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作者: wenye1213    时间: 2012-4-3 12:58
标题: issue47 40分钟写的 觉得3分都到不了… 421杀鸡 麻烦各位给个评价 求狠拍!
作文只求3.5! 觉得这篇有点要跑题了… 还有 中间论述只有正反两段可以吗 第三段觉得时间紧写不完啊

47) Educatorsshould find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer itto them.
正:的确,教育者应当充分考虑学生对课程的意见。教育的意义。
反:一味的听从学生的建议阻碍学生发展。 教育者没有资源和精力考虑每个人的需求学生判断未必正确(这段两个分论点,是只写一个充分分析好还是写两个有侧重?)
合:广泛听取学生想法,根据学生自身需要和教育规划合理制定
The author alleges that educators should take into account what students need inthe curriculum and satisfy them. It might be tempting to agree with the author,primarily because educators acting as guiders of development of students oughtto consider what students want. However, the author overlooks the feasibilityof the statement and neglect the rationality of advice from students. In myview, I consider that educators should make sound developing scheme based onrequests of students instead of adopting their advice without analysis.

It s true that educators should sufficiently take account into what studentswant. Education amounts to , far from instilling knowledge into students,imparting and delivering beliefs, values and methods of critical thinking. So,in order to lead every student to their best final goals, educators ought torefer to opinions and advice from students before deciding curriculum whatstudents must take. One apt illustration involves an authoritative researchfrom The University of Hong Kong which conducted among eighty-five universitiesand colleges around the world. The research shows that the quality of graduatesof approximately 89 percent universities that design curriculum according tostudents’ interest and inclination is much higher than that of universitiesthat disregard what students would like. Thus, educators have to emphasize theimportant role of students’ ideas in teaching.

However,exorbitant following students’ ideas might to some extent deteriorate qualityof teaching and impede development of students. First, the amount of teachersand professors in one university or college is limited, thus it is impossibleto adequately meet every student’s need. Considering diversity ofcharacteristics of every student, had adopted every student’s request,educators would have to spare every effort to satisfy them, which is ridiculousand arduous. Secondly, many students cannot really exactly know what they want.Take for instance a student who dislikes major curriculums such as mathematicsand physics. He or she might inform educators that major curriculums should besuperseded by other interesting courses such as drawing which benefit studentslittle. In this case, without understanding what students certainly want,educators should not decide curriculum merely through students’ advice.

To sum up, before determining curriculum based on students’ inclination, educatorsought to deliberately take into account the feasibility of change of curriculumand validity of students’ ideas. As educators play a significant role instudents’ individual development, rather than arbitrarily follow students’request, they are supposed to correlate current situation with students’feature and to reasonably make decision.

作者: 竹林中人    时间: 2012-4-3 20:05
作文只求3.5! 觉得这篇有点要跑题了… 还有 中间论述只有正反两段可以吗 第三段觉得时间紧写不完啊

47) Educatorsshould find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer itto them.
正:的确,教育者应当充分考虑学生对课程的意见。教育的意义。
反:一味的听从学生的建议阻碍学生发展。 教育者没有资源和精力考虑每个人的需求学生判断未必正确(这段两个分论点,是只写一个充分分析好还是写两个有侧重?)
合:广泛听取学生想法,根据学生自身需要和教育规划合理制定
The author alleges that educators should take into account what students need in the curriculum and satisfy them. It might be tempting to agree with the author,primarily because educators acting as guiders of development of students ought to consider what students want. However, the author overlooks the feasibility of the statement and neglect the rationality of advice from students. In my view, I consider that educators should make sound developing scheme based on
requests of students instead of adopting their advice without analysis.


It s true that educators should sufficiently take account into what students want. Education amounts to , far from instilling knowledge into students,imparting and delivering beliefs , values and methods of critical thinking. So,in order to lead every student to their best final goals, educators ought to refer to opinions and advice from students before deciding curriculum what students must take. One apt illustration involves an authoritative research from The University of Hong Kong which conducted among eighty-five universities and colleges around the world. The research shows that the quality of graduates of approximately 89 percent universities that design (those design )curriculum according to students’ interest  and inclination is much higher than that of universities that disregard what students would like. Thus, educators have to emphasize the important role of students’ ideas in teaching.

However,exorbitant following students’ ideas might to some extent deteriorate quality of teaching and impede development of students. First, the amount of teachers and professors in one university or college is limited, thus it is impossible to adequately meet every student’s need. Considering diversity of characteristics of every student, had adopted every student’s request,educators would have to spare every effort to satisfy them,  which is ridiculousand arduous. Secondly, many students cannot really exactly know what they want.Take for instance a student who dislikes major curriculums such as mathematicsand physics.  He or she might inform educators that major curriculums should be superseded by other interesting courses such as drawing which benefit students little. In this case, without understanding what students certainly want,educators should not decide curriculum merely through students’ advice.

To sum up, before determining curriculum based on students’ inclination, educators ought to deliberately take into account the feasibility of change of curriculum and validity of students’ ideas. As educators play a significant role instudents’ individual development, rather than arbitrarily follow students’request, they are supposed to correlate current situation with students’feature and to reasonably make decision.
-- by 会员 wenye1213 (2012/4/3 12:58:06)



作者: 竹林中人    时间: 2012-4-3 20:11
你写的提纲是不错的,鉴于你的提纲,我觉得你最好写完第三段,这是体现你的文章的档次的一段,因为这是体现你立场的一段。
其他的,你的段落需要精简优化下,有些地方感觉有点绕
作者: wenye1213    时间: 2012-4-3 22:49
恩恩,我知道了~ 第二段有两个论点  教育者没有资源和精力考虑每个人的需求学生判断未必正确 这两个我觉得都展开的话,我的速度可能时间不够。 这样的话是只挑一个写深入还是两个都写,但都不详细? 谢谢
作者: wenye1213    时间: 2012-4-4 23:51
恩恩,我知道了~ 第二段有两个论点  教育者没有资源和精力考虑每个人的需求学生判断未必正确 这两个我觉得都展开的话,我的速度可能时间不够。 这样的话是只挑一个写深入还是两个都写,但都不详细? 谢谢
作者: 竹林中人    时间: 2012-4-6 11:41
恩恩,我知道了~ 第二段有两个论点  教育者没有资源和精力考虑每个人的需求学生判断未必正确 这两个我觉得都展开的话,我的速度可能时间不够。 这样的话是只挑一个写深入还是两个都写,但都不详细? 谢谢
-- by 会员 wenye1213 (2012/4/4 23:51:37)

两个都提下,用两三句话各写下,尽量精炼,应该可以的,不必展开太多




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