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作者: zcool    时间: 2010-5-9 14:51
标题: 请各位评价一下,第一次写issue。。。谢谢
第一次写AI,水平实在有限,花了1个多小时,而且还参考了其他一些资料,不知道能达到什么水平,请走过路过的进来看看。。这样实战中能上3.5吗?这样的字数够不够?
(红色标的是后来修改的)。

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Nations should cooperate to develop regulations that limit children’s access to adult material on the Internet.**The Internet is a worldwide computer network.



Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading



Whether nations should cooperate to develop regulations to limit children's access to adult material on the Internet is a controversial issue, which has drawn considerable attention of public nowadays. As far as I concern, I agree with the author's conclusion that nations should attempt to build these regulations by the regularly national cooperation. My positions are based on a deep and fundamental analysis discussed as follows.

On the one hand, with the rapid development of technology such as Internet, we can have access to abundent(abundant) information available on it. Consequently, the ease to reach these material, however, makes children have more chances to review some adult items, such as some sexual movies, pictures and books, which will be seriously harmful to the psychology of the children and distort the view of them about the society. Hence, it is fully necessary for the government to set up some regulations to decrease the possibility of children to be involved in such materials.

On the other hand, the Internet is based on the worldwide computer system, which is beyond the boundaries of separated nations. As a result, it is not feasible for one nation itself to control the effect of adult material on children. For example, maybe someone in country A has release some sexual videos on the Internet, making these materials available to the children in country B. In this case, consequently, it is hard for the government B to use its own regulations to punish the crime in government A if in A there are no related policies to manage adult material on the Internet. Under this circumstance, it is obvious that international regulations are highly necessary for the effective management of Internet resources.

Admittedly, recognizing that the current Internet is a very complicated system and that more political and economic aspects are contained in it, I agree that national cooperation faces a lot of obstacles, especially between the two countries having hostile relationship. Nevertheless, in spite of different difficulties, I will appeal that we should never give up the effort to realize the worldwide cooperation to develop regulations thatlimit the availbility(availability) of adult material on the internet so that children can grow in a clear(fresh) and healthy circunment(environment).

In sum, the Internet issue as well as the solution to it is international in scope.Therefore, a cooperation based on nations is dispensable to develop regulations that limit children's access to adult sexual material on the internet. Although we are facing many difficulties and obstacles to achieve this goal, we should never give up our effort to do so for the bright future of next generations.

作者: cutewen    时间: 2010-5-9 18:01
我是前来拜读的..(还没动手写过AA AI...) 惭愧..

请问一下 你写AA 和 AI都总结好自己的模板了吗?
作者: zcool    时间: 2010-5-9 18:29
我还有一个多月考,最近才刚开始写AA,AI,有一点体会,现在去背模板意义不大,因为每个人的写作习惯不一样,到了实战中,很难完全把模板记下来,而且每个题目实际上不能完成套用一个模板的,我打算现在多联系几篇,看看自己比较适合什么套路,最后1,2周再背自己的模板。。。现在背模板,真不如多写几篇来的印象深。。
作者: zcool    时间: 2010-5-10 01:29
自己ding一下,这里果然很冷清的。




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