标题: 新gre argument-2 [打印本页] 作者: a273007862 时间: 2012-1-28 23:31 标题: 新gre argument-2 2 A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In this argument above, it is well presented yet far-fetched. It lays a claim that the birth order has affect on an individual’s levels of stimulations. To bolster this conclusion, the author advocates that the firstborn infants, no matter monkeys or humans, under stimulating situations, have high levels of cortisol. And the author also points out that the first-time mother monkeys have higher level of cortisol. Nevertheless, from the logically perspective, this argument is in effect hardly convincing me due to several critical flaws after a close scrutiny, albeit it appears credible at a cursory glance.
In the first place, the arguer only take eighteen rhesus monkeys into account. In this situation, the author does not explain how to choose these monkeys to take observation and if the chosen monkeys is the sign of random samplings. However, the arguer offers no evidence to substantiate this crucial assumption. If this is the case, the arguer’s reasoning is definitely flawed. Hence, if the author wants to convince me entirely, he must takes some useful information about these monkeys.
In the second place, even if the chosen monkeys are random samplings and a reasonable way to choose them, the argument still maintains ill-conceived. The arguer rests on the further assumption that the high levels of cortisol are due to firstborn infants, both monkeys and humans. To illustrate this point, the author does study that the firstborns are more high cortisol than their younger siblings. However, the author does not supply any evidence to confirm this assumption. It is quite possible that the firstborn infants are bigger than their following sisters and brothers. Thus, without ruling out or accounting for these and other likely possibilities, the arguer cannot bolster the recommendation.
Before I come to my conclusion, it is necessary to point out the last flaw in this argument. Even if the evidence turns out to support the forgoing proviso, the first-mothers have high levels of cortisol can not determined. The author just simply jumps to the conclusion that the firstborn may be hit the point. But the author omits to inform us whether there may be some other explains to cause this higher cortisol, such as neverous and so forth about the pregnancy itself.
To sum up, it seems precipitous to jump to the conclusion based on the problematic premises. In order to draw an efficient conclusion, the author ought to reason more convincingly, and take every possible consideration into account. Therefore, if the argument had better evaluated the conclusion, I would need to know how the author excludes the situations I mentioned above.
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时间很紧，30分钟不包括审题
作者: lukebrehm 时间: 2012-1-29 01:21
1. argument above (we all know where the argument is so there is no need to mention that), it is well presented 2. individual’s levels of stimulations (singular, stimulation). 3. And the author also points (no need for the "And") 4. have higher level (plural, levels unless you say "a higher level") of cortisol. 5. from the (from a NOT from the) logically perspective, 6. he must takes some useful information about these monkeys. ----- don't stop! Continue to write about what useful information.. 7. the argument still maintains (remains) ill-conceived.
Don't be vague. If you want to the author to take everything into account than you do the same.
good luck作者: 普渡哥 时间: 2012-1-29 11:40
需要很清楚题目要你写什么。
