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标题: 包子不包子：欢迎拍砖～～ [打印本页]

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-7 12:47
标题: 包子不包子：欢迎拍砖～～
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to choose a friend with whom you can have fun than to choose a friend that will help you when you are in need. Use specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, with the expansion influence of easy communication among people, like telephone, internet and instant messages. it is increasingly important for us make correct choice in making friend, a friend to have fun with or a friend who will help us out of trouble. For me, both kinds of friends are of great needed, which depends on the differences of situations.

When summer holiday is coming, what will happen if i spend the entire holiday with myself is hard to imagine. Therefore, a friend who i can have fun with will help to color my vacation life a lot. For example, jo, a friend of mine, he is such a kind person. i remember in my last high school summer holiday, in order to memory our beautiful three-year-long high school life, a trip to Hong Kongwas created. Though it was in the middle of July, long trip and hot weather, we still had joke with each other, talked about the past three years studying together and imagined about the coming future. Even now, I insist that the trip with jo was one of my most unforgettable and funny trips.

for other situation, when i am in trouble, a friend who is always willing to get me out of difficulties is whom I appreciate most, and i am lucky enough to have another friend Zoë, who is kind to assist those who are in trouble. Once, in the middle of nowhere, i lost my way to the city town hall, with no map, not enough money but only a Mobil phone. Zoë rang a bell in my mind immediately. i called her, she said no problem and drove her tiny old car to give me a ride within 15 minutes. Thanks for her kind heart, or i had to walk 4 hours without water and light!

In a word, hardly is it easy for us to make on or two close friends. Accordingly, friends of different kinds, who is easy to have fun with and who is willing to help me out of trouble, are all of equal importance for me.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-7 20:52
又写了一篇虽然不是作业还是希望大家狂批～
185 第四篇Which is more important? book knowledge or experience

Tracing back to the prehistoric time, people of any tribe in that period of time did not have word. Depending on what kind of approach can they make a living? Experience, indeed. Knowledge from body experience was brought back home to the whole tribe, without book knowledge people managed to break through the roughest time in history. Therefore, from the personal perspective, experience is more important than book knowledge.
First of all, not every aspects of knowledge are possible to be absorbed from books. As a toddler, without the ability to read, there does exist a great number knowledge to learn by experience. For example, a toddler may eager to touch the shining and swaying thing -fire for satisfying their curiosity. Apparently, it hurts them, pains them. on the other hand, the toddler will never try to feel the fire, even things characterized to be the same again, which regarded to be the security of their life for the toddler learned what the dangerous are from their experience and it is unforgettable. Other things like how to communicate with another child, how to brush teeth and how to say I love you to the beloved one are not easy to find in books.
Additionally, knowledge gained from experience is more unforgettable than those from books. That is also the reasons for the existence of experiment in the studying period of students. At school, for the first time in chemistry class, the teacher would rather show the students the color of a bottle of burning pure oxygen than simply put the page number on the board and let the students read them tediously. Compared with the plain black and white text book, to see the color directly in eye with the true feeling of experience of their burning will no doubt impress the light blue of the pure burning oxygen in students mind steadily.
In a word, practice makes perfect, to experience directly in eye or straightly by hands certainly sends the knowledge more impressive. Moreover, as a remarkable implement of books, personal experience will enlarge people' ken of variety of knowledge. So, experience is more important than book knowledge.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-8 10:46
再接再厉 185第6
the most important thing you want to change about your hometown

I live in a quiet and small town Fenghuang, which located in south east china. It is beautiful and its charming attract tourist visiting every summer. However, once winter is coming, it is difficult for people to live here, because the major income of the local economy is shirked by the decreasing number of tourists. Therefore, the most important thing I want to do is to set up a factory to ensure the whole year happiness of my hometown.

Although factory is likely to bring pollution and other disadvantages to my hometown, but compared to the advantages, I think its benefits will overweigh the shortcomings. Here are the reasons for my strong eager to establish a new factory.

To smoothly run a factory, the steady supporting of water and electric must be ensured. Accordingly, the local people will benefit from this point. Old water pipes and electric systems will probably be reconstructed and renewed in remote areas; people there will gain a steady utilizing of clean water, high level of electric, which is an unbelievable thing for them in the past. Also the expanses for all the resources can be reduced due to the new factory' contribution in local tax. what' more, owing to the high consumption of water of the factory, water recycle system is forced to be built to maintain the local scenery, and no worry about the cleanness of the drinking water will be there of the residents.

The most important thing is that much more working opportunities will be produced by the factory, which would improve the living condition of the local people. Lots of my neighbors used to depend their life on selling little souvenirs to the visitors in summer, which was of little profits. As long as there is a factory, residents in the local places may become the first consideration to work in the factory. In this way, a fix amount of salary can be gained by people despite of the changes in seasons here; following that, clean cloth, health food and warm house would be ensured. If the workers work hard enough, they may be able to afford larger houses and even possible to move to a developed city far away.

In all, the factory can benefit local people' essential life needs and provided them with opportunities for seeking better life. When talked about the possibilities for the pollution brings out by the factory, more environment protection rules can be imposed into the construction of the factory to prevent the environment from going bad to worse. I believe with the building of the new factory, residents here certainly will live a happy and less worrying life.

作者: Crystaljoy 时间: 2012-5-8 11:58
包~185的题库很老了，不建议拿来练习呢，拿来学习逻辑，结构，语言还是不错的~

可以练习近两年北美考试真题~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-8 12:01
！！这样
大谢大谢～迅速转移～～

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-8 17:22
Currently, with the gradual fiercer growing competition in the society, it is of great significance for people to choose the right and proper career, which is regarded as a secure for their further life. As there are great number of people in my country chooses to study finance and accounting, it does not mean everyone in the field like the subject and it will influence the development of their future. Again it stress that a great concern should be paid to choose the suitable career. From my perspective, it is better to choose the career as our parents.

To begin with, when we were children spent a long period of time at home with our parents; their profession talking, whether chemistry, art or literature, were the first thing that we were able to get familiar with. If it was art, oil paintings, pigments and sculptures of various kinds would probably trap us in the colorful world. As children are surrounded by all those stuffs, they touch the painting brushes and painting board frequently; besides getting familiar, at least it is not scary for them to see those manlike sculptures standing there, lifelessly and rigidly. Therefore, the related career environment is set up by parents even though the children are young, they have the easiest access to feel them, touch them and fail in love with them.

In addition, if children choose the same career as their parents do, the possible guidance, assistance and advice will not be difficult to obtain. With the additional help from parents, a high possibility to success is created. Take the most traditional career in China, farmer, for example. Not long before, 60% of China' population is still farmer; they are usually a family of farmers for generations. Accordingly, fathers will teach their sons from young age about when to start planting carrots, what time is the best to water the field and how to use the limited tools to fight against pests in the land depends on the variations in areas. Imaging there is no such kind of help and guidance from parents, what will happen? Waste several years of time to search for the right answer by himself. Certainly it is not realistic, because he cannot afford to lose; there is the whole family he has to feed.

To sum up, children should choose the same career as their parents do. In this way, they are able to receive the guidance and assistance, which will help them to be competitive in the human resources market. Moreover, it is easier for the young to establish relation with the career that they are familiar with when they were young, which will also lead to their higher preference.

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-5-8 21:51
包子亲~不好意思哇我改错文章了……
捂脸~这就给你修改……wait~~
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红色为错误，蓝色为疑惑建议，高亮为精彩！
Currently, with the gradual fiercer growing competition in the society, it is of great significance for people to choose the right and proper career, which is regarded as a secure(security n.) for their further life. As there are great number of people in my country chooses to study finance and accounting, it does not mean everyone in the field like the subject and (actually) it will (also) influence the development of their future. Again it stress(es) that a great concern should be paid to choose the suitable career. From my perspective, it is better to choose the (same)career as our parents.

To begin with, when we were children(, we) spent a long period of time at home with our parents; their profession talking, whether chemistry, art or literature, were(was) the first thing that we were able to get familiar with. If it was art, oil paintings, pigments and sculptures of various kinds would probably trap us in the colorful world. As children are surrounded by all those stuffs, they touch the painting brushes and painting board frequently; besides getting familiar, at least it is not scary for them to see those manlike sculptures standing there, lifelessly and rigidly. Therefore, the related career environment is set up by parents even though the children are young,(.They) they have the easiest access to feel them, touch them and fail(fall)in love with them.

In addition, if children choose the same career as their parents do, the possible guidance, assistance and advice will not be difficult to obtain. With the additional help from parents, a high possibility to success is created. Take the most traditional career in China, farmer, for example. Not long before, 60% of China' population is still farmer; they are usually a family of farmers for generations. Accordingly, fathers will teach their sons from young age about when to start planting carrots, what time is the best to water the field(s) and how to use the limited tools to fight against pests in the land depends on the variations in areas(regional differences). Imaging(Imagine 祈使句) there is no such kind of help and guidance from parents, what will happen? Waste several years of time to search for the right answer by (the child) himself. Certainly it is not realistic, because he cannot afford to lose; there is the whole family he has to feed.

To sum up, children should choose the same career as their parents do. In this way, they are able to receive the guidance and assistance, which will help them to be competitive in the human resources market. Moreover, it is easier for the young to establish relation with the career that they are familiar with when they were young, which will also lead to their higher preference.

[CONCLUSION]很好的文章啦~主要是小细节注意下，比如指代、单复数的问题。开头有点长了。。。不过整体还是很好的~~加油哦！

很好的文章啦~主要是小细节注意下，比如指代、单复数的问题。开头有点长了。。。不过整体还是很好的~~加油哦！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-8 22:26
没事儿～我也刚给你改好
不管是写还是改都没水平啊啊啊.... 见笑了

作者: tyyhappy 时间: 2012-5-9 11:34
红色是修改，蓝色是疑问，黄色是精彩

Currently, with the gradual(gradually副词修饰形容词) fiercer growing（fiercer是个比较级，是不能用来修饰growing的哈。这个可以换个说法说的。） competition in the society, it is of great significance for people to choose the right and proper career, which is regarded as a secure for their further life. As there are （a）great number of people in my country chooses (choose) to study finance and accounting, it does not mean everyone in the field like the subject(s,上文提到了finance 和 accounting 两个学科) and it will influence the development of their future（s）. Again it stress(es) that a great concern should be paid to choose the suitable career. From my perspective, it is better to choose the career as our parents.

To begin with, when we were children (，we) spent a long period of time at home with our parents; their profession talking, whether chemistry, art or literature, were the first thing that we were able to get familiar with. If it was art, oil paintings, pigments and sculptures of various kinds would probably trap us in the colorful world. As children are surrounded by all those stuffs, they touch the painting brushes and painting board frequently; besides getting familiar, at least it is not scary for them to see those manlike sculptures standing there, lifelessly and rigidly. Therefore, the related career environment is set up by parents even though the children are young, (两个句子并列了，加个and) they have the easiest access to feel them, touch them and fail（fall） in love with them.

In addition, if children choose the same career as their parents do, the possible guidance, assistance and advice will not be difficult to obtain. With the additional help from parents, a high possibility to success is created. Take the most traditional career in China, farmer, for example. Not long before, 60% of China' population is still farmer; they are usually a family of farmers for generations. Accordingly, fathers will teach their sons from young age about when to start planting carrots, what time is the best to water the field and how to use the limited tools to fight against pests in the land depends on the variations in areas. Imaging there is no such kind of help and guidance from parents, what will happen? Waste several years of time to search for the right answer by himself(觉得这个地方用祈使句不合适，祈使句是省略了you的主语，那么这句话完全了就是you waste several years···貌似不合适呀). Certainly it is not realistic, because he cannot afford to lose; there is the whole family he has to feed.（这段论证挺好的^_^，一气呵成，连贯性强）

To sum up, children should choose the same career as their parents do. In this way, they are able to receive the guidance and assistance, which will help them to be competitive in the human resources market. Moreover, it is easier for the young to establish relation with the career that they are familiar with when they were young, which will also lead to their higher preference（higher preference 没看懂嘿）.

To 包子

结构整齐，论点鲜明。

但是包子的小错误有点多哈，类似于单三或者谓语动词并列累的小错误，细心哟，包子。^_^

包子提个小建议哈，下次粘文的时候表上日期呗^_^

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-9 14:13
5.9 独立~

Final exam is coming! There is still a lot of knowledge I have not reviewed yet. Whom should I turn to for help? In school time, it is not strange for us to hear that kind of worrying words. How should students solve this problem? Find a partner to study together. However, who is better, a friend or a tutor？From my point of view, it is better to ask for assistance from a tutor.

First of all, tutors are more experienced and they are the authority of the certain subject. What is more, it is tutors who design the papers but not our friends. Suppose you raise a question for your friends. Unfortunately, no one can answer that question or they answer it with an opaque number, and finally, still, you have to turn to your tutor for help. If it is your tutor who is the first you ask for answer, a large amount of time could be saved to review other subjects or to find some more tough questions. Assistance from tutor is not only of high accuracy but also efficient.

In addition, students are not tutors anyway. It is the words from tutors that can inspire you. Usually, we can hear stories from our friends that after having only one class from Mr. Smith, Jo comes to be the top students of the whole grade! Though it is hard to imagine, that is where the intelligence of tutors lies. With mere several words or equations, the question becomes so clear and seem could not be easier, even the related one is no longer difficult to finish. When preparing for exams, time is limited, only with the concrete and inspiring words from tutors can we complete in finishing all the review work.

Maybe it is comfortable to talk to a friend and maybe study with a friend will not be so boring. Anyway, for me, it is the help from tutors that makes me feel confident and it eases my anxious. In all, It is better to ask help from your tutor when you find it is hard for you to pass the exam.

这个题目好尴尬什么都想不出来啊。。。

作者: sang824 时间: 2012-5-10 10:03
Final exam is coming! There is still a lot of knowledge I have not reviewed yet. Whom should I turn to for help? In school time, it is not strange for us to hear that kind of worrying words. How should students solve this problem? Find a partner to study together.(这句话放在这里感觉不合适) However, who is better, a friend or a tutor？From my point of view, it is better to ask for assistance from a tutor.

First of all, tutors are more experienced and they are the authority of the certain subject. What is more, it is tutors who design the papers ~~but~~ not our friends. Suppose you raise a question for your friends.(这是一个没有完成的句子吧？..) Unfortunately, no one can answer that question nor they answer it with an opaque number,可以句号结束这句了。 and finally, still, you have to turn to your tutor for help. If it is your tutor who is the first you ask for answer, a large amount of time could be saved to review other subjects or to find some more tough questions. Assistance from tutor is not only of high accuracy but also efficient.

In addition, students are not tutors anyway. It is the words from tutors that can inspire you. 文章用了好多强调句..用多了感觉就失去意义，反而有冗杂的感觉了Usually, we can hear stories from our friends that after having only one class from Mr. Smith, Jo comes to be the top students of the whole grade! Though it is hard to imagine, that is where the intelligence of tutors lies.(这个例子感觉很牵强...) With mere several words or equations, the question becomes so clear and seems could not be easier, even the related one is no longer difficult to finish. When preparing for exams, time is limited, only with the concrete and inspiring words from tutors can we complete in finishing all the review work.

Maybe it is comfortable to talk to a friend and maybe study with a friend will not be so boring. Anyway, for me, it is the help from tutors that makes me feel confident and it eases my anxious. In all, It is better to ask help from your tutor when you find it is hard for you to pass the exam.

可能题目比较难写，包子字数最好再多一点嘿嘿
注意句子间的联系，可以尝试长短句运用~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-10 14:48
5.10独立~
不知道为什么越写越没底啊

求狠拍！！

In the modern world, situation is changing almost every day. New technologies, fresh market theories and brand-new human resources market are emerging continually. Consequently, competition in every filed is of extreme tension, especially, in the economy world. For each company, in order to make the greatest profits for their development, from my point of view, the most important investment should not only put to improve the efficiency and proficiency of its employees.

To begin with, a big company should pay enough attention and investment into keeping pace with the new things. As I have mentioned before, new things are emerging up in a high speed today, which cannot be compared with any other time in the history. Therefore, it is of great importance to track the changes in the market. Take Nokia for an example, this big company puts 15% of its found every year into the investigation of the market changes and new commands of consumers. Consequently, various colored, special functioned phones are created by the company every season, which is certainly for the necessity of the market. Imagine if the company only pushes its employees to produce thousands of old fashion products, how can the company keep living in the competitive economy world.

For another point of same value, make plan is not only useful for individual, but also will assist a company to gain great profits. Only with a clear understanding of the goals, can the company realize the next step of the investment work. Whether it is better to put effort into the enhancing of the function system or should the company change its production method. Once the company invests in doing research in accomplishing its annual plan, an actual guidance could probably be created to lead the company to a brighter future. Or all the thing that a company can do is struggling without direction and no one can pull it out of darkness.

Others may say that how can a company manage to achieve its aim with groups of lazy stuffs? Investment could be put into the improving of the efficiency of its employee but not the most important one. Besides that, market research and new technology investigations are waiting for the found to make devotion for the company.

To sum up, the most important investment of the company cannot merely be put into its employees. Due to the rapid conversion in modern economy world, it is safe to draw the conclusion that keeping track with the changes in the market and develop annual plans should be paid ample attention and investment to.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-11 00:38
5.11 独立~
Family and friends to a person is what water to fish. People's life without families and friends are not complete. It can be understood that the first crucial task for a company is to gain profits. However, to pay employees high salary but require them to stay away from their families and friends is indeed not my preference.

To make the point bright, being separated from family and friend, people cannot live a normal life. Everyone comes up with problems and depression in their life every now and then, when that kind of things happened, an intimate person, friend or family member, is of great necessity rather than colleagues, because they understand and care about us. Courage, assistance and beliefs are provided by them. If that help is not in hand instantly, troubles will not leave, how can employees even spare effort to work? Even the mantel health of employees can be harmed, what can people do if they have a weak body? High salary is of little use now.

