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作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-4 12:25
标题: Vanessa923的作文贴！6月4日起全力以赴写作！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should encourage their children to do their schoolwork independently rather than help children to do their schoolwork.
Nowadays,parents play a increasingly crutial role in children's education and well-being.Some argue parents should encourage their children to deal with homework independently in wish for children's independent thinking ability rather than work with the children with the schoolwork.I disagree with this claim .
First and foremost,both parents and children can cooperate and communicate in the learning process,thus in turn promote their communication and improve their understanding and relationship.When I was in primary school,every night my parents would spend 1 hour assisting me in my study.After analyzing my problems and give me some hints,I would always feel out of puzzle.Besides,there always came a happy discussion about my school life,like how was my friend Kate who always cried out in fear of math calss and whether my English teacher married who always emphasize being single.These funny stories always make us giggle and trully reinforce the parent-and-children relationship.
In addition,by helping children with their schoolwork,parents can check the children's study plan and make some reasonable ajustments.For instance,if the child is apt at math while poor at English,concious of this imbalance,the parents can make a plan for the child.They can arouse the child's interest of English by taking the child to Enlish corner or watching English movies with the child.All these ajustments can nurture the child's interest in Enlish.Consequently,child can really benefit from the kind of flavor by adding english into the child's life.
Though some claim that let the child finish his/her homework independently can develop their independent thinking ability,but the parents can also achieve this goal by giving a hand.Here is a good suggestion,parents can set a time for child'sindependently handling schoolwork.In this way,the chances of children seeking for answers instantly without thinking can be avoided.Then after the time,parents can check the schoolwork and help finding the blind spots. Moreover,the parents can even help children conquer the dilemma of the neck-of-bottle when this problem was overlooked.
In a nutshell,with the guidence and scrutinize of parents,the children can not only have a better understand of their study,but their own being-their own advantages and disadvantages,their gifts and shortcomings.
算了一下，才343个字。。不知道会不会有点少啊。。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-4 12:38
再来加个提纲，比较方便大家改。
1.不同意
2，理由1有助于父母与子女间的交流，从而加强父母子女关系。例子自己编
3.理由2有助于父母及时检查学习计划。
4.转折，诚然可以提高孩子独立思考能力，但是父母一起学也可以。加建议
5，总结。
各路牛人都可以看看，提提意见哈。小女子先在此谢过啦。O(∩_∩)O~

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-4 12:46
昨日习作Questions:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
提纲：同意
1.体验新事物可以踏入新领域，获得意想不到的结果。e.g.Elon Musk
2.能更好适应社会。自己找工作例子。
3.让步
4.总结
Asked what successful people have in common,some people would say they kept trying new experiences
and take risks.While some people argue that they focus on doing what they are good at.As far as I am
concerned,successful humans would rather challenge themselves than stick to the status-quo.
First,by experiencing new things and going outside to take risks,people can step into the unknown world they are not familiar with and gain some challenges and even unexpencting results.Take Elon Musk as an example,after droping out of university and started his own business comapany,we all thinnk maybe it's the best result for him.However,to our suprise,with the money by selling the paypal to Ebay,he made an astouding decision-to set up his own sapce company and send the satelite into orbit.He made it and it's really a big turning point for him,even for the world.
Second,though trying new things we can better adapt ourselves into society and the world.An illustrsting example is my own experience.In the second summer holiday of my college life,I intended to take a part time job as a turtor as usual.However,my mother suggested me taking a quite different job."You need to try different jobs and you will know where you go to."She said.At last,I chose to be a sales girl in a private shop which sells handbags and suitcase.I really benefit a lot.Not only this job offers me a good oppotunity to paratice my oral English,but helps improve my communication skills.Noew I am quite talkative and can easily get along with others.
Though some people oppose by saying that you may lose everything by risking.But to me,life is long,and you will never know what will happen next.Even if you lose the money,the reputation,but who can say you can never get them back in the end?Who knows?
After experiecing new things and enjoying beautiful scenery along the long road of life,you will find your life colouful and worthwile.

作者: Crystaljoy 时间: 2012-6-4 17:22
wow~好认真的孩子哦！

但是记得去大本营回复哦，然后晚上才会被分组。规则在大本营首页~加油！

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-4 19:04
呵呵。好滴。。。。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-4 22:12
TPO12
The reading passage explores the subject of a professionally painted portrait and the lecturer talks about the same issue.However,contrary to the claim in the reading passage that the subject is Jane Austen,the professor argues for the following reasons.
First,though Austen's family recognize the portrait as Jane Austen with the illustration of her letters,the professor contends there are evidence showing the letter was written in 1882 when Jane had been dead for 17 yeaes.So that shows there is no chance for the family to use the letter as evidence.This directly contradicts the counterpart in the reading passage.
In addition,the writer suggests that the subject in the picture resembles the real Jane Austen in Cassandra's sketch,however,the lecturer oppose it by pointing out that the subject could be any character in Jane's big family-the cousin or the cousin's children ,any relative could be similar in the appearance.
Last,the reading passage claims that the style of the painting is linked to Ozias Humphrey,who just existed in the same period when Jane Austen was a teenager.While the the professor argues that the paiting was produced in the time when Jane was indeed elder in the portrait.In other words,it couldn't be Jane Austen.
In conclusion,the proffesor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the main idea in the reading-that is, the subject in the portrait is Jane Austen,is incorrect.

作者: lxc1989614 时间: 2012-6-5 09:55
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should encourage their children to do their schoolwork independently rather than help children to do their schoolwork.
Nowadays,parents play a increasingly crutial（crucial） role in children's education and well-being.Some argue parents should encourage their children to deal with homework independently in wish for children's independent thinking ability rather than work with the children with the schoolwork.这句话太长啦~I disagree with this claim .你的观点要，明确讲出来
First and foremost,both parents and children can cooperate and communicate in the learning process,thus in turn promote their communication and improve their understanding and relationship.When I was in primary school,every night my parents would spend 1 hour assisting me in my study.After analyzing my problems and give me some hints,I would always feel out of puzzle.Besides,there always came a happy discussion about my school life,like how was my friend Kate who always cried out in fear of math calss class and whether my English teacher married who always emphasizes being single.These funny stories always make us giggle and trully reinforce the parent-and-children relationship.我感觉这个例子不是很恰当。。到后面怎么变成八卦了。。。
In addition,by helping children with their schoolwork,parents can check the children's study plan and make some reasonable ajustments.For instance,if the child is apt at math while poor at English,concious of this imbalance,the parents can make a plan for the child.They can arouse the child's interest of English by taking the child to Enlish corner or watching English movies with the child.All these ajustments can nurture the child's interest in EnlishEnglish.Consequently,child can really benefit from the kind of flavor by adding english into the child's life.
Though some claim that letting the child finish his/her his or her homework independently can develop their independent thinking ability,but the parents can also achieve this goal by giving a hand.Here is a good suggestion,parents can set a time for child'sindependently handling schoolwork.In this way,the chances of children seeking for answers instantly without thinking can be avoided.Then after the time,parents can check the schoolwork and help finding the blind spots. Moreover,the parents can even help children conquer the dilemma of the neck-of-bottle when this problem was overlooked.
In a nutshell,with the guidence and scrutinize of parents,the children can not only have a better understand of their study,but their own being-their own?? advantages and disadvantages,their gifts and shortcomings.

主要有几个问题：
1、拼写错误，建议楼主写完后自查一遍
2、有许多中式的表达方法不能理解，建议多看一点地道的表达方法
3、时态、语法什么的貌似比较混乱（因为本人语法不好，所以有些语法的问题也不是很清楚）

作者: joan31217 时间: 2012-6-5 12:40
TPO12
The reading passage explores the subject of a professionally painted portrait and the lecturer talks about the same issue.However,contrary to the claim in the reading passage that the subject is Jane Austen,the professor argues for the following reasons.

First,though Austen's family recognize the portrait as Jane Austen with the illustration of her letters,the professor contends there are evidence showing the letter was written in 1882 when Jane had been dead for 17 70　yeaers.So that shows there is no chance for the family to use the letter as evidence.This directly contradicts the counterpart in the reading passage.

In addition,the writer suggests that the subject in the picture resembles the real Jane Austen in Cassandra's sketch,however,the lecturer opposes it by pointing out (好句子） that the subject could be any character in Jane's big family-the cousin or the cousin's children ,any relative could be similar in the appearance.

Last,the reading passage claims that the style of the painting is linked to Ozias Humphrey,who just existed in the same period when Jane Austen was a teenager.While the the professor argues that the paiting was produced in the time when Jane was indeed elder in the portrait.（这句话里没提blank canvas,这才是重点） In other words,it couldn't be Jane Austen.

