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作者: sanlingjie 时间: 2011-11-17 19:58
标题: Season 3——manhattan 51 (已点评)
Here is my turn!

我接过了第三季下半期的接力棒，继续SC悬赏令。当然，悬赏的分数能否得到不重要，毕竟都是网络虚拟的东西，但是希望大家踊跃参与，你看题目在脑中过一遍和你把分析写下来的效果肯定是不一样的。祝大家考试成功！

顺便夸一下manhattan（虽然别人夸得已经很多了），真的不错！

下面发布新题：

51. That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.

A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants

B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check are necessary prerequisites for employment

C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check

D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks

E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees

The sentence has several errors of concision. First, the structure “X is of … importance which is why Y is a … prerequisite” is awkward and wordy, and can be more concisely written as follows: “Because [X is … important], [Y is … necessary].” Second, both “some importance” and “necessary prerequisite” are redundant: if something is “important” it has "some importance"; similarly, a “prerequisite” is by definition “necessary.”

(A) This choice is incorrect as it repeats the original sentence.

(B) The singular verb “is” does not agree with the plural subject “records.” In addition, the plural verb "are" does not agree with the singular subject "background check." Finally, the phrase “necessary prerequisite” is redundant.

(C) CORRECT.The redundant and passive clause “X is of significant importance to investment banks” is replaced by the more concise and active clause “they [investment banks] consider X important.” In addition, the redundant and passive clause “a background check is a necessary prerequisite [of investment banks]” is replaced by the more concise and active “investment banks require background checks.” Finally, the entire sentence is rewritten in the concise form “Because X, Y.”

(D) The phrase “some importance” is redundant and wordy. In addition, the meaning of the sentence has been changed to state that “many” of the employees underwent a background check; the original sentence asserted that the background check was required, and, therefore, was submitted to by all.

(E) The structure “the reason X is because Y” is redundant. The proper idiom is either “the reason X is Y” or “Y is because X.” In addition, it is not clear whether the pronouns “they” and “their” refer to “investment banks” or “applicants.”

几位同学都分析的不错，顺带说一下，只要看到which直接跟在一个名词后面前面没有逗号，一般就可以判断这个句子是错误的。因为which在GMAT里是不能引导限制性定语从句的。这题比较简单，但实际考试的SC会难些，希望大家多多努力。

这个句子主要的错误就是：1. which用法错误；2. of some importance 太啰嗦，GMAT里很少用到这么复杂的短语，能用动词的就用动词，或者说一般能用一个词表达的绝不用两个词；3. necessary prerequisite 是重复啰嗦的； 4. The reason ........is because........是错误的用法，这个是初高中语法哈；5. 注意主谓一致； 6. 不要轻易改变原文的意思

作者: Jimmyzhang2012 时间: 2011-11-17 20:27
选C
A which 引导限定性定语从句修饰banks 错误
B Clear records are important，单复数错误； hence 和分号用一个就好
D which 同A
E the reason that ... is because... 错误

作者: jofre 时间: 2011-11-17 20:48
楼主说的真好，写下来的过程就是整理思路与再思考的过程，赞一个

51. That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.
A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants
B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check are necessary prerequisites for employment
C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check
D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks
E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees

ABD选项肯定错，CE选项纠结
选项A: that every worker has a clean criminal record作为主语太长，最好用形式主语it替代或者改变句子结构；be of some importance不简洁；which在GMAT中不能指代整个句子，本选项中which从句前无逗号，表示限制性定语从句就近修饰investment banks，错。
选项B: 后一个句子主谓不一致，are错；另外逻辑上也有点问题，“其员工拥有clean criminal records”的整个状态，而非“clean criminal records”本身对investment banks重要。
选项C: 感觉原句强调员工拥有clean criminal records对investment banks重要，本选项强调投行要求背景调查，改变句子重心；require each job applicant to undergo ...变成applicant做背景调查，逻辑上应该是investment banks做背景调查。
选项D: be of some importance不简洁；which在GMAT中不能指代整个句子，本选项中which从句前无逗号，表示限制性定语从句就近修饰records，错；them向前指代不清，可能指代workers或records，但逻辑上应指代investment banks，错
选项E: 除了reason与because意思重复外，其它读起来非常通顺，没有上述指代/逻辑主语/句子重心改变等问题

纠结半天还是选E吧，望牛人楼主指点

作者: vanchaser 时间: 2011-11-17 21:02
我选C。
A选项的“of some importance to” wordy, which不可以修饰句子。
B选项的第二句中are 谓语不对。
D选项和A一样的两个错误。
E选项的the reason和because重复，错误。前几天的题好像也有。

作者: sanlingjie 时间: 2011-11-18 09:19

选C
A which 引导限定性定语从句修饰banks 错误
B Clear records are important，单复数错误； hence 和分号用一个就好
D which 同A
E the reason that ... is because... 错误

-- by 会员 Jimmyzhang2012 (2011/11/17 20:27:43)

