标题: 【写作小分队】第一篇，献丑了 [打印本页] 作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-21 22:42 标题: 【写作小分队】第一篇，献丑了 Recently many people care about public recognition and thus do some job in a low income. They have do some job that is of great importance to the society and make our life more convenience. I think these people are really generous, but, I do not think they would do such thing with no money paid.
As a Chinese old saying goes, "Money cannot buy every thing, but have no money may cause a bit inconvenience." Though some people are munificent to do something that would really benefit the public, if they cannot gain enough money to feed themselves, they would be starving. And the starving of the good guys will no doubt cool them zeal to do something good down, some people cannot bear the hunger would flight, and some people that is about to join those people would cancel this decision. Finally there would be no one left.
On the contrary, if there is compensation, and those who want to do something gaining public recognition get payment, there would be more people willing to join. In the Asian Games, for instance, the Asian Games Organization Committees offered every volunteer drink and food as well as free public transportation, and paid every volunteer fifty Yuan symbolically. Therefore, there is thousands of people joined in, because they did not need to worry about starving.
What's more, with the compensation, the people joined will do the job more effectively in a more efficient way. It's the food offered by the AGOC that make it possible for me, a volunteer in Asian Games, to focus all my attention in the work.
In conclusion, since every people still need some money to used, to by food drink or some other daily necessarily, there is no possibility for people to work hard to obtain public recognition without any money.作者: Crystaljoy 时间: 2012-2-21 23:31
Kid加油，期待你2,3,4,5，，，N篇！作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-22 21:38
恩！ 希望能变好吧。。。看了老美185中的前50个topic了，现在终于还是要开始试试了作者: boboo 时间: 2012-2-22 21:45 Recentlymany people care about public recognition and thus do some job in a low income.They have do some（some 这个词可以换一下，不要老do some job重复） job that is of great importance to the society and make our lifemore convenience. I think these people are really generous, but, I do not thinkthey would do such thingswith no（without） money paid.
Asa Chinese old saying goes, "Money cannot buy everything, but having no money may cause a bit inconvenience." Though some people aremunificent to do something that would really benefit the public, if they cannotgain enough money to feed themselves, they would be starving. And the starvingof the good guys will no doubt cool them(their) zeal(decrease the zeal? 不知道用法到底是咋样的，觉得cool their zeal 好奇怪)to do something good down, somepeople cannot bear the hunger would flight（是fight？）, and some people thatis about（whowant） to join those people wouldcancel this（their）decision.Finally there would be no one left.
On the contrary, if there is compensation, and(去掉？) those who want to do somethinggaining public recognition get payment, there would be more people willing tojoin. In the Asian Games, for instance, the Asian Games Organization Committeesoffered every volunteer drink and food as well as free public transportation,and paid every volunteer fifty Yuan symbolically. Therefore, thereis(are) thousands of people joined in,because they did not need to worry about starving.(因为不会挨饿就超多人加入？例子是可以用的) What's more, with the compensation, the peoplejoined will do the job more effectively ina more efficient way（and more efficiently）. It's the food offered by theAGOC that makesit possible for me, a volunteer in Asian Games, to focus all my attention inthe work.
In conclusion, since every people still need somemoney to used(use), to by(buy) food , drink or some other dailynecessarily, there is no possibility for people to work hard to obtain publicrecognition without any money. 红色是错误，蓝色是疑问，高亮是精彩。 审题上提一点，they will work harderto obtain public recognition even though there is no moremoney given. 个人觉得你这篇说的应该是no money吧。第一次批改独立作文，水平有限，已经尽力了~~~作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-22 22:20
恩，谢了，审题的时候确实有一点问题。大家一起加油吧！！！作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-22 23:02
这是我的第二篇。。。。大家瞧瞧看看狠狠批批吧。。。。
月22日 2010.10.9NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Upon the question whether people live in rural areas would take better care of their families. In some situation, live in city means a better infrastructure, and better medical care. On the other hand, people live in countryside would have more time take care of their families. No doubt the people live in rural would take care of the families better.
Though people live in the city could have a better medical care, but it could not be justified, what the family members really need is the time shared together. When I was a little kid, my father was very busy, and we did not have much time talk to each other or play together. At that time, I did not familiar with my father, and, in fact, a little afraid of him. I think the money is not that important if my father cannot spare any time with me. So I would rather live in a rural, and share my time with my families. In addition, the more time the family member spent together, the better one can care about his or her families.
And what's more? People live in the city would always meets some uncomfortable things, and thus gain a bad mood. Sometimes， they may just have a quarrel with their workmates, sometimes they may be criticized by the boss, sometimes they have a sad mood just because of not finishing a work. With all that happened, they may come home with a terrible temper. How can families be happy with such a sad guy? How can they take care with their families better with a bad mood?
