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标题: 6分ai作文写法-3(面面俱到,考场碰见怪题不慌) [打印本页]

作者: lisiyin    时间: 2008-2-17 21:57
标题: 6分ai作文写法-3(面面俱到,考场碰见怪题不慌)

最后讲一种题目,黄金里的也是,就是题目的论述无懈可击,是真理一般,既没有提A比b好让你选或者让你驳,也没提出啥啥啥不应该,让你给揪住辫子.这种题目最好的办法就是分层次写.

 12,26就属于这种题目

 12,26就属于这种题目

 12,26就属于这种题目

 12,26就属于这种题目

12. “Education has become the main provider of individual opportunity in our society. Just as property and money once were the keys to success, education has now become the element that most ensures success in life.”

 

 

 

 

26. “Location has traditionally been one of the most important determinants of a business’s success. The importance of location is not likely to change, no matter how advanced the development of computer communications and others kinds of technology becomes.”

对12做个分析.

开头(尽量用点比较复杂的的句子结构,让人眼前亮一下)(如Done by sth, A does;  Doing sth, A is ...) (Prep doing sth, a becomes...)  As the society is becoming more and more complex,人们成功的require更多了,要求更高了.Education, the resource that used to be accessible only to those well-off or privileged,变成了主要的机会提供者. (后面分层,这句话提点):不仅career成功需要教育,life成功也更需要教育.(下面分层写的 桥 搞定)(这里对成功进行了分类)

中间: On one hand 事业成功,知识的重要性,信息花科技化,还是很容易的,举个爆发户的例子如dell或者中国的dell神舟啥的.或者引用个Bacon的知识就是力量,很多做项目的如4大都需要lifelong learning

ON the other hand,生活的成功需要知识教育.因为社会复杂,诱惑多,人们尽管物质丰富,但啥啥贫瘠,不断的教育给人的心灵purified一下,instill nutrients进我们的心,生活上避免snare,获得成功.

结尾.

最后谈一下句式的变化和重申文章的结构:

句式的变化:

原句 this argument would be more persuasive if more evidence can be added. 评价:基本的句式,比较一般.

改动 Buttressed with more evidence, the argument can be more cogent(persuasive),由于开头的过去分词的出现,这个高级的结构就会给你带来加分.试着改一下自己平淡的句子吧,呵呵,但不用每句都如此.段落里面最好的结构就是长短句结合,有长有短,不过这个要求比较高,在这里我点到为止~

同样By providing opportunities to civilians, education has become .....比 because education can provide opportunities to ,education has become出彩的多.

对东西的修饰  A,.........,is 如何如何,中间,,,,,就是对A的定语修饰,同位语。比如Enron, the former monster in resource and energy that collapsed along with its auditor A&A for frauds, demonstrated that .............这里我们可以看到,即使插入语我们也可以在其中放入从句,交代的更清楚,句子清晰,老外看了更喜欢,呵呵.其实都是简单的技巧,不用你扩大词汇,只是修改一下自己平淡的表达,说不定就能拿高点的分数.

文章的结构:还是应该尽量全面,注意逻辑关系.Admittedly(Indisputably)一段, however(be that as it may)否定一下,出正式的论断.既加字数又显得分析全面还是不错的,其实ai时间短本来就不可能太深入,还是考察大家是否对题目的各个点都能提一下.大家加油吧,就写这么多.

全部写完 一共三部分,请到下面的我为我mm第三次杀g 3月8号考,立的祝福贴帮顶下,我想为她收集祝福给她力量,她心里素质不是很好,希望这样让她觉得温暖和有信心~谢谢大家

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[此贴子已经被作者于2008-2-18 0:36:14编辑过]

作者: sjy00000    时间: 2008-2-19 14:31

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作者: lisiyin    时间: 2010-9-21 04:14
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作者: xylophones    时间: 2013-4-3 18:47
感谢非常,虽然时隔多年。。。。





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