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标题: 我已经没有退路！只能考toefl,大家帮帮我！！ [打印本页]

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-1 11:22
标题: 我已经没有退路！只能考toefl,大家帮帮我！！
以后要每天写日记和作文，大家监督我吧，而且帮我改改作文吧！！！thanks!

作者: reddragon 时间: 2003-9-1 12:06
好，快开工，我是周拔皮，呵呵

作者: plmnpl 时间: 2003-9-1 14:13
ok.. where is your today's 日记和作文?

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-1 19:20
帮我改改，好吗？谢谢！

topic 34: Business should hire emploees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree ? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

  Nowadays, some people think that business should hire emplyee for their their lives, but others consider that business should hire employees by contract. If I were faced with the issue, I would follow the latter. I will reason and provide my evidence to support my viewpoint.

  In the first place, to the employers, it has a lot of disadvantages if they hire employees for their entire lives. As we all know, change will be helpful for developing, just as our bodies, that everyday absorb some fresh water, air and healthy nutritions and get rid of some exhausted materials. It is very natural cycle and do good for our health. Business should recruit some new people and fire  some employees sometimes. Of course, it sounds like very cruel. HOwever, if business hire employees all their lives, it has no vacant position to hire other more apporpriate people to work. And with the challenge of the modern sociery, if business can not make progress, it maybe be broken. Eventually, everyone in the company including the one who is hired by all his or her entire life will lose job.

In the other place,to the employees, it will motivate them to learn more knowledge if they are not hired by their whole lives. Imagine that someone were hired by his or her entire life, he/she maybe think I am safe and would never lose job, how can try his/her best to study more knowledge to improve his/her ability. If the company where he/she work would be broken, do you think he/she have much opportunity to find other job? So , hired by the whole life will be harmful to employees.

In addition, facts can witness many examples. Most famous international companies do hire the employees by contact instead of  hiring the employees by all their lives. For instance, Microsoft, that is one of the most famous companyies in the world, recruit some people and hire some employees annually.

  Still, people who hold the same opinion as me can list other reasons to account for it, however, those three reasons that I have expored in tha above discussion can make me draw a conclusion that business should not hire employees for their entire lives.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-1 22:16
听写了三篇短文（ppview），读了5 遍，写了一篇作文，看了三篇article，美国文摘

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-2 18:39
没人帮我改改吗？5555555......

topic 2: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support you answer.

Some people think that parents are the best teachers, but others oppose it. If i were faced with the issue, I would probably follow the former. In the following discussion, I would like to provide and reason to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that parents gave us the best and most essential things, which will affect our entire lives. Parents gave us lives and nurtured us. Who teached us to walk? Who teached us the first word? And who told us how to treat other people? It is the parents. Do not you think these examples are very persuasive?

Experience is another head and chief reason that i have chosen to put there. It is not better illustration that demonstrate the view.Parents are older than us, and they have a lot of experience , that can not easliy learn from books. For example, I learned to fix leaky faucet from my father, and learned the knit from my mother.

In addition, parents gave us lives and nurtured us. They know our good merits and bad habits.They will help us get rid of our bad habits. Sometimes when we fail, they can help us analyze the reasons and get us some ideas. Those help maybe not be get from others, because they do not know us well. If you can see that, you can understand it more deeply.

Still, people who hold the same oponion with me can list other reasons to account for it. However, those those reasons that I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw a conclusion that parents are the best teachers.

作者: 困难是弹簧 时间: 2003-9-2 20:32
我作文太烂，我去请高人

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-2 22:26
谢谢！看到有人看我的臭作文，我已经很感动了！谢谢大家！
今天照常听写了三篇短文的听力，
请问弹簧：阅读如何复习？我已经把pp题给做了，不好！但是我大部分记得答案，我现在该怎么办？重做一次吗？

作者: 困难是弹簧 时间: 2003-9-2 22:30
阅读最好看看你常错的题型，然后就是背单词，要熟背那个机考词汇

呵呵，pp记得答案就做DETAL KEY

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-3 10:18

有些词使用的挺怪：facts can witness many examples？healthy nutritions? business broken? 挺chinglish的

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-3 20:28
thank you, eyesy, I think 'facts can witness many examples' is right, because witness can be used by verb.
about 'healthy nutritions', what is your suggestion? Maybe it is 'healthy food'?

and i should say 'business goes bankrupt' instead of 'business broken'

and whay do you think?

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-3 21:11
今天的作文：

topic 9: Some people perfer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you perfer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Some people think that living in a small town is a good idea, but others prefer to live in a big city. If I were faced with the issue,  I would probably follow the latter. In the following discussion, I would like to provide and reason evidence to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that a big city can provide more job opportunity than a small town. There are more companies or factories in a big city than a small town. And as we all know, a large population is the basic characteristic in a big city, in order to accommodate a lot of people, there are more stores and services , that create more job opportunity in a big city than a small town.

Convenience is another important reason that I have chosen to put here. It is no better illustration to demonstrate the view. People can take bus in theri neighborhoods and go shopping in the neighborhood or near their neighborhoods. When people want to see a movie or go to the museum, it is very convenient for them to take a bus or drive to the destinations. But if you live in a small town, it maybe take  a long time to reach those places.

In addtion, a big city usually provide perfect public service. There are libraries , swimming pools, supermarket, museums and zooes in the city , that  make lives more enjoyable.

Of course, living in a small town has some advantages.The most important advantage in a small town is that people can own more place. However, the benifits that we can get from living in a big cith carrys more weigh than the advantages provided by a small town.

Still, people who hold the same oponion as me can list other reasons to account for it. For me, those reasons that I have explored in the above  discussion can make me draw a conclusion living in a big city is better than living in a small town. So I choose to live in a big city.

听写PP1的最后三篇短文，哪个earth science class的几乎都写不出来！555555

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-4 19:49
看看我的作文吧？给点意见，好吗？

topic 4: It has been said.''Not everything that is learned is contained in books'' Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

Some people think that books are more important source for people to gain knowledge, but others oppose the view. If I were faced with the issue, I would probably follow the former. In the following discussion, I would provide and reason evidence to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that books are the most direct souce for people to gain knowledge. People can do not need to go out, they can read books to learn something. With the development of the Internet, people can just stay at home and search different documents that they want to read, not to mention people can lay at bed to read books. But for experience,people may not have those comfortable environment. For example , if  people want to see some relics in the museum , they must go out. If they choose to get those knowledge about those relics, they can stay at home to read books that introduce those relics.

One can see that books can tell people more knowledge than experience. For instance, people can not get knowedge about outer space through experience , because most people can not have the opportunity to go to the outer space, but they can get those knowledge by reading some books about ouster space. If you can see that, you can understand more deeply.

In addition, reading books to get knowledge  can help people save time and energy. For example, if I want to learn knowledge about Yellow Stone Park , if I choose to visit it, it will take me about 22 hours to get the destination. However, how many books can i read books about it?

Of course, experience also plays an important role in our daily lives. For example, people can not learn to swim only by reading books that introduce skills even though they can remember them. They must do some practical action in the swimmint pool. However, there are no enough evidence to suggest the experience is more important source than books.

To sum up, people can get knowledge by books and experience. but the books are more important for people to get knowledge according to the reasons that I have explored in the above discussion  If I can choose, I would like to read books before I do it.

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-4 21:02

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-3 20:28:00的发言：
thank you, eyesy, I think 'facts can witness many examples' is right, because witness can be used by verb.
about 'healthy nutritions', what is your suggestion? Maybe it is 'healthy food'?

and i should say 'business goes bankrupt' instead of 'business broken'

and whay do you think?

healthy nutritions…… healthy food …… nutrition 就可以了吧？
business goes bankrupt 太绝对；可以用poor performance, productivity or competitiveness
另外，你可真是多产啊！···

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-4 21:09

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-3 21:11:00的发言：
今天的作文：

topic 9: Some people perfer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you perfer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Some people think that living in a small town is a good idea, but others prefer to live in a big city. If I were faced with the issue,  I would probably follow the latter. In the following discussion, I would like to provide and reason evidence to support my viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that a big city can provide more job opportunity than a small town. There are more companies or factories in a big city than a small town. And as we all know, a large population is the basic characteristic in a big city, in order to accommodate a lot of people, there are more stores and services , that create more job opportunity in a big city than a small town.