In addition, it is not possible for employees to spend all of their time in working with no connection with life. People have to work to make a living, but should not live to work. Enjoying dinner with family and friends after a whole day of busy working, sitting together with close friends to watch a movie at weekend or going on a trip with family in New Year Eve is what life should be like. All study no play makes Jack a dull boy explains the point perfectly. No life, only work, where can money be spent? Even a millionaire prefers family to his money, needless to talk about normal people like me. Therefore, working is not the entire life despite of the high salary is offered.

Others may against that lots of things cannot be done if not enough money can be collected. Again, people, at least myself, do not live for money. They can do nothing when I am sad, when I need comfort, when I eager to talk to someone who is in close relation with me. High salary is indeed the passage to materials, to luxury life some people longing for. However, under no circumstances, can money bring a family to us.

To conclude, what a person need is life, not work in their whole living time. Compared with merely high salary, I will absolutely choose to stay with my friends and family. They are the engine of my life, which brings me braveness to carry on but not the money.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-12 13:16
5.12 独立

Teamwork has become an indispensable part in people's working pattern gradually. Seldom can we see that Noble Prize is for only one person. Usually, it is the reorganization of the achievements in an entire team. Therefore, succeed in working in teams makes up an undeniable part of a person' success. Is it possible for people who cannot accept criticism succeed working in teams? From my point of view, it is not realistic. I will demonstrate my reasons.

To begin with, criticism's appearing in a team cannot be avoided, like people have to face difficulties in their life. If those things cannot be avoid, no excuse for us not to accept and make adaptation for them. The teamwork of designing software explains this point well. Two kinds of job positions in designing software, creating and testing, often has friction. People who creating software are usually imaginative and confident about their work so that bugs in their software cannot be fond easily by the creators, while people who does the testing work is critical and it is their job to identify the weakness of the software and give criticism to people who creates the software. In order to put the best functioned software into the market and make personal success, creating people have to accept criticism from their colleagues to improve and perfect their software work.

In addition, accept the criticism from others is a helpful for achieving higher standard. Bitter criticism is always helpful for your achievement; an old Chinese saying goes like that. Indeed criticisms does not make people feel comfortable, they usually against our will and always try to pick annoying mistakes from our work. However, have you think about the cheerfulness when you improved the work by eliminating the mistakes rising by others in your work? Besides, no one is perfect; people make mistakes every now and then. Criticism from team members is a channel for us to be perfect and to be succeeded. Accept them will assist people to success in teamwork.

Others may announce that not all criticism is helpful, maybe some of them come from jealous or envy. While, only after you accept those criticisms can you consider about their usefulness and accuracy. Never accepting, never listening to others opinion, needless to talk about being successful, how can this kind of people working in a team and communicate with his or hers colleagues?

According to the reasons displayed above, it is safe to draw the conclusion that people who cannot accept the criticism cannot succeed in working in a team.

作者: 张小心 时间: 2012-5-12 23:27
5.11 independent writing 小心改
写在前面：鉴于题目是JJ，并不是完整的题目，个人觉得JJ题目的描述是有偏差的，是不是“Some jobs pay a high salary but require employees to leave their families. Some jobs pay less but close to families. Which job would you prefer? Why?”更make sence 一点？仅仅是一己之见哈。要不然就是agree or disagree with the company's requirement of leaving their family and friends with high salary? 反正这个题目老怪了。

Family and friends to a person is what water to fish.~~People's~~ life without families and friends ~~are~~ is not complete. It can be understood that the first crucial task for a company is to gain profits. However, to pay employees high salary but require （木有主语，若解释to do 名词格做主题的话，也不能解释后面的require的主语）them to stay away from their families and friends is indeed not my preference.

To make the point bright, being separated（语法里讲being+被动语态都有点awkard，直接用separated就好） from family and friends, people cannot live a normal life. Everyone comes up with problems and depression in their life every now and then. When that kind of things happened, an intimate person, friend or family member, is of great necessity rather than colleagues, because they understand and care about us. Courage, assistance and beliefs are provided by them. If that help is not in hand instantly, troubles will not leave.How can employees even spare effort to work? Even the mantel health of employees can be harmed. What can people do if they have a weak body? High salary is of little use now.

In addition, it is not possible( impossible ) for employees to spend all of their time in working with no connection with life. People have to work to make a living, but should not live to work. Enjoying dinner with family and friends after a whole day of busy working, sitting together with close friends to watch a movie at weekend or going on a trip with family in New Year Eve is what life should be like. All study no play makes Jack a dull boy explains the point perfectly. No life, only work, where(how/ on which) can money be spent? Even a millionaire prefers family to his money, needless to talk about normal people like me. Therefore, working is not the entire life despite ofthe fact that ~~the~~ high salary is offered.

Others may against that lots of things cannot be done if not enough money can be collected. Again, people, at least myself, do not live for money. ~~They~~Money can do nothing when I am sad, when I need comfort, or when I eager to talk to someone who is in close relation with me. High salary is indeed the passage to materials, to luxury life some people longing for. However, under no circumstances, can money bring a family to us.
Dear, 此段没有TS。

To conclude, what a person need is life, not work in their whole living time. Compared with merely high salary, I will absolutely choose to stay with my friends and family. They are the engine of my life, which brings me braveness to carry on(move forward)~~butnotthe~~ while money does not.

总结：
1. 因为题目本身的原因，第一段和最后一段的论题不一样了。到底是站在企业角度还是站在雇员角度来讲preference?
2. 例证不够充分。
3. 有画龙点睛之笔，有些句子用得很地道。学习了！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-13 11:28
5.13 独立
又感觉不好写例证啊例证

批改的童鞋辛苦了！

Different attributes belong to various toys of job. There are obvious differences between an artist and a super movie star. Their working environment, working properties and goals of their job lead to the vast gap between their job effective. We cannot jump to the conclusion that my job has more effect on my happiness than my social life. It depends on my occupation to some extent.

If I am working like a writer, which means the achievements of my work is the most influential thing to my career rather than my interpersonal ability, my job will produce more impact on my happiness than my social life. As a writer, my success lies in the wide recognition from the public of my novels or articles. Once I receive that recognition, it is normal for me to be happy and say' oh, I am so glad that people love my books and it pays my hard working'. Maybe the sense of happiness and satisfaction will assist me carrying my work even further. All the things mentioned above are related to personal feelings, happiness and satisfaction. How can my social life change due to the achievement in my writing skills? Under no circumstances will I attend parties or feasts in a dramatically increasing number of chances.

On the other hand, the opposite situation appears when I am a celebrity like Lady Gaga. More impacts on my social life will be brought by my job. Imagine the celebrity wearing extremely fancy clothes to meet the queen of U.K. for a formal social event, what will happen? Absolutely, the day after, all the front pages of the major newspaper in U.K. will display the unrespectable attitude of the celebrity to the most important person in their country, and that is far from the end of the story. Maybe all the performance of the celebrity in U.K. will be canceled and famous people and studio in U.K. would rather not to meet the celebrity any more. Less working opportunity and fewer parties or meetings to know new people will also follow. In this way, great impact from my job property has been put into my social life.

To sum up, different types of job cloud lead to opposite influence in social life and the sense of happiness. It all depends. No conclusion so absolute can be reached.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-14 15:57
5.14独立

超时了啊啊啊啊啊。。。

Honest, as a virtue of human, has been discussed by thousands of scholars and normal people for centuries. Up till now, people still use their life time to chase for this quality to maintain their relationships with friends .However, is it possible for people to be completely honest with friends? From my point of view, it is impossible.

To begin with, unfortunates in life are inevitable and we need white lies to ease the unfortunate. People are weak in both mantel and physical when they encounter bad fortune. As their friends, no doubt we will pull them out of the darkness or the troubles even though we have to lie to them. Imagine those who has cancer. There exists the possibility for them to recover, only if they believe strongly that the tumor in their body is merely a meat ball. How can they strengthen that kind of belief? With our assist, as a friend, indeed. Apparently, nothing true about their illness can be provided to them but the beautiful lies-it is only a tiny tumor, everything will be okay in several days. Under this situation, a lie overweighs the truth, honest is useless now.

Another point of the same value is that nothing is absolute and to be honest with our friends in a complete way could cause the loss of the relation with a friend. Maybe you just do not want to hurt their feelings by telling the truth. Maybe you want to have a joke with them after a long day of tedious working. Or maybe things happen out of expectation accidently. Life is unpredictable, like the words told to Frost Gump by his mother when he was a little boy, you can never know what taste of chocolate you will have the next time. Due to this ‘disadvantage’ in people's life without exception, to lie or not to be honest can be regarded as a possible approach that enables us to protect the relation with friends. Whether it is a joke or an unintended line, those lies could help us to maintain the relationship with friends.

Some people may announce that if people are not able to be honest with their friends, what will they behave to face their family? Ignore their existence to hide the truth or even do not regard them as your family members? Both of them are not wise choices. At least in certain situation, telling lies can be understood, and it is another thing to lie in other situation such as whether you steal your friends for pocket money. From a possible stand of point, no one can be absolutely honest with friends around him/ her.

In all, to be honest with friends in an absolute way is of least possibility to achieve. For infortune happens in people's life every now and then. Besides, nothing is absolute in the true world, no one can ensure his/hers behavior.

作者: 探险者 时间: 2012-5-14 19:34
标题: BY 探险者
Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life.
（补充：觉得更准确的表述是 Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life does.）
楼主，你好。关于昨天的独立作文，我的理解和你的是一样的，英文的表述是相同的。那么这句话翻译过来是不是这样：工作对个人幸福的影响比你的社交生活对幸福的影响更大。这就不是你说的social life 对career的影响了

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-14 19:46
what intrinsically influences our job performance is our relationship with our clients.应该是job影响relationship啊
这个是想说relationship影响job么

作者: 探险者 时间: 2012-5-14 19:52
标题: BY 探险者
昨天的作文的确写得不好，主要是没有点题。我想说的是social life对人们的happiness有更大的影响，因此说了人们的social life包括在工作中和客户、同事、领导的关系，在平常和朋友的关系，在家中和亲人的关系。由此来说明对幸福的影响，然后自己的点题不够，所以理解上费劲了。
那句话，是想说工作中很重要的是relationship，这影响工作的质量，进而影响自己的情绪好坏

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-14 20:01
哦这样这样加几句结论性的就明白了～
继续加油～～

作者: 探险者 时间: 2012-5-14 20:04
标题: BY 探险者 5.13独立修改

Different attributes belong to various toys of job. There are obvious differences between an artist and a super movie star. Their working environment, working properties and goals of their job lead to the vast gap between their job effective(effective是形容词，怎么能用在这里呢？应该是efficiency). We cannot jump to the conclusion that my job has more effect on my happiness than my social life. It depends on my occupation to some extent.

If I am working like（作为一个作家：as a writer） a writer, which means the achievements of my work is(主谓不一致) the most influential thing to my career rather than my interpersonal ability, my job will produce more impact on my happiness than my social life. As a writer, my success lies in the wide recognition from the of public（建议用readers） my novels or articles. Once I receive that recognition, it is normal for me to be happy and say' oh, I am so glad that people love my books and it pays my hard working'（表示自己的工作有回报，建议：my hard working pays off）. Maybe the sense of happiness and satisfaction will assist me carrying my work even further. All the things mentioned above are related to personal feelings, happiness and satisfaction. How can my social life change due to the achievement in my writing skills? Under no circumstances will I attend parties or feasts in a dramatically increasing number of chances.

On the other hand, the opposite situation appears when I am a celebrity like Lady Gaga. More impacts on my social life will be brought by my job. Imagine the celebrity wearing extremely fancy clothes to meet the queen of U.K. for（in） a formal social event, what will happen? Absolutely, the day after, all the front pages of the major newspaper in U.K. will display the unrespectable attitude of the celebrity to the most important person in their country, and that is far from the end of the story. Maybe all the performance of the celebrity in U.K. will be canceled and famous people and studio in U.K. would rather not to meet（为什么用meet。如果是采访，可以说Interview） the celebrity any more. Less working opportunity and fewer parties or meetings to know new people will also follow. In this way, great impact from my job property has been put into my social life.（为什么没有说对happiness的影响？）

To sum up, different types of job cloud lead to opposite influence in social life and the sense of happiness. It all depends. No conclusion so absolute can be reached.

楼主我觉得你对这个题目的理解是有偏差的。如果按照你的理解，那么题目是这样的Your jobs have more effect on your happiness than on your social life.但是现在的题目的理解是Your jobs have more effect on your happiness than your social life does.

语言很不错，有些地方的用词可以再斟酌一下。注意一些小的语法错误。

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-14 20:12
呵呵写的时候没有看到补充说明。。。把happiness 和social life并列了

捂脸。。。
第一个例子想说如果是作家 job 对happiness影响更大
第二个例子想说如果是明星job对social life影响更大
就是depends 了嘿

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-15 12:24
5.15 综合

第一次写综合想请教一下批改童鞋时态是怎么规定的嘞
在涉及文章材料和听力材料时用一般过去时但是在我解释文章或听力内容的时候的时候用一般现在时么
不明白啊不知道怎么写了。。。
还有啊这听力写到什么程度是细致呢包子是不是写得不够细致啊啊啊
谢谢～～

The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, it states that the study of old cultural artifacts in Britain faced problems and limitations in the 20th century. However, this does not correspond with the listening material.

To begin with, the writer claims that precious artifacts were lost and damaged due to the construction projects. In contrast, the professor points out that the newly published guideline improved that situation. That is to say before the carrying out of the construction project, the site has to be examined in order to ensure it is an archaeology interest or not. Once it is proved as an historical interest, builders, governors and all the other related stuff will gather together to make a plan to preserve the interest. So the lecture totally disagrees with the reading passage.

Second, the lecture insists that there would not be shortage in the found. Because the construction company instead of the government will pay for the archaeology plan. Enough found can be reached without the disturbing in the changing of government. In contrast, the author demonstrates this point in an absolute different way.

Finally, the professor mentions that more paid work that never existed before would be created for archaeologists to make sure enough jobs were provided for archaeologists to research the precious artifacts. On the contrary, the reading material argues that it is difficult to have a career in archaeology, and that contradicts with the listening explicitly.

In conclusion, the points made in the lecture refutes what is presented in the reading material.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-15 13:49
5.15独立

As the rapidly growth happening in economy world, modern cities with skyscraper monsters gradually become crowded and busy. It seems that the hustle and bustle city life forces people to be impolite. However, not everywhere is experiencing the soaring in population and working pressure. It is too harsh to jump into the conclusion that being polite is not necessary.

To begin with, polite is of fundamental needed in every family. As a Chinese, respect the old and love the young, has always been the principle the people received since they are young. Besides, being polite is regarded as a virtue by all the society. Inside a family, being polite is followed precisely by every family member. As rules, their performing assists the family to maintain peach and happiness. Suppose polite has gone out of a family absolutely, what will happen? Children will shout at their parents for them not fulfill their will. Parents will punish their children even though they know it is their fault. Family members will argue about tiny problems rudely. Therefore, it is necessary to be polite in a family.

Another point about will make the statement bright, not like the announcing that everywhere is so busy and crowded and that makes unnecessary for people to be polite. That is so absolute indeed. Still, places like countryside, library and classrooms are not such crowded as mentioned. Once polite is through by people, loud laughing in library, students' fighting in classroom and people barging about trifles in the countryside will be so prevail that it is cruel for people to face the truth. Because no order can be seen in the society, even the environment will be merit to bear for the residents. In all, crowded and busy situation does not appear in each place, polite should not be forget by anyone.

Maybe someone will cast the doubt that in modern world to be polite can gain nothing for personal better life in busy and crowded environment. However, things should not be analyzed in this way. Interaction between people is what matters most. If you do not be polite, how can you expect others to be kind with you as the respond of your impolite calling? Only you perform in a polite manner, will others' behavior profit you please you. Accordingly, being polite is of extremely necessity for each one. Also, to start immediately is the fast approach for people to get benefit.

To sum up, owing to the actual situation exist in each family and public area. Assert as people do not need to be polite is not exact and it is biased. Being polite cannot be cast down by people even though only the busy and crowded can be experienced.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-16 10:59
5.16 综合

The professor casts doubts on the reasons that decrease the number of birds in United States raised by boost human population by claiming the unconvincing of the information given in the reading material.

First of all, the reading material insists that the increasing urban use land due to population growth results in the destruct in bird's habitats. As the traditional areas suitable for birds' living no longer exist, all the birds' population shrinks as a consequence. However, in the lecture, the professor against that point by mentioning the growing number of some other kinds of birds, such as, pigeons and seagulls, even hawks manage to expand their number owing to the jumping number of prey. Although some species may experience the declining in number, no all the birds have to go through that.

Second, agricultural activates do play a part, states the professor, but in the future its influence will decrease due to the less land need in the United States for agriculture each year. Another reason, introduction of more productive crops could protect some birds' habitats from being destroyed, strengthens the opinion of the professor. In contrast, the author claims that the diminishing in birds' population will continue due to the growing of agricultural land.

Finally, for pesticides using, different statements are showed by reading and listening. The reading discusses the poisons in lowering the number of birds will continue, which is objected by the listening. Two reasons are displayed- new less toxoid pesticides are coming to be popular and more pest resisted crops are created by genetic modify-to help reducing the harm from human to birds.

In conclusion, the points made by the reading are challenged by the listening due to its less believable.

