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作者: 冷月钟笛 时间: 2011-10-18 20:32
标题: I84 当世无英雄(重写) 求拍
选择了原有立场，放弃了媒体丑闻等的事例论证（考虑合理篇幅与论点需求），做出了内容与论述上的修正，观点依然不能说完全公允，希望各位G友狠狠拍砖~

Issue 84
It is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

正文：
What do you bear in your mind when you hear the word “hero”? Ironclad power, great glory, victory, noble soul, and may be more. We usually explain the title “hero” as someone who has achieved great work, something extremely valuable. But we may dismiss another more important part about the meaning of hero: the high expectation from the populace. Today, as the progress of our society and cognition of people, such expectation about a hero has been extremely undermined, therefore making almost no one can deserve the title “hero” any more as the issue said.

To be fair, I concede that there are always some noble people who have achieved some great work in current times, as it is in every time. Those people may be reputed as heroes about something due to their success in some field. For example, in risk of life, the astronauts step out into the outer space for the future of all human beings, and we name them as "space heroes"; the doctors and nurses, who fight against the plagues like SARS and work with the patients together all the time, are worth the title of "heroes". We witness the beautiful part of human nature on them via their great work, and we appreciate their contribution to the society. That is why we view them as heroes.

However, the name of heroes today may not last for long due to the declining expectation about it since people get more and more aware that heroes are actually as normal as us. After all, the existence of the reputation of heroes is more than achievement itself, but the glory and worship derived from it. Today, due to the great power of media, we are able to understand more about the heroes and their lives. As a word says, both the worship and contempt to someone come from a bad knowledge about him. In opposite, when you get to know someone well, learn his habits and flaws, you may find they are just as ordinary as us. As a result, those noble and great people can be applauded and awarded, but can never be qualified as heroes, an extremely high glory.

Moreover, another reason for few heroes today is that the heroism value is not that qualified in the current times. Given a hero there, we might expect him high to fulfill some tough job all alone since we appreciate such heroism in the past. But now, as the progress of our society, instead of relying some person or people, we tend to trust more on a system to solve problems. For example, instead of pinning our hope on some heroes, we now expect the police stuff to deal with the crimes, and believe our law system will make right judgments on their sins. It can be some kind of moral abduction for any individual to impose him an extra responsibility of solving some problems beyond his field, even for the heroes. Therefore, due to the decline in heroism, it is reasonable to witness few heroes in the world, but more and more responsible people.

In retrospect, there are still many noble “heroes” who have achieved great work for the society, if we decrease the standard for judging a hero. Due to a better understanding on those noble and great people, and an increasing ration for system justice, there are actually few people who can be qualified as heroes today, but many good ordinary people.

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1   英雄的高标准：
1.1   英雄英雄：高尚品格的人格，令人敬佩的人，能人所不能。荣耀，胜利，力量，无坚不摧。
1.2   英雄之名的维持，一方面来自英雄人物本身的成就，更主要的是依靠人们对英雄极高的期望——敬仰与崇拜；
1.3   这种过高的期望会随着对当事人的了解加深而逐渐降低，而这种逐渐贬值的“英雄”正在失去这个字眼原有的含义
2   （+）世上依然有很多品格高尚的人，因为卓著的成就而被成为英雄；
3   （-）因为对英雄了解的加深，让人们认识到英雄也不过是普通人，因而对他们的崇拜与敬仰会随着这种了解的增进而降低，使英雄之名很快消逝
4   （-）因为现在英雄主义价值的不再合适，使英雄不再被人们所称道。
5   尽管世上依然有很多善良而卓越的人，但因为以上两点原因英雄诚然罕有。但这并不意味着时代的退步，只不过那些卓越而优秀的人们不再以英雄著称而已。

附上ppguo提供的提纲：
1.当人们提起英雄这个词时，脑袋里会浮现出XXXXXXX, 或者电影中的谁谁谁，这些人有着一些非同常人的品格，在关键时刻救人脱离困境。但是现在英雄这个词越来越少出现在媒体中。因为 a) 媒体的审查 b) 大众对人性的了解更透彻，不再轻易相信完美的英雄。
2. 但是这并不意味这这个世界上就不会再出现英雄。在媒体的焦点以外，有很多人默默地为人类的幸福努力。例子有特蕾莎修女，还有那个几十年间资助过上百个学生的中国老人。
3. 人们头脑中英雄的概念与以往不同。人们不再要求英雄是完美的。在承认他们伟大的贡献的同时，也接纳他们作为一个普通人有的软弱和缺陷。英雄的概念也不再局限于个人，可以是一个团体。例子有：汶川地震的志愿者们。
4. 结论，一个社会中还是会出现英雄的，不管他们有没有被曝光，是一个人还是一个团体。

作者: ppguo 时间: 2011-10-18 23:43
写得挺好的。这个角度是会比较难写。尤其赞冷月的行文，很流畅，读起来很舒服。

作者: 冷月钟笛 时间: 2011-10-19 01:19
谢谢~ 虽然已经尽量包装了~ 不过强行提高标准，换个称号这种写法，以后几乎不会再用了~

作者: ppguo 时间: 2011-10-19 03:10
呵呵。好~~

作者: cqcn1991 时间: 2011-10-19 23:37
报一下我以前写的提纲
首先提一下
这个题目其实是对应3个题目的，ISSUE 44 75 84
主要是当今媒体和现世英雄的冲突……所以针对你的这个题目，我依然在写Media，尽管ISSUE题目里面只字未提
1.现在的媒体的scrutiny确实会导致scandal
2.但是这实际上，是因为媒体提供了more information，而这种more information其实增加了对于hero的understanding。小的错误、自身的局限性，体现hero平凡的一面，更实际更acceptable
3.而且，媒体的广泛，会发现更多的hero；另一方面，媒体的监督会使hero对自己的要求更高
4.In conclusion,英雄不但没有减少，反而更多了

主要问题是，感觉问题挖得不够深

作者: ppguo 时间: 2011-10-19 23:40
“cqcn" 的提纲比我的好。隐藏的高手啊。

作者: 冷月钟笛 时间: 2011-10-22 12:19

报一下我以前写的提纲
首先提一下
这个题目其实是对应3个题目的，ISSUE 44 75 84
主要是当今媒体和现世英雄的冲突……所以针对你的这个题目，我依然在写Media，尽管ISSUE题目里面只字未提
1.现在的媒体的scrutiny确实会导致scandal
2.但是这实际上，是因为媒体提供了more information，而这种more information其实增加了对于hero的understanding。小的错误、自身的局限性，体现hero平凡的一面，更实际更acceptable
3.而且，媒体的广泛，会发现更多的hero；另一方面，媒体的监督会使hero对自己的要求更高
4.In conclusion,英雄不但没有减少，反而更多了

主要问题是，感觉问题挖得不够深

-- by 会员 cqcn1991 (2011/10/19 23:37:26)

丑闻导致英雄被妖魔化
了解导致英雄更平民化
发现导致英雄更真实化

关于这个提纲依然有一些疑问：
1. 不被发现的英雄就不是英雄了吗？——对映第三点
2. 你发现原来的英雄其实平凡如你我，也就是预先承认世上有英雄，只是很平凡而已——那么有没有很好地讨论是否同意作者观点——世上无英雄？好像你说有英雄，却不告诉我为什么有，只告诉我英雄很平凡；——对应第二点
3. 丑闻妖魔化英雄形象，让英雄非英雄，这里要写好，觉得还是得联系主题——可能因为这个原因，令作者认为世上无英雄，因为他们身上都有弱点，被丑闻暴露之后，就不是英雄了——之后又联系到为什么暴露弱点就不是英雄的问题

光看提纲有这些想法，也许在写作处理的时候可以把这些问题都写进去，一点拙见，感谢分享！

作者: cqcn1991 时间: 2011-10-23 00:06
到底还是我论证不够严密啊……
另外，也只能说是对于Issue的定义不一样了（而且对比你的标准，我对于英雄的定义也没那么高……）
因为我主要是对应的这个题目：
75 In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
不知道照搬会不会被判偏题，因为我确实感觉这2个题目尽管看起来像，但是处理方式不同，应该是按你的来做，去讲英雄的“原因”

而我实际上没有论述到底“有没有英雄”，主要侧重点是“媒体对现有英雄的影响”，是双方的“关系”
不过我们必须得抗起来啊，谁让我们position不一样

以下可以略读，因为前提已经不一样了：
1.因为我确实认为，不被发现的英雄就不算是regard as hero。比如, （尽管我不是很喜欢这个），就是感动中国……
不知道我应该怎么论证才能更有说服力？因为我确实感觉写起来也就是只能举一些平民英雄的例子，比如susan大妈……

2.确实承认了英雄的存在的。因为这个东西是顺承上文media的负面效果，接下来论证media的正面效果。“因为真实，所以精彩”一些小的错误小八卦其实让更迷人。然后moreover，高大全的英雄可能甚至不会让社会regard as hero
不过还没想到什么特别好的例子，恐怕得生造了

作者: 冷月钟笛 时间: 2011-10-23 02:39
嗯~ 其实你写的提纲都是有道理的，标准提的也很合理——像英雄被大家知道才行，不然都是无名氏了，谁知道是不是英雄呢~——只不过提一些问题，促进思考，这样在写的时候可以把这些关键的信息写出来，把这些reasoning呈现出来~ 话说如果不是一开始NC地选了这个立场，我也不想拔高规格提高标准来写英雄

这实乃让渡观点的无奈。。。

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