Convenience is another important reason that I have chosen to put here. It is no better illustration to demonstrate the view. People can take bus in theri neighborhoods and go shopping in the neighborhood or near their neighborhoods. When people want to see a movie or go to the museum, it is very convenient for them to take a bus or drive to the destinations. But if you live in a small town, it maybe take  a long time to reach those places.

In addtion, a big city usually provide perfect public service. There are libraries , swimming pools, supermarket, museums and zooes in the city , that  make lives more enjoyable.

Of course, living in a small town has some advantages.The most important advantage in a small town is that people can own more place. However, the benifits that we can get from living in a big cith carrys more weigh than the advantages provided by a small town.

Still, people who hold the same oponion as me can list other reasons to account for it. For me, those reasons that I have explored in the above  discussion can make me draw a conclusion living in a big city is better than living in a small town. So I choose to live in a big city.

听写PP1的最后三篇短文，哪个earth science class的几乎都写不出来！555555

注意对称结构
And as we all know, a large population is the basic characteristic (in -->of) a big city, in order to accommodate a lot of people, there are more stores and services , (that create--->creating) more job (opportunity-->opportunities) in a big city than a small town.
It is no better illustration to demonstrate the view （than……）. People can take bus in theri neighborhoods and go shopping in the neighborhood or near their neighborhoods. When people want to see a movie or go to the museum, it is very convenient for them to take a bus or drive to the destinations. But if you live in a small town, it maybe take a long time to reach those places.
先改这些

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-4 22:07
谢谢eyesy!
一天写一篇文章多吗？因为我的基础不好，所以我想多多练习会有进步的，而且我的时间可能比较少，我想在10月份考，而且压力很大，真的，在一种走投无路的情况下，还真不知道会怎么样呢？！
真的谢谢你，希望你能再继续帮我看看作文，好吗？

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-5 09:34
你写的不错啊！！为什么走投无路？
当然可以继续看作文，你写的比我当时的还好呢！！

作者: Taurus 时间: 2003-9-5 09:44
我试试吧，希望能有所帮助。修改意见在括号里。

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-1 19:20:00的发言：
帮我改改，好吗？谢谢！

topic 34: Business should hire emploees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree ? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, some people think that business should hire emplyee for their their lives, but others consider that business should hire employees by contract. If I were faced with the issue, I would follow the latter. I will reason and provide my evidence to support my viewpoint.
（这两句稍嫌啰嗦。建议改为：Personally, I prefer the latter. And my reasons are as follows.
记住，简洁流畅的文章人人都爱看。托福作文也不是写得越长，词藻越华丽，结构越复杂，分数就越高。建议你看一下TOEFL作文的评分标准。能否拿高分，关键是看你能否自然清晰地表达出你的观点。从我们备考的角度来看，策略就是尽量用简单的句式，用常用的词汇，当然了，在不大量重复使用同一词汇的前提下。在上面这两句，你倒是清楚地表达出自己的观点了，但显得冗长。）

In the first place, to the employers, it has a lot of disadvantages if they hire employees for their entire lives. As we all know, change will be helpful for developing, just as our bodies, that everyday absorb some fresh water, air and healthy nutritions and get rid of some exhausted materials.
（建议改为：As we all know, changes are helpful for developing. Take our bodies for example, they need to take in nutritions and get rid of wastes everyday. 这句之所以这样修改，是因为原句过长，结构复杂。记住，应该写成两句的，千万不要硬捏成一句。否则一来会使句子难懂，产生歧义；二来也是给自己犯语法错误创造机会。写这类作文时，一定不要吝啬写简单句。记住，最重要的是保持文风的流畅。）

It is very natural cycle （语法错误，缺少 a）and do （应该是does）good for our health. Business should recruit some new people and fire  some employees sometimes （sometimes不要放在句尾）. Of course, it sounds like very cruel （残忍这种词一般不加修饰词）. （这句最好改为：Of course, it bounds to hurt someone this way. 原因是原句感觉语气稍重）

HOwever, if business hire employees all their lives, it has no vacant position to hire other more apporpriate people to work （建议改为people who suit better for the job.）. And with the challenge of the modern sociery, if business can not make progress, it maybe be broken. （这句反而觉得语气不够重了，为了强调发展的意义，可以改为 businesses with no progress have no prospects at all.）
Eventually, everyone in the company including the one who is hired by all （最好用throughout）his or her entire life will lose job. （the one 之后的那部分不太顺畅，建议改为：including those who are hired throughout their lives will lose their jobs. 用复数一方面可以省掉his/her只苦，又可以还原lose someone's job这个词组。否则lose job 可以说是一个语病）

  In the other place（这个词组好怪，不常用，建议使用On one hand...on the other hand）,to the employees, it will （建议用can，因为这里强调的是功能方面的意味。我发觉你习惯使用should, will。尝试多使用其他的，因为这两者有时会显得语气不够劲儿。哈哈）motivate them to learn more knowledge if they are not hired by their whole lives （建议使用for life，终身，到这里，你已经多次使用了by ... lives，entire, all, whole 这几个词都用了。我注意到了你在努力争取词汇上的变化，这很好。不过换一个结构效果就更好了。）.

Imagine that someone were hired by his or her entire life, he/she maybe (might 既然前面用了虚拟，就要虚下去！) think I am safe and would never lose job （这是一个病句，I 改为he/she）how can try his/her best to study more knowledge to improve his/her ability. （这里的he/she实在太蹩脚了，就只用he就得了）If the company where he/she work would be broken, do you think he/she have （has） much opportunity to find other （another）job? So , hired by the whole life will be （is actually） harmful to employees.

  In addition, facts can witness many examples. Most famous international companies do hire the employees by contact instead of  hiring the employees by all their lives. For instance, Microsoft, that is （可以省略）one of the most famous companyies in the world, recruit some people and hire some employees （可以改为others）annually.

Still, people who hold the same opinion as me can list other reasons to account for it, however, those three reasons that I have expored in tha above discussion can make me draw a conclusion that business should not hire employees for their entire lives. （这段的表述有点别扭，建议改为：Still, there can be many other reasons other than those mentioned above. All in all, it is more efficient for the firms to hire people by contract rather than for life.）

以上仅仅是一点小建议，仅供参考。Good luck with everything!

[此贴子已经被作者于2003-9-5 9:53:29编辑过]

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-5 12:40
谢谢taurus！你真好！
真的，在这里与大家交流的感觉真好！发现比与自己的家人还能说出心里话，特别是在这种情况下，总不会得到谴责：为什么要放弃在中国还算是decent的工作？！为什么在中国不好好学英语？如果这个世界有后悔药的话，每个人还不都喝了好几壶了？所以能得到大家的支持和帮助，我真的很感动！
我想关键是要向前看，和克服目前的困难！

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-5 18:26

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-5 12:40:00的发言：
真的，在这里与大家交流的感觉真好！发现比与自己的家人还能说出心里话，特别是在这种情况下，总不会得到谴责：为什么要放弃在中国还算是decent的工作？！为什么在中国不好好学英语？如果这个世界有后悔药的话，每个人还不都喝了好几壶了？所以能得到大家的支持和帮助，我真的很感动！
我想关键是要向前看，和克服目前的困难！

大家都是同道中人，因为大家都不满足于现状，因为都怕被琐碎的工作所吞嗜，因为自己的能力还不足以改变根深蒂固的制度，因为……
唯一不同的是，我目前的职业还是“坐家”……

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-5 18:29
18楼的Taurus，头像真是有个性啊！！而且分析够透彻，猫妹妹我自叹不如…………

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-5 20:13
topic 36: Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed poeple's lives. automobiles, bicycles, airplane, Use specific reasona and examples to support your answer.

At first, it seems very difficult for me to answer the statement since each one has changed people's lives very much. However, after serious consideration,  I think airplanes are the transportation that has changed people's lives most. In the following discussion, I will list reasons for the view.