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-5-16 12:04
5.16 综合修改
The professor casts doubts on the reasons that decrease the number of birds in United States raised by boost human population by claiming the unconvincing of the information given in the reading material.（这个句子看的晨依晕倒了，@_@感觉句子结构不是特别清晰，大体意思倒是明白了。我觉得如果长难句很难看清楚结构的话，还是建议分成两句写吧。。。）

First of all, the reading material insists that the increasing urban use land due to population growth results in the destruct(destruction) in bird's habitats. As the traditional areas suitable for birds' living no longer exist, all the birds' population shrinks as a consequence. However, in the lecture, the professor against(这个好像不能直接这样用吧，votes against怎么样) that point by mentioning the growing number of some other kinds of birds, such as, pigeons and seagulls, even hawks manage to expand their number owing to the jumping number of prey. Although some species may experience the declining in number, no(not) all the birds have to go through that.

Second, agricultural activates do play a part, states the professor, but in the future its(前面是复数的吧) influence will decrease due to the less land need in the United States for agriculture each year. Another reason, introduction of more productive crops could protect some birds' habitats from being destroyed, strengthens the opinion of the professor. In contrast, the author claims that the diminishing in birds' population will continue due to the growing of agricultural land.

Finally, for pesticides using, different statements are showed by reading and listening. The reading discusses the poisons in lowering the number of birds will continue, which is objected by the listening. Two reasons are displayed- new less toxoid pesticides are coming to be popular and more pest resisted crops are created by genetic modify(modification?)-to help reducing the harm from human to birds.(这个句子写得真好！)

In conclusion, the points made by the reading are challenged by the listening due to its less believable.

总的来说写得还是很不错的，尤其是句子很流畅，词汇也很高级，亮点多多。但是我觉得其实听力部分不需要太多自己发挥的，把听力里面的key words说的恰到好处就好了，有的时候自己的同义转述本来是应该给文章加分的，但是ETS的评分员可能会觉得你听的时候只记了个大概意思，反而会对你的印象不好。。。之前新东方曾经说过就是reading部分尽量转述，listening部分尽量尊重原著吧。还有due to好像在文章中闪了好几遍，可以尝试多换换哈~继续加油咯！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-16 12:29
谢谢晨依的修改～
看样子还是要加强听力练习。。。
那个晨依改错文章了这篇是今天的。。。嘎

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-16 12:31
5.16 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people have no influence on the decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole.

Young people are the morning sun of a country; their brightness cannot be shadowed by any other social groups to some extent. Courage, active and youth are their advantages, depending on those qualities, how can young people have no influence on the discussions that determine the future of the society? I will demonstrate my reasons as the following parts.

In the first position, young people are active in innovation world, which has great impacts over a society's future development. Though they are young, they are creative and brave enough to publish their idea to the world, besides young inventers are needleless to count during the gradual quicken developing pace of human society. Walt created the steam engine not even reached his thirties. Nothing has to say about the great contribution of steam engine to human industry during the 1800s. Jobs, another creator, he managed to construct Apple to be a company that lead the fashion trend of computers and Walkman, which even influence the recognition of social statue among people. All this creations were planned during the youth of Jobs. In all, the action and decisions of young people cannot be ignored due to their magnificent influence over the society.

Another point of same value is that young people are energetic than aged people as well as they are more experienced than the teenager in terms of decision making. In this situation, it seems that they are the best candidates to take the burden of the future of a society. Even though wrong decisions are made by unconscious, more time to contemplate deeply and much energy to work even harder would probably assist them to compensate for the mistake produced by then before. Besides, young people are also a large group of the society, they are given the right to vote, to be voted and to demo fully with their own willing, and how can young people create no function in the decision making about the future of a society? It is merely a biased conclusion.

Some people may argue that young people are not mature enough, so it is dangerous for the young to decide the fortune of a whole society. It is true though, compared with the old. However, their young, their not matureness will benefit the society with ample brand new decisions that have never been proposed by the old ever before. New trend leading people's understanding, new technology enhancing the industrial pace of the society and up-to-date construction decision made for the need of young people, which can only be understand by their peers.

To sum up, young people plays a fundamental role in the decision making to decide the future of a whole society in variety of fields.

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-5-16 17:10
好吧晚上再给你改昨天的……o(╯□╰)o
5.15 综合修改
The lecture apparently disputes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the passage, it states that the study of old cultural artifacts in Britain faced problems and limitations in the 20th century. However, this does not correspond with the listening material.

To begin with, the writer claims that precious artifacts were lost and damaged due to the construction projects. In contrast, the professor points out that the newly published guideline improved that situation. That is to say(,)before the carrying out of the construction project, the site has to be examined in order to ensure(ensure是确保吧、后面就不要加or not了，或者换一个表达v. whether it is...or not) it is an archaeology interest or not. Once it is proved as an historical interest, builders, governors and all the other related stuff will gather together(貌似gather一个词就可以了，或者说get together) to make a plan to preserve the interest. So the lecture totally disagrees with the reading passage.

Second, the lecture insists that there would not be shortage in the found. Because(because) the construction company instead of the government will pay for the archaeology plan. Enough found can be reached without the disturbing in the changing of government. In contrast, the author demonstrates this point in an absolute different way.

Finally, the professor mentions that more paid work that never existed before would(这里是不是少写了什么？怪怪的) be created for archaeologists to make sure enough jobs were provided for archaeologists to research the precious artifacts. （还是长句的问题，写得有点乱了。）On the contrary, the reading material argues that it is difficult to have a career in archaeology, and that contradicts with the listening explicitly.

In conclusion, the points made in the lecture refutes what is presented in the reading material.

包子的文章写得不错，字数足足的，语言流畅性更是没的说！

好的不多说啦，晨依来挑挑毛病哈~

首先，阅读的部分一定要少于听力的部分，听力的内容一定要突出重点强化哈、比如第四自然段感觉就不是特别突出了。其次，最好是能有一个清晰的结构哈、我是指的段内，可以先说reading的观点，再说listening的观点，再说反驳啊等等，只是一个例子啊，建议包子看看小鹤鹤的文章，我觉得他写的就很条理。最后，第三四段的听力细节可以再详细些哈、我觉得包子的语言表达已经没有问题了，可以用TPO的综合写作练练听写加强下细节！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-16 17:45
哈哈～
麻烦了麻烦了～·～

作者: 陈。彤学 时间: 2012-5-16 19:14
蓝色背景的是我觉得写得好的，我都背下来了，留着以后用~ ^^
写的很好思路也很清晰没有找到什么大的错误
尤其是表达多样化这点我该好好学一下~
许多词和短语都用的很好

As the rapidly growth happening in economy world, modern cities with skyscraper monsters gradually become crowded and busy. It seems that the hustle and bustle city life forces people to be impolite. However, not everywhere is experiencing the soaring in population and working pressure. It is too harsh to jump into the conclusion that being polite is not necessary.[我觉得第一段写的很好，切题，把busy和crowded都说清楚了，自己的观点也点明了，而且用词也好。]

To begin with, polite is of fundamental needed in every family. As a Chinese, respect the old and love the young, has always been the principle the people received since they are young. Besides, being polite is regarded as a virtue by all the society. Inside a family（这是不是说in a family就行，inside感觉有点奇怪）, being polite is followed precisely by every family member. As rules, their performing assists the family to maintain peach and happiness. Suppose polite has gone out of a family absolutely, what will happen? Children will shout at their parents for them not fulfill their will. Parents will punish their children even though they know it is their fault. Family members will argue about tiny problems rudely. Therefore, it is necessary to be polite in a family.[what will happen 后面的例子既简单有有说服力~]
Another point about will make the statement bright, not like the announcing that everywhere is so busy and crowded and that makes unnecessary for people to be polite. That is so absolute indeed. Still, places like countryside, library and classrooms are not such crowded as mentioned. Once polite is through by people, loud laughing in library, students' fighting in classroom and people barging about trifles in the countryside will be so prevail that it is cruel for people to face the truth. Because no order can be seen in the society, even the environment will be merit to bear for the residents. In all, crowded and busy situation does not appear in each place, polite should not be forget by anyone.

Maybe someone will cast the doubt that in modern world to be polite can gain nothing for personal better life in busy and crowded environment. However, things should not be analyzed in this way. Interaction between people is what matters most. If you do not be polite, how can you expect others to be kind with you as the respond of your impolite calling? Only you perform in a polite manner, will others' behavior profit you and please you. Accordingly, being polite is of extremely necessity for each one. Also, to start immediately is the fast approach for people to get benefit.

To sum up, owing to the actual situation exist in each family and public area. Assert as people do not need to be polite is not exact and it is biased. Being polite cannot be cast down by people even though only the busy and crowded can be experienced.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-17 17:06
5.17 综合
超时了。。。

The reading explores the issue of ways to address the decline of Torreya. The listening deals with the same topic. However, the professor thinks that all the three possible reasons listed in the reading are unlikely to be true.
It mentioned in the reading that reestablish Torreya in their original locations could ease the problem owing to the cooler and wetter microclimate. The professor, on the contrary, declares that it is unlikely to be achieved. This is because the coolest and dampest microclimate is easily to be affected by changes in the larger region climate. That is to say the almost drained wetlands in Florida and gradual warming global climate both contribute to the impossible of Torreya reestablish, which is raised by the author.
Moreover, the next view made by the writer is that the decline would be eased by the assisted migration. The lecturer contradicts that by pointing out another similar example about black lockist trees 这是什么树啊中间那个单词听不出来, which kill lots of local endangered trees after being moved to another region by human. In this way, there is an unpredictable outcome of the migration of Torreya. In other words, this solution cannot be put into practice either.
At last, the author asserts that situation can be improved if research center is set up. Whereas the professor claims trees in research center are not able to resist the diseases due to its less population and diversity, which will not happen in a wild area. Therefore, this reason is denied by the professor.
In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows the central arguments in the reading, reestablish, assisted migration and research center, are incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-17 18:09
5.17 独立

又超了两分钟啊啊啊啊。。。码太多字了。。。。

ML It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future

No wonder with the ascent competition and more variously growing of professions in modern career fields, which career will possess a brighter future confused people even they when are still in collages. Compared with the past, less frequent changes in technology, small population and immatureness of globalization, those are all the possible features could assist people to identify a secure and successful future.

To begin with, globalization was not a prevalent phenomenon in the past. Therefore, little information can be transformed among nations, which means the same situation for crisis. Things like Great Depression are unlikely to make people lose their job in each isolate country. Aside from information transformation, trend followed those super stars cannot create a worldwide influence, which means no necessity for people working in mass production area to change their products every minute and either do they have to worried about what will happen if people do not like the products related to certain star anymore. In this way, the security of people's job can be promised clearly in the past time, also people can make choices freely.

Another point will make the statement clear is that technology was not advanced, which means great evolution in technology would not appear in such a high frequency like nowadays. Walt created stream engine, thousands positions in factories were offered for a long time. Edison invented bulb, millions of people were hired to work in electricity field for years. Einstein discovered relativity theory, another thousands works were provided to scientists to enhance that area for decades. Those are all what the topic means. No frequent changes in technology, no rapid shift in people’s job. People will not be forced to change their career according to the popularity of another kind of technology, which is another kind of insurance for their job. Unlike these days, new technology spreads out through the world at the second minutes they are proposed. Obviously, no one can presume what will happen to their profession in the next second.

Some people may announce that right now there are thousands kinds of occupations for people to pick and there are great needs in the market. On the contrary, in the past, there were just few. Indeed the variety of job is increased. Unfortunately, things like more security in job are not an accurate prediction. Population has grown tenfold over the last century, what can be ensured is that the competition is tenfold to some extent. Accordingly, it is easier for people in the past to identify their career.

To sum up, because of globalization, developed technology and soaring population, hardly can people identify whether they make correct choice to ensure themselves a security and successful future.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-17 18:12
膜拜了小鹤鹤的综合～！
也来规划个模板～

好好练听力了。。。

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-18 10:30
5.18 综合

The reading explores the issue of attacking buzzers, people who are hired as 'live advertisements' for companies to praise their products. The student, a part-time buzzer, deals with the same topic. However, the student states his opinion as a buzzer from a completely different view.

It mentioned in the reading material that buzzers never tell the truth. The student, on the contrary, disproves that by his personal experience. He says that cell phone company hires buzzers who really think their products are good and enjoy using them, and they do get paid. What the buzzers do is exactly opposite from the commercial advertisement. Therefore, the student casts doubts on the counterpart of the reading.
Moreover, the next point made by the writer is that people believe whatever buzzer says. Again, Bill, the students, claims that there is a precisely opposite situation. When he is buzzing about the cell phone to people, they are always asking lots of questions about the products, such as how long can they use it and related functions. If people trust every word told by the buzzer they will absolutely not ask any question, which is contradicted with the scene described by the passage.

At last, the reading insists that buzzers harm the relationship of the society. It is stupid, explains the student, buzzers are the group of people who love using the products. They will spare no effort to share their true feelings with the consumer. Once customers buy the product they will know how good they are, and no wonder buzzers will be more trustful and open to the public.

To sum up, Bill clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading and convincingly shows that the argument in the passage to attack buzzers are incorrect.

作者: 易雨水巷 时间: 2012-5-18 12:02
5.17 独立蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误
又超了两分钟啊啊啊啊。。。码太多字了。。。。
ML It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or jobwould have a secure or successful future

No wonder with the ascent competition and more variously growing of professionsin modern career fields, which career will possess a brighter future confusedpeople even they(去掉) when (they) are still in collages (colleges). Comparedwith the past, less frequent changes in technology, small population andimmatureness of globalization, those are all the possible features could assistpeople to identify a secure and successful future. (既然用的是compared with the past,那么接下来应该说的是现代blabla但lz貌似写的的是古代怎么样啊，雨巷觉得不太合适呢)

To begin with, globalization was not a prevalent phenomenon in the past. Therefore,little information can be transformed among nations, whichmeans the same situation for crisis.（？） Things like Great Depression are unlikely to make people lose theirjob in each isolate country. Aside from informationtransformation, trend followed those super stars cannot create a worldwideinfluence, which means no necessity for people working in mass production areato change their products every minute and either do they have to worried （worry）aboutwhat will happen if people do not like the products related to certain staranymore. （这么长的句子。。。。whichmeans 可以换成In otherword/ that is to say等另起一句ps发现lz文章很多whichmeans ，可以考虑替换哦）In this way, thesecurity of people's job can be promised clearly in the past time, also people can make choices freely.（两个句子了要么加连接词，要么另起，建议 and people can make choicesfreely as well.）

Another point will makethe statement clear is that technology was not advanced, which meansgreat evolution in technology would not appear in such a high frequency likenowadays. Walt created stream engine, thousandspositions in factories were offered for a long time. Edison invented bulb,millions of people were hired to work in electricity field for years. Einstein discovered relativity theory, another thousands works wereprovided to scientists to enhance that area for decades. (这些例子貌似都是两个句子木有连接词就放到了一句话里==)Those areall what the topic means. No frequent changes in technology, no rapid shift inpeople’s job.（这句话才应该是你上面三个例子的TS吧，第一句感觉明显不搭额） People will not be forced to change their careeraccording to the popularity of another kind of technology,which is another kind of （两个another kind of 出现同一句话里直接说aninsurance 或者oneof insurances 就ok 啊）insurance for their job. Unlike these days, new technology spreads outthrough the world at the second minutes they are proposed. Obviously, no onecan presume what will happen to their profession in the next second.

Some people may announce that right now there are thousands kinds of （sorts of）occupations for people to pick and there are great needs in themarket. On the contrary, in the past, there were just few. Indeed the varietyof job is increased. Unfortunately, things like more security in job are not anaccurate prediction. Population has grown tenfoldover the last century, what can be ensured is that the competition is tenfoldto some extent. (又是两句话，木有连接词)Accordingly, itis easier for people in the past to identify their career.

To sum up, because of globalization, developed technology and soaring population, hardly can people identifywhether they make correct choice to ensure themselves a security and successfulfuture.
To 包子不包子：
1.在这么短的时间写出这么多字，还木有错误，雨巷着实佩服O(∩_∩)O~
2.需要注意的问题啊，lz很喜欢两个句子放在一起不加连接词唉

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-18 12:54
5.18 独立

Old people are always considered to be the symbol of wisdom in my country, and even in Tang Dynasty, old people's words often win the great concern of the emperor. From my point of view, though in the past fifty years the world has changed so much, the old people have been through all those events successfully.
Accordingly, they are experienced without doubts. Therefore, it is to harsh to jump into the absolute conclusion that the advice from our grandparents are useless. It depends on the questions we ask about to some extent.

To begin with, grandparents are experienced. Their advice for significant things in normal life should be given enough consideration. You will take the burden if you do not listen to the old, is the old saying in China that examines what the situation means. Should we go to work right after graduation? Should we marry a person from an extremely different culture? Or should we devote ourselves in charity area foe the whole life? Indeed, revolutionary changes happened in the society in the past years, grandparents saw them, talked to them and even competed with them and they survived. How can we not listen to the words from a winner? Besides, grandparents love us, they will do whatever they can to assist us even though they have to cast down their old fashion opinion and learn the new one.

On the other hand, things related to modern technology can be totally different. Yesterday, I asked my grandpa about the process to reset my computer. Should I press the blue or the red button first? The red one apparently, answered my grandpa without hesitation. However, unfortunately, I can never start my computer right after I pressed the red button. It is just a little thing happened in normal life, I still can ask the professional stuff to fix my computer the other day. However, what will happen if I do the same thing to the computer saves useful commercial information belongs to a super international company? Maybe I will be accused for destroying secret business information. All that things happened just because I accept a tiny piece of advice from my aged grandpa. Therefore, for all the technology fields, advice that our grandparents can give to us may not be useful.

