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`A powerful business leader has far more opportunity to influence the course of a community or a nation than does any government official.~

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

That whether a powerful business leader or a government official has more opportunity to influence the course of a community is still a controversial problem. Some people advocate that it is a business leader who influence the course of a community more than a government official, but still some others prefer a government official to a businessman. While I admit that a government official is very important in the society, I still hold the opinion that a business leader is more powerful in influencing the society.

To begin with, in the rapidly developing commercialized society, business plays a more and more important part in the development of a nation. Many countries now view their economic performance as their standards to measure the development. For example, the term "GDP" refers to the total output of a whole country in a year and also refers to the living standard of a country. Therefore, whether a country is powerful is determined by the performance of the economy and moreover is determined by the performance of the individual business leaders. Consequently, a business leader is more crucial to the country than the government official.

In the second place, a business leader can influence our life more directly. The commodities which are necessary in our daily life are produced by the corporation supervised by the business leader. Suppose that if a supervisor of a monopolized oil producer stop his or her work for two months, the result that the oil price will rise sharply is disastrous to most people in the society. Since it is a fact that ordinary people in the society concern more about their daily life than about the matters of politics, business leaders are surely more important to the public.

Finally, a government official has the status in a official-centered society. He or she can make some laws to regulate people's daily life. With the intention to serve the public, a government official is more willing to communicate with people in the society to gather some information to improve his or her work. Thus, a government official also has some opportunities to influence the course of a community or a nation to some extent.

In sum, although a government official plays a part in the official-centered society, a business leader, who is related to the people's daily life more directly and detrimental to the economy, has far more opportunity to influence the course fo a community or a nation than does any government official.

以下是引用天之角在2005-9-22 9:14:00的发言：

超过400了，诀窍就是说废话。：）

`A powerful business leader has far more opportunity to influence the course of a community or a nation than does any government official.~

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

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That whether a powerful business leader or a government official has more opportunity to influence the course of a community is still a controversial problem. Some people advocate that it is a business leader who influence the course of a community more than a government official,这么说的话意思仿佛是比政府官员作用大的是企业领导，和你要表达的企业领导比政府官员重要不是一个意思 but still some others prefer a government official to a businessman. While I admit that a government official is very important in the society, I still hold the opinion that a business leader is more powerful in influencing the society.

Finally, a government official has the status in a official-centered society.这句话显得很突兀是什么意思呢？ He or she can make some laws to regulate people's daily life. With the intention to serve the public, a government official is more willing to communicate with people in the society to gather some information to improve his or her work. Thus, a government official also has some opportunities to influence the course of a community or a nation to some extent.

从你表达的意思看，好象这段的连接词用admittedly会比较好。

感觉模版还是要再改一改。其实开头尤其是结尾可以再多说些废话的。而且尽量要有for example这样的词出现。要么会影响e-rater对你的评价。GG加油哦！我们都支持你！