The most important reason for my propensify for airplane is that it is very convenient. People can go to other distant places in a few hous. It  shortens the distance among countries. Nowadays, people can have a meeting in London afternoon, and have dinner with their family in Paris, that is unbelievable for people few centuries ago, because they traveled by sail and they must traveled several days.

Safety is another head reason that i have chosen to put there. According to some statistic, airplane is the safest transportation than any other vehicles like railroad. It is reported that the accident  ratio of airplanes is lower than that of trains and ships.

In addtion, it is very enjoyable to take a airplane. When you take a trip by an airplane,  you might cross different rivers,mountains even different continents and time zones. When you get off the airplane, you are in a place where people  say different language.

I can not deny that other transportations have changed our lives a lot, however, based on the reasons that I have explored in the above discussion, I can say airplanes have changed more than other vehicles.

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-5 20:32

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-5 20:13:00的发言：

At first, it seems very difficult for me to answer the statement since each one has changed people's lives very much. However, after serious consideration, I think airplanes are the transportation that has changed people's lives most. In the following discussion, I will list reasons for the view.

是不是用了废话模版？ I think airplanes change people most.

The most important reason for my propensity for airplane is that it is very convenient. People can go to other 删除 distant places in a few hous. It  shortens the distance among countries. Nowadays, people can have a meeting in London afternoon, and have dinner with their family in Paris, that is unbelievable for people few centuries ago, because they traveled by sail and they must travel several days. 语法要搞清楚

Safety is another head reason that i have chosen to put there. According to some statistic, airplane is  safer than any other vehicles such as railroad. It is reported that the accident  ratio of airplanes is lower than that of trains and ships.

In addtion, it is very enjoyable to take a airplane. When you take a trip by an airplane,  you might cross different rivers,mountains even different continents and time zones. When you get off the airplane, you are in a place where people  say different language.(这些ship和train都可以吧？)

I can not deny that other transportations have changed our lives a lot, however, based on the reasons that I have explored in the above discussion, I can say airplanes have changed more than other vehicles.

作者: Taurus 时间: 2003-9-5 22:14

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-5 12:40:00的发言：
谢谢taurus！你真好！
真的，在这里与大家交流的感觉真好！发现比与自己的家人还能说出心里话，特别是在这种情况下，总不会得到谴责：为什么要放弃在中国还算是decent的工作？！为什么在中国不好好学英语？如果这个世界有后悔药的话，每个人还不都喝了好几壶了？所以能得到大家的支持和帮助，我真的很感动！
我想关键是要向前看，和克服目前的困难！

不要客气！还有两天就开学了，我也是趁自己还有空，班门弄斧一把。

走自己的路，让别人去说吧。等你到了这边的时候，你就会知道自己的决定是对的。无论如何，出来见识一下这个世界，蛮有趣的！

衷心祝福你考试顺利！

作者: Taurus 时间: 2003-9-5 22:19

以下是引用eyesy在2003-9-5 18:29:00的发言：
18楼的Taurus，头像真是有个性啊！！而且分析够透彻，猫妹妹我自叹不如…………

哈哈，谢谢eyesy mm，这是一只很稀有的摺耳猫（发现它什么地方不对劲儿了吧？对，它的耳朵是答拉着的！）这宝贝儿正努力地大声叫唤着，照相者的角度选得真好，看上去就象是它在捧腹大笑，够开心！哈哈。。。

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-7 12:39
谢谢eyesy and taurus,能与大家一起共勉，感觉前进的道路并不孤独！

作者: eyesy 时间: 2003-9-7 22:03
其实我很懒的，10月要考，现在还没状态

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-8 10:15
eyesy,能分享一下你是怎样复习的吗？

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-8 19:14
Topic 6: if you could change one important thing in your hometown, what would you change? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The answer to the statement depends on different situation in the hometown where you live. If I were faced with the issue, I would probably do one important thing in my hometown: build up a large shopping center. I would list my reasons to explain the view.

The most important reason why I decide to build up a large shopping center in my hometown is that people in my hometown really need it. There is not any shopping centers in my town even though there are more than 20,000 people in my neighborhood. Without shopping centers, it is not convenient for people to buy things like foodstuff that people really need in their daily lives. People must go to other communities far from my hometown to buy vegetables, fruits and so on. It is so miserable! If you could see that, you can understant deeply. So I could change something in my hometown, the first one that I exactly change is to build up a large shopping center.

Revenue is another important reason that I have chosen to put there. If a large shopping center could be built, goverrment could take more tax from the large shopping center. As we all know, tax is the main source of revenue. With the enlargement of revenue, goverment would spend more money in building or improving our pubilc sevice.

In addtion,a large shopping center could improve people lives.

eople could find jobs in the large shopping center. And the rate of unemployment would drop,what's more , the income could increase. People could spend more money for their food ,clothes and education. So people would have a more happy lives.

Of course, there are other important things should be changed. However, the most important thing that should be solved in my hometown at once is to have a large shopping center. Anyway, different people have different choices according to their hometown real situations.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-8 19:20
to eyesy, 你在写作文是用模板吗？你是怎么做的，在作文这方面？很想找到一个好办法来提高我的作文啊！有时候，我列出了三条理由，但在写的过程中，却只能写出一句话，（也就是我想出的理由）！我该怎样提高呢？！

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-9 20:17
topic 1: People attend college or university for many different reasons(for example, new experiences, career perparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, more and more people attend college or university. There are many reasons to explain this phenomenon. As far as I am concerned, there are three important reasons as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that people want to improve their experience, especially the teenagers. For most teenagers, attending college or university is the first time for them to live in other place, that is different from their hometowns. They must learn to do housework, deal with the relation with roomates , and take care of themselves, that can be done wholly or partially by their parents when they still stay with their parents. With those daily work, they can learn a lot of basic skills, that will be helpful for their lives.

Career preparation is another important reason I have chosen to put there. In the modern society, it is not so easy to find a job, not to mention a decent job. People must learn more skills in order to keep their pace with this challenging society. More and more people attend college or university with part time or full time.If you could see that, you can understand deeply.

In addition, people especially teenagers can meet more people and learn more knowledge for the academic study. People have the opportunity to meet people who come from different countries or cultures. There are many teachers, professors with abundant teaching experience who teach stdent a lot of knowledge. With their help, students can learn a lot of basic and professional knowledge which is helpful for their future.

Also, people can list other reasons to explain why people attend college or university. However, those three reasons that I have explored in the above discussion, I think, are the most important reasons. Anyway, people have different reasons according to their experience.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-10 11:42
XMDJ们，给我提点意见，好吗？

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-10 20:27
topic 7: How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, movies or television become more and more popular. It has change our daily lives very much. Some people think that it brings a more happy life to people, but others consider that it creates a lot of problems. Obviously, it has a plenty of advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages carry more weigh than the disadvantages.

The most important change is our lives. Take my family for example, everyday when we have spare time, we will watch TV especally news , opera, comedy and so on to get lastest news and knowledge. We will exchange our views about those programs together or with our classmates or colleagues. Nowadays, some programs have become important topics when we chat with others.It is obvious that TV or movies has broadens the scope of additional topics for communication among friends and family.

Recreation is another head change that I have chosen to put there. In the challenging society, the tasks of people's shoulder are more and more heavy. Most people need relax.
Maybe the best way to relax is watch TV. What I need to do is to sit at the cozy sofa , turn on the TV and change my favorite programs especailly the comedy, that make me laugh, and as people always say 'laugh is the best medicine', after laugh, my mind will become fresh.

Of course, I do not deny that there are many disadvantages when people addict into TV or movies, because they will waste a lot of time on it and become more passive. However, everything has advantages and disadantages. All the factor I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw the conclusion that most changes based on TV or movies are good.

作者: sfish 时间: 2003-9-11 00:12

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-10 20:27:00的发言：
topic 7: How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, movies or television become more and more popular. It has change our daily lives very much. Some people think that it brings a lot of fun, but others argue that it creates a lot of problems. Obviously, it has a plenty of advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages carry more weigh than the disadvantages.

The most important change is our lives. Take my family for example, everyday when we have spare time, we will watch TV especally news , opera, comedy and so on to get lastest news and knowledge. We will exchange our views about those programs together or with our classmates or colleagues. Nowadays, some programs have become important topics when we chat with others.It is obvious that TV or movies has broadens the scope of additional topics for communication among friends and family.