In conclusion, people live in the rural would always take better care of the families then live in the city. They would have more time to share with families and have a good mood to accompany the family members.作者: lixiang8747 时间: 2012-2-23 20:25 月22日 2010.10.9NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in cities, people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
Upon the question（查字典没找到这么写的准确意思，我可以明白，但不知道是否可以这样写，如果你也不确定就直接换个表达方式吧） whether people live in rural areas would take better care of their families. In some situation, live in city means a better infrastructure, （可以去掉逗号）and better medical care. On the other hand, people live in countryside would have more time（to） take care of their families. No doubt the people live in rural would take care of the families better.
Though people live in the city could have a better medical care, but（前面写though了后面就不用but了） it could not be justified, what the family members really need is the time shared together. When I was a little kid, my father was very busy, and we did not have much time（to） talk to each other or play together. At that time, I did not familiar with（be familiar with） my father, and, in fact, a little afraid of him. I think the money is not that important if my father cannot spare any time with me. So I would rather live in a（the） rural , and share my time with my families. In addition, the more time the family member spent together, the better one can care about his or her families.（这段的问题是例子好像不适用，爸爸和自己相处少不能证明住在农村就一定可以相处多，没有着重提出住在农村可以更好照顾家庭的好处。） And what's（英文文章里最好不要出现省略，就写what is 吧） more? People live in the city would always meets some uncomfortable things, and thus gain(个人意见就用cause吧，gain不好) a bad mood. Sometimes， they may just have a quarrel with their workmates, sometimes they may be criticized by the boss, sometimes they have a sad mood just because of not finishing a work. With all that happened, they may come home with a terrible temper. How can families be happy with such a sad guy? How can they take care with（of） their families better with a bad mood? （这段的例子我觉得也有问题，住在农村可能有更多烦恼的事情，比如说房子坏了找不到人修。所以单纯说住在城市可能遇到不舒服的事情不是一个有力的论点。） In conclusion, people live in the rural would always take better care of the families then（than 口语里可以这么写，写作里就是错的啊） live in the city. They would have more time to share with(the) families and have a good mood to accompany the family members.
语法上问题不大，但是列举的例子都不好，建议brainstorming时候考虑一下哪个观点好写，另外字数有些少啊，才300多点，建议再多写一些吧。 作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-23 23:49
2月23日 2010.10.23NADo you agree or disagree with the following statement? The advice from grandparents has no use for their grandchildren because the world changed a lot during the past 5o years. Use specific reasons to support your answer.
As we all know that grandparents love their grandchildren so much, and they would always want to protect them grandchildren every times. But as the world changed so much during the last 50 years, they may not catch the trend and would always offer some advice that not fit the situation well. So people need to take their grandparents' advice with cautious.
Grandparents are very old, sometimes just too old to catch the modern trends. They are conservative, they are out of fashion. They do not know how to use the Internet, how to use a telephone, and how to use some other new facilities. What is more, they would even afraid to taking an airplane. So, it's really hard to imagine when you need to go some place by plane for the limited time, but your grandparents insist you to take bus, simply because they think it is safer.
But on the other hand, grandparents are old and thus gain more experience and sometimes they are knowledgeable to turn to for help. I could remember there was a time when I met something very embarrass, I did not want anybody know what actually happened. But my grandfather knew my difficulties from my abnormal behavior and helped me a lot to face that. It was the encouragement and advice from my grandpa that made it possible for me to go through that big problem in a short time. I feel grateful to have such grandpa.
Moreover, I always believe that the true love in the relatives always make our grandparents a best advisor. They love us and they will spear no effort to help us if we meet some difficulties.
In conclusion, we need to take our grandparents advice carefully. Their knowledge and love make them a best advisor, but their conservation makes it important for us to take their advice with cautious.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-23 23:50
老实说，好害怕，现在还不能掐好时间。。。。呜呜，3.4号就要被虐了作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-24 21:13
2月24日 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people’s lives have already taken place.
Though improvement of technology is making our life better and better, the question whether the most significant improvement have already taken place is still under debate. Some people may think the technology have already led to a measurable change in the life, and thus there would not have any chance to make any more improvement. But I think, as time goes by, there will always be something much more incredible happen and will be a much more significant improvement in life.
To begin with, no one would imagine what would happen next, because life is a talent writer, always coming up with something unpredictable. The past 50 years have saw the tremendous change in china. When everybody live in 1949, no one would imagine the telephone would used in every family. And what they do know is that china has win a war and would thought that the triumph was the most significant change in their life. But when it came to 1978, when the America became more familiar with every one, no one would imagine the significant change America would bring to China. And then, the television, the computer, and the Internet all make every one daily life even more interesting. For short, no one would predict the feature, and there will always be something new happened.
