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标题: 推荐信，请给位大神给润色下，看看有啥要改的，，，，虚心求教 [打印本页]

作者: 小楼独醉 时间: 2012-3-27 11:37
标题: 推荐信，请给位大神给润色下，看看有啥要改的，，，，虚心求教
To Whom It May Concern,

This is######, and I am currently an Associate Dean at#####in China. It is my pleasure to recommend#### for admission to the Master of Business Management program at ####. I have taught her the class of Macro-Economics in 2009, and I can confidently say that #### is one of the most dedicated and unique individuals I have ever taught.

In my class there were many projects and the students feedback is that it is quite challenging. For these reasons, quite a small percentage of students here can get an A. However, Wenjing earned 90 in my class and I have been impressed with her rigor toward economics study.

Not only did #### perform well in examination, she also did good jobs in applying the knowledge in textbook to the reality. During my class discussion about the exchange regime, ###### and her group members showed great interest in the relationship between the RMB appreciation and the undergoing intense pressures of inflation in China. Then they used the econometric model learned in class to test the effect of the exchange rate regime reform on RMB exchange rate pass-through and proposed useful suggestion.

Based on our frequent communication, I can feel ####’s substantial interests in business management. We have talked about whether the huge amount of foreign exchange reserve should be counted as national wealth. And she was fascinated to learn how to minimize the financial losses facing the foreseen RMB appreciation.

I believe #####’s academic preparation and great concern to the real world problem will make her an outstanding candidate for admission to ####. I strongly recommend this promising young lady. If you require any further information, please feel free to contact me by email at ??

作者: 普渡哥 时间: 2012-3-27 11:40
不要太套模板，要是老美看到大家的推荐信都差不多，肯定生疑心的。

作者: 小楼独醉 时间: 2012-3-27 14:25
说实话，这个是中介给写的版主能具体点说说嘛？

作者: 小楼独醉 时间: 2012-3-27 14:26
还有什么错误不？请大牛指教

作者: zhangjun1118 时间: 2012-3-27 15:08
Not only did #### perform well in examination, she also did good jobs in applying the knowledge
找到一个语法错误。。。正确的应该这么用 not only but also/ not only.. but

作者: zhangjun1118 时间: 2012-3-27 15:12
可能确实套了蛮多模板的。。没办法你要找中介就只能这样他给你写成咋样就咋样了除非你自己改或者自己重写有些时候确实自己写的要比中介写的好的多但是前提是英文写作水平要好
Anyway good luck

这个RL总体中庸水平吧没啥亮点。。

作者: 小楼独醉 时间: 2012-3-27 17:30
大家继续批判，，，，不要客气，，，多多益善

作者: 普渡哥 时间: 2012-3-27 21:52
其实推荐信语法没有特别重要，写得太好太模板别人会以为是假的。你帮给中介的钱给我一半，我能写出比这好十倍的。

作者: 小楼独醉 时间: 2012-3-27 22:08

作者: 小楼独醉 时间: 2012-3-27 22:10
版主大人饶命啊，能搞个免费的不？

作者: 普渡哥 时间: 2012-3-27 22:34
免费的只能套各种模板了。。。不过不值得在推荐信上花很多钱吧

作者: KnightBM 时间: 2012-3-28 00:00
RL如果不是牛推，推荐新的内容美国那边的录取委员会并不会仔细阅读分析的，所以不用太在意，注意适度真实就行了！

作者: zhangjun1118 时间: 2012-3-28 10:37

其实推荐信语法没有特别重要，写得太好太模板别人会以为是假的。你帮给中介的钱给我一半，我能写出比这好十倍的。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/3/27 21:52:56)

why do you think Chinese professors dont have a good command of English writing? ... So stereotyped

作者: 普渡哥 时间: 2012-3-28 10:42

其实推荐信语法没有特别重要，写得太好太模板别人会以为是假的。你帮给中介的钱给我一半，我能写出比这好十倍的。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/3/27 21:52:56)

why do you think Chinese professors dont have a good command of English writing? ... So stereotyped

-- by 会员 zhangjun1118 (2012/3/28 10:37:03)

你知道中国教授怎么写英文吗？他们学的英文和现在的不一样，写作风格也不是我们的风格。

作者: zhangjun1118 时间: 2012-3-29 13:28

其实推荐信语法没有特别重要，写得太好太模板别人会以为是假的。你帮给中介的钱给我一半，我能写出比这好十倍的。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/3/27 21:52:56)

why do you think Chinese professors dont have a good command of English writing? ... So stereotyped

-- by 会员 zhangjun1118 (2012/3/28 10:37:03)

你知道中国教授怎么写英文吗？他们学的英文和现在的不一样，写作风格也不是我们的风格。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/3/28 10:42:52)

有些教授英文是不敢恭维，有些教授英文还是可以的。
话说多数同学DIY或让中介写千篇一律的模板文，我追求一点完美写好了写出感情没有语法错误怎了？为啥能避免的错误不去避免？
我不知道中国教授怎么写英文的，麻烦版主告知下，10/20年前的英文怎么不一样？

写得太好太模板别人会以为是假的。你帮给中介的钱给我一半，我能写出比这好十倍的。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/3/27 21:52:56)

还有敢问如何定义写的好？！你写出来的比这个好十倍？。。。呵呵

作者: zhangjun1118 时间: 2012-3-29 13:30
再者，近年来海归博士也多了，他们的英文写作你敢说都不好？
呐，我找了一个海归老师帮我写rl，他二话没说，还洋洋洒洒写了好多。。。
写的比此文中的中介好不得了。。

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