Recreation is another head change that I have chosen to put there. In the challenging society, the tasks of people's shoulder are more and more heavy. Most people need relax.
Maybe the best way to relax is watch TV. What I need to do is to sit at the cozy sofa , turn on the TV and change my favorite programs especailly the comedy, that make me laugh, and as people always say 'laugh is the best medicine', after laugh, my mind will become fresh.

Of course, I do not deny that there are many disadvantages when people addict into TV or movies, because they will waste a lot of time on it and become more passive. However, everything has advantages and disadantages. All the factor I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw the conclusion that most changes based on TV or movies are good.

Nowadays, movies or television become more and more popular. It has changed our life dramatically. Some people think that it has a lot of fun, but others argue that it causes a lot of problems. Obviously, it has a plenty of advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages carry more weigh than the disadvantages.

The most important change is our lives. Take my family for example, everyday when we have spare time, we watch TV after the dinner especally news , opera, comedy and so on to get lastest news and knowledge. We will exchange our views about those programs together or with our classmates or colleagues. Nowadays, some programs have become important topics when we chat with others.It is obvious that TV or movies has broadens the scope of additional topics for communication among friends and family.

Recreation is another head change that I have chosen to put there. In the challenging society, the tasks of people's shoulder are more and more heavy. Most people need relax.
Maybe the best way to relax is watch TV. What I need to do is to sit at the cozy sofa , turn on the TV and change my favorite programs especailly the comedy, that make me laugh, and as people always say 'laugh is the best medicine', after laugh, my mind will become fresh.

Of course, I do not deny that there are many disadvantages when people addict into TV or movies, because they will waste a lot of time on it and become more passive. However, everything has advantages and disadantages. All the factor I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw the conclusion that most changes based on TV or movies are good.

I tried to help you correct the first paragraph, although my composition is not good. Be honest, there is a lot of mistakes and weird expression in you article. You may need read some English articles to familiar with the real English. But anyway, it is good start.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-11 08:20
How about other parapgrapghs? Could you help me correct it? I know my English is not good not only the oral English but also writing. But i think 'Practice makes perfect' . Could you help me? Anyway,your suggestion will help me a lot.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-11 18:45
topic 19: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more moeny on improving public transportation(buses,trains,subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

Some people thinkthat governments should more money on improving roads and highways, but others consider that governments should spend more money on improving public transportation. If I were faced with the issue in the city where I live, I would probably follow the latter. There are no less than three reasons as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that the public transportation in our city need to be improved. Pubilc transportation is most people first choice when they want to reach other places because most people do not own cars. However, there are no enough pubilc transportation like buses, trains and subway, so it is not so easy to take pubilc transportation or it takes a long time to wait for buses, trains or subways. It is like nightmare to take them in the rush hour. People waste a lot of time on that. If governments could spend more money improving pubilc transportation, they would help most people save a lot of time.

Secondly, improving public transportation can help decrease pollution. Recent research suggests that pollution caused by cars is more than by industries and factories. If pubilc transportation is so advanced that people can take it very conveniently , people will take it more frequently and drive their cars more less, that can avoid more pollution.

Finally, public transportation can increase employment. With the improvement of public transportation, there are more job vacancy especially services that people can apply for. So it can drop unemployment rate and increase income, that will bring a more happy for people.

I do not deny that governments should spend money improving roads and highways, to some extent, roads and highways are basic public establishments for public transportation. However, the most urgent thing that governments should do is to improve pubilc tranportation that is very scarce in my city.

To sum up, from those reasons above, it is obvious that governments should spend more money to improve public transportation.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-12 19:01
topic 5: A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your comany. Do you suppose or oppose the factory? Explain your positions.

If a company had announced that it wished to build a large factory near my community, some people would approve this idea and others would oppose it because a large factory will bring a lot of advantages and cause plenty of probrems. As far as I am concerned, I would support this idea, and I will list my reasons as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that a large factory will bring a lot of job vacancy  if it could be built in my community because it would hire many people. So there are many people can be hired by the large factory and the unemployment will be drop greatly. With the increase of income , people can spend more and more in food, clothes and entertainment, that will bring a more happy life.

Revenue is another head reason that I have chosen to put there. As we all know, tax is the  main source for revenue and revenue is the economical basis to public service. When a large factory were built, governments could get more revenue, and so government had more money to improve our public sevice, that most people would benefit from.

In addition, a large factory would make our lives more convenient. A large factory must hire employees, meanwhile, there would be  more people in my community. In order to accommodate more people, more stores and homes would be needed. This would boost  real estate development in my community and those stores would make our daily lives more convenient.

Of course, I do not deny that there are some problems caused by the large factory like pollution and traffic. However, the advantages that we can get from the large factory carry more weigh than those disadvantages.

Still, there are other reasons to account for my view, however, from what I have discussed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that it is beneficial to build a large factory in my community.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-14 19:43
topic 15: Neighbors are the people who live near us.In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

Wherever we are living, we have neighbors. What are the qualities of a good neighbor? The answer to the question depends on personal experience, life style and emotional concern. As far as I am concerned, there are three important qualities as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that neighbors should have good life habits. For example, people should not open their stereo too loud to affect their neighbors. On the other hand, neighbors should take care of public service and keep the community clean. Those life habits seems very subtle, but if neighbors do not have them, commninity will become messy, that will affect our health and mood.

Secondly, neighbors should be glad to help others, especially those people who live near theirs. As we all know, everyone could encounter some unforeseen emergencies, and the fastest help he can get is probably from his neighbors because they can provide immediate help. In the same way, a neighbor who likes to help others can get help in turn.

Finally, neighbors should respect others' culture. Nowadays, it is very natural for people to live other countries different from their hometowns, so there maybe different cultures in the same community. As a neighbor, it is a certain thing to respect his neighbors's culture and religion, that maybe the prerequisite for a pleasant living environment.

Still, there maybe other qualities than those mentioned above, however, those qualities in the above discussion is the most important qualities for neighbors. Anyway, different people have different views according to their fondness and personality.

作者: Taurus 时间: 2003-9-14 22:27

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-14 19:43:00的发言：
topic 15: Neighbors are the people who live near us.In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

Wherever we are living, we have neighbors. What are the qualities of a good neighbor? The answer to the question （直接用It就好，不过这样也不错。）depends on （加one's）personal experience, life style and emotional concern. As far as I am concerned, there are three important qualities as follows.

第一段很不错的！

No issue is more important than the one that neighbors should have good life habits. For example, people should not open （？？？记住，我们所谓的“开音响”，不要直译到英文中去！这里改成keep.）their stereo too loud to affect their neighbors. （这句有问题，前面是should not，后面却有too...to...结构，有双重否定的嫌疑。我倒是能明白你的意思，但ets就不一定能认可。其实很简单，建议改为people should not keep their stereo very loud, especially at late night. 这里可以不必明说，大家都明白噪音是会吵到邻居的。）

On the other hand, neighbors should take care of public service （改为participate in public services。）and keep the community clean. Those life habits seems very subtle, but if neighbors do not have them, commninity will become messy, that will affect our health and mood. （稍嫌罗嗦，建议改为：This kind of habits seem subtle, but they are actually crucial to the healthiness of a neighborhood.）

Secondly, neighbors should be glad to help others, especially those people who live near theirs（多余，删除吧）. As we all know, everyone could encounter some unforeseen （删除，这个意思已经包含在后面的“emergencies“里了。）emergencies, and the fastest （改为first-time）help he can get is probably （改为most likely，probably的语气太重。）from his neighbors because they can provide immediate help（删除，和前面意思重复）. In the same way, a neighbor who likes to help others can get help in turn.（删除）（加：You never know what could happen to you in the future. Feel glad to help others, and you can get helped when it comes to you.）

这段的缺点就是太多意思重复之处。不是说我们写文章时不能重复，但重复是要在原有基础上有所升华，哪怕只有一点点。尽量不要在同一句中重复。

Finally, neighbors should respect others‘ culture. Nowadays, it is very natural for people to live （缺in）other countries different from their hometowns（直接说foreign countries就好）, so there maybe different cultures in the same community. （这句问题多。第一，没有be动词。maybe可不是动词哟。第二，建议全句改为：there can be people of different backgrounds in the same community。）As a neighbor, it is a certain thing to respect his neighbors's culture and religion, that maybe the prerequisite for a pleasant living environment.（改为：A good neighborhood is built on people's mutural respects, for each other's culture and religion.）

Still, there maybe other qualities than those mentioned above, however, those qualities in the above discussion is the most important qualities for neighbors. Anyway, different people have different views according to their fondness and personality.

