标题: OG13 第35题 求NN指教 [打印本页] 作者: nnhuihui 时间: 2015-11-17 17:00 标题: OG13 第35题 求NN指教 By 1940,the pilot Jacqueline Cochran held seventeen official national and international speed records, and she “earned them at a time when aviation was still so new for many of the planes she flew to be of dangerously experimental design.”（引号为划线句子）
(A) and she earned them at a time when aviation was still so new for many of the planes she flew to be
(B) earning them at a time when aviation was still so new for many of the planes she flew were
(C) earning these at a time where aviation was still so new such that many of the planes she flew were
(D) earned at a time in which aviation was still so new such that many of the planes she flew were
(E) earned at a time when aviation was still so new that many of the planes she flew were
OG解释：Rhetorical construction; Diction
Since this is a complex sentence with a lot of elements, its rhetorical construction is crucial in order to maintain effective communication. The underlined part emphasizes that on top of earning seventeen speed records, the pilot Jacqueline Cochran did so at a time when planes were of dangerous experimental design because aviation was still so new.
A This version is too wordy and does not contribute to clarity. Ecomonical, clear expression connects earned directlly with the noun speed records, which it modified.
B Here, the word earning takes the pilot sherself, not the records, as ite subject. However, earning is close to the record, not to Jacqueline Cochran, making this sentence hard to process. In addition, the causal relationship between aviation being new and planes being of experimental dsign is more effectively communicated by the structure so new that many X were Y, not by the structure so new for many X to be Y.
C The word earning takes the pilot herself, not the records, as its subuject. However, eatning is close to the records, not to Jacqueline Cochran, making this sentence hard to understand. Furthermore, the use of where to modify time is wrong; where refers to place.
D The corect pronoun for time is when. The word such is redundant within so new that many X were Y.
E Correct. The word earned is close to the noun it modifies, speed records. This verdion uses the clearest expression of causal relationship: so new that many X were Y.