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标题: 每天坚持写!Argument 131 继续求狠拍 [打印本页]

作者: fanny89757    时间: 2012-3-20 17:47
标题: 每天坚持写!Argument 131 继续求狠拍
   
throughout the sw USlittle impact on customers:



only 2 % complained== 98% happy



some do not complained:not distinguish,butter refer to both







In this argument, the author asserts that the customers who are served with margarine which the replacement of butter, has had little influence by this change in all Happy Pancake House(H) restaurants located in the southwestern United States. To support the conclusion, the author involves that the complained customers only account for 2 percent which means the others are gald with the difference. Besides, the author asserts as well that some servers reports indicates that there is a number of the customers, who require the butter, accept the change without any complaint, and it is obvious that either these customers may fail to distinguish that change or they thought that both the butter and the margarine are the same to use a term of "butter".However, the argument seems to be stay in a logical construction, the author's evidence fails to prove the conclusion for the following reasons.



Firstly, the first evidence in the passage about the 2 percent is hardly to infer the conclusion. The author do not tell us that how many people participate in this survey. If the number of the people whoare of particition is not enough for a survey , the percentage of it is too vague. Further more, even the percentage of the complained people is justifiable, it cannot assert that the 98 people out of 100 are happy with it, which because the percentage is different from an exact number. The 98 is infer from the 2 percent, which is just a rate but not an real number exactly. Besides,the word before the 2 percent is too ensure to prove the conclusion, for the reason that the 2 can be a number rounded down.



Secondly, the problem of the passage is about the report of the servers. Although there is some people do not complain the change, it does not mean they are agree with the change. We cannot suggest whether these people have been told that change before they eat them. The author indicates the two probabilities of the customers apprently without any base. To analyze this question, we should firstly know how many people had been told about the change and had not, after that, how many people who had been told can not distinguish and how many can not. in the distinguished how many refer to the butter and the margarine the same.



Finally, whether the impact to the customers is big or little should be dicided by all the addition above, and the author should add more details to support his unjustifiable conclusion.

内容还不是很够!字数也不够!才400 多!重点还是看语言表达!
时间还是超了~40分钟了!
明天会继续努力!求大哥大姐狠拍咯!

作者: fanny89757    时间: 2012-3-20 17:51
前面的是质疑点
作者: 竹林中人    时间: 2012-3-21 12:00
   
throughout the sw USlittle impact on customers:





only 2 % complained== 98% happy





some do not complained:not distinguish,butter refer to both











In this argument, the author asserts that the customers who are served with margarine which (is)the replacement of butter, has had little influence by this change in all Happy Pancake House(H) restaurants located in the southwestern United States. To support the conclusion, the author involves that the complained customers only account for 2 percent which means the others are gald with the difference. Besides, the author asserts as well that some servers reports indicates(不用复数) that there is a number of the customers, who require the butter, accept the change without any complaint, and it is obvious that either these customers may fail to distinguish that change or they thought that both the butter and the margarine are the same to use a term of "butter".However, the argument seems to be stay in a logical construction, the author's evidence fails to prove the conclusion for the following reasons.





Firstly, the first evidence in the passage about the 2 percent is hardly to infer the conclusion. The author do not tell us that how many people participate in this survey. If the number of the people whoare of particition is not enough for a survey , the percentage of it is too vague. Further more, even the percentage of the complained people is justifiable, it cannot assert that the 98 people out of 100 are happy with it, which because the percentage is different from an exact number. The 98 is infer from the 2 percent, which is just a rate but not an real number exactly. Besides,the word before the 2 percent is too ensure (ensure)to prove the conclusion, for the reason that the 2 can be a number rounded down.





Secondly, the problem of the passage is about the report of the servers. Although there is some people do not complain the change, it does not mean they are agree with the change. We cannot suggest whether these people have been told that change before they eat them. The author indicates the two probabilities of the customers apprently without any base. To analyze this question, we should firstly know how many people had been told about the change and had not, after that, how many people who had been told can not distinguish and how many can not. in the distinguished how many refer to the butter and the margarine the same.





Finally, whether the impact to the customers is big or little should be dicided by all the addition above, and the author should add more details to support his unjustifiable conclusion.

内容还不是很够!字数也不够!才400 多!重点还是看语言表达!
时间还是超了~40分钟了!
明天会继续努力!求大哥大姐狠拍咯!
-- by 会员 fanny89757 (2012/3/20 17:47:39)

你只能写出两点,时间还超时了,说明你找argument的题目中的质疑点还不是很熟练,熟练了看一次题目就可以找很多的。
语言表达中的小错误已经标出
作者: fanny89757    时间: 2012-3-21 17:29
是!谢谢您!
找点确实不熟练,题库只过了一遍,反应还不够灵~我会继续努力的!
这个找点怎么才能比较准确和快呢?求指导!
作者: 竹林中人    时间: 2012-3-21 18:22
是!谢谢您!
找点确实不熟练,题库只过了一遍,反应还不够灵~我会继续努力的!
这个找点怎么才能比较准确和快呢?求指导!
-- by 会员 fanny89757 (2012/3/21 17:29:00)

看看一些关于argument常见错误的讲解,有哪些类型的错误,有什么特征,然后根据题目多找找,熟练了一看到某些字眼儿就知道是什么错误




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