建议改为：Still, there can be many other qualities. But those mentioned above are the essential ones from my point of view. To qualify for a good neighbor, people should cherish love, careness and respect, and behave with them.

总体来说还是不错的！加油！加油！！！

[此贴子已经被作者于2003-9-16 11:47:29编辑过]

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-17 09:43
Taurus: thank you very much, u r very nice!真的不知道要怎样谢谢你！自己的作文怎样看都不知道要怎样改才好，或者是有时候想不出来用什么句子来代替会更好！谢谢你！

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-17 09:44
同时谢谢你的鼓励！让我看到了希望！

作者: Taurus 时间: 2003-9-17 10:11

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-17 9:43:00的发言：
Taurus: thank you very much, u r very nice!真的不知道要怎样谢谢你！自己的作文怎样看都不知道要怎样改才好，或者是有时候想不出来用什么句子来代替会更好！谢谢你！

mm，不要客气。你喜欢就好。我写托福的经验就是，能写短句，决不写长句。
能写成3句，决不写成2句。。。

阐述论点的时候，一般首句表达该段的中心意思，之后跟大约3-4句的，以为展开。
即使你觉得这个论点一句话就能说明白，也最好一点一点来。每写一句，都给后面
的句子留有余地。一般4句为宜。我前面所说的“在重复的基础上要有升华”，就是
这个意思。嘻嘻，其实都是“车轱辘”话，只是稍须一点技巧。

不罗嗦了啦，祝你考试顺利！

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-17 18:22
topic 52: What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? The answer to the question depends on one's personal experience ,lifestyle and age. As far as I am concerned, the most important thing that  my hometown can do to entice people with my age is to build a large big shopping center.I will list my reasons for the point of view.

No issue is more important than the one that a large shopping center will make lives more convenient no matter what kind of life do your have. A large shopping center can provide most commodities like foodstuff, clothes and furnitures and so on, that is related to people's daily lives. Unfortunately, my hometown has none. It is not so convenient to live here and  not so easy to go shopping, that is the main reason that people do not like to live in my hometown. So if there would be a large shopping center in my hometown, it would be definitely more appealing.

Secondly, nowadays, people are becoming busier and busier than before. People must try their best to work for living and find a better job in the future.Everyday people live in a rapid pace and want to relax. A large shopping center can prodive people a good  place. The beautiful things in the shopwindow can please people's eyes and mind. Take my experience for example, in the weekend, I would like to go shopping , see nice furnitures and take a cup of coffee in the cozy coffee shop with my friends. For the young,a large shopping center can make them enjoy. So it is obvious that people with the same age as me would be more likely to live in my hometown if there would be a large shopping center.

Finally, a large shopping center can make many job vacancies. The job opportunities in my hometown will attract people to live there.

Still, there are many other things that people can do to make their hometown more appealing. However, for my hometown, the best thing is to bulid a larger shopping center. Anyway , different people could have different opinions according to their own situations.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-18 19:32
topic 62: What do you want most in a friend- someone who is intelligent, or someone who has a sense of homor,or someone who is reliable? Which one of these characteristics is most important to you? Use reasons and examples to explain your choice.

What kind of friends do you want to make? Different people have different choices depending on their own experience, lifestyle and emotional concern. If I were faced with this issue, I would mainly choose people with reliability. I would list my reaosns for it.

No issue is  more important than the one that I can spare my feelings with reliable friends. I can directly talk them about my happiness and sadness without worry being betrayed because they are trust-worthy. Nowadays, there are a lot of things we must take care  like the relation about family and job. Sometimes it is not so easy to deal with them and we will feel miserable.The best way to make us happy is to talk with others, after that, we will feel better. Reliable friends are the best persons because they can help you keep your secret.

In addtion, a friend with faith  could be more helpful  than others when people  have some trouble.In the challenging society, everyone might encounter emergencies. The most important help that they can get could probably come from their faithful friends especially for people who are far from their parents and relatives. Their reliable friends  would try their best to help their friends. A friend in need is a friend indeed. people can get a lot of fun from their friends who have a sense of humor and get knowledge from intelligent friends, but the reliable friends are not indispensable in their whole life.

Friends play an important role in our lives, and reliability is the most important charactersitic in  friends because people  can share happiness and sadness with them and get help from them. So when I choose a friend, reliability is the first factor to be considered. Anyway, different people have different choices according to their fondness and personality

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-19 19:11
topic 4: It has been said.' Not everyting that is learned is contained in books.' Compares and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained frim books. In your opinion, Which source is more important? Why?

It seems difficult to make a quick conclusion which source  is more  important between books and experience since each one has its advantages and disadantages respectively. However, after serious consideration, books are more important for people to get knowledge than experience. I will list  reaosns for it.

No issue is more important than the one that people maybe have no  chance to get knowledge by experience, especially  students like me. For example, when I want to learn some knowledge about Yellowstone Park, it is impossible for me to reach the park to learn it since it is far from my country and it takes 22 hours to get there , so the best and first method is to read books. And there are a lot of  books to introduce the park: history, environment and ecosystem and so on. If your could see that, you could understand deeply.

Secondly, one can see that it is very convenient to get knowledge from books. What people need to do is stay at home, open  and read  books that are connected to the knowledge that they want to know. With the development of modern technology, the Internet, known as the warehouse of information and documents, makes people  read books just in their computers. Furthermore, the advanced audio and video from the Internet can make the books more vivid and help people to remember the knowledge that they are reading.

In addtion, sometimes books can help people to learn more knowledge than experience. Take my experience for example, when I went to the Yellow mountain in China, I could not understand why some common stones that look very usual are listed specially until I checked the books for reasons. Without the books, I would not get the knowledge since I am not the expert who can get knowledge from their little mark.

Of course, under certain circumstances,experience is also very important to get knowledge. For instance, people can not learn to swim no matter how many times they read books. However, everything has two sides. For me, the books carry more weigh for getting knowledge than experience. Anyway, different people have different choices according to their fondness and personality.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-22 19:10
topic 20: It is better for children to grow up in the countryside tan in a big city. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.

The answer to the statement depends on personal experience, lifestyle and emotional concern. If i were faced with the issue, I would think that it is better for children to grow up in a big city than  in the countryside. I will list my reasons for the point of view.

No issue is more important than the one that a big city can provide children a better place to learn knowledge. In general, the school in a big city is better than that in  rural areas not only teachers but also school establishments. Teachers are well educated to teach children inspiring knowledge. And there are enough establishments for children to learn knowledge and build up their health.For example, shools in a big city often have big libiaries and sport centers, but in the countryside,most schools have none. So childrens can grow up better in a big city than in the countryside.

Secondly, there are more advanced medical establishments in a big city. In city areas, there are a lot of hospitals, so children who live in there can easily get medical services. However, it is not convenient to go to hospitals for childern in the rural areas since there are little hopsitals, not to mention the annual check-up, that is very usual for everyone who lives in a big city.

Finally, children can meet more people in a big city , and that will help them learn a lot of things. For example, children can meet more foreign people, so they can talk with them to learn foreign languages, that is proven by some researchers to be the quickest method to learn languages different from their native languages. Unfortunately, children in the countryside have less opportunity than those in a big city.

Of course, living in the countryside has merits. It is less pollution in a small country. The air is blue and the river is clear. But  the advantages that we can get from living a big city carry more weigh than the benefits in the countryside.