In conclusion,the proffesor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the main idea in the reading-that is, the subject in the portrait is Jane Austen,is incorrect.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-6 18:45
标题: 6.5独立--写死我了。
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past.
People ofen find themselves in dilemmas-am I prettier than others or whether I should quit my job when bored with the work?Or like the statement,are we less happy and less satisfied than people in the past?For this puzzle,I would say,no,I don't think we are living a less happy and satisfied life than our forebears.
First and foremost, compared with 20 or 30 years ago,people's health conditions are greatly improved with improvements both in medical and technology.As an survey reveals,the life span of human beings has increased to 72 on average at an astounding rate in just 30 years.The research really shows that we are living a healthier and longer life.An illustrating example is my grandmother.Once we had a talk and she told me she gave birth to 8 children before the founding of the new nation.At that time people suffered a lot from the war and the famine.So it is imaginable that she lost 3 children 3 weeks after they came to this world for the lack of food and the haunt of disease.I feel pity for the miserable life at that time and I think if it is set in the present background, it can not happen.
In addition,with such a wide variety of entertainment to choose from,people can have a wider choice to choose the way they live.I believe nowadays we have a better understanding of ourselves with better and higher education.And it is not difficult to find what we really pursue.My uncle,a middle- aged man,determined to travel in Thailand for a month after experiencing the bottom point in his career."I am tired of the present life and I wanna try a quite different life style for a break",he said.Yes,if one is fed up with the present life,he can choose whatever life he likes.raging from travelling to volunteer.This wider mental recreation can help us live an easy life.
Some people cliam that we may not contented with the present life with better life and wider choices,thus we are less satisfied and less happy. However,I still think seeking for happiness is humans' ultimate desire.As long as the world is peaceful and we are healthy,can 't we say that it is the true happiness we are seeking for? Obviously we are enjoying this kind of life.
In a nutshell.there is no definite answer to whether we are happy with the past life or the present life .As long as we accept what we are and where we are,the best time is just before our eyes.

作者: 默存追日 时间: 2012-6-6 22:00

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past.
People ~~ofen~~(often) find themselves in dilemmas-am I prettier than others or whether I should quit my job when bored with the work?(语法问题：破折号后面是否可以跟随一般疑问句我不太确定，但是，用or并列两个句子的话，至少应该同为疑问句或是同为陈述句。)Or （or一般用作连词，可以并列词和句子，此处同学应该是想应用副词吧？）like（不知道托福怎样要求，GMAT要求举例不用like，用such as吧。） the statement,（逗号后面要有个空格，格式要求。）are we less happy and less satisfied than people in the past?For this puzzle,I would say,no,（run-on语法错误，两个句子并列没有连词）I don't think we are living a less happy and satisfied life than our forebears.（（喜欢这个词的用法。）
First and foremost, compared with 20 or 30 years ago,people's health conditions are greatly improved with improvements （个人觉得，既然之前用了improve的话，后面尽量避免其名词形式improvement，要是我的话，会用development等。）both in medical and technology.（句号后面也是要空一格。）As an survey reveals,（觉得survey的应用值得学习，自己写的时候没有想到应用survey进行论点阐述。）the life span of human beings has increased to 72 on average at an astounding （同学词汇量很好。）rate in just 30 years.The research really shows that we are living a healthier and longer life.An illustrating example is my grandmother.Once we had a talk and （and此处多余了，once在这里做连词了。） she told me （宾语从句在此处是否可以省略引导词？不确定，但是觉得加上that肯定是不会错。）she gave birth to 8 children before the founding of the new nation.At that time people suffered a lot from the war and the famine（学习新词了。）.So it is imaginable that she lost 3 children 3 weeks after they came to this world for the lack of food and the haunt of disease（此处的and并列会不会造成歧义，建议补出介词for。还有逻辑上，两个部分并不适合并列，逻辑含义不对，要是“住在疾病蔓延的地方”的话，是可以和“食物缺乏”并列的）.I feel pity for the miserable life at that time and I think if it is set in the present background, it can not happen.
In addition,with such a wide variety of entertainment to choose from,people can have a wider choice to choose（choose换成make吧，make a choice） the way they live.I believe （加上that比较好些，注意补上that的时候的副词nowadays的位置，副词位置不同，修饰对象不同。）nowadays we have a better understanding of ourselves with better and higher education.And it is not difficult to find what we really pursue.My uncle,a middle- aged man,determined to travel in Thailand for a month after experiencing the bottom point in his career."I am tired of the present life and I wanna try a quite different life style for a break",he said.Yes,if one is fed up with the present life,he can choose whatever life he likes.（此处要用“,”，V-ing修饰，不是完整句子。）raging from travelling to volunteer.This wider mental recreation can help us live an easy life.
Some people cliam that we may not contented with the present life with better life and wider choices,thus we are less satisfied and less happy. However,I still think seeking for happiness is humans' ultimate desire.As long as the world is peaceful and we are healthy,can 't we say that it is the true happiness we are seeking for? Obviously we are enjoying this kind of life.
In a nutshell.there is no definite answer to whether we are happy with the past life or the present life .As long as we accept what we are and where we are,the best time is just before our eyes.

-- by 会员 vanessa923 (2012/6/6 18:45:12)

昨天是我第一次写托福作文。所以说，我对托福作文的书写逻辑层面划分及相关手法要求还木有熟悉。

不过格式和语法应用我倒是没有太大问题。

楼主例子应用的很好，生动。

看出楼主喜欢用复杂句式，但是，句子逻辑含义的划分上，请楼主利用一下GMAT的SC部分的知识。要是没学过GMAT，就直接背那个写作300句吧。

第一次改写他人作文，刚到家，有些匆忙，此次仅能做到这样。不好意思，加油。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-6 22:47
呵呵，谢谢追日同学。改得真的超认真的呢。受教了。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-7 17:28
标题: TPO14
The reading passage explores the benifits of the salvage logging,while the professor diagrees with what the reading passage stated for the following reasons.
To begin with,the reading passage suggested that the salvage logging can remove the remains of the dead trees,thus making room for the fresh growth. However,the lecturer argues that the cleaning up of dead trees can also lead to the loss of nutrients in the soil which definitely necessarily contributes to the growth of trees.
In addition,the satatement in the reading shows that decaying woods may lead to the insect habitat which can damage live and healthy trees.The professor opposes it by pointing out that these insect habitats may not cause much harm as expected.In fact,the salvage logging does more harm than does the insects.This directly contradicts with the counterparts in the reading.
last,though the reading passage reveals that salvage logging has ecnomic benifits by providing much wood in need and addition jobs for local residents，however,the professor contends that this kind of benifits is temporary. Employers may apply helicopters and vehicles rather than laborers and tend to hire experienced workers.
In conclusion,the professor identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and shows the salvage logging is not a good way to deal with remains in the forest disasters.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-7 20:12
标题: 6月6日独立！

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food in the past was much healthier than today.
Have you ever found that the flavor of the muskmelon bought from the market today fail to satisfy you?Have you ever found the supermarket swarmed with genetically modified food?Have you ever found you miss the fresh fruit pick from your grandparents' orchard?Now more and more people state compared with today, food in the past was much healthier.I agree with this statement.
First and foremost,with the rapid development in the science and technology,we are in a society asking for higher speed and efficience.Thus we are in a hurry not only for the work but also for the food.Instead of feeding such poultry as chooks or pigs naturally with forage,farmers learn to apply chemical additives to speed the growth of these animals.Also,dung is replaced with fertilisers to provide the so-called nutrients for the crops.In our daily life,children are flocking into such fast food restuarants as KFC or Mcdonald's.News keep saying another "healthy genetically modified food is on the way ending up on our table" Just as an old saying goes,"we are what we eat".So it is not difficult to imagine what we would become with the food full of hormone and what our next generation would suffer.
In addition,the economical developments exert an indispensible influence on this change.In this realistic age,often humans are judge by his fortune and status .People,especially some greedy businessmen,drived by the desire to earn more money and to live a better life,make great profits by adding additives and preservatives in the food.An astounding example for this is the famous Sanlu milk powder incident.Sanlu, the first company to be found selling melamine-tainted milk,was condemned for its ignorance and loss of consience.The impulse of money and higher status triggers tragedies like this.What a pity!
Some people claim that scientific developments undoubtedly impose a positive effect on the food.Yes,we can not ignore the convenience and efficience along with the products developed by scientists.But we still have a long way to grasp a more clear understanding of the merits and demerits of these products.
In a nutshell,the pragmatism,as the product of social and economical developments,and the hurried life styles led to unhealthier food and even unhealthy life.We really need to ponder on this issue and accordingly make a change.

作者: joan31217 时间: 2012-6-8 11:27
The reading passage explores the benifits of the salvage logging,while the professor diagrees with what the reading passage stated for the following reasons.

To begin with,the reading passage suggestsed（时态保持一致吧） that the salvage logging can remove the remains of the dead trees,thus making room for the fresh growth. However,the lecturer argues that the cleaning up of dead trees can also lead to the loss of nutrients in the soil which definitely necessarily contributes to the growth of trees.

In addition,the satatement in the reading shows that decaying woods may lead to the insect habitat which can damage live and healthy trees.The professor opposes it by pointing out that these insect habitats may not cause much harm as expected.In fact,the salvage logging does more harm than does the insects.This directly contradicts with the counterparts in the reading. （丢了一个点，说不仅带来有害的昆虫，还会招来鸟类等益虫。）

last,though the reading passage reveals that salvage logging has ecnomic benifits by providing much wood in need and addition jobs for local residents，however,the professor contends that this kind of benifits is temporary. Employers may apply helicopters and vehicles rather than laborers and tend to hire experienced workers.

In conclusion,the professor identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage （有点不对劲， weakness of points ？)and shows the salvage logging is not a good way to deal with remains in the forest disasters.

