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标题: GMAT作文评分网站推荐+从CR的角度写作文：本人AWA5.5经验奉献！！ [打印本页]

作者: elaineyoung 时间: 2015-8-20 12:52
标题: GMAT作文评分网站推荐+从CR的角度写作文：本人AWA5.5经验奉献！！
2015.9.12 更新：因为回帖中有朋友说这个网站不太准，我建议大家还是不要来测了哈！！！
顺便在这里说一下我自己的情况：我9.2考的G，AWA5.5。
我用的还是批改网，主要是纠正自己一些词组搭配错误和拼写错误。
一点小小的经验奉献给大家：
我个人发现，作文专区大家说来说去的七宗罪其实有好几条是重复的，如果死抠着七宗罪去分析题目，或者去写自己的模板，
只能说你浪费了你在训练Verbal时练出来的一手逻辑分析能力，而且极有可能码不出理想的字数。
所以接下来要给大家介绍本人基于CR的AWA模板写作方法，学完后分分钟码出450字+++
1. 首先，模板的头尾你是要自己准备好的。
2. 也就是我们重中之重——躯干：
任何一个作文的原题都和CR本质上相同：premise+conclusion=argument

可以将整个推理分为前提—逻辑关系—结论

以下就是我写作方法的精华提炼表格：

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Premise		Line of reasoning		conclusion
Survey	调查执行方不可信	Causality	因果无联系	结论成立是否表示其他结论不能成立（either or choice）
	调查对象信息不充分等
Sample	样本代表性（特殊）
			因果过程中的干扰因素(时效性，all things are equal)
			他因得果
	样本数量不充足	Analogy between A and B	案例AB不相似	结论的副作用
			案例C，有AB的相似点，但无法推出结论
Assumption (尤其方案推理中的“方案”)	可操作性
	副作用

大家拿到一个题目，从左往右，从上往下分析，至少可以找到3++个攻击点。[/hide]

当然，我认为大家也是可以看看七宗罪的，但那主要是用来告诉大家不同的论证句子大概是什么样的写法。

最后再送给大家我自己的模板和一些常用褒贬义中性词汇分类。[attach]167777[/attach]

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//之前的帖子内容：无意中发现的一个网站，里面有100+篇往年的题目，做完之后电脑免费给分，
http://www.findscore.com/members/t/alltopics.php?type=GMATa

比如我做了一次，得到的结果是这样的：

Statistics Report

Word Count       328
Total Unique Words       168
Lexical Desity       51.22
Number of sentences       11
Average words per sentence       30
Hard Words       77 (23.48%)
Fog Index       21
Statistics Breakdown by Paragraph

Paragraph       Word count       Sentence count       Words per sentence
1       85       3       28
2       72       3       24
3       96       3       32
4       75       2       38
Total:       328       11
Word Frequency Cloud

ads although american analogy analysing appealling argument article asserts assumption attracted attracts author background based cannot cars case claims commits company conclude considerations convincing copying customers deny detailed elimilate engine evidence exception exceptionally explain explanation explanations factors facts fails failure fallacious foreign former gain glance gratuitous hear highlight however identifying improve inducement insufficient intend into invalid its lacks lines local lose loud measure moreover mortorcycle motorcycle music newspaper noice noise noisiness parts perchase product products quieter quiter reality reasoning reasons respects rour sell simillar stores supposed suspecting thorough threshold unconvincing x
Content

27 words in topic appreared in text, as shown in red color.Keyword ListThere are 91 keywords in this essay.
ads although american analogy analysing appealling argument article asserts assumption attracted attracts author background based cannot cars case claims commits company conclude considerations convincing copying customers deny detailed elimilate engine evidence exception exceptionally explain explanation explanations factors facts fails failure fallacious foreign former gain glance gratuitous hear highlight however identifying improve inducement insufficient intend into invalid its lacks lines local lose loud measure moreover mortorcycle motorcycle music newspaper noice noise noisiness parts perchase product products quieter quiter reality reasoning reasons respects rour sell simillar stores supposed suspecting thorough threshold unconvincing x
Organization