All in all, from what I have discussed above, I believed that it is better for children to live in a big city than in the countryside.Anyway, differenet people have different choice acoording to their fondness and personality.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-24 18:53
topic 10: When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

What is the source when people succeed? Some people think it is because of hard work and luck, but others disagree. If I would faced with the issue, I would think success depends on hard work and luck, that are indispensable factors for success. I will list reasons for the point of view.

Fistly, hard work is the prerequisite. In daily life and work, it is obvious that only people who are working-hard  can succeed. In the school, the students who get good grades often work hard not only in the class but also in their homework. Edison ,one of the most famous scientists in the 20th century, said 'there is no substitude for hard work'. All his inventions, that are beneficial to all of us,  are based on his effort. So  clearly, hard work is indispensable for success.

Secondly, luck can not be neglected. Meanwhile, Opportunity(luck) also plays an important role since people were born. For example, no one can seriously think that anyone who grows up poorly, lives in a bad neighbor and attends in an inferior school can have the opportunity equal to that of some more favored. If you could see that, you could understand deeply that hard work is not the only requisite for success.

Finally, people who are very lucky can succeed even though they do not work hard. For instance, in the newspaper or TV, somtimes we can see someone become millionnaires when they accomplish  the lottery. In this case, the unique factor for success is luck but nothing. So under certain circustances, it is not exactly right to say that the reason for success is hard work.

All in all, from what I have discussed above, we can safely arrive at the conclusion that hard work and luck are  the important reasons for success.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-25 18:35
topic 13: Some people perfer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prefare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examles to support your answer.

The answer to the statement depends on personal experience , lifestyle and emotional concern. If I were faced with the issue, I would prefer to prefare and eat food at home when I am not so busy.I will list reasons for the point of view.

No issue is more important than the one that it is cheaper to prepare and eat food at home than to eat at food stands and restaurants. It is obvious that food stands or restaurants must make profit, so the expense for food at food stands or restaurants will higher  than the price of  vegetables and meat that I buy to cook at home.  And as a poor student with no income, I can not spend too much money for food because there are many other things I must pay like  tuition and rental.

Family time is another reason that I have chosen to put here. Preparing and eating can provide gathering for family . Take my family for example,Whe we  eat at home, we can have time to share what we think. The meal time, especially the dinner, is the best time for our family time because we must work and study at the daytime. So eating at home can enforce our emotion.

In addtion, preparing and eating food at home is more healthy. Not only can people choose favorite food for themselves, but they can choose foodstuffs with low-calorie and high protein and vitamin, that is very important for health since healthy food is the prerequisite for long life.

Of couse, I can not deny that there are  a lot of benefits for  people who  eat at food stands or restaurants. The  most important merit is convenient: people do not need to prepare food before they eat and wash dishes after they eat. But the advantages that we can get from preparing and eating food at home carry more weigh than the benefits from eating food at food stands or restaurants.

To sum up, I prefer to prepare and eat food at home , unless I have no time to cook. Anyway, different people have different choices according to their personality and fondness.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-26 19:37
topic 29: SOme people believe that the Earthis being harmed(damaged ) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is obvious that human activity has changes the Earth a lot. Some people think the Earth is making  the Earth better than before by human activity, but others disagree. If I were faced with the issue, I would believe that the Earth is being damaged by human activity. There are no less than three reasons as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that resources in the Earth have been losing drastically. People dig up the Earth for coal , oil and industrial materials. The demand for those resources is more and more because people need them to develop factories and industries. However, most resources are limited and can not reproduce.Those lost resources cause thousands kinds of species extinct! With the pace of exploitation, researchers suggest that resources will be exhausted after 500 years. So human activity makes the Earth lose a lot of materials.

Deforestation is another reason that I have chosen to put here. As we all know, The tree plays an important role in photosynthesis. And the photosynthesis is the process in which trees absorb carbon dioxide and produce oxygen, that all of us need. Without trees, the atmosphere in the Eath will not  have enough oxygen for creatures to live. Deforestation is caused by human activity because with the development of modern industries, people need more spaces not only for living but also for industries.

In addtion, human activity makes the Earth full of pollutants . Everyday, there are many pullutants made by human activity like automobile emissions, industrial wastes and oil spill. All of those garbages threathen people's heath and the beauty of the Earth.

To sum up, human activity has damaged the Earth drastically. It is time for humans to know those influences  and try our best to lessen the loss. If we could not, what kind of Earth would we have in the future?

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-27 12:27
topic 3: Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In the modern society, it is very easy for people to prepare food. Modern technology has changed our daily food drastically. Some people think this change improved the way people live, but others disagree. If I were faced with the issue, I would believe that this change is good. I will list reasons for the point of view.

No issue is more important than convenience. Nowadays, when I want to cook rice, the only thing I should do is to open several buttons in the appliance  like microwave , and after several minutes, the rice is ok. But that was not so easy for my mother few decade years ago. She must use coal or wood for stove, and it took 25 minutes to cook rice! The convenience has improved our lives very much, since we can save a lot of time. As we all know, time means a lot of things for people in the competitive society, it  means knowledge for students , money for businessman and profit for company. If you could see that, you could understand deeply.

In addition, food that has become easier to prepare can make more favors , more varieties. With the refrigerator, we can cook a lot of different foods in our home. It is very easy for people to perserve enough foodstuffs for their daily lives in home. Since technologies make cooking more easier and faster, people are willing to make several dishes for only a simple meal.

Finally, healthy eating is more easier than before. When people cook, they can choose low-calorie and high-vitamin food. Moreover,people can buy a lot of fruits and vegetables  fresh, and just perserve them in the refrigerators for their daily need.

All in all, there are many other changes that those mentioned above. Those reasons that I have explored above can make me draw  the conclusion that food that has become easier to prepare has improved our lives a lot.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-9-30 18:08
topic 7: How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, movies or televisions have influenced people's behavior drastically. How do they influence people's behaviour? Different people have different opinions. If I were faced with the issue, I would think they influence people's lifestyle, health.  I will list my reasons for the point of view.

No issue is more important than the one that movies or televisions play an important role in people's daily lives. In the modern society, people must do a lot of things. They must try their best to work and study for a better job in the future. And the task in people's shoulders is more and more heavy. The burdensome work and study call for relaxation in their spare time. Of course, there are many methods that people can choose to relax, for example people can walk ,play games or watch TV and so on. Maybe the direct way to relax is to watch TV at home. As most people have television, it is very convenient to watch program at home. What they need to do is to open the power and choose channels. According to some statistic, most people watch TV everyday.So it is very obvious that television has become part of  people's lives.

Talking topic is another reason that  I have chosen to put here. Since most people watch TV everyday, the TV programs have become the main talking topics when they meet  others.They will exchange their views about some programs.

Finally, movies or televisions make people less active. Seeing movies or watching TV is a passive activity. If people watch too much, expecailly for those who are addicted to this activity, it will do harm to people's health physically and mentally. Watching too much TV at home will kill a lot of family time.

To sum up, although there are some disadvantages for movies or televisions, I think people can get  a lot of advantages for them . As an old proverb says:'everything has two sides'. If people do not indulge in movies or televisions, those influences from them are good for people.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-1 19:14
topic 74: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to travel is in a  group led by a tour guide. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

When you travel, do you think that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide? The answer to the statement depends on personal lifestyle and experience. If  I would faced with this issue, I would choose to travel with a group. There are no less than three reasons to explain the view as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that travelling with a group led by a tour guide can save  a lot of money and time. Nowadays, most landscapes like gardens and zooes often offer the discount tickets for a group. The more people, the less money you spend for the tickets. Moreover, with a group led by a tour guide, you do not need to take care of the hotel , meal and tickets. You do not spend time to care for those intivial things,a nd what  you need to do is make yourself fun.

Safety is another reason that I have chosen to put here. As we all know, people maybe meet some unforeseen emgergencies when they are travelling. If they travel with a group, it is very easy to get some help from others. Take my experience for example, two years ago, I went to Huang mountain for sightseeing. Unfortunately, I twisted my knee when I went down from the mountain. My teamers helped me go back to hotel. I could not imagine what will happen if I did not travel with a group since this situation was very bad and I could not walk. If you could see that, you could understand it is safer to travel with others than alone.