写得很不错，论点清晰，语言简练明了。

作者: joan31217 时间: 2012-6-8 11:44
Have you ever found that the flavor of the muskmelon bought from the market today fail to satisfy you?Have you ever found the supermarket swarmed with genetically modified food?Have you ever found you miss the fresh fruit picked from your grandparents' orchard?Now more and more people state that, compared with today, food in the past was much healthier.I agree with this statement. (开头很棒！！！）

First and foremost,with the rapid development in the science and technology,we are in a society asking for （感觉有点不太好，用chasing?) higher speed and efficience.Thus we are in a hurry not only for the work but also for the food.Instead of feeding such poultry as chooks or pigs naturally with forage,farmers learn to apply chemical additives to speed the growth of these animals.Also,dung is replaced with fertilisers to provide the so-called nutrients for the crops.In our daily life,children are flocking into such fast food restuarants as KFC or Mcdonald's.News keep saying another "healthy genetically modified food is on the way ending up on our table" Just as an old saying goes,"we are what we eat".So it is not difficult to imagine what we would become with the food full of hormone ( 挺奇怪的）and what our next generation would suffer.

In addition,the economical developments exert an indispensible influence on this change.In this realistic age,often humans are judged by his fortune and status .People,especially some greedy businessmen,drived by the desire to earn more money and to live a better life,make great profits by adding additives and preservatives in the food.An astounding example for this is the famous Sanlu milk powder incident.Sanlu, the first company to be found selling melamine-tainted milk,was condemned for its ignorance and loss of consience.The impulse of money and higher status triggers tragedies like this.What a pity!
Some people claim that scientific developments undoubtedly impose a positive effect on the food.Yes,we can not ignore the convenience and efficience along with the products developed by scientists.But we still have a long way to grasp a more clear understanding of the merits and demerits of these products.

In a nutshell,the pragmatism,as the product of social and economical developments (很别扭）,and the hurried life styles lead to unhealthier food and even unhealthy life.We really need to ponder on this issue and accordingly make a change.

1.三个论点不错，但是里面都包括了technology带来的影响，有点乱
2.语言有的句子很好，有的有些chinglish.
3.总的来说不错，加油

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-8 13:00
我也感觉到了。。就是第一二点好像有点交叉。。思绪混乱了。。。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-8 21:06
标题: 6月7独立
我真心第一次接触这类作文，感觉写得真心不好，求狠狠狠批！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.
The curriculum of high school includes science and art,varying from such abstract subjects as chemistry and physics to history and music.Some people put forward that high school student should take a couse on basic economics.I agree with this statement.
First and foremost,it is undeniable that most high students would pursue further education far away from home.At that time,they should learn to live and study by themselves,including purchasing daily goods and distribute their living expenses.However, large proportion of high school students,according to a survey reveals,lives a dependent life on their parents.That is to say,most of them,with the aid of their parents, never have the chance to develop their ability to allocate their money wisely and reasonablly.On the contrary,it would be easier for them in the university life with the basic knowledge of economics.On that condition,they would have a better understanding of the "output and input "in the daily life and accordingly make a reasonable budget.An illustrating example is my experience.At the beginning of every month I would make a detailed plan as to what to buy and how much to save. I can always make ends meet at the end of every month and even sometimes save some in my account.I credit my good habit of planning to the the economic knowledge learned from my high school.
In addition ,people can make a wise investment with a grasp of economics.In old days people would save their money in the banks for safe.Nowadays,due to the horrific hyperinflation and dramatic currency devaluations,more and more people choose to apply the substantial balance in the banks to buy bonds,stocks and insurance.This kind of investment can not only devalue overtime but also make money with wise application.An surprising news show that a 15-year-old teenager become a millionaire with only 2000 RMB at the very start in just 2 years.When asked about his secret of success,he just smiled and said."It is with the economic knowledge in my brain that I can do it."
It is true that the high school students should focus on their academic subjects in well preparation for the college entrance examination.But we also cannot ignore the substantial effect of practical economic knowledge.
In sum,owing to the merits of learning basic economics,students can better equipped and more competitive in their future study and life.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-8 21:59
标题: 6月7，tpo15
The reading passage suggests several ways to stop the spread of the cane toads in Australia while the lecturer contradicts the measures for the following reasons.
To begin with,the reading passage states to build a national fence would blocks the advance of the toads.However,the lecturer refutes that the national fence cannot block the young toads and cane toad eggs which habitat along rivers and streams.Definitely,the fence cannot stop the flowing of the water with which the toad eggs may spread.
In addition,contrary to the statement in the reading that vonlunteers can be organised to capture and destroy the toads,the professor argues that some untrained volunteers can also destroy the endangered native frogs which are similar to the young cane frogs.This directely contradict the counterpart in the reading.
Last,though the reading passage says that specific disease-causing virus can be applied to control the population of toads,the professor contends that this kind of virus may also exert a bad influence on the toads native in south America.Thus the whole ecological balance suffers a lot and may breaks down.
In sum,the professor uses convincing reasons to disprove the measures proposed to control the cane toads in Australia in the reading passage.

作者: joan31217 时间: 2012-6-9 07:34
The curriculum of high school includes science and art,varying from such abstract subjects as chemistry and physics to history and music.Some people put forward that high school student should take a couse on basic economics.I agree with this statement. （开头貌似有点短）

First and foremost,it is undeniable that most high students would pursue further education far away from home.At that time,they should learn to live and study by themselves,including purchasing daily goods and distribute their living expenses.However, large proportion of high school students,according to a survey reveals,lives a dependent life on their parents（still depend on their parents 好像舒服点). That is to say,most of them,with the aid of their parents, never have the chance to develop their ability to allocate their money wisely and reasonablly.On the contrary,it would be easier for them in the university life with the basic knowledge of economics.On that condition,they would have a better understanding of the "output and input "in the daily life and accordingly make a reasonable budget.An illustrating example is my experience.At the beginning of every month I would make a detailed plan as to what to buy and how much to save. I can always make ends meet at the end of every month and even sometimes save some in my account.I credit my good habit of planning to the the economic knowledge learned from my high school.

In addition ,people can make a wise investment with a grasp of economics.In old days people would save their money in the banks for safe.Nowadays,due to the horrific hyperinflation and dramatic currency devaluations,more and more people choose to apply the substantial balance in the banks to buy bonds,stocks and insurance.This kind of investment can not only devalue(意思说反了吧？） overtime but also make money with wise application.An surprising news show that a 15-year-old teenager become a millionaire with only 2000 RMB at the very start in just 2 years.When asked about his secret of success,he just smiled and said."It is with the economic knowledge in my brain that I can do it."

It is true that the high school students should focus on their academic subjects in well preparation for the college entrance examination.But we also cannot ignore the substantial effect of practical economic knowledge. （这段有点少，也有点跑题）

In sum,owing to the merits of learning basic economics,students can be better equipped and more competitive in their future study and life.

作者: joan31217 时间: 2012-6-9 08:17
The reading passage suggests several ways to stop the spread of the cane toads in Australia while the lecturer contradicts the measures for the following reasons.

To begin with,the reading passage states that to build a national fence would blocks the advance of the toads.However,the lecturer refutes this point that the national fence cannot block the young toads ~~and~~ (because?) cane toad eggs ~~which~~ habitat along rivers and streams.Definitely,the fence cannot stop the flowing of the water with which the toad eggs may spread.

In addition,contrary to the statement in the reading that vonlunteers can be organised to capture and destroy the toads,the professor argues that some untrained volunteers can also destroy the endangered native frogs which are similar to the young cane frogs.This directely contradict the counterpart in the reading.

Last,though the reading passage says that specific disease-causing virus can be applied to control the population of toads,the professor contends that this kind of virus may also exert a bad influence on the toads native(啥？） in south America.Thus the whole ecological balance suffers a lot and may breaks down.

In sum,the professor uses convincing reasons to disprove the measures proposed to control the cane toads in Australia in the reading passage.

整体不错，模版总结的很好，很流畅

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-9 15:20
标题: 6月8独立！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past.
What is the past?The past is a combination of experiences,wisdom and guidences from our forebears at different time and from different nations.Along the river of history these remarks and principles would not fade,instead,they sparks and attract our eyes. Some people argue that in order to solve the problems of the present and the future,people should resort to the past.I am of this opinion.With regard to individuals,the past can not only show us clear directions but also pull us back from the wrong way both in the road of learning and life. Take myself as an example.When I was in high school,I dreamed to be successful businesswoman.At that time,I intended to choose Business Management as my major . In order to gain some prerequisite experience and better adapt to the society,I worked as a salesgirl in a shop in the summer holiday.But after a month,I was determined to give up my former choice.Businessmen demand for courage,carefulness and insights.But though my experience in the shop,I sobered and have a better understanding of myself and my ability-I was not meant for that.At the though of not fitting to be a businessman,I changed my major. Now thanks to the past experience, I am quite enjoying my present life and confident with my future career.
In addition,just as an famous philosopher remarked,"those who cannot remember the past are condemned to repeat it,"not only did the past prevent us from making the same mistakes but also provide us with new insights of the problem.Take China for instance,with the rapid development of science and technology,China is on her way to mordernization.However,China also develop its economy and industry at the expense of deforestation and switching lakes to farmland.In 1998,a horrible flood,as the curse of nature,occured in China and took away millions of lives.Having tasted the bitter fruit of nature,China learn to look back and make sustainable development as a national policy.The policy of sustainable development is not a new product in 21th century.As far as 5000thousand years ago,great chinese philosophers have made it an effective way to banlance the nature and development.It is the ponder on the past that set a new way for China.
Admittedly,some people argue that in order to make greater achievements we should look forward rather than look back.Indeed,we can be better prepared along with the future developments.But isn't it more reasonable for us to step forward with the bless of the past?
In sum,the past render us boththe opprtuinity of reflecting and insights into the future,it is wise of us to deal with present and future problems before reviewing the past.