What is more, a famous scientist once said, " Imagination is more important than knowledge." We should not limit our imagination to what has already been. Just believe that, there will always be something unknown approaching.
On the contrary, if everyone just believes the most significant improvement has already taken place, and everyone do not do their best to discover something new, then the world would really stop the pace.
All that I have said above boils down to the conclusion that, we should never have a thought that the significant improvement in life has already taken place.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-24 21:14
哭了，如果加上修改时间久超时了，肿么办肿么办？？？？？？？哎哎哎~作者: daisyの小夢想 时间: 2012-2-24 21:49
As we all know that grandparents love their grandchildren so much, and they would always want to protect them(their) grandchildren every times(all the times). But as the world changed so much during the last 50 years, they may not catch the trend and would always(always太绝对, sometimes/probably) offer some advice that not(don’t) fit the situation well. So people need to take their grandparents' advice with cautious(cautiously).
(One one hand,)Grandparents are very old, sometimes just too old to catch the modern trends.(表述有点奇怪。改为As they are in such an old age, grandparents may not be able to catch up with the trends and accept new things.) They are conservative, they are out of fashion. They do not know how to use the Internet, how to use a telephone, and how to use some other new facilities.(三个how to use有点累赘) What is more, they would even afraid to(be afraid of) taking an airplane. So, it's really hard to imagine when you need to go some place by plane for the limited time, but your grandparents insist you to take bus(没有insist you to这一用法，应为insist that you should take a bus), simply because they think it is safer.
But on the other hand, grandparents are old and thus gain more experience(have much more experience than we do) and sometimes they are knowledgeable to turn to for help.(they are so knowledgeable that we can rely on them for help) I could remember there was a time when I met something very embarrass(embarrassing), I did not want anybody know what actually happened. But my grandfather knew(noticed) my difficulties from my abnormal behavior and helped me a lot to face that(confront them). It was the encouragement and advice from my grandpa that made it possible for me to go through that big problem in a short time. I feel grateful to have such (a) grandpa.
Moreover, I always believe that the true love in the relatives(family) always make our grandparents a best advisor. They love us and they will spear(spare) no effort to help us if we meet some difficulties. (这个观点单独一段有点虚，可以把它摆到上一段)
In conclusion, we need to take our grandparents’ advice carefully. Their knowledge and love make them a best(good) advisor, but their conservation makes it important for us to take their advice with cautious(with caution).
sorry，迟来了~！作者: jiaosisisisi 时间: 2012-2-25 12:11
noarkid 你好，我是音乐同学 224的综合，very glad 由我负责给你revise~~~ but 我的水平有限，如果。。。请多包涵啊~~~作者: lixiang8747 时间: 2012-2-25 15:16 2月24日 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people’s lives have already taken place.
Though improvement（应该是复数，改进会有很多的） of technology is（相应的助动词要改） making our life better and better, the question whether the most significant improvement have already taken place is still under debate. Some people may think（that） the technology have（has） already led to a measurable change in the life, and thus there would not have any chance to make any more improvement. But I think, as time goes by, there will always be something much more incredible happen and will be a （去掉）much more significant improvement（复数） in life.
To begin with, no one would imagine what would happen next, because life is a talent writer, always coming up with something unpredictable. The past 50 years have saw the tremendous change（复数） in china. When everybody live in 1949, no one would imagine the telephone would used in every family. And what they do know is that china has win a war and would thought that the triumph was the most significant change in their life. But when it came to 1978, when the America became more familiar with every one, （什么是当美国对大家更熟悉后？这句话有问题）no one would imagine the significant change America would bring to China. And then, the television, the computer, and the Internet all make every one（名词所有格呢，每个人的生活） daily life even more interesting. For short, no one would predict the feature, and there will always be something new happened.（这句话时态太混乱了，鸟儿觉得应该这么写there will always be something new to happen）再说说这段的逻辑，我觉得没必要罗列历史事件，问题问你是不是科技的进步已经让你的生活发生改变，你写得这些似乎和这个论点都没什么关系） What is more, a famous scientist once said, " Imagination is more important than knowledge." We should not limit our imagination to what has already been. Just believe that, there will always be something unknown approaching.（这个approaching是形容词，用在这里不对，直接approach） On the contrary, if everyone just believes the most significant improvement has already taken place, and everyone do（does单复数问题） not do their best to discover something new, then the world would really stop the pace.
All that I have said（这里用过去式比过去完成时好） above boils down to the conclusion（这里要有be动词，否则句子没有谓语了） that, we should never have a thought that the significant improvement in life has already taken place.
文章有点短，建议第三段再放开写写，另外注意单复数，出现很多这个问题。 作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-25 20:24
2-24综合。。。。补交作业 In the lecture the professor was skeptical about the idea of the reading which overestimated the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine, though what it said about replacing the automobile's main source of power was true. The professor argued that the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine was not that nice.
