of a student. If they could not know much about a student, tutors could not help students in a proper way. However, it will be different when I face this problem. Every day, I spend much time on communicating with my classmates. I could know most of them about their study habits. Thus, when my classmate faces some problems in doing their assignments, I could interpret these academic questions on depending their different ways of learning. In this way, they could better understanding the answers.
Furthermore, we would pay some money to tutors because of the instruction. Especially, when we need a professional tutor, the price of tutoring will even higher. All of these could make students cause budget tensions. However, if I could give my classmates a hand, they could save a lot of money. Also, there is an old saying: a friend in need is a friend indeed. Thus, I could do my utmost to help others about their schoolwork. (上下逻辑不通，后面一句写成帮助坚固我们之间的友情更好)

Personally speaking, although maybe it is true that students have different dictionaries of their own on finding proper guides which may tutor them, I still think I am a perfect candidate who could help my friends better in terms of convenience, all-round knowing and free-fee.

第一次见面，多多指教，瓜瓜改的有点严厉了，A同学多多见谅。

总评：文章结构完整，思路也很完整，但是有表达不是很合适。上下文的逻辑也需要稍微注意一下。拼写基本没有错误，赞一个

本来应该A同学给我批22号的独立哒，但是小分队有人说已经写过了，so瓜瓜偷懒木有写，so，A同学就不用帮我改了哈。

-- by 会员瓜瓜不瓜 (2012/6/23 13:26:16)

哈哈好的~~我才看见~~是我说的哈哈那个是0617刚考的肯定是不会考了~~我们一起加油哈~~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-23 20:53

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

整体不错，能在40分钟内写出，很具有挑战性了。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/22 12:02:03)

哈哈谢谢k改的文章，改的好好确实我的第三个观点有点薄弱~~托福不用举什么特别出名的例子就身边的小例子就好，什么我姐我妈我爸我弟我舅舅哈哈~~把身边人都写遍了就行哈哈~~

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-23 21:30
tpo7 0623
Both the reading material and reading passage talk about an international organization start use certification to wood companies. However, the lecturer, in the listening passage, says many wood companies have adopted new, ecologically friendly practices in order to receive certification in the United States. It apparently revised the idea illustrated in the reading material.

First of all, in the reading passage, the author states that American consumers are vulnerable to so many advertising because they could not evaluate the labels of ecocertificaition. However, the professor defies the American consumers do not treat all the ads as the same. They can distinguish these productions independently. They have confidence to judge if the products are worth to buy or not. So the lecture totally disagrees with the standpoint made in the reading passage.

In addition, the reading material asserts that the prices of woods will be increasing because woods have been examined by a certification agency. Conversely, the professor maintains that the American consumers do really think more about the price, especially when the prices are much higher or lower than other competitors. But the prices of discrepancy of the two products are small, say less than 5%, the American consumers think others more than prices. For example, one person who values to pursue the products is that if the products are benefit for environment. It is different from what is stand in the passage.

Furthermore, the reading material says it is unnecessary to keep up with the development in the rest of the world. Nevertheless, the professor contends the company should pay attention on the international business is because the foreign competitor rather than the foreign consumer. If the native business is slow, some foreign company will go into the nation.

To sum up, all the information about certification illustrated in the lecture objects to the points in the reading passage.

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-24 13:05

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

It is a common and an indisputable fact that people are much easier to become education （now）than in the past. There are many reasons to cause this situation. Generally speaking, it is due to high level of education, system learning or even more competition. In my point of view, a growing number of people receive more education easily, （and）at the same time(这样可以和上半句关联额) they can gain knowledge more convenient than the past.

In the first place, the reason is an increasing level of education and development of living condition. Suppose, fifty years ago, the condition of education. Our grandparents may had no chance to get education. On one hand, they are so poverty that their home hardly could support them to get further study. On the other hand, what's more important, nearly no teachers had educated well, not to mention my grandma can received a better instruction. However, due to the high level of education（nowadays）, we could not only have knowledgeable and resourceful of teachers, but also could easily access to a huge number of information and knowledge by ourselves, because nowadays more and more media come into our life, such as Internet or television programs. .thanks to the invention of the computer and the internet, we can search all kinds of information through the internet. Also, the television shows, like CNN and discovery, help us broaden our horizon and better understand the whole world. So we can sink in an atmosphere full of education.

In addition, compared to the past, nowadays we accept more scientific learning system gradually. For example, in an elementary school, kids need to study multiplication table so that they can calculate numbers by themselves, and lay the foundation for the further study. When they are in high school, they need take advantage of the knowledge of multiplication table to understand the meaning of algebra. Then, going to the university, they should learn the calculus by understanding the multiplication table and algebra. Hence, learning system is more scientific than past, and the students can better understand the meaning of the academic information.

Furthermore, the third reason is more competitions. People pursue further educational degree, especially master degree and doctorate degree, because they realize that applying jobs are not easy tasks to them anymore. In old days, a person who has a bachelor degree can work in one of the TOP 500 companies. However, now, it is impossible. So they need to study harder and learn more knowledge to put them in favorable positions in（to face） the upcoming competitions.

To sum up, the reasons why people are much easier become education（educated） than in the past is the easier access of acquiring knowledge, the more understandable（convenient） way of learning（achieving） information and the stronger desire of gain knowledge, people in modern society can learn much faster than they used to do in the past.

XiaoA姐限时写的作文有一点小错误了，整体还是很好。

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-24 13:34
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Both the ~~reading~~ listening material and reading passage talk about an international organization, which starts use certification to wood companies. However, the lecturer, in the listening passage, says many wood companies have adopted new, ecologically friendly practices in order to receive certification in the United States. It apparently revised the idea illustrated in the reading material.

First of all, in the reading passage, the author states that American consumers are vulnerable to so many advertising because they could not evaluate the labels of ecocertificaition. However, the professor defies the American consumers do not treat all the ads as the same. They can distinguish these productions independently. They have confidence to judge if the products are worth to buy or not. So the lecture totally disagrees with the standpoint made in the reading passage.independent ecofriendly agency 没有听到啊

In addition, the reading material asserts that the prices of woods will be increasing because woods have been examined by a certification agency. Conversely, the professor maintains that the American consumers do really think more about the price, especially when the prices are much higher or lower than other competitors. But the prices of discrepancy of the two products are small, say less than 5%, the American consumers thinkconsider about others more than prices. For example, one person who values to pursue the products is that if the products are benefit for environment. It is different from what is stand in the passage.

Furthermore, the reading material says it is unnecessary to keep up with the development in the rest of the world. Nevertheless, the professor contends the company should pay attention on the international business is because it is the foreign competitor rather than the foreign consumer没说完？. If the native business is slow, some foreign company will go into the nation.

To sum up, all the information about certification illustrated in the lecture objects to the points in the reading passage.

最后一个方面论证不够细致啊
其他还好啦

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