作者: acrophobiahy 时间: 2012-6-9 16:34
红色为修改，蓝色为好词好句~~

What is the past? The past is a combination of experiences, wisdomand guidences (guidance) from our forebears atdifferent time and from different nations. Alongthe river of history these remarksand principles would not fade, instead, they sparks and attract oureyes. Some people argue that in order to solve the problems of thepresent and the future, people should resort to the past. I am of this opinion.

With regard to individuals, the past can not only show usclear directions but also pull us back from the wrong way ~~both~~ in the road of both learning and life. Takemyself as an example. When I was in high school, I dreamed to be a successful business woman. At that time, I intendedto choose Business Management as my major. In order to gain some prerequisite experience and better adapt to the society,I worked as a salesgirl in a shop in the summer holiday. But after a month, I wasdetermined to give up my former choice. Businessmen demand for courage,carefulness and insights. But though my experience in the shop, I sobered and have a better understanding of myselfand my ability-I was not meant for that. At the thought of not fitting to be a businessman,I changed my major. Now thanks to the past experience, I am quite enjoying mypresent life and confident with my future career.

In addition, just as a famous philosopher remarked,“those who cannot remember the past are condemnedto repeat it.” Not only did the past prevent us from making the samemistakes but also provide us with new insights of the problem. Take China for instance,with the rapid development of science and technology, China is on her way tomordernization(modernization). However, Chinaalso develops its economy and industry at the expense of deforestation and switchinglakes to farmland. In 1998, a horrible flood, asthe curse of nature, occurred in Chinaand took away millions of lives. Having tasted the bitterfruit of nature, China learn to look back and make sustainabledevelopment as a national policy. The policy of sustainable development is nota new product in 21th century. As far as 5000thousand years ago, great Chinesephilosophers have made it an effective way to banlancethe nature and development. It is the ponder on the past that set a new way forChina.
正文第一段，你写了对于个人而言，回顾过去的意义。而这段，你则是针对了国家问题。是不是在第二段开始，写个过渡句将两者练习起来呢？或者独立出来作为一段？
本段中，格言的引用，还有关于可持续发展的例子，真的很符合文章的内容，值得我学习~~

Admittedly, some people argue that in order to make greater achievements weshould look forward rather than look back. Indeed, we can be better preparedalong with the future developments. But isn't it more reasonable for us to stepforward with the bless of the past?
这段是为了让步，我觉得有关过于简单了，可以加上几句，比如reviewing thepast所带来的坏处，像会限制我们的思维等等。你觉得如何？

In sum, the past render us both the opportunity ofreflecting and insights into the future, it is wise of us to deal with presentand future problems before reviewing the past.

这片作文结构清晰，标准的2-1模型。
里面的例子、语言感觉都很好，不过在打字的时候注意拼写错误啊，还有单复数问题~~
整体赞~~

作者: pplovermm 时间: 2012-6-9 20:27
写的真好我要是能写出这么好的就好了

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-9 22:23

红色为修改，蓝色为好词好句~~

What is the past? The past is a combination of experiences, wisdomand guidences (guidance) from our forebears atdifferent time and from different nations. Alongthe river of history these remarksand principles would not fade, instead, they sparks and attract oureyes. Some people argue that in order to solve the problems of thepresent and the future, people should resort to the past. I am of this opinion.

With regard to individuals, the past can not only show usclear directions but also pull us back from the wrong way ~~both~~ in the road of both learning and life. Takemyself as an example. When I was in high school, I dreamed to be a successful business woman. At that time, I intendedto choose Business Management as my major. In order to gain some prerequisite experience and better adapt to the society,I worked as a salesgirl in a shop in the summer holiday. But after a month, I wasdetermined to give up my former choice. Businessmen demand for courage,carefulness and insights. But though my experience in the shop, I sobered and have a better understanding of myselfand my ability-I was not meant for that. At the thought of not fitting to be a businessman,I changed my major. Now thanks to the past experience, I am quite enjoying mypresent life and confident with my future career.

In addition, just as a famous philosopher remarked,“those who cannot remember the past are condemnedto repeat it.” Not only did the past prevent us from making the samemistakes but also provide us with new insights of the problem. Take China for instance,with the rapid development of science and technology, China is on her way tomordernization(modernization). However, Chinaalso develops its economy and industry at the expense of deforestation and switchinglakes to farmland. In 1998, a horrible flood, asthe curse of nature, occurred in Chinaand took away millions of lives. Having tasted the bitterfruit of nature, China learn to look back and make sustainabledevelopment as a national policy. The policy of sustainable development is nota new product in 21th century. As far as 5000thousand years ago, great Chinesephilosophers have made it an effective way to banlancethe nature and development. It is the ponder on the past that set a new way forChina.
正文第一段，你写了对于个人而言，回顾过去的意义。而这段，你则是针对了国家问题。是不是在第二段开始，写个过渡句将两者练习起来呢？或者独立出来作为一段？
本段中，格言的引用，还有关于可持续发展的例子，真的很符合文章的内容，值得我学习~~

Admittedly, some people argue that in order to make greater achievements weshould look forward rather than look back. Indeed, we can be better preparedalong with the future developments. But isn't it more reasonable for us to stepforward with the bless of the past?
这段是为了让步，我觉得有关过于简单了，可以加上几句，比如reviewing thepast所带来的坏处，像会限制我们的思维等等。你觉得如何？

In sum, the past render us both the opportunity ofreflecting and insights into the future, it is wise of us to deal with presentand future problems before reviewing the past.

这片作文结构清晰，标准的2-1模型。
里面的例子、语言感觉都很好，不过在打字的时候注意拼写错误啊，还有单复数问题~~
整体赞~~

-- by 会员 acrophobiahy (2012/6/9 16:34:45)

总结了一下：
一是第二三段加个过渡会更好（呵呵看了你的文章觉得过渡真心好呢！）
二是让步需要再多加些内容。你说的限制思维确实没想到，呵呵受教了！
三是打字。恩恩这个对我来说是个大毛病，一定改！
恩恩，谢谢acrophobiahy！建议真心好！！！

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-10 10:02
标题: 6月9日独立！
6月9日101030 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.
Human beings are more than animals;apart from meeting the basical needs in daily life such as food and cothing,they still pursue higher levels of thinking raging from entertainment to the ultimate meaning of life.In order to achieve such altitude,we need to resort to education.Some people argue that people nowadays are easier to become educated than in the past.I am of this opinion.
First and foremost,there is a growing awareness of the importance of education among us.That is to say,people have a clearer awareness of the significance of receiving education.Examples abound in our life.It is common to see parents sending their children of an early age to kindergartens.We can often hear that even on weekends,the children aren in a hurry to attend all kinds of specialized classes.Take my little niece for example,she is only 5 years old.Except for attending regular formal classes everyday,she also signs up for extar classes like dancing and piano.When asked how she feels about the busy study,she smiled and said,"I know it is good for me."
In addition,the government also plays a crucial part in this change.Compared with the past,the government attribute more efforts and resources to the education.The authorities improve the quality by increasing input for education and moreover take effforts to attract talents overseas.Let us take a glimpse of America for example.Within a span of less than two and a quarter centuries,the US has grown from a new-born nation of 13 former colonies to the only super-power country in the world.Asked how could they achieve this,they are likely to say,the deep faith in education.The belief that investment in people is the most essential to devote its resources.It is the center on education that American can make its people literate and make itself strong in all aspects.So with the solid backgound of the whole nation,people are definitely better educated than in the past.
Adimittedly,some suggest that we have stepped in the business era which highlights economy and development.Thus people care more about money and profits rather than the education.Indeed,to some degree we focus on the materianl goods,however,with a solid foundation of education,isn't it easier for us to keep forwad ?
In sum,be concious of the importance of being educated and the strong support of the nation,we are better educated than our forebears.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-10 10:03
后面的让步段我写的确实有些混乱了，实在不知道怎么写了。求指点！谢谢啦！

作者: jiaosisisisi 时间: 2012-6-10 11:59
6月9日101030 NA
绿色的是表示很赞的地方
红色的表示是可能会有问题的地方！
修改的不合适的地方请多多体谅！

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are now easier to become educated than in the past.

Human beings are more than animals;(很少见用分号吧)apart from meeting the basical（basic就可以adj了，basically是其副词形式）needs in daily life such as food and cothing,they still pursue higher levels of thinking raging from entertainment to the ultimate meaning of life.In order to achieve such altitude（“为了达到这样的高度”，感觉翻译有点直译！In order to reach this heights不知道是不是好一些）,we need to resort to education.Some people argue that people nowadays are easier to become educated than in the past.I am of this opinion.