To sum up, statement like all the advice from our grandparents could not be helpful is inaccurate and things should be contemplated from different points of view. For events occurred in normal life, advice from experienced grandparents can be of extreme value. On the contrary, in technology field, that advice should be considered several times.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-18 13:01
恩语法 T,T
一直以来不愿意理的事。。。
研究了一下清楚多了～
谢谢雨巷～

作者: lxc1989614 时间: 2012-5-18 15:31
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people have no influence on the decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole.

Young people are the morning sun of a country为什么我觉得外国人应该是没有这种讲法的。。很容易让人联想到毛主席时代啊。。。; their brightness cannot be shadowed by any other social groups to some extent. Courage, active and youth are their advantages, depending on those qualities, how can young people have no influence on the discussions that determine the future of the society? 这里的观点是不是应该再明确一点？I will demonstrate my reasons as the following parts.

In the first position, young people are active in innovation world, which has great impacts over （on)a society's future development. Though they are young, they are creative and brave enough to publish their idea to the world, besides young inventers are needleless to count during the gradual quicken developing pace of human society. Walt created the steam engine not even reached his thirties. Nothing has to say about the great contribution of steam engine to human industry during the 1800s. Jobs, another creator, he managed to construct Apple to be a company that lead the fashion trend of computers and Walkman, which even influence the recognition of social statue among people. All this creations were planned during the youth of Jobs. In all, the action and decisions of young people cannot be ignored due to their magnificent influence over(on) the society.

Another point of same value is that young people are energetic than aged people as well as they are more experienced than the teenager in terms of decision making个人认为这句可以去掉啊~本来就是和老人比，不用加入青少年之类的吧~这样会显得比较啰嗦，观点还是简洁一点好. In this situation, it seems that they are the best candidates to take the burden of the future of a society. Even though wrong decisions are made by unconscious, more time to contemplate deeply and much energy to work even harder would probably assist them to compensate for the mistake produced by then before. Besides, young people are also a large group of the society, they are given the right to vote, to be voted and to demo fully with their own willing, and how can young people create no function in the decision making about the future of a society? It is merely a biased conclusion.

Some people may argue that young people are not mature enough, so it is dangerous for the young to decide the fortune of a whole society. It is true though, compared with the old. However, their young, their not matureness will benefit the society with ample brand new decisions that have never been proposed by the old ever before. New trend leading people's understanding, new（。New) technology enhancing the industrial pace of the society and up-to-date construction decision made for the need of young people, which can only be understand by their peers.

To sum up, young people plays a fundamental role in the decision making to decide the future of a whole society in variety of fields.

不好意思，这两天有事，拖到今天才给你改
有几点建议：这么长的文章你能写完么？？是不是可以缩减一下的。。。如果你打字速度够快，请忽略这一点
然后。。。没有然后了。。。
你写的挺好的。。。

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-18 21:02
谢谢LXC的修改~
以后一定要简洁要简洁啊啊

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-5-18 23:04
5.17 综合改文~
超时了。。。

超了多少时间啊？

红色错误，蓝色疑问，黄色高亮~
The reading explores the issue of （这个是多余的吧？）ways to address the decline of Torreya. The listening deals with the same topic. However, the professor thinks that all the three（这个地方感觉怪怪的） possible reasons listed in the reading are unlikely to be true.（婷婷建议改成：none of three possible solutions is convincing.）

It (is) mentioned in the reading that reestablishing Torreya in their original locations could ease the problem owing to the cooler and wetter microclimate. The professor, on the contrary, declares that it is unlikely to be achieved. This is because the coolest and dampest microclimate is easily to be affected by changes in the larger region climate. That is to say the almost drained wetlands in Florida and gradual warming global climate both contribute to the impossible（impossibility） of Torreya reestablish( Torreya's reestablishment), which is raised by the author.

Moreover, the next view made by the writer is that the decline would be eased by the assisted migration. The lecturer contradicts that by pointing out another similar example about black lockist trees 这是什么树啊中间那个单词听不出来(black locust tree一种槐树), which kill lots of local endangered trees after being moved to another region by humans. In this way, there is an unpredictable outcome of the migration of Torreya. In other words, this solution cannot be put into practice either.

At last, the author asserts that situation can be improved if research center is set up. Whereas the professor claims （that）trees in research center are not able to resist the（不要） diseases due to its less population and diversity, which will not happen in a wild area. Therefore, this reason is denied by the professor.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows the central arguments in the reading（这句话好实用的说~）, (这个地方建议用：)reestablish, assisted migration and research center, are incorrect.

Conclusion：1.包子要注意语言的流利性

2.动名词

3.名词的单复数

4.还有宾语从句的that尽量别省~

嘿嘿，总的来说，还是不错的啦，加油哦~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-19 11:28

5.17 综合改文~
超时了。。。

-- by 会员婷婷connie (2012/5/18 23:04:26)

超了两分钟。。。
婷婷觉得语言流利性不够是因为逻辑性不强还是结构不好还是别的什么原因嘞？

作者: 易雨水巷 时间: 2012-5-19 12:25
Old people are always considered to be thesymbol of wisdom in my country, and even in Tang Dynasty, old people's wordsoften win the great concern of the emperor. From my point of view, though inthe past fifty years the world has changed so much, the old people have beenthrough all those events successfully.
Accordingly, they are experienced without doubts. Therefore, it is to (too) harsh to jump into the absolute conclusion that the advicefrom our grandparents are useless. It depends on the questions we ask about to some extent.

To begin with, grandparents are experienced. Their advice for significantthings in normal life should be given enough consideration. You will take the burden if you do not listen to theold,(不听老人言吃亏在眼前？再确认一下翻译吧) is the old saying in China that examines what the situation means.Should we go to work right after graduation? Should we marry a person from anextremely different culture? Or should we devote ourselves in charity area foe （for）the whole life? Indeed, revolutionary changes happened in the society in thepast years, grandparents saw them, talked to themand even competed with them and they survived. （这些them they指代混乱啦）How can we not listen to the words from a winner? Besides, grandparents loveus, they will do whatever they can to assist us even though they have to cast downtheir old fashion opinion and learn the new one.

On the other hand, things related to modern technology can be totallydifferent. Yesterday, I asked my grandpa about the process to reset mycomputer. Should I press the blue or the red button first? The red oneapparently, answered my grandpa without hesitation. However, unfortunately, Ican never start my computer right after I pressed the red button. It is just alittle thing happened in normal life, I still can ask the professional stuff tofix my computer the other day. However, what will happen if I do the same thingto the computer saves useful commercial information belongs to a superinternational company? Maybe I will be accused for （of） destroyingsecret business information. All that things happened just because I accept atiny piece of advice from my agedgrandpa. Therefore, for all the technology fields, advice that our grandparentscan give to us may not be useful.（例子占得篇幅貌似有点儿略多了，可以多加点理论以后再写例子O(∩_∩)O~）

To sum up, statement like all the advice from our grandparents could not behelpful is inaccurate and things should be contemplated from different pointsof view. For events occurred in normal life, advice from experiencedgrandparents can be of extreme value. On the contrary, in technology field,that advice should be considered several times.
To 包子不包子
水巷从来不敢写正反的文章，觉得好难T.T
包子写得不错啊，上次的两句不加连接词的问题已经不见了，恭喜啦
加油↖(^ω^)↗

作者: sang824 时间: 2012-5-19 12:33
5.18 综合

The reading explores the issue of attacking buzzers, people who are hired as 'live advertisements' for companies to praise their products. The student, a part-time buzzer, deals with the same topic. However, the student states his opinion as a buzzer from a completely different view.

It mentioned in the reading material that buzzers never tell the truth. The student, on the contrary, disproves that by his personal experience. He says that cell phone company hires buzzers who really think their products are good and enjoy using them, and they do get paid. What the buzzers do is exactly opposite from the commercial advertisement. Therefore, the student casts doubts on the counterpart of the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the writer is that people believe whatever buzzer says. Again, Bill, the students, claims ~~that there i~~s a precisely opposite situation. When he is buzzing about the cell phone to people,~~they are always asking~~ people always ask lots of questions about the products, such as how long can they use it and related functions. If people trust every word told by the buzzer they will absolutely not ask any question, which is contradicted with(to?) the scene described by the passage.

At last, the reading insists that buzzers harm the relationship of the society. It is stupid, explains the student,(该句号另起下一句哦？) buzzers are the group of people who love using the products. They will spare no effort to share their true feelings with the consumer. Once customers buy the product they will know how good they are, and no wonder buzzers will be more trustful and open to the public.

To sum up, Bill clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading and convincingly shows that the argument in the passage to attack buzzers are incorrect.

没有什么大问题综合个别地方注意简洁就好~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-19 12:46
5.19 综合

Both of the lecture and the reading material explore the consequences of Yellowstone fire. The writer displays three kinds of damages produce by the fire. However, the speaker claims that there are positive results of the fire and natural fire is part of the ecological natural cycle.

It is mentioned in the reading that Yellowstone fire caused tremendous damage to the plants and vegetation. The professor, on the contrary, holds the opposite view that the fore creates new opportunities for some kinds of vegetation. That is to say, the fire replaces tall plants with other sorts of small plants, which even possess a higher diversity. Besides, some seeds must go through the high temperature to germinate. Therefore, the professor's argument contradicts the counterpart of the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the reading is that wild life in the national park was affected by the fire extremely. Again, the speaker claims that new chances for some types of animals are produced by the fire, which differs from the reading. The small plants talked before bring suitable habits for rabbits and hares, after their settlement, predators that make living on them are able to come back. Accordingly, a stronger food chain is provided by the fire.

At last, the author states that local economy suffered from the fire. Whereas the lecturer disproves that point by explaining how unusual the 1990s fire was to Yellowstone. Only that kind of fire happens each year will the tourism be suffered. She gives the examples of the unusual combination of the weather that year, such as less rainfall and unusual strong wind. Furthermore, this kind of fire has never occurred ever since the 1990s and tourists come back to visit the national park every year after that. No effect on tourism is produced.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the argument, three damages produced by natural fire, is incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-19 13:50
5.19 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people in today are less dependent on their parents than in the past.

People now live in an era of information explosion. No matter where you are or what time it is, just by simply pressing a button on your computer or cellphone, myriad of most up-to-date information will come up. Owing to this, young people, who are always more familiar with the brand new technique than their parents, are less likely to depend on their parents compared with the past. More reasons will be given as the following.

To begin with, technology is developing, Internet, Facebook and Twitter jump into people's life, which provide young people with great convenience in communication. In those social networks, people in every field can be found without effort. Merely by clicking the mouse, young people can talk with a professor in biology, math or linguistic face to face to solve problems. Moreover, parents have the limited ability in helping us, they have their own profession. When things happened out of their profession, it is time for the Internet. Again, by typing the questions into Google or Bing, young people can find whatever they want quickly and precisely without bothering their parents. Therefore, due to the technology development, young people are less dependent on their parents than in the past.

Another point will make the statement clear is that more young people nowadays regard their independence as a kind of matureness and braveness. In my community, lots of young people at my age step into the society right after their graduation from high school. They believe people who can live on their own effort rather than their parents are worth respecting. Some of them move out of their parents' house and struggle in the society to achieve success. Other young people insist to do part time job to pay for their college fees. In this way, young people learn to live with themselves, earn money by themselves and study by themselves. No wonder there is less dependence of young people on their parents.

Some people may doubt that whether this independence can bring a health development for the young. In my opinion, mistakes in young people's independent living are impossible to avoid. However, we should not jump into the conclusion that these mistakes are harmful and only negative results are produced. In fact, young people could learn a lot from their own mistakes or experience, which will assist and guide them in their future life. Always, this kind of experience is difficult to forget. With all these instructive experience, how can people announce that there will not be a health development?

To sum up, with the help of myriad, easy accessed information, technology and social network as well as the new conception of matureness and braveness, young people are more independent on their parents than in the past.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-20 13:26
5.20 综合综合

Both of the writer and lecturer explore the issue of genetically modified trees. The writer believes that three advantages are provided by the planting of genetically modified trees. On the contrary, the professor states that there are problems and even costs brought by genetically modified trees.

It mentioned in the reading that genetically modified trees are able to survive hardier environment than natural trees. The speaker, however, claims an opposite results that genetically modified trees do not ensure their survival. She explains that a few natural trees can survive a hardier environment, but that is enough to enable their living. For genetically modified trees, they are designed to resist only one situation. When other things happen they will be killed completely. Therefore, the professor’s argument agonists its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the passage is that genetically modified trees promise to bring economic benefit to people who grow them. Again, the professor disproves that opinion by pointing out the truth that company always charges for a higher price for genetically modified trees from tree farmers than natural trees. Besides, tree farmers cannot simply collect the seeds and plant them next year, instead they have to pay for the company every time those trees are planted. A higher cost is produced rather than economic benefit.

At last, the author believes that genetically modified trees can help to prevent overexploitation from wild trees. Whereas the professor declares that genetically modified trees are more aggressive, and they are inclined to compete with local wild trees for resources, such as water and nutrition. Eventually, genetically modified trees will outcompete the local tree and crowding out them.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading and convincingly shows that the central view in the reading, genetically modified trees will benefit people who plant them, is incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-20 15:17
5.20 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past.

New leisure centers with big screen cinema are next to the street. Most up-to-date information is send to your personal computer every morning. Beautiful countryside sceneries can be accessed easily. Those are all the things happened in modern society only. People in the past do not possess such kind of convenience and pleasure. In my opinion, people now are happier and more satisfied than the past.

To begin with, modern technology provides happiness and satisfaction to people without doubts. With simply a personal computer connected to the Internet at home, people do not have to waste time on the way between their office and home, which is annoying when traffic jam comes up. Besides, more personal environment and flexible time are created due to the working at home. All people have to do is clicking several buttons and start working with their colleagues just like they are working in the office. Comfort and convince are provided to people's everyday life, how can people not feel happy and satisfied?

Another point owns the same value is that more opportunities are produced by modern cities. Cities are developing; consequently, labors are of desperate needed. People from all vacations, labor workers, technique workers and instructors, are all welcomed by large cities. Moreover, the necessity of those people is increasingly gradually. Even people from countryside who want to achieve a better life can find their ideal job now. In this way, the quality of people’s life is ensured, the development of a city is enabled and a harmony society comes to people's life step by step. No complains, sadness and unsatisfactory will ever occur. Compared with the past, people can only work in their birth places because of the less advanced city construction. Farmer family maintains to be farmers. People living in the bottom of the society continue to struggle for food. Nothing about happiness and satisfaction can be seen.

Others may argue that modern world harms people to some extent. People from all over the country gather in one or two cities, which can only bring difficulties in security work and boosting in population. Furthermore, competitions will become fiercer. Local people would suffer from the low cost labors from poorer places. The gap between rich and poor will be enlarged. However, those situations are just dark sides of the modern society. Every coin has two sides, the advantages overweigh the disadvantages of a modern city when talk about the general development. Accordingly, people in present days enjoy more happiness and satisfaction than before.

To sum up, owing to the development of modern technology and cities, people now possess more happiness and satisfaction than the past.

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-5-20 23:30
包子不好意思啊、晨依攒了三篇没有给你改了，这几天赶快给包子补上！
5月19日综合
Both of the lecture and the reading material explore the consequences of Yellowstone fire. The writer displays three kinds of damages produce by the fire. However, the speaker claims that there are positive results of the fire and natural fire is part of the ecological natural cycle.

It is mentioned in the reading that Yellowstone fire caused tremendous damage to the plants and vegetation. The professor, on the contrary, holds the opposite view that the fore creates new opportunities for some kinds of vegetation. That is to say, the fire replaces(个人感觉用replace意思很对但是主语是fire是不是不太合适?) tall plants with other sorts of small plants, which even possess a higher diversity. Besides, some seeds must go through the high temperature to germinate. Therefore, the professor's argument contradicts the counterpart of the reading.(听的好仔细啊，赞！)
Moreover, the next point made by the reading is that wild life in the national park was affected by the fire extremely. Again, the speaker claims that new chances for some types of animals are produced by the fire, which(which不可以指代整个句子) differs from the reading. The small plants talked(?) before bring suitable habits(habitats) for rabbits and hares, after their settlement, predators that make living on them are able to come back. Accordingly, a stronger food chain is provided by the fire.

At last, the author states that local economy suffered from the fire.(我觉得是不是应该加个时间词限定一下，感觉过去时有点突兀呢、包子斟酌下~~)Whereas the lecturer disproves that point by explaining how unusual the 1990s fire was to Yellowstone(the Yellowstone park).(前面加个连词衔接一下)Only that kind of fire happens each year will the tourism be suffered. She gives ~~the~~examples(我觉得不是example，应该是elements什么的吧、) of the unusual combination of the weather that year, such as less rainfall and unusual strong wind. Furthermore, this kind of fire has never occurred ever since the 1990s and tourists come back to visit the national park every year after that. No effect on tourism is produced.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the argument, three damages produced by natural fire, is incorrect.

Conclusion：包子的作文很茁壮！文章结构有了很大改善，细节也足足的，最欣赏的是，包子用的动词很精妙。以上的蓝色部分包子斟酌哈、晨依水平有限可能有些地方不是很到位的包子包涵一下啦，总体来说真的很好！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-21 14:03
5.21 综合
Both of the reading and lecture explore the issue of ethanol fuel. The reading insists that ethanol fuel is not a good replacement of gasoline. However, the professor disproves the writer by pointing out the unconvincing arguments.

It is mentioned in the reading that ethanol fuel would not help to ease global warming. The speaker, on the contrary, claims that it is not true. She explains that corns planted for producing ethanol fuel can compensate the amount of CO2 emitted in to the atmosphere when burning them. In this way, plants use CO2 as their nutrition. They actually remove CO2 from the air. Apparently, the professor's statement disputes its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the reading is that ethanol fuel reduces the amount of plants that are used to feed the animals. Again, the lecturer contests the view by stating that producing ethanol fuel will only consume the cell wall of plants to meet humans' needs. Besides, that part of plants is not eaten by animals. Accordingly, no lack in animals’ food will happen.

