NN帮忙指正，模板还有其他地方哪里需要改进，时间太赶了，没时间检查， 感觉AI就是在瞎扯。还有几个问题：作文一段多少行比较合适？太多了是不是最好分段？
AA:
28. The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.
“Commuter use of the new subway train is exceeding the transit company’s projections. However, commuter use of the shuttle buses that transport people to the subway stations is below the projected volume. If the transit company expects commuters to ride the shuttle buses to the subway rather than drive there, it must either reduce the shuttle bus fares or increase the price of parking at the subway stations.”
The argument try to establish that transit company must either reduce the shuttle bus fares or increase the price of parking at the subway stations. To fortify this claim, the author assumes that Commuters either rides ride the shuttle buses to the subway or drive to the subway by themselves. The author further bolsters this claim by survey commuter use of the shuttle buses that transport people to the subway stations is below the projected volume. . Additionally , The author strengthen this claim by assumption that either reduce the shuttle bus fares or increase the price of parking at the subway stations would be effect . At first glance, this argument appears to be plausible, but a close scrutiny examination would reveal that it omits some significant factors that should be addressed to substantiate the argument. The analysis does not lend strong support to what the argument want to maintains, and lack of credibility in reasoning caused the conclusion to be suspected. A careful examination would reveal how groundless this argument is
The author assumes that commuters to ride the shuttle buses to the subway and drive there are mutual exclusive alternatives. Commuters either rides ride the shuttle buses to the subway or drive to the subway by themselves. However, no evidence is stated in the argument to support this assumption. And it is not necessary the case. It is more likely that commuter go to stations by bicycle. So , it is impossible to draw the conclusion without ruling out such possibility.
The author commit a gratuitous assumption that reduce the shuttle bus fares or increase the price of parking at the subway stations is an either-or choice and there is no common grounds between them. The author provides no evidence to support this either-or choice. Commence sense tells us that adjust both shuttle bus fares and the price of parking at the subway station would get better result .
The survey sites by the author are too vaguer to be information. The claim does not indication who conduct this survey, or when , where and how this survey was conducted. Lacking information about when and where this conduct , it is impossible to access the validity of this survey. For example, if this survey is conducted in two years ago , when gas price is lower than gas price of today. The result of the survey would be highly suspected .
Because this argument provide no evidence to rule out such possibility , the result of survey would can not be taken as evidence to support the argument
The author provides inadequate justification to support the argument that company must either reduce the shuttle bus fares or increase the price of parking at the subway stations. The author assumes that commuters to ride the shuttle buses to the subway and drive there are mutual exclusive alternatives. The author commit a gratuitous assumption that reduce the shuttle bus fares or increase the price of parking at the subway stations is an either-or choice . The survey sites by the author is too vaguer to be information. To better brace the argument , the author need more information gathering and analysis to smooth out all the wrinkles in the line of reasoning. Besides, to better bolsters the argument, the author should rule out all the possibility mentioned above that would weaken the argument.
Only with more evidence could the argument be more that just a emotional one .
AI:
“Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace.”
The speaker claims that Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace. However, as far as I am concerned , this issue arouse much controversy among people with different perspectives and backgrounds, and each alternatives is viable in certain circumstance. In determining whether Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace, we should weight the effectiveness of working under the circumstances of combing private lives with work against the effectiveness of working under the circumstances of keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace. To sum up , I partly agree that Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities from the workplace. In the following , I will describe several my major points to support my opinion.
On the one hand, I believe that Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities from the workplace. After all , Workplace is a place for working. The reason I am presenting here is that when you work , you need to focus on your attention on your job . Other things such as private lives and personal activities would attract your attention ,make you can not concentrate your work , and may result in bad work result. To illustrate this , let us look an example described as below. One clerk walk out the office to eat her breakfast during working time , and there is an very important potential customer call in during the interval . No one pick up the phone makes the company lost a big business. Hence , it is pretty obvious that Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace.
More over , If Employees do not keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace, they can not do a good job . One reason is that these private things would take their attraction. The example is not far to seek . One famous doctor left one watch in the body of a patient during the surgery. Investigation shows that wife of the doctor is in danger of an car accidence. As a result , it is obvious Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace.
On the other hand , I will disagree keep their private lives and personal activities “as separate as possible “ from the workplace This argument overstates the importance of workplace ,and fails to consider other critical factor. For instance, some times work under personal activities would get a better result . For example , some big business contract was sign in one gulf game between bosses .
So Although in many case Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace, in some case Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities with the workplace.
Even though the issue about whether Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace has aroused many different points between people , considering the above argument , we may safely to conclude that in most of case Employees should keep their private lives and personal activities as separate as possible from the workplace .
刚刚自己看了看，拼写错误还很多和Copy,paste的功夫都还欠火候。可能要精简字数，留时间检查，不然可能考试的时候打不完或是拼写错误太多。大家尽情地拍。
是啊，感觉举证不力，时间特别赶，所以罗嗦的很，不过拈贴过来的格式有些出入，有些我是一段的，在这里显示成两段了．
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