First and foremost,there is a growing awareness of the importance of education among us.That is to say,people have a clearer awareness of the significance of receiving education.Examples abound in our life（lives）.It is common to see parents sending their children of an early age to kindergartens.We can often hear that even on weekends,the children arein a hurry（过于口语化） to attend all kinds of specialized classes.Take my little niece for example,she is only 5 years old.Except for attending regular formal classes everyday,she also signs up for extar classes like dancing and piano.When asked how she feels about the busy study,she smiled and said,"I know it is good for me."

In addition,the government also plays a crucial part in this change.Compared with the past,the government attribute more efforts and resources to the education.The authorities improve the quality by increasing input for education and moreover take effforts to attract talents overseas.Let us（托福作文较为academic，let us这从样过于口语化） take a glimpse of America for example.Within a span of less than two and a quarter centuries,the US has grown from a new-born nation of 13 former colonies to the only super-powercountry in the world.Asked how could they achieve this,they are likely to say,the deep faith in education.（这个也有点过于口语化）The belief that investment in people is the most essential to devote its resources.It is the center on education that American(America)can make its people literate and make itself strong in all aspects.So with the solid backgound of the whole nation,people are definitely better educated than in the past.

Adimittedly,some suggestthat we have stepped in the business era which highlights economy and development(这句话貌似不是很通顺).Thus people care more about money and profits rather than the education.Indeed,to some degree we focus on the materianl （material？）goods,however,with a solid foundation of education,isn't it easier for us to keep forwad ?

In sum,be concious of the importance of being educated and the strong support of the nation,we are better educated than our forebears.
（结尾有点太过于匆忙，）
总结：结构完整，连接词非常丰富，不过使用的语言有很多处过于口语化，缺乏学术文章的严肃性！而且如果有一些中文point想表达的时候，千万不要直译，想一想别的结构或许不一样但是可以表达这个意思的英文搭配，anyway，祝顺利crack TOEFL

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-10 17:25
标题: tpo16！
The reading passage explores the problems and limitations facing the science of archaeology while the professor puts forward that,with a new guideline issued in Britain,the prospect of archaeology is different for the following reasons.
To begin with,the reading passage suggests that along with the population growth,many construction projects may ruin valuable artifacts.However,the professos argues that the guideline points out that before carrying construction projects,the site should be carefully examined with the joint efforts of construction company and professional archaeologists.That is to say,if being of great value, the sites will not be destroyed when construction companys work together with experts.
In addition,though the reading claims that archaeological researches may fail for the lack of financial support fundede by government,the lecturer refutes the point by saying that the guideline made it clear that it is the construction company that pays for the archaeological researches.Definitely these companies can get sunbstantial financial support from a variety of organizations.This directly contradicts with the satatement in the reading.
Last,contrary to the reading passage that it is difficult for archaeologists to have a career,the professor contends that the guideline makes it possible for the experts to find a high-paid job by offering large quantities of jobs and opportunities.
In sum,the professor uses convincing examples to disproves what the reading states.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-10 18:04
标题: Tpo 17
The reading passage explains three reasons for the loss the birds in the United States ,owing to the human population and increase in agriculture.However the professor diagrees with the statement in the reading.
To begin with,the reading suggests that with the increase of human populaiton and settlement,the habitats for birds disappear accordingly.The lectures oppposes it by pointing out that though the urban area play a role in the decreade of some kinds of birds,but also help the increase of some birds.
In addiotion,the reading passage states that the agricultural activities along with the growing human population also lead to further distruction of birds habitats.But the professor contends that scientist have tried to develop new crops which can make the most of the farmlands.That is to say,less wilderness areas will be converted to farmlands.This is contrary to the counterpart in the reading passage.
Last,though the reading says the chemical pesticides will poison the insects and water.Thus the birds can be killed by eating poisoned insects or contaminated water.The professor argues that the history will not happen in the future.In fact,scientists are trying to develop new pesticide which do no harm to insects.Besides,by researching new kinds of pest-resistant crops we can also stop the application of pesticide.
In summary,the professor uses the above reasons to indentify that the points in the reading passage is not convincing.

P.S.我第一个论点是真没听清啊。。。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-11 20:57
标题: 6月11独立！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is never a reason to be rude (impolite) to another person.Shakespeare once remarked in his great artwork The Merchant of Venice,"Kindness is like the gentle rain falling down from the sky."This sentence definitely reveals the importance of being kind . However, regarding the statement-there is never a reason to be rude to another person,I frown on it.
First and foremost,there are chances that people are rude to others unconsciously.The rudeness often follow the circumstances such as emergences or being hasty.This to say,people are meant no harm and they are just so hurried that they may impose some impoliteness on others.An illustrating example is my experience with one of my roommate-Helen.The first time I saw her was on the first day of my fresh college life.I entered the dormitory with joy and was to clean to my desk.However,when i was holding a basin of water and stepping in to the dormitory,a girl ran out of the room and just knocked into me.The basin fell over and I was drenched.To my surprise,the girl just looked back and said "i am sorry",then she dashed away.I was furious.How rude a girl she was!Later i found thst she is my roomate and for the awful impression of her,I seldom talk with her.But one day she came to me and explained everything to me.On the first day,she was told that her mother had an traffic accident.The first thought occurred to her was to get to the hospital as quickly as possible."I did not mean to hurt you and I was really in a hurry."she explained.Knowing all the resons,i erased my misunderstanding for her and we get along well with each other.
In addition,sometimes we show our anger and discontent in the form of being rude.In some cases we release these feeling for the purpose of asserting our esteem and intergrity instead of hurting others' feeling intentionally.When insulted with constant abuse and curses,shouldn't we gather all the courage and fight it back? When facing the haves bully the have-nots,shouldn't we stand out and stand in line with the poor?When reviewing the news about greedy businessmen selling poinsnous powder at the expense of children's health to make profits,shouldn' t we act out and condemn these immoralities?Under these circumstances,kindness will not chase away the darkness,only anger and condemn can do.
It is true that in order to build a harmonious society,we should be friendly and amicable.But there are always some reasons for which we resort to being harsh.These rudenesses are supposed to drive away the inequality and harrassment, not to hurt others.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-12 10:18
6月11独立！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is never a reason to be rude (impolite) to another person.

Shakespeare once remarked in his great artwork The Merchant of Venice,"Kindness is like the gentle rain falling down from the sky."This sentence definitely reveals the importance of being kind . However, regarding the statement-there is never a reason to be rude to another person,I frown on it.

First and foremost,there are chances that people are rude to others unconsciously.The rudeness often follow the circumstances such as emergences or being hasty.This to say,people are meant no harm and they are just so hurried that ~~they~~ may impose some impoliteness on others.An illustrating example is my experience with one of my roommate-Helen.The first time I saw her was on the first day of my fresh college life.I entered the dormitory with joy and was to clean to my desk.However,when i was holding a basin of water and stepping in to the dormitory,a girl ran out of the room and just knocked into me.The basin fell over and I was drenched.To my surprise,the girl just looked back and said "i am sorry",then she dashed away.I was furious.How rude a girl she was!Later i found thst she is my roomate and for the awful impression of her,I seldom talk with her.But one day she came to me and explained everything to me.On the first day,she was told that her mother had an traffic accident.The first thought occurred to her was to get to the hospital as quickly as possible."I did not mean to hurt you and I was really in a hurry."she explained.Knowing all the resons,i erased my misunderstanding for her and we get along well with each other.
事例叙述有些长了
In addition,sometimes we show our anger and discontent in the form of being rude.In some cases we release these feeling for the purpose of asserting our esteem and intergrity instead of 换成rather than 比较好hurting others' feeling intentionally.When insulted with constant abuse and curses,shouldn't we gather all the courage and fight it back? When facing the haves bully the have-nots,shouldn't we stand out and stand in line with the poor?When reviewing the news about greedy businessmen selling poinsnous powder at the expense of children's health to make profits,shouldn' t we act out and condemn these immoralities?Under these circumstances,kindness will not chase away the darkness,only anger and condemn can do.

It is true that in order to build a harmonious society,we should be friendly and amicable.But there are always太绝对了 some reasons for which we resort to being harsh.These rudenesses are supposed to drive away the inequality and harrassment, not to hurt others.