In the reading passsage, the petroleum, which is the sauce main source of the internal-combustion engine, would run out of one day, but the hydrogen was plentiful and was easy to get. On the contrary the professor argued that the hydrogen is not that avalable, as it was artificial and was not easy to produce and stove.
Then, professor opposed reading's idea that the hydrogen-based cells would solve the pollution problems, Though the by-product of fuel-cell engines was environmental friendly, the pollution came from the produce procced was very large, as the large amount of coal and oil would be used, whose by-product was carbon dioxide.
Finally, the writer camplain that the fuel-cell engines would be economically competitive one day. However the profressor thought there would not be any cost saving and the fuel-cell engines is really expensive.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-25 20:25
noarkid 你好，我是音乐同学 224的综合，very glad 由我负责给你revise~~~ but 我的水平有限，如果。。。请多包涵啊~~~
-- by 会员 jiaosisisisi (2012/2/25 12:11:03)
彼此彼此啦。。。。。作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-25 21:53
2月25日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
Recently more and more people rush into the city and search for a better life. No doubt, there are many advantages to live there. So, I would like to support the idea that those live in the city will take better care of their families.
To begin with, urban residence earns much money, thus will take care of the families better. In China there is a big gap between urban and rural, those live in rural can just feed themselves, but those works in the city will have a lot surplus income to support the family. Moreover, with the money, the family can do lots of funny things. They can travel around the world, for instance, which will bond the relationship between the family members, and broaden them horizon. Therefore, living in city will lead a better life for the family.
In addition, city provides the residents with plenty of resources. There are many good hospitals, schools and playgrounds. When one of our families falls ill, there is better medical care; when families needs to go out for a rest, plenty of amusement-park would be available; when someone meets something sad, the bar is the best choice. With all that facilities, of course, one will take better care of the family.
Of course, there would be some benefit to live in the urban. The air there is fresh, the environment there is good, people there is friendly. Every thing is peaceful in the countryside. But it could not be justified, since in China, the rural would not provide enough materials for the betterment of the whole family.
In conclusion, though there may be some beneficial to live in the rural areas, the city is much better to take care of the family. Live in city will earn much more money and will enjoy a better facility there, all of which plays a really important role in taking care of the family.作者: jiaosisisisi 时间: 2012-2-25 22:35
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In the lecture the professor was skeptical about the idea of the reading which overestimated the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine, though what it said about replacing the automobile's main source of power was true. The professor argued that the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine was not that nice.
In the reading passsage,（在阅读文章里，应该是作者指出，或者是得出结论比较好吧，如果单纯罗列出在阅读文章里的事实感觉很怪吧~~，） the petroleum, which is the sauce main source of the internal-combustion engine, would run out of (of介词去掉吧，)one day, but the hydrogen was（友情建议一个the hydrogen was supposed to be） plentiful and was easy to get. On the contrary （on the contrary 一般后面一般有逗号的！）the professor argued that the hydrogen is not that avalable, as it was artificial and was not easy to produce and stove.(stove 是火炉的意思，如果想表达存储。store ) Then, professor opposed reading's idea that the hydrogen-based cells would solve the pollution problems, Though the by-product of fuel-cell engines was environmental friendly, （environmentally friendly）the pollution came from the produce procced（production process生产过程，貌似这样表达好些吧） was very large, as the large amount of coal and oil would be used, whose by-product was carbon dioxide. Finally, the writer camplain complainthat the fuel-cell engines would be economically competitive one day. However the profressor thought there would not be any cost saving and the fuel-cell engines is really expensive.
读后感：总体把三个VS 描述了出来，比较全面！ 但是美中不足，是记忆下单词拼写！！！
整体结构 看起来不够 明朗 ！强烈建议noarkid 小盆友~~~ keyi 有一个自己的模板 ~~~~~~~ 作者: Crystaljoy 时间: 2012-2-26 13:27
Noarkid，2,25的独立你跟Daisy互改哦。有点小小调整。作者: daisyの小夢想 时间: 2012-2-26 22:23
2月25日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
Recently more and more people rush into the city and search for a better life. No doubt, there are many advantages to live there. So, I would like to support the idea that those live in the city will take better care of their families.
To begin with, urban residence(residents) earns much (more) money, thus will take care of the families better. In China there is a big gap between urban and rural (+areas), those live in rural (+areas) can just feed themselves, but those works in the city will have a lot (+of)surplus income to support the family. Moreover, with the money, the family can do lots of funny things. They can travel around the world, for instance, which will bond the relationship between(among) the family members, and broaden them(their) horizon. Therefore, living in city will lead a better life for the family.
