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针对自己的状况，选取一款个人特色的修辞手法，排比句式，反问句式，引用名人的sayings、或者倒叙，总之就是采取各种能够让自己鹤立鸡群的手法，迅速地获得质量较高的Attention；然后在段尾一定要清晰地让摆出自己本文的主论点。

In the second place，我认为TOEFL-Writing，independent writing文章结构层面考察的是：你的分论点是如何高效地support你的总论点的。罗列你自己的逻辑链条。当然这个过程中一定要有很多漂亮的链接词。分论点与主论点的切合度，就是你的分论点要紧紧围绕主题，比如假设我们在写一篇people who live in rural areas can take better care of their family than those who live in cities我们不能在分论点里面一致罗列各种"农村居住比城市好”的事实以及例证，其实我们要做的是写一篇因为“因为农村居住比城市好，所以住在农村照顾家人更好”的文章，随时随地不能忘记你的逻辑链条，否则你就让人感觉切合度不够！

Last but not least，最后一段是总结段，大家可以把你第一段的point再次罗列一遍，stress一下，然后进行结尾段对全文的points进行归纳、总结；再次摆明自己的观点，首尾呼应。

好吧，以上就是我的八股作文思路。顺便贴出一篇自己按照以上思维写出的文章作为Example.

3月3日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

Have you found that the tempers of the young people get worse and worse after enjoying the violent movies and TV programs?Have you found that the young are spending days too fast just because of watching movies and television ?Or have you unconsciously foundthat more and more young peopleare wearing glasses just because they watch TV everyday? If so ,you might deeply stand on my side that movies and television are playing a relatively negetive role in our daily life.

To begin with,the increasing rate of criminals among the young people have support the view that movies and television are conducting the behaviors of the young .Statistics have revealed that more than half of the young criminals they do things such as rob or rape Just because they are imitating the superstars in the movies or they learn such behaviors form TV.Therefore,it is obvious that violent movies and TV plays are mentally endagering the young people.

Additionally ,watching too much movies and TV will surely take up too much time for other things .Take my college roomate for example,he was once crazy about the Japanese cartoons.The first thing he came back from school would always be turning on the computers,and keep his bodies unmoved by staring at the cartoons all the time.Unfortunatly after he finished the last episode of Japanese cartoon,he also get a average 50 scroes out of 100 in his finnal examination. Therefore,it is unwise for one take up too much on movies and TV.

Finally,you might be surprised when we find more and more childred wear glasses at a very young age.I would like to attribute much of this phenomenon to movies and TV. Obviously,It's bad for our eyes if when stare at one thing too much time.We should take rest for the sakes of our eyes,but TV and movie lovers never care about this truth.

To sum up,if you are not a good manager of yourself ,you might endanger yourself by movies and TV. So why not be a little wise and put some of your Movie or TV time to other more siginificant things?