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作者: sanlingjie 时间: 2011-11-18 09:24

楼主说的真好，写下来的过程就是整理思路与再思考的过程，赞一个

51. That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.
A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants
B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check are necessary prerequisites for employment
C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check
D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks
E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees

ABD选项肯定错，CE选项纠结
选项A: that every worker has a clean criminal record作为主语太长，最好用形式主语it替代或者改变句子结构；be of some importance不简洁；which在GMAT中不能指代整个句子，本选项中which从句前无逗号，表示限制性定语从句就近修饰investment banks，错。
选项B: 后一个句子主谓不一致，are错；另外逻辑上也有点问题，“其员工拥有clean criminal records”的整个状态，而非“clean criminal records”本身对investment banks重要。
选项C: 感觉原句强调员工拥有clean criminal records对investment banks重要，本选项强调投行要求背景调查，改变句子重心；require each job applicant to undergo ...变成applicant做背景调查，逻辑上应该是investment banks做背景调查。
选项D: be of some importance不简洁；which在GMAT中不能指代整个句子，本选项中which从句前无逗号，表示限制性定语从句就近修饰records，错；them向前指代不清，可能指代workers或records，但逻辑上应指代investment banks，错
选项E: 除了reason与because意思重复外，其它读起来非常通顺，没有上述指代/逻辑主语/句子重心改变等问题

纠结半天还是选E吧，望牛人楼主指点

-- by 会员 jofre (2011/11/17 20:48:39)

Thanks very much for your support.

作者: sanlingjie 时间: 2011-11-18 09:30

我选C。
A选项的“of some importance to” wordy, which不可以修饰句子。
B选项的第二句中are 谓语不对。
D选项和A一样的两个错误。
E选项的the reason和because重复，错误。前几天的题好像也有。

-- by 会员 vanchaser (2011/11/17 21:02:33)

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作者: 庭草绿 时间: 2011-11-18 22:02
51. That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.

A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants
be of adj 罗嗦；which不能指代前面整句话；necessary 和prerequisite 重复
B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check arenecessary prerequisites for employment
谓语动词单复数错误；necessary 和prerequisite 重复
C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check
D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks
be of adj 罗嗦；which不能指代前面整句话
E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees

The reason…is because…错误，应为the reason… is that…

作者: maxiv 时间: 2011-11-20 04:28
51. That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.

A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants
错。which 引导的因果关系不明确

B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check are necessary prerequisites for employment
错，is至少应该是are

C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check
错。出现了they指代banks，改变了主语，与原句的语意不同。

D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks
对。

E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees
错。reason做主语，与原句语意不同。

作者: Sophia001 时间: 2011-11-21 06:20

-- by 会员 jofre (2011/11/17 20:48:39)

本句的“员工的无犯罪记录"和"背景调查”是因果关系，而不是一个重要一个不重要的关系。因为员工拥有无犯罪纪录这一点对投行很重要，所以投行要求他们的申请者接受严格的背景调查。“require each job applicant to undergo ...变成applicant做背景调查，逻辑上应该是investment banks做背景调查。”这里applicant 是undergo这个调查的，并非做这个调查。
不知这样解释清楚否？

作者: balapupu 时间: 2011-12-13 09:51
That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.

A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants

B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check are necessary prerequisites for employment-->主谓不一致，应该用is

C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check

D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks-->which 这里到底可不可以修饰限定性定语从句？

E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees-->the reason is becasue....错

这道题的考点好难看出的说。。。。

作者: balapupu 时间: 2011-12-13 09:57
哎哎~~原来这道题算是简单题啊，囧，看来自己想难了，还是以后which这种考点就果断判断错把~~

作者: 南瓜0729 时间: 2011-12-14 15:57
51. That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.

A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants
which不能指句子
B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check are necessary prerequisites for employment
主谓不一致
C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check
选C
D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks
同A
E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees 不能同时用

作者: maxiv 时间: 2011-12-29 18:30
51. That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants.

A That every worker has a clean criminal record is of some importance to investment banks which is why a stringent background check is a necessary prerequisite for all of their job applicants

B Clean criminal records of their employees is important to investment banks; hence, a stringent background check are necessary prerequisites for employment

C Because they consider it important that all of their employees have a clean criminal record, investment banks require each job applicant to undergo a stringent background check

D It is of some importance that all investment banks’ workers have clean criminal records which is why many of them undergo stringent background checks

E The reason that investment banks require background checks of their applicants is because they require clean criminal records of their employees

1，is of中的of指代不清，AD错
2，which指代错，AD错。
3，a check。。。are错，B错
4，it important缺verb，C错（consider X Y的句型，不错了）
5，the reason和because重复，E错。

正解C

作者: Halo621 时间: 2017-11-5 21:17
请问c选项的指代没有问题吗？可以说they＝investment banks吗？人＝机构？求解～

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