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标题: 请教这篇JJ argument 思路 [打印本页]

作者: andreasyang    时间: 2010-9-21 03:42
标题: 请教这篇JJ argument 思路
following appeared in a memorandum from the head of a human resources department at a major automobile manufacturing company to the company's managers:
“Studies have found that employees of not-for-profit organizations and charities are often more highly motivated than employees of for-profit corporations to perform well at work when their performance is not being monitored or evaluated. Interviews with employees of not-for-profit organizations suggest that the reason for their greater motivation is the belief that their work helps to improve society. Because they believe in the importance of their work, they have personal reasons to perform well, even when no financial reward is present. Thus, if our corporation began donating a significant portion of its profits to humanitarian causes, our employees’ motivation and productivity would increase substantially and our overall profits would increase as well.”
作者: 流浪的心    时间: 2010-9-23 00:06
我也在想 有没有人给点思路啊
作者: jacjoaquin    时间: 2010-9-23 21:30
1、无因果联系:Highly motivated workers do not necessarily perform well at work. Although less motivated , employees of for-profit corporations might be more efficient than those of not-for-profit organizition, since employees of for-profit corporations might have better skills and management of time.
2、Not only not-for-profit work but also for-profit work help to improve society. In some way, for-profit work can be regarded more important than not-for-profit work, since it creates value.
3、The author falsely depends on gratuitous assumptions that donation a great profits to humanitarian will lead to substantial increase of motivation and prductivity, and of profits. In fact, this is not the case. It's more likely that profits of corporation and motivation and productivity of employees will decrease, since , after a great portion of profits is donated, salaries of emplyees decreases.

新手上路,多多指导
作者: MelissaW    时间: 2010-11-24 20:25
1, Interviews with employees of not-for-profit organizations suggest 不能代表所有的organization

2,无因果联系if our corporation began donating a significant portion of its profits to humanitarian causes,不一定能保证our employees’ motivation and productivity would increase ,因为员工可能更看重其他方面,比如公司的福利,是否能够提高个人价值等等。

3,错误类比:charity和automobile是两个不同的产业,automobile可以creat value,可以创建品牌增加综合国力。

我也是新手,最怕AA找不到错误,请大家指教!!




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