At last, the writer believes that ethanol fuel could not win in the price compared to gasoline if there is no help from the government. Whereas, the professor declares that this support of tax subsidies from government is not always needed. That is to say, the more people create the needs of ethanol fuel, the more will be produced by producers and the price will drop consequently. Furthermore, a study displays that if the needs of ethanol grow 3 times greater, its prices would drop by 40%. Therefore, the costs of ethanol will definitely does down even without the assistance from government.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument of the writer, ethanol fuel will not bring benefits, is incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-21 14:05

包子不好意思啊、晨依攒了三篇没有给你改了，这几天赶快给包子补上！
5月19日综合
Both of the lecture and the reading material explore the consequences of Yellowstone fire. The writer displays three kinds of damages produce by the fire. However, the speaker claims that there are positive results of the fire and natural fire is part of the ecological natural cycle.

It is mentioned in the reading that Yellowstone fire caused tremendous damage to the plants and vegetation. The professor, on the contrary, holds the opposite view that the fore creates new opportunities for some kinds of vegetation. That is to say, the fire replaces(个人感觉用replace意思很对但是主语是fire是不是不太合适?) tall plants with other sorts of small plants, which even possess a higher diversity. Besides, some seeds must go through the high temperature to germinate. Therefore, the professor's argument contradicts the counterpart of the reading.(听的好仔细啊，赞！)
Moreover, the next point made by the reading is that wild life in the national park was affected by the fire extremely. Again, the speaker claims that new chances for some types of animals are produced by the fire, which(which不可以指代整个句子) differs from the reading. The small plants talked(?) before bring suitable habits(habitats) for rabbits and hares, after their settlement, predators that make living on them are able to come back. Accordingly, a stronger food chain is provided by the fire.

At last, the author states that local economy suffered from the fire.(我觉得是不是应该加个时间词限定一下，感觉过去时有点突兀呢、包子斟酌下~~)Whereas the lecturer disproves that point by explaining how unusual the 1990s fire was to Yellowstone(the Yellowstone park).(前面加个连词衔接一下)Only that kind of fire happens each year will the tourism be suffered. She gives ~~the~~examples(我觉得不是example，应该是elements什么的吧、) of the unusual combination of the weather that year, such as less rainfall and unusual strong wind. Furthermore, this kind of fire has never occurred ever since the 1990s and tourists come back to visit the national park every year after that. No effect on tourism is produced.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the passage and convincingly shows that the argument, three damages produced by natural fire, is incorrect.

Conclusion：包子的作文很茁壮！文章结构有了很大改善，细节也足足的，最欣赏的是，包子用的动词很精妙。以上的蓝色部分包子斟酌哈、晨依水平有限可能有些地方不是很到位的包子包涵一下啦，总体来说真的很好！

-- by 会员晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/20 23:30:21)

谢谢晨依修改！很细致呀蓝色部分很有帮助的呀~~ ^_^

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-21 15:00
5.21 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Food in the past was much healthier than today.

When talk about food people eat nowadays, all the things I can remember are fast food, high calories desserts and can food. Compared with the situation in the past of China, delicious homemade feast, healthy dumplings and traditional cakes just jump into my mind. Clearly, food in the past was much healthier than today. I will explain myself as following.

First of all, fast food is so prevail that it seems they occupy every corner on earth. People in the past do not depend on fast food to squeeze time for their working. Nowadays, on the streets, how many people do not hold a burger in one hand and a cup of coffee in another while walking in a hurry? How many people do not have breakfast in Wendy's or MacDonald's as their lunch? How many people do not call for take-away services when on weekends? Usually, we meet people take the advantages of the convenience of fast food but overlook its unhealthy. On the contrary, people live in the past regard preparing food for the family as pleasure. Mothers changes the dishes and combination of food nutrition every meal. No wonder will there be a healthier food style in the past.

Another point values the same is that chemical elements used to preserve food is harmful. Although people benefit a lot from a longer shelf life, they do not have to buy daily food frequently, have they considered about a recent research? It is displayed in the study that a certain chemical element in a popular can fish could probably trigger cancer if it is eaten frequently. Besides, not only in preserving food, colors and flavors of food may be added additionally. In this way, a variety of food, juice, cake and chocolate are poisons to some extent. Even though, some people still love those man-made taste and color in their everyday meal. Things are totally different in the past. People eat home-grown vegetables and drink milk from the cow they feed. What else can be healthier than the food from nature directly?

Others may declare that fast food suits the market better than those traditional dishes at present. However, do people want a health body or merely tasty food with a poor health condition? I guess it is the former that most people want. Therefore, no matter how good looking and tasty the food are now, they are not as health as they used to be.

To sum up, food in nowadays are not less healthy than they used to be due to the popularity of fast food and overuse of chemical elements in preserving food.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-22 09:43
5.22 综合

Both of the reading and listening explore the issue of the decline in yellow cedar number in northwestern North America. The writer insists three reasons lead to the dropping number of cedars. However, the professor believes all the causes are not adequate.

It is mentioned in the reading that a kind of insect, cedar bark beetle, parasites in the tree results in the lowering number. The speaker, on the contrary, disagrees with that. She explains that the barks and leaves of yellow cedars are all saturated with powerful chemical, which is poison to the insect. It is also the reason for yellow cedars to be much more resistance to the insects than other trees. In order to explain the dead tree with insects, the professor argues that those trees have been damaged before the insects' appearance. Therefore, the speaker's argument disproves its counterpart of the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the passage is that brown bears' clawing at cedars damages the tree. Again, the speaker disputes this statement by saying that it is not an overall cause. Because yellow cedar both living on the mainland and island are dying and there is no brown bears live on the island. If it is the consequence of bear attacking, whether with or without brown bears around should create different decline pattern in trees' number in those two areas. Unfortunately, there is not. Accordingly, bears should not be blame.

At last, the author asserts that changing climate damages the root system of yellow cedars and that leads to the reducing number of cedars. Whereas, the professor against that view by giving the fact. The situation is that cedars living in the low elevator area, warm area, are facing more decrease in number than the cold area. In this way it is not the weather that harms the root system. At least this reason is not the killing one.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading and convincingly shows that the three reasons mentioned in the passage are incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-22 10:28
5.22 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Colleges and universities should offer students better job preparation before they start working. Use specific reasons to support your ideas.

Population is soaring. People tend to gather in big cities. Financial crisis can happen at every second. All those reasons lead to a tough environment for college students to find job. Therefore, in my opinion, it is necessary for colleges to offer job preparation before students start working. I will explain myself as the following.

To begin with, college students are not familiar with the society and working situation. Students spend most of their time in libraries, classrooms and dormitories to study. It is hard for them to imagine what it looks like at the outside. During school time, students are under the protection of schools. They do not have to worry about what will happen if they do not earn enough money and have nowhere to spend the cold night. They do not have to compete with their classmates for higher salary, either about the result of failing an important task assigned by the boss. However, when students are working, they have to know how to deal with those questions. Accordingly, providing students with enough preparation for job by colleges and universities is of great needed.

Another point of the same value is that students who possess the preparation knowledge are able to gain a better job. For the sake of students’ brighter future, colleges and universities should supply better job preparation. My brother wants to get a high-salary job in Middle East, so he takes preparation courses for job finding. The significant tip he learned in the class is do not hug with Middle East women if not invited or you are regarded to be rude. Before the interview, if it is not the tip he remembered in class, he will hug the women and lost the job even without saying a word. How important is the job preparation that colleges offered!

Others may insist that college students are adults and they should know how to take care of themselves. It is a waste of money and time to offer job preparation in colleges and universities. They are adults, indeed. They are inexperienced either. How can colleges not give students the right to become experienced? Consequently, no way can better job preparation not given to students.

To sum up, job preparation could assist students to be experienced and get used to the society before they start working. Besides, it also ensures a better job and future for the students. In all, colleges and universities should offer better job preparation for students.

作者: chasedreamabc 时间: 2012-5-22 13:09
Both of（both…and…）the reading and lecture explore the issue of ethanol fuel. The reading insists that ethanol fuel is not a good replacement of gasoline. However, the professor disproves the writer by pointing out the unconvincing arguments.

It is mentioned in the reading that ethanol fuel would not help to ease global warming. The speaker, on the contrary, claims that it is not true. She explains that corns planted for producing ethanol fuel can compensate the amount of CO2 emitted in to the atmosphere when burning them. In this way, plants use CO2 as their nutrition. They actually remove CO2 from the air. Apparently, the professor's statement disputes its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next point made (be done) by the reading is that ethanol fuel reduces the amount of plants that are used to feed the animals. Again, the lecturer contests the view by stating that producing ethanol fuel will only consume the cell wall of plants to meet humans' needs. Besides, that part of plants is not eaten by animals. Accordingly, no lack in animals’ food will happen.

At last, the writer believes that ethanol fuel could not win in the price compared to gasoline if there is no help from the government. Whereas, the professor declares that this support of tax subsidies from government is not always needed（needed过去式和always经常发生，这个逻辑可以连用吗）. That is to say, the more people create the needs of ethanol fuel, the more will be produced by producers and the price will drop consequently. Furthermore, a study displays that if the needs of ethanol grow 3（标准语法中，数字应该依然使用英文标出） times greater, its prices would drop by 40%. Therefore, the costs of ethanol will definitely does down even without the assistance from government. (名词不能单独使用，+a或者the)

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument of the writer, ethanol fuel will not bring benefits, is incorrect.

在综合中，OG给出的是听力对文章的支持或者反驳，并且OG的范文都是先将听力内容放在前面，阅读在后的。

作者: hysx1988 时间: 2012-5-23 19:06
Population is soaring. People tend to gather in big cities. Financial crisis can happen at every second. All those reasons lead to a tough environment for college students to find job. Therefore, in my opinion, it is necessary for colleges to offer job preparation before students start working. I will explain myself as the following.（首段演绎得很精彩哦，非常吸引人）

To begin with, college students are not familiar with the society and working situation. Students spend most of their time in libraries, classrooms and dormitories to study. It is hard for them to imagine what it looks like at the outside. During school time, students are under the protection of schools. They do not have to worry about what will happen if they do not earn enough money and have nowhere to spend the cold night. They do not have to compete with their classmates for higher salary, either about the result of failing an important task assigned by the boss. However, when students are working, they have to know how to deal with those questions. Accordingly, providing students with enough preparation for job by colleges and universities is of great needed.（应该是need吧，be of +名词）

Another point of the same value is that students who possess the preparation knowledge are able to gain a better job. For the sake of students’ brighter future, colleges and universities should supply better job preparation. My brother wants to get a high-salary job in Middle East, so he takes preparation courses for job finding（常用job hunting）. The significant tip he learned in the class is (应该加that,表语从句是不可以省略that引导的)do not hug with Middle East women if not invited or you are regarded to be rude. Before the interview, if it is not the tip he remembered in class, he will hug the women and lost the job even without saying a word. How important is the job preparation that colleges offered!

Others may insist that college students are adults and they should know how to take care of themselves. It is a waste of money and time to offer job preparation in colleges and universities. They are adults, indeed. They are inexperienced either. How can colleges not give students the right to become experienced? Consequently, no way can better job preparation not given to students.

To sum up, job preparation could assist students to be experienced and get used to the society before they start working. Besides, it also ensures a better job and future for the students. In all, colleges and universities should offer better job preparation for students.

总结：逻辑非常清晰，语法错误灰常少，写得很不错哦，向你学习~加油~ps: 我一直搞不懂为什么题目中有better，很担心是不是机经翻译不准，原题会不会是要和过去神马的作对比，所以我很紧张得一直和现状作对比，求解答~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-23 20:00
谢谢修改～

Doyouagree or disagreewiththefollowingstatement? Colleges or universitiesshouldoffer more courses to prepare students for the future beforetheystartworking
beforetheystartworking

这是我找的另外一个版本忽略颜色吧
个人感觉对比不一定是必需的只要能说明自己的观点有说服力就好～

作者: hysx1988 时间: 2012-5-23 22:18
嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~

~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-5-23 22:20
5.21 综合
Both of the reading and lecture explore the issue of ethanol fuel. The reading insists that ethanol fuel is not a good replacement of gasoline. However, the professor disproves the writer by pointing out the unconvincing arguments.
（开头超级shine~~！）
It is mentioned in the reading that ethanol fuel would not help to ease（好词，但是ease一般是用来减轻痛苦的，用在这里并不合适。） global warming. The speaker, on the contrary, claims that it is not true. She explains that corns planted for producing ethanol fuel can compensate the amount of CO2（Attention！一定要在文章首次提到的时候先写全称，后面括号CO2，这样比较好，或者全文都写carbon dioxide） emitted in to（into） the atmosphere when burning them. In this way, plants use CO2 as their nutrition. They actually remove CO2 from the air. Apparently, the professor's statement disputes its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next （这个会不会有点感觉重复？）point made by the reading is that ethanol fuel reduces the amount of plants that are used to feed the animals. Again, the lecturer contests the view by stating that producing ethanol fuel will only consume the cell wall of plants to meet humans' needs. Besides, that part of plants is not eaten by animals. Accordingly, no lack in animals’ food will happen.

At last, the writer believes that ethanol fuel could not win in the price compared to gasoline if there is no help from the government. Whereas, the professor declares that this support of tax subsidies from government is not always needed. That is to say, the more people create the needs of ethanol fuel, the more（这里没有东东？）will be produced by producers and the price will drop consequently. Furthermore, a study displays that if the needs of ethanol grow 3 times greater, its prices would drop by 40%. Therefore, the costs of ethanol will definitely does down even without the assistance from government.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses in the reading passage and convincingly shows that the central argument of the writer, ethanol fuel will not bring benefits, is incorrect.（感觉插入语那里不是很对呢、你再体会体会）

晨依迟到的批改……

还是只说说缺点吧，优点不说了哈~~嘻嘻

唯一的缺点我觉得这次的句子写得有点碎，但是关联词很出彩，适当长短句结合吧！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-24 08:58

嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~

~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

-- by 会员 hysx1988 (2012/5/23 22:18:04)

嘿嘿
挣扎一番找到了四部分分开的24...
要准备期末考试了

过两天再写...

作者: 婷婷connie 时间: 2012-5-24 15:38

嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~

~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

-- by 会员 hysx1988 (2012/5/23 22:18:04)

嘿嘿
挣扎一番找到了四部分分开的24...
要准备期末考试了

过两天再写...

-- by 会员包子不包子 (2012/5/24 8:58:15)

恩，包子，写完了告诉我哦，再给你改文~
婷婷飘过@

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-24 17:36

嗯，在这种情况下确实木有必要对比的~！太感谢啦，还找出另一个版本的来~

~对了，有人发你TPO24了吗~我刚才才看到你发的帖~

-- by 会员 hysx1988 (2012/5/23 22:18:04)

嘿嘿
挣扎一番找到了四部分分开的24...
要准备期末考试了

过两天再写...

-- by 会员包子不包子 (2012/5/24 8:58:15)

恩，包子，写完了告诉我哦，再给你改文~
婷婷飘过@

-- by 会员婷婷connie (2012/5/24 15:38:41)

好的没问题～

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-5-24 18:35
哭……我这是肿么了啊，又改错作文了

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-24 18:54

哭……我这是肿么了啊，又改错作文了

-- by 会员晨依Jacqueline (2012/5/24 18:35:27)

哈哈
我都没发现啊
不急不急慢慢来~~~~

作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-5-29 21:58
包子不要恨我……我自己都不好意思发了……

People now live in an era of information explosion. No matter where you are or what time it is, (No matter where and when,这样比较简洁一点吧)just by simply pressing a button on your computer or cellphone, myriad of most (the most of)up-to-date information will come up. Owing to this, young people, who are always more familiar with the brand new technique than their parents, are less likely to depend on their parents compared with the past. More reasons will be given as the following.(开头写得很流畅自然，让人读着特别舒服。)

To begin with, technology is developing,(as technology develops,) Internet, Facebook and Twitter jump into people's life, which provide young people with great convenience in communication.(这么好的论点加上这么妙的表达，赞！)In those social networks, people in every field can be found without effort. Merely by clicking the mouse, young people can talk with a professor in biology, math or linguistic face to face(个人觉得这里的f2f是不是需要解释一下是通过视频聊天神马的、、、略感突兀。。。) to solve (这里没有啥错误，只是晨依觉得为了突出net的强大作用可以加一个形容词哇比如emergency啊difficult啊什么的)problems. Moreover, parents have the limited ability in helping us(我觉得直接说are limited in providing young people help就好，limited ability有点缀余的感觉不是很地道), they have their own profession(s). When things happened out of their profession, it is time for the Internet. Again, by typing the questions into Google or Bing, young people can find whatever they want quickly and precisely without bothering their parents. Therefore, due to the technology development, young people are less dependent on their parents than in the past.

Another point will make the statement clear is that more young people nowadays regard their independence as a kind of matureness(maturity) and braveness. In my community, lots of young people at my age step into the society right after their graduation from high school. They believe people who can live on their own effort rather than their parents（parents'？？）are worth respecting. Some of them move out of their parents' house and struggle in ~~the~~ society to achieve success. Other young people insist to do part time job to pay for their college fees. In this way, young people learn to live with themselves(on their own), earn money by themselves and study by themselves.(看明白了包子是想写并列的，可是晨依觉得这里表达不够简洁，可不可以把三个动词词组都写完了最后写by themselves呢？)No wonder there is less dependence of young people on their parents.