Finally,travellin with a group can make  a lot of fun. When you are tired, you can talk with others especially some jokes, that will help you get rid of tire. A tour guide can tell you a lot of things since he/she is familiar with those addresses. Maybe there are some folktales and historic sites, if you travel alone, you maybe miss them.

Of course, there are some advantages when people travel alone. They can arrange  the time and route for themselves. However, those advantages that we can get from traveling with a group carry  more weigh than those benefits from travelling alone.


Still, people who hold the same opinion as me can list other reasons for the point of the view. However, those advantages that I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw a conclusion that the best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide. Anyway, it is defined to me, different people have different choices accroding to their personality and fondness.

作者: jamesdigital 时间: 2003-10-2 07:19
When I see your essays,I can feel your astonishing backbone.Now I have the same situation as you.I will write essay like you,owing to bad skills of writing.
Let's go ahead.
Being moved by your activity.

作者: jamesdigital 时间: 2003-10-2 08:21
I wrote the last topic,then I found that your essay is far better than me.
Learning...

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-2 15:49
thank you very much, jamesdigital!

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-3 18:35
topic 28: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspapers, magazines and other media pay too attention to the personal lives of famous people such as public figures and celebrities. Use specific reaaons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, media like televisions, newspapers maganizes  pay an important role in people's daily lives. All most everyday, people get information from them. Some people say that they pay too attention to personal lives of famous people, but others disagree. If I were faced with this issue, I would follow the former. I will list reasons for the point of view as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that media dig up too many personal activities of famous people in order to survive in the competitive society because people are full of curiosity especially for famous people like public figures and celebrities. Nowadays, when people watch TV or read magazines or newspapers, it is unavoidable  to read some news about personal lives of famous people since there are too much paper to  write those things.

Secondly, media always say that people have the right to know everything including personal lives of famous people. However, we need to know if  someone who we are  electing for public offices is involved in  shady business deals, but we do not need to know if he or she defaulted on a loan twenty years ago.

Finally, media that pay too attention to personal lives will mislead people especially teenagers. It is obvious that there are many other important things that are worth broadcasting, not just the personal lives of famour people. The media will confuse people with the phenomenon that those personal lives are more important than others.

Still,there are other reason than those mentioned above. Anyway, media should concentrate on  more important issues rather than personal lives.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-5 14:41
topic 38: Learning about the past has no value for those of use living in the present. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people think that learning about the past has no value for those of use living in the present, but others disagree. If I were faced with this issue, I would believe that people can benefit from the knowledge about the past. I will list reasons for the point of the view.

No issue is more important than the one that most knowledge that people have learned from that of the past, that is mainly wirtten in books and documents. From the elementary school, people read books to get all kinds of knowledge including arts and science ,and those knowledge is the summary of the past, moreover, it is the source of the wisdom. Learning about the past is the fastest and most direct way to get knowledge , and all of knowledge that we have today is the result of all work of our predecessors. People receive knowledge from the past and are able to improve it and use it.

In addition, learning about the past can help people to avoid mistakes happened. The creation of the Eurpoean Union(EU) is a good example. After World War II, a lot of politians, historians and other social researchers call for peaceful and united Europe. After they study the whole process of the War, EU came to the stage and in growing, because Eurpoeans have learned lessons from the past and they want to help the peace, they need such organism. A lot of other truths in the history have shown that people can avoid faulty and develop a more peaceful world after they learn from the past.

Still, there are many other reasons than those mentioned above. All in all, learning from the past can be beneficial for people.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-6 18:19
topic 138: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to be a member of a group than to be the leader of a group. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The answer to the statement depends on personal life style  and experience. Each one has advantages and disadvantages respectively. If I were faced with this issue, I would choose to be a leader of a group rather than a member of a group. I will reasons for this point of view.

No issue is more important than the one that being a leader will be beneficial for personal development. A leader, especially the owner of business, must do a lot of things such as licence, tax and management, but  most those duties that a leader must deal with are not requisited to the members of group. However, through those things, I can improve my ability.No other better things than those duties can enhance competence. I want to succeed and hope to have my own business , but I have no enough experience. So the leader of a group is my first choice. The leader of a group has more chance to learn more knowledge because I will meet more challenging tasks.

Money is another reason that I have chosen to put here. In general,leader will get more money than members of this the group. And money  can help me  to make my dream reality. I want to go abroad  for further education and the expense is very expensive and buy a large house for my deelply love parents.  Moreover, there are many unforeseen emergencies, so I must earn money. And the leader of the leader of the group can let me attain the goal quickly.

Of course, there are many disadvantages as a leader. I must spend more energh and time in the job. But everything has two sides. In order to improve personal advancement and earn more money, I will choose a leader of a group instead of a member of  the group.

All in all, being a leader of a group can make me accomplish my goal more fast. Anyway, different people have different choices according their own personality and fondness.

作者: 困难是弹簧 时间: 2003-10-6 21:08
wch2001_akuan MM,真对不起你
我去请高手帮你看看

作者: morphias 时间: 2003-10-7 00:33
我不是高手, 不过想请教一下,是不是每一段都有个引导词较好, 如first of all.

作者: lucyyyh 时间: 2003-10-7 04:14

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-30 18:08:00的发言：

Nowadays, movies or televisions have influenced people's behavior drastically. How do they influence people's behaviour? Different people have different opinions. If I were faced with the issue, I would think they influence people's lifestyle, health. I will list my reasons for the point of view.

个人感觉第一段有一些需要改动的地方.
Nowadays, movies or televisions have influenced people's behavior drastically. How do they influence people's behaviour?(behavior) Different people have different opinions. If I were faced with(faced) the issue, I would think they influence people's lifestyle, health.(lifestyle and health) I will list my reasons for the point of view.

face 可以做vt.不需要被动语态.这个地方的虚拟语气是不是可以不用? 看看能不能这样写.
as far as I am concered, they influcence people's lifestlyes and health. My view will be supported by the following reasons.

作者: lucyyyh 时间: 2003-10-7 04:47
No issue is more important than the one that movies or televisions play an important role
(开头应该总起,点明是什么role,----people can relax themselves from watching mvoies )

in people's daily lives. In the modern society, people must do a lot of things. They must try their best to work and study for a better job in the future. And the task in people's shoulders is more and more heavy. The burdensome work and study call for relaxation in their spare time. Of course, there are many methods that people can choose to relax, for example people can walk ,play games or watch TV and so on. Maybe the direct way to
( such as walking, playing games or traveling. 可以提一些除了tv以外的方式. 这里用动名词要简洁些)

relax is to watch TV at home. As most people have television, it is very convenient to
                                    ( Because)                (televisions)
watch program at home. What they need to do is to open the power and choose
      (programs)
channels. According to some statistic, most people watch TV everyday.So it is very
                                    (statistics)
obvious that television has become part of  people's lives.

Talking topic is another reason that  I have chosen to put here. Since most people watch
(你是想说谈论的话题吧? 只是这样表达不是佷清楚,可不可以说成 The other reason for me to choose the statement is that people can have more talking topics from watching movies or televisions)

TV everyday, the TV programs have become the main talking topics when they meet  others.They will exchange their views about some programs.

Finally, movies or televisions make people less active. Seeing movies or watching TV is a
(However, 感觉你这一段写的是缺点,那么应该用一个转折连词)
passive activity. If people watch too much, expecailly for those who are addicted to this activity, it will do harm to people's health physically and mentally. Watching too much TV at home will kill a lot of family time.

To sum up, although there are some disadvantages for movies or televisions, I think people can get  a lot of advantages for them . As an old proverb says:'everything has
                                             (from)
two sides'. If people do not indulge in movies or televisions, those influences from them are good for people.

Wch2001_akuan MM真的佷棒,写了这么多的作文.加油,加油,XDJM们的好榜样!

作者: lucyyyh 时间: 2003-10-7 04:49

以下是引用morphias在2003-10-7 0:33:00的发言：
不过想请教一下,是不是每一段都有个引导词较好, 如first of all.

