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作者: ykhjy 时间: 2012-1-19 12:38
标题: 新g issue 13 求拍~
13) Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

The statement recommends that universities should require students to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study. To some extent, it is beneficial for students to learn more knowledge thus they can be more competitive in the society. However, there are also some negative aspects in the recommendation.

The statement seems to assume that in this increasingly competitive society, students are required to learn general knowledge thus they can deal with various situations. For example, to some students who are major in physic, it is beneficial for them to learn some courses concerning interpersonal relationship, which is almost a key to success in the society that every student may have some knowledge about it. Furthermore, learning a various courses outside the major fields may help students to find another interest, thus enrich their life. Meanwhile, learning some courses such as music for students who are major in computer science may help them release themselves when they are tired with the major study.

However, education should be humanism. Humanism education points out that every person have curiosity to explore something they don't know. And students have the right to choose fields of study, thus it is not suitable for universities to make requirement for students to learn some fields outside their major study. Universities should define their task is to aid and manage teaching rather than interfering students' choice. It is possible that for some students, major study is the only interest that they have, and they may devote themselves into it with the expect that avoiding disturbed by any other courses.

Furthermore, it is unnecessary for universities to require students to take a various courses outside their major field. Since the goal to make this requirement should be that students can really learn something useful. If students are interested in the courses that universities require, they will be desire to explore it even if universities don't require them to learn. If students are not interested in those courses, they will learn only to finish the assignment rather than absorbed some knowledge from those courses, thus it is meaningless to make them comply the requirement.

In addition, students don't necessarily have more energy to put in courses other than which they are major in. Thus if universities make a variety of courses outside the student's field of study to be compulsory courses. It may result in students' low efficience thus make them not only cannot get achievement in their major field but also be fed up with courses that the universities require and originally have interest in.

In conclusion, rather than requiring every student to take various courses outside the student's field of study, universities should try their best to offer sufficient educational resources to aid students to choose some field which they are interested in and have the energy to put in.

作者: jz20000cn 时间: 2012-1-19 21:42
这一篇表达得很清楚，good job!

作者: lukebrehm 时间: 2012-1-19 23:30
1. who major in physics, NOT who are major in physic,
2. interpersonal relationships, which can be the key to success in society and every student should have some knowledge of it. NOT interpersonal relationship, which is almost a key to success in the society that every student may have some knowledge about it.
3. learning various courses NOT learning a various courses

nicely written and I like your point

作者: ykhjy 时间: 2012-1-20 02:04
THX~

作者: skily22 时间: 2012-2-27 22:39
Good job. 写得很好

作者: 普渡哥 时间: 2012-2-29 10:18
这篇写得很好，我打4分：）

作者: jameszhm 时间: 2012-2-29 11:43

这篇写得很好，我打4分：）

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/2/29 10:18:11)

看来楼主很强了呀~~大家都说好恭喜哈~~

作者: jameszhm 时间: 2012-3-1 12:28
从require这个角度写，我觉得很不错很好的切入主题。不过好像前面两个支持观点都是从这个角度说的会不会有点重复~~个人意见纯属参考

作者: franciszmy 时间: 2012-3-1 14:04
这篇我也给4分，是比较规整的文章。不华丽，但是整体文章观点写的比较清楚，起码给人感觉逻辑是清晰的。

作者: jameszhm 时间: 2012-3-2 12:08

从require这个角度写，我觉得很不错很好的切入主题。不过好像前面两个支持观点都是从这个角度说的会不会有点重复~~个人意见纯属参考

-- by 会员 jameszhm (2012/3/1 12:28:29)

楼主回复我啊~~

作者: weiqu 时间: 2012-3-2 13:14
小拍一下哦.我觉得作者用词方面可能还可以修改一下,比如像thus和beneficial如果开始就重复用几次,会让对方觉得vocabulary比较欠缺.而且读得会不流畅. 还有比如knowledge,interested这样的反复用词,前者可以考虑修改成curriculum or subjects,后者可以换一下表达方式,比如他们对此有热情的,或者willing to等等.
其次,Humanism education这样的表达方式好像很少见..你其实想表达的是一个民主的意思.不希望被干涉,我觉得可能表达方式还可以考虑一下.
furthermore这一段比较绕.可以修改挺多的.两个if的对立内容之间,可以用vice versa之类的phrase去简化.
整篇感觉有部分语句比较长,但是表达内容不是特别清晰.还可以修改修改的.对不起说太多了.

作者: jameszhm 时间: 2012-3-2 21:13

小拍一下哦.我觉得作者用词方面可能还可以修改一下,比如像thus和beneficial如果开始就重复用几次,会让对方觉得vocabulary比较欠缺.而且读得会不流畅. 还有比如knowledge,interested这样的反复用词,前者可以考虑修改成curriculum or subjects,后者可以换一下表达方式,比如他们对此有热情的,或者willing to等等.
其次,Humanism education这样的表达方式好像很少见..你其实想表达的是一个民主的意思.不希望被干涉,我觉得可能表达方式还可以考虑一下.
furthermore这一段比较绕.可以修改挺多的.两个if的对立内容之间,可以用vice versa之类的phrase去简化.
整篇感觉有部分语句比较长,但是表达内容不是特别清晰.还可以修改修改的.对不起说太多了.

-- by 会员 weiqu (2012/3/2 13:14:03)

谢谢weiqu~

作者: ykhjy 时间: 2012-3-6 16:29
虽然两个都是require的角度，但是一个是从学校不能require的角度，另一个是学校require 没有效果的角度

作者: ykhjy 时间: 2012-3-6 16:31
多谢哈我语言方面确实不太行

作者: jameszhm 时间: 2012-3-6 18:06
为什么不结合起来呢？是为了分开而分开的吗？~

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