Some people may doubt that whether this independence can bring a health development for the young. In my opinion, mistakes in young people's independent living are impossible to avoid(这里应该是it is impossible to avoid...吧，主语这样好像不对呢). However, we should not jump into the conclusion that these mistakes are harmful and only negative results are produced.(感觉这里的被动语态用着不舒服，我觉得用主动就完全可以啊and only produce negative results) In fact, young people could learn a lot from their own mistakes or experience, which will assist and guide them in their future ~~life~~. Always, this kind of experience is difficult to forget. With all these instructive experience, how can people announce that there will not be a health(y)development?

To sum up, with the help of myriad, easy accessed information, technology and social network as well as the new conception of matureness and braveness, young people are more independent on their parents than in the past.（结尾感觉和前面有点重复了，略显逊色，可以再升华升华的哈！）

特别喜欢包子举例子的地方，很自然有木有~！晨依只会for example再for example……汗。。。

我觉得句子的高效性和简洁性还可以再提高提高，真是挑不出其他毛病了哇思路和语言写得很好，感觉想XDF外教的范文了！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-5-31 13:23
谢谢晨依修改～～夸得包子都不好意嘞
包子一定再简洁再高效些

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-10 13:29
tpo 24 综合终于补上！
5.24

Both of the reading and listening discuss the issue of the existence of the actual animal tissue in the fossils of T.rex. The writer lists three evidences to support his idea. However, the professor believes that the three evidences are skeptical.

First, the soft organic substance is not necessarily the remains of blood vessels in the leg bone of T.rex, the professor claims. He says the after the death of the animal, bacteria colonized the hollows in the bone and left traces of organic material. Therefore, the soft organic material could be soft residues left by colonies -- bacteria instead of the tissue of blood vessels. This directly disproves its counterpart in the reading.

Moreover, the next point made by the speaker is that sphere presented in the bone may have another origin rather than left by the red blood cells. He explains that by pointing the findings of sphere in other animal fossils in the same area, which indicates the fossils of primitive animals which do not have red blood cells when they are alive are found to have sphere in the microscope examination. Accordingly, the sphere could be just reddish mineral and the author’s theory is challenged.

At last, the professor asserts that collagen cannot be discovered older than 100000 years old. Consequently, the collagen found in the 70 million-year-old fossil is too improbable. As for the appearance of collagen, the lecturer insists that they come from the skin of researchers who handles the bone. In this way the theory raised by the reading material is disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the reading and convincingly shows that the three arguments in the passage are incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-10 14:48
6.10 综合

Both of the reading and listening discuss the issue of addressing the decline of a kind of evergreen tree-Torreya. The author comes up with three possible solutions. The speaker, on the contrary, insists that none of the solutions are satisfied.

First, the professor believes that the microclimate in the same location where Torreye have thrived thousands years is affected by the larger region greatly. Climate change and drain out of the wet land in Florida could produce a drier environment for Torreya, which is difficult for Torreya to survive in any microclimate within its original location. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart, reestablish Torreya in the same location, in the reading.

Moreover, the speaker contends that move Torreya to different location are unlikely to be successful, because it can produce unpredictable outcome to the new environment. She explains that by providing an example about the moving of another tree species. When this kind of tree was planted in a different region, it spread so quickly that killed local trees which were already endangered. Accordingly, the second solution is proved to be not practicable.

At last, the professor asserts that research center is not a satisfied solution either, which contradicts with the idea proposed by the author. She says that Torreya in the research center are in small population and less genetic diversity. Therefore, they cannot resist disease and do not have enough capacity to survive like the trees in the wild environment in the long term. Consequently, the research center theory is also disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identified the weakness in the reading and convincingly shows that all the solutions raised by the writer are not satisfied.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-10 14:58
婷婷~ 5.24 tpo24 写好了
好久没写很没感觉... 麻烦了~

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-10 16:06
6.10 独立

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To make children do well at school, parents should limit the hours that a child spends on watching TV.

Children living in modern city enjoy watching TV in a gradual increasing time. Sometimes, a couple of children are likely to spend all the weekend staying at home and watching TV. Less time is left for outdoor activities to build a healthy body. On the other hand, little attention is paid to school work. From my stand of point, parents should limit the hours that a child spends on TV. I will demonstrate my reasons as the following.

To begin with, watching TV is a time consuming activity for a child and it does occupy the time for studying. While watching TV, cartoons, movies and talk shows, hardly can a child control him or herself to stop watching in the next 5 minutes. The colorful pictures are moving on TV and they produce amazing sounds as well as fabulous contents. All of the elements mentioned above are possible to trap a child's attention. No awareness is left to do school work in this way. Though a child can stop watching TV in the next 5 minutes, they cannot stop thinking about the programs they just watched. So interesting the sounds and images are that they keep emerging in their mind, which impairs children’s concentration significantly. Therefore, the time children spend on watching TV should be limited by their parents.

Another point that of the same value is that watching TV for an infinite time could produce negative influence to a child’s health, which cannot assure the acquisition for study. Stay indoors and stare at the same point close to eyes is not only harmful for children's physical development but also mental. What a child should enjoy is not shut him or herself alone in a little room. Play with other children, talk and laugh with each other is what they should love to do. During which, communication can help them to learn from each other and improvement and development of themselves are possible to be achieved. Only with healthy body and mind can children devoted to school work better. Again, children should not watch TV no matter how long they want.

Some people may announce that there are TV programs about science, art and other subjects that children can learn knowledge from. Children should not be limited in watching programs like that. Personally, I would like to say that if a child really can learn knowledge from TV, what are schools and teachers for. The view mentioned above is limited and children should pay more attention to their works at schools rather than TV programs.

To sum up, spend too much time watching TV is not only harmful for a child physical health but also psychological health, and TV programs also produce a long term influence on study which is difficult for children to control. Accordingly, children's time spend on watching TV should be limited.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-11 11:31
6.11 综合

Both of the writer and lecturer discuss the critical statements about buzzers, people who work as living commercial advertisements to promote products. The writer lists out three critical statements. However, the lecturer, buzzer Bill, insists that all of them are misleading.

First, the buzzer claims that buzzers do tell the truth and they are not just ordinary advertisements. Although they get paid from the company they work for, buzzers are people who have used the products and really enjoyed them. For Bill himself, he thinks the phone service he is buzzing is great. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the speaker contends that people believe in whatever buzzers say is not true, which is different from the author. On the contrary, the truth is the opposite situation. People ask buzzers lots of questions, such as price, services and how long they have used them. If the buzzer cannot answer those questions, the customer will not buy the product definitely. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences contradicted theory.

At last, buzzers produce harmful effects on social relationships is refuted by the speaker. It is stupid, he claims. In fact, buzzers improve social relationships. He explains that company has bad products cannot crew buzzers. People who try the products buzzers are promoting will be able to experience those good one. Due to this, people become trustful and open to others. Consequently, the last statement is also disproved.

In conclusion, the lecturer clearly identifies the weakness in the passage and convincingly shows that the arguments in the reading to attack buzzers are incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-11 13:04
6.11 独立不好写啊啊啊啊啊T.T

6月11日110821 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? There is never a reason to be rude (impolite) to another person.

Have you ever seen a person shouting at a salesman for trivial things? Have you ever seen people standing in the same line arguing about the sequence? Have you ever an employee been criticized by his employer? If you have seen those things before. No wonder can you see the outcome of being impolite. Personally, I agree that there is never a reason to be rude to another person.

To begin with, being impolite to another person is not helpful to solve the problem. Imagine an employee has just been criticized by his boss. With a low and desperate mood and struggle to let the anger out, how can anyone under that circumstance able to settle things done perfectly? Bad mood leads to unpleasant results, which can be another reason for the leader to shout at the employee. The cycle will go on. No improvement can be made. All the things are started from the employer's being impolite. Surely, he is not satisfied with the work others did. Other than shouting and being rude to people, there are still myriad of methods to express his unsatisfactory. Therefore, rudeness is not assisting to address any problems, even they make things worse, and under no account can people be rude to others.

Another view owns the same value is that being polite is a crucial quality of a person. Respect the old and love the young is an old tradition in China. People regard being polite to others as a way of self-achievement for individuals and an acquisition to keep the order of the society. Politeness creates harmony for a society. Can you imagine what does it look like if people are shouting, arguing and fighting everyday on the streets? Only when politeness rest in every citizens' hearts, can the society reach its order and progress be assured. Again, there is never a reason for people to be rude. If it is to express the unpleasant feelings, being rude is kind of an excuse. I guess talk to another people in peace is a better approach to express clearly rather than screaming.
Others may say that there are some situation that people cannot control themselves to be rude. Everything just happens so quickly, when they remember what happened, they had already hurt someone. In that case, people should ask for others forgiveness politely and try to correct their fault.

In conclusion, under no circumstances can people be rude to others. If it happened without control, a polite approach should be created to fix the situation.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-12 11:42
6.12 综合TPO20

Both of the lecturer and author explore the critics of the 'let it be' policy for natural fire. The reading lists three possible critics. The listening, however, insists that natural fire is part of the ecological cycle and it also plays as a creative part for nature. She explains what really happened after the 1988 Yellowstone fire.

First, the professor believes that the fire diversify trees and vegetation instead of damage them in Yellowstone. She justifies her point by giving two examples. With the burning down of tall trees in the forest, open air are produced for certain small plant to thrive. In addition, seeds of some species can only germinate by exposing to high level of heat. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the speaker contends that there is a same situation for animals, the fire creates new opportunities for certain animals and the food chain is even stronger after the fire, which is different from the writer. She declares that the small plants benefit from the dying of the tall trees supply ideal habitats for small animals like hares and rabbits, which are the food for later predators, large animals. Accordingly, this is another point where experiences the contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that only if this kind of impressive fire happens every year, no negative effect can be put on local economy and tourism. The 1988 forest fire in Yellowstone is the result of an unusual combination of elements, low rainfall and strong wind. For fire like this is not common and such kind of fire never happened again since 1988. Tourists came back to the park the next year and each year after that. Consequently, the last critic is also disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the passage and convincingly shows that the arguments in the reading are incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-12 12:42
6月12日 090403 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries

Education tops the list of what people should do to achieve self-improvement in recent years. It seems like an insurance of a bright future. Gradual attention has been put into educational field, money, policies and equipment. However, can the quality of education be improved by the increase in the teacher's salaries? Is it the best way to do so? Personally, I do not think so.

To begin with, education is not only about the knowledge that people learn at school. How to be a qualified person is also part of it. Education is not the knowledge that a person learnt at school, it is what he is after forgetting all the knowledge, virtue and personality. This is the best understanding of education I have ever read. Teachers' teaching brings the truth of the world to students, chemistry, physics and poem. Some people devote themselves in the development of certain subject after their graduation. Others, unfortunately, use their chemical knowledge to harm other people. This is the defect of teachers' teaching. The appropriate method to deal with the real world is personal and it is hard to be passed on to students from teachers, which is indeed part of education. Accordingly, by simply increase the salaries of teachers are not helpful to improve the quality of education in this aspect.

Another point owns the same value is that teachers are merely part of the educational system. High education also demands for academic environment, qualified educational equipment and up to date information. Can you imagine all the things that a university has are professors? No labs, libraries and computers. The list will go on. It definitely cannot be called as a university. A real famous university provides the best education for its students through various approaches not only limited by the lectures professors given. Students are able to discuss projects in libraries and practice themselves in labs. If there is any problems, computers and the Internet are their most efficient assistance. In this way, education no longer attached to teachers in a simple way. Only increasing the salaries is not a wise choice.

Others may announce that people can be motivated by money, and teachers are the same. Whereas, have they ever consider about what if there exist a limitation in the teaching abilities of teachers? Under this circumstance, I am afraid that no matter how large a sum of money that a teacher receives, even a little improvement cannot be reached in his or hers work.

To sum up, increasing the salaries of teachers is not the best way to improve the quality of education. Education is not only related to teachers. There are several elements should be contemplated about.

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-12 12:47
标题: 改6月11独立
红色错误。蓝色建议，黄色好词好句。
Have you ever seen a person shouting at a salesman for trivial things? Have you ever seen people standing in the same line arguing about the sequence? Have you ever（seen） an employee been（being） criticized by his employer? If you have seen those things before. No wonder can you（是you can么？有待考证） see the outcome of being impolite. Personally, I agree that there is never a reason to be rude to another person.

To begin with, being impolite to another person is not helpful to solve the problem. Imagine an employee has just been criticized by his boss. With a low and desperate mood and struggle to let the anger out, how can anyone under that circumstance able to settle things done（去掉，settle直接可以做及物动词） perfectly? Bad mood leads to unpleasant results, which can be another reason for the leader to shout at the employee. The cycle will go on. No improvement can be made. All the things are started（starts） from the employer's being impolite. Surely, he is not satisfied with the work others did. Other than shouting and being rude to people, there are still myriad of methods to express his unsatisfactory. Therefore, rudeness is not assisting to address any problems,（and ）even they make things worse, and under no account can people be rude to others.

Another view owns the same value is that being polite is a crucial quality of a person.(语法错误）（ To） Respect the old and love the young is an old tradition in China. People regard being polite to others as a way of self-achievement for individuals and an acquisition to keep the order of the society. Politeness creates harmony for a society. Can you imagine what does it look like if people are shouting, arguing and fighting everyday on the streets? Only when politeness rest in every citizens' hearts, （去掉）can the society reach its order and progress be assured. Again, there is never a reason for people to be rude. If it is to express the unpleasant feelings, being rude is kind of an excuse. I guess talk（ing） to another people in peace is a better approach to express（express什么呢，可以加点东西） clearly rather than screaming.
Others may say that there are some situation that people cannot control themselves to be rude. Everything just happens so quickly, （.）when they remember what happened, they had already hurt someone. In that case, people should ask for others forgiveness politely and try to correct their fault.

In conclusion, under no circumstances can people be rude to others. If it happened without control, a polite approach should be created to fix the situation.
总体来说思路还不错。一些小细节例如主谓一致，主语成分的注意一下。加油！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-12 13:00
vanessa923有没有觉得包子的词汇句型太简单单调什么的？
好久没写感觉没有以前写的好了 T.T

作者: nirvanababy 时间: 2012-6-12 19:35
红色错误，高亮写得不错。

Both of the reading and listening discuss the issue of addressing the decline of a kind of evergreen tree-Torreya. The author comes up with three possible solutions. The speaker, on the contrary, insists that none of the solutions are satisfied.

First, the professor believes that the microclimate in the same location where Torreye have thrived thousands years is affected by the larger region greatly. Climate change and drain out of the wet land in Florida could produce a drier environment for Torreya, which is difficult for Torreya to survive in any microclimate within its original location. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart, reestablish(reestablishing) Torreya in the same location, in the reading.

Moreover, the speaker contends that move(moving) Torreya to different location are (is) unlikely to be successful, because it can produce unpredictable outcome to the new environment. She explains that by providing an example about the moving of another tree species. When this kind of tree was planted in a different region, it spread so quickly that killed local trees which were already endangered. Accordingly, the second solution is proved to be not practicable.

At last, the professor asserts that research center is not a satisfied solution either, which contradicts with(删掉)the idea proposed by the author. She says that Torreya in the research center are in small population and less genetic diversity. Therefore, they cannot resist disease and do not have enough capacity to survive like the trees in the wild environment in the long term. Consequently, the research center theory is also disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identified the weakness in the reading and convincingly shows that all the solutions raised by the writer are not satisfied. （平行结构的时态没有一致）

总体来说听力和阅读里的要点都把握得很好，改写也很不错。赞一个！孩纸你完成作业很积极，学习ing!

作者: vanessa923 时间: 2012-6-12 19:45

vanessa923有没有觉得包子的词汇句型太简单单调什么的？
好久没写感觉没有以前写的好了 T.T

-- by 会员包子不包子 (2012/6/12 13:00:24)

我觉得词汇还好哦，其实用准用对才是最好的。
句型可以适当下意识提高一下，像我有时候会特意提醒自己什么强调句，倒装句，并列句什么的多用点。
有意识就好了，呵呵。
加油！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-13 11:52
6.13 tpo21

Both of the writer and the lecturer discuss the influences of genetic modified trees. The writer lists out three possible benefits of genetic modified trees. The lecturer, however, insists that they can benefit the public and environment but they are not as great as they first heard. Problems and causes associated with genetic modified trees are real.

First, the professor believes that genetic modified trees cannot ensure the survival of its species. That is genetic modified trees are more unified. Not like nature trees with genetically diverse, at least some trees of its species are resistance to the environmental challenges, which ensure the survival of that species. Genetic modified trees, on the contrary, are more likely to die out when facing environmental challenges because of their lacking in genetic diverse. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the lecturer contends that genetic modified trees actually cost more for people who grow them, which is different from the writer. The speaker strengthens her idea by claiming that genetic modified trees companies charge more for the seeds and people who grow them cannot simply collect the seeds and plant them for free. By law, they have to pay for the companies every single time they plant that kind of tree. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences contradicted theory.

At last, the speaker asserts that genetic modified trees produce more damages to wild trees rather than prevent them from overexploitation. They grow more aggressively, she says, also they outcompete the wild trees which are mixed with genetic modified trees for resources like sunlight, water and nutrition. Eventually, the nature trees will be crowding out. Consequently, the last point is disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the passage and convincingly shows that all of the potential benefits raised by the author are incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-13 11:55

vanessa923有没有觉得包子的词汇句型太简单单调什么的？
好久没写感觉没有以前写的好了 T.T

-- by 会员包子不包子 (2012/6/12 13:00:24)

-- by 会员 vanessa923 (2012/6/12 19:45:00)

恩！
谢谢～
同努力！！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-13 12:36
6月13日110211 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.

Spoiled children crying for new gifts are the commonest scene I can see in my community. Nowadays, parents devoted all their love to the next generation, especially in China, where there is a one child policy. However, the flooding love and protection from parents does not always ensure the health development children. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from that.

