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作者: 2009harvard    时间: 2008-1-1 15:44
标题: 求教AI writing,急!

比如B1所说的,公民的主要责任是遵守法律。

那如果展开的话,可以说公民的主要责任是保护环境,节约能源。。。等等吗?

这个算离题吗?

不太了解评分的标准。。。

请教,谢谢!


作者: rio    时间: 2008-1-1 17:02

如果完全不谈法律 肯定跑题


作者: 2009harvard    时间: 2008-1-1 18:52

谢谢rio.

那如果就第一段写法律不是主要的责任,还有其他责任,后转到其他话题呢。

这个算不算跑题呢?法律实在写不出东西。。。


作者: 2009harvard    时间: 2008-1-2 23:37

I am expecting a response...

Thanks!


作者: icecream1983    时间: 2008-1-3 12:34

    

斗胆把我写的一篇发上来供大家讨论,不知道这样写算不算跑题,我也不太明白文章的重点是应该focus在citizens’ primary responsibility上还是在obey the laws上。写的很烂,大家轻拍~~


I partly agree with the statement above
that the primary responsibility of citizen is to obey their nation's civil and
criminal laws, however, we should also notice that all the things are changing
as the time changes, the civil and criminal laws are not exception, so the
civil and criminal laws in the past may not suitable for the present situation,
then it is wrong and even ridiculous for citizens to continue to obey the
out-dated laws.


    

 


    

On one hand, it is important for citizens
to obey the nation's civil and criminal laws since it could maintain a nation's
stability and prosperity. Imagine that in a country almost all of the citizens
do not obey their nation's civil and criminal laws, then there must be many collision
and big disorder in the country, from the theft to abduct, from corruption to
criminal, many social problems would come to the country. No one could control
the awkward situation unless the citizens could obey the country's civil and
criminal laws. So the primary responsibility of the citizens is to obey their
nation's civil and criminal laws.


    

 


    

On the other hand, based on the reason I
talked in the first paragraph, the citizens could not always obey the laws if
some social situation has changed and the laws can not adapt to the new environment.
Rather, the citizens should have the courage to challenge the laws and try to
find a solution to abolish the old laws or amend the out-dated laws. For
example, it is legal for a man to have many wives only if he like or he can
afford the high expenditures, but it is illegal now to do this because it violate
the marriage laws. Another example, before civil war in America it is legal to
have black servant, without Lincoln and many other people's effort, it might
also be legal to have black servant. So the citizens should also have the
responsibilities to challenge the law and amend the law continually.


    

 


    

In conclusion, the primary responsibility
of citizen is to obey the nation's civil and criminal laws, but the
citizens   also have the obligation to
challenge and amend the laws so that the laws could serve the society better.



作者: 2009harvard    时间: 2008-1-3 17:34

Yes, here I see we have very DIFFERENT understanding of the issue topic.

What you focus on is whether we should obey the law or not, while, my focus is what is the primary responsibility to citizens....

So, in the end, which one does ETS favor? Any authority can tell?
    






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