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标题: 请教一句话的改写，来自Argument11,非常感谢！！ [打印本页]

作者: crystalno_1 时间: 2005-7-21 22:50
标题: 请教一句话的改写，来自Argument11,非常感谢！！

请教一句话的改写，来自Argument11,非常感谢！！

11. The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.

“In the first four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city of San Perdito, the population has decreased and the unemployment rate has increased. Two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. Under Varro, who served as mayor for four years before Montoya, the unemployment rate decreased and the population increased. Clearly, the residents of San Perdito would be best served if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro.”

自己写的时候总不能一模一样照抄吧，所以偶想改，题目中黄色的一句话我改成这样The number of closed businesses has doubled the number of new opened businesses.这句话可以吗？尤其是粉红色部分用CLOSED 和NEW OPENED合适吗？盼望大家指点。。。

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作者: happyfish0517 时间: 2005-7-22 13:28
NEW-OPENED，中间加个连字符号比较好~

作者: crystalno_1 时间: 2005-7-22 16:17
谢谢版主大人，可否再问一下为什么加个连字符比较好呢？偶不太明白，不好意思

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作者: happyfish0517 时间: 2005-7-22 19:13

我觉得用连字符号显得简洁明了，而且一看就知道修饰对象是谁

比如说new opened business...new既可以做adj.又可以做adv.那么这里是修饰opened还是business的呢？用new-opened就不会产生这种疑惑了，嘻嘻

p.s.表叫我大人~~我寒呢，嘻嘻

作者: crystalno_1 时间: 2005-7-22 19:25

明白了，太谢谢了。

P.S.那就不叫“大人”了，呵呵.偶一直觉得CD的斑竹都很伟大的。

偶继续去复习了，汗。。。。想到作文偶就害怕。

作者: happyfish0517 时间: 2005-7-23 00:20
嘻嘻~表害怕~~a za a za fighting...

作者: happyfish0517 时间: 2005-7-23 00:21

还有~~斑竹和普通会员没啥区别...只是比你们先行一步，早了解些情况而已...嘻嘻~共同进步~~

作者: crystalno_1 时间: 2005-7-23 07:59

好啊，好啊，大家都加油

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