In addition, city provides the residents with plenty of resources (to enjoy together with their families). There are many good(advanced) hospitals, schools and playgrounds. When one of our families falls ill, there is better medical care; when families needs to go out for a rest(for relaxing), plenty of amusement-park would be available; when someone meets something sad, the bar is the best choice. With all that facilities, of course, one will take better care of the family.
Of course, there would be some benefit(s) to live in the urban (+areas). The air there is fresh, the environment there is good, (and) people there is(are) friendly. Everything is peaceful in the countryside. But it could not be justified(什么意思？？), since in China, the rural would not provide enough materials for the betterment of (+life of)the whole family.
In conclusion, though there may be some (a little) beneficial to live in the rural areas, the city is much better (+for us) to take care of the family. Live(Living) in city will (enable us to) earn much more money and will enjoy a better facility there. all of which plays a really important role in taking care of the family.(All factors considered above play important roles in how well we can take care of our families.)
观点不错，很清晰~~~语言表达要注意一下语法哦^^作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-27 01:36
2月26日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.
There is a famous saying that "parents are the best teacher of the children". I think it is because parents always do their best to tell children right from wrong. When it comes to teaching, many would believe that parents should always teach the child right thing and prevent them from making a mistake, but i do believe that parents should allow their children to make mistake and let them learn from their own mistakes.
To begin with, making mistake is the nature of human, and human would learn more when they make a mistake. On the contrary, just tell the child what is right may not have the same influence, because the child may not understand why it is right or why it is wrong. When children are told not to torch fire, for instance, they would not believe it until they tried themselves. From such movement, the children would develop knowledge that the fire is hot and would hurt them, and they would no torch it any more. From this case we can see that world is pale, but the mistake tells the child a lot.
What is more, when parents tell the children what to do, the children would gradually develop a sense of dependence. Just imagine, what would a children do when they or she finds that what their parents tell is always correct? The child may lose intention of thinking, as it is a unnecessary process would cost energy. Eventually, he or she would not be willing to think every thing carefully, and following becomes their nature. Then, how can this kind of child live in the society when he or she grows up? They would meet a lot problem then.
Making a mistake is not always a bad thing. If one can learn something from it and would not make the same mistake any more, it would even be really a good one. And people can really learn a lot from the mistake they make. That is the reason why I support the idea that parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from such mistakes.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-27 01:37
呜呜。。。。。弄得好晚，不过我坚持一定交作业作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-2-27 08:37
红色为错误，蓝色为疑惑or建议，高亮为精彩！ There is a famous saying that "parents are the best teachers of the children". I think it is because parents always do their best to tell children right from wrong. When it comes to teaching, many would believe that parents should always teach the child right thing and prevent them from making a mistake, but i do believe that parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from their own mistakes.(这个句子有点长，建议从but处断开)
To begin with, making mistakes is the nature(个人认为这里用nature不是很合适，但没有想好用什么词，也可以尝试换一种说法)of human, and human would learn more when they make a mistake. On the contrary, just tell(telling?) the child what is right may not have the same influence, because the child may not understand why it is right or why it is wrong(这个地方没有错误，就是觉得写得有点不够简洁呢、kid你再想想有没有比较好的表达能体现出right or wrong的). When children are told not to torch(touch?没有查到torch fire的用法呢……) fire, for instance, they would not believe it(it refers to what?) until they hadtried themselves. From such movement, the children would develop knowledge(increase knowledge) that the fire is hot and would hurt them, and then (我觉得加个then可能读起来逻辑更好些，我的本意还是觉得这个句子有点过长了……kid斟酌一下)they would no torch it any more. From this case we can see that world is pale(不太完全理解，从case中怎么看出pale了？？), but the mistake tells the child a lot.
What is more, when parents tell the children what to do, the children would gradually develop a sense of dependence. Just imagine, what would a children do when they or she finds that what their parents tell(what their parents told them) is always correct? The child may lose intention of thinking, as it is an unnecessary process whichwould cost energy. Eventually, he or she would not be willing to think every thing carefully, and following(obedience) becomes their nature. Then, how can this kind of child live in the society when he or she grows up? They would meet a lot problems then.
Making a mistake is not always a bad thing. If one can learn something from it and would not make the same mistake any more, it would even be really a good one. And people can really learn a lot from the mistake they make. That is the reason why I support the idea that parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them learn from such mistakes. Noarkid文章写得还不错，个人建议多注意一下单复数和冠词的细节，多积累一些好的词汇和搭配~文章的开头写得很好！ 作者: yangshuyun 时间: 2012-2-27 23:34
4月的，求狠批 1.People attend college or university for many different reasons(for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people atten college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the development of the society, people nowadays have more chances to go to college or university to attain advanced education. There are a lot of reasons that people receive the college education. Some people would like to get new experiences. Some want to prepare for their careers in the future. Others are in university just for new knowledge. From my own perspective, I strongly hold the idea that people should go to university to find their real interest and increase knowledge about it.