词汇很好啊第一个例证有些长了第二个很吸引人的
可以加一个让步段显得逻辑严谨些

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-12 22:02
标题: 学累了推荐首歌哈！
wild world 歌手：mr big Now that I've lost everything to you,you say you want to start something new,and it's breaking my heart you're leaving,baby I'm grieving.But if you wanna leave take good care,hope you have a lot of nice things to wear,but then a lot of nice things turn bad out there.Oh baby baby it's a wild world,it's hard to get by just upon a smile.Oh baby baby it's a wild world,I'll always remember you like a child, girl.You know I've seen a lot of what the world can do,and it's breaking my heart in two,'cause I never want to see you sad girl,don't be a bad girl,but if you want to leave take good care,hope you make a lot of nice friends out there,but just remember there's a lot of bad and beware, beware,Baby I love you, but if wanna leave take good care,hope you make a lot of nice friends out there,but just remember there's a lot of bad, and beware,

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-12 22:38
标题: 6月11综合
The reading passage talks about the negative effects of buzzing,while the professor,a buzzer himself sometimes,refutes the points with the following reasons.
To begin with,the reading passage states that the consumers may not receive the truth from the buzzers who are paid to to advertise and praise the product.However,the lecturer argues that the company often hire people who have used the product and thought the product is worth buying.So the information offered by the buzzers is not misleading,but the truth.
In addtion,contrary to the statement in the reading that people are likely to be less critical when listening to buzzers and hence to buy the products,the lecturer points it out that consumers would ask all kind of questions concerning the product such as price and service.If the buzzers fail to answer their questions,they would not buy the product.
Last,as for the harmful effect of buzzing ,that is,the spread of mistrust and the expectation of dishonesty,the lecturer holds a different view.Since the product the buzzers promote is of high quality,those consumers who listen to the suggestion and buy the products benifit from it.That is to say,they will be more trustful and helpful to others.
In conclusion,the lecturer uses convincing points to prove the main idea in the reading passage-that is,the buzzing is misleading and harmful,is incorrect.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-14 09:43
标题: 6月12独立！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of a university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

Nowadays,there is an increasingly awareness of the importance of receiving education.People are more willlingly to attend universities to better equip themselves for the ever-growing fierce competition.Along with this trend comes a new controvertial debate-whether the main role for universitity professor is to educate students or to do research.From my point of view,I think to educate students is the main role for university professors.
First and foremost, the main reason why people choose to attend universities is to obtain more specialized knowledge so as to compete in the future job-seeking market.If the professor focus on doing all kinds of researches rather than educate the students,the students cannot receive the knowledge they pursue.Moreover,for the parents who spend large sums of money to send their children to universities, it is a great loss for not being able to achieve their anticipation for their children.A illustrating example is a survey which research the college graduates.It reveals that graduates who are imbued with specialized knowledge are more likely to find satisfactory jobs than their coounterparts.
In addition,university is a golden time for students to form their value systems and outlook of their future career and life.During this time,if the professor can offer reasonable and wise career suggestions when the students feel at a loss about their future,students absolutely can benifit a lot from it and have a better insight into their future lives.Also,equally important are the directions concerning the moral conducts.By setting a good example for the students and telling students to distinguish the right from the wrong,the good from the evil,the professor can not only exert a substantial influence on the students,but also the whole society.On the contrary,professor who concentrate on lab researches can not hone moral standards for their students.
Some claim that the professors' responsibility is to do researches rather than educate students.It is partly true that doing researches may help make new scientific discoveries and hence solve the problems puzzling human beings.But in the long-term aspect, isn't better for us to educate more outstanding students who help solve the ever-growing problems reasonablly ?
In sum,by fostering students both specialized knowledge and better insight into the future,they can be better equipped in this fast-paced society and devote themselves into future world.

作者: zombiee 时间: 2012-6-14 10:16
[/quote]Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of a university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.
red:incorrect, blue: suggestion, yellow: good use
Nowadays,there is an increasingly awareness of the importance of receiving education.People are more willlingly to attend universities to better equip themselves for the ever-growing fierce competition.Along with this trend comes a new controvertial(typo~) debate-whether the main role for universitity professor is to educate students or to do research.From my point of view,I think to educate students is the main role for university professors.
First and foremost, the main reason why people choose to attend universities is to obtain more specialized knowledge so as to compete in the future job(for a better job)-seeking market.If the professor focus(es) on doing all kinds of researches rather than (on educating) educate the students,the students cannot receive the knowledge they pursue(purse knowledge?).Moreover,for the parents who spend large sums(amount) of money to send their children to universities, it is a great loss for not being able to achieve their anticipation for their children.A illustrating example is a survey(举例和调查分开用这种混用的说法不多见啊) which research(survey发不出这个动作）the college graduates.It reveals that graduates who are imbued with specialized knowledge are more likely to find satisfactory jobs than their coounterparts.
In addition,university is a golden time for students to form their value systems and outlook of their future career and life.During this time,if the professor can offer reasonable and wise career suggestions when the students feel at a loss about their future,students absolutely can benifit a lot from it and have a better insight into their future lives.Also,equally important are the directions concerning the moral conducts.By setting a good example for the students and telling students to distinguish the right from the wrong+andthe good from the evil,the professor can not only exert a substantial influence on the students,but also the whole society.On the contrary,professor who concentrate on lab researches can not hone moral standards for their students.
Some claim that the professors' responsibility is to do researches rather than educate students.It is partly true that doing researches may help make new scientific discoveries and hence solve the problems puzzling human beings.But in the long-term aspect, isn't+it better for us to educate more outstanding students who help solve the ever-growing problems reasonablly ?
In sum,by fostering students both specialized knowledge and better insight into the future,(分词修饰主语，由主语发出)they can be better equipped in this fast-paced society and devote themselves into future world.

-- by 会员 vanessa923 (2012/6/14 9:43:36)

[/quote]I think the topic of 6.12 is : 090403 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries.Anyway, I just correct this one that you have finished.总体表达清楚，语言有亮点，句式表达有点中国化，缺少举例，survey不够有说服力。
水平有限，建议仅供参考，如有异议M我，加油

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-6-17 16:39
6.7 独立改文
6月7独立

我是万恶的婷婷,一直考试，刚刚翻身，求谅解呀~~~

红色错误，蓝色疑问，高亮精彩

我真心第一次接触这类作文，感觉写得真心不好，求狠狠狠批！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.
The curriculum of high school includes science and art,varying from such abstract subjects as chemistry and physics to (literary subjects like这里可以跟前面的subtract对应)history and music.Some people put forward（recommend） that high school student should take a couse(course)on basic economics.（Frankly speaking, 这样加上就没有那么突兀了）I agree with this statement.
First and foremost,it is undeniable that most high students would pursue further education far away from home.At that time,they should learn to live and study by themselves,including purchasing daily goods and distribute their living expenses.However, large proportion of high school students,according to a survey reveals（这是什么用法？）,lives a dependent life on their parents.That is to say,most of them,with the aid of their parents, never have the chance to develop their ability to allocate their money wisely and reasonablly（rationally）.On the contrary,it would be easier for them in the university life with the basic knowledge of economics.On that condition,they would have a better understanding of the "output and input "in the daily life and accordingly make a reasonable budget.（这段婷婷给你改了一下： Conversely, the knowledge obtained in the economics course will better students' understanding of the "output and input" in the daily life and allow them to make wiser budget.)An illustrating example is my （own）experience.At the beginning of every month I would make a detailed plan as to what to buy and how much to save. I can always make ends meet at the end of every month and even sometimes save some in my account.I credit my good habit of planning to the the economic knowledge learned from my high school.

这一段用了对比，然后举了自己的例子，很好，不过篇幅略长，和后文比，有点头重脚轻，建议两选一吧。
In addition ,people can make a wise investment with a grasp of economics.In old days people would save their money in the banks for safe.Nowadays,due to the horrific hyperinflation and dramatic currency devaluations,（这俩词很专业啊~）more and more people choose to（tend to/ incline to） apply the substantial balance in the banks to buy bonds,stocks and insurance.This kind of investment can not only devalue overtime but also make money with wise application.An surprising news show that a 15-year-old teenager become a millionaire with only 2000 RMB at the very start in just 2 years.When asked about his secret of success,he just smiled and said."It is with the economic knowledge in my brain that I can do it."
It is true that the high school students should focus on their academic subjects in well preparation for the college entrance examination.But we also cannot ignore the substantial effect of practical(pragmatic)economic knowledge.（这是让步段吧，字少了很多。让步段精华是让一小步，我通常会写些其实还是有坏处的，但是可以克服~）

Admittedly, I concede that take a basic economic course may exert an extra burden on students to some degree. Since students are required to take such course, they probably sacrifice some of their leisure time to grasp the essence of the course and get well prepared for the examinations. However, once we consider the case in depth, we could not ignore the substantial effect of economic knowledge, like help us make budge and investment. As long as we formulate ourselves a rational schedule, we are able to relax for a while and get good grades as well. Thus, the course on basic economics is imperative.

乱写了一个，接受批评哦！~
In sum,owing to the merits of learning basic economics,students can better equipped and more competitive in their future study and life.

Conclusion：1.感觉vanessa的整体感觉不错，没有太多拼写错误，模板很好。

2.写detail的时候多钟方法交替使用，像（事例就包括名人的，自己的，别人的，还有数例，另外就是对比和因果了）让步段需要加强。加油！

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-17 17:32

6.7 独立改文
6月7独立

我是万恶的婷婷,一直考试，刚刚翻身，求谅解呀~~~

红色错误，蓝色疑问，高亮精彩

我真心第一次接触这类作文，感觉写得真心不好，求狠狠狠批！
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.
The curriculum of high school includes science and art,varying from such abstract subjects as chemistry and physics to (literary subjects like这里可以跟前面的subtract对应)history and music.Some people put forward（recommend） that high school student should take a couse(course)on basic economics.（Frankly speaking, 这样加上就没有那么突兀了）I agree with this statement.
First and foremost,it is undeniable that most high students would pursue further education far away from home.At that time,they should learn to live and study by themselves,including purchasing daily goods and distribute their living expenses.However, large proportion of high school students,according to a survey reveals（这是什么用法？）,lives a dependent life on their parents.That is to say,most of them,with the aid of their parents, never have the chance to develop their ability to allocate their money wisely and reasonablly（rationally）.On the contrary,it would be easier for them in the university life with the basic knowledge of economics.On that condition,they would have a better understanding of the "output and input "in the daily life and accordingly make a reasonable budget.（这段婷婷给你改了一下： Conversely, the knowledge obtained in the economics course will better students' understanding of the "output and input" in the daily life and allow them to make wiser budget.)An illustrating example is my （own）experience.At the beginning of every month I would make a detailed plan as to what to buy and how much to save. I can always make ends meet at the end of every month and even sometimes save some in my account.I credit my good habit of planning to the the economic knowledge learned from my high school.

