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标题: 麻烦各位大牛帮忙看一下 AI39 感激不尽！！！ [打印本页]

作者: HANHAN12 时间: 2008-4-19 15:28
标题: 麻烦各位大牛帮忙看一下 AI39 感激不尽！！！

还有不到一个月就要考了，作文是最令我头疼的一项之一。

本来基础就不怎么好，再加上时间又很紧

麻烦大牛们帮我提些意见好么？？

感激不尽呀！！！！

With the development of the society, people spend more and more time on their work in order to achieve their professional success. Such phenomenon appears nearly all around the world, especially in advanced city with highly competition such as Hong Kong and Japan. So there is a saying that it is difficult for people to achieve professional success without sacrificing important aspects of a fulfilling personal life. However, as I see it, this is not the case.

To begin with, the professional success and personal life are not mutually exclusive. Although it is known to all that in big cities such as Hong Kong, residents rush to work early in the morning and the “out time work” is necessary for people who want to get promotion. However, it can not simply lead to the conclusion that all those people sacrifice their personal life. Actually, the pursuing of career success and the enjoying of personal life are not contradicted but play a part together. For example, if one people aim to get his professional success and continue working late into night without any rest, s/he must be fatigued next morning and can not work well. In another word, long hour working will result in low efficient, and personal life is an integral part of professional success.

Furthermore, despite there still be some difficulty in balancing both the professional success and the personal life, considering the potential factors such as technology, it will become much easier to maintain both of them. For instance, a dad can encourage his son’s first attempt to make a speech through telephone during his business trip; a young lady can share her happiness of promotion with her boyfriend through MSN during a meeting. In addition, many professionals think their job as their hobbies, so many of them are likely to work without compensation. For these people, professional and personal fulfillment are totally the same.

Last but not least, even in some cases people may cut off their personal time in order to chase the success of professional, it does not mean the most important aspect of personal life will be hurt. It is likely that s/he will decrease the time of watching TV series but maintain the time sharing with families and friends.

To sum up, the success of professional and the personal life exist side by side and play a part together. Some difficulties may lie in maintaining both of them; however, according to the effect of modern technology, it will not be the case in the future. Even it dose, the most important part of personal life will not be sacrificed.

[此贴子已经被作者于2008-4-19 15:29:13编辑过]

作者: HANHAN12 时间: 2008-4-20 12:50

可以麻烦帮我看一下么？？？？？？？

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是不是我写得太烂了都没人想看。。。。。

作者: HANHAN12 时间: 2008-4-21 08:36

还是没有人么......

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