Organization phrases count: 14
References
Computer Evaluated Score

Computer: 5

也不知道准不准……给大家分享一下，如果以前有人用过这个也可以来评评这个好不好用

作者: elaineyoung 时间: 2015-8-21 13:52

顶一个 ~ 被淹没了~

作者: holly12345 时间: 2015-8-24 14:36
不错啊，支持一下

作者: monica1315 时间: 2015-9-4 05:41
正在找这种网站，感谢分享！

作者: lixibao 时间: 2015-9-8 22:14
感谢分享！

作者: monica1315 时间: 2015-9-9 19:29
楼主，我在这个网站上写了两次，都是4分。我看网站上最高只有5分。楼主，能帮我看下，是我写得不好？还是网站要求高呢？

Essay - GMAT472. The following appeared as part of an article in the business section of a local newspaper. "The Cumquat Caf? made a mistake in moving to a new location. After one year at the new spot, it is doing about the same volume of business as before, but the owners of the RoboWrench plumbing supply wholesale outlet that took over its old location are apparently doing better: RoboWrench is planning to open a store in a neighboring city." Discuss how well reasoned . . . Etc.

The argument that the Cumquat Cafe made a mistake in moving to a new location omits some important concerns that must be addressed to substantiate the argument. The statement that follows the description of why RoboWrench that took over the Cumquat Cafe's old location seems to do better simply describes RoboWrench's branch plan in another city. This alone does not constitute a logical argument in favor of the old location, and it certainly does not provide support or proof of the main argument.

Most conspicuously, the argument does not address what a restaurant need such as customer services and attractive products if it wants to increase its sales. First, the argument assumes that the Cumquat Cafe is doing about the same volume of business as before is just because its new location is not good. In a weak attempt to support its claim, the argument describes that the RoboWrench that took over the Cumquat Cafe's old location is apparently doing better. But if the success of RoboWrench is due to its good reputation, advertising or any other reasons, a good location will not solve the Cumquat Cafe's problem. Second, the argument never address whether the Cumquat Cafe has adopted a new marketing strategy to adapt to its new location. If its old advertising does not conform to the preference of its new customers, no increase in its sales will not be avoided. Finally, even if the reason of the RoboWrench's success is its location, it does not indicate that the Cumquat Cafe's sales will increased in its old location. If the Cumquat Cafe's sales was increasing in its old location, why would it move to a new location ?

Because the argument leaves out several key issues, it is not persuasive. If it included the items discussed above instead of solely explaining the current state of the RoboWrench, the argument would have been more thorough and convincing.

作者: lliiaanngg 时间: 2015-9-11 00:03
感谢分享！

作者: monica1315 时间: 2015-9-11 23:02
我拿两篇cd上的范文在该网站测试了一下，都只有4分。不知道是范文太差，还是网站的问题。

作者: elaineyoung 时间: 2015-9-12 16:25
刚刚更新了~顶上去~~~

作者: elaineyoung 时间: 2015-9-12 16:32

monica1315 发表于 2015-9-9 19:29
楼主，我在这个网站上写了两次，都是4分。我看网站上最高只有5分。楼主，能帮我看下，是我写得不好？还是网 ...

我觉得你的长句有点头重脚轻！主干部分的谓宾太短，主语携带的从句太长

作者: monica1315 时间: 2015-9-12 21:15

elaineyoung 发表于 2015-9-12 16:32
我觉得你的长句有点头重脚轻！主干部分的谓宾太短，主语携带的从句太长 ...

仔细看了下，确实如此。

作者: zhennning 时间: 2015-10-17 21:01
感谢分享

作者: 吃货小蚊子 时间: 2015-12-3 16:10
Mark一下！

作者: nigelwang 时间: 2015-12-4 13:04
谢谢分享总结的非常好！

作者: 瑞典肉丸儿 时间: 2015-12-4 23:14
感谢分享！

作者: daidaiyula 时间: 2015-12-27 18:22
感谢分享！

作者: lulufiola 时间: 2016-1-20 13:49
谢楼主分享~

作者: Shinny2015 时间: 2016-1-23 23:17
顶楼主！

作者: 汪汪luyi 时间: 2016-2-21 20:51
感谢分享！

作者: fraqia 时间: 2016-4-4 16:41
感谢分享！

作者: PiggySophie 时间: 2016-7-16 00:00
楼主是个有心人

作者: yzxdy 时间: 2016-8-20 14:39
Mark一下！

作者: adsdsd 时间: 2016-9-12 11:04
Mark一下！

作者: Kittycy01 时间: 2016-12-13 12:21
感谢分享！

作者: hc23268 时间: 2017-9-30 12:55
谢谢

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