这一段用了对比，然后举了自己的例子，很好，不过篇幅略长，和后文比，有点头重脚轻，建议两选一吧。
In addition ,people can make a wise investment with a grasp of economics.In old days people would save their money in the banks for safe.Nowadays,due to the horrific hyperinflation and dramatic currency devaluations,（这俩词很专业啊~）more and more people choose to（tend to/ incline to） apply the substantial balance in the banks to buy bonds,stocks and insurance.This kind of investment can not only devalue overtime but also make money with wise application.An surprising news show that a 15-year-old teenager become a millionaire with only 2000 RMB at the very start in just 2 years.When asked about his secret of success,he just smiled and said."It is with the economic knowledge in my brain that I can do it."
It is true that the high school students should focus on their academic subjects in well preparation for the college entrance examination.But we also cannot ignore the substantial effect of practical(pragmatic)economic knowledge.（这是让步段吧，字少了很多。让步段精华是让一小步，我通常会写些其实还是有坏处的，但是可以克服~）

Admittedly, I concede that take a basic economic course may exert an extra burden on students to some degree. Since students are required to take such course, they probably sacrifice some of their leisure time to grasp the essence of the course and get well prepared for the examinations. However, once we consider the case in depth, we could not ignore the substantial effect of economic knowledge, like help us make budge and investment. As long as we formulate ourselves a rational schedule, we are able to relax for a while and get good grades as well. Thus, the course on basic economics is imperative.

乱写了一个，接受批评哦！~
In sum,owing to the merits of learning basic economics,students can better equipped and more competitive in their future study and life.

Conclusion：1.感觉vanessa的整体感觉不错，没有太多拼写错误，模板很好。

2.写detail的时候多钟方法交替使用，像（事例就包括名人的，自己的，别人的，还有数例，另外就是对比和因果了）让步段需要加强。加油！

-- by 会员婷婷connie (2012/6/17 16:39:09)

呵呵,没事没事.谢谢婷婷.我好好看看.呵呵!

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-2 20:21
标题: TPO9 综合
The reading passage describes three main advantages of hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine which may replace internal-combusion engines. However, the professor disputes these points with the follwing reasons.
Firstly, though the professor admits that petroleum is finite and Hydrogen can be derived from various plentiful sources, but in fact the fuel-cell energy is not easily available. The production of hydrogen derives from a kind of pure liquid and this kind of liquid needs extreme cold condition. Moreover, the store of the Hydrogen is also efforts-taking.
Secondly, even though the reading passage states that hydrogen-based fuel cells are eco-friendly, the professor refutes this idea by pointing out that the production of fuel-cell engine do harm to the environment for the fact that it needs the consumption of fuel energy like coal and oil.In a word, this kind of engine still produce pollution and cannot solve the problem of envioronment.
Last but not least, the professor claims that fuel-cell engines are not as economically competitive as the reading passage said. The operation of fuel-cell engine needs a valuable material which definitely cost a lot. So it is not wise to say the people will spend less money on the fuel-cell engine.
In sum,the professor uses convincing satatements to disprove the points listed in the reading passage, which convince us that the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine is not a wise choice.

唉，好久没写了，狠狠拍吧。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-4 13:48
标题: TPO13综合
The reading passage explores the disadvantages of rare and important fossils being sold to private ownership and the lecture deals with the same issue. However, the professor contends that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages with the following reasons.

Firsly, even though the reading states that there will be a decline in public interest in fossils, the professor says that instead, there will be greater exposure of fossils when the public institutions display the collected fossils. This direcly contradict the counterpart in the reading passage.

Secondly, the reading suggests that scientists may lose some access to some of the important fossils and miss out discoveries. However, the lecturer refutes it by pointing out that before fossils being sent to commercial fossil collectors ,they are under scientific identification and detail experimentation of scientists. That means the fossil still pass through the hands of scientists.

Last but not least, the reading passage claim the commercial fossil collectors will destroy valuable evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. On the contrary, the professor opppses it by say-ing that most fossils go undiscovered with the scientists. So maybe these commercial colletors help to discover the potential fossils.

In conclusion, the professor uses convincing points to disprove the main idea in the reading passage and show us that the merits of fossils sent to commercial collctors outweigh the disadvantages.

作者: 阿伦艾弗森 时间: 2012-10-4 19:14
TPO13综合修改后
The reading passage explores （that ）the disadvantages of rare and important fossils (are)being sold to private ownership and the lecture deals with the same issue. However, the professor contends that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages with the following reasons.

~~Firsly~~, （firstly,粗心了哦。嘿。）even though the reading states that there will be a decline in public interest in fossils, the professor says that instead, there will be greater exposure of fossils when the public institutions display the collected fossils.（缺细节，像是schools can purchase fossils and display in public） This direcly contradict the counterpart in the reading passage.

Secondly, the reading suggests that scientists may lose some access to some of the important fossils and miss out discoveries. However, the lecturer refutes it by pointing out that before fossils being sent to commercial fossil collectors ,they(指代不是很明确)are under scientific identification and detail experimentation of scientists.（我觉得这里的of scientists 与前面的scientific有一点点语意重复） That means the fossil still pass through the hands of scientists.

Last but not least, the reading passage claims the commercial fossil collectors will destroy valuable evidence associated with the fossils they unearth. On the contrary, the professor opppses it by say-ing that most fossils go undiscovered with the scientists. So maybe these commercial colletors help to discover the potential fossils.
(可以加上那句发现一些总比什么都发现不了好)

In conclusion, the professor uses convincing points to disprove the main idea in the reading passage and shows us that the merits of fossils sent to commercial collctors outweigh the disadvantages.

1、注意单三
2、细节听的不够多
3、尽量多写听力听到的内容

一点拙见，还望共同进步。

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-6 21:20
标题: 10月4独立~
The best way to increase students’ interest in a subject is to teach them the significance of the subject outside of school.

There are certainly a variety of ways to increase a student's interest in a subject. As for this topic, I think teaching the significance of a cetain subject outside of school is a good way to increase students' interest in the subject, but not the best way.

I concede that by informing the students the significance of the subject outside of school, the students ,to some degree, engender a desire to have a good knowledge of that subject. Since the practical aim of receiving education at school is to guarantee a good job after graduation,the application of certain subjects outside of school is essential. Aware of the importance of this subject, even if the student is indifferent to it, he is still likely to learn that subject actively and even force himself to absorb the knowledge he needs so as to assure a promising and decent job.

But there exist other recommended methods to raise the interests of students on certain subjects. For instance, to involve students into some fieldwork when teaching nature science subjects or encourage students to appreciate the symphony by Beethoven in the learning process of music. These ways are also play a positive role on teaching. Take myself as an example. When I was in high school, I just could not focus myself on the English. The alphabet was so abstruse and I just could not figure out an effective way to understand the combination of these letters. However, my english teacher understood my situation and she started to raise my interest by combining the learning with the pleasure- watching inspiring Hollywood movies like Forrest Gump.I was enchanted with them and instantly fall in love with English. As for me at that time ,this is best way to learn English!

In conclusion, when it comes to raise students' interest on subjects, there are indeed a variety of good ways. From my point of view, instead of making great efforts to figure out which is the best way, we should focus more on the ultimate target -to make sure we really master the needed knowledge as much as we can.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-7 19:12
标题: 10月6号独立！
Your job will have more effect on your happiness than the social life does.
Happiness arise from a variety of scenarios, raging from making great achievment in some fields you love to a bright smile of a passer-by when you feel gloomy. As for this topic, I do not think my job have more effect on my happiness than my social life does.

First I have to admit that my job indeed plays a pivotal role in my happiness in that it provides me with stable income and reflects my ability and moreover, bring me overwhelmingly pride and satisfaction. No one can deny the importance of the a steady source of income with which you can maintain a healthy and comfortable lifestyle. More importantly, the sense of pride and commitment can make your life enriched, since you do not live for living, but for a more upgraded and complete life. With your job to show and prove your ability , you definitely would live a busy but enriched life.

At the same time, my social life also exert great influence on my happiness. Human beings are gregarious and no one can live a happy life while isolated from the group he belongs to. Along the growth of mankinds, social relationships can not only mold their personalites but also accompany them through the hard and lonely times. Take myself as an example. When i was 12, my family moved to a new city and I had to adapt myself to the new and total unfamiliar school life. I was so low since I felt being deserted by others. However, after understading my situation, my Chinese teacher encouraged me to take participate in all kinds of group activities such as camping and hiking. By talking and playing with other students, I gradually involved myself to the new environment and made a lot of friends. I no longer felt lonely with the accompany of new friends and trully found happiness.

To sum up, I think both job and social life greatly contribute to one's happiness. It is better for one to combine these two together to foster a happy life.

