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作者: ywsunny 时间: 2011-3-25 22:06
标题: OG12-SC-88求大家帮忙解答
88.Thelonious Monk, who was a jazz pianist and
composer, produced a body of work both rooted in the
stride-piano tradition of Willie (The Lion) Smith and
Duke Ellington, yet in many ways he stood apart from
the mainstream jazz repertory.
(A)Thelonious Monk, who was a jazz pianist and
composer, produced a body of work both rooted

(B)Thelonious Monk, the jazz pianist and composer,
produced a body of work that was rooted both

(C)Jazz pianist and composer Thelonious Monk,
who produced a body of work rooted

(D)Jazz pianist and composer Thelonious Monk
produced a body of work that was rooted

(E)Jazz pianist and composer Thelonious Monk
produced a body of work rooted both

Grammatical construction; Rhetorical
construction

The subject of the sentence is Thelonious Monk,
and the sentence tells about two things that he
did: produced and stood apart. Tne work he
produced was rooted in the mainstream {stride
piano) jazz tradition, yet at the same time, he
deviated from this tradition. The use of a relative
clause (who was a jazz pianist...) or an appositive
(thejazz pianist...) introduces unnecessary
wordiness and grammatical complexity. Since
only one point is being made about Monk's body
of work, the appearance of the word both in the
clause presenting the claim about Monk's work is
deceptive as well as grammatically incorrect.

AThe relative clause introduces wordiness and
confusion.

BThe appositive introduces wordiness and
unnecessary grammatical complexity.

CThe sentence is a fragment because the main
subject, Thelonious Monk, has no verb.

DCorrect. The sentence concisely identifies
Thelonious Monk and expresses the single
point about his work without unnecessary or
misleading words.

EThe appearance of both is misleading, since
only one point is being made about where
Monk's musical roots are located.

The correct answer is D.

这题有两个语法点。关于BOTH的语法点我已经明白了。不明白的是A,B答案为何错，OG的解释只简单说它们wordiness，但是我觉得A,B的表达好像没有什么大问题，为什么不可以用像A中用who引导一个从句，或B中用两个逗号加个插入语呢？
恳请各位大牛帮忙~多谢了

作者: ogram 时间: 2011-3-25 22:35
这题关键不能有both,因为只rooted了一个方面，就是rooted in stride-piano tradition，后面的两个人名是起迷惑作用的，让你误以为rooted了两个方面，所以要加both.其实不应该加both

作者: ywsunny 时间: 2011-3-25 22:43
谢谢解答。但是both的问题我已经明白了，我还是不明白A,B中的wordy的问题。

作者: banboshuying 时间: 2011-3-26 00:08
1. A 选项中的 who 无指代。比如可以用这样的表达： T.M., a people who is ... 不过还是很冗余。

2. B 选项 the jazz pianist and composer 做同位语修饰 T.M. 这里用了定冠词 the，用 a 比较好。

作者: naoyixue 时间: 2011-4-6 15:47
还是有点搞，谁能帮忙在说下，谢谢

作者: FactOrFiction 时间: 2011-4-8 22:56
A里面把who was和both去掉, 我认为就对了.

Both不解释了. who was是啰嗦的表达方式, OG中有很多例句, 之前有很多that are, that were这种表达方式, 都被OG说wordy. who was也是一样.

B里面的问题我觉得不是wordy. (如果要说啰嗦的话, 那么就是多了两个逗号.)

首先who不应该有, 造成了yet前面不是一个完整的句子. 其次, the是特指, a是泛指, 含义是有差别的.

作者: 牛奶喝不喝 时间: 2011-4-13 14:57
个人认为，句子的主语是TM，produced应该紧跟在主语后面修饰，中间加入了who was ... composer的话，produce就会就近指代composer，但显然composer不是句子的主杆。

一点拙见，还望牛人指导

作者: FactOrFiction 时间: 2011-4-17 16:34
1. produced是谓语，谓语和主语之间不一定要紧跟，类似句子OG里面有很多。
2. 谓语不是修饰成分，而是句子的主干，所以对谓语没必要找紧跟的修饰对象。

作者: 无敌可爱多 时间: 2011-7-7 07:35

谢谢解答。但是both的问题我已经明白了，我还是不明白A,B中的wordy的问题。

-- by 会员 ywsunny (2011/3/25 22:43:17)

作为修饰语，形容词>同位语,分词短语>从句
这里形容词性的前置定语比后置同位语修饰成分少了个the。
优先级从短到长很明显

作者: yeyoye 时间: 2016-9-17 20:50
who在manhattan中说明是essential modifier，和that一样，所以修饰时应该不能用逗号隔开，这样就变成nonessential modifier了。。。不知道这样想是否能解释的通。。。

作者: Flameco绿光 时间: 2016-10-7 00:49

yeyoye 发表于 2016-9-17 20:50
who在manhattan中说明是essential modifier，和that一样，所以修饰时应该不能用逗号隔开，这样就变成noness ...

我记得我见过who在修饰的时候用逗号隔开的...

作者: Flameco绿光 时间: 2016-10-7 00:54
我感觉这个地方both rooted in the stride-piano tradition of Willie (The Lion) Smith and Duke Ellington

Duke Ellington应该是和Willie (The Lion) Smith平行的呀，不是讲的是他produce的这些作品的来源是从Willie (The Lion) Smith和Duke Ellington吗？为什么讲解解释的是和both rooted in…平行呢？

这个地方纠结好久了...

作者: 御寒 时间: 2016-12-13 20:27
同一道题做错两次了，我总觉得CDE三个选项中， pianist and composer TM 可以指两个人啊。。pianist是单独的一个人，TM是另一个人。。。

作者: tracy巨巨 时间: 2018-3-19 17:06

御寒发表于 2016-12-13 20:27
同一道题做错两次了，我总觉得CDE三个选项中， pianist and composer TM 可以指两个人啊。。pianist是单独 ...

对啊！！我也觉得有歧义

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