To begin with, the knowledge learned from people's own experience are more impressive direct and hard to forget. For a child, the colorful world around him is beautiful but also dangerous. It is not strange that a child favors to put everything in their reach into their mouth. Also they may easily be attracted by the shining flame of candle and struggle to touch them. When things like that happened, parents should allow children to bit those things and touch the fire. Only by children themselves' self -experiments can they impress the feeling deep in their hearts-the hot dancing fire is not a good toy and erasers are not tasty. If those things must be convey to a toddler by language, the outcome may not be as clear as mentioned above. Apparently, next time, no same mistakes will occur again on the children who have experienced the mistakes before. Therefore, children become more experienced from their own experience if the parents allowed them to make mistakes.

Another point values the same is that learning from mistakes is part of self-improvement process. There is an old saying in China that people who can learn from their mistakes should own the respects as teachers. No one can live a life without a single mistake. The point is that whether people can benefit from their misdoing and never let the same thing happen again, which is the real progress for a person. For parents, if they invest them in protecting their children from all kinds of danger. Eventually, children probably cannot understand the meaning of mistakes. No wonder they can do nothing when encounter with mistakes later in their life and it is needless to discuss about self-improvement. In this way, making mistakes and learning from them is part of people's developing journey. Parents should not stop their children from enjoying them.

Some people may say the children are too young to handle all kinds of mistakes in the real world. While, this is time for parents to be on stage. What they have to do is not prevent children from attempting and learning. The role they should act is like a tour guide to offer help and direction for their beloved children, which will definitely leads to a brighter future for children.

To sum up, children are not precious dolls. They have to experience mistakes and learn from them, which is part of their development in nature. Accordingly, parents should allow their children to make mistakes and learn from them.

作者: nirvanababy 时间: 2012-6-13 22:52
红色改错，蓝色疑问or建议，高亮精彩，绿色点评。
6.13 tpo21

Both of the writer and the lecturer discuss the influences of genetic （genetically） modified trees. The writer lists out three possible benefits of genetic modified trees. The lecturer, however, insists that they can benefit the public and environment but they are not as great as they first heard. Problems and causes associated with genetic modified trees are real.

First, the professor believes that genetic modified trees cannot ensure the survival of its species. That is genetic modified trees are more unified. Not like nature trees with genetically diverse, at least some trees of its species are resistance to the environmental challenges, which ensure the survival of that species. Genetic modified trees, on the contrary, are more likely to die out when facing environmental challenges because of their lacking in（lack in后面一般是接名词）genetic（genetically） diverse. Therefore, this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the lecturer contends that genetic modified trees actually cost more for people who grow them, which is different from the writer. The speaker strengthens her idea by claiming that genetic modified trees companies charge more for the seeds and people who grow them cannot simply collect the seeds and plant them for free. By law, they have to pay for the companies every single time they plant that kind of tree. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences contradicted theory.

At last, the speaker asserts that genetic modified trees produce more damages to wild trees rather than prevent them from overexploitation. They grow more aggressively, she says, also they outcompete the wild trees which are mixed with genetic modified trees for resources like sunlight, water and nutrition. Eventually, the nature trees will be crowding out. Consequently, the last point is disproved.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the passage and convincingly shows that all of the potential benefits raised by the author are incorrect.

要点都写到了，逻辑清晰，继续努力~！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-14 16:42
6月14日110415 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with hiring famous teachers, school should pay more attention to improve facilities.

写得有点多... 超时了T.T

Education makes up a significant part of a person's development. Nowadays, lots of schools in my community are competing with each other about whether they have the best facilities or not. It seems that myriad of parents regard this factor as an indispensable element in measuring the quality of a school. From my perspective, those can be compared to people have no knowledge but enjoying in showing off their expensive clothes to others. In this way, school should pay more attention in hiring famous teachers rather than improving facilities.

To begin with, without qualified teachers, even a world top class facility cannot be made the most use of. Precise facilities are not as handy as they first saw. That is also why institutions always hire the best specialists in the country to run those facilities. Under the operation of famous teachers, those facilities are able to show the expected experiment results-bright light after the mixture of certain chemical elements and the function of alter violate wave, which is the most direct approach to educate students. Once problems occur, it is hard to imagine what will happen if no one knows how to fix them. With the qualified teachers in reach, the questions can be solved in a second, which ensures the regular routine of school and teaching work. Besides, schools do not have to pay extra money in inviting experts to fix the facilities. Therefore, more attention should be paid to hire famous teachers than improve facilities.

Another point owns the same value is that education is about interactions between students and teachers, but not students and advanced facilities. In ancient Greece, no modern exist facilities at schools. All the tools available are stone boards, rocks and sticks. In spite of that, still lots of famous people emerge in the flow of history. Socrates and Aristotle, teacher and his student, both of them own world fames thousands of years later. It is not the reason of advanced facilities, but the devotion of famous teacher in their career that educates students. A famous teacher talks to students about their mistakes. A famous teacher encourages students when they are in low mood. A famous teacher can teach students how to be a useful person to the society. All those things about education mentioned above are impossible for any facilities to accomplish. Accordingly, schools should devote more in hiring famous teachers.

Others may say that in modern education system students should learn to practice. Consequently, facilities related to do chemical and physical experiments should be improved. The statement is biased. No matter how advanced the facilities are, without the instruction from famous how can students know what to do? Facilities are merely a small part of the iceberg. Attention should be paid to the main body-teachers.

To sum up, education is related to students and teachers instead of students and facilities. In this way, schools should pay more attention in hiring famous teachers rather than improving its facilities.

作者: zombiee 时间: 2012-6-14 20:59

6月13日110211 NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.

Spoiled children crying for new gifts are the commonest scene I can see in my community. Nowadays, parents devoted all their love to the next generation, especially in China, where there is a one child policy. However, the flooding love and protection from parents does not always ensure the health development children. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from that.

To begin with, the knowledge learned from people's own experience are more impressive direct and hard to forget. For a child, the colorful world around him is beautiful but also dangerous. It is not strange that a child favors to put everything in their reach into their mouth. Also they may easily be attracted by the shining flame of candle and struggle to touch them. When things like that happened, parents should allow children to bit those things and touch the fire. Only by children themselves' self -experiments can they impress the feeling deep in their hearts-the hot dancing fire is not a good toy and erasers are not tasty. If those things must be convey to a toddler by language, the outcome may not be as clear as mentioned above. Apparently, next time, no same mistakes will occur again on the children who have experienced the mistakes before. Therefore, children become more experienced from their own experience if the parents allowed them to make mistakes.

Another point values the same is that learning from mistakes is part of self-improvement process. There is an old saying in China that people who can learn from their mistakes should own the respects as teachers. No one can live a life without a single mistake. The point is that whether people can benefit from their misdoing and never let the same thing happen again, which is the real progress for a person. For parents, if they invest them in protecting their children from all kinds of danger. Eventually, children probably cannot understand the meaning of mistakes. No wonder they can do nothing when encounter with mistakes later in their life and it is needless to discuss about self-improvement. In this way, making mistakes and learning from them is part of people's developing journey. Parents should not stop their children from enjoying them.

Some people may say the children are too young to handle all kinds of mistakes in the real world. While, this is time for parents to be on stage. What they have to do is not prevent children from attempting and learning. The role they should act is like a tour guide to offer help and direction for their beloved children, which will definitely leads to a brighter future for children.

To sum up, children are not precious dolls. They have to experience mistakes and learn from them, which is part of their development in nature. Accordingly, parents should allow their children to make mistakes and learn from them.

-- by 会员包子不包子 (2012/6/13 12:36:41)

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.

Spoiled children crying for new gifts are the commonest scene I can see in my community. Nowadays, parents devoted all their love to the next generation, especially in China, where there is a one child policy. However, the flooding love and protection from parents does not always ensure the health development +of children. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from that.

To begin with, the knowledge learned from people's own experience are more impressive direct and hard to forget. For a child, the colorful world around him isbeautiful but also dangerous. It is not strange that a child favors to put everything in their reach into their mouth. Also they may easily be attracted by the shining flame of candle and struggle to touch them. When things like that happened, parents should allow children to bit those things and touch the fire. (真的吗，这么危险)Only by children themselves' self -experiments can they impress the feeling deep in their hearts-the hot dancing fire flame is not a good toy and erasers are not tasty. If those things must be convey to a toddler by language, the outcome may not be as clear as mentioned above. Apparently, next time, no same mistakes will occur again on the children who have experienced the mistakes before. Therefore, children become more experienced from their own experience if the parents allowed them to make mistakes.

Another point values the same is that learning from mistakes is part of self-improvement process. There is an old saying in China that people who can learn from their mistakes should own the respects as teachers. No one can live a life without a single mistake. The point is that whether people can benefit from their misdoing and never let the same thing happen again, which is the real progress for a person. For parents, if they invest them in protecting their children from all kinds of danger. Eventually, children probably cannot understand the meaning of mistakes. No wonder they can do nothing when encounter with mistakes later in their life and it is needless to discuss about self-improvement. In this way, making mistakes and learning from them is part of people's developing journey. Parents should not stop their children from enjoying them.

Some people may say the children are too young to handle all kinds of mistakes in the real world. While, this is time for parents to be on stage. What they have to do is not prevent children from attempting and learning. The role they should act is like a tour guide to offer help and direction for their beloved children, which will definitely leads to a brighter future for children.

To sum up, children are not precious dolls. They have to experience mistakes and learn from them, which is（单复数，） part of their development in nature. Accordingly, parents should allow their children to make mistakes and learn from them.
不错的文章，有点小错误，加油

作者: zombiee 时间: 2012-6-14 21:00

Spoiled children crying for new gifts are the commonest scene I can see in my community. Nowadays, parents devoted all their love to the next generation, especially in China, where there is a one child policy. However, the flooding love and protection from parents does not always ensure the health development +of children. Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from that.

To begin with, the knowledge learned from people's own experience are more impressive direct and hard to forget. For a child, the colorful world around him is beautiful but also dangerous. It is not strange that a child favors to put everything in their reach into their mouth. Also they may easily be attracted by the shining flame of candle and struggle to touch them. When things like that happened, parents should allow children to bit those things and touch the fire. (真的吗，这么危险)Only by children themselves' self -experiments can they impress the feeling deep in their hearts-the hot dancing fire flame is not a good toy and erasers are not tasty. If those things must be convey to a toddler by language, the outcome may not be as clear as mentioned above. Apparently, next time, no same mistakes will occur again on the children who have experienced the mistakes before. Therefore, children become more experienced from their own experience if the parents allowed them to make mistakes.

Another point values the same is that learning from mistakes is part of self-improvement process. There is an old saying in China that people who can learn from their mistakes should own the respects as teachers. No one can live a life without a single mistake. The point is that whether people can benefit from their misdoing and never let the same thing happen again, which is the real progress for a person. For parents, if they invest them in protecting their children from all kinds of danger. Eventually, children probably cannot understand the meaning of mistakes. No wonder they can do nothing when encounter with mistakes later in their life and it is needless to discuss about self-improvement. In this way, making mistakes and learning from them is part of people's developing journey. Parents should not stop their children from enjoying them.

Some people may say the children are too young to handle all kinds of mistakes in the real world. While, this is time for parents to be on stage. What they have to do is not prevent children from attempting and learning. The role they should act is like a tour guide to offer help and direction for their beloved children, which will definitely leads to a brighter future for children.

To sum up, children are not precious dolls. They have to experience mistakes and learn from them, which is（单复数，） part of their development in nature. Accordingly, parents should allow their children to make mistakes and learn from them.
不错的文章，有点小错误，加油

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-15 16:42
6.15 独立
ML It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future

Population is soaring in every corner of the world. Revolution in technology is happening in every second. Myriad of brand new information is spreading among countries in every now and then. In all, things change so quickly. From my perspective, it is not as easy as in the past to identify the career in order to have a secure or successful future.

To begin with, every country is connected by globalization, which creates a complex environment for people to identify their career nowadays. Capital globalization, resources globalization and employee globalization, the world is an integral. Once the role of only one country changes on the global stage, unfortunate may spread out quickly to all the other countries in the world. People cannot predict what changes will appear in the next few years. Also it is hard to identify a career to secure their future success under such a complicated situation. Like the Great Depression, dark side of globalization, people with the most decent job, finical employees, end up to work as labors on the streets. Needless to discuss about their life’s secure and success in the future. Is their choice to be an accounting or investment analysts wrong? Apparently not, it is the changes on the global stage unable to assure their career success.

Another point owns the same value is that competition is even fiercer with one new life every three seconds to feed on earth. In every filed, especially in those that can ensure the success of an individual, hundreds of candidates are gathered together to compete for merely several position. People can never feel relief even they get a good job, chief or the leader of the whole medical department. There are always new and better candidates coming to compete for the job. Even the most inconspicuous mistake can be the reason for one to leave. At the first second, you though the bright future is right in your hand. The next second, you lost it. No matter what kind of difficulty and struggle you have been through when identifying a suitable job, with the soaring population and fierce competition people in modern world can never announce with confidence that they find a lifelong successful career.

Some people may argue that modern world creates thousands of new occupation for people. How can there be worry for identifying a secure job? However, please do not forget that variation of job has been increased, so does the population. Maybe there is a threefold in job variation. Population could be tenfold and competition either. Therefore, it is too harsh to jump to the conclusion that modern world definitely provide people with clear background in identifying career.

To sum up, changes produced by globalization and competition pressure created by growing population lead people to great difficulty in identifying their career to ensure a secure and successful future.

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-15 22:29
先占个座~~明天过来评哈·~

作者: jasonma2046 时间: 2012-6-16 10:07
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with hiring famous teachers, school should pay more attention to improve facilities.

写得有点多... 超时了T.T

Education makes up a significant part of a person's development. Nowadays, lots of schools in my community are competing with each other about（compete可接三个介词with,against,for,此处应该用for）whether they have the best facilities or not. It seems that myriad of parents regard this factor as an indispensable element in measuring the quality of a school. From my perspective, those can be compared to people have(having) no knowledge but enjoying in showing off their expensive clothes to others.(这个比喻还是很贴切的) In this way, (也可用Therefore)school should pay more attention in hiring famous teachers rather than improving facilities. (反驳反面观点开头，引出正面观点很好)

To begin with, without qualified teachers, even a world top class (top-class)facility cannot be made the most use of. Precise(难道是precious?) facilities are not as handy as they first saw(as they were first seen). That is also why institutions always hire the best specialists in the country to run those facilities. Under the operation of famous teachers, those facilities are able to show the expected experiment results-bright light after the mixture of certain chemical elements and the function of alter violate wave(更改扰乱波？alter是动词，不知什么意思), which is the most direct approach to educate students. Once problems occur, it is hard to imagine what will happen if no one knows how to fix them. With the qualified teachers in reach, the questions can be solved in a second（太快了吧）, which ensures the regular routine of school and teaching work（教学工作？有点chinglish，直接teaching好了）. Besides, schools do not have to pay extra money in inviting experts to fix the facilities. Therefore, more attention should be paid to hire famous teachers than improve facilities. （观点论据都很好，论述能力很强啊）

Another point owns （owning否则出现两组谓语了）the same value is that education is about interactions between students and teachers, but not students and advanced facilities. In ancient Greece, no modern exist facilities at schools （No modern facilities exist at school）. All the tools available are stone boards, rocks and sticks. In spite of that, still lots of famous people emerge in the flow of history. Socrates and Aristotle, teacher and his student, both of them own world fames(fame是不可数名词) thousands of years later. It is not the reason of advanced facilities, but the devotion of famous teacher in their career（是否应该为who pursuing their career） that educates students. A famous teacher talks to students about their mistakes. A famous teacher encourages students when they are in low mood. A famous teacher can teach students how to be a useful person to the society. All those things about education mentioned above are impossible for any facilities to accomplish. Accordingly, schools should devote more in hiring famous teachers. (最后用排比句突出老师的作用，还是蛮好的)

Others may say that in modern education system students should learn to practice（practise?）. Consequently, facilities related to do chemical and physical experiments should be improved. The statement is biased. No matter how advanced the facilities are, without the instruction from famous (teachers)how can students know what to do? Facilities are merely a small part（tip） of the iceberg. Attention should be paid to the main body-teachers.

To sum up, education is related to students and teachers instead of students and facilities. In this way,（出现两次可以换一换） schools should pay more attention in hiring famous teachers rather than improving its facilities.

Conclusion:

1、优点：论据与论点充足，文章结构都蛮好的，词汇量特别是连接词用的很好，不重复。

2、缺点：句式有些死板，应当倒装啊，反问啊什么的用的多一点，这样显得文章表达灵活多样。
3、总体上已经很好了，表达很清楚明白，注意一些小的语法点就可以了。

作者: lunating 时间: 2012-6-16 10:34
刚刚把6.15独立写完的几篇浏览了一下，发表些许感慨哇><

包子亲，现在用英文写文章绝对是信手拈来哇^^

这篇首先立意特别高，站在全球的视角。行文气势磅礴，波涛汹涌，看完直觉心胸开阔有木有！

再次，遣词造句也相当完美华丽，直接可当例文参考。So wonderful，全文下来，精彩不断。膜拜之！

最后，指出一小点错误：
1. Therefore,it is too harsh to jump to the conclusion thatmodern world definitely provides people with clear background in identifying career.
2. To sum up,changes produced by globalization and competition pressure created by growing population leads people to great difficulty in identifying their career to ensure a secure and successful future.

都是单复数的小问题啦！我的水平有限，实在挑不出旁的错来。值得肯定的是，这篇文章本身就很完美。

加油哦亲，看好你！认真向同志们学习！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-16 11:37
TPO24 6.16

Both of the author and the lecturer discuss the appearance of organic tissues in the leg bone fossil of T. rex. The writer gives three possible identifications to support the opinion that organic tissues do exist. The speaker casts doubts on that statement and believes that they are skeptical.