作者: luhuaipei 时间: 2012-10-7 19:20
标题: 改10.4独立
不好意思，改晚了~

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-7 19:22

不好意思，改晚了~

-- by 会员 luhuaipei (2012/10/7 19:20:05)

木有事，谢谢啦呵呵。

作者: bonnenuit 时间: 2012-10-7 21:21
Happiness arise from a variety of scenarios, raging from making great achievement in some fields you love to a bright smile of a passer-by when you feel gloomy. As for this topic, I do not think my job have more effect on my happiness than my social life does.

First I have to admit that my job indeed plays a pivotal role in my happiness in that it provides me with stable income and reflects my ability and moreover, brings me overwhelmingly pride and satisfaction. No one can deny the importance of the a (怎么出现两个冠词）steady source of income with which you can maintain a healthy and comfortable lifestyle. More importantly, the sense of pride and commitment can make your life enriched, since you do not live for living, but for a more upgraded and complete life. With your job to show and prove your ability（这句有点不懂，如果是伴随状语的话，your jod 和provide 不平行，除非改providing） , you definitely would live a（生活不可数，去掉） busy but enriched life.

At the same time, my social life also exerts great influence on my happiness. Human beings are gregarious and no one can live a(去掉） happy life while isolated from the group he belongs to. Along with the growth of man-kinds, social relationships can not only mold their(their指代有歧义是指人还是relationships) personalities but also accompany them through the hard and lonely times. Take myself as an example. When i was 12, my family moved to a new city and I had to adapt myself to the new and totally unfamiliar school life. I was so low since I felt being deserted by others. However, after understading(understood） my situation, my Chinese teacher encouraged me to take participate in all kinds of group activities such as camping and hiking. By talking and playing with other students, I gradually involved myself to the new environment and made a lot of friends. I no longer felt lonely with the accompany of new friends and trully（truly） found happiness.

To sum up, I think both job and social life greatly contribute to one's happiness. It is better for one to combine these two together to foster a happy life.

词汇基础不错，但有不少拼写错误要避免
语法还有很大的进步空间，句式多变换一下会更好
再接再厉

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-8 22:13
标题: 1007独立！

Nowadays, scientific discoveries are essential in human development since it makes old imaginations and speculations possible and even bring new possibilities to human life. When asked about whether government and corporation should share all their scientific discoveries with other countries in the world, I think the answer is no.

At first, I concede that there exist competition between governments and corporations. It is this sense of competition that push governments and corporations make great efforts to conduct scientific researches and try to make new and influential discoveries. And also for this reason we can say it is possible for these governments and corporations refuse to share those efforts-taking discoveries with others. For instance, can we expect the Apple company share its high-edged technologies with other potential competing companies in the world? Definitely not. Since these hi-tech is their source of money and reputation.

However, when things are set under the global background, we need to admit that it is significant for government and corporations share these discoveries. Since now we are living in a global village, we need to join hands together in the face of unprecedented diseases and natural disaster. Take the battle for cancer as an example. Cancer is a global puzzle which needs the efforts and hardworking of every nation. Imagine if a single country make a breakthrough in the study of cancer or a medical company develop a potential kind of pill , and they just refuse to publicise their achievements, can we boast we can find the key to unlock the mystery of cancer in the near future? Of course not. Only by combining the endeavor of every nation can we find the ultimate solution of this disease as soon as possible.

In conclusion, since we do not live alone as a single individual and every country do not grow as a single nation, we need to cooperate with others to live better lives. So I think we should make joint efforts to conquer the possible obstacles and stand against any challenge.

作者: luhuaipei 时间: 2012-10-9 17:59
改完了~~

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-9 21:30
标题: TPO18综合
The reading passage advocates three ways to address the decline of Torreya and the lecture deals with the same topic. However, the professor thinks the three ways mentioned in the reading migh be unsuccessful in preventing the extinction of Torreya.

In the first place, the reading suggest a option of reestablishing Torreya in the same location in Northern Florida with the favorable microclimate. However, the professor refutes this option by suggesting that the microclimate in Northern Florida is drier and no longer fit for the growth of Torreya as a result of global warming and wetlands. So the first option is not desirable.

Secondly, according to the reading, it might be a good option to move Toreya to a different location via the process of assisted migration. The lecturer opposes this option by introducing the example of the migration of Blacklocust. The migration of Blacklocust causes the death of other endangered trees and the professor concludes that the same parctice of migrating Torreya might incur unpredicted outcomes.

Last but not least, instead of suggesting that to preserve Torreya in research centers, the professor points out that the research certers might not hold the diverse population of Torreya in case of potential diseases.

In conclusion, the professor uses vivid examples and convincing points to disprove the feasibility of three options discussed in the reading passage.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-10-9 23:26
标题: 1008独立
Have you ever seen young people waiting in long queue to seek for a job interview? Nowadays, a growing numbers of people choose to move into big cities in seek of fortune and chance. Some people claim that people who move out of their native village are more successful and happier than those who do not. I partly disagree with this topic.

At first, I concede that big cities tend to provide us with more job oppotunilies ,resources and challenges. Thus more and more people are likely to leave native towns and flock to big cities to find jobs and establish their own business. With a wider platform to polish their abilities and seek companions, the chance of being successful also increased. Take my uncle as an example. He was just 17 when he left the town and determined to seek his fortune in Beijing. That young adults enjoying healthy and easy lifestyle inspire him to open a gym. Now he is quite successful at running this gym and plans to open subsidiary gyms at different districts.
Regarded as successful businessman, however, my uncle doesnot label him as a happy bussinessman. In fact, in the face of heavy loads of affairs to deal with, he hardly spare time to get together with his family menmbers. Beside, the pressure from the high-paced life in Beijing city always suffocate him. “Compared with my peers living in the small town, I might be rich in material. But in fact how I envy them for their easy lifestyle." My uncle once told me.
Yes, behind the superficial mask of rich, we can not ignore the inside of poor ,which results from a sense of lost and anxiety. Maybe we can get large amount of fortune in the big cities ,but only we ourselves can konw the bitter inside.

作者: Yeeisstrong 时间: 2012-10-10 08:35

8独立

Have you ever seen young people waiting in long queue to seek for a job interview? Nowadays, a growing numbers of people choose to move into big cities in seek of fortune and chance. Some people claim that people who move out of their native village are more successful and happier than those who do not.（But） I partly disagree with this topic.(开头的问句和后面逻辑不紧密，不如再加两个类似的问句，是逻辑关系层层加深.Have you ever seen people who have a sick must go to hospital alone? Have you ever seen people cannot together with their family in big festival? )

At first, I concede that big cities tend to provide us with more job oppotunites(opportunities), resources and challenges. Thus more and more people are likely to leave native towns and flock to big cities to find jobs and establish their own business. With a wider platform to polish their abilities and seek companions, the chance of being successful also increased. Take my uncle as an example. He was just 17 when he left the town and determined to seek his fortune in Beijing. That young adults enjoying healthy and easy lifestyle inspire him to open a gym. Now he is quite successful at running this gym and plans to open subsidiary gyms at different districts.(这段是把我的逻辑搞混了，到底是说native好呢，还是离开好呢？和你的观点背道而驰吧？)
Regarded as successful businessman, however, my uncle does not label him as a happy businessman. In fact, in the face of heavy loads of affairs to deal with, he hardly spare time to get together with his family members. Beside, the pressure from the high-paced life in Beijing city always suffocate(s) him. “Compared with my peers living in the small town, I might be rich in material. But in fact how I envy their easy lifestyle."(However, in fact, I envy their lifestyles very much.)My uncle once told me.
Yes, behind the superficial mask of rich, we can not ignore the inside of poor, which results from a sense of lost and anxiety. Maybe we can get large amount of fortune in the big cities, but only ourselves can know the bitter inside.

（这篇文章比较奇特，建议LZ多看看范文，比如老美185，看看论点论据是如何合理化的，像这种既有支持又有反对的还是少些微妙吧。lz用词也很新颖，我也只能改到这种程度了，自己也是个菜鸟!）

作者: AnthonySummer 时间: 2012-10-11 21:36
TPO18综合

The reading passage advocates three ways to address the decline of Torreya and the lecture deals with the same topic. However, the professor thinks the three ways mentioned in the reading migh (might) be unsuccessful in preventing the extinction of Torreya.

In the first place, the reading suggest a (an) option of reestablishing Torreya in the same location in Northern Florida with the favorable microclimate. However, the professor refutes (refues) this option by suggesting that the microclimate in Northern Florida is drier and no longer fit (fits) for the growth of Torreya as a result of global warming and wetlands. So the first option is not desirable.(感觉可以多用些复杂句为自己加分)

Secondly, according to the reading, it might be a good option to move Toreya to a different location via the process of assisted migration. The lecturer opposes this option by introducing the example of the migration of Blacklocust. The migration of Blacklocust causes the death of other endangered trees and the professor concludes that the same practice of migrating Torreya might incur unpredicted outcomes.

Last but not least, instead of suggesting that to preserve Torreya in research centers, (妹子你这个举的例子有些简单)the professor points out that the research certers (centers) might not hold the diverse population of Torreya in case of potential diseases.（希望多提些听力中的内容，毕竟你的总体字数太少了）

In conclusion, the professor uses vivid examples and convincing points to disprove the feasibility of three options discussed in the reading passage.

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