First of all, interest is the best teacher for people. Because the university education is a transition from students' life to work life. It is important for students to find what they really enjoy. A study has shown that during the life of people, they spend one third of their time with work. If people won't work on something that they really have interest in. They won't live a happy life. For example, a friend of mine is interested in history. But his parents ask him to study finance because they think that it will be easier for their son to find a job. So he changes his major. However, although he studies hard in finance, he doesn't get a good score since he dones't enjoy his study at all. From this example, we can find that people should do jobs that is truly attractive to them.
Besides, people can't fulfill their dream only with interest. They need knowledge about it. Supporse a teenager who like computer science but has no knowledge about it. He maybe has interest in computer jsut like Bill Gates. But it is obviously wrong that if he wants to quit from the school juas as Bill did in the past. Bill quited from Harvard because he thought that he had enough knowledge about computer science. Since the boy has the right direction, the right thing he needs to do is to learn more about computer science and gain more experience which may be helpful in the future. We can't succeed only with dreams. Have the right direction and insist on it. One day, we can achieve our dreams.
In sum, university is a key time in our life. We ought to find the right direction of our life and hold on it. One old saying has told us that "No pains, no gains". If we want to become successful, we need to take the right direction and increase the knowledge about it in the university.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-28 01:41
2月27日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to buy a new technological device when it becomes available than to wait until many people have owned it.
As time goes by, the technology is developing rapidly. And many new devices come out more and more frequently. Every time there is a new device, thousands of people would rush into the shop and buy some of them without any hesitation. But I do not quite understand why they do such a thing. In fact I do think that a new technological device would not offer much enjoyable if people cannot share it with friends.
To begin with, a Chinese famous philosopher, Mengzi, once say "Those who do not play with others would not be as enjoyable as those who play." I totally agree with what he said. No man would be happy if he just play it alone. To examplify what I mean, just imagine, if a child just gets a toy, something like a transformer, and others do not have one, what would happen? The child may lend it to his friend, but finally, he or she may get bother with it, there would be no fun to lend toy to friends all the time.
On the contrary, if there are more people use the devise, those own the device would play together and without bothering each other. I think it would be much more enjoyable
Moreover the one standing out would always suffer a sense of lonely, which is nearly a universally acknowledge. Once I bought a new mountain bicycle, which is very expensive, and I cherished it a lot. And everything goes perfectly until my classmates known that I own an expensive bicycle. They began to critique me a lot as, because the bike is expensive, I did not borrow my bike to them. It was really not a good memory. To standing out is not always good. Things became positive when one day I lose my bike and every came back to normal.
To sum up, I think to buy a new technological device as soon as it become available cannot offer that much enjoyable. The cost of the new device is very high and the lonely would suffer is pain.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-28 01:44
我勒个去，我准备个托福容易吗我，我在写作文的时候，舍友在炫耀怎么把女朋友驯得服服帖帖的。。。。。。尼玛，作文写了一个小时，写一半，以为他们去睡了，于是从写，想掐时间，结果这群人在床上聊。。。。。。。尼玛尼玛尼玛德作者: 蝴蝶渡海 时间: 2012-2-28 16:11
同3.4号考试、你这些都是几经里面的作文吧？我一写过一篇。第一次好害怕。准备还不充分作者: 晨依Jacqueline 时间: 2012-2-28 19:56
Noarkid你就假设这些人是在考场上还没有说完口语呢，顺便又练了抗干扰能力~不错哦作者: prodliu 时间: 2012-2-28 21:24
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To begin with, a Chinese famous philosopher, Mengzi, once say said "Those who do not play with others would not be as enjoyable as those who play." I totally agree with what he said. No man would be happy if he just play it alone. To examplify what I mean, just imagine, if a child just gets a toy, something like such as a transformer, and others do not have one, what would happen? The child may lend it to his friend, but finally, he or she就用He may get bother with it, there would be no fun to lend toy to friends all the time.
On the contrary, if there are more people use the devise, those own the device would play together and without bothering each other. I think it would be much more enjoyable
Moreover， the one standing out would always suffer a sense of lonely, which应该用that，在GMAT里which只能代表lonely is nearly a universally acknowledge. Once I bought a new mountain bicycle, which is very expensive, and I cherished it a lot. And everything goes perfectly until my classmates known that I own had an expensive bicycle. They began to critique me a lot because the bike is expensive, I did not borrow my bike to them. It was really not a good memory. To standing out is not always good. Things became positive when one day I lose my bike and every came back to normal.