First, the professor insists that the soft substance is not necessarily the residence of blood vessels. It could be something else, he states, when bacteria colonies hollows, empty area like bones, left by the dead tissues, they often leave behind trace of organic material. Therefore, the soft substances tested in the leg bone fossil might just be soft moisture residues of bacteria. And this directly disproves its counterpart in the reading material.

Moreover, the speaker contends that spheres origin from the red blood cells is not exact. Because reddish spheres were found in other animals' tissues around the same time, which contains primitive animals that do not have red blood cells. If there is no red blood cells, spheres cannot be examined either. A different origin might be a good explanation-they are just reddish mineral. Accordingly, this is another place where experiences contradicted theory.

At last, the lecturer asserts that no collagen can be found in the tissue older than 100 000 years old, which means the finding in a 70- million- year -old T. rex fossil contradicts with the idea about how long collagen can last. It does not come from T. rex, says the professor, it comes from a recent resources like human skin of a researcher who was handling the bone, which strengthens the opinion raised by the lecturer. Consequently, the last evidence is also rebutted.

In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weakness in the passage and convincingly shows that the arguments in the reading material are incorrect.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-16 12:41
6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Have you ever seen a bunch of young students rushing to the cinema just for a one hour comedy? Have you ever noticed that the youngest child in the family prefers to watch TV all day alone rather than hang out with friends? Have you ever discovered that coach potatoes tend to appear among the young? If so. It is evident that movies and television have more negative effects on the way young people behave.

To begin with, there is too much information in movies nowadays that are not suitable for the young. Extremely violate scene, actors’ smoking and cheating selfishly for personal interests gradually impress deeply into the young’s heart. They are too immature to distinguish right from wrong. Maybe they smoke for showing their brave. Maybe they fight with each other for exhibiting their sense of unity. Maybe they cheat on others' feelings merely for fun. However, no matter what the initiate of those behaviors are, movies produce negative influence on the young's actions and health. Can people pretend to be okay when they see the strong and active young people wondering on streets smoking and fighting with others and have nothing to do? In this way, movies indeed produce more negative effects over the young's behavior.

Another equally significant view is that watching TV impairs the communicating skill of the young. Coach potatoes are the best examples. They stay at home from day to night. Except staring at the screen, nowhere else do they give a single glance. Moreover, seldom do they step out of home, seldom do they talk to another person.. Consequently, coach potatoes lose all their friends and what is worse they will experience great difficulty in communicating with others because they seldom open their mouth. Besides, their health conditions are declining and all kinds of diseases can appear at each second. For the young people, there is no exception for them if they watch too much TV and become addicted as a coach potato. No social communication, have no idea about how to communication with others and even possibly be caught by mental disease. All the results are likely to happen with the increasingly stronger influence of TV. Accordingly, TV produce more negative influence over the young people's behave as movies do.

Admittedly, some people may against my point by insisting that the young can learn the latest information form TV in all fields and movie is the most efficient way for the young to relax. However, compared with the negative effects they produce. Do people what a health and positive generation or a generation that is inner going and cleaver but do not use their talent in the right place? I guess it is the former. So the negative effects produced by movies and TV overweigh its positive influence.

To sum up, under some situation, movies and TV could provide people with a relax environment. Whereas, in other situation they generate too many negative influence over the young people's behave and their future.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-16 12:44

刚刚把6.15独立写完的几篇浏览了一下，发表些许感慨哇><

包子亲，现在用英文写文章绝对是信手拈来哇^^

-- by 会员 lunating (2012/6/16 10:34:13)

哈哈谢谢指出的错误～
包子也在学习中啦夸得那么完美都不好意思了
互相学习互相学习恩

作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-6-16 18:45

6.15 独立
ML It was easier for people in the past to identify which type of career or job would have a secure or successful future

Population is soaring in every corner of the world. Revolution in technology is happening in every second. Myriad of brand new information is spreading among countries in every now and then. In all, things change so quickly. From my perspective, it is not as easy as in the past to identify the career in order to have a secure or successful future.

To begin with, every country is connected by globalization, which creates a complex environment for people to identify their career nowadays. Capital globalization, resources globalization and employee globalization, the world is an integral. Once the role of only one country changes on the global stage, unfortunate may spread out quickly to all the other countries in the world. People cannot predict what changes will appear in the next few years. Also it is hard to identify a career to secure their future success under such a complicated situation. Like the Great Depression, dark side of globalization, people with the most decent job, finical employees, end up to work as labors on the streets. Needless to discuss about their life’s secure and success in the future. Is their choice to be an accounting or investment analysts wrong? Apparently not, it is the changes on the global stage unable to assure their career success.

Another point owns the same value is that competition is even fiercer with one new life every three seconds to feed on earth. In every filed, especially in those that can ensure the success of an individual, hundreds of candidates are gathered together to compete for merely several position. People can never feel relief even they get a good job, chief or the leader of the whole medical department. There are always new and better candidates coming to compete for the job. Even the most inconspicuous mistake can be the reason for one to leave. At the first second, you though the bright future is right in your hand. The next second, you lost it. No matter what kind of difficulty and struggle you have been through when identifying a suitable job, with the soaring population and fierce competition people in modern world can never announce with confidence that they find a lifelong successful career.

Some people may argue that modern world creates thousands of new occupation for people. How can there be worry for identifying a secure job? However, please do not forget that variation of job has been increased, so does the population. Maybe there is a threefold in job variation. Population could be tenfold and competition either. Therefore, it is too harsh to jump to the conclusion that modern world definitely provide people with clear background in identifying career.

To sum up, changes produced by globalization and competition pressure created by growing population lead people to great difficulty in identifying their career to ensure a secure and successful future.

-- by 会员包子不包子 (2012/6/15 16:42:54)

Population is soaring（我看很多文章用的都是soar up这个短语）in every corner of the world. Revolution in technology is happening in every second. Myriad of brand new information is spreading among countries in every now and then（in the future比较好吧~~）. In all, things change so quickly. From my perspective, it is not as easy as in the past to identify the career in order to have a secure or successful future.

To begin with, every （用each吧~~文章用了好多every~~）country is connected by globalization, which creates a complex environment for people to identify their career nowadays. Capital globalization, resources globalization and employee globalization, the world is an integral. Once the role of only one country changes on the global stage, unfortunate（这个词是形容词啊~~能做主语吗？用adversity怎么样~~） may spread out quickly to all the other countries in the world. People cannot predict what changes will appear in the next few years. Also it is hard to identify a career to secure their future success under such a complicated situation. Like the Great Depression, dark side of globalization, people with the most decent job, finical employees, end up to work as labors on the streets. Needless to discuss about their life’s secure and success in the future. Is their choice to be an accounting or investment analysts wrong? Apparently not, it is the changes on the global stage unable to assure their career success.

Another point owns the same value is that competition is even fiercer with one new life every three seconds to feed on earth. In every filed, especially in those that can ensure the success of an individual, hundreds of candidates are gathered together to compete for merely several position（单复数问题~~）. People can never feel relief even they get a good job, chief or the leader of the whole medical department. There are always new and better candidates coming to compete for the job. Even the most inconspicuous mistake can be the reason for one to leave. At the first second, you though the bright future is right in your hand. The next second, you lost it. No matter what kind of difficulty and struggle you have been through when identifying a suitable job, with the soaring population and fierce competition people in modern world can never announce with confidence that they find a lifelong successful career.

Some people may argue that（定冠词~~） modern world creates thousands of new occupation（单复数~~） for people. How can there be worry for identifying a secure job? However, please do not forget that variation of job has been increased, so does the population. Maybe there is a threefold in job variation. Population could be tenfold and competition either. Therefore, it is too harsh to jump to the conclusion that modern world definitely provide people with clear background in identifying career.

To sum up, changes produced by globalization and competition pressure created by growing population lead people to great difficulty in identifying their career to ensure a secure and successful future

写得好好~~

特别是用词上面，用了很多类似排比的东西啊例子啊·~

我写文章比较喜欢用身边简单的例子说事情，不像你的你的文章很深刻哦~~

印象最深是倒数第二段，基本上每句话都带个连词好好~~
黄色是好词好句型~~改你的文章好受意
你的文章很深奥有点像g的作文呵呵~~

作者: kchszy061ban 时间: 2012-6-17 17:08

Have you ever seen a bunch of young students rushing to the cinema just for a one hour comedy? Have you ever noticed that the youngest child in the family prefers to watch TV all day alone rather than hang out with friends? Have you ever discovered that coach potatoes tend to appear among the young? If so. It is evident（you can see how）that movies and television have more negative effects on the way young people behave.

To begin with, there is too much information in movies nowadays that are not suitable for the young（youth当然形容词作名字还是可以的）. Extremely violate scene（s）, actors’ smoking and cheating selfishly for personal interests gradually impress deeply into the young’s heart（brain）. They are too immature to distinguish right from wrong. Maybe they smoke for showing their brave. Maybe they fight with each other for exhibiting their sense of unity. Maybe they cheat on others' feelings merely for fun. However, no matter what the initiate of those behaviors are, movies produce negative influence on the young's actions and health（heathy development）. Can people pretend to be okay when they see the strong and active young people wondering on streets smoking and fighting with others and have nothing to do? In this way, movies indeed produce more negative effects over the young's behavior.

Another equally significant view is that watching TV impairs the communicating skill of the young. Coach potatoes are the best examples. They stay at home from day to night. Except staring at the screen, nowhere else do they give a single glance. Moreover, seldom do they step out of home, seldom do they talk to another person.. Consequently, coach potatoes lose all their friends and what is worse they will experience great difficulty in communicating with others because they seldom open their mouth. Besides, their health conditions are declining and all kinds of diseases can appear at each second. For the young people, there is no exception for them if they watch too much TV and become addicted as a coach potato. No social communication, have no idea about how to communication with others and even possibly be caught by mental disease. All the results are likely to happen with the increasingly stronger influence of TV. Accordingly, TV produce more negative influence over the young people's behave as movies do.（这个例子是不错，不过这些例子太特殊不？我觉得是不是应该把这个现象普遍化后，才能更好的支持观点）

Admittedly, some people may against my point by insisting that the young can learn the latest information form TV in all fields and movie is the most efficient way for the young to relax. However, compared with the negative effects they produce（这个貌似没写玩的样子）. Do people what a healthy and positive generation or a generation that is inner going and cleaver but do not use their talent in the right place? I guess it is the former. So the negative effects produced by movies and TV over（out是不是更合适一点）weigh its positive influence.

To sum up, under some situation, movies and TV could provide people with a relax environment. Whereas, in other situation they generate too many negative influence over the young people's behave and their future（这个future，用意就不清晰了）.

包子的作文很明显已经很好了，我是硬找错误来的，嘿嘿，不要怪我哈。

然后就是个人觉得包子的例子和例证过程显得有些不是很自然，我指的不是例子本身，而是，例子和观点之间的衔接要更自然一点。

看没人给我改啦，就改改你的，欢迎来批。

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-17 21:29

包子的作文很明显已经很好了，我是硬找错误来的，嘿嘿，不要怪我哈。

然后就是个人觉得包子的例子和例证过程显得有些不是很自然，我指的不是例子本身，而是，例子和观点之间的衔接要更自然一点。

看没人给我改啦，就改改你的，欢迎来批。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/17 17:08:44)

谢谢勤劳的ban的修改
包子的逻辑方面尤其还需要提高
其实都是有待提高的恩恩同努力！

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-17 21:30
6月17日110115 NA
写得有点多超时了T.T
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of a university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.

University professor is a special job. Not like high school teachers, they are responsible to do research, part for their career, part for the scientific field. Not like specialists, they have to give lecturers to students. It is also their duty to educate the most power and active generation of the country. Therefore, whether the main role of a university professor is educating students or doing research is hard to distinguish. Personally, I would like to say it is doing research.

To begin with, new results of the research could advance students' study in certain field; even they can change the education system in universities. As on one can assure that all the knowledge told in university and all the educational system used at schools are one hundred percent correct, doing research to modify the system and to beautify the knowledge seems to be extremely needed. Consequently, the main role of professors is clear-doing research. A education field professor can claim with the results of his research that the most popular education method is sufficient and even impairing students' cavity. An education revolution can be generated. A chemical field professor can declare with the support of his research that the outcome of most famous equation in the field is not precise and he comes up with a better one. Because of this, students have to learn all the related knowledge again. It can be seem that the power of research is unbelievable. Educational revolution, hundreds of thousands students' re-studying and maybe the findings are possible to cause another revolution in the new century. So doing research is more important that educate students for a university professor.

Another point is equally significant is a university will become famous and professional due to the results of several researches. Every now and then, people can watch on the TV that a new equation in physics is found by professors in certain university, people can read in the newspaper that a fresh human organ for medical study is produced by a group of professors in another university. Even on the advertisement board in the streets and moving cars rushing on the roads, people can see information for promoting the research result of universities. How can people not be influenced by the research made by universities? University with more research results gradually becomes familiar with the public. Parents are willing to send their children to these schools and skillful professors are eager to work with those who work in such kind of university. No wonder, a university can make a great leap with the assistance of merely several research results. Accordingly, it is of great importance for professors to contribute them more in doing research.

Admittedly, some people may argue that educating students is teachers' nature. Why should they throw that away? Imagine there is no research for a long time, and students just keep learning. Once a new discovery in a research comes out and pointing out the mistake that all the students is studying. What will happen? All the working is in vain. There is no fault to say that professors should pay more attention in doing research.

To sum up, for the development of the university and the efficient studying of students, doing research outweighs the importance of educating students.

作者: bestshanshan 时间: 2012-6-17 21:36
6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

On contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T effects on the way young people, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.
Basic to personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, the children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme,such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”
In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota. Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale.
Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them, I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for young generation.

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-17 21:42

6月16日110319NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

On contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T effects on the way young people, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.
Basic to personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, the children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme,such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”
In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota. Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale.
Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them, I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for young generation.

-- by 会员 bestshanshan (2012/6/17 21:36:28)

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

On in contemporary society, with the advent of technologically advanced society and the information explosive explosion era, all kinds of compelling Movies and television serve as a season to our boring life which enjoys an increasingly high popularity among young people. Movies and television become an even important role in our daily life。However, when it comes to the topic of M&T首次缩写要有全称说明 effects on the way young people behave, I hold the view that it has more negative effects than positive ones, the standpoint can be illustrated in the following aspects.

Basic to based on ?personal understanding of the neglects, young people can be deeply affected by M&T is that which? brings us too much unhealthy contents and violence plots. Young people have super learning ability towards these information filled with their daily life, day by day, ~~the~~ children form the habit of watching tv and cinema instead of learning from book and finishing homework on time. After dinner, they are sofa potato to watch all kinds of programme programs, such as “fei ni moshu”、“fei cheng wu rao”

可以对bad habit展开一下显得更有力段尾可以加上一句话总结点题

In addition, some children accelerate to grow up , reasoning that they spend too much time on amusement programs which deliver sorts of reality to beat into their pure head and misleads normal and healthy thinking towards the surroundings. Further lending credence to my position is that video games I can think of no better illustration than the example of dota.

这一段的topic观点很好表述也非常好但是少支持论点的论据少细节分析

Admittedly, M&T,to some extent, enables us to know more about the news from all over the world. For instance, by watching news,we can focus on the political and economic issues ,which make our life vibrant, without these our life would probably pale. So 再次陈述强调观点让步段可以重起一段

Therefore, due to the above mentioned reasons reasons mentioned above, which sometimes correlate with each other to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any single one of them,表述很好但是包子没看懂是要说明什么…I reinforce my stand point that M&T brings more neglect effects towards young generation rather more positive leading as for the young generation.

文章整体的措辞句型都没的说结构明晰

但是段落内缺少细例证节支持论点这点很重要啊要有说服力

作者: 包子不包子 时间: 2012-6-18 10:51
6月18日101017 大陆

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.

Looking at people around you, how many of them do not stay up in order to approach the project? How many of them do not rush to the bus station every morning? How many of them do not eat fast food as lunch for squeezing more time to studying or working. People are under gradually increasing pressure. Relax becomes the most popular among people naturally. Personally, I would like to say that doing physical exercises is better for relaxation.

To begin with, doing physical exercise like basketball and soccer is a kind of communication and a way of making new friends who may share the same interest with you. By several people playing basketball together outdoor, people need the spirit of team work. Not only players gain the opportunities to exercises in the open air, strengthening their bodies and relaxing their mind, but also they obtain the chance to communicate other player in the same team, understanding new people and even realizing your boss outside work in their normal daily life. No boss will criticize their employees when playing hockey, with such kind of cooperation and assistance, I have to say that relaxation is not the only benefit you have gotten. Kill birds with one stone. How can people not enjoy physical exercises as their method to relax?

Another equally important point is that doing physical exercise helps people to build good physical condition of their body no matter what is their initiate. Life's meaning lies in motion, the saying is not coming from nowhere. If one is tired and sad, he can go running. By reaching the same goal in a shorter time compared with before, feelings of satisfaction and achievement will emerge. In this way, the purpose of relaxation has accomplished, sadness has gone and the body's physical condition has be improved, which is a kind of insurance in people' further studying and working. Can sick people complete the same amount of work in a limited time as a health people do? Apparently, they cannot. Accordingly, it is better to relax by doing physical exercises.

Some people may argue that by reading books and watching movies, people are capable to learn knowledge. After a whole day of busy work, no wonder learning new knowledge becomes a tough question for people because of the over using of brain in the day. Anyway, doing physical exercises looks like a wise choice.

To sum up, doing physical exercises can fulfill people's aim in relaxing and also it is possible to benefit people in other kinds of approach. Why should people not chose do physical exercises a good way to relax?

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