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作者: jasonzhang518    时间: 2005-8-9 17:25
标题: AI132 请修改 谢谢

132. Governments should not be responsible for regulating businesses and other organizations. Instead, society would benefit if the organizations themselves assumed most of the responsibility for establishing and enforcing their own standards and regulations.



Should the government or the organizations themselves be responsible for the establishing of regulations and standards?  Different people have different opinions owing to their repective backgrounds . The author asserts that the society would benefit if the organizations themselves assume most of the responsibility for establishing and enforcing their own standards and regulations. However, as far as I am concerned, I cann’t agree with the author owing to the following reasons.


Firstly, the organizations prefer to reduce the standards or establish the regulations which are easy to meet or preferable to them if they are given the rights to establish the regulations and standards. The aim of the organizations is to make profit. If the standards are high or strict, the cost of the organizations will go up. The organizations don’t want to see their cost goes up.  So considering their own interest, the organizations will make the regualations and standards easy to meet .  For example, a food producer will not establish too high standards or much more strict regulations if they have the right to establish such regulations and standards. Or they will reduce the standard to make the food dangerous to people’s health. Then it will be harmful to the society.


Secondly, it is also difficult for the orgizations to establish such regulations and standards if they are given such rights.  Let’s make an example. There are two organizations in the same line. One has the modern machines and the latest technology . On the contrary , another one’s facilities are old and technology is out of dated.  Each of these two organizations wants to make the regulations and standards more preferable to itself. So who should have the right to establish the regulations?  


Thirdly, only the government can make the moderate and fair regulations and standards . The government can send a group of people to analyze relative fields and the conditions of the organizations , to establish acceptable standards , and to enforce the management of these organizations. Only in this way, the society can benefit.


Admittedly, the government should not establish too many regulations and standards which will badly influence the activies and enthusiasm of the organizations.


In conclusion, I cann’t agree with the author . The government should be responsible for the establishing and enforcing the regulations and standards. But the government’s management should be moderate.


作者: judydongxueni    时间: 2005-8-9 18:14
以下是引用jasonzhang518在2005-8-9 17:25:00的发言:

132. Governments should not be responsible for regulating businesses and other organizations. Instead, society would benefit if the organizations themselves assumed most of the responsibility for establishing and enforcing their own standards and regulations.



Should the government or the organizations themselves be responsible for the establishing


用establishment似乎更好?如果是用你的说法直接说for establishing regulations and standards 就好了。


of regulations and standards?  Different people have different opinions owing to their repective backgrounds . The author asserts that the society would benefit if the organizations themselves assume most of the responsibility for establishing and enforcing their own standards and regulations. However, as far as I am concerned, I cann’t agree with the author owing to the following reasons. 很多人这么用但我个人觉得也查了一些native的文章这么写应该是不必要的重复。


Firstly, the organizations prefer to reduce the standards or establish the regulations which are easy to meet or preferable to them if they are given the rights to establish the regulations and standards. The aim of the organizations is to make profit. If the standards are high or strict, the cost of the organizations will go up. The organizations don’t want to see their cost goes up.  So considering their own interest, the organizations will make the


去掉


regualations and standards easy to meet .  For example, a food producer will not establish too high standards or much more strict regulations if they have


这个感觉比较突兀


the right to establish such regulations and standards. Or they will reduce the standard to make the food dangerous to people’s health. Then it will be harmful to the society.


Secondly, it is also difficult for the orgizations to establish such regulations and standards if they are given such rights. Let’s make an example. There are


这么说貌似很不地道,Assume there are


two organizations in the same line. One has the modern machines and the latest technology . On the contrary , another one’s facilities are old and technology is out of dated.


我觉得应该是想说up to date 吧?


Each of these two organizations wants to make the regulations and standards more preferable to itself. So who should have the right to establish the regulations?  


Thirdly, only the government can make the moderate and fair regulations and standards . The government can send a group of people to analyze relative fields and the conditions of the organizations , to establish acceptable standards , and to enforce the management of these organizations. Only in this way, the society can benefit. only提前起强调作用的时候后面应该倒装吧?


Admittedly, the government should not establish too many regulations and standards which will badly influence the activies and enthusiasm of the organizations.


In conclusion, I cann’t agree with the author . The government should be responsible for the establishing and enforcing the regulations and standards. But the government’s management should be moderate.


挺好的尤其是思路。注意不要重复用词这样会让人觉得你的词汇量不大。建议可以使用下rhod斑斑的模版改造大法在精华区里面就有的。






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