To sum up, I think to buy a new technological device as soon as it become available cannot offer that much enjoyable. The cost of the new device is very high and the lonely people would suffer is pain.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-28 22:04
同3.4号考试、你这些都是几经里面的作文吧？我一写过一篇。第一次好害怕。准备还不充分
-- by 会员 蝴蝶渡海 (2012/2/28 16:11:25)
那还不一起来写作。。。。作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-28 23:44
大哥。。。。每天要改一篇别人的写一篇自己的。。。。你还要我再改一篇啊？几天后就考试了，还要准备口语。。。。。。。你自己加写作大本营就好了，别想不劳而获作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-29 01:19
2月28日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important to choose friends that could have fun with than to choose friends that will help you when you are in need.
As we live in the world, we need to develop various relationship with different people. Most people would believe that you should make sure whether the one who you get alone with have the potential to help you when you in trouble before bond a relationship. However, I do not agree with it. I do think it is not necessary do such a thing, because, it may be in vain.
Though, I also agree with the famous saying "A friend in need is a friend in deed." It just defines what a true friend should be, but not how to choose a friend. It is nearly impossible for one to know whether his/her friends would help him/her or not, because at the time the relationship began no one would know much about his/her friend. So, it's impossible to use such quality as a rule to choose friends. Just imagine, what happen if you ask someone you meet at first time what would he/she do when you have a hard time, like just be fired? I think it would enrage that man, as your sending a trustless signal.
And, in fact, no one would encounter trouble every time. On the contrary, the length of the life makes much of the life very boring. So, I think those just have some friends that might help them in the future, are less happy than those who have friends that can play with killing time together. What is more, people stay together all the time tends to build a more stable relationship. And thus, they may also support their friends when their friends are in trouble after a long time contacting.
In conclusion, I prefer to choose friends that could have fun with. The life is really boring, spent time with friends will kill the boring time, and then, as more time spent together, we would develop a much more stable relationship. So there is not any necessary to choose friends by judging whether or not the friend has responsibility, which is also impossible.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-29 01:20
真的觉得写作文好困。。。。。好困，上课以后就整天半夜写作。。。。不要考试时候一些作文就犯困咯作者: ft3098563 时间: 2012-2-29 20:37 标题: 凡与不凡修改，仅供参考 As we live in the world, we need to developvarious relationship with different people. Most people would believe that youshould make sure whether the one who you get alone with have the potential tohelp you when you in trouble before bond a relationship. However, I do notagree with it. I do think it is not necessary do such a thing, because, it maybe in vain. 文章的第一段通常包括引进话题，简述题目背景和给出个人观点三个部分(有时前两者可融为一体)。它会给评阅人留下关键的第一印象，所以非常关键。恕我直言，此文首段并没有明确告知读者这篇文章到底要讲什么，而作者的观点也很模糊，it is not necessary do such a thing指什么，最好明确指出来，不该羞涩时一定不要羞涩。 Though, I also agree with the famous saying"A friend in need is a friend in deed." It just defines what a truefriend should be, but not how to choose a friend. It is nearly impossible forone to know whether his/her friends would help him/her or not, because at thetime the relationship began no one would know much about his/her friend. So,it's impossible to use suchquality（没有明白想表达什么意思）as a rule to choose friends. Justimagine, what happen if you ask someone you meet at first time what wouldhe/she do when you have a hard time, like just be fired? I think it wouldenrage that man, as your sending a trustless signal. 此段首句应当给出一个论点，以支持自己的观点。但显然本文论点并没有直接给出。说实话本段没有看懂作者想要表达什么意思。 And, in fact, no one would encounter trouble every time. On the contrary, thelength of the life makes much of the life very boring. So, I think those just have some friends that might help them in thefuture, are less happy than those who have friends that can play with killingtime together. （此句话很不通顺，建议修改一下）What is more, peoplestay together all the time tends to build a more stable relationship. And thus,they may also support their friends when their friends are in trouble after along time contacting.
In conclusion, I prefer to choose friends thatcould have fun with. （终于明确表达了自己的观点）The life is really boring,spent time with friends will kill the boring time, and then, as more time spenttogether, we would develop a much more stable relationship. So there is not anynecessary to choose friends by judging whether or not the friend hasresponsibility, which is also impossible. 写作时要多注意文章的结构，在把结构搭好的基础下训练词法句法的表达，语言不需要多漂亮，但是最重要的是要让你的读者读懂，这是写好文章的基础。作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-29 21:00
2月29日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime.
Personally, I think the most important problem in the world is the environmental problem, which has already caused a serious influence to the human society and nature. Especially after the industrial revolution, human have create large quantity of waste much more than ever before, hence the environmental problem. But I think the human will solve this problem in our lifetime.
To begin with, nowadays, more and more people become aware of the importance of the environmental protection. They know that the worse environment will make them sick, the global warming will cause serious problem for the society, and the exhausted of the resource will make every one go through a hard time. And thus, more and more people take action and just do their best to solve such kind of problem. They do, for instance, save water by use it several times, go out by bike rather than drive a car, and plant trees every year. Though, for individual, the influence may be limited, when all of people take action to protect the earth, the solving of the environmental is just a matter of time. And I do not think it would cost life long.
What is more, the technology is developing rapidly, and more and more new technique developed will help solving the problem easily. I think scientists will create a device that can help clean the air, the soil and the water; and they would also find a method to save resource more effectively; also they would find a way to stop the pace of global warming. The potential of science is very unpredictable, and just believe everything will be fine in the future.
In conclusion, the most important problems nowadays will be solved in our lifetime. Since everyone has realize the problem and take action to solve it, with the help of science, nothing will be impossible. And the problem, no matter how important it is, will be solve in a short time.作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-2-29 21:02
自己说一下目标两天内要改了的毛病，1字数要上350，2 错别字不能再超过5个。。。。尼玛，发现5分钟给自己丫也检查不出什么错别字啊作者: Crystaljoy 时间: 2012-2-29 21:52
那5分钟可以读出来，拼写到无大碍，凭语感能检查出语法小毛病。OG上说偶尔的小错误不影响理解的没关系，同一个词前面拼错后面拼对就认为你会。这点上还是少有的人道的哈`作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-3-1 21:28
The writer mainly talks about the way to control the number of the cane toad. But the professor thinks the measure discussed in the essay will not get rid of the cane crops.
The reading materials first stated that building a national fence could be a good way to prevent the spread of the toad from moving out. But, it could not be justified, the professor pointed out that the fence could only stop the spreading, but can not reduce the number of the species, therefore it is not a effective solution.
The speaker also disagree with the idea in the passage that organizing a campaign to destroy the toads. He noted that it is hard to distinguish between the cane toad and an endangered native frog spices, especially when they are young. Thus, this activity may cause much damage to such spices.
Finally, the writer suggests using a virus to control the toad, which will specifically harm only the cane toads. However, the professor pointed out that this kind of virus is artificial, and if this kind of disease spread to America, it will destroy the local ecosystem by killing all cane toad there.
All in all, the professor does not think any solution is both effective and environmental friendly. 综合吧今天。。。。。作者: 越人歌 时间: 2012-3-2 20:24
红色修改 蓝色疑问 高亮精彩
The writer mainly talks about the way to control the number of the cane toad. But the professor thinks the measure discussed in the essay will not 感觉加一个 help the region 比较通一点 get rid of the cane crops.
The reading materials material（单数吧应该） first stated后面都是现在时的，这里就不要用过去时的了吧 that building a national fence could be a good way to prevent the spread of the toad from moving out 语法有一点奇怪，prevent the spread from moving out 防止扩散开始发生？这个moving out 是开始行动的意思吗？呃，我不太懂 . But, it could not be justified, the professor pointed out that the fence could only stop the spreading, but can not reduce the number of the species, therefore it is not a effective solution.我感觉这个点不太对，应该是讲这个fence不能完全起到隔离的效果，一些eggs会随着河流跨越过去，所以这个方法不靠谱
The speaker also disagree with the idea in the passage that这里用of比较通一点 organizing a campaign to destroy the toads. He noted that it is hard to distinguish between the cane toad and an endangered native frog species(这个去掉吧), especially when they are young. Thus, this activity may cause much damage to such spicesspecies，这个词用得太多了，建议改成 those frogs 或者别的什么.
Finally, the writer suggests using a virus to control the toad, which will specifically harm only the cane toads. However, the professor pointed还是时态问题 out that this kind of virus is artificial, and if this kind of disease有点重复了，建议用it代替 spread to America, it will destroy the local ecosystem by killing all cane toads there.
All in all, the professor does not think any solution is both effective and environmental friendly.
总体还是可以的，就是很多细节要多注意，特别是点一定要听准，这个是得高分的关键。
第一次改作文，没什么经验，因为刚考的GMAT所以在语法上可能会纠结得比较多一点
一起加油吧！O(∩_∩)O 作者: noarkid 时间: 2012-3-2 21:19
3.2综合 The lecture mainly talks about a new guidelines found in British, solving the problems discussed in the passage.
The writer believes that the archaeology suffer a lot in UK. It states that the valuable artifacts were lost when digging foundations for new buildings. And the financial support for archaeological search is limited, which makes it hard for the archaeologists to investigate different places. Also, the archaeology jobs were not adequate, left most of the archaeological research unpaid.
However the professor points out that the career has changed a lot since the foundation of the guidelines state, mainly by three ways. First of all, the new policy from the government command the new program in the city should acquire the agreement of the archaeologists, reducing the damage to the archaeological buidings. Secondly, archaeolgists are paied by new construction company wich is a kind of new financial support. And third, the new guidelines also provide lots of paid work, makes the archaeologists pursue their careers easily.
So the professor do not agree with the statement the science of archaeology in Britain is faced with serious problems.