个人感觉是的.因为段落直接结构紧凑,给人感觉思路清晰.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-7 11:17
谢谢 lucyyyh, 我只是坚持每天都写一篇作文，按照radpassion的分类方法。
因为基础不好，所以很是心虚！

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-7 11:21
(你是想说谈论的话题吧? 只是这样表达不是佷清楚,可不可以说成 The other reason for me to choose the statement is that people can have more talking topics from watching movies or televisions)

这样改是不是也还不错？
The other reason for me to choose the statement is that TV or movies can provide some additional topics for communication among people and friends.

作者: morphias 时间: 2003-10-7 12:24
The other reason for me to choose the statement is that TV or movies can provide some additional topics for communication among people and friends.

The other reason不如another reason吧. communication among people and friends, 怪怪的.

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-7 18:02
topic 182: Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds,cats,or other animales as members of their family Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, there are many people have pets, and many treat their pets as members of family. Some people think that it is a good thing, but others disagree. As far as I am concerned, I believe that treating pets as members of family is beneficial to people. I will reasons as follows.

First of all, it is good for children. As we all know, children need someone to play with them, but adults may not have time to play with them. If there were pets, children could spend a lot of time with them , so children do not feel lonely even though their parents do not take care of them. And adults can have their own time to do what they need.

Seconly, it is good for adults. In this competitive society, the tasks in people's shoulder are more and more heavy, and people must try their best to study and work in order to find a better job in the future. The work is so hard that people need relax. If they have pets, they can talk to them, look them as persons and tell them what they care for. This will help people decrease their pressure and make a better mood.

Finally, it is good for old people, especially retired people. Young people may not have enough time to stay with old people as they must work for their lives. If they have pets and treat them as members of family, they will not feel lonely. They can talk a walk with pets and talk with them. Some pets like dogs also can be trained helper for people. For example, dogs can become the director of blind people.

Of course, I do not deny that pets can make trouble, for example , they may break vases or something. However, everygthing has two sides. The advantages that people can get from pets carry more weigh than those disadvantages.

To sum up, people can benefit from pets and they should take care of pets as members of family.

作者: lucyyyh 时间: 2003-10-8 00:15
嗯,这一篇从结构上来看好多了.

作者: lucyyyh 时间: 2003-10-8 00:22
Nowadays, there are many people have pets
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这句话不对. 出现了两个谓语,可以改成 There are many people who have pets or many people have pets. 显然后一句要简洁些.

I will reasons as follows
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这里reason如果是做v.应该用原型reason. 这种表达我见的不多.你再斟酌一下.

作者: endlesswu 时间: 2003-10-8 01:11
请问大家的topic 是从哪里找到的。谢谢！

作者: jamesdigital 时间: 2003-10-8 04:15
论坛里就有。185。

作者: jamesdigital 时间: 2003-10-8 04:21
Now I insist to write essays everyday.But I eventually find that needs time to remember some typical sentences.Do you remeber how we learned to write a good paper in the primary school?So who has this good sentence article?Please paste on here.
Thanks a lot.

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作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-8 18:21
jamesdigital : may be you can check here: http://acezh.jijing.org

topic 161: People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Everyone has a lot of gifts or presents, and he or she always can remember specific ones. What is the reason? Different people have different reasons depending on their own experience. I think there are three common reasons that can account for the phenomenon.

No issue is more important the one that gifts or presents can let us feel enjoyable when we see them.A gift from parents or husbands or wife makes us feel loved each time we use or see it. For example, I often take the necklace that my husband sent to me, so I can feel his love when I see it no matter whether he stays with me.

Secondly, another reason that everyone can see is that gifts or presents can make people recall beautiful days. For instance, the favorite toy will recall people their best friends in their childhood, and a beautiful bag can represent the nice time in the high school. All of these memory are happy time.

Finally, different gifts or presents often pinpoint different events. A birthday card from friends or family will memorize the specific day. A necklace represents the love of husband.And many wives will preserve wedding ring for the wedding.

All in all, people remember specific gifts or presents because they bring people with happiness and pleasure and they recall people the past good time.

作者: 困难是弹簧 时间: 2003-10-9 11:00
lucyyyhMM，辛苦你了！

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-9 19:25
topic 145: Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, every time when we watch TV or read magazines, we will see a lot of adverstisements.  Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.Different people have different opinions. As far as I am concerned,under most circumstances , I would follow the former. There are no less than three reasons to account for the viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that the main goal about advertisement is to attract customers to buy or consume products because business must make profit. Maybe those products is  not good for customers. For example, my nephew, a boy with two-year-old, always want to eat fried chicken wings in  KFC or McDonald's. As we all know, it is not benetifial to our health if we eat a lot, but he likes it since he always see the advertisement in the TV or magazines or newspaper.So, clearly, advertising stimulates people to consume products that is not good for them.

Secondly, advertisements sometimes mislead people. For instance, there are many advertisements about the weigh, that is claimed to measure health. The advertisements always encouraged people to become slim in order to sale their products, that confuses a lot of people. Nowadays, some people, especially young girls, go on a diet even though they are very slim.

Finally, advertisements makes use of people's nature, that everyone want to obtain everything that other people have.  It encourage people to buy products that their neighbors or friends have bought, and maybe they would not use those things.

Of course, advertisements have advantages. They can tell products that people are not familar with. And people can know  where they can buy those products.

All in all, take what I have expored in the above discussion, the conclusion is obvious: advertisement encourages people to buy things that people do not need.

作者: lucyyyh 时间: 2003-10-9 22:30

以下是引用困难是弹簧在2003-10-9 11:00:00的发言：
lucyyyhMM，辛苦你了！

作者: lucyyyh 时间: 2003-10-9 22:38
wch2001_akuan MM, 这两篇都不错哦.
准备什么时候考呀?

作者: wch2001_akuan 时间: 2003-10-10 10:34
thank you very much , Lucyyyh. but this two topics spend more than half an hour to write them. and there are about 6 difficult topics in the 185 topics. Maybe i should try them more.

作者: redpassion 时间: 2003-10-18 22:12
加油，wch2001_akuan mm你一定会成功的，你已经差不多把各种题型的作文都练了
还有，考试的时候，最好写作文先把5-6段框架写好，然后开头结尾2段写完，剩下来的就是填空式作文咯。这样可以节约时间，在心理上也会好很多，就算没有写完，你的结尾也已经写好了，这样纰漏不会很大，呵呵
加油，祝你成功~~~~

作者: Taurus 时间: 2003-11-3 09:39

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-10-9 19:25:00的发言：
topic 145: Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, every time when we watch TV or read magazines, we will see a lot of adverstisements.  Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Different people have different opinions. As far as I am concerned, under most circumstances , I would follow the former. There are no less than three reasons to account for the viewpoint.

No issue is more important than the one that the main goal about advertisement is to attract customers to buy or consume products because business must make profit. Maybe those products is  （are）not good for customers. For example, my nephew, a boy with two-year-old（a two-year-old boy）, always want （wants）to eat fried chicken wings in  KFC or McDonalds. As we all know, it is not benetifial to our health if we eat a lot （加 of those）, but he likes it since he always see （sees）the advertisement in the TV （on TV）or （加 in the）magazines or newspaper. So, clearly, advertising stimulates people to consume products that is not good for them.

Secondly, advertisements sometimes mislead people. For instance, there are many advertisements about the weigh（没太明白，是想说减肥产品么？diet products，这一句表达的不大清楚，建议修改）, that （which）is claimed to measure health. The advertisements always encouraged people to become slim in order to sale （sell）their products, that （which）confuses a lot of people. Nowadays, some people, especially young girls, go on a diet even though they are very slim.

Finally, advertisements makes use of people’s nature（human nature）, that everyone want （wants）to obtain everything that other people have.  It encourage （encourages）people to buy products that their neighbors or friends have bought, and maybe they would not use those things（整句语气不够强，没有表达出你想表达的意思，建议改为： which they yet probably won't use at all）.

Of course, advertisements have advantages. They can tell products （give infomation of those products）that people are not familar with. And people can know  where they can buy those products.

All in all, take （taking）what I have expored in the above discussion, the conclusion is obvious: advertisement encourages people to buy things that people do not need.

Pretty good! Congratulations, I can see you have worked really hard in the past month.

Keep it up, and you'll benefit from it!

Yet, you were a bit careless about grammar. Be alert of those tense mistakes.

Again, good luck!!!

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