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作者: lukeyu    时间: 2011-9-23 00:41
标题: 第二篇issue,真心求板砖~~求指点~~
Issue题号:新G 01
As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.



In our time, technologies which are the effective creation of our human beings are coming to be so essential factors in our daily lives that we rely on it much more than ever before and that there is appearing a wonderful world which is out of our ever imagination. Surly there is the fact that more of our basic activities can be done by the methods of technologies than ever before, which, however, cannot be the sufficient evidence that the fact that humans’ abilities of thinking for themselves will depreciate is due to the more dependence on technology.


All technologies are the creation of thinking of human and refined by our thinking, so in this way our dependence on technology should be interpreted as a kind of recreation that technologies lead us to promote and improve the present technology with the help of technological methods and our intelligence, which is a reflection that our humans’ continuous thinking and great improved intelligence. It is a creation that is out of the ranges that traditional skills and methods can provide, which greatly limits the abilities of creation and are able to catch the pace of social development. There are certainly some opposite arguments existing that more and more relying on the technology results in the fact that people are too lazy to think for themselves independently without the assistant of technological methods, which, however, only see the partial effect brought by technology. Why people prefer to solve problems and matters with the help of technology is that technological methods provide human with an efficient way of thinking and with opportunities to expand their thoughts.


In the field of education, even though parents and teachers complain that the multiple media technology depreciate students’ passion of actively thinking and exploring, the fact that cannot be denied and ignored is that increased equipments with multi-media technology have utilized in teaching and learning from the level of kindergarten education to the high-level education system, which enhances the efficient of education significantly and allows teachers and students to gain more choices to choose the methods of communication. This renewed communicating mechanism that inspire and promote the energy of thinking abilities has activated the adhesive interests and passion of student of discovery and exploration and has greatly changed the atmosphere of class that is cultivated by the traditional way of teaching with only blackboard and the textbook whose contents of class is tedious and boring, which, however, limits the audiences’ thinking abilities in imagination.


Some people argue that it is the more dependence of people on technologies that leads to the depreciation of thinking abilities of humans, so it is the counterpart that the independence on technological methods can develop our thinking abilities. It is the common sense that the solid fundaments of economy which is drived by the advanced technology determine the buildings above it which include the thinking abilities of people, so the development of our thoughts cannot live without the improvement and promotion of technology. It is clear that the independence of technologies will rather not develop our thoughts, but what is more harmful is that the thinking abilities of our human would be limited and even be weakened, which is a great shame of our intelligent group, so what is real depreciation is the neglecting on technology.
作者: 普渡哥    时间: 2011-9-23 00:44
排版排得真好,我吃过饭再来欣赏
作者: fanfan3200    时间: 2011-9-23 01:20
怎么通篇都是长句啊?有的句子实在是长啊
作者: 普渡哥    时间: 2011-9-23 03:09
谁来帮我分析一下这个长句呢?
however, cannot be the sufficient evidence that the fact that humans’ abilities of thinking for thinking for themselves will depreciate is due to the more dependence on technology.
作者: Liam0205    时间: 2011-9-23 08:14
我有个建议啊。

发作文的时候,把提纲先一并发上来。。
作者: 普渡哥    时间: 2011-9-23 08:17
是啊,我觉得Liam的建议很好。
作者: lukeyu    时间: 2011-9-23 18:49
下次注意~~
作者: jz20000cn    时间: 2011-9-23 23:27
我觉得思路很好,作者的逻辑很明确。
作者: jz20000cn    时间: 2011-9-23 23:28
不一定都要用长句,可以用一些专业一点的单词,也会加分。主要要让那些评分的人读起来舒服,就能拿高分
作者: lukeyu    时间: 2011-9-23 23:31
是不是通篇的长句子也不好啊~~
作者: lukeyu    时间: 2011-9-23 23:33
改过来了~~
作者: jz20000cn    时间: 2011-9-23 23:43
我觉得不用通篇。只要保证流畅就行,不要刻意用长句,自然一点最好
作者: lukeyu    时间: 2011-9-24 00:03
一开始的时候写不长,然后把几个短句整合一下就长了,就变成现在这样子了~~自己读起来都感觉好累啊,缺少节奏的变化~~
作者: 普渡哥    时间: 2011-9-24 12:05
